Now is time for Kiai
01:41:883 (7) - make this more spaced, similar to 01:41:693 (5,6) - distance
01:46:078 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Weird snaps and not fitting too much, feels overmapped and overdone
01:47:095 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - those first wiggles doesn't make sense connecting with the 1/8 because there is no change of any pace in the song.
01:47:731 (3,4,1,2,3,4) - listen, the red tick here is making a noticeable change in the song
idk why but 01:54:214 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - feels something off, check it out! :3
overall good difficulty, i would prefer more creavity and more movement in parts that should be harder, nerf others and fix stuff
00:59:044 (2,1,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,1) - this part doesn't convince me, this feels easy and visually doesn't look too good, the part that was slower is pretty much harder than the part with higher pace :d
01:15:316 (1,2,1) - this space feels too empty, feels like a note is missing on 01:15:824 -
01:23:197 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this could be much better and more fitting, feels like a bad entrance
00:47:095 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - here i would prefer to buff and make more stairs of it with some hyperchains on the whistles / finishes sounds to connect with the other stairs
00:48:875 (9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - You should follow a pattern here because those last wiggles make this quite weird.
00:54:214 (1) - 00:54:722 (1) - these sliders in blue tick, feels so off-snap... i recommend ending them on red tick because is unnecesary
00:55:231 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - this could be harder, you are using parts that could be hard but instead those that i expect the most are easier
00:10:231 (8) - this is a slider, no sounds for wiggle here (probably same for similar parts)
00:18:621 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Make this something reasonable to make sense with the rhythm, there is even a kind of butterfly type thing there to do with sliders. Just felt like random placed 1/4 sliders :d
00:21:672 (1,2) - make these difference from 00:22:180 (1,2) - because the sound for the first one is louder so, you should add spacing
00:24:214 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - awkward pattern
00:24:913 (3) - unnecesary note, add a long slider there 00:24:849 (2) -
00:34:892 (1) - i would switch the slider 2 to the first note so it would be more comfortable to play and visually
Hello again, i'm here to show some big issues with the map
i will argument with points and after that i will give my full map opinion. (btw, i don't main english to explain perfectly about this so i will use "examples" to make you understand my points)
00:50:372 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This section and rhythm that repeats in the map using 1/8, i just made a example of what you should do here and why not fully mapping it 1/8. (https://youtu.be/er-vyHrVBEA)
Also, the reason of using so much 1/8 it's not really worth... the old version of _asriel has a spacing between those that made it feel more rhythmic in the way you hear and play it.
My resolution is to decrease the usage 1/8 in the map and not for this part only.
00:58:258 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - those kicks shouldn't be made this way, use just a little note for the kick and then a movement stack with 1/8 but keep the rhythm.
01:03:058 (3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19278546/b124, remove some random 1/8 to the rhythm and make it a better fitting pattern for it.
01:19:858 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - this kind of sections are being made in 1/8 when it could be made in 1/4, https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19278556/c8a6 example here and same will be going for the other parts.
01:20:543 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - my opinion in these sections or kind of sections goes related to the first issue, so nothing to say. Just make some spacing between break notes ending with 1/4 instead of using the 1/8 the entire part.
01:23:286 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - this entire section feels empty, straight patterns and very low quality doing here... just do something with it, cook something with some 1/8 rhythms using sliders like the asriel one or do something FUN to play in this section :)
01:45:229 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2) - i have no comments to describe what you should change here, i would say everything on this section is wrong
i would change the way the map is represented by using a lot of 1/8 when you can do something like this or do variations with it instead of FULL 1/8 THE ENTIRE THING, here is my example: https://youtu.be/jKZGDfXybvc
01:56:201 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2) - this section is weird and boring to me, try using other patterns and stop using too much 1/8 pls...
02:07:172 (1,2,1) - Don't use too much this kind of stacks, players during the years have been taking a dislike towards this and a example is the booth of figthers (050 map) and others like this. This just use something like this example: https://youtu.be/ommtiUp4BdQ
02:22:258 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - isn't there any other pattern or rhythm you could use? like, the map as been using the same style the entire time until this point for now :)
Now... getting on the most discussing part of the map, we're here for this mostly. The kiai.
The kiai is a great example of overmapping and overdone, why? the patterns just simply doesn't fit and the rhythm is overmapped, overcharged of 1/8 stream when i gave already my points on first one and other parts corcening about being 1/8 the entire stream parts when it could take 1/4 breaks.
The patterning is useless, in this point the way that the song was represented in the entire map falls down because now the audio goes a bit hype than before then it proceeds to become a DISASTER in terms of difficulty compared to the rest of the parts.
Now my opinion in the entire map is the next: The entire map is weak, the idea was not bad but bad executed and simply empty in some "slow parts" providing not fun at all, it it's like you have two sections that make this map 11* but the rest make it like 8* and this point is the one i would like to talk about. The song itself is NOT MADE FOR 10* type of map, this is clear to me hearing the song, it could be done 9* if we talk about patternings that could be used in the entire map without caring too much about SR and things.
The map itself is overdone and has so much overusage of 1/8 even on little breaks from 1/8 long stream parts. just use 1/4 more instead of overusing it.
I could put more points here but as i told Ascendance, my english is not that good and i hope you guys understand that i won't take more than one hour doing this (it took me one hour to make this one... and it's simple).
It's exhausting, i'm here just to drop little feedbacks and issues in general :)
nope, the connection with the 1/4 and 1/8 is not the best, you need to look for the pattern itself and the sound that starts developing here 01:47:731 (3) - because maintaining the current wiggles and entrance doesn't make too much sense
if you start the wiggle here 01:47:349 (1) - doesn't make sense because 01:47:095 (1) - has the same pitch as the start of 1/8 meaning that there is no point in making it 1/8 and also, could have more diversity during that part and starting the 1/8 wiggle at 01:47:731 (3) -
forgot to mention but for 00:23:451 (1,2,3) - maybe would be more fitting a repetitive 1/4 wiggles on a corner instead of three separated sliders because feels off-pace