[Pukuchiku]
- 00:13:259 (6,1) - I don't get this drastic DS change, moreover why is 00:13:415 (1,2,3) - static? You had such great movement with the previous pattern but you decided to halt it and with such low DS, it makes it awkward to play.
- 00:14:040 (5) - Seems a bit too curvy, kinda inappropriate with the previous slider.
- 00:16:228 (1,2) - Since the current hitsounds are not too loud the sliderend is audible even with 5%, you should probably just use a muted hitsound, here's a download link for one http://puu.sh/mquSU/48845e9c9e.wav
- 00:18:728 (1) - This is waaaay too low, perhaps around 35~45% is better.
- 00:19:978 (1,2) - Why not make them identical? It fits, just copy 2 and place it instead of 1 at the same position.
- 00:30:603 (7) - The emphasization needs to be on the sliderend here, not on the sliderhead, either change it to a 1/4 slider or use 2 circles and emphasize the second one, it feels completely wrong now.
- 00:30:915 (8) - If you do the previous thingy then you should probably remove it and map the triplet
- 00:53:103 (1,2) - This overlap is irriating, either overlap them properly or don't overlap at all, it gives a bad vibe.
- 00:56:071 (1,2,3) - Awkward.. Doesn't follow vocals properly and the slider that starts on the red tick isn't any good either. Regardless, the triplet is overmapped and personally I don't feel like it contributes much.
- 00:56:540 (4,5,6,7,8,1) - I'm sure you could make this pattern look better.
- 00:57:321 (1,2,3) - I would say that you should either stack them all or have that small different movement, both are cool but you shouldn't mix.
- 00:59:040 (5) - NC is appropriate here.
- 01:02:478 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - Why? This pattern doesn't fit at all, the music doesn't ask for it at all, there are no repeating doubles in the music, you are pushing the wrong pattern onto the music.
- 01:08:259 (11,12,13,1) - I got a few things to say on this one, first of all, I feel like the object rhythm should be different, either all circles or at the very least have the slider as 2 circles, since it has the most strength, and having the strong note as the sliderend is kinda meh.. Second thing, the movement from the slider 13 to the slider 1 is kinda weird, it doesn't look that good, the curve is just wrong, it's a bit hard to explain, this for example will look better: http://puu.sh/mqvUz/af9e57248a.jpg but since I said that the slider there is not anything good, so consider: http://puu.sh/mqvWJ/60e513820b.jpg, or even http://puu.sh/mqvYi/6e5724639f.jpg. oh and you really need a NC there, perhaps on 9.
- 01:12:321 (5,8) - Avoid this kind of overlap please
- 01:14:978 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - An other inappropriate pattern in terms of music, it doesn't follow it very well, actually here those are doubles, or pairs, whatever you might call them, and not groups of three.
- 01:42:478 (1,2) - That's not really good in my opinion, usually this would be backed up by vocals just like at 01:21:228 (1,2) - 00:36:228 (1,2) - and such, but now it's just not right. Although there's that repeating ringing sound, it repeats midslider so you shouldn't really used a long slider there.
- 02:09:353 (1,1,2,3) - Why is the spacing is drastically bigger from 00:53:103 (1,2,3,4) - although it is the same pattern? Also, the NC is incosistent here.
- 02:12:321 (1,2,3) - Just like before, I don't feel like this overmap helps and the slider is no good either.
- 02:13:259 (7,8,1) - The movement from 8 into the slider is just horrible in my opinion, it feels way too forced and the slider placement is awkward, try something like this: http://puu.sh/mqwyC/8f1325eef7.jpg, don't forget to move the other notes as well.
- 01:04:353 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - and 02:20:603 (1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6) - those seems drastically different, now when I look, 01:04:665 (3,4,5,6,7) - doesn't seem like the best overmap, but overall I feel like the first pattern is much better and interesting. Should they really be that different when you are pretty consistent most of the time?
- 02:24:665 (13,1) - The movement is great compared to before, but I think the rhythm should be changed here too.
- 02:26:384 (1,2) - Why not a triple like 01:10:134 (1,2,3) -
- 02:31:071 (7) - Why is the drum completely ignored here? You could make some transition into the next pattern.
- Egh I dislike the next section, just one streamy section which makes the map unplayable for most players, could put some more thought there in my opinion.
- Should probably increase the hitsound volume from here 02:29:978 (1) - even though it is not kiai, it deserves something much higher.
- 02:41:696 (9) - Even though there are vocals, the music dosen't emphasize the long held one here, so missing the strong instruments inside is awkward, 02:42:321 (1) - is fine because the music supports it.
- 02:42:165 (10,1) - You should probably change the movement a bit, the circle doesn't go along with the current slider curve and placement.
- 02:51:618 - I highly suggest mapping this as well.
- 02:53:728 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - Drums are quite significant here, follow them properly.
- 03:22:321 (1) - Long slider is inappropriate, strong instrument in the middle and the you are better putting something to press for the vocals.
- 03:26:071 (1,2,3) - Did you copy paste the kiais and just change everything slightly? lol ::P