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Your inherited lines are not snapped
We Will Wait
00:16:672 (1,2,3) - the curve here can be better, shift 00:16:755 (2) to somewhere around x: 428 y: 200 or something
00:21:505 (2) - can you place the ring such that the slider end is centralized? Right now it looks off and in a sense sloppy:
00:24:339 (10) - NC for sv change
00:27:672 (5) - NC
00:28:505 (9,10) - blanket it better
00:33:672 (4) - NC for sv change
00:36:339 (4) - ^
00:39:005 (6) - ^
00:44:339 (3) - ^
00:45:672 (5) - ^
00:46:672 (1) - remove NC
00:49:672 (7) - NC for sv change
00:55:672 (6) - NC as this section will be different from the previous part with the faster sv of 00:56:172 (9)
00:59:005 (10) - NC for sv change
It just goes on and on, highlight the changes in SV clearly in the song, there is no other way to distinguish it here in the song and it happens all too often for it not to be clearly indicated. Ensure that the player is able to tell properly that there is a change in speed, it's not like you can see a tick here because the change is not as drastic as that
01:36:339 (3,4) - this is very weird
01:47:672 (1,1) - same thing about the rings, place it with the objects centralised within it
01:53:005 (1,1) - ^
01:54:339 (1,2) - don't overlap
01:58:339 (1,1) - centralise the object within the ring
01:59:672 (1,2) - don't overlap
02:08:339 (2,1) - same thing about the ring
02:12:672 (3,1) - ^
02:19:672 (1,1) - ^
02:21:005 (1,2) - blanket them to look better
02:28:672 (2) - curve it less
02:48:339 (1,2,3,4,1) - this shape looks very uneven and doesn't look nice
02:51:005 (1) - same thing about the ring
02:54:339 (1,1) - stack them perfectly
02:56:672 (1,1) - ^
03:06:839 (4,5) - these shapes don't suit together in a pattern, it looks odd
03:12:339 (1,1) - same thing about the rings
03:17:672 (6,7) - use the same shapes
03:27:005 (2,3) - to look neater:
03:34:005 (1,1) - same thing about the rings
03:42:005 (1) - remove NC
03:47:672 (1,2,3) - such overlapping looks very untidy
03:50:672 (2,3) - it would be better for flow if they weren't moving in the same direction and having the following slider be behind the previous
03:52:672 (1) - remove NC. Be consistent with the patterns, like 03:47:339 (2)
04:12:005 (1,2) - make them more symmetrical and matching
04:15:005 (2) - curve it less
04:28:339 (2,3) - don't overlap
04:27:672 (1,2,3,4) - their spacings keep varying and it doesn't make sense for it to be like that when it's one whole phrase of its own
04:34:339 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - the curve in the stream can be improved and smoothened
04:37:672 (1,1,2) - their non-stacked look doesn't look great
04:55:672 (1,2) - make them more matching and even pattern
05:06:839 (4,5) - blanket
Overall it is very raw and can be refined a lot
Good Luck
Your inherited lines are not snapped
We Will Wait
00:16:672 (1,2,3) - the curve here can be better, shift 00:16:755 (2) to somewhere around x: 428 y: 200 or something
00:21:505 (2) - can you place the ring such that the slider end is centralized? Right now it looks off and in a sense sloppy:
00:24:339 (10) - NC for sv change
00:27:672 (5) - NC
00:28:505 (9,10) - blanket it better
00:33:672 (4) - NC for sv change
00:36:339 (4) - ^
00:39:005 (6) - ^
00:44:339 (3) - ^
00:45:672 (5) - ^
00:46:672 (1) - remove NC
00:49:672 (7) - NC for sv change
00:55:672 (6) - NC as this section will be different from the previous part with the faster sv of 00:56:172 (9)
00:59:005 (10) - NC for sv change
It just goes on and on, highlight the changes in SV clearly in the song, there is no other way to distinguish it here in the song and it happens all too often for it not to be clearly indicated. Ensure that the player is able to tell properly that there is a change in speed, it's not like you can see a tick here because the change is not as drastic as that
01:36:339 (3,4) - this is very weird
01:47:672 (1,1) - same thing about the rings, place it with the objects centralised within it
01:53:005 (1,1) - ^
01:54:339 (1,2) - don't overlap
01:58:339 (1,1) - centralise the object within the ring
01:59:672 (1,2) - don't overlap
02:08:339 (2,1) - same thing about the ring
02:12:672 (3,1) - ^
02:19:672 (1,1) - ^
02:21:005 (1,2) - blanket them to look better
02:28:672 (2) - curve it less
02:48:339 (1,2,3,4,1) - this shape looks very uneven and doesn't look nice
02:51:005 (1) - same thing about the ring
02:54:339 (1,1) - stack them perfectly
02:56:672 (1,1) - ^
03:06:839 (4,5) - these shapes don't suit together in a pattern, it looks odd
03:12:339 (1,1) - same thing about the rings
03:17:672 (6,7) - use the same shapes
03:27:005 (2,3) - to look neater:
03:34:005 (1,1) - same thing about the rings
03:42:005 (1) - remove NC
03:47:672 (1,2,3) - such overlapping looks very untidy
03:50:672 (2,3) - it would be better for flow if they weren't moving in the same direction and having the following slider be behind the previous
03:52:672 (1) - remove NC. Be consistent with the patterns, like 03:47:339 (2)
04:12:005 (1,2) - make them more symmetrical and matching
04:15:005 (2) - curve it less
04:28:339 (2,3) - don't overlap
04:27:672 (1,2,3,4) - their spacings keep varying and it doesn't make sense for it to be like that when it's one whole phrase of its own
04:34:339 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - the curve in the stream can be improved and smoothened
04:37:672 (1,1,2) - their non-stacked look doesn't look great
04:55:672 (1,2) - make them more matching and even pattern
05:06:839 (4,5) - blanket
Overall it is very raw and can be refined a lot
Good Luck