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yanaginagi - Muteki no Soldier [Osu|Taiko]

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[CSGA]Ar3sgice
4,298 posts
Joined July 2011
[CSGA]Ar3sgice
from my queue

尼玛刚刷了一百多pp就给我这种图这不是打击我么, 什么心态 <-- ignore this line (off-topic, only for myself o.o)

Unbeatable

  1. 00:16:715 (2) - here looks better x:436 y:220
  2. 00:25:429 (1) - move last sliderpoint to x:144 y:144 to make blanket look better
  3. 00:33:144 (6,3) - it's not stacked perfectly
  4. 00:36:287 (1,2,3,4) - this gives a better flow http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358720
  5. 01:03:715 (9,1) - slider blanket like this..? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358721
    141,191,63715,2,0,B|68:192|28:268|60:332,2,180,4|0|4
  6. 02:54:215 (2,3) - why 1/4..? missing note at 02:54:144 ?
  7. 02:58:001 (5) - better here..? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358724
  8. 03:18:287 (3) - move to x:152 y:188
  9. 04:39:572 (4) - better blanket..? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358728
  10. 04:42:572 - drag break here..? gives a pause break effect
  11. 05:06:252 - add note here http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358730 ._.
S.S

  1. 00:15:858 (5,6,7) - imo ctrl+r plays better here o.o
  2. 00:23:144 (1) - I think this shape goes with music better orz http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358697
  3. 01:03:144 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - imo,,, back and forth jump at 210 bpm, it's so hard,,,,, and also, 01:04:001 (7) - stacks there ;__; maybe you can do like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358701
  4. 01:04:715 (3) - ctrl+r plays better here o.o
  5. 01:44:287 (1,2) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358703 looks better...
  6. 02:07:144 (1,2,3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358704 how about this._.
  7. 02:16:287 (1,2,3,4) - stack somewhere else...?
  8. 03:42:001 (1,2) - you can do slider blanket better like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/358708 
    92,268,222001,6,0,B|132:208|104:120|24:104,1,200.000000596047,4|8
  9. 04:22:715 (2,3,4,5) - stream here
that's all

Good luck~
BCI
1,081 posts
Joined May 2011
BCI
hi there
mod time via my queue

[General]
why you ignore kosiga's

kosiga wrote:

from AIBat: - [S.S]04:44:180, BPM of 176.000. - [Unbeatable]04:44:179, BPM of 176.000.
i still see it

[S.S]


[Unbeatable]


sorry but mapset is clean imo, please don't give kd /me runs
Ryu_old
Ryu_old
[UB]
01:08:429 - 01:08:715 - slider 1 repeat
01:48:572 - 01:48:715 - slider
01:48:858 - 01:49:144 - slider 1 repeat
01:49:429 - 01:49:715 - slider
01:50:287 - 01:50:572 - slider 1 repeat
01:50:715 - remove
01:51:001 - ^

[S.S]
So Sexy

Good luck moemoe >w</
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Leorda
Oh hey


[Unbeatable]
02:53:644 (1) - Unsnapped tail slider
02:54:572 (4) - Add clap at start slider
04:28:144 (3) - Move 1 grid left? (Nazi)
04:49:974 (7) - New combo?
05:03:269 (1) - Why whistle? It shouldn't have a whistle at last spinner


[S.S.]
01:49:001 (1) - Not stack correctly with previous note
02:04:001 (2) - Move down a bit so it's not overlapped by previous slider (Nazi)
02:39:715 (1,2,3,4,5) - An anti-jump after jump pattern will confuse the players, I guess
03:04:001 (4) - This note is touch the HP Bar
03:06:001 (5) - The tail slider is almost offscreen
04:11:429 (4) - I don't like if this place at same place as 04:11:429 (4).... Try to make something better?


That's all I got, sorry
bmin11
5,438 posts
Joined October 2008
bmin11
[S.S]
개인적으로 호루라기의 부재가 아쉬운 노래네요. 기타와 어울리리라 생각했는데 쩝...
01:47:287 (3) - 이 노트가 특별히 점프가 아닌 이유가 있나요?
02:07:144 (1,2,3,4,5) - 굳이 안티 점프라 여겨질 멜로디도 없고 노트가 겹쳐있기까지하다보니 되려 넓은 스트림으로 여겨질까 걱정되네요. 좌우 지그재그로 내려오는 패턴이 어떨까요? 이전 슬라이더들과도 어울리리라 생각해요.
02:16:287 (1,2,3,4) - 위와 같은 이유입니다. 다른 패턴을 추천드려요.
02:39:715 (1,2,3,4,5) - 으아아 파트의 클라이막스다보니 거의 확실하게 스트림으로 여겨지게 되네요. 위 두 패턴은 몰라도 이건 정말 알아낼 방도가 없었어요.
04:44:520 (1) - 개인적으로 이 이후로 Soft Whistle을 너무 남용하신게 아닌가 싶네요. 노래의 에필로그나 다름없으니 잔잔한 여운을 남기는게 좋으리라 생각합니다. 예를 들어 일정한 리등으로 넣으며 볼륨을 조금 줄이는것도 좋은 방법이구요.

[Unbeatable]
위 모딩과 같이 호루라기의 부재가 아쉬운 난이도네요.
00:23:715 (3) - 슬라이더 모양이 흐름에 굉장히 어긋나네요. U가 되도록 고쳐보세요.
00:30:144 (8) - 좀 더 내리셔서 다음 슬라이더로의 움직임이 수월하게 해주세요.
01:29:001 (5) - 이거 1/3으로 고쳐주세요.
01:59:144 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 노래와 무관한 점프네요. 물론 그런 점프가 이전에 아예 없다고 (두 난이도 포함) 할순 없겠지만 이건 특히 어긋나게 느껴지네요. 이전 같은 슬라이더 + 노트 점프가 더 어울리리라 생각합니다 굳이 점프가 필요하다면.
02:06:001 (3) - 패턴이 3노트로 이루어지면 안되고 4노트로 이루어져야겠네요. 보컬이 패턴의 시작점이 되게 패턴과 히트사운드를 고쳐주세요.
02:36:144 (3,4) - 갑자기 여기서부터 정상 스페이싱이 되니 헷갈리네요. 점프로 고쳐주세요.
02:54:144 (2) - 이 노트를 지워주세요. 이유는 다음 슬라이더를 위함입니다.
02:54:286 (3) - 위를 하신 후, 이 슬라이더를 이전에 있는 파란색 선으로 옮겨주세요.
03:32:144 (3) - 박수 추가
03:34:715 (4,5) - 이것들 1/3입니다. 고칠 필요는 없습니다 어차피 플레이어가 못느낄수도 있으니.
03:45:001 (1,2,3,4) - 이전 노트로부터 이어지기 편하게 왼쪽으로 조금 옮겨주세요.
04:44:519 (2) - 이 이후부터 박수는 안어울린다고 생각합니다 (솔직한 심정으로 말하자면 피아노 공연에서 축하용 폭죽 터트리는 듯한 기분). Soft Whistle이 더 어울릴꺼에요.



화이팅!
Beige
Elite Mapper
2,192 posts
Joined February 2011
Beige

[Unbeatable]


OD : -1

00:21:858 (6) - : NC

00:34:001 (3,1) - : 조금 겹치네요... 조금 넓혀 주세요.

00:42:287 (4) - : stuck 해주시는게 좋을 것 같습니다.

01:28:572 (3,4,5) - : 연타 길이 조금 좁혀주세요.

02:11:715 (7) - : stuck 해주시는게 좋을 것 같습니다. 그리고 NC

02:35:858 (1) - : 슬라이더하고 겹치는 건 조금 그렇습니다. 옆으로 해주세요.

02:53:644 (1,2) - : 박자가 조금 안맞는 것 같습니다. 1/4로 해보세요,

03:47:644 (2,3) - : 연타로 해주세요. 햇갈립니다.

04:06:144 (8) - : NC


[S.S]


02:04:858 (1,2,3,4) - : stuck 해주시는게 좋을 것 같습니다.


잘 만드셧습니다 ㅇㅅㅇ..
플레이도 잘하시고 매핑도 잘하시는 당신은 욕심쟁이 ㅇㅅㅇ...

늅모딩 봐주셔서 감사합니다 ㅎ..

그리고 이 스레드에 S.S = Star Stream이라고 넣어주세요.
x847606653
524 posts
Joined January 2011
x847606653
Hi,there
just some suggestions

Unbeatable
00:05:429 (3) - like this
SPOILER
01:04:572 (2,3) - change place mutually
01:13:429 - add 2 green line to a little kia,like thisi
SPOILER
01:28:429 (2) - move to 24.212

S.S
none

that's all I can find,hope it's useful.GL>_>
x847606653
524 posts
Joined January 2011
x847606653
0.0
val0108
1,430 posts
Joined January 2010
val0108
[unbeatable]
00:05:429 (3) - copy of the 00:04:858 (1) - h and j
00:36:858 (5) - stack on the 00:36:715 (4) -
00:38:715 (1) - soft sound default, slider head only
00:39:001 (2) - ^
00:41:001 (1,3) - ^
00:43:287 (1,2) - ^
00:47:858 (1,3) - ^
00:50:144 (1,2) - ^
00:52:429 (1,3) - ^
01:42:715 (1,2) - ^
01:45:001 (1,3) - ^
01:47:286 (1,2) - ^
01:51:858 (1,2) - ^
01:54:144 (1,3) - ^
01:56:429 (1,3) - ^
03:48:429 (1,3) - ^
03:50:715 (1,2) - ^
03:53:001 (1,3) - ^
03:57:572 (1,2) - ^
03:59:858 (1,3) - ^
04:02:144 (1,2) - ^
00:42:287 (4) - stack on the 00:41:715 (2) -
00:42:858 (7) - ^
00:43:715 (3) - new combo
00:44:001 (1) - remove new combo
00:57:858 (2,4,6) - new combo,'cause 00:55:144 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - same
01:29:001 (5) - one more slider arrow?
01:50:287 (3) - x:456 y:208
01:59:572 (3,5,7) - new combo?
02:53:620 (1) - change notes,slider is weird rythm.
02:53:620 (1) - not whistle
04:22:001 (1) - remove sound finish
04:28:572 (6) - stack on the 04:28:144 (3) -
04:46:906 (1,4) - remove whistle,04:47:588 - add here whistle
04:57:815 (1) - remove whistle

[S.S]
00:14:572 (3) - ctl + r?
00:15:572 (3) - 2 grid down
00:17:858 (3) - move somewhere.in slider body is hard >_>
00:27:001 (2) - x:116 y: 44 is better imo
00:28:001 (2) - stack on the 00:27:572 (6) -
00:30:715 (1) - remove new combo
00:31:001 (1) - ^
00:38:715 (1,2) - same "unbeatable" diff mod.
00:41:001 (1,2) - ^
00:43:287 (1,2) - ^
00:47:858 (1,2) - ^
00:50:144 (1,2) - ^
00:52:287 (1,2) - ^
01:42:715 (1,2) - ^
01:45:001 (1,3) - ^
01:47:287 (3) - ^ slider head and end only.
01:51:858 (1,3) - ^
01:54:144 (1,2) - ^
01:56:429 (1,3) - ^
03:48:429 (1,2) - ^
03:50:715 (1,2) - ^
03:53:001 (4) - ^
03:57:572 (5) - ^
03:59:858 (2) - ^
04:02:144 (1,3) - ^

01:12:858 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - x:276 y:222 because near 01:12:715 (4,1) - in play mode.
01:52:287 (1) - remove new combo
01:52:429 (2) - new combo
01:54:572 (1,2) - ^
02:07:858 (6,7,8,9,10) - x:267 y:359 .because in play mode near.
04:03:144 (3) - copy and ctl + h and j of the 04:02:572 (1) -

that's all!!!
BinJip
759 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
BinJip
val0108

x847606653

thanks 'w'
Rare
1,119 posts
Joined August 2010
Rare
Hi BinJip~
all suggestions.
my modding isn't Perfection. No kudosu pls :(

[General]
StackLeniency is different from another difficulty. Is this rankable?

[Unbeatable]
00:00:287 (1) - remove clap to start slider
00:01:715 (2,3,4,5,6) - try this http://puu.sh/16gO7
00:02:572 (1) - same as 00:00:287 (1) -
00:04:858 (1) - ^
00:19:144 (3,4) - I prefer to not stack here http://puu.sh/16gPH
00:29:429 (4) - add new combo
00:52:429 (1,2,3) - like the Triangle http://puu.sh/16gQQ
00:54:287 (3) - remove finish
01:01:715 (4) - x:288 y:40
01:13:358 - don't need Inherited Point
01:32:001 (2) - x:256 y:184
03:55:715 (6) - x:28 y:280
04:40:715 (1,2,3,4,5) - compose → Create Polygon Circles http://puu.sh/16gXT

fight ></
wantuole
528 posts
Joined December 2010
wantuole
Hello binjip
from my mod queue
try for mod
[S.S]
02:35:715~02:40:287 - use overlap? use Rotation or other
02:40:287 (5) - new combo
[Unbeatable]
00:01:715 (2,3,4,5,6) - more careful.
02:54:215 (4) - start in blue?
03:32:287 (1) - ?? in here seem so bad

that all

:o mod app is so hard for me
mancuso_JM_
osu! Alumni
4,615 posts
Joined October 2010
mancuso_JM_
Hi! Mod Requested on my Queue :3

[General:]

- Timing Points: You have an Incocnsistency between both difficulties on the second Uninherited Timing Point (Red Line), by 1ms. Because on Unbeatable the Red Line is Placed on Offset: 284.179 and in S.S is placed on Offset: 284.180. You have to fix that, to keep the consistency

[Unbeatable:]

• 00:04:144 (7): This Note flow bad where is it, also is very overlapped by Hitbursts that is not a good idea for a fluent map. Maybe a little jump can work better here, so try to move this Note to x:400 y:120
• 00:14:572 (3,4): A Stack here is not very benefit to the map, the previous section is really fast and this Stack can be sudden in some point, also it looks a bit random. Try to unstack this, please
• 00:15:001 (1): A Clap on the end of this Slider, fit properly with the Instrumental
• 00:16:715 (2): Since it is a beatmap aiming for the approval, is better if you risk more with the Rhythm. In this case I suggest you to break a bit the Symetry reducing this Slider by 1/2 and then add a Note on 00:17:001
• 00:38:715 (1): The Whistle on the Beginning of this Slider doesn't sound very fitting, I think that is better if you Remove it from here
• 00:55:144 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2): This Combo Spam is unnecesary to me, the music doesn't need that. To be sincere, I think that any New Combo fit fine here, so remove all the New Combos to make this pattern (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8)
• 00:57:572 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2): (^)
• 01:03:715 (9): (Nazi)- Move this Note to x:140 y:192 to occupate this on the same position as (5) in 01:02:858
• 01:09:715 (4): I can hear the Cymbals on the music here, in this case is better if you Replace the Clap to a Finish on the Slider beginning
• 01:25:287 (2,3): This pattern don't fit with the music at all, especially with the long vocal that appear here. For a better Rhythm the Slider (3) should start on 01:25:287 and finish on 01:25:572. Then add the Note on 01:25:715. Something like that:
SPOILER
• 01:37:287 (5): A Clap sound preety fine with the music and with your previous Notes
• 01:51:144 (7,8,9): Hmm... I don't know if 3 Stacked Notes flow fine here. This make an unnecesary stop that the music doesn't need it, so would be better if at least unstack one of this Notes
• 01:51:858 (1,2): To keep consistency with these kind of sections (where the music sound like that), is better if you change these Sliders to 4 Notes instead, you can make a border to previous (9) with your next (1,2).
• 01:56:429 (1,2,3): Increase the spacing between these Notes (at least to 1.50x), flow better and also is consistent with your other sections where the music sound like that.
• 01:59:144 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2): Again this Combo Spam, it is a consistent increase on the Spacing, so you don't need to remark anything with combos, believe me.
• 02:11:572 (6): A Whistle here sounds very fitting with the music, really. Make a good sense, try it :P
• 02:15:144 (4): The kiai end here, so the change in the music is imminent. It's a good idea add a New Combo here to remark this change
• 02:16:858 (7): Both Clap and Finish sound really noisy on this Note, I think that the whistle sound work better here.
• 02:22:572 (4): You are missing a Clap here, appear on the music too.
• 02:26:001 (1,2,3,4): I personally don't like this kind of patterns, in general they don't flow fine on standard difficulties (I said that because plays good on CTB difficulties), in this case is better if you keep the spacing between the Notes and move (2) where it is (3) and (3) where it is (2). An Screenshoot to illustrate you :P
SPOILER

• 02:51:715 (3): Now, I'm not really confident about the rankability of this kind of Sliders (the rules are very stricts nowaday), but I'm not really sure I should investigate
• 02:53:620 (1,2,3): You should make something with this Notes, they are not easy to read because they are snapped on 1/3 but the spacing is too similar comparing with 1/2 patterns, I don't know, adjust the spacing, change the combo colours to a new one, etc.
• 03:34:787 (x): A Note sounds fine here
• 04:12:858 (5,6): To follow the sequence as your previous patterns out of the Kiai, is better if you unstack (6) from the end of this Slider.
• 04:23:144 (T): This kiai should finish here (like S.S diff) because the kiai becomes very long and also if you finish here this kiai will be consistent with your previous one.
• 04:55:599 (4,5): Works better with the Vocal if you delete (4), then the Slider should start here instead. Then, this Slider have to finish on 04:56:110
• 05:00:883 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7): It is a very slow section this one, so long jumps doesn't fit here, try to use spacing less to 3.00x for a better flow as I said before
• 05:03:355 (Spin): A Whistle (default) on the end of this Spinner works perfectly with the bells on the music. You should try it :3

[S.S:]

• 00:04:287 (4): Just to be confident, but is it necesary this 1/8? It doesn't appear anything on the music, also I can't listen anything on 1/4 (on 25% obviously), so would be better if you avoid that
• 00:52:287 (1): You can move this Slider (and also the next (2) to keep the symetry) some grids left to avoid the overlap with the next one, it doesn't look very well in my opinion
• 01:30:287 (7): The Clap on this Note sounds preety loud, especially comparing with the clap on (1). Would be better if you reduce the volume on this Note
• 01:31:858 (x): In general you follow the Vocal, so here is a good place to add a Note
• 01:43:572 (3,1): A jump just for symetry... I don't know if it is a good idea, the music doesn't need that, especially because on sections where the music sounds like here, you don't have huge jumps. If I were you I'd rearrange this pattern a bit, but it is your decision
• 01:46:858 (2,3): Wait, here you should increase the Spacing between these Sliders, it flows much better and it is more consistent with the rest of the map. I thought something like move (3) to x:240 y:84
• 01:48:287 (3,4,1): A jump and then a Stop to as a relative same part of the song, this doesn't work at all. It's better if you move (4) out of here increasing the Spacing between (4,1)
• 02:07:144 (1,2,3,4,5): This antijump plays bad, is totally stright and plays bad because you don't have another antijump like this one. At least if you want to add an antijump, try to do a shape more 'fluent'
• 02:16:287 (1,2,3,4): (^)
• 03:14:429 (x): I find more fluent if you start with the section here, adding a Note. When you play the map, this doesn't sound a 'sudden' start of the new section
• 03:39:572 (1,2,3,4,5): I'm not really partidary of this kind of overlaps but meh.. :P. Well, I also think that the rhythm can be better
• 03:58:858 (5,6,7,8): The jump between (5,6) and (7,8) look forced to make a nicer pattern but the flow is not correct at all. Try to exchange the position between (6,7), you mantain a little jump and the flow is better imo
• 04:13:572 (6): Again, is necesary this 1/8? :P
• 04:18:858 (2): This Slider can be named as hidden Slider, it is preety unpredictable under to the other Slider (5), try to do something with that please
• 04:22:572 (1): This Note stacked with the rest of the stream, can cause a bad readability because players will think that this is part of the stream. Try to unstack it

Well, That's it. Sorry for the delay :(
Good Luck with your map ;)
Prid13
1 post
Joined September 2010
Prid13
I love Ra's Hard Beatmap, it's honestly one of the best and most flowing beatmaps I've ever played. I am actually not a good osu! player when it comes to Insane difficulties which often have super fast notes, but this one, despite its speed, kept me flowing, and I beat it on second or third try, and did I feel awesome! I can't believe this hasn't been approved yet :O
Dark Fang
1,981 posts
Joined February 2011
Dark Fang
[General]

Tag 에 Ra-s 추가? 나중에 할것으로 보아 이것은 무시...

[Easy]

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00:57:429 (1) - 대칭으로 해보시는건 어떤가요. last point of slider move to (232,356)
00:59:715 (1) - ^
01:08:287 (2) - Ctrl + G 하시고 노트 간격 조절해보시는게 어떤가요. 저게 더 동선이 자연스럽네요.
01:36:287 (2,3) - 반복 슬라이더 대신 조금 더 긴 슬라이더를 사용해 보시는게 어떤가요. 이지치곤 어려운것 같아요. like this
02:01:429 (1) - 아까 것과 같이..
02:03:715 (1) - ^
02:12:287 (2) - 이것도 01:08:287 (2) - 이것과 같이
02:33:429 (1) - 이건 이렇게 두는게 나을것같아요.
36,184,153429,6,0,B|36:100|104:100|104:100|108:168|176:180,1,240.000001788141,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
03:10:858 - 브레이크를 삭제하시는게 어떠십니까. 여기 브레이크를 두면 초보 유저들은 쉬는타임이라고 혼동할 뿐아니라, 드레인은 충분하여서 여기에 브레이크는 그다지 필요는 없어보입니다.
03:12:287 (1,1,1) - 음... 이 노트들을 겹쳐두면 초보 유저들이 박자를 혼동하기 쉽습니다. 모양을 따로 잡아보시는게 어떤가요?
04:07:143 (1) - 이것도 00:57:429 (1) - 이것과 같이
04:09:429 (1) - ^
04:18:002 (2) - same as 01:08:287 (2) -
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전체적으로 슬라이더만 예쁘면 좋을 것 같아요.

[Normal]

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02:24:287 (1) - 이걸 이렇게 두는게 더 나을 것 같아요.
328,52,144287,6,0,B|328:144|184:144|184:52,3,220.000001192094,4|8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0
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[Unbeatable]

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언스냅은.... 알아서 체크해주세요 ㅠㅠ

[Star Stream]

02:07:858 (6,7,8,9,10) - 스페이싱 중앙으로 하시는게 어떤가요



어휴... 곡도 길고 맵도 좋고 미치겟네요.
wantuole
528 posts
Joined December 2010
wantuole
from my mod queue
3 time get you required,I modder last months,and I see you get new diff
so remoded
[General]
ok
[easy]
00:30:001 (3) - remove finish
00:52:858 (1,2,1) - this 3 is so nealy,not good for look
00:57:144 (4) - remove finish
00:59:429 (4,1) - ^ ,add finish at 1 start,remove finish 4 ,1 end
01:00:858 (2) - remove finish
01:36:287 (2,3) - not covered report
02:33:429 (1) - make a groove in end for next 2 start
02:34:572 (2) - ^
04:02:002 (2,3,1) - too nealy
04:19:716 (1,2) - ^
[Normal]
fine, but use less long copy
00:42:001 (2) - a little out of Screen
00:51:144 (2) - ctrl+g you change direction too fast, not do it in easily diff
01:22:572 (1) - <_< out of screen
03:12:287 (1,2,3) - little hard for nuws player
04:00:859 (2) - ^
04:44:519 (1,2) - too fast get note after spinner
04:49:633 (1) - <_< out of screen,slider circle is cover HP ,(it is fly
05:00:542 (1,2,3) - a little jump

that all good luck
KRZY
Former osu! Champion: OWC#3
4,850 posts
Joined May 2009
KRZY
[Unbeatable]
'muteki'를 영작하면 unbeatable보단 invincible이 어울림. 난이도 이름 바꾸는 거 한 번 고려해봐
00:08:001 (4) - 이거 함 해바, 기타 리프에 맞춰봤어
389,94,8001,1,0,0:0:0
467,207,8144,2,0,B|395:290,1,105.000000298023
00:09:429 (1) - 00:10:429 (4)처럼 부드러운 슬라이더 쓰는게 더 나아보여
00:11:715 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 기타에 더 맞게 함 바꿔봐
SPOILER
00:27:715 (7) - 00:27:858 (1) 시작부분으로 옮겨봐 (옮기면 뉴콤보)
00:29:144 (2,3,1,2,3) - 이런 점프 모양을 다각형으로 맞춰주면 보기에도 좋고 플레이하기에도 좋아
160,196,29144,1,8,0:0:0
239,373,29287,1,0,0:0:0
416,294,29429,1,0,0:0:0
336,116,29572,1,0,0:0:0
178,13,29715,1,8,0:0:0
00:30:715 (2,3,4,5) - 얘네도 그냥 놓는것보단 사다리꼴이나 평행사변형으로 맞추는 게 더 보기에 좋지
256,320,30715,1,0,0:0:0
357,81,30858,1,0,0:0:0
256,64,31001,2,0,B|212:32|148:40,1,105.000000298023
357,303,31287,1,0,0:0:0
00:35:429 (3,4,5,6) - 이렇게 한 번 맞춰봐
SPOILER
00:47:858 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - 정확하게 마름모로 맞춰주면 좋아. 뒤에 2번 슬라이더도 그 뒤에 나오는 8번 슬라이더랑 대칭으로 설정해주고.
188,60,47858,5,2,0:0:0
114,269,48001,1,2,0:0:0
92,140,48144,1,2,0:0:0
210,189,48287,1,4,0:0:0
231,318,48429,6,0,B|261:354|325:352,1,105.000000298023,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
433,291,48715,2,0,B|462:251|444:192,1,105.000000298023,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
00:51:572 (5) - (312, 156)으로
00:52:429 (1,2,3,1) - 이런것도 하나하나 모양 맞춰주면 좋아. 이거 함 해바
132,116,52429,5,0,0:0:0
380,116,52572,1,0,0:0:0
256,40,52715,1,2,0:0:0
380,116,52858,6,0,B|436:152|436:152|476:224|432:300,1,210.000000596047,4|
00:54:001 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 6을 없애고 4,5를 한 칸씩 뒤로 민 다음에 원래 4번 슬라이더가 시작하던 자리(00:54:429)에 4번 슬라이더 시작하는 위치랑 같은 곳에 노트를 둬봐
01:05:715 (3) - 얘를 바로 전 노트 위치로 옮겨야 삼각형패턴 규칙이 맞아
01:24:501 (8) - 없애
01:28:572 (3,4,5) - 여기 박자가 1/6이야
SPOILER
01:47:286 (1,3) - y좌표를 192로 맞추고
01:48:286 (3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 이렇게 한 번 바꿔봐
128,192,108287,2,0,B|124:132|168:88,1,105.000000298023,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
128,192,108572,1,8,0:0:0
385,192,108715,6,8,B|431:75|303:24,1,210.000000596047,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
256,128,109144,1,0,0:0:0
256,128,109287,1,8,0:0:0
205,25,109429,2,8,B|80:75|127:192,1,210.000000596047,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
256,128,109858,1,8,0:0:0
01:50:715 (4) - 스페이싱
02:02:715 (5,7) - (456,232)로 옮겨봐
02:10:572 (1) - (365,82)로 옮겨봐
02:11:001 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - 이렇게 한 번 해봐. 1번 슬라이더 위치를 살짝 옮기다 보니 지금 있는 패턴으로 모양 내기가 좀 어렵더라고
164,141,131001,1,0,0:3:0
59,152,131144,1,0,0:3:0
38,254,131286,1,0,0:3:0
129,306,131429,1,0,0:3:0
206,237,131572,1,0,0:3:0
306,237,131715,5,0,0:3:0
383,306,131858,1,0,0:3:0
474,254,132001,1,0,0:3:0
453,152,132143,1,0,0:3:0
348,141,132286,1,0,0:3:0
02:12:858 (3) - 얘 그냥 02:13:144까지 늘려
02:18:858 (7) - (148,276)으로 옮겨
02:36:287 (4) - 얠 없애고
02:36:429 (5,6) - 얘네를 왼쪽으로 한 칸씩 옮기면서 위치도 지우기 전 4번 노트 있던곳으로 옮겨
02:36:858 - 여기에 이제 (112,92)에 노트 추가
02:53:644 (1,2,3) - 얘네 이렇게 해봐
SPOILER
03:28:287 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 규칙성도 있고 음악에도 맞게 하기 위해 이렇게 한 번 바꿔봐
168,200,208287,6,0,B|296:200,1,105.000000298023,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
380,200,208572,1,8,0:0:0
112,88,208715,2,0,B|236:88,1,105.000000298023,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
324,88,209000,1,0,0:0:0
32,236,209144,2,0,B|136:236,1,105.000000298023,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
244,236,209429,1,8,0:0:0
404,328,209572,2,0,B|272:328,1,105.000000298023,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
192,328,209858,1,0,0:0:0
472,192,210001,2,0,B|364:192,1,105.000000298023,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
260,192,210287,2,0,B|141:192|140:192,1,105.000000298023
80,60,210572,6,0,B|184:60,1,105.000000298023,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
292,60,210858,1,0,0:0:0
260,192,211001,2,0,B|396:192,1,105.000000298023,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
472,192,211287,1,8,0:0:0
256,40,211429,2,0,B|256:176,1,105.000000298023,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
256,250,211715,1,0,0:0:0
364,112,211858,2,0,B|364:248,1,105.000000298023,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
364,322,212144,1,0,0:0:0
03:34:572 (1,2) - 여기도 박자가 1/6이니까 이렇게 한 번 해봐
256,112,214572,6,0,B|256:244,1,105.000000298023,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
218,305,214858,2,0,B|160:344,3,70.0000001986823
03:44:429 (2,5) - (48,196)으로 이동
03:53:287 (3) - (360,168)로 이동
04:12:144 (2) - 얘 그냥 3번 슬라이더 시작점 위에 놓는 게 더 나아보여
04:12:715 (4) - 얘도 1번 슬라이더 시작점 위에 놓는 게 더 나아보이고
04:14:858 (5) - (54,143)으로 이동
04:15:572 (8) - (458,143)으로 이동
04:36:287 (1,2,3,4,1) - 이렇게 한 번 바꿔봐
248,104,276287,5,0,0:0:0
340,56,276430,1,8,0:0:0
440,88,276573,1,0,0:0:0
391,183,276715,1,0,0:0:0
349,279,276858,5,4,0:0:0
Quilt
1,476 posts
Joined May 2010
Quilt
irc mod dayo

SPOILER
23:59 BinJip: easy normal modding site!
23:59 Quilt: doreno?
23:59 *BinJip is watching [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/181576 yanaginagi - Muteki no Soldier [Easy]]
00:00 Quilt: iikedo
00:00 Quilt: shiteki dekinakutemo okoranaide ne
00:00 BinJip: un w
00:02 Quilt: easy
00:02 BinJip: easy heta dakara ooito omou
00:03 Quilt: 01:30:715 (2) -
00:03 Quilt: reverse ikkai herasu
00:04 BinJip: un
00:05 Quilt: 01:36:287 (2,3) - kokomo
00:05 Quilt: reverse itteiga ii
00:06 BinJip: ittei?
00:06 Quilt: certain
00:06 Quilt: �ｼ�
00:06 Quilt: kana
00:07 BinJip: aa
00:07 Quilt: 01:51:715 (2) - delete nore
00:08 Quilt: 01:52:001 (2) - 01:51:715 (2) - move here
00:08 Quilt: and reverse ikkai
00:08 Quilt: a]
00:08 Quilt: suggestion ne
00:08 Quilt: !
00:09 Quilt: 01:54:001 (2) - koremo 01:51:715 (2) - kokoto onaji kanjini
00:10 BinJip: un
00:11 Quilt: 02:00:572 (3) -
00:11 Quilt: delete
00:11 Quilt: 02:01:144 (3) -
00:11 Quilt: kore
00:11 Quilt: 02:00:858 (3) - kokoni idou
00:11 Quilt: 02:02:857 (3) - delete
00:12 Quilt: 02:03:429 (3) - move to ]02:03:144 (3) -
00:12 BinJip: ok
00:13 Quilt: 02:05:715 (3) - delete
00:13 Quilt: 02:04:858 (2) -
00:13 Quilt: kore wo
00:13 Quilt: 02:05:429 - kokomade nobasu
00:14 Quilt: 02:14:572 (2) -
00:14 Quilt: kore kottinohouga better
00:14 Quilt: 02:14:858 (2) -
00:14 Quilt: 02:18:858 (3) - delete
00:15 Quilt: 02:26:287 (4) - delete
00:15 Quilt: edit no bag uzeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
00:15 BinJip: wwww
00:15 BinJip: slider nagai
00:18 Quilt: 03:15:715 (2) -
00:18 Quilt: http://puu.sh/1fMwG
00:18 Quilt: konnna kanjini
00:18 Quilt: slider naga sugi w
00:21 BinJip: ok
00:22 Quilt: 03:55:144 (3) - ikkai reverse?
00:23 Quilt: 04:06:287 (3) - delete
00:23 Quilt: 04:06:859 (3) - move to 04:06:572 -
00:23 Quilt: 04:08:572 (3,4) - koremo onaji kanjini
00:24 Quilt: 04:33:716 (3) - delete
00:26 Quilt: 04:55:429 (2) - 04:55:429 (2) - 1/2 late
00:26 Quilt: 04:55:769 (2) - delete
00:26 Quilt: 04:57:474 (2) - delete
00:26 Quilt: easy owari
00:27 BinJip: otu
alacat
osu! Alumni
3,872 posts
Joined May 2011
alacat
Hi:3 from My queue.

[General]
●Blue line is unnecessary .
●If you can , change to BG size 800 x 600 → 1024 x 768

[Easy]
●00:23:144 - hmm . I want finish sound here><
●00:22:858 (1,2,3) - I think it'd look better if it was symmetrical.
●00:27:429 (3) - add finish on the slider's end
●00:30:001 (3) - ^ same as slider's head.
●00:34:001 (3) - add clap at the head instead of finish
●00:34:001 (3) - add clap on the slider's end
●00:36:858 (2) - add finish and add new combo as the synth's phrase should begin here.
●00:44:572 (2) - bend slider to the opposite direction ? the flow is good imo
●00:45:429 (3) - remove finish on the slider's head
●00:46:001 (4) - add finish
●00:46:001 (4,1) - switch these newcombos for your pattern? although i think the current one looks better.
●00:56:287 (2,3) - itis hard to take a little for easy. try to make one slider ?
●00:56:572 - add clap
●00:58:572 (2,3) - same as here.00:56:287 (2,3) -
●00:58:858 - add clap
●01:02:001 (1) - add finish on slider's head
●01:07:144 - remove finish on the slider's reverse.it follows nothing.
●01:11:144 (1) - add finish on slider's head and remove new combo.
●01:30:715 (2) - miss map ? o.o
●01:33:429 (3) - add finish on the slider's reverse.try 60% volume
●01:36:287 (2,3) - Ctrl+H?
●01:38:572 (1) - try to change spinner's end at here.01:40:858 - and add finish
●01:56:858 (1,2,3) - gradually add volume about finish sound
●02:00:858 (3) - add clap instead of finish? it needs clap sound imo
●02:03:144 (3) - same as here
●02:03:715 (1) - add finish on the slider's head.like this your pattern at here.02:01:429 -
●02:15:144 (1) - add finish on the slider's head.
●02:26:572 (1) - add finish on the slider's head.like this your pattern at here.02:17:429 (1) -
●02:58:572 (1) - add clap on the slider's end
●03:12:287 (1,1,1) - not stack better .maybe confusing many beginners ;_;
●03:32:573 (1,2,3) - I think it'd look better if it was symmetrical.
●03:46:573 (2,1) - switch these newcombos for your pattern?as the synth's phrase should begin here.
●04:08:858 (3) - remove finish
●04:09:430 (1) - add finish on slider's head
●04:19:715 (1,2) - hmm , try to make this ?
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/466936
●04:34:002 (4) - add whistle instead of clap
●04:34:573 (1) - add whistle on the slider's end
●04:44:179 - -10% volume from here
●04:56:451 (2,1,2,3) - 1 grid down ? put a center.

if you don't like finish sound , sry :o

Hope you fine this helpful :oops:
Ra-s
1,289 posts
Joined May 2009
Ra-s
http://puu.sh/1h52E
아직 휘슬 못박음.
컴퓨터 꺼야해서 다 못하고 끔 ㅠㅠ
Sonnyc
7,776 posts
Joined June 2008
Sonnyc
이지만 할래여,,

Easy:

-- 클랩을, 노래 속의 클랩 위치가 아니라 원하는 곳에 넣으셨나봅니다. 뭐, 좋아요..

00:25:715 (1) - 좀더 대칭시키기
01:30:429 (1) - 01:30:287로 데려와 보세요. 거리 조절도 하시고.. 음악상 여기가 나을거 같아서요
02:26:001 (3) - (160,240)? 겹치는것 보다는 나을것 같아서요..
03:58:002 (3) - 갑자기 1.0 스페이싱 된게 이상한거 같기도 합니다
04:34:002 (4,1) - 휘슬이 어색한듯요
04:48:610 (3) - 1칸 왼쪽, 아래
04:49:633 (1) - 1칸 위로

ㅇㅅㅇ :D
chaotic_iak
287 posts
Joined February 2012
chaotic_iak


Unrankable, problem, plausible problem. Yay good stuff.

Okay so apparently the song is 5:09 but you want all diffs? I'll give some overview, since I can't pass some and the rest are well-made.

[General]
My only suggestion is to cut the song to somewhere about 2-3 minutes, since otherwise it will tire and bore players (proven that I quit Easy halfway).
Also remove lead ins where you have the 15s break at the beginning.

[Easy]
Reduce stacking; Easy players are not that good with stacking. At least remove the stacking of something like 02:14:572 (2,1).

[Normal]
Don't use that many spinners; double spinners are somewhat hard for Normal players.

[Ra's Hard]
Should be no problem as far as I notice.

[Invincible, S.S]
I can't pass them :(

Meh one of the laziest mods I've done, but there is either a common mistake in each diff with not so much of the rest or there is too few mistakes so I can't notice. Good luck!
Crimmi
1,947 posts
Joined June 2009
Crimmi
Modding, CrimmiStyle!

from Crimmi & Bass' Resqueue

Easy

01:08:287 (2) - Place Finish on the slider tail.
01:09:429 (3) - I don't think this Finish fits here.
01:24:287 (3,1) - Can you make it like this?
01:30:429 (1,2) - Can you make it like this?
01:35:429 (1) - I rather see that slider in this position:
01:50:572 (1) - Remove clap.
02:03:715 (1) - Remove Finish & Clap from slider tail and put the Finish to the slider head.
02:04:858 (2) - ^
02:10:572 (1) - ^
02:12:287 (2,3) - Remove Clap from (2), Add Finish to (2)'s slider tail and remove Finish from (3).
03:10:287 - I don't think this [img=http://puu.sh/1icoX]break[/img] is necessary.
03:45:429 (1) - Remove New Combo.
03:47:144 (1) - ^
03:56:287 (1) - ^

Normal

Nothing~

Invincible

Is 2.10 a bit too high of a SV for a high BPM?

AR -1

05:01:224 (2,3,4,5) - This is just a suggestion:

SPOILER
[img=http://puu.sh/1iknZ][/img]

Ra's Hard

02:27:572 (6,7) - Suggestion:

S.S.

Nothing~
Ra-s
1,289 posts
Joined May 2009
Ra-s
^I want to keep a distance...
Flask
Beatmap Nominator
3,473 posts
Joined July 2011
Flask
Request from my Queue~

[General]
  1. Owari no Hoshi no Love Song to Source? youtube says it's from this anime, so it should be in source not tags
  2. Add Invincible to tags due to the name
  3. You need to make kiai time inconsistency in your diff.
[Easy]
  1. tick rate 1? Seems nice because you're SV is low a bit, will be messy if tick rate 2 D:
  2. 00:18:572 (1) - remove clap to finish? I don't think clap here is nice
  3. 00:29:429 (2) - (end) clap due to your clap rule (:
  4. 00:33:715 (2) - clap here and remove clap on (3)
  5. 00:35:715 (1) - remove nc to fit the song, and you use 3 ncs in here, that's a bit messy D:
  6. 00:38:715 (2) - remove a reserve and put it on 00:38:715 - to fit the song, the vocal is very individual here. And you can add clap at the begin & end to fit the song
  7. 00:40:858 (2) - ^
  8. 00:43:144 (2) - ^
  9. 00:47:715 (2,3) - ^
  10. 00:50:001 (2,3) - ^
  11. 01:42:572 (2) - ^
  12. 01:44:858 (2) - ^
  13. 01:47:144 (2) - ^
  14. 01:51:715 (2,3) - ^
  15. 03:48:287 (3) - ^
  16. 03:50:573 (2) - ^
  17. 03:57:430 (3,4) - ^
  18. 00:46:001 (1) - remove nc, you don't need to nc here
  19. 00:59:429 (3) - clap here? sounds nice imo :3
  20. 01:00:858 (2) - (end) you missed the clap
  21. 01:01:715 (3) - ^
  22. 01:02:001 (1) - finish at begin, remove clap at end, finish+clap is a bit noisy
  23. 01:03:144 (2) - finish at begin & end, remove clap at end to keep inconsistency with (1)?
  24. 01:12:287 (1) - This spinner is a bit short in an over 200bpm song, and we're talking about Easy diff. Maybe use a 4/1 slider instead?
  25. 01:30:715 (2) - Add a reserve to fit the song, and add clap at begin, end and reserves to make the volume stronger
  26. 01:36:287 (2,3) - Sounds great if add clap at the first & the third short white tick, and remove clap from the second short white tick
  27. 01:38:572 (1) - Stop at 01:40:287 - to make more distance between this spinner and 01:41:429 (1) - ?
  28. 02:03:715 (1,2) - missed clap at the end, breaks the rhythm D:
  29. 02:10:572 (1) - ^ (reserve)
  30. 02:12:287 (2) - ^ (begin), and remove clap at end due to your clap rule
  31. 02:22:001 (1) - (begin,end) finish?
  32. 02:28:858 (1) - finish to keep inconsistency with 02:26:572 (1) - , and it's a good point to add finish :3
  33. 02:31:144 (1) - finish+clap is tooooo noisy imo, remove clap here
  34. 02:34:572 (2) - remove finish from the end, it's a bit noisy and you've added finish on the downbeat on (1) before, to keep inconsistency with (1) is great
  35. 02:35:715 (1) - (end) finish, same reason as above :3
  36. 03:03:144 (1) - finish to fit with song? There's a sound in the song lol
  37. 03:13:287 (1,1) - Use a slider instead these two notes would be more readable imo
  38. 03:21:715 (1) - clap at the end due to your clap rules
  39. 03:26:287 (1) - ^
  40. 04:10:573 (2) - ^
  41. 04:11:716 (1) - finish+clap is noisy again.
  42. 04:22:001 (2) - finish at begin?
  43. 04:41:144 (4) - (nazi) clap at the end? The music is individual here so...
  44. 04:55:769 - Add a note here
  45. 05:03:269 (1) - whistle? There's some piano sound, so whistle would be great i think
    You need to improve your hitsound, it's weird and messy. Placement is good imo :3
[Normal]
  1. I'd suggest you to AR-1 OD-1 HP-1 because the bpm is high
  2. 00:18:572 (1) - (end) clap
  3. 00:21:715 (2) - clap
  4. 00:30:572 (2) - Can you make it 1/2 shorter, than add a reserve? fit the vocal is a good idea because the vocal here's individual :3
  5. 03:40:287 (2) - ^
  6. 00:38:572 (4) - (end) finish
  7. 00:48:858 (2) - ctrl+G this due to (1)'s end is at right, but (2)'s begin is at left, that's a bit hard to "normal"
  8. 03:58:573 (2) - ^
  9. 00:59:715 (1) - clap at the end
  10. 01:02:858 (2) - clap
  11. 01:09:429 (2) - remove finish at the begin because there's no finish sound
  12. 01:12:287 (2) - remake this slider like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/474670
    316,108,72287,2,0,B|408:92|472:136|488:208|484:268|464:332|388:344|344:340|300:316,1,440.000002384188,4|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
  13. 01:29:430 (1) - ^
  14. 04:22:002 (2) - ^
  15. 01:22:572 (1) - make like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/474678
    224,36,82572,6,0,B|140:24|64:48|12:96|-8:160|-
  16. 01:24:858 (1,1) - ^
  17. 01:24:287 (2,3) - I'd suggest you to delete these sliders and put note at 01:24:429 - and 01:24:715 - , what you did is a bit hard to newbies
  18. 01:26:573 (2,3) - ^ (01:26:715 - and 01:27:001 - )
  19. 01:32:001 (1) - Spacing? I hate jumps D:
  20. 01:50:287 (2) - clap at the begin
  21. 01:56:858 (1,2) - clap at end to keep clap inconsistency
  22. 02:04:287 (3) - (nazi) remove clap at the begin? Sounds weird but it's ok to me D:
  23. 02:12:858 (1) - clap at end
  24. 02:24:287 (1) - Umm.. Try this, not a big change but you better fix, because what you did is ugly imo. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/474685
  25. 02:26:858 (2) - clap to keep inconsistency
  26. 02:33:429 (1,2,3) - This overlap is not clear, newbie will be messy here, please fix it.
  27. 03:14:001 (3) - put on 03:13:858 - ? fits the vocal is a good idea imo
  28. 03:24:287 (2) - I know you're making like this to fit with the vocal, but I suggest you 1/2 longer this slider. Sounds really weird here
  29. 03:28:287 (1) - clap at the end to keep inconsistency
  30. 03:39:144 (4) - touches the hp-bar a little bit, it's not hard to fix it, right? (:
  31. 03:39:715 (1) - clap at the end
  32. 04:18:573 (1) - ^
  33. 04:40:287 (3) - ^
  34. 04:40:001 (2) - clap
  35. 04:40:858 (4) - clap at begin, end and reserves? There's a sounds :3
  36. 04:41:429 (1) - end at 04:43:715 - , and add note at 04:44:179 - to improve the downbeat
  37. 05:03:440 (1) - whistle, same reason as Easy
    Great at all.
[Invincible]
  1. 00:30:858 (3) - clap
  2. 01:40:429 (1,2,3,1) - Put a square? Like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/474699
  3. 02:15:715 (2) - ctrl+G? This jump is a bit too big D:
  4. 02:54:001 (3) - finish
  5. 04:21:287 (5) - put on (6)'s begin?
  6. 04:55:769 (4) - remove finish from the end
[Ra's Hard]
  1. 00:24:572 - Add a note here to make the rhythm inconsistency
  2. 01:28:572 - ^
  3. 00:34:572 (1) - finish
  4. 00:32:287 (3) - ^
  5. 01:04:287 (1) - ^
  6. 01:12:287 (3) - ^ (end)
  7. 01:36:287 (3) - ^
  8. 01:38:572 (1) - ^
  9. 01:44:858 (1) - Remove nc here, because you don't nc at 01:42:715 (6) - D:
  10. 02:08:287 (1) - finish
  11. 02:38:072 (1) - ^ there's a strong finish sound
  12. 03:35:572 (3) - Make like this? Seems more blanket than yours lol
    212,276,215572,2,0,B|196:332|140:348|92:316,1,140.000000596047
  13. 03:44:287 (1) - finish
  14. 03:54:429 (3) - remove finish, I don't here any finish here D:
  15. 04:21:429 (2) - finish would be better
  16. 04:22:001 (3) - ^ (begin & end)
  17. 04:32:144 (5) - Remove nc then overlap on 4? I heard the vocal, and the downbeat is on (1), so move (5) to somewhere else
    Nice map /w/!
I'm a bit tired now, so I don't mod S.S D: takes me 3 hours to mod this..
Anyway good luck
BinJip
759 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
BinJip

Flask wrote:

Request from my Queue~

[General]
  1. Owari no Hoshi no Love Song to Source? youtube says it's from this anime, so it should be in source not tags
  2. Add Invincible to tags due to the name
  3. You need to make kiai time inconsistency in your diff.
[Easy]
  1. tick rate 1? Seems nice because you're SV is low a bit, will be messy if tick rate 2 D:
  2. 00:18:572 (1) - remove clap to finish? I don't think clap here is nice
  3. 00:29:429 (2) - (end) clap due to your clap rule (:
  4. 00:33:715 (2) - clap here and remove clap on (3)
  5. 00:35:715 (1) - remove nc to fit the song, and you use 3 ncs in here, that's a bit messy D:
  6. 00:38:715 (2) - remove a reserve and put it on 00:38:715 - to fit the song, the vocal is very individual here. And you can add clap at the begin & end to fit the song
  7. 00:40:858 (2) - ^
  8. 00:43:144 (2) - ^
  9. 00:47:715 (2,3) - ^
  10. 00:50:001 (2,3) - ^
  11. 01:42:572 (2) - ^
  12. 01:44:858 (2) - ^
  13. 01:47:144 (2) - ^
  14. 01:51:715 (2,3) - ^
  15. 03:48:287 (3) - ^
  16. 03:50:573 (2) - ^
  17. 03:57:430 (3,4) - ^
  18. 00:46:001 (1) - remove nc, you don't need to nc here
  19. 00:59:429 (3) - clap here? sounds nice imo :3
  20. 01:00:858 (2) - (end) you missed the clap
  21. 01:01:715 (3) - ^
  22. 01:02:001 (1) - finish at begin, remove clap at end, finish+clap is a bit noisy
  23. 01:03:144 (2) - finish at begin & end, remove clap at end to keep inconsistency with (1)?
  24. 01:12:287 (1) - This spinner is a bit short in an over 200bpm song, and we're talking about Easy diff. Maybe use a 4/1 slider instead?
  25. 01:30:715 (2) - Add a reserve to fit the song, and add clap at begin, end and reserves to make the volume stronger
  26. 01:36:287 (2,3) - Sounds great if add clap at the first & the third short white tick, and remove clap from the second short white tick
  27. 01:38:572 (1) - Stop at 01:40:287 - to make more distance between this spinner and 01:41:429 (1) - ?
  28. 02:03:715 (1,2) - missed clap at the end, breaks the rhythm D:
  29. 02:10:572 (1) - ^ (reserve)
  30. 02:12:287 (2) - ^ (begin), and remove clap at end due to your clap rule
  31. 02:22:001 (1) - (begin,end) finish?
  32. 02:28:858 (1) - finish to keep inconsistency with 02:26:572 (1) - , and it's a good point to add finish :3
  33. 02:31:144 (1) - finish+clap is tooooo noisy imo, remove clap here
  34. 02:34:572 (2) - remove finish from the end, it's a bit noisy and you've added finish on the downbeat on (1) before, to keep inconsistency with (1) is great
  35. 02:35:715 (1) - (end) finish, same reason as above :3
  36. 03:03:144 (1) - finish to fit with song? There's a sound in the song lol
  37. 03:13:287 (1,1) - Use a slider instead these two notes would be more readable imo
  38. 03:21:715 (1) - clap at the end due to your clap rules
  39. 03:26:287 (1) - ^
  40. 04:10:573 (2) - ^
  41. 04:11:716 (1) - finish+clap is noisy again.
  42. 04:22:001 (2) - finish at begin?
  43. 04:41:144 (4) - (nazi) clap at the end? The music is individual here so...
  44. 04:55:769 - Add a note here
  45. 05:03:269 (1) - whistle? There's some piano sound, so whistle would be great i think
    You need to improve your hitsound, it's weird and messy. Placement is good imo :3
[Normal]
  1. I'd suggest you to AR-1 OD-1 HP-1 because the bpm is high
  2. 00:18:572 (1) - (end) clap
  3. 00:21:715 (2) - clap
  4. 00:30:572 (2) - Can you make it 1/2 shorter, than add a reserve? fit the vocal is a good idea because the vocal here's individual :3
  5. 03:40:287 (2) - ^
  6. 00:38:572 (4) - (end) finish
  7. 00:48:858 (2) - ctrl+G this due to (1)'s end is at right, but (2)'s begin is at left, that's a bit hard to "normal"
  8. 03:58:573 (2) - ^
  9. 00:59:715 (1) - clap at the end
  10. 01:02:858 (2) - clap
  11. 01:09:429 (2) - remove finish at the begin because there's no finish sound
  12. 01:12:287 (2) - remake this slider like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/474670
    316,108,72287,2,0,B|408:92|472:136|488:208|484:268|464:332|388:344|344:340|300:316,1,440.000002384188,4|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
  13. 01:29:430 (1) - ^
  14. 04:22:002 (2) - ^
  15. 01:22:572 (1) - make like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/474678
    224,36,82572,6,0,B|140:24|64:48|12:96|-8:160|-
  16. 01:24:858 (1,1) - ^
  17. 01:24:287 (2,3) - I'd suggest you to delete these sliders and put note at 01:24:429 - and 01:24:715 - , what you did is a bit hard to newbies
  18. 01:26:573 (2,3) - ^ (01:26:715 - and 01:27:001 - )
  19. 01:32:001 (1) - Spacing? I hate jumps D:
  20. 01:50:287 (2) - clap at the begin
  21. 01:56:858 (1,2) - clap at end to keep clap inconsistency
  22. 02:04:287 (3) - (nazi) remove clap at the begin? Sounds weird but it's ok to me D:
  23. 02:12:858 (1) - clap at end
  24. 02:24:287 (1) - Umm.. Try this, not a big change but you better fix, because what you did is ugly imo. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/474685
  25. 02:26:858 (2) - clap to keep inconsistency
  26. 02:33:429 (1,2,3) - This overlap is not clear, newbie will be messy here, please fix it.
  27. 03:14:001 (3) - put on 03:13:858 - ? fits the vocal is a good idea imo
  28. 03:24:287 (2) - I know you're making like this to fit with the vocal, but I suggest you 1/2 longer this slider. Sounds really weird here
  29. 03:28:287 (1) - clap at the end to keep inconsistency
  30. 03:39:144 (4) - touches the hp-bar a little bit, it's not hard to fix it, right? (:
  31. 03:39:715 (1) - clap at the end
  32. 04:18:573 (1) - ^
  33. 04:40:287 (3) - ^
  34. 04:40:001 (2) - clap
  35. 04:40:858 (4) - clap at begin, end and reserves? There's a sounds :3
  36. 04:41:429 (1) - end at 04:43:715 - , and add note at 04:44:179 - to improve the downbeat
  37. 05:03:440 (1) - whistle, same reason as Easy
    Great at all.
[Invincible]
  1. 00:30:858 (3) - clap
  2. 01:40:429 (1,2,3,1) - Put a square? Like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/474699
  3. 02:15:715 (2) - ctrl+G? This jump is a bit too big D:
  4. 02:54:001 (3) - finish
  5. 04:21:287 (5) - put on (6)'s begin?
  6. 04:55:769 (4) - remove finish from the end
[Ra's Hard]
  1. 00:24:572 - Add a note here to make the rhythm inconsistency
  2. 01:28:572 - ^
  3. 00:34:572 (1) - finish
  4. 00:32:287 (3) - ^
  5. 01:04:287 (1) - ^
  6. 01:12:287 (3) - ^ (end)
  7. 01:36:287 (3) - ^
  8. 01:38:572 (1) - ^
  9. 01:44:858 (1) - Remove nc here, because you don't nc at 01:42:715 (6) - D:
  10. 02:08:287 (1) - finish
  11. 02:38:072 (1) - ^ there's a strong finish sound
  12. 03:35:572 (3) - Make like this? Seems more blanket than yours lol
    212,276,215572,2,0,B|196:332|140:348|92:316,1,140.000000596047
  13. 03:44:287 (1) - finish
  14. 03:54:429 (3) - remove finish, I don't here any finish here D:
  15. 04:21:429 (2) - finish would be better
  16. 04:22:001 (3) - ^ (begin & end)
  17. 04:32:144 (5) - Remove nc then overlap on 4? I heard the vocal, and the downbeat is on (1), so move (5) to somewhere else
    Nice map /w/!
I'm a bit tired now, so I don't mod S.S D: takes me 3 hours to mod this..
Anyway good luck

verrrrrrry long

ths~ ;)
BinJip
759 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
BinJip
KDS 태그 추가
Coro
2,394 posts
Joined September 2010
Coro
Taiko mod~
All are suggestions unless in red.

[Taiko DS]
Use alternating colours next time~
Use default hitsounds, remove unnecessary timing points. Taiko hitsound volume try not to go below 60%.
00:01:715 - move to 00:01:858
00:08:572 - d
00:08:715 - d
00:29:572 (65,66,67) - add finish

nice map~
NatsumeRin
osu! Alumni
4,032 posts
Joined August 2009
NatsumeRin
[General]
In S.S/Ra's Hard diff, the second red line is 284,180, while in the other diffs it's 284,179

[Easy]
fine.

[Normal]
00:30:572 (2) - make it a 3/2 reversed slider to follow the vocal may be better (your next spinner is according to the vocal)
01:11:144 (1,2) - http://puu.sh/1jyQ2 flows better if you have to use long sliders.
01:22:572 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1) - Suggest you to remap this part, in a common way.
02:04:287 (3,5) - not perfect stacked.
03:40:287 (2) - same as 00:30:572 (2)
04:22:002 (2) - same as 01:11:144 (1,2)
04:40:001 (2,3) - still clap here, so 04:40:858 (4) get better effect.
04:49:633 (1) - make it 2 sliders..? Honeslty why use such long sliders.. (they're not good looking..)
To make better easier diffs (or better maps in general), i suggest you to find more features about the song itself (for example: 00:38:572 (2)/00:40:858 (2) in easy)

[Taiko DS]
01:31:572 - still 0.75x here plz. it changes too sudden now.
02:09:431 (212) - Unsnapped.
02:42:429 - add k?
02:44:715 & 02:44:787 - add d?
02:47:001 - add k?
03:05:429 - too silent. raise some volume here.
fun diff.

[Invincible]
01:59:429 (2,4,6,8) - make the place change a little every time, the effect would be better.
02:02:715 (5,6,7,8) - i think far like this is meaningless...

[Ra's Hard]
00:30:287 (2,3) - http://puu.sh/1jzpY far better i think.
00:34:572 (1,1) - too close, the BPM is high and this is only 1/2
03:40:001 (2,3,1,2) - same as 00:30:287 (2,3)
03:44:287 (1) - same as 00:34:572 (1,1)
04:32:144 (1,2) - switch new combo, also personally i think stack on 4 is better.

[S.S]
00:32:287 (4) - ..better shape plz?
00:33:429 (1) - ^
00:54:144 (1,2,3) - jump is fine but for such parts i think use another shape may be better. you're make the beats gradually stronger, but for such a placement people just hurry to jump back-forth and won't have such a feeling,.
01:28:858 (3) - use 1/6 snap here, the right one should be http://puu.sh/1jzC5
02:39:715 (1) - a larger square jump here?
Star Stream
2,039 posts
Joined June 2010
Star Stream
All fixed except

[Normal]
01:22:572 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1) - Suggest you to remap this part, in a common way. I think it's fine and commone way enough

[S.S]
00:54:144 (1,2,3) - jump is fine but for such parts i think use another shape may be better. you're make the beats gradually stronger, but for such a placement people just hurry to jump back-forth and won't have such a feeling,. But they're pretty enjoyable now imo
02:39:715 (1) - a larger square jump here? Would be too hard imo..

and thanks for moddings

http://puu.sh/1jA5D
http://puu.sh/1jA63
BinJip
759 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
BinJip

NatsumeRin wrote:

[Invincible]
01:59:429 (2,4,6,8) - make the place change a little every time, the effect would be better. Pattern changes
02:02:715 (5,6,7,8) - i think far like this is meaningless... Change closely
Ra-s
1,289 posts
Joined May 2009
Ra-s
http://puu.sh/1jCFx
KDS
502 posts
Joined February 2010
KDS

CoroQuetz wrote:

Taiko mod~
All are suggestions unless in red.

[Taiko DS]
Use alternating colours next time~
Use default hitsounds, remove unnecessary timing points. Taiko hitsound volume try not to go below 60%. this bug orzzzzz.. fixed
00:01:715 - move to 00:01:858 good suggestion :33 moved
00:08:572 - d IMO 'kkk k k k..' fits better.
00:08:715 - d ^
00:29:572 (65,66,67) - add finish i think it's not so good.. the tension of that point isn't so high, right?

nice map~

NatsumeRin wrote:

[Taiko DS]
01:31:572 - still 0.75x here plz. it changes too sudden now. it's already fixed in CQ's modding :33
02:09:431 (212) - Unsnapped. fixed
02:42:429 - add k? hmm.. added some notes
02:44:715 & 02:44:787 - add d? ^
02:47:001 - add k? ^
03:05:429 - too silent. raise some volume here. :3
fun diff.


ok thanks for mod CQ and Rin ><

http://puu.sh/1jDfa
BinJip
759 posts
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ok, upload
NatsumeRin
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01:28:858 (3) - use 1/6 snap here, the right one should be http://puu.sh/1jzC5
still there.
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NatsumeRin wrote:

01:28:858 (3) - use 1/6 snap here, the right one should be http://puu.sh/1jzC5
still there.
a...... slider...... done
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Ths Rin
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wow S.S diff is bad ;_____;
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Oh boy, yanaginagi~

[General]
The BG is really low quality... think you can find a better one?

[Easy]
00:37:429 (1) - Remove new combo
00:38:572 (2) - This sounds much better if you extend it to 00:39:001 - Maybe start with clap and end on whistle too.
00:40:858 (2) - Same suggestion here
00:42:001 (1,2) - This was a little misleading though since it's the same part in the music, but a different snap. Line them all up please.
00:47:715 (2,2) - ^
00:52:572 (3) - And maybe delete this
00:59:715 (1,2) - It would be nice if you could avoid overlaps like this
01:12:287 (1) - Add finish to end?
01:30:715 (2,1) - This is... pretty tough for an easy. Short repeating slider with more than one repeat and a note so soon after it's completion. Please change this.
01:35:001 - Considering how you've mapped the rest of this, this gap in rhythm feels awkward. Might play better like this:

01:36:287 (2,3) - No hitsounds?
01:42:572 (2,2,2,2,2,2) - Same suggestion as before with extending the slider and hitsounds
02:03:715 (1,2,1) - Kinda ugly overlap
02:12:287 (2) - Add finish to end
02:13:429 (3) - Remove finish
02:14:001 (1,2,1) - This kind of rhythm into a stack isn't recommended considering this is an Easy.
02:38:001 (1) - No finish?
03:13:287 (1) - Remove new combo
03:13:287 (1,1) - Overlap
03:28:287 (1) - There's your copy paste, haha. I guess it was inevitable.
03:48:287 (3,2,2,3,3,2) - So same as before
04:02:287 (3) - and delete
04:09:430 (1,2) - overlap
04:18:002 (2) - Finish on end
04:19:144 (3) - remove finish

[Normal]
No video on this difficulty?
00:21:715 (2) - Add clap
00:30:572 (2) - This is really boring without any hitsounds to spice it up
00:47:715 (4,2) - overlap
02:04:287 (3,4,5) - This doesn't read very well at all for a Normal. I recommend you don't return to the end of the slider with 5.
03:28:287 (1) - Add clap on end
03:40:287 (2) - boring hitsounds, blah blah. Same stuff since it's a copy/paste section
03:57:430 (4,2) - Overlap
04:44:519 (1) - Way too soon after a spinner for a Normal.
04:44:179 - I'd either silence every other tick here during this section. 2 feels too noisy during this part.
Felt way too spinner-heavy imo. Those longer notes in the choruses would be better represented with long sliders instead of spinner spam.

[Taiko]
02:17:429 - End kiai here
04:44:179 - Should lower the volume a bit here.
05:02:589 (107) - Maybe have a drum roll here instead? If you do, have it crescendo like the ride cymbal.

[Ra's Hard]
00:25:572 (1,2,3,4) - This circle -> slider progression is really awkward. maybe follow the vocals a little stronger or keep your previous circle -> slider -> circle -> slider instead of the c -> s -> s -> c
03:10:287 - Having a giant break, a short part to play, and then another giant break is really boring. Map through the second break or something.
04:42:572 - Think you can set up the delayed break to be like this? It's not quite precise, but it gives a better feeling than a break does.

04:44:179 - I'd silence every other tick during this section since 2 is a bit noisy for this part.

[Invincible]
00:04:144 (7) - Might be better to have a long slider from here to 00:04:429 - The constant 1/2 rhythm feels a bit pushy for an intro.
00:05:715 (4,1) - Why a jump here when the phrase is in a decline? It feels out of place and extreme for the music.
00:19:144 (3,4) - This stack kills your momentum in a bad place.
00:29:715 (6,7) - The 1-5 here are nice big spacing leading to the powerful change in the phrase at the 6 -> 7, but you opt to go to small spacing instead. It really kills the anticipation of something awesome coming.
00:31:001 (4,5) - This is just bad flow. You have a nice flowing vocal part to help accent here with the longer sliders and you go with a sharp zigzag pattern instead while also stacking on the end of a slider going the opposite direction. A couple suggestions you can take here: either move the 5 to a point on the left side of the screen, or leave the 5 and rotate the 6 and 7 slider 90 degrees clockwise, then reverse each individual slider (and reposition outward to reduce overlap)
00:36:287 (1,2,3,4,5) - Better as a 5-hit pattern instead of a 4-hit pattern with a stack on the end. It looks like you ran out of room and got lazy.
00:39:287 (1,2) - This is a little messy to read due to the hitburst from 00:38:287 (6) -
00:43:572 (2,3) - This plays better if the slider is where the 2 currently resides. The stacked note into the 2 slider after a slider jump like that doesn't play so well.
00:46:715 (5,6) - I'm not feeling the need for a reversal maneuver like this.
00:47:858 (1,2,3,4) - I'd stick with the sliders for this part of the song. Mixing it up with these high velocity circles then going back to the sliders feels really inconsistent and randomly placed instead of trying to represent the music.
00:57:572 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2) - ctrl + h
01:08:858 (1,2,3,4) - Hrm. I think this flows better like this: (and transitions to the 01:10:001 (1,2,3,4) - jumps better).
SPOILER
Oh, and all four of these slider's ends are unsnapped. Fix that, if anything.
01:10:572 (5,6) - Actually, there seem to be a lot of slider ends unsnapped. Go through this map and make sure the ends are properly snapped.
01:22:572 (1,2,3) - This slider rhythm progression is a little strange. It played a lot better when you did the rhythms like at 01:24:858 (1,2,3,4) -
01:27:144 (1,2) - Strange spot for a jump, though since you did another one at 01:28:001 (4) - the one at 01:28:144 (1,2) - is mistimed. It should be at 01:28:429 (2,3) -
01:31:572 (1) - Better as just a circle
01:37:001 (4,5) - ctrl + g
01:45:001 (1,2,3,4) - This is okay, but it would be best if you could extend the pattern so that the next time you mirror it the same part of the song is happening, so if you can, extend the pattern until 01:47:287 -
01:59:144 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This entire section has some pretty bad flow. You're just bouncing in hard angles all over the place and it's more just plain reading the map instead of playing the map and enjoying it. Sooo some suggestions here.
02:00:858 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6) - ctrl + h this section, then set 01:59:429 (2,4) - around here (about 2x DS)
SPOILER
02:01:858 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This part really just needs to be redone. You have these sharp jumps that reflect little with the flow of the music and it just trying to be hard with a mirrored pattern.
02:03:858 (3,4,5,6) - And all these returns to stacks are a pain to read and also don't flow very well. I suggest you rethink it.
02:26:001 (1,2,3,4) - After all those smother lines, having this as jumps is just cruel. Leave it as a normal pattern.
02:53:644 (1,2,3) - This isn't really following the guitar right (and is what you should be following after that previous part)
03:10:858 (6,1) - It might be better to focus on smoother long sliders like at 03:12:715 (3) - during this part since it's a little on the calmer side compared to 03:14:572 (1) - where it's more appropriate to use more 1/2 rhythms.
03:32:858 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - These triples are all out of sync with the piano. If you wanted to use that, you need to have a double at 03:32:858 (1,2) - , then start your triples at 03:33:144 (3) - It would look like this following your strange combo progression

03:35:144 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - Same thing here: it's all off by one. The sets of 3 should start at 03:35:287 (2) -
03:47:644 (2,3) - I... think you should just stick with the 1/2s here. Trying to follow that vocal part is a little weird.
04:05:144 (2) - ctrl + g
04:34:858 (3,4) - Keep this spacing larger please
04:35:572 (6) - Having this on the right side of the screen would flow better
04:41:429 - The same break delay change suggestion from Ra's Hard. If not, just leave it at the default settings with no delay.
04:44:179 - I'd silence every other tick during this section since it's a much calmer part of the song. You can do this with green lines manipulating volume or with a new file on a new custom section. Whichever.

And S.S was removed, so I'll skip that.

Sorry for taking so long. This set has a long way to go, me thinks.

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http://puu.sh/1kuCn
적어도 주말이 되야지 Breaktime부분을 매꿀 수 있는데...평일은 시간이 안됌
BinJip
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Ra-s wrote:

http://puu.sh/1kuCn
적어도 주말이 되야지 Breaktime부분을 매꿀 수 있는데...평일은 시간이 안됌

그냥 주말까지 냅두지뭐 천천히 하자 그냥
Star Stream
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All fixed from Garven's
and delete S.S diff plz
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awesome work > <
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01:11:144 (1,3) - wrong snap ?!
BinJip
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cRyo[iceeicee] wrote:

01:11:144 (1,3) - wrong snap ?!
fixed '^'
BinJip
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Garven wrote:

[Invincible]

01:45:001 (1,2,3,4) - This is okay, but it would be best if you could extend the pattern so that the next time you mirror it the same part of the song is happening, so if you can, extend the pattern until 01:47:287 - Don't understand

02:00:858 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6) - ctrl + h this section, then set 01:59:429 (2,4) - around here (about 2x DS)
SPOILER
01:59:144 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This part pattern change

02:53:644 (1,2,3) - This isn't really following the guitar right (and is what you should be following after that previous part)I tried fixing it, don't konw if I got it right though

Remainder is complete


Thanks Garven
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Garven wrote:

[Taiko]
02:17:429 - End kiai here fixed by Binjip :3
04:44:179 - Should lower the volume a bit here. ^
05:02:589 (107) - Maybe have a drum roll here instead? If you do, have it crescendo like the ride cymbal. no change becuz i think this last part needs stability more than a crescendo
thanks Garven :)
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Sorry for the delays; I've been really busy.

[Easy]
00:38:572 (3) - Maybe you misunderstood me on this line. I meant for it to

be like this instead. I think it will sound a lot better this way:

This applies to all those oddly-timed short sliders.
00:52:858 (1,2,1) - Make the distance between these all the same. You can

do that by raising 00:54:001 (2,1) - up by one grid
01:36:287 (2,3,4) - No hitsounds?
02:04:858 (2,1) - A little overlap still here
02:14:001 (1) - Remvoe new combo
04:03:716 (2,1) - Adjust down one grid to keep the distance the same

[Hard]
00:25:572 (1,2,3,4) - I still think this part is a little weird rhythmically. Why not have something similar to what you did at 03:35:144 (1) - ?
03:26:001 (1) - This slider is hidden from 03:25:144 (2) - 's hitburst

[Insane]
00:30:715 (2,3) - I find this to flow better with ctrl + g
00:49:001 (3,4,5,6,7) - Spacing feels a little big considering the music... It might flow better if you have larger spacing with 00:48:429 (1,2) - though
01:08:858 (1,2,3,4) - These slider ends are still unsnapped.

01:45:001 (1,2,3,4) - With this, the pattern would fit musically better if you kept from using 01:46:144 (3,4,5,6) - this pattern until 01:47:287 -
01:47:572 (2) - Hm, maybe position this ctrl + h'd from the end of 01:47:286 (1) - Flows better to me.
02:26:001 (1,2,3,4) - Just use even spacing here.

In general, I think the Insane still needs more work. There's still a lot of strange hard-angled flow that doesn't feel like it's representing the music very well and feels like it's just trying to be hard instead. See if you can get a few more mods mainly on the Insane and call me back please.
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All Fixed. Thanks Garven
http://puu.sh/1pLYC
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mod request from my queue~

[Invicible]
00:07:429 (2) - ctrl+g? why this the only one that reversed? and remake the slider to make flow better,ss will included below
00:08:144 (5) - feel awkward with this slider, maybe something like this? if you do that fix spacing with (6) to keep consistency
SPOILER
00:12:001 (2) - why this the only one without big jump?
00:13:858 (9) - make it further from (8)
01:32:001 (2) - make this futher from (1), need to be more jumpy here

Actually I really hope this diff feel at least more jumpy, especially opening part (before reff 1)
Sorry for tiny mod, just mod something (imo) awkward
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[Invincible]
Heh, you don't want anyone to get full combo on this, if this gets ranked, I see.

00:11:001 (6,7) - Too intense jump.
00:54:572 (5,6) - ^
01:37:144 (5,6) - There is a line between difficult and impossible, not sure which one this is. Might want to change it, but might be okay.
02:51:715 (3) - Make the red points regular and the slider slightly thinner.
03:29:000 (4,5) - Too intense jump.
03:29:858 (8,9) - ^
04:39:429 (3,4,5,6) - This whole part, impossible.
05:02:247 (5,6) - Unfitting jump.

And that's it. Great map(set) overall, I hope this gets ranked soon~
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ths
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Did some IRC modding concerning missed mods on the Easy and these points on the Insane.

[Invincible]
00:30:858 (3) - This jump right here.. is really bugging me. It's just out of nowhere to keep your pattern pretty, but it plays rather poorly.
00:48:429 (1,2) - This jump doesn't make sense when you compare the same part of the music with 00:46:144 (1,2,3,4) -
00:57:429 (5) - Stack this with 00:57:858 (2) -
01:50:715 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - These returns to stacks are a little confusing to read. Think you can make it more clear?
02:02:715 (1,2,3,4) - This doesn't read very well afte doing a circular pattern at 02:01:858 (1,2,3,4,1) - The jump from 1 -> 2 is the culprit here. Maybe using more even spacing for all 4 instead of this random jump will fair better.
02:07:715 (5) - Change the spacing on this one too, considering the rest of the pattern.
02:59:715 (1) - This repeat arrow is slightly obscured by the hitburst from 02:58:858 (2) - . Should be easy to adjust.
03:35:144 (1) - I find this plays better unstacked
03:38:001 (4,5,6) - Maybe change these to something like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/505284 Flows much better
04:02:429 (2) - This should be the slider, and the end of 04:02:572 (1) - should be the circle, rhythmically.
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I just want to say this map and song is incredible and cannot wait to see the finish product. I give all of my love to this map <3<3<3
BinJip
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Garven wrote:

Did some IRC modding concerning missed mods on the Easy and these points on the Insane.

[Invincible]
00:30:858 (3) - This jump right here.. is really bugging me. It's just out of nowhere to keep your pattern pretty, but it plays rather poorly.
00:48:429 (1,2) - This jump doesn't make sense when you compare the same part of the music with 00:46:144 (1,2,3,4) -
00:57:429 (5) - Stack this with 00:57:858 (2) -
01:50:715 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - These returns to stacks are a little confusing to read. Think you can make it more clear?
02:02:715 (1,2,3,4) - This doesn't read very well afte doing a circular pattern at 02:01:858 (1,2,3,4,1) - The jump from 1 -> 2 is the culprit here. Maybe using more even spacing for all 4 instead of this random jump will fair better.
02:07:715 (5) - Change the spacing on this one too, considering the rest of the pattern.
02:59:715 (1) - This repeat arrow is slightly obscured by the hitburst from 02:58:858 (2) - . Should be easy to adjust.
03:35:144 (1) - I find this plays better unstacked
03:38:001 (4,5,6) - Maybe change these to something like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/505284 Flows much better
04:02:429 (2) - This should be the slider, and the end of 04:02:572 (1) - should be the circle, rhythmically.


ths Garven
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very bothered
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Bothered? By what?

[Easy]
03:56:287 (1) - Remove new combo
BinJip
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Garven wrote:

Bothered? By what?

[Easy]
03:56:287 (1) - Remove new combo
fixed

played LoL ww

osu! is Bothered ._.
Garven
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Um, you changed the position of the slider. Was that on purpose?

Edit:

I guess spboxer is going to take a look when he gets some time. Let me know when he's done with it. :3
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※ Notice

red is unrankable issue.
blue is recommended to fix.
 Black is just suggestion.

general


  • Settings
    (For the setting/general issue.)
  1. nope

Easy


  • Settings
    (For the setting. like Song Setup/timing or break time~)
  1. 01:59:143 - unsnapped kiai timing.
Overlaps
(Some overlaps of notes/sliders in this diff don't look good. Here is a list of beats that overlap each other could space them farther apart. Yep. It's just suggest and nazi. you can ignore this par)
  1. 00:44:572 (2,3,1) -

  2. 02:04:858 (2,1) -

  3. 02:28:858 (1,1) -

  4. 03:23:429 (3,1) -
Hitsound
(For my listened. Just some suggest for the hitsound.)
  1. 00:30:287 - & 00:30:572 - Meaningless finish hitsound. I can't hear any downbeat or drum beat like finish.

  2. 01:22:572 - to 01:29:429 - let the whistle hitsound set at 1/2 rhythm (the soft-whistle it's more like "hihit" sound, it's more likely assist drum beat . then, general we used main beat at 1/1 rhythm. so used whistle at 1/1 rhythm is not suitable imo.)

  3. 03:00:858 (1) - ,03:02:001 - remove clap to make hitsound consistency.

  4. 03:40:001 - & 03:40:287 - looks copy from 00:30:287 - & 00:30:572 -... so remove finish hitsound is better imo.

  5. 03:48:287 (3) - add clap hitsound to make hitsound consistency

mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)
  1. 00:19:429 (2) - (nazi) It's obvious need used symmetrical slider for your pattern: 00:19:429 (2,1) - so make the (2) blanket (1)'s slider end
    code
    268,116,19429,2,0,B|310:192|268:267,1,160.000001192094,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

  2. 01:22:572 (1,2,3) - Umm... you should make sense for your pattern like: flow,prettier shape.

  3. 02:06:001 (1) - I'm try to make symmetrical slider code for you.
    code
    180,60,126001,6,0,B|220:68|256:92|256:92|292:64|340:60,1,160.000001192094,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

  4. 03:29:144 (2,1) - you can used the code same as 00:19:429 (2) - ((looks it's copy pattern from 00:19:429 (2) -

  5. 03:56:287 (2,3) - Err... It's immature slider shape for this pattern. first, the slider end have overlaps issue (it should be stack or avoid overlaps to make pattern cleaner.) second, I can't understand why you used inconsistent spacing this pattern, It's doesn't make sense

Overall this map should more work, about flow (like:01:22:572 (1,2,3) - ,02:33:429 (1,2,1) - ...etc) fix messy pattern (like: 02:06:001 (1) - ,00:19:429 (2) - ,04:11:716 (1) - ...etc)

Star's Normal


  • Settings
    (For the setting. like Song Setup/timing or break time~)
  1. unsnap kiai time:
    00:55:143 -
    01:59:143
    02:08:286 -
    04:14:000 -
Hitsound
(For my listened. Just some suggest for the hitsound.)
  1. 02:13:429 - uhm? I think is used clap batter... but you used whistle. D:
mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)
  1. 00:20:858 (1) - unsymmetrical pattern, 
    321,368,20858,6,0,B|321:294|256:274|190:294|190:368,1,220.000001192094,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

  2. 00:46:572 (2,3,4) - awkward pattern~you can make the layout better. ((for this pattern, I expect can make more coherent (smooth) flow to make the layout better.

  3. 00:57:429 (1,1) - you can avoid the object cover by "spinner-osu.png" issue. It's possible make confuse to player. you can add transparent photo for "spinner-osu.png" (( don't forget add spinner groups element.
  4. 01:56:858 (1,2,3) - Umm... it's immature messy pattern. perhaps, you can make those blanket to solve this case.

  5. 02:24:287 (1) - unsymmetrical pattern, but I guess you wnat to make it symmetrical. so here is symmetrical code:
    328,54,144287,6,0,B|328:142|183:142|183:54,3,220.000001192094,4|8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0

  6. 03:30:573 (1) - ^ ((btw, It's should snap to 03:30:572 - 
    190,15,210572,6,0,B|190:89|256:109|321:89|321:15,1,220.000001192094,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

  7. 03:56:287 (2,3,4) - copy from 00:46:572 (2,3,4) - . awkward pattern too.
Worthy of improvement: inflexible flow like: "00:21:715 (2,3,4,1) - ,00:46:572 (2,3,4) - ...etc" and coherent (smooth,blanket) like: "00:36:858 (1,2,3,4) - ,00:48:287 (1,2,3) -,00:59:715 (1,2) - ...etc"

Ra's Hard


  • Settings
    (For the setting. like Song Setup/timing or break time~)
  1. 04:42:858 - break start at here?
Overlaps
(Some overlaps of notes/sliders in this diff don't look good. Here is a list of beats that overlap each other could space them farther apart. yep. It's just suggest and nazi. you can ignore this par)
  1. 00:59:429 (8,2) -

mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)
  1. 00:20:286 (5,6) - unsymmetrical pattern, but looks make this pattern symmetrical is better. move 00:20:572 (6) - to x304,y296

  2. 00:37:001 (1) - should add new combo in this case. you should add it at beginning of the sentence

  3. 00:40:429 (5,1) - (nazi) make blanket with 00:40:429 (5) - reverse.

  4. 01:24:286 (5,6) - copy from 00:20:286 (5,6) - . so still have the same issue.

  5. 03:15:429 (4,3) - stack issue.
It's a solid mapset~ nice work ;)

Invincible


  • Settings
    (For the setting. like Song Setup/timing or break time~)
  1. unsnap kiai time:
    00:55:143
    01:59:143
  1. duplicate timing line:
    04:44:179 - (you can used red timeline to change the hitsound)
mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)
  1. 00:03:715 (5) - overmapped object. obviously, used empty it's better then add note. ((neither have drum beat nor have vocal. It can't make sense to enhance the pattern.

  2. 01:06:429 (6,4) - move to center.
    01:56:001 (7) - unsnap

  3. 02:51:715 (3) - add new combo to make this pattern more readable.
    03:34:787 (3) - unsnap (wrong rhythm ↓ )
    correct rhythm

Overmapped diff. you can used jump for you want to stress point(note/slider), but you used many confuse jump (like:00:03:858 (6,7,8) - ,00:12:715 (5,6,7) - ,00:31:001 (4,5,6) - ). Err... you should make more logic for your mapping skill: "why did I used jump here?", "Is it a best solution" not only force it's playable or rankable. :<


Taiko


  • Settings
    (For the setting. like Song Setup/timing or break time~)
  1. recommend to make Taiko BG

mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)
  1. looks it's fine~

You can call Garven to help you recheck your map~
Star Stream
2,039 posts
Joined June 2010
Star Stream
fixed except
00:57:429 (1,1) - you can avoid the object cover by "spinner-osu.png" issue. It's possible make confuse to player. you can add transparent photo for "spinner-osu.png" (( don't forget add spinner groups element.
02:13:429 - uhm? I think is used clap batter... but you used whistle. D:

thanks for modding~

http://puu.sh/1wJLc
Ra-s
1,289 posts
Joined May 2009
Ra-s
http://puu.sh/1x07q
All Fixed without overlap
BinJip
759 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
BinJip
ok,

finish
Garven
osu! Alumni
5,857 posts
Joined January 2010
Garven
[Star's Normal]
Um, the video was removed from this.
BinJip
759 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
BinJip

Garven wrote:

[Star's Normal]
Um, the video was removed from this.

fixed
Sure
4,220 posts
Joined February 2009
Sure
  1. Added Japanese Artist and Title.
  2. Fixed some stuff on Invincible diff.
Garven passed me the baton, here are simple suggestions.
Other diffs seem good enough to be ranked imo.

IRC Log
00:04 ykcarrot: 02:56:858 (3,4,5)- 이거 아무도 태클 안 걸어요?
00:05 BinJip: 가븐이 패스래요
00:05 ykcarrot: 흠.. 그냥 노트 일관성으로 통과시키려나 보네요
00:06 ykcarrot: 히트 사운드 모딩 몇 개 있어요
00:06 BinJip: 네
00:06 ykcarrot: 00:29:572 (5)-
00:06 ykcarrot: 00:29:572 (5)- Add clap
00:06 ykcarrot: 00:29:858 (7)- Add clap to head
00:07 ykcarrot: 노래 들어보면 스네어 세번 있더라고요
00:07 ykcarrot: 그거 때문에 제안한거고요
00:07 ykcarrot: 00:43:572 (2)- Add finish to tail
00:08 BinJip: 힛사만 해요?
00:08 ykcarrot: 다른 거도 있어요
00:08 ykcarrot: 00:52:429 (1)- Add whistle
00:09 ykcarrot: 01:48:715 (1)- Add finish to head
00:09 ykcarrot: 03:51:001 (2)- Add finish to tail
00:09 ykcarrot: 힛사는 이거로 끝
00:10 ykcarrot: 다 하셨음?
00:10 BinJip: 네
00:10 ykcarrot: 00:07:715 (3)- 한 칸 내리세요
00:10 ykcarrot: 00:43:858 (3)- 여기 뉴콤보
00:11 BinJip: 끝
00:11 ykcarrot: 02:23:144 (6)- 이거 보면 슬라이더 끝이 5번 끝이랑 겹치잖아요
00:11 ykcarrot: 그리고 약간 가까운 느낌이 있던데
00:12 ykcarrot: 6,7,8 번 노트 수평반전 해보세요
00:12 BinJip: 했어요
00:13 ykcarrot: 02:36:858 (6)- 이거 뉴콤보 말씀 드렸었나요?
00:14 BinJip: 아뇨
00:14 BinJip: 하나만 뉴콤보?
00:14 ykcarrot: 다음노트 말고 거기에 뉴콤보 넣으세요
00:14 ykcarrot: 3 2 3 이렇게 돼있으니까
00:14 ykcarrot: 노트 개수
00:14 BinJip: 네
00:15 ykcarrot: 마지막으로 아티스트랑 제목인데요
00:15 ykcarrot: 일본어 넣으세요
00:15 BinJip: 어디예요?
00:15 BinJip: 타이틀에요?
00:15 ykcarrot: http://puu.sh/1BYgm
00:15 ykcarrot: 이런식으로
00:17 BinJip: 끝?
00:17 ykcarrot: ㅇㅇ
Simple English
[Invincible]
00:07:715 (3) - Move down by 1 grid
00:29:572 (5) - Add clap
00:29:858 (7) - Add clap to head
00:43:572 (2) - Add finish to tail
00:43:858 (3) - You missed adding NC
00:52:429 (1) - Add whistle
01:48:715 (1) - Add finish to head
02:23:144 (6) - The spacing from previous note and overlap of its end a bit bothers me, it will be free from them by flipping horizontally.
02:36:858 (6) - Why didn't you add NC?
03:51:001 (2) - Add finish to tail


Go for it
BinJip
759 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
BinJip
ths!

yk!!
Garven
osu! Alumni
5,857 posts
Joined January 2010
Garven
Thanks ykcarrot.

It's been a long time coming, but here you go!

Ranked!
BinJip
759 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
BinJip
THS GARVEN!
B2IN
B2IN
축하해요 ~
Gloria Guard
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Joined May 2011
Gloria Guard
빈집님 두번째 랭크 축하!
Rucker
Former osu! Champion: OWC#1
561 posts
Joined August 2009
Rucker
Nice :)
-Neipezi
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-Neipezi
빈집님 랭 경축!
OnosakiHito
osu!taiko Paragon
6,864 posts
Joined March 2010
OnosakiHito
To be honest @ KDS and BAT's, I'm not sure about this break in the Taiko diff. at the beginning.
It has no reason to have such a - long - break, either I don't feel like it fits here in any way well. This isn't such a small issue. It feels akward, like it has been just cut at this part after this k-stream.

Please give me a reason why you used it here, else this should be unranked and mapped because of following guideline:
Breaks
All break sections should be artificially removed from the .osu file.
This also means to have in general no break sections as long as it dosen't fit.

Edit: I noticed right now, there are even more breaks. Why so KDS?
03:07:715~03:28:287 - those are 21 seconds are in general a not allowed time range, especially when the song it self is going on.
alacat
osu! Alumni
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Joined May 2011
alacat
congrats BinJip san :3
Mythol
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Mythol
where's SS :(
Quilt
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Quilt
ome~
bmin11
5,438 posts
Joined October 2008
bmin11
랭크 축하드려요!
MadViolinist
8 posts
Joined July 2011
MadViolinist
love this song and the map great job <3
MMzz
Elite Mapper
3,979 posts
Joined June 2009
MMzz

OnosakiHito wrote:

To be honest @ KDS and BAT's, I'm not sure about this break in the Taiko diff. at the beginning.
It has no reason to have such a - long - break, either I don't feel like it fits here in any way well. This isn't such a small issue. It feels akward, like it has been just cut at this part after this k-stream.

Please give me a reason why you used it here, else this should be unranked and mapped because of following guideline:
Breaks
All break sections should be artificially removed from the .osu file.
This also means to have in general no break sections as long as it dosen't fit.

Edit: I noticed right now, there are even more breaks. Why so KDS?
03:07:715~03:28:287 - those are 21 seconds are in general a not allowed time range, especially when the song it self is going on.
I will tell you this right now, it's not getting deranked. You're free to have discussion with KDS as to why he did this though.
Mikkuri
823 posts
Joined April 2010
Mikkuri
gratz~ <3
C h i a_old
C h i a_old
Nice map :3
OnosakiHito
osu!taiko Paragon
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Joined March 2010
OnosakiHito
Edit: ah whatever, like someone is going to listen to me
Tshemmp
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Tshemmp
finally, yay
Kanari
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Joined June 2011
Kanari
Yanaginagi ~ <3
Congrats on rank! >w<
LQA20Ans
1,344 posts
Joined November 2011
LQA20Ans
Finally ranked! >_<

Congratulation!!!
JMC
osu!artist
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JMC
Invincible (4.9 stars, 1245 notes)
Ra's Hard (4.98 stars, 764 notes)

le trolled
HelloSCV
3,490 posts
Joined April 2011
HelloSCV
So nice song!!! Nice work~
랭크 축하드립니다 :D
Seph
Seph
goddamn i love you binjip
Re_Znseemm6
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Re_Znseemm6
amazing map!! ^_^
Fabi
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Joined September 2009
Fabi
Awesome map!
Morbon_old
Morbon_old
>5~ min song
>1600~ max combo at hard, 1800~ combo at insane
>ranked, not at approved

ok why not lol
anyway good song and map
Stefan
Global Moderator
10,425 posts
Joined January 2011
Stefan

Morbon wrote:

>5~ min song
>1600~ max combo at hard, 1800~ combo at insane
>ranked, not at approved

ok why not lol
anyway good song and map
t/84012&start=0
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