Garven wrote:

[Hard]
00:06:590 (3,4) - What rhythm is this? :/ if you listen carefully there is a synth playing at 00:06:590, and immediately the vocals start at 00:07:004; this is the best setup i can think to cover both sounds
00:37:211 (3,4) - ^ this is similar, except in reverse
00:40:521 (3,4) - Gah, now they're suddenly everywhere. At least during the intro most of them actually fit the song. Now they're just kind of there to be wrong or something. my rational is the same for all these; covering both the instrumentals and vocals. If you disagree with me i dont mind changing them, but this is just what i think represents the music best
00:28:935 (3) - I think this would have more impact as circles instead of a slider sure

Garven wrote:

[Easy]
Should raise the volume a bit. It's pretty quiet... Raised the volume
01:07:831 (3) - New combo fixed
01:09:487 (1) - Remove new combo fixed

[Insane]
These hitsounds are way too quiet. Raise the volume overall a bit. Also raised it a bit
00:21:280 (1) - Why the slowdown? There's nothing here in the music to really indicate that kind of drastic velocity change. I thought it played better, anyways fixed~~
00:23:142 (1) - This section is kind of a mess spacing-wise. You switch between 1.5 and 1.2 all over the place with pretty much zero consistency. Snapped the section to 1.2
01:14:866 (3,4,5) - Suddenly tiny spacing. Move that out a bit. fixed

Hard's use of bad rhythms was kind of annoying considering the general difficulty level of it. Insane and easy were way too quiet and the Insane needs to normalize spacing so that it's at least consistent with itself.

Garven wrote:

[Insane]
Let's clean up some of the remaining spacing at the end of this
01:16:314 (3,1) -
01:18:590 (5,6) -
01:19:625 (2,3) -
01:21:487 (3,4) -
fixed all
There are others between these too, but these are the biggest offenders. Try to make it more uniform and more obvious when you're using jumps. It's still all over the place here.

xChippy wrote:

Thx for the support :3/! But I'm kinda starting to doubt whether this will be ranked....

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  00:02:245 (3) - The biggest problem about these sliders is that the distance between (3) and (4) is the same as the distance between (3) and (2). I'll refer to basic osu! standard guideline "Beat placement should follow the time-distance equality rule". So, to be sure nobody misunderstands your rhythm, nobody thinks that (4) is another 1/4, either make (2) and (3) closer (http://puu.sh/57qv7.jpg) or (3) and (4) farther (http://puu.sh/57qx7.jpg)
  00:03:900 (3,4) - Same here.
  00:05:969 (4) - Same here.
  00:07:831 (6) - Same here, even though it doesn't seem to be too close, still the heads of sliders are close enough. You should separate 1/4 combo (00:06:590 (1,2,3,4,5) - ) from 1/2 combo (00:07:831 (6,1) - ). Try this: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1077406
  00:43:314 (2,3) - This is a quite bad rhythm. You're not used to play offbeat 1/4 sliders. Here they both start at blue tick, which is not that hard as white and red. 00:43:418 - for example, at this point, at the white tick, sounds a bass sound, which should have been emphasized, but it is placed on a slider end, when player doesn't hit a button. In this case, you can try these rhythms instead: http://puu.sh/57qPe.jpg http://puu.sh/57qQa.jpg http://puu.sh/57qQz.jpg
  00:44:969 (2,3) - Same
  00:51:280 - I really doubt that this speedup is needed here. I don't think the song gets 1.5 times faster or harder in kiai, it barely gets a 10% increase in tensity. I'd not make it 1.5x, but 1.2x at maximum.
  01:04:004 - This is again a blue-tick problem. You start a stream from an offbeat note, so it's quite hard to understand when to start presing buttons after the repeating slider. This should look much better: http://puu.sh/57r17.jpg
  01:11:142 - This slowdown looks even worse than the speedup. It feels that you just have set the kiai end artificially, since almost nothing changes in the song itself. But you make a huge difference in the SV. If you want to keep the speedup, let it last until 01:24:487 - , same for kiai time.
  01:17:245 (1) - Same blue tick stuff here as at 01:11:142 -

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  00:18:176 (1) - This should be placed closer to the previous slider maybe? http://puu.sh/57s2m.jpg Idk, this is the only jump that didn't feel good for me.

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  00:49:625 - Maybe follow synth instead of vocals here? It has more interesting rhythm: http://puu.sh/57sdh.jpg

grumd wrote:

Hi.

— Insane

• 
  00:02:245 (3) - The biggest problem about these sliders is that the distance between (3) and (4) is the same as the distance between (3) and (2). I'll refer to basic osu! standard guideline "Beat placement should follow the time-distance equality rule". So, to be sure nobody misunderstands your rhythm, nobody thinks that (4) is another 1/4, either make (2) and (3) closer (http://puu.sh/57qv7.jpg) or (3) and (4) farther (http://puu.sh/57qx7.jpg)
  00:03:900 (3,4) - Same here.
  00:05:969 (4) - Same here.
  00:07:831 (6) - Same here, even though it doesn't seem to be too close, still the heads of sliders are close enough. You should separate 1/4 combo (00:06:590 (1,2,3,4,5) - ) from 1/2 combo (00:07:831 (6,1) - ). Try this: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1077406
  00:43:314 (2,3) - This is a quite bad rhythm. You're not used to play offbeat 1/4 sliders. Here they both start at blue tick, which is not that hard as white and red. 00:43:418 - for example, at this point, at the white tick, sounds a bass sound, which should have been emphasized, but it is placed on a slider end, when player doesn't hit a button. In this case, you can try these rhythms instead: http://puu.sh/57qPe.jpg http://puu.sh/57qQa.jpg http://puu.sh/57qQz.jpg
  00:44:969 (2,3) - Same
  00:51:280 - I really doubt that this speedup is needed here. I don't think the song gets 1.5 times faster or harder in kiai, it barely gets a 10% increase in tensity. I'd not make it 1.5x, but 1.2x at maximum.
  01:04:004 - This is again a blue-tick problem. You start a stream from an offbeat note, so it's quite hard to understand when to start presing buttons after the repeating slider. This should look much better: http://puu.sh/57r17.jpg
  01:11:142 - This slowdown looks even worse than the speedup. It feels that you just have set the kiai end artificially, since almost nothing changes in the song itself. But you make a huge difference in the SV. If you want to keep the speedup, let it last until 01:24:487 - , same for kiai time.
  01:17:245 (1) - Same blue tick stuff here as at 01:11:142 -

Everything should be fixed But I'm not sure whether I applied it correctly. But I think it was correctly Changed kia time to 1.20x
Easy is good, no problems there :3

xChippy wrote:

Thx for the support :3/! But I'm kinda starting to doubt whether this will be ranked....

grumd wrote:

Hi.

— Normal

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  00:49:625 - Maybe follow synth instead of vocals here? It has more interesting rhythm: http://puu.sh/57sdh.jpg it was already like this before, but i changed my mind and preferred not use blue tick here, so no change

xChippy wrote:

Thx for the support :3/! But I'm kinda starting to doubt whether this will be ranked....

jonathanlfj wrote:

good guy dadkun here to save the day

dkun wrote:

Okay, re-bubble!

Just kidding, have a heart.

dkun wrote:

Okay, re-bubble!

Just kidding, have a heart.

happy623 wrote:

gratz o/! (late

koreapenguin wrote:

<3