RIP my activity, maybe i shouldn't aiming to be a BN at the first place lol
[Endless Sea]
- Can you make the combo colors lighter a little bit? It blends with the BG too much
- 00:31:982 (3,1,2) - Not perfectly blanketed if you care.
- 00:41:239 (3) - I think that you have better opinion like stacking to the slider end at 00:40:725 (1) - rather having a gimmick overlap, It will looks more tidier and the current one is kinda forced to make this overlap
- 00:41:753 (1) - Optional though, but can you make the end slightly more curve? The aesthetics looks weird imo
- 00:44:153 (5,6) - Two straight kick slider is okay here, making a kick slider that complicated might looks cramped and weird
- 00:43:810 (2,6) - 00:43:982 (3,4,5,1) - Nazi, but i think it looks more better when stacked, But it's okay if you changed those kick slider
- 00:46:896 (4,1) - Perhaps you should make their distance larger, at least move 00:47:239 (1) - so 00:46:896 (4) - can point to it, The flow isn't great when playing at this part, It can't catch up 00:47:239 (1) - so it plays oddly
- 00:48:953 (1) - Nazi, but i think it looks better when they're parallel with 00:49:639 (5,6) - , but you might need to adjust 00:49:982 (1) -
- 00:49:982 (1) - Again, Nazi, but at least you adjust the bottom part like this so the wave can stand out and the look will look better
- 00:51:525 (3) - This overlap creates reading issues, players won't have time to read it
- 00:58:382 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - There's many problems i want to mention in this pattern but i can't make any suggestions on it:
1. 00:57:868 (3,1,2,3) - It doesn't flow well from 3 to 1, it gives a feeling that going to push to the right
2. 00:58:896 (3,4) - The jump distance is strangely decreased yet it also creates flow issues on 00:58:896 (3,4,1) -
3. 00:59:239 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - downward motion at 00:59:239 (1,2,3) - then upward at 00:59:668 (2,3,4) - , although it's okay logically but it makes 00:59:582 (1,2,3,4) - easy to choke than expected when i was testplaying it, but sure is this the reason it easy to choke - 01:10:896 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I like the gimmick and it's rhythm, but can you at least make it spaced a little bit so it gives more space to flow? Same goes to similar patterns
- 01:21:868 (1,2,3,4,1) - Those stacked circles is kinda strange to read, tbh, 01:21:868 (1,2) - Is acceptable but 01:22:382 (3,4,1) - makes the next slider isn't clear enough, but sure is it because the combo color or my skin, but this issue also happened when i was playing it
- 01:26:153 (2,1,2) - Another flow issue though, It's kinda like suddenly reach out for 01:26:668 (1) -
- 01:27:868 (3,4,1) - Same thing that i mentioned on 01:21:868 (1,2,3,4,1) -
- 03:18:782 (1,1) - Remove NC on those two
- 04:49:125 (3,6) - Again, those kick sliders no need to be that complicated
- 05:15:010 (1) - No....The path is hidden too much at the end, maybe you can use the same slider as 05:15:268 (2) -
- 05:16:296 (2,3) - Nazi, but you can make the head part straight this time
- 05:20:153 (1) - The path at the end is kinda hidden too, but better than before
I like the dubstep part though, I really like some of the slider arts, however, the aesthetics and flow needs more work though, what i can see here, you're putting too hard on complicated short slider and gimmick overlaps such as 00:49:982 (1,3) - ,making those part was kinda cramped and hard to sightread, you can review xChorse's part for some parts, his part is awesome
Also, use more copy and paste...
Good luck~