Rita - Bookmark Memories

Giralda wrote:

Hey o/

[Grimore]
00:15:932 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Not the best flow here. Coming off the stream on a linear flow at 00:15:932 (1,2,3) - but then coming back up on a really awkward angle is kinda meh. Try using Ctrl+G on these two objects 00:16:437 (4,6) as this would help contrast 00:16:437 (4,5,6) - with 00:15:932 (1,2,3) - much better than what you had before. fixed
00:10:875 (1) - You may want to snap this circle to at least 1.00x. Right now it plays really awkwardly and the fact that it's not at 1.00x means it's slower than what your slider velocity asks for. fixed
01:00:089 (1) - Rather awkward placement to build up your stream. You had a nice up-and-down movement happening over at 00:59:078 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - and then suddenly the flow switches into a stream that doesn't respect the build-up. As a solution, I would love to see the stream start at where 01:00:341 (4) - is located. fixed
01:09:359 (7,1,2) - This sudden change into linear flow is really random and doesn't fit well into what the music warrants, nor does it fit into what you were doing with circle patterns prior to this. changed a little
01:38:516 (4,5) - This is angled rather awkwardly and doesn't play that well. How about angling it down to the left instead of up? fixed
The map is a beyond what I can handle myself so I'm not really able to judge much of what's happening..
Good luck on the way though.

MEGAtive wrote:

Hi
Mod from PM req First STD Mod lel

Rita - Bookmark Memories

[Grimoire]

Mods

1. 00:19:134 - Hmm, add note here? I could hear the hihat just like 00:26:550 (5) . x=352 y=188 are y suggestion so the length between the current notes are still same. fixed
2. 00:21:831 (2,3) - Maybe you could consider on turning these into a slider. Since it's how the vocal works, and looks like you prioritized the vocal above any. So.... yeah, might turn it back to it's original state
3. 00:24:864 (8,9) - Consider to turning these into a slider too. That's how the vocal works here. passed for now
4. 00:47:786 (3) - I don't know, are following the vocalist's breath-taking sound or hihat? It's okay if it's hihat, but since the more clearer sound is the vocalist's breath-taking I suggest to delete this. Since this will be awkward to play IMO. need more opinion about this
5. 00:48:628 (2) - I think just this being normal note is fine. This doesn't represent any vocal to begin with. fixed
6. 00:48:881 (3,1) - Consider on merging these. For the vocal sake. fixed
7. 01:27:224 - Hmm, maybe add a note here. Preferrably on x=200 y=248 (The coordinate where the slider starts). IMO looks prettier. passed
8. 01:32:280 (2) - Suggest to make this into a slider like 01:31:774 (1) , since it got same melody.fixed

I don't know if this helps, feel free to not give a kudosu to me if the mod didn't accepted. Good Luck~

1. I assume the diff is a collab? If so, add collab to tags.

1. 02:28:741 - For nearly two and a half minutes into the map, there is no SB whatsoever. Why? It's strange to see SB effects so late on the map.
2. 02:55:707 - Why use this font in "5eania.png"? It's difficult to read and gives off that cheap Japanese-wannabe-English look. The "mexican.png"(?) font however is much more uniform and readable. To make the SB consistent, I recommend using that font on "5eanina.png" instead.
3. 03:00:089 - I recommend avoiding the BG being completely dark. Instead, the BG should be barely visible. I think it would make the "white-light" effect more striking.
4. 03:00:426 - Why should "5eanina.png" fade out? Keep it visable throughout the kiai time.
5. 03:10:875 - Like I said about the BG completely dark, keep it barely visible instead.
6. 03:11:213 - Again, "5eanina.png" should be kept visible.
7. 03:21:999 - Why this fade-to-black SB is here? It's the only time the SB does that effect. I recommend either removing it to keep the SB consistent or add this effect more on the map.
8. 03:27:392 - Again, why is this SB here? This time, there's a "Sunlight Flare.png" in effect. Like I said above.
9. 04:15:763 - Like I said above, keep the BG barely visible.
10. 04:15:932 - Like I said above, this time "mexican.png" should be kept visible.

1. 00:07:168 (1) - This slider has too many sliderpoints on it. Remove any unnecessary ones.
2. 00:10:538 (9) - Is it me, or I don't here any hitsound from this circle?
3. 00:11:887 (4) - This slider felt off and lazy. I recommend copying the notes from 00:10:875 (1,2,3) instead of a repeating slider.
4. 00:13:235 (1) - Shorten this slider and add more notes to something similar to what I said above.
5. 00:17:280 - From here on out, the map is a messy combination between the vocals and instrumentals. I highly recommend avoiding the vocals and instead map the instrumentals. Vocals are difficult to follow, boring, and it limits mappers to fully interpret the song.
6. 00:17:111 (9,1) - The tiny jump to this slider should be much larger.
7. 00:17:617 (2) - Reduce sliderpoints.
8. 00:21:831 (2) - Should this slider be closer to the one before at 00:21:325 (1) ?
9. 00:27:729 (1) - Why is the slider shaped like that? Clean it up.
10. 00:27:729 (1,1) - Should there be a jump here?
11. 00:31:269 (2) - Reduce sliderpoints.
12. 00:32:617 (5) - ^
13. 00:38:010 (3) - ^
14. 00:41:550 (1) - ^
15. 00:43:572 (2) - ^
16. 00:44:246 (1) - ^
17. 00:46:943 (1) - ^
18. 00:47:786 (3) - Adjust this circle slightly to x:452 y:148
19. 00:49:640 (1) - Reduce sliderpoints.
20. 00:50:229 (3) - Adjust this circle slightly to x:224 y:264
21. 00:55:033 (1) - I think the slider velocity is too fast. Reduce it to x1.25
22. 01:02:786 (4) - Raise this circle slightly to x:492 y:368
23. 01:03:123 (6) - Reduce sliderpoints.
24. 01:07:168 (1) - Remove this slider and map it out instead.
25. 01:11:213 (4) - Reduce sliderpoints.
26. 01:12:224 (7) - ^
27. 01:12:561 (1) - Should there be a jump here? Also reduce sliderpoints.
28. 01:13:909 (6) - Reduce sliderpoints.
29. 01:14:920 (2) - ^
30. 01:16:606 (7) - ^
31. 01:17:954 (1) - ^
32. 01:18:460 (3) - ^
33. 01:19:302 (1) - ^
34. 01:21:156 (7) - ^
35. (Optional) 01:20:651 (5,6,7) - The (6) circle should be in the middle between the (5) and (7) slider.
36. 01:21:999 (1) - Reduce sliderpoints.
37. 01:23:347 (1) - I think a spinner is better here instead of a long, awkward slider.
38. 01:27:392 (1) - Reduce sliderpoints.
39. 01:30:089 (1) - ^
40. 01:30:089 (1,2,3) - ^
41. 01:31:100 (3) - Extend this slider all the way to 01:31:690 , behind 01:31:774 (1)
42. 01:32:786 (1,2) - Reduce sliderpoints.
43. 01:34:134 (1) - I think the slider velocity is too fast. Reduce it to x1.23
44. 01:39:527 (3) - Reduce sliderpoints.
45. 01:44:078 (1) - ^
46. 01:45:257 (1) - ^
47. 01:47:617 (1,2) - ^
48. 01:50:314 (1) - ^
49. 01:50:819 (3) - ^
50. 01:53:010 (1) - ^
51. 01:53:516 (3) - ^
52. 01:55:539 (3,1) - There should be a jump here.
53. 01:58:404 (1,2) - Reduce sliderpoints.
54. 01:59:415 (4,1,2) - ^
55. 02:01:100 (1) - ^ ...I think you know where I'm getting at by now. A lot of sliders are messy and unappealing. Removing unnecessary sliderpoints should clean it up a bit. I won't mention this from now on, but please clean up your sliders.
56. 02:17:617 (2) - Lower this circle to x:360 y:272
57. 02:19:640 (7) - This circle should be farther out from 02:19:302 (6)
58. 02:20:314 (9) - Similar to above ^
59. 02:22:336 (3,1) - A jump here?
60. 02:50:988 (1) - I think a spinner would be better than a ridiculously long slider.
61. 02:56:381 - I think this the best part of the diff. Fun stuff.
62. 03:23:179 (1) - A spinner here instead?
63. 03:28:572 (1) - ^
64. 03:40:875 (1) - ^
65. 03:43:572 (1) - I think the slider velocity is too fast. Reduce it to x1.25
66. 03:48:965 (1) - Map this part out instead of a long slider.
67. 03:54:359 (1) - ^
68. 04:09:696 (1) - A spinner here instead?
69. 04:33:460 - I think the map should end here...
70. 04:52:336 - ...OR here instead. The slow sliders at the end feel unnecessary. At 04:52:336 (1) - a spinner would be better here. And 04:59:331 (1) - the spinner should be removed. I like to think all of this artificially lengthens the map so it can go for Approval instead. This feels dirty to me.

Darcsol wrote:

Mod request


[General]

1. I assume the diff is a collab? If so, add collab to tags.

[Storyboard]

1. 02:28:741 - For nearly two and a half minutes into the map, there is no SB whatsoever. Why? It's strange to see SB effects so late on the map.
2. 02:55:707 - Why use this font in "5eania.png"? It's difficult to read and gives off that cheap Japanese-wannabe-English look. The "mexican.png"(?) font however is much more uniform and readable. To make the SB consistent, I recommend using that font on "5eanina.png" instead.
3. 03:00:089 - I recommend avoiding the BG being completely dark. Instead, the BG should be barely visible. I think it would make the "white-light" effect more striking.
4. 03:00:426 - Why should "5eanina.png" fade out? Keep it visable throughout the kiai time.
5. 03:10:875 - Like I said about the BG completely dark, keep it barely visible instead.
6. 03:11:213 - Again, "5eanina.png" should be kept visible.
7. 03:21:999 - Why this fade-to-black SB is here? It's the only time the SB does that effect. I recommend either removing it to keep the SB consistent or add this effect more on the map.
8. 03:27:392 - Again, why is this SB here? This time, there's a "Sunlight Flare.png" in effect. Like I said above.
9. 04:15:763 - Like I said above, keep the BG barely visible.
10. 04:15:932 - Like I said above, this time "mexican.png" should be kept visible.

I think consistency is the main problem with the SB. The first half of the map not having any SB is strange; you might as well not have any SB. The awkward font looks off. And some of the effects are unnecessary. I hope you consider my suggestions.


[Grimoire]

1. 00:07:168 (1) - This slider has too many sliderpoints on it. Remove any unnecessary ones.
2. 00:10:538 (9) - Is it me, or I don't here any hitsound from this circle?
3. 00:11:887 (4) - This slider felt off and lazy. I recommend copying the notes from 00:10:875 (1,2,3) instead of a repeating slider. passed for now
4. 00:13:235 (1) - Shorten this slider and add more notes to something similar to what I said above. passed for now
5. 00:17:280 - From here on out, the map is a messy combination between the vocals and instrumentals. I highly recommend avoiding the vocals and instead map the instrumentals. Vocals are difficult to follow, boring, and it limits mappers to fully interpret the song.
6. 00:17:111 (9,1) - The tiny jump to this slider should be much larger. fixed
7. 00:17:617 (2) - Reduce sliderpoints.
8. 00:21:831 (2) - Should this slider be closer to the one before at 00:21:325 (1) ? fixed
9. 00:27:729 (1) - Why is the slider shaped like that? Clean it up.shape fits the sound imo, if more suggest to change it i will
10. 00:27:729 (1,1) - Should there be a jump here? maybe
11. 00:31:269 (2) - Reduce sliderpoints.
12. 00:32:617 (5) - ^
13. 00:38:010 (3) - ^
14. 00:41:550 (1) - ^
15. 00:43:572 (2) - ^
16. 00:44:246 (1) - ^
17. 00:46:943 (1) - ^
18. 00:47:786 (3) - Adjust this circle slightly to x:452 y:148 fixed but not to your exact location
19. 00:49:640 (1) - Reduce sliderpoints.
20. 00:50:229 (3) - Adjust this circle slightly to x:224 y:264 fixed
21. 00:55:033 (1) - I think the slider velocity is too fast. Reduce it to x1.25 fixed
22. 01:02:786 (4) - Raise this circle slightly to x:492 y:368 fixed
23. 01:03:123 (6) - Reduce sliderpoints.
24. 01:07:168 (1) - Remove this slider and map it out instead. passed
25. 01:11:213 (4) - Reduce sliderpoints.
26. 01:12:224 (7) - ^
27. 01:12:561 (1) - Should there be a jump here? Also reduce sliderpoints.
28. 01:13:909 (6) - Reduce sliderpoints.
29. 01:14:920 (2) - ^
30. 01:16:606 (7) - ^
31. 01:17:954 (1) - ^
32. 01:18:460 (3) - ^
33. 01:19:302 (1) - ^
34. 01:21:156 (7) - ^
35. (Optional) 01:20:651 (5,6,7) - The (6) circle should be in the middle between the (5) and (7) slider. passed
36. 01:21:999 (1) - Reduce sliderpoints.
37. 01:23:347 (1) - I think a spinner is better here instead of a long, awkward slider. passed
38. 01:27:392 (1) - Reduce sliderpoints.
39. 01:30:089 (1) - ^
40. 01:30:089 (1,2,3) - ^
41. 01:31:100 (3) - Extend this slider all the way to 01:31:690 , behind 01:31:774 (1) need more opinion about this
42. 01:32:786 (1,2) - Reduce sliderpoints.
43. 01:34:134 (1) - I think the slider velocity is too fast. Reduce it to x1.23 reduced
44. 01:39:527 (3) - Reduce sliderpoints.
45. 01:44:078 (1) - ^
46. 01:45:257 (1) - ^
47. 01:47:617 (1,2) - ^
48. 01:50:314 (1) - ^
49. 01:50:819 (3) - ^
50. 01:53:010 (1) - ^
51. 01:53:516 (3) - ^
52. 01:55:539 (3,1) - There should be a jump here. fixed
53. 01:58:404 (1,2) - Reduce sliderpoints.
54. 01:59:415 (4,1,2) - ^
55. 02:01:100 (1) - ^ ...I think you know where I'm getting at by now. A lot of sliders are messy and unappealing. Removing unnecessary sliderpoints should clean it up a bit. I won't mention this from now on, but please clean up your sliders.
56. 02:17:617 (2) - Lower this circle to x:360 y:272 seems really weird
57. 02:19:640 (7) - This circle should be farther out from 02:19:302 (6) why? it would make the spacing uneven
58. 02:20:314 (9) - Similar to above ^ fixed
59. 02:22:336 (3,1) - A jump here? passed for now
60. 02:50:988 (1) - I think a spinner would be better than a ridiculously long slider. passed
61. 02:56:381 - I think this the best part of the diff. Fun stuff.
62. 03:23:179 (1) - A spinner here instead? passed
63. 03:28:572 (1) - ^ ^
64. 03:40:875 (1) - ^ ^
65. 03:43:572 (1) - I think the slider velocity is too fast. Reduce it to x1.25 passed for now
66. 03:48:965 (1) - Map this part out instead of a long slider. passed
67. 03:54:359 (1) - ^ ^
68. 04:09:696 (1) - A spinner here instead? ^
69. 04:33:460 - I think the map should end here...
70. 04:52:336 - ...OR here instead. The slow sliders at the end feel unnecessary. At 04:52:336 (1) - a spinner would be better here. And 04:59:331 (1) - the spinner should be removed. I like to think all of this artificially lengthens the map so it can go for Approval instead. This feels dirty to me.

The main problems I have are the sliders, the vocal-mapping, and the end of the map.

The sliders are very annoying to me. There are a lot of unnecessary sliderpoints that made awkward curves and slopes, making the map look rough. I highly recommend cleaning up those sliders.

I feel like mapping only the vocals is limiting the potential of your map. Consider going over the map and remap the vocals.

I already said my thoughts about the end of the map. It feels like a dirty move to avoid making diffs.

There are other problems with your map, especially with the difficulty. Some parts look very questionable, but I don't have the skills to pass this diff, making it difficult to evaluate. Hopefully modders can address that.


Good luck

DahplA wrote:

Normal mod as requested.

Grimoire

1. Add combo colors.
2. 01:47:280 (4) - I feel like this would make more sense as a 3/4 for the vocals. passed for now
3. 02:47:448 (2,3) - Likewise, I think if you combined these two into one slider, it would match the vocals better. I feel that 02:47:954 (3,4,1) - is too mashy for some reason, as 02:47:954 (3) - isn't mapped on a vocal line. nice notice, can't believe i haven't see that. fixed!
4. 04:21:662 (1) - This slider doesn't really make sense. You want to emphasise a sound here with the SV increase, but you've lowered the spacing from 04:21:578 (4) - . I'd have the spacing stay consistent with 04:21:325 (1,2,3,4) -
5. 04:32:448 (1,1) - 1.5x and 1.25x. Strange, compared to the 1.5x and 0.5x of 04:21:662 (1,1) - . I think you should keep it consistent by raising the first set from 0.5x to 1.5x. Even if the sounds are slightly different, I just think that the drastic SV change from 1.5x to 0.5x is too much.

That's basically it. I couldn't find much, as you don't often come across these types of maps. While there aren't much errors, I don't necessarily feel this is too polished either.

Good luck.

-Yuzuriha wrote:

from game chat

General

Audio Lead In 2000

http://gyazo.com/0a66939d4fc95a44d984f94eb2ba8674
About the same

Grimoire

00:02:954 (3) - strange . i think normal curve
00:02:449 (1,3) - same

00:20:482 (2) - nazi blanket fixed

00:22:336 (3) - strange , normal curve plz

00:23:853 (5) - NC fixed

00:52:336 (1) - 00:52:168 this start pending

01:13:909 (6,1) - NC swap fixed

03:55:622 (5) - delete pending

-----------------------------------

mod finish

gl

1. 00:04:808: Blanket departs from hitcircle near end.
2. 00:24:359: Blanket does not conform to end of slider.
3. 00:51:662: Blanket is too far away from hitcircle at beginning.
4. 01:04:134: Blanket departs from hitcircle near end.
5. 01:12:561: Blanket #2 departs from hitcircle near end.
6. 02:29:415: Blanket gap seems to narrow as slider goes on.
7. 02:58:572: Blanket is too far away at beginning.
8. 03:02:786: Blanket is completely off.
9. 03:04:808: Blanket is slightly off at beginning.
10. 03:05:145: Blanket (if meant to be a blanket) is completely off.
11. 03:12:561: Blanket is too far away at beginning.
12. 03:26:718: Blanket (if intended) does not conform to 03:25:875 near end.
13. 03:57:729: Blanket could conform a bit more to hitcircle.
14. 04:05:145: Blanket ending is too close to 04:05:061.

1. 00:39:359: Slider angle at beginning is too sharp, does not align with end.
2. 01:03:797: Slider end is almost straight, angle in slider seems a bit sharp.
3. 01:11:718: Slider seems shallow at beginning, angle is not consistent.
4. 01:14:920: Slider is not smooth near end.
5. 01:21:999: Slider is not smooth near middle.
6. 01:27:392: Slider has sharp angle at beginning.
7. 01:38:179: Slider could be smoother at end of wiggle.
8. 01:56:044: Slider curve is not consistent.
9. 02:19:302: Slider angle at beginning seems too sharp.
10. 02:49:640: Slider angle at beginning seems too sharp.
11. 03:20:482: Slider angle at end seems too sharp.
12. 03:39:527: (Slider is fine, but I feel that the curve near the beginning could be a bit more shallow.)
13. 03:43:572: Slider seems too sharp right after wiggle.

Anxient wrote:

delay2much4m3

00:04:724 (5) - for the starting part i think you should avoid 1/4 beats. just coz its not hype enough.
00:06:999 (3,4) - questionable flow. really odd. fix the entry from 3 to 4. fixed
00:11:887 (4) - imho try something like this. feels better for me idk fixed

a

00:23:684 (4) - i think you should put it higher up, like this? fixed

b

00:24:022 - you didnt map a strong beat, i recommend you to map it. more like just mudge the slider forward, add note and shorten. yatta! i don't understand
00:37:168 (4,5) - try having a back and forth jump. fixed

c

00:39:359 (1) - end and start not round enuf D:
00:41:381 (3,1) - fix entry, same as first mod. i don't understand
00:45:763 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - these jumps feel a bit stale... try doing something else like triangle square mix, but make sure the jumps flow well to enter 00:46:943 (1) - i did something like this idk

d

00:53:684 (1) - a ctrl g would flow much better, recommended fix maybe
00:55:538 (3,4,5,6,7) - woah easy there on the jumps m8. song didnt escalate yet fixed
01:12:224 (8) - idk why my brain told me that ctrl g would be a good idea, but try it. who knows? lol fixed
01:23:347 - add a note here, 01:23:684 - drag slider here. emphasis plz, just cut the tail a bit. will consider

e

01:38:684 (5,6,7,8,9) - straight slider would work MUCH more better passed for now
01:40:033 (5,6,7,8,9) - ^ ^
01:41:381 (5,6,7,8,9) - ^ ^
01:48:628 (3) - ctrl g - recommended fixed
01:48:965 (1) - ^ - recommended fixed
01:56:044 (2,3,4) - http://puu.sh/jmyTx/a6f2739229.jpg plz fixed
02:03:797 (1,2) - place 2 near the slider end of 1 to support the momentum, place 02:04:302 (3) - according to circular flow. fixed
02:04:808 (4,5,6) - map not hype enough to use such a huge jump atm :v maybe
02:08:600 (4,5) - a spaced stream would actually be fitting here to support the large jumps later on ;v - recommended fixed

try to follow this

02:15:595 (4) - ctrl g fixed
02:16:269 (2,3,4,5) - straight slider? maybe
02:23:348 (4,5,6,7) - song not hype enough for such large jumps atm fixed
02:24:527 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^, but make it more spaced than the above fixed
02:27:055 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - NOW WERE TALKING
02:29:415 - underwhelming part of the song. i dissapooint D:
02:34:808 (1) - make end slider more round D: idk how
02:39:864 (4,1) - this is good entry, 02:41:213 (3,4) - but this isnt. try to make it similar. fixed
.02:43:572 (2) - ctrl g - recommended awesome,fixed
02:44:246 (3) - ^ - recommended ^
02:50:988 (1) - this is gorgeous
02:57:392 (4,5,1) - ctrl g 5 to make consistent with slider start triangles. also plays better
03:08:347 (2) - おっぱい―　
03:19:640 - ITSUDEMOOOOOO
03:20:314 (3,4) - entry fixed
03:23:179 (1) - blanket slider the loop :L idk how
03:27:898 (3) - ctrl g would make better flow but 03:28:235 (4) - this... remade

this might be pushing it

03:52:336 (6,1,2,3) - lower the DS for this jump. song not strong enough at this part. i hope you know what i mean. fixed
03:55:707 (6) - bad entry. dont slow down the slider when stream is so fast. fixed
04:01:100 (1) - ctrl g maybe? passed for now
04:01:606 (2,3) - place 3 more up to support the entry of 3 by the slider end curving upwards from 2 to 3, momentum if you do not understand anything fixed
04:09:527 (2,1) - really really bad entry. momentum breaks and flow is like CRAShokay im dead. im no slider expert, but i know for sure that starting your slider in this shape would be soooo much better. - MUST DO fixed

onegai

04:17:280 (2,3,4,1,2) - this part is abit confusing to explain so lets do this step by step!
1. 04:17:786 (4,1) - hl these two and ctrl g
2. reverse the positions of these two
3. 04:17:786 (4) - lengthen this
4. 04:18:291 (2) - delete this
5. 04:18:460 (1) - place this closer to 04:18:628 (1) - this

bah

04:24:022 (1,2,1) - curve upwards plz
04:29:415 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - a bit questioanable? try going with 1/4 everytime you alternate to the larger spaced stream? if youre confused by this send me forum pm

good luck! that was alot.

PointTaken wrote:

:? This is a visual mod ( as well as my first). It will only be for sliders and blankets.

[Blankets]

1. 00:04:808: Blanket departs from hitcircle near end.
2. 00:24:359: Blanket does not conform to end of slider.
3. 00:51:662: Blanket is too far away from hitcircle at beginning.
4. 01:04:134: Blanket departs from hitcircle near end.
5. 01:12:561: Blanket #2 departs from hitcircle near end.
6. 02:29:415: Blanket gap seems to narrow as slider goes on.
7. 02:58:572: Blanket is too far away at beginning.
8. 03:02:786: Blanket is completely off.
9. 03:04:808: Blanket is slightly off at beginning.
10. 03:05:145: Blanket (if meant to be a blanket) is completely off.
11. 03:12:561: Blanket is too far away at beginning.
12. 03:26:718: Blanket (if intended) does not conform to 03:25:875 near end.
13. 03:57:729: Blanket could conform a bit more to hitcircle.
14. 04:05:145: Blanket ending is too close to 04:05:061.

[Sliders]

1. 00:39:359: Slider angle at beginning is too sharp, does not align with end.
2. 01:03:797: Slider end is almost straight, angle in slider seems a bit sharp.
3. 01:11:718: Slider seems shallow at beginning, angle is not consistent.
4. 01:14:920: Slider is not smooth near end.
5. 01:21:999: Slider is not smooth near middle.
6. 01:27:392: Slider has sharp angle at beginning.
7. 01:38:179: Slider could be smoother at end of wiggle.
8. 01:56:044: Slider curve is not consistent.
9. 02:19:302: Slider angle at beginning seems too sharp.
10. 02:49:640: Slider angle at beginning seems too sharp.
11. 03:20:482: Slider angle at end seems too sharp.
12. 03:39:527: (Slider is fine, but I feel that the curve near the beginning could be a bit more shallow.)
13. 03:43:572: Slider seems too sharp right after wiggle.

All Fixed! expect for collab part & those i intended

[Closing Statement]

Nice map overall, can't wait to play it and fail once it's ranked. Shot a star.

kunkakunkakunkakunka wrote:

From req.

General

※Tag : Please add it. 「Librarian of Grimoire」(Title)、「Astronauts ALYA」(Production company)、「eroge」
Source → [official site]

Grimoire

00:02:449 (1) - it is add finish to a head. fixed

00:04:808 (6) - I would like the blanket neatly, please. end point x:172 y:172 fixed

00:14:920 (1,2,3,4) - A flow is an acute angle. This can solution by moving 00:15:257 (2) - . How about this? fixed

SPOILER

00:18:460 (1,1) - I felt rhythm oddly. How about this? nice! fixed

SPOILER

00:28:404 (2,3,4) - A little more beautiful placement is desirable. fixed

SPOILER

00:34:640 (6) - NC? fixed

00:41:044 (1) - I think that this NC is not necessary. fixed

00:46:437 (1) - ^ fixed

01:01:774 (1) - I feel NC to be unclear from here. For example, 01:03:123 (6) - NC is necessary according to consistency here. For the same reason, remove the NC 01:03:797 (1) - . Furthermore, 01:04:471 (3) - NC, and 01:05:145 (1) - remove NC. and 01:05:819 (4) - NC.
A consistent flow is kept in this. I think that it is better to add NC at regular intervals. Seemingly, because there is still a lot, please confirm it. fixed

01:11:718 (6) - I would like the stack neatly, please. end point x:164 y:212 fixed

01:53:347 (2) - A flow and overlap are not good. I recommend movement of 01:53:347 (2) - . How about with x:224 y:224 ? fixed

03:59:415 (1) - it is add finish to a head. fixed

04:27:224 (1) - This is not reverse. A player may be confused. I think that you should acquire an angle a little more.

04:44:246 (1) - it is add whistle to a head. fixed

04:52:336 (1) - A spinner is better. and 04:59:331 (1) - Because there is not a sound, it is unnecessary.

GL.

1. 04:11:887 - Kiai Time is toggled on for less than 15 seconds. (check AIMod)

1. e_yuu1402.png

1. ev/5eania.png
2. ev/_________10.png
3. ev/_________16.png
4. ev/e_sub0301.png
5. ev/e_ter0101.png
6. ev/e_yuu0801.png
7. ev/flash.png
8. ev/mexican.png
9. ev/s_yuuc001.png
10. ev/sunlight flare.png
11. ev/white.png

1. 00:10:538 (9,1) - swap NC .. NC start on 00:10:538 (9)
2. 00:14:246 (1) - remove NC here for consistency , add NC on 00:14:583 (5) - and remove NC on 00:14:920 (1)
3. 00:14:246 (2) - add clap here
4. 00:17:617 (2) - 5th point move to 208|312 for better flow
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 00:19:302 (3) - 236|183 (stack with 00:20:988 (3) - )
6. 00:26:381 (4) - better make same placement like 00:25:370 (1,2) - move this not to 260|200
7. 00:26:718 (1) - 336|80 , straight with 00:26:887 (2) -
8. 00:27:561 (8) - Ctrl+H then rotate 75 degree for better flow
   
   SPOILER

   
9. 00:30:257 (4,5,1) - this placement too close , better move this. Here my recommend 00:30:257 (4) - 396|316 and 00:30:763 (1) - 308|336 (7th point move to 264|160)
   
   SPOILER

   
10. 00:32:111 (1,2) - stack tail.
11. 00:36:156 (1,2) - as you can see here , you give small spacing . But on 00:35:819 (4,1) - you give big spacing , better you make another one same spacing like this. If you keep that , move 00:36:493 (2) - 256|148 same like 00:38:010 (3,4)
12. 00:39:359 (1) - remove NC here , NC start on 00:40:707 (2)
13. 00:49:302 (2) - 288|324 , same spacing on 00:47:448 (2,3)
14. 00:59:752 (3,4) - that's was a big spacing , I can't even tap this. decrease the spacing please .. or you can move 00:59:752 (3) - to 352|319
15. 01:01:437 (7,8,9) - 196|208 stack with 01:00:426 (1) - also move 01:01:269 (6) - 104|368 . If you don't mind , make 01:00:426 (1,2) - same spacing like 01:01:100 (5,6) - I point before ..
16. 01:04:134 (5) - 7th point move to 212|168 nazi blanket
17. 01:05:651 (5) - 296|200?
18. 01:06:156 (2) - better stack on slider tail 01:05:819 (1) - because the spacing too close.
19. 01:19:808 (2) - 296|168?
20. 01:28:572 (1) - remove NC
21. 01:29:078 (1) - 168|328 blanket with 01:28:572 (1)
22. 02:02:111 (6,1) - stack
23. 02:16:943 (2) - 36|52 and 02:19:640 (4) - 460|112 . Same spacing like 02:19:808 (1,2) -
24. 02:24:527 (2,3,4,5,6) - really death spacing , you need decrease the spacing
25. 02:27:055 (1,2,3,4) - ^
26. 02:35:819 (2) - better stack on slider tail 02:34:808 (1)
27. 04:24:696 (1,1) - hmm..

Frey wrote:

ahh, ppism

• Storyboard

1. 5eania.png and mexican.png have unnecessary transparency, which could disobey the rules, so here is the cut version: http://puu.sh/jt5aa/ac95878b6c.rar The location of 5eania.png may be changed, so do remember to check and adjust it. fixed
   
2. and I think your bg pictures for sb are too large (like e_sub0301、s_yuuc001, each pic is about 1mb), can you compress them?

• Grimoire

1. Custom combo color would be better. well, default is good though
   
2. 00:32:111 (1,2) - stack those slider ends? fixed
   
3. 03:33:123 (1) - two inherit points at the same time! delete one please fixed

well, I can't play this map, so I can't give you suggestions about flow or something. I think you need more tests by pro players. Good luck guys.

1. 00:11:044 (2) - try make like This.
2. 00:19:640 (5) - look carefully and maybe here's nazi blanket with 00:19:471 (4) -
3. 00:20:482 (2) - perfect blanket if you do the Slider structured clean
4. 01:29:078 (1) - if you supposed to do blanket, it's not perfect.
5. 01:32:111 (2) - not balanced space between 01:31:774 (1,3) -
6. 02:42:898 (1) - good blanket. So please create the slider clean like this
7. 04:01:606 (2) - ^
8. 04:11:550 (2) - Like this? (nvm about my bad blanket lmao)
9. 04:24:022 (1,2,1) - seems awkward with unbalanced triples even has NC

Sky Trias wrote:

Hi Slick! o/
As your request for posting mod in thread , sorry late ..
no kds.

[General]

1. 04:11:887 - Kiai Time is toggled on for less than 15 seconds. (check AIMod)

[Storyboard]

Codeless SB Elements

1. e_yuu1402.png

Unused Image Files

1. ev/5eania.png
2. ev/_________10.png
3. ev/_________16.png
4. ev/e_sub0301.png
5. ev/e_ter0101.png
6. ev/e_yuu0801.png
7. ev/flash.png
8. ev/mexican.png
9. ev/s_yuuc001.png
10. ev/sunlight flare.png
11. ev/white.png

[Grimoire]

1. 00:10:538 (9,1) - swap NC .. NC start on 00:10:538 (9) fixed
2. 00:14:246 (1) - remove NC here for consistency , add NC on 00:14:583 (5) - and remove NC on 00:14:920 (1) https://osu.ppy.sh/s/330216
3. 00:14:246 (2) - add clap here but there is no clap in the music
4. 00:17:617 (2) - 5th point move to 208|312 for better flow fixed
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 00:19:302 (3) - 236|183 (stack with 00:20:988 (3) - ) fixed
6. 00:26:381 (4) - better make same placement like 00:25:370 (1,2) - move this not to 260|200 i don't understand, sorry
7. 00:26:718 (1) - 336|80 , straight with 00:26:887 (2) - fixed
8. 00:27:561 (8) - Ctrl+H then rotate 75 degree for better flow will see about this
   
   SPOILER

   
9. 00:30:257 (4,5,1) - this placement too close , better move this. Here my recommend 00:30:257 (4) - 396|316 and 00:30:763 (1) - 308|336 (7th point move to 264|160) fixed
   
   SPOILER

   
10. 00:32:111 (1,2) - stack tail. fixed
11. 00:36:156 (1,2) - as you can see here , you give small spacing . But on 00:35:819 (4,1) - you give big spacing , better you make another one same spacing like this. If you keep that , move 00:36:493 (2) - 256|148 same like 00:38:010 (3,4) fixed
12. 00:39:359 (1) - remove NC here , NC start on 00:40:707 (2) idk
13. 00:49:302 (2) - 288|324 , same spacing on 00:47:448 (2,3) idk
14. 00:59:752 (3,4) - that's was a big spacing , I can't even tap this. decrease the spacing please .. or you can move 00:59:752 (3) - to 352|319 passed for now
15. 01:01:437 (7,8,9) - 196|208 stack with 01:00:426 (1) - also move 01:01:269 (6) - 104|368 . If you don't mind , make 01:00:426 (1,2) - same spacing like 01:01:100 (5,6) - I point before ..
16. 01:04:134 (5) - 7th point move to 212|168 nazi blanket fixed
17. 01:05:651 (5) - 296|200? passed
18. 01:06:156 (2) - better stack on slider tail 01:05:819 (1) - because the spacing too close. passed
19. 01:19:808 (2) - 296|168? passed
20. 01:28:572 (1) - remove NC thought NC gave a hint slider had big SV change
21. 01:29:078 (1) - 168|328 blanket with 01:28:572 (1) fixed
22. 02:02:111 (6,1) - stack will see about this
23. 02:16:943 (2) - 36|52 and 02:19:640 (4) - 460|112 . Same spacing like 02:19:808 (1,2) - fixed
24. 02:24:527 (2,3,4,5,6) - really death spacing , you need decrease the spacing probably
25. 02:27:055 (1,2,3,4) - ^ i think this is fine
26. 02:35:819 (2) - better stack on slider tail 02:34:808 (1) maybe but will make bad spacing
27. 04:24:696 (1,1) - hmm..

[-AKiTOSHi-] wrote:

I'm not good at looking expert rated maps but here we go~

1. 00:11:044 (2) - try make like This. fixed
2. 00:19:640 (5) - look carefully and maybe here's nazi blanket with 00:19:471 (4) - fixed
3. 00:20:482 (2) - perfect blanket if you do the Slider structured clean fixed
4. 01:29:078 (1) - if you supposed to do blanket, it's not perfect. fixed
5. 01:32:111 (2) - not balanced space between 01:31:774 (1,3) - fixed
6. 02:42:898 (1) - good blanket. So please create the slider clean like this fixed
7. 04:01:606 (2) - ^ fixed
8. 04:11:550 (2) - Like this? (nvm about my bad blanket lmao) yeah might be good
9. 04:24:022 (1,2,1) - seems awkward with unbalanced triples even has NC

I see nothing with brutal maps ;w;
no kds if it is useless

Sky Trias wrote:

Hi Slick! o/
[General]

1. 04:11:887 - Kiai Time is toggled on for less than 15 seconds. (check AIMod)

Loughje wrote:

PM request~

Grimoire

00:03:628 (6,3) - Blanket these and see how you like it.
00:05:651 (3,5) - Could make this into a perfect blanket, just a little off. fixed
00:11:887 (1,1) - I know you're trying to match the violin but I think ending the slider where the hitsound is might be a better option, up to you.
00:19:640 (5,1) - Small blanket issue. fixed
00:19:977 (1,2) - ^ fixed
00:26:381 (4) - This seems a bit close to 00:25:875 (3) maybe move it back a bit for a cleaner look. fixed
00:26:887 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - These are pretty quiet , think about turning up the volume for these a little bit. fixed
00:36:156 (1,2) - 00:36:156 (1,2) - These are hitting which doesn't look too good in here, maybe blanket instead? fixed
00:40:707 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - More very quiet notes.
01:09:696 (6,3) - Pretty extreme jumps, maybe take them down just a bit.
02:05:482 (2) - Why not blanket this with 02:05:145 (1)
02:11:718 (6) - Really close notes again, think of moving. fixed
03:05:735 (1,2) - ^
03:35:145 (3) - The tail of this is odd being right next to 03:35:482 (1)
03:36:662 (1) - Id curve this up to 03:37:505 (2) For a better flow. fixed
03:48:123 (3) - I think this slider looks odd behind 03:47:617 (1) take a look and see if you know what I mean.
04:00:763 (4,1) - Move 1 back for a cleaner blanket.
04:33:460 - Timing point here and set it to BPM: 89

Not a huge mod, really nice map! Hope this helps and good luck on rankings!

Lasse wrote:

little check from #memehelp

02:11:887 (1) - move the last point a little bit to the right, would look better imo fixed
03:02:448 (4,1) - blanket looks minimally off
03:05:145 (4,2) - stack end of 4 on 2?
03:53:347 (2) - move a little bit up/right so the completed slider lead more to it# fixed
04:06:999 (3) - dangerously close to being offscreen... fixed
04:08:853 (4,1) - blanket the end of 4 with the upper part of 1? might do
04:09:527 (2) - move to around 228/48? fixed
04:12:224 (2) - blanket or stack on sliderend?
04:47:617 (1,2) - blanket in each other fixed
04:51:662 (2) - make this a mirrored version of 1 ?

Honestly, the map seems really well polished and all those mods on it made it really hard to find stuff.
So I've been extremely picky with those
But since it's looks nice I'll leave a star

1. 00:02:449 (1,2,3) - Distance between (2,3) should be higher then (1,2) because the violin (3) is much stronger. Move (2) to 328:64 for example
   
2. 00:04:724 (5) - Why did you map this? It seems overmapped, delete this circle please
3. 00:10:117 (5) - ^^
4. 00:25:370 (1,2) - Overlap is a bit weird. Consider moving (2) to 267:340, looks better, has better flow, and it stacks with an previous object (00:25:033 (5) - )
5. 00:39:359 (1) - Nice slider!
6. 00:54:696 (4) - Consider moving to 211:281 so it stacks with the next object. It looks much better then the current way, due to the weird overlap
7. 01:14:583 (3,4,1) - Don't you think these jumps are a bit overdone? It's only 1/4 distance, and due to the slidertick interfering, you need to hold it to almost the end
8. 01:38:684 (5,6,7,8,9) - Stream looks a bit messed up, please make it look better
9. 02:13:572 (3,4) - Blanket?
10. 02:27:055 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - As said above, this part is way to hard. Look at the screenshot. This is one of the 2 big peaks. Nerf it a bit (or at least the spaced stream)
11. 02:34:471 (2,1) - Teach me how to make awesome things like this O.o
12. 02:42:224 (2) - The jumps feels out of place. Cltr G this
13. 02:50:988 (1) - Teach me how to make awesome things like this O.o - I LOVE THIS SLIDER
    
    
    [5eania]
    This part misses MANY NCs
    Usually, with dubstep, many NC are there to increase readability. Combos of 1 are really common
    
    1. 02:56:887 (2,3) - NC, either do both or none of them, if you do, NC 02:57:392 (4) - as well
    2. 02:59:078 (2,3) - ^^
       
    3. 03:00:679 (2,3,4,5,6) - NC ALL of these 5
    4. 03:09:864 (2) - NC
    5. 03:11:465 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Nc all 6
    6. 03:13:909 (4) - NC
       03:17:617 (5) - NC
    I love this part
    
    [Grimoire again]
14. 03:23:179 (1) - Nice slider
15. 03:28:572 (1) - ^^
16. 03:52:336 (4,7) - Either stack them or space them, the overlap feels rather awkward
17. 03:56:381 (3,4,1) - Those jumps O.o Please decrease spacing
18. 03:59:415 (5) - Stack to 03:58:909 (2) - , don't forget to move 03:59:752 (1) - as well
19. 04:09:527 (2) - Why not move this to 192:184 for the blanket? Looks better then an overlap
    
    [Midge]
    
    1. 04:13:404 (1) - Consider making it in such way (1)'s end stacks with 04:13:066 (1) -
    2. 04:15:763 (2) - NC for build up for the next part, as it feels quite similar
    3. 04:17:280 (2) - NC for start of stanza
    4. 04:20:314 (2) - Nc, cause it looks better
    5. 04:22:168 (2) - NC for better readability, it really looks like 1/4, and the huge jump before this doesn't make it better
    6. 04:28:067 (2) - NC for stanza
    7. 04:29:415 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Tone down a little please. Many people will break/fail only because of this part
    I also love this part
    
    [Grimoire ptIII]
20. Many slider here are unrankable because of their low volume. Either the sliderbody can be silenced, but then the end/sliderticks must be audible (or in any other way) You can keep it low, but please, something like 15-20 so it at least is audible (players who play this type of hard level usually have silent sldierbody/slidertick, so you can also only silence the end

Baraatje123 wrote:

As promised

[Midge]

1. 04:13:404 (1) - Consider making it in such way (1)'s end stacks with 04:13:066 (1) - i like the freehand look. stylized choice, i guess
2. 04:15:763 (2) - NC for build up for the next part, as it feels quite similar swapped 1 and 2 nc
3. 04:17:280 (2) - NC for start of stanza start of stanza is emphasized through the nc on 1. this nc looks cleaner, as 04:16:943 (1,2) - is nc'd in the same way
4. 04:20:314 (2) - Nc, cause it looks better done
5. 04:22:168 (2) - NC for better readability, it really looks like 1/4, and the huge jump before this doesn't make it better done
6. 04:28:067 (2) - NC for stanza same as the reason given before
7. 04:29:415 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Tone down a little please. Many people will break/fail only because of this part lowered ds even more, i guess

I also love this part

Bubble#1'd

2015-09-01 18:24 Slick: i'll listen it through now with 10% volume music
2015-09-01 18:24 Slick: make sure everything is fine
2015-09-01 18:30 Slick: everything seems fine
2015-09-01 18:30 Slick: but there is one tricky note
2015-09-01 18:30 Slick: can you help me...
2015-09-01 18:30 Baraatje123: which one?
2015-09-01 18:30 Slick: 04:09:527 (2) -
2015-09-01 18:30 Slick: 04:09:696 (1) - this slider becomes so hard to catch
2015-09-01 18:30 Slick: because of 04:09:527 (2) - position
2015-09-01 18:31 Baraatje123: Try 264:384
2015-09-01 18:32 Slick: i'll do that
2015-09-01 18:32 Slick: do you think od shoud be 8?
2015-09-01 18:33 Baraatje123: It's fine at 8
2015-09-01 18:33 Slick: 04:34:808 - and these sliders
2015-09-01 18:33 Slick: should i raise ticks & end to 10% volume?
2015-09-01 18:33 Slick: i didn't know it was unrankable
2015-09-01 18:34 Baraatje123: I double checked and it seems fine now
2015-09-01 18:34 Slick: okay
2015-09-01 18:36 Slick: updated
2015-09-01 18:39 Baraatje123: A few more things
2015-09-01 18:39 Baraatje123: 00:25:370 (1,2) - Can you please remove the overlap?
2015-09-01 18:39 Baraatje123: As said in the thread, move (2) to 267:340, as the current overlap is incredibly awkward ;w;
2015-09-01 18:40 Slick: yeah done
2015-09-01 18:40 Slick: was that all?
2015-09-01 18:40 Baraatje123: 00:54:696 (4) - Consider moving to 211:281 so it stacks with the next object. It looks much better then the current way, due to the weird overlap
2015-09-01 18:41 Baraatje123: That's all
2015-09-01 18:42 Baraatje123: wait
2015-09-01 18:42 Slick: so it's end stacks with 00:55:033 (1) - ?
2015-09-01 18:43 Baraatje123: Just one more thing
2015-09-01 18:43 Slick: like this? http://puu.sh/jWoCL.jpg
2015-09-01 18:43 Baraatje123: yes
2015-09-01 18:43 Baraatje123: 02:42:224 (2) - Ctrl G this please, it makes more sense
2015-09-01 18:43 Slick: yeah
2015-09-01 18:44 Baraatje123: When you fix it and update I can bubble
2015-09-01 18:46 Slick: updated

Beomsan wrote:

oh bubble pop? what the

Lethargy wrote:

what is so surprising? the map is pretty unpolished

-Lemons wrote:

Wee

Aesthetics

You asked me to look at blankets and whatnot so here you go<3

00:03:628 (6) - http://puu.sh/k2lyS/fd95a5fb46.jpg move it slightly over and bring up the anchor point for a better blanket

00:05:145 (1) - move the middle anchor to 448|304 , the big curve on that slider feels off to me

00:05:651 (3) - Rotate 6 degrees so it leads into the slider better, then move it to 180|272 for the blanket fixed

00:08:684 (4,5) - I don't like the placement of these, it feels like a really harsh flow for this part http://puu.sh/k2m1B/3d5f002500.jpg I think moving 00:08:684 (4) - to 196|268 winds up with a much better flow and it makes use of the curve on 00:09:022 (6) - fixed

00:11:550 (4) - Move this to 256|40, having it so close feels weird

00:19:471 (4,5) - http://puu.sh/k2nIa/84d39b6048.jpg

00:22:673 (1) - I would just make this a curved slider or make it completely blanket around 00:22:336 (3) - slider end, the current one looks a little funky fixed

00:25:875 (3,5) - http://puu.sh/k2nSQ/9f62614cbd.jpg I adjusted the last red anchor point to be closer to 5 and then moved the last white anchor point down slightly for a better blanket

00:28:404 (2,3,1) - polish 3 so that way the curve is the same as 2 and have it be a perfect blanket over the red slider that comes up like this http://puu.sh/k2lkk/e52b5f67a4.jpg

00:29:920 (2,3,4,5) - something like this makes the curve on the end of the slider 5 look better http://puu.sh/k2lpN/ea79dad0ed.jpg

00:34:640 (1,3) - These two sliders look a little off to me in the way they rest together but I don't really have a good suggestion
changed a little

00:40:707 (1,2,3,4,5) - the flow here is pretty janky, specifically in the back and forth from 4-5-1 don't know if I like it or not

00:44:246 (1,2) - Move both of these together so you don't break the blanket, but have 1 rest on the slider head of 00:43:572 (2) -

00:58:741 (2) - move the end anchor to 184|368 for a tighter blanket fixed

01:05:819 (1,3) - You could probably blanket the sliderhead of 3 with the curve at the end of 1 (if you did this you'd have to move 01:06:325 (3,4,1,2,3,1,2) - all of this with it as well, to keep everything looking pretty, so totally up to you)

01:08:179 (2,2) - http://puu.sh/k2pnH/e3d65179ac.jpg

02:05:482 (2,3) - these two seem awfully close but the blanket is fine it's just a very close up blanket and the rest of them are about the same distance
typically

02:08:684 (4) - Now I know that 4 is stacked on the end of the 2 slider, but I think having it be blanketed by the large curve on 3 winds up looking better, plus it makes use of that nice slider design that otherwise is just a very simple blanket on the end of 3 into 2. http://puu.sh/k2q7P/ea468ee085.jpg you could also just remake the slider design on 2 so it rests in the area. http://puu.sh/k2qfS/3e71fab1df.jpg I do know that doing something like this makes the jump from 2-3 a little smaller but obviously it's up to you

02:42:224 (2,3,1,2,1) - This here looks amazing and I love it to bits, however, but I think if you rotate 02:42:224 (2) - by -40 and then move the sliders so that way the spacing is the same it winds up looking even better as then you make use of the hole in 1. http://puu.sh/k2rxF/dadd88f638.jpg if you do this BE CAREFUL WITH 02:42:898 (1) - as it can go offscreen, i'd suggest if you do this just take the entire combo 02:41:381 (1,2,3,1,2,1) - and moving it up slightly

02:59:078 (1,1) - the angle of these two is slightly off if you wanted them to be parallel http://puu.sh/k2qL4/9352d5622a.jpg

04:39:527 (2) - move to 364|308 for a blanket on 1 and then move 04:40:201 (1) - to 380|128 to blanket it all nice and tidy fixed

should be all I can see that could need any sort of changes

Cherry Blossom wrote:

1/2 and 1/4 which are difficult to recognize.

Midge wrote:

here's a reminder that my part is confirmed possible

Cherry Blossom wrote:

There is also a lot of "mapping quality issues", i highly recommend you to improve your map before getting it bubbled.

Thing

I had to rotate slider 2 to make this work

Cherry Blossom wrote:

I'm lazy to bubble pop, just.
You can't silence both sliderticks and sliderslides together, i see a lot of sliders which have both silenced (consider 5% is silenced).
There is also a lot of "mapping quality issues" with 1/2 and 1/4 which are difficult to recognize. I don't really have time to check your map, but i highly recommend you to improve your map before getting it bubbled.

If i have time in future, i could help you with your map.
Good Luck ~

Arphimigon wrote:

00:30:089 (3,4,5) - These honestly need more spacing, clear vocal here. It was increased a lot more 00:19:302 (3,4,5) - there. Another reason for the change is to separate it from this small distancing 00:29:246 (1,2) - here by making it larger than that small spacing you can separate the clearly expressed vocal. fixed

Cherry Blossom wrote:

[*] First point Concerning those long sliders, When you can follow vocal with a long slider, and when you can end it on a strong note, just do it, instead of ending a slider on a 1/4 tick later, It gives a better impression when you try to follow all instruments and vocal. And also, there is nothing really audible on blue ticks where your long sliders end.

Cherry Blossom wrote:

[*] Second Point And concerning consistency with your sliders i really have doubts, sometimes for the same notes you use different lengths, and i'm 100% sure you will have troubles with the QAT concerning consistency and lack of "concept" about rhythm (Captin's Asymmetry's DQ). Using 3/4 sliders in not really recommended at all, and they can only be used if the mappers knows what he wants to do with, it includes consistency and view about rhythm. You made things inconsistent, for example 01:55:707 (1,2,3) - and 00:17:280 (1,2,3) - which are the same notes, but not the same patterns, a perfect example of what you should not do with 3/4 sliders.

Cherry Blossom wrote:

00:19:977 (1) - This slider is really weird because it ends on a blue tick, on nothing really audible. You can end it here instead 00:20:314 -, on the strongest beat. Imo, following vocals makes you skip the strongest beats, when when you can follow them with a 1/2, just do it instead of following vocals with 1/4 and skipping most important notes. Same for 00:20:988 (3) - , use a 1/2 slider instead of a 3/4
00:28:066 (1,2,3) - Still hard to recognize which is 1/2 and 1/4, it could be better if you increase the distance between 00:28:066 (1,2) - , it will be easier to read. And same scenario for 00:31:269 (2,3,1) - fixed
01:45:257 (2,3,4,5) - same for ^ , visually these objects 01:45:257 (2,3) - has the same spacing as 01:45:595 (3,4) - . There should be a higher distance between 01:45:595 (3,4) - fixed
01:58:909 (2,3) - I was really surprised by this pattern when i was playing, the long distance between this double 01:59:331 (3,4) - and this slider 01:58:909 (2) - was not expected or predictable because there wasn't another pattern like this before, and the distance between those objects is really high. It could be better if they have the same distance, just see :fixed

SPOILER

01:59:752 (1,2) - Same as i said for long slider, in first point.
02:11:887 (1) - same as ^ and you should do it, because a 1/4 gap between a long slider and a triple is not conventional and more difficult to play than a double after a slider. It will be more fluid if there is a 1/2 gap between 02:11:887 (1,2) - .

Other
00:26:718 (1,2) - There should be a higher distance between this triple and this circle 00:26:718 (1) - . Visually, the distance between 00:26:718 (1,2) - and 00:27:055 (4,5) - is the same, and that could be surprising, i got surprised too and i got a miss. With a higher distance between 00:26:718 (1,2) -, it will give more acceleration to the player and it will be easier to play the next pattern, and easier to read as well. Same for 01:54:190 (5,1) - going to fix this
01:05:819 (1,2,3) - It seems you didn't have enough space to make this pattern more airy. There is a less distance distance between these objects compared to what you can see before this pattern. It could be better if you make things consistent here, so you should increase the distance between 01:05:819 (1,2) - . And also you should increase here too 01:06:156 (2,3) - in order to make this pattern more airy and better to play. It won't give an impression of slowdown. i did intend for a slight slowdown, i'll look into making it better
01:09:696 (6) - tbh this circle is really difficult to catch because it is at top right and also the spacing between previous circles is enough large. There is a spacing change between 01:09:527 (5,6) - and that could be a little surprising and the player might miss, when i played it with HD i was a little lucky, i didn't see that circle and i just hit it randomly and i got it. So, it should be better if you keep the same spacing on this zigzag pattern. Or if you don't want to keep the same spacing, just reduce the global spacing of this pattern. Same for 01:10:875 (6,7) - repositioned it
01:51:325 (4,5) - This looks counter intuitive to play, there are strong vocal notes on both objects (the circle and the sliderhead) and you put an antijump here. The distance between 01:51:325 (4,5) - is really close and it is really disproportionate compared to 01:50:819 (3,4) - , and i really recommend you, at least, to increase the distance between 01:51:325 (4,5) - . going to fix this
03:52:168 (3,4,5) - This looks a little uncomfortable to play, because the angle is near to 180° and the spacing between circles is really large, it will be smoother if there is a closer angle between those circles. You can try a symmetry with 03:52:168 (3,5) - , but you will need to arrange the next circle 03:52:673 (6) - in order to keep this pattern as fluid a possible. Just see the symmetry fixed

SPOILER

03:56:381 (3,4,1) - The distance between these sliders is really large, the gap between each slider is 1/4, and the player might get a 100 on each sliderend if he doesn't know the gap between each slider is 1/4. At least, this slider 03:56:381 (3) - should be 1/2 slider instead, according to First point.

As i said before your self popped bubble, this needs a lot of improvements, my mod will not make your map good enough to get rebubbled.
You have to work on the structure, i didn't talk about the structure because there is no starting point for making good suggestions about "how to make this pattern more structured", because of your style. This map is various slidershapes and high spaced circles, and some wub, this kind of maps is difficult to treat. Overall, the playability of the map is nice, but it is a little difficult to play these long and fast sliders, the player might get a sliderbreak easily.
We already talked about that in my #spectator yesterday, with Mazzerin too. And you also said something about the QAT that answered you about how they will treat this map etc.

As i said, what i am saying is not absolutely true, you can choose to ask a BN for a rebubble after my mod if you want, but it's risky.
Good luck ~

Desperate-kun wrote:

I didn't think I would get involved with this map again, yet I have to make something clear here.

Literally every BN and QAT were telling you to change the Extended Sliders, so that's what you should do. Even though the vocals are hold, you can't just ignore strong beats in the music and map all sliderends on nothing instead. It is not nice to play at all (because the players are hearing a strong sound earlier than the slider ends) and sounds bad, too.

If the consistency / structure you see in it is not obvious for any other player, mapper or BN, it's pointless.

You have improved the map a lot since the very beginning, that doesn't mean you can keep it as it is now and just get it ranked. Your rhythmic concept is not working at all, so you need to change it or keep your map unranked. It's really as simple as that.

Feel free to prove me wrong though.

Desperate-kun wrote:

Literally every BN and QAT were telling you to change the Extended Sliders, so that's what you should do. Even though the vocals are hold, you can't just ignore strong beats in the music and map all sliderends on nothing instead. It is not nice to play at all (because the players are hearing a strong sound earlier than the slider ends) and sounds bad, too.

Desperate-kun wrote:

Your rhythmic concept is not working at all.

KuranteMelodii wrote:

When this Skystar0108 map getting ranked

Arphimigon wrote:

Good question though.
Whens next update!?

Charles445 wrote:

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Charles445 wrote:

[Storyboard]
_________10.png is a large file for a storyboard element, you should convert it to a JPG (should end up being around 300kb)
_________16.png is a large file for a storyboard element, you should convert it to a JPG (should end up being around 300kb)
e_sub0301.png is a large file for a storyboard element, you should convert it to a JPG (should end up being around 400kb)
e_ter0101.png is a large file for a storyboard element, you should convert it to a JPG (should end up being around 300kb)
e_yuu0801.png is a large file for a storyboard element, you should convert it to a JPG (should end up being around 300kb)
s_yuuc001.png is a large file for a storyboard element, you should convert it to a JPG (should end up being around 400kb)

Since you're fitting some 4:3 backgrounds to a 16:9 storyboard resolution, the top and bottom halves of some images are cut off.
These images are _________10, _________16, e_ter0101, and e_yuu0801. You can save space on them if you cut off the top and bottom of them equally, resizing them to 1024 x 576

[General]
e_yuu1402.png is the main background file, but it's 1024x768. In the actual storyboard, it's scaled to fit 1366x768, and so it completely cuts off the guy in the background.
You might want to add a width extension to it like s_yuuc001 so other parts of the picture aren't cut off.
Also, it'd be a good idea to save it as JPG to save size.
all this above should be fixed

[Grimoire]

--- Slick ---

00:04:724 (5) - This isn't really pronounced in the music, it feels weird to have to press this object. I'd delete this and move the 6 slider somewhere else.fixed
00:07:420 (5) - Again this doesn't really fit, also the stream is a lot slower paced than the slider before it so it feels a bit clunky.fixed
00:10:117 (5) - Same as beforefixed
00:10:538 (1) - Move this to the bottom left corner of the screen, this will give it more impact and increase the distance from 1 to 2 for better readability -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256346 made it better another way
00:13:151 (3) - Nothing really here in the music. fixed
00:16:269 (3) - I'd move this up and to the left, so 2 to 3 is a jump at a sharp angle. Try x: 160 y:116 -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256356 fixed
00:19:977 (1) - End this on the white tick like the slider at 00:21:325 (1) - . Sounds / feels better. fixed
00:42:561 (4) - Rotate this by selection center clockwise 50 degrees. Better angle for it. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256370 fixed
00:48:881 (4) - I can kinda hear this, but not too well... I think this circle would be best avoided. i can hear this but i wouldn't mind removing it if you really think i should
00:49:555 (8) - I really can't hear this one. I'd remove this circle. fixed
00:50:482 (4,5) - I'd swap places for these two. It keeps the angle changes going. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256417 fixed
00:55:033 (1) - This slider isn't moving up fast enough to make this smooth gameplay, I think you should loosen up the red points at the beginning -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256423 fixed
00:56:802 (2) - Doesn't quite fit, there's a sound at 00:56:634 - and 00:56:971 - but not 00:56:802. it's overmapped but if i removed it i would have to refurnish the following jumps and i can't think of anything good. i'll look into it though
00:57:561 (7,1) - This is a large jump from left to right, but the slider right after is moving to the left... this is going to cause a lot of unfair breaks. It'd be easier if the slider started moving to the right, and then curved to the left somehow... -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256443 yeah that would compliment (7) more but i'd lose the nice wobble shape for the vocal, i don't think the flow is too harsh, i'd prefer to keep.
01:00:932 (3,4,5) - Rotate selection center anti-clockwise 15 degrees. Better angle coming from 2 and into 6. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256457 fixed
01:27:392 (1,2) - The (2) slider should start at 01:27:898 - instead. -> http://puu.sh/mhgc6/3154d1897e.jpg wow nice catch, fixed
01:39:190 (1,2,3) - This is pretty awkward to play. Try moving 2 to x: 168 y:292 fixed
01:44:078 (1,2,3,4) - I think having the stream after it be 5 long instead of 3 long would be more intuitive... -> http://puu.sh/mhgB8/baab1bf765.jpg wouldn't it make 01:44:499 - overmapped, i want to focus on the violin here so i'd prefer to keep it as it is
01:45:595 (3,4) - It feels weird moving to the left on this slider. Maybe point the 3 slider down and to the left? -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256493 fixed
01:47:111 (3,4) - Instead of the 4 moving down and to the right, it'd be more comfortable if it moved a little up and to the right... try something like this -> http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256494 changed 01:47:617 (1) - instead to compliment 01:47:280 (4) -
01:53:010 (1,2) - I recommend repositioning these so the 2 is a little above the 3's start. Something like this -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256496 fixed
01:54:359 (1) - Move this lower and rotate it a little bit clockwise. -> I used 32 degrees for this picture -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256502 fixed
02:00:763 (3,4,5,1) - Player is going to be basically moving straight from 3 to the 1... I'd make the 451 stream either perfectly straight or curving downwards -> http://puu.sh/mhh6v/d27730bb08.jpg fixed
02:03:460 (6,1) - The (1) slider is too far away and at a bad angle. Try something like this -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256513 fixed
02:10:033 (3,1) - The slider's angle doesn't fit the previous movement too well. Try a shape that starts more diagonally, something like this -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256539 fixed
02:12:898 (1,2,3,4) - This movement is pretty awkward, especially the 2 to 3. Moving 2 and 3 around can fix the problem -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256549 fixed
02:15:595 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This is really awkward movement, a lot of people are going to be uncomfortable starting the stream. I think if it's kept moving up and down, while slowly moving to the left, it'll be more intuitive. Here's an example -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256561 fixed
02:20:482 (3,4,5) - Rotate selection anti-clockwise 20 degrees. Better angle for the stream. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256571 fixed
02:23:095 (2) - I can't hear the instrument this is based on in the music. You should probably remove this circle to be safe. it's overmapped, if i remove it i have to refurnish the following jumps and it's hard for me to make it good, i'll look into it though
02:25:201 (6,1) - This angle is pretty rough, movement is up and to the left, so moving so strongly to the right is going to cause a lot of breaks. Try starting going up and to the left, then curving into the right. Something like this (don't make it this ugly though haha) -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256606same reason as the first time you mentioned it, i'd prefer to keep the wobble shape, i'll try to make it play better

03:22:168 (2,3) - Movement from 2 to 3 is going down and to the left, but the 3 is moving down and to the right at first. It'd be less awkward to play if the slider started by moving down and to the left. Here's an example of a possibility -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264167 fixed
03:33:965 (1,2) - It makes sense why you're doing this, but it's still weird spacing. It's easy to read and not a real problem but I can see someone complaining about it down the line. when this happens i think using either really low spacing or high spacing works
03:36:493 (3,1) - Again the slider would be best catching the movement from the 3. A similar fix like at 03:22:168 would be great. should play better now
03:42:224 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - Really underwhelming to just have simple streams for this transition. The angles they are at don't play very well either, I recommend trying something different with this transition. made it different, hopefully it's better
03:45:932 (5,1,2) - From 5's end to 1 to 2, it's basically a straight line of varying speed. Changing speed in the same direction is really hard to do, and is far less fun than changing speed while also changing angle. Fortunately this issue can be avoided by moving the 2 up somewhere, and having it pointed away from 1. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264250 fixed
03:50:314 (1,2) - Playing this doesn't feel quite right to play. I think it'd work better if the 2 was either pointed more downwards, or more away from the 1. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264260 or -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264262 lowered it a bit
03:52:842 (7,1) - This jump feels a little too big. i'll look into it
03:56:381 (3,4) - This is a risky slider stream jump. I expect most people would break on the 3 since it's so far away from the 4. I'd make this less of a jump, and reconsider the angle 3 ends at. made it play better
03:56:718 (4,1) - Again, same thing as before. move it a little bit to the right
03:58:404 (1) - Rotate by selection center anticlockwise 23 degrees. It creates a better angle coming from the previous circle. Also consider moving the slider end up a little bit. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264282 fixed
04:02:954 (3,4) - Really weird angle here. I think this would work better if the 3 ended more to the right. Moving the (2) is also a good idea. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264288 fixed
04:03:797 (1,2,3) - This has the same problem as at 03:45:932 - where it's going in the same direction, but changing speed erratically. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264300 fixed
04:05:482 (2,3) - This jump is huge! Really needs to be smaller. yeah, can't think of anything right now..
04:08:347 (3) - This would feel a bit better if it moved less up at first and more to the right. Rotating it clockwise should help. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264308 fixed

5eania wrote:

Charles445 wrote:

[Grimoire]
--- 5EANIA ---

02:56:887 (1) - Remove new combo. It'll be obvious that this is a fast moving slider because of the next object, so there's no need to hint at it. ac
02:57:392 (1) - You don't really need this new combo. ac
02:58:404 (6,7) - Too big a jump, too easy to sliderbreak. Try pointing the 6 more to the right, and starting it a little bit farther away from the 5. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256620 ac
02:58:572 (7) - No need to extend this to 1/8, will just make people upset. Instead change the slider velocity at 02:58:572 - to 1.5x. It'll be basically the same, just less likely to cause slider breaks. ac
02:59:583 (1,2) - Swap these new combos. It'll match up with what happened previously. ac
03:01:522 (1) - Remove new combo, it's excessive and makes this part a bit tricky to read. ac
03:02:280 (3) - This is basically a free sliderbreak... This being a slider isn't terribly important, I'd recommend just having it be a circle so the player can focus their time getting to the very important 1/8 slider. If you absolutely must have it be a slider, point it more to the right so it's moving both up and to the right. dn: well... idk, but i think it's not bad...
03:02:954 (2) - Move this more to the left and a little more up, so the jump into the next combo isn't so huge. You might want to move the previous slider a bit as well. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256632 ac
03:02:448 (4,1) - Consider swapping these new combos. It'll be more like the previous stuff that way. ac
03:05:145 (4,1) - Swap these new combos. This is very important for readability. ac
03:05:735 (1,2) - Swap these new combos. Same reason as above. ac
03:05:988 (1) - Remove this new combo, it'll be unneeded if the previous two combo things are applied (which they should be, haha). ac
03:07:842 (3,1) - I'd swap these new combos, then add a new combo at 03:08:516 (3) - ac
03:10:370 (3) - See usually here you would have some object starting at 03:10:538 - with a new combo on it, so this slider is really, really out of place. I'd redo this section to have something that's starting at 03:10:538 - . ac
03:12:308 (1) - Excessive new combo ac
03:12:477 (1) - Excessive new combo, removing this one will also make this part easier to read. ac
03:14:583 - Ending a slider on the big beat again is inconsistent and hard to read. Something like this would be more readable and maintain the uh, edgy circle stream jump thing you had going on before. -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4256824 ac
This is a bit of a readability hazard though, so you could always go for the safer route -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4264123 ac
03:15:763 (3) - Pretty weak, but I guess that's the point since it's slowing down for the next section. ac

1. 00:02:111 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - like this? for flow and blanket
2. 00:05:988 (4) - 36|112?
3. 00:10:538 (1,2) - stack? kinda close for me
4. 00:18:460 (1,2) - blanket?
5. 00:19:640 (5) - ctrl+G better for me, for flow
6. 00:23:684 (4) - 104|112?
7. 00:26:718 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - like this? for flow, just move 1 and rotate 234
8. 00:51:662 (3,4) - and 00:52:336 (1,2) - embarrassing for me, as distance
9. 01:01:606 (9) - change to a 1/4 slider which have no volume at tail?
10. 01:19:302 (1) - the same shape like 01:18:460 (3) - ? I mean copy and paste
11. 01:29:078 (1) - like this? I really like stack at tail of a high speed slider when there is an empty beat
12. 01:31:100 (3,1) - no good the same flow, how about like this?
13. 02:05:482 (2,3) - this blanket is really off, btw I think you'd better fix some other blankets which are off
14. 02:10:707 (2) - 480|336?
15. 02:28:066 (5) - change to a 1/1 slider which have lower volume and ×1.0 sv? for there is a fun melody background
16. 02:47:448 (2) - ctrl+G? I don't think the same flow fits vocal here, btw the blanket
17. 02:57:561 (3) - ctrl+G? to have a feeling like 'OUT'
18. 03:06:325 (4) - change to a 1/4 slider? that will be cooler
19. 03:09:190 (5) - ^
20. 03:16:774 (2) - ctrl+G better imo
21. 03:42:898 (1) - make a strange shape? and flowing to the next slider is better imo especially for here
22. 04:15:763 (1) - ctrl+G? just like opposite for 04:15:763 (1,1) - them is better
23. Besides unifying the distance for blanket parts will make patterns titier, as an example like 00:19:640 (5,1,2) -