Hello, NM from my queue
I loved the song, my mod questions your rhythm choice for the 3/4s a lot because to me in kinda lacked structure as in, passive rhythm for slow part and something more active for stronger parts but other than that the streams are really clean and play well and it's a really fun map
Box because it's kinda long
[General]
- Really personal here but to me AR and OD are a bit high for the bpm, i mean it is a stream fest, pretty dense and at times with a decently high spacing on the stream but to me AR9 would fit better, about the OD idk it's just in general something lower could feel better as the bpm is pretty low
- 00:15:794 (1) - This slider creates a polarity change which here is unnecessary, right now the gap between 00:15:794 (1,2) - is 3/4 while the gap between 00:16:367 (2,3) - is 1/2 which is a bit unintuitive to read and since it's a slow part a passive rhythm would feel better, i'd delete 2 and reverse 1 instead so it fits the calm atmosphere better
- 00:19:043 (2) - The vocals here are on the blue tick again and i'll take it that's what you've been following the whole intro, the triple at 00:19:425 (3,4,5) - makes the rhythm a bit weird but i think something like this fits vocals better, you can also use just a single circle for 1 and 2 but sliders fit the song better at this moment
- 00:20:380 (1,2) - Vocals on blue tick again, a 3/4 reverse slider would fit better
- 00:23:915 (4) - This isn't snapped to anything in the song, 00:23:437 (3) - reverse this one instead
- 00:24:966 (1,2) - Polarity change again, for this one i feel like 2 circles 00:24:966 - 00:25:253 - would fit the song best as it emphasizes the 2 vocals beats more, making it 2 circles is more intuitive than just a 3/4 slider
- 00:29:552 (1) - The second part of the curve isn't very neat because the white node between the red anchor and the slider end isn't exactly balanced, if you place the white node at x:380 y:292 it looks cleaner and makes the blanket with 00:30:125 (2) - more perfect (k this is really nazi)
- 00:34:807 - You could add a note here to fit with vocals
- 00:37:195 (5) - NC here to make it consistent with the rest of the stream, also emphasizes the stop better
- 00:43:310 (3) - Since you used only circles for this part you should turn this into 2 circles too, also i'd NC to make the rhythm change more obvious
- 00:51:336 (5) - Not sure of what you're trying to follow here, there are sounds on the blue ticks so you should turn this into anything that's 1/4
- 00:57:641 (3) - The end isn't snapped correctly, extend it to the red tick since there's a drumbeat there
- 01:01:272 (6) - The end here should be snapped on the 1/3 tick not the 3/4 one
- 01:02:418 (4) - I believe this is fine as it is but it feels a bit weird to skip the beats at 01:02:609 - 01:02:705 - 01:02:800 - I understand that you use the extended slider to emphasize the hold but i'd suggest this to map the background sounds since they're kinda noticeable
- 01:03:947 (7,8) - Wrong rhythm here, there is vocals 01:04:234 - here and drums 01:04:425 - here so the only logical rhythm to me here would be this
- 01:06:240 (1,2,3,4) - Not a fan of the rhythm here either, following drums with a reverse slider is a bit questionnable to me, also the vocals are asking to be followed here imo, 01:06:813 (2,4) - deleting these and making these 01:06:240 (1,3) - 3/4 would make more sense to me
- 01:08:246 - Skipping a drum beat here
- 01:10:062 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - Here the rhythm is a bit tricky since there's a constant 1/4 from the drums and i believe you intended to follow vocals with 01:10:444 (4,5) - but vocals are on 01:10:348 - if you want to follow drums, make it a stream, if you want to follow vocals do this instead
- 01:19:234 (7) - Shorten this to the red tick and add a note to create a triple, would emphasize the last note better
- 01:21:144 (5,1,2,3,4,5) - The distance here is kinda low considering the downbeat, i'd spread the stream more to make it more independent from the previous pattern
- 01:22:673 (9) - This is snapped to nothing, it's actually in the middle of two doubles, you can either do http://puu.sh/s1aXc/3e4edcc7a3.jpg or http://puu.sh/s1aYZ/143c2206da.jpg (Not a fan of this one because it's kinda boring) or http://puu.sh/s1b10/aa0ee4de71.jpg if you want something more passive
- 01:24:106 - Missing a sound here, triples emphasize the last note so it would sound cool here with vocals
- 01:25:348 (7) - NC here to make it look more indenpendent from the previous part and consistent with 01:25:730 (1) -
- 01:26:399 - Missing vocals here, since there are drums at 01:26:304 - you could simply add a note here
- 01:27:641 (1) - I'd turn this into 2 circles to emphasize the vocals more here
- 01:30:699 (1) - Not a fan of the rhythm here because it skips the kick on the white tick, i'd do this to fit with the drums more and a triple here feels more appropriate considering it's a build up
- 01:31:463 (5) - Personal opinion here, i think it looks nicer if you make it a straight line with 01:31:558 (6,7) - by moving it at x:348 y:132
- 01:36:336 - I understand that you're following vocals here but i'd add a note here to make the kiai more dense and give more emphasis
- 01:42:928 (5) - NC here and remove it on 01:43:406 (1) - to make it consistent and avoid to NC on the blue tick
- 01:44:457 (1,3) - Turn these into circles to emphasize this hype part more
- 01:48:565 - Same as before, i'd add a note here
- 01:59:743 (1) - Not sure about the snapping here, i don't think it's 1/12, i think making it 1/8 fits better
- 02:02:800 (1) - I'd turn this one into two circles because the drums are really strong and they stand out a lot from the previous and next part and you did it for 02:08:915 (1,2,3) - which makes a lot more sense to me
- 02:04:329 (1,2,3) - Instead of this rhythm, i'd suggest a 3/4 reverse slider because it's a much more quiet part
- 02:11:208 (1,2,3,4) - Doesn't make much sense to follow vocals with 1 only and going back to drums after, put a 1/2 slider at 02:11:495 -
- 02:15:030 (1) - I'd honestly suggest to use circles everytime there are drums to support it to give a better feedback when playing
- 02:37:482 - Same as first chorus, add a note, same reasonning
- 02:45:603 (1,3) - Same as before, makes more sense to use circles here because of the drums, also the second one's end is snapped on the 1/3 tick be careful
- 03:32:227 (5,6,7,8) - To make it look cleaner, i'd move this entire selection so 03:32:323 (6,3) - are stacked
- 03:39:871 (4,5,6) - Doesn't make much sense that you didn't follow the guitar here since you did it for the entire pattern, turn this into a 1/2 slider
- 03:42:164 - Imo the kiai should start here instead, makes more sense because of the 1/2 snares and stuff
- 03:45:221 (1,3) - Make these circles since this part is really hypey
- 04:02:036 (3,4,5) - I'd make this a 3/4 reverse slider because it's a calm part
- 04:58:597 - That's personal but from here to 05:03:183 - could be kiai
I loved the song, my mod questions your rhythm choice for the 3/4s a lot because to me in kinda lacked structure as in, passive rhythm for slow part and something more active for stronger parts but other than that the streams are really clean and play well and it's a really fun map