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OT! Manga Adaptation [volume 1, chapter 1]

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Taking into account the full reading of the OP, AND the first page of the manga, would you read the OT! manga? (Your vote matters)

I don't like manga, but this one is special, I'll read it.
1
4.17%
This isn't my style of manga, but this one is special, I'll read it.
4
16.67%
Given the first page, it looks pretty bad, but this manga is special, I'll read it.
5
20.83%
What?? My dream will come true, I'll read it.
5
20.83%
I don't like manga, so no.
1
4.17%
This isn't my style of manga, so no.
0
0.00%
Given the first page, it looks pretty bad, so no.
0
0.00%
...I can try, but don't expect me to not give up.
5
20.83%
I definitely can't say that with just one page (even if it is true, avoid this option)
0
0.00%
Other.
3
12.50%
Total votes: 24
Behrauder
95 posts
Joined June 2021
Topic Starter
Behrauder
Type: Manga
Volumes: Unknown
Chapters: Unknown
Status: Publishing
Genres: Comedy, Slice of Life
Themes: CGDCT (Cute Girls Doing Cute Things), School
source: Inspired by OT! (Off-Topic osu! forum)
Authors: Behrauder (Story & Art)
Synopsis:
Sametdze, Marco, and Serraionga are students at an all-girls school who have formed a storytelling club. They have fun together, exploring the ups and downs of high school while sharing their original stories. With a lot of references and appearances from other OT! members, their adventures are always exciting. Will a new member join their club soon?


As I don't want to dedicate all my time to this manga, and work non-stop 24 hours a day, I'm going to TRY to publish an 8-page chapter per month.

No artificial intelligence was or will be used in the manga creation process (it's good to clarify this, since it's me, lol).


⚠ IMPORTANT THINGS, read carefully: ⚠


To see the manga, access it on a computer (not a cell phone), and set the zoom to 100% (it is not 100% by default). You should take these preventive measures to avoid the moire effect.

If you don't know what the moire effect is, it's when there is a strange unwanted pattern due to something to do with pixel overlap or something like that (which makes several manga look strange at some zooms other than 100%), but it is better explained here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Moir%C3%A9_pattern



The manga reading order is from right to left, and top to bottom.

Links:

Volume 1, chapter 1: https://www.canva.com/design/DAGZBVSVaWo/kMpuMny9lUJNJP5dxcz0qg/edit?utm_content=DAGZBVSVaWo&utm_campaign=designshare&utm_medium=link2&utm_source=sharebutton


I would like to know what you guys thought of this. Also, if you didn't like something in the manga, let me know now. I want tips and suggestions. ヾ(≧▽≦*)o
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sametdze
343 posts
Joined July 2021
sametdze
honestly this is extremely cool, i would 100% read this entire thing, awesome work dude
DM FOR MUTUAL
609 posts
Joined March 2021
DM FOR MUTUAL
This isn't really criticism because idk what you're cooking but a few questions to do with writing:

1. What was you're thinking with making samet, Marco and serroinga the main characters? Also do the characters relate to the irl counterparts in any way, because I didn't really get any indication from the first page, just 3 anime girls that share the same name and maybe some design aspects. Granted it's just the first page though

2. Why a storytelling club, does it have something to do with OT? I feel like if you wanted to make a club out of OT, it would be something like a club that is filled with misfits that has absolutely no direction or purpose and they get up to crazy shenanigans all the time. Or is this more like an OT school and this is a club in it?

Really cool thread though, we're entering Valhalla with this one
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BluePyTheWDeer_
97 posts
Joined March 2024
BluePyTheWDeer_
I will read whenever I feel like it.
Ymir
1,760 posts
Joined June 2020
Ymir
Thanks for the clarification, now I can actually say that it's good art and I support this project.
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Achromalia
343 posts
Joined November 2016
Achromalia
i would read it, because you made it and it's for the off-topic subforum :)

the art is acceptably expressive and legible, no issues!! the writing and characterization, though... i dont know yet

given the nature of cgdct, and the way this manga introduced itself... it will need some help to remain interesting, and what i would want from it may not really align with the premise or genre. i think it would have to either introduce some sort of narrative substance through characterization to feel fulfilling, or it would have to rely on the absurd comedy it seems to be aiming for, which may not be as easy as it might seem

but i hope to be grateful for what you made. and if you make more, i hope that you or anyone else here will enjoy its creation. i would definitely visit again if it's updated, and i would be open to submitting more feedback when the time comes <3

(i might update the review later with more specific critique!! it should be in another post sometime tomorrow, if i remember to do that)
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Behrauder
95 posts
Joined June 2021
Topic Starter
Behrauder
For those who voted that the manga looks bad, I would like you to explain why, so I can improve it. If it has to do with the size of the screentones (the little dots that are in all mangas, used for painting), changing it is the easiest thing.

DM FOR MUTUAL wrote:

This isn't really criticism because idk what you're cooking but a few questions to do with writing:

1. What was you're thinking with making samet, Marco and serroinga the main characters? Also do the characters relate to the irl counterparts in any way, because I didn't really get any indication from the first page, just 3 anime girls that share the same name and maybe some design aspects. Granted it's just the first page though

2. Why a storytelling club, does it have something to do with OT? I feel like if you wanted to make a club out of OT, it would be something like a club that is filled with misfits that has absolutely no direction or purpose and they get up to crazy shenanigans all the time. Or is this more like an OT school and this is a club in it?

Really cool thread though, we're entering Valhalla with this one
I chose Marco and Serraionga because I like them and I know they won't leave the forum (look at how long they've been here), and Samet because he's the only one who somehow fits the personality that was missing. It's going to be a storytelling club so there's always something interesting happening, with different scenarios, etc. Serraionga should have portal powers in his stories, and Miku will be in Marco's stories. Each one will have a different storytelling style. As you can see, Marco seems to dislike violence in the manga, which is consistent with the Marco we know. In the stories I intend to mention past events about the forum and things like that, to always give a familiar atmosphere. That's basically all I've thought of so far. And I plan to add new people in the future.
B0ii
592 posts
Joined November 2021
B0ii
Hell yeah I support this no matter how scuffed it will be
MangaGrumpy
319 posts
Joined May 2022
MangaGrumpy
LEEEETTTSSSS GOOOOO
z0z
505 posts
Joined February 2018
z0z
i think you should post these pages as .pngs

also did you turn people here into girls?
Ymir
1,760 posts
Joined June 2020
Ymir
I actually think the Manga looks pretty good, I dont know what people are on about.
Maybe their expectations are too high?

On a separate note, I think you should drop the overuse of honorifics, or change the names to actually match those honorifics.

For example, hearing "Serraionga-chan" is quite awkward and jarring, it just doesnt work.
Maybe a nickname like "Serri-chan"? Personally think it works a lot better (obviously you choose the names, I'm not the greatest at this stuff either, evidently).
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Patatitta
1,251 posts
Joined February 2020
Patatitta
didn't know you could draw
tapperruiii
11 posts
Joined July 2024
tapperruiii
no fish in first page -10/10000000 score
Behrauder
95 posts
Joined June 2021
Topic Starter
Behrauder
Since no one said that the screentones are bad, I think I'll keep the style.

z0z wrote:

i think you should post these pages as .pngs

also did you turn people here into girls?
Putting it in BBcode is too obvious for me not to have tested it, it causes moire. but I can also do it as a complement, if anyone wants.

And yes, just like on the first page, they are all anime girls.


Ymir wrote:

I actually think the Manga looks pretty good, I dont know what people are on about.
Maybe their expectations are too high?

On a separate note, I think you should drop the overuse of honorifics, or change the names to actually match those honorifics.

For example, hearing "Serraionga-chan" is quite awkward and jarring, it just doesnt work.
Maybe a nickname like "Serri-chan"? Personally think it works a lot better (obviously you choose the names, I'm not the greatest at this stuff either, evidently).
Thank you, you are helping me a lot! :)
People should not be afraid to say what they think...
I think I will stop using honorifics, unless it is a "-sama" or something that makes a difference.
Ymir
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Joined June 2020
Ymir
Yeah that's a good idea.
tapperruiii
11 posts
Joined July 2024
tapperruiii
i should make temu version with my 1st grader drawing skills
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Corne2Plum3
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Corne2Plum3
pog
Winnyace
645 posts
Joined June 2016
Winnyace
I wanted to ask something, but I will get smacked by the GMTs if I do so.
Behrauder
95 posts
Joined June 2021
Topic Starter
Behrauder

Winnyace wrote:

I wanted to ask something, but I will get smacked by the GMTs if I do so.
You can PM me if it is relevant.
Karmine
898 posts
Joined November 2015
Karmine
Other: please fucking kill me.
- Marco -
7,410 posts
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- Marco -
I LOOK SO CUTE
Patatitta
1,251 posts
Joined February 2020
Patatitta
honestly, what I said in a previous thread, don't sweat the details too much, just do it, this is liek the third or fourth time we get a osu manga announced and none of them passed like the third chapter
Behrauder
95 posts
Joined June 2021
Topic Starter
Behrauder

Patatitta wrote:

honestly, what I said in a previous thread, don't sweat the details too much, just do it, this is liek the third or fourth time we get a osu manga announced and none of them passed like the third chapter
The process of making it is cool, so unless college is really hard (I'm going to start it next year) and I have very little time, I'll continue the manga as long as I can.

Also, can you find these mangas? It would be interesting for me if I could see them, and the posts in these threads.
Wimpy Cursed
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Joined July 2021
Wimpy Cursed
will read :thumbsup:
Reyalp51
963 posts
Joined April 2021
Reyalp51
i hope this isnt too much work for you but i think its neat and i will read it
Patatitta
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Joined February 2020
Patatitta

Behrauder wrote:

Patatitta wrote:

honestly, what I said in a previous thread, don't sweat the details too much, just do it, this is liek the third or fourth time we get a osu manga announced and none of them passed like the third chapter
The process of making it is cool, so unless college is really hard (I'm going to start it next year) and I have very little time, I'll continue the manga as long as I can.

Also, can you find these mangas? It would be interesting for me if I could see them, and the posts in these threads.
community/forums/topics/564898?n=1
community/forums/topics/1847647?n=1
community/forums/topics/1843133?n=1
Ymir
1,760 posts
Joined June 2020
Ymir
I mean, those are 'osu!' mangas, I think as long as OT doesn't just abandon this thread, this could have potential.
Corne2Plum3
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Corne2Plum3

Patatitta wrote:

Behrauder wrote:

Patatitta wrote:

honestly, what I said in a previous thread, don't sweat the details too much, just do it, this is liek the third or fourth time we get a osu manga announced and none of them passed like the third chapter
The process of making it is cool, so unless college is really hard (I'm going to start it next year) and I have very little time, I'll continue the manga as long as I can.

Also, can you find these mangas? It would be interesting for me if I could see them, and the posts in these threads.
community/forums/topics/564898?n=1
community/forums/topics/1847647?n=1
community/forums/topics/1843133?n=1
Those are about osu! in general, not OT specific
keremaru
218 posts
Joined November 2017
keremaru
wanna make an OT!shonen, but i suck at drawing and i'd rather finish the story first before getting to the visuals
this is a good compromise
Behrauder
95 posts
Joined June 2021
Topic Starter
Behrauder
4 people will read it because they really think it will be good, 4 will read it but think it will be bad, 3 people don't like this style of manga, but they will read it, and two people will at least try to read it, totaling more than 80% of the votes (at least now), and only one person won't even try to read it.

These are good enough results to motivate me to do it, so it's confirmed!

In about a month (It could be more or less, but more likely less) the first chapter, expected to have 8 pages, will be released (it may seem like few pages for a long time, but it REALLY isn't). :)

Also, today I dreamed that Sametdze (one of the main characters) changed his osu! username, it was a nightmare really lol.
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Patatitta
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Joined February 2020
Patatitta
yeah 8 pages per month is actually a pretty good thing, consider that most mangas do release a chapter a month, yes those chapters are usually a bit longer but they're professionals
ColdTooth
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Joined June 2012
ColdTooth

Patatitta wrote:

yeah 8 pages per month is actually a pretty good thing, consider that most mangas do release a chapter a month, yes those chapters are usually a bit longer but they're professionals
me brainstorming my own novel for lore of my entire characters (basically the size of like, 30 bibles) and expecting to write at minimum a chapter a day except not really because im still brainstorming
sametdze
343 posts
Joined July 2021
sametdze
it would be funny if you include a person who has changed their osu name many times, and then have another character call them by one of their former names without realising lol

"hello canadian-baka!"
"who?"
"you!"
"i'm ashton now.."
Aireunaeus
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Joined December 2021
Aireunaeus
Oh damn that’s actually cool lol
Behrauder
95 posts
Joined June 2021
Topic Starter
Behrauder

sametdze wrote:

it would be funny if you include a person who has changed their osu name many times, and then have another character call them by one of their former names without realising lol

"hello canadian-baka!"
"who?"
"you!"
"i'm ashton now.."
Noted, thanks for your contribution!


05/12/2024: Attention, the first chapter of the OT! Manga Adaptation will be slightly delayed, but it is almost finished. Don't worry, I’m doing my best to work quickly while maintaining quality.
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Serraionga
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Serraionga
Behrauder
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Topic Starter
Behrauder
The first chapter of the OT! Manga Adaptation is finally out. Let me know your thoughts! :)


Behrauder wrote:

⚠ IMPORTANT THINGS, read carefully: ⚠


To see the manga, access it on a computer (not a cell phone), and set the zoom to 100% (it is not 100% by default). You should take these preventive measures to avoid the moire effect.

If you don't know what the moire effect is, it's when there is a strange unwanted pattern due to something to do with pixel overlap or something like that (which makes several manga look strange at some zooms other than 100%), but it is better explained here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Moir%C3%A9_pattern



The manga reading order is from right to left, and top to bottom.


Link <===============




The focus of chapter 1 was just showing in a funny way that Samet likes trains. I think in the next chapter I'll probably focus on Marco or Serraionga, but I haven’t decided yet. With this manga, I realized that thinking about what 8 pages of a manga will be is actually very hard.

Did you like it? Do you have any suggestions for improvement?
Reyalp51
963 posts
Joined April 2021
Reyalp51
now this is the advanced autism i wanted to see, my only suggestion would be to try making really intense scenarios instead of slice of life but thats a personal taste of mine. Making what you promised in time is really impressing so congrats dude

also disapierd
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Behrauder
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Topic Starter
Behrauder

Reyalp51 wrote:

now this is the advanced autism i wanted to see
Thanks! :)

Reyalp51 wrote:

my only suggestion would be to try making really intense scenarios instead of slice of life but thats a personal taste of mine.
Hmm, I don't think I'll do that, but if more people say they want it to change, maybe I could consider it.

Reyalp51 wrote:

Making what you promised in time is really impressing so congrats dude
Actually it wasn't 100% on time...

Reyalp51 wrote:

also disapierd
;-; Fixed.
MangaGrumpy
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MangaGrumpy
Hahaha! Very nice chapter :)
- Marco -
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- Marco -
man i'm not dressed like her... at least i'm qt :3
Corne2Plum3
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Corne2Plum3
PEAK QUALITY
sametdze
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sametdze
SEHRRRRRRRRRRRRRR GUUUUUUUUUUHHHHHHTTTTTTTTTT
Achromalia
343 posts
Joined November 2016
Achromalia
i see... i think i like it, the punchline of them finding out they've worried for nothing landed well enough while still generally characterizing everyone (to different extents) and remaining light-hearted! the panelling is good, the use of screen tones has been good, scenes are given whatever visual aids they need in order to convey whatever emotions they need to, everything seems to connect reasonably well :>

if i could make sense of the "vibe" i've gathered from it, i'd describe it through a flavor... something like tomato and lettuce with a hint of fragrant orange zest-- mild and wet and leafy, with glimpses of a warm and sharp citric taste, i guess...? or a chilled ham sandwich, or something like that

idk, i dont have that much to add, and the things i'm interested in aren't really present in this (i haven't seen anything notable related to characterization or narrative substance that i'd pay attention to), but it still does what it came to do in classic cgdct fashion
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Behrauder
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Topic Starter
Behrauder

- Marco - wrote:

man i'm not dressed like her... at least i'm qt :3
I can make you cosplay her soon, that's actually a good idea.

sametdze wrote:

SEHRRRRRRRRRRRRRR GUUUUUUUUUUHHHHHHTTTTTTTTTT
?

-----

Now all that's left is for Serraionga to post to complete the trio, lol.
sametdze
343 posts
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sametdze
sehr guht means very good in german
Patatitta
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Joined February 2020
Patatitta
now that I have the full chapter, the general drawings feel very 3d, in many ways it feels like i'm watching kemono friends with the full 3DCG, which honestly I don't mind. Also, this seems to be entirerily episodic right?, that may be the best approach to this manga
- Marco -
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- Marco -

Behrauder wrote:

- Marco - wrote:

man i'm not dressed like her... at least i'm qt :3
I can make you cosplay her soon, that's actually a good idea.
AYOOOOOO
B0ii
592 posts
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B0ii
this is actually impressive ngl

I love it
anaxii
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anaxii
peak
reffty_gag
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reffty_gag
cubone cameo was peak
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