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Bubble must be popped because offset is too early, use 8521.
Discussed a bit with other people and this is what they said.
00:13:054 (27) - Shouldn't this be a kat?
00:29:709 (132,134) - Remove these ones so you both reduce the stream a bit and follow vocals better.
00:41:813 (43,44,45,46,47) - I think this should be kkddk to keep your kat structure here.
00:48:330 - 00:48:537 - I think dons would fit nicely with the stream in the music.
00:55:675 - I found this a bit weird as you ignore this strong beat, how about change 00:55:675 (58,59,60,61,62,63) - from dd dk k d to d dd kk d
01:06:847 (16) - I think a kat would complement the previous kkd better
01:10:571 (43) - Considering you're following the high pitched instrument it'd be better to move this 1/4 beat back to keep following it.
01:30:330 (129,130) - This is really awkward as vocals are the same and you made this pattern different, make dk pls.
01:36:950 (167,168) - ^
02:44:089 (98,99,100,101,102,103,104) - This would fit better as a 1/3 stream, it won't be that unreadable and still fitting the song.
02:48:434 (128,129,130,131) - A ddd k would fit better both vocals and the instrumental than a dd dk.
03:00:123 - I think you should add a note here to make it consistent with previous ddddk pattern, obviously, remove the finisher if you do.
03:01:468 (56,57,58,59) - Kinda the same here, a dk dk pattern would be better here for vocals.
03:12:847 - Missing note?
03:13:365 (110) - Remove?
03:15:020 (116) - ^
03:16:365 (121) - A don would fit better here and also would make more sense with the "extra" sound in the music.
03:16:985 (124) - A don would be better to separate both sections in the music better.
04:29:088 (16,17) - Change to dk as I explained before
04:35:708 (55,56) - ^
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Bubble must be popped because offset is too early, use 8521.
Discussed a bit with other people and this is what they said.
Also some suggestions from myself:MMzz wrote:
02:39:348 (70,71,72,73,74,75,76,77) - These doesn't fit the music at all. The wubs are going 1/3 not 1/6.
02:42:658 (90,91,92,93,94,95) - 1/6 swing rhythm doesn't even match the music and is almost impossible to read at the slow SV. There should be another 1/3 stream here similar to 02:40:796 (80,81,82,83,84,85,86) - .
02:44:245 (99,100) - ^ seriously.
02:45:969 (111,112,113,114,115,116,117,118) - Need to be removed again.
02:50:728 (141,142,143,144,145,146,147) - This can be 1/4 instead of 1/6 since 1/6 doesn't work at all still.
If he forms this section more like he did with this pattern: 02:47:417 (121,122,123,124,125,126,127,128,129,130,131) - It would be better and more fun to play.
Unrelated to the slow section: 03:35:348 (227) - Remove this because it isn't in the music. Unnecessary difficulty.
03:38:658 (245) - ^
03:41:969 (1) - ^
03:48:589 (38) - ^
03:51:555 (58,59,60,61,62,63,64) - Bad overmap. Make it more appropriate to the song -> http://puu.sh/bCBAL/2c81b7bc27.png
03:55:210 (82) - Remove again.
03:58:521 (106) - ^
00:13:054 (27) - Shouldn't this be a kat?
00:29:709 (132,134) - Remove these ones so you both reduce the stream a bit and follow vocals better.
00:41:813 (43,44,45,46,47) - I think this should be kkddk to keep your kat structure here.
00:48:330 - 00:48:537 - I think dons would fit nicely with the stream in the music.
00:55:675 - I found this a bit weird as you ignore this strong beat, how about change 00:55:675 (58,59,60,61,62,63) - from dd dk k d to d dd kk d
01:06:847 (16) - I think a kat would complement the previous kkd better
01:10:571 (43) - Considering you're following the high pitched instrument it'd be better to move this 1/4 beat back to keep following it.
01:30:330 (129,130) - This is really awkward as vocals are the same and you made this pattern different, make dk pls.
01:36:950 (167,168) - ^
02:44:089 (98,99,100,101,102,103,104) - This would fit better as a 1/3 stream, it won't be that unreadable and still fitting the song.
02:48:434 (128,129,130,131) - A ddd k would fit better both vocals and the instrumental than a dd dk.
03:00:123 - I think you should add a note here to make it consistent with previous ddddk pattern, obviously, remove the finisher if you do.
03:01:468 (56,57,58,59) - Kinda the same here, a dk dk pattern would be better here for vocals.
03:12:847 - Missing note?
03:13:365 (110) - Remove?
03:15:020 (116) - ^
03:16:365 (121) - A don would fit better here and also would make more sense with the "extra" sound in the music.
03:16:985 (124) - A don would be better to separate both sections in the music better.
04:29:088 (16,17) - Change to dk as I explained before
04:35:708 (55,56) - ^
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