bor4bor
[Sakura]
Some unsnapped kiai ends in the end of the song
00:10:540 (6) - I'd probably nc this for emphasis, also I think you could better emphasis it with a sharp angle rather than a linear flow from 00:10:051 (1,2,3,4,5) - I think the biggest issue here is the curve with 00:10:296 (4,5,6) - as 6 goes against the natural flow here so idk maybe a placement like
this or smtng
00:13:801 (2) - I think this note is too strong to be stacked under the sliderend
00:15:268 (5,6,1) - Idk if just your style but a bit too tight curves for my taste, also 00:15:268 (5) - I think this could use a bit more spacing from 00:14:942 (4) - since it's a rather emphasized note
00:16:247 (2,3,4,5) - If you want to use a linear pattern here I think you should have at least progressively increasing spacing since the pitch of the guitar is going up as well
00:16:899 (6,7,1) - really emphasized stuff here, feels kinda bad to see it stacked the same way a lot weaker sounds on 00:14:453 (1,2,3) -
00:17:714 (3) - Yeah again I don't like stacking strong sounds on sliderends
00:18:366 (1,2,3) - Could use some additional spacing... The slider leniency would easily allow it so no need to make strong sounds so cramped. As it is it plays ever weaker than just a triple would so kinda meh imo
00:19:182 (5,6,7) - Here too would be nice to see something represent the pitch changes on guitar
00:19:752 (1) - I'd rather end it on 00:20:812 - where the guitar sound ends and add a circle for the vocal at 00:20:812 - if you feel like mapping it
00:21:953 (5) - Pretty interesting choice in both rhythm here... 00:22:279 - stands out more than the rest of the slider also you use a 1/2 + circle here despite being lot weaker 00:23:258 (6,7) - ?
00:24:562 (5,1) - Again kinda counter-intuitive rhythm choice here, this time also on 00:25:051 (1) - since I'm quite sure majority would think the kick is more impacting than the echo kind of thing on the down beat
00:25:622 - idk if you missed the triple here or ignored on purpose, feels a bit weird since you mapped other weak triples too
00:26:355 (1,2,3) - Hmm might want to rework rhythm here. The first 2 objects indicate that you'd be following vocals but then you leave it on slider end on 3. Also I think the visuals on the pattern could be better, like utilising the blanket opportunites from 00:26:355 (1,3) - or trying to make an even triangle or something
00:29:779 (5) - I'll stop pointing these out, they are repeating so idk if you had some kind of reason for doing them but I can't figure it out
00:30:432 (2) - I think you could add another triple here since the guitar kinda stands out here despite being quite low pitch
00:31:410 (7) - Again I don't like this stacking here since the sounds are completely unrelated and the vocals are quite strong
00:34:018 - feels kinda empty, could add something or change 00:33:692 (6) - into a circle and add a 1/2 slider here 00:33:855 -
00:35:486 (1) - Most of the there has been no strong sounds on placements like these but there are quite strong vocals here so it deserves more spacing imo
00:35:649 (2,6) - I get your following the kicks here but I'd argue that snares + vocals are stronger here
00:36:301 (6,7,8,1) - Too much flow changes here imo, I'd prefer you just keep the flow on 00:36:627 (7,8) - instead of reversing it and then reversing again on 00:36:790 (1) -
00:37:768 (4) - slidertail definitely more dominant here than the head, consider changing rhythm
00:38:095 - Well... I wouldn't ignore this since there are vocals and a (rather silent) cymbal there in addition to being the downbeat
00:38:258 (1,3) - pretty minor but these aren't properly stacked
00:38:747 (3) - well this goes against your most rhythm choices since you've prioritized kicks over other stuff in most places (Some which I don't really agree to since I found other sounds more important but you should try to be consistent here if that's the rhythm you chose)
00:39:073 (4) - Definitely would work better as 3/4 slider. Kinda funny that I haven't seen you using one after the one in the beginning (00:14:942 (4) - )
00:39:725 (2) - I don't really know what this is following since it's ignoring the vocals on red tick and a triple too
00:40:377 (4) - rhythm issues again
00:53:421 (5,6,1) - While technically this isn't wrong I just can't agree with this rhythm pattern choice here. It's really lacking in emphasis since it pretty much plays like 3 stacked 1/2 circles into a 1/2 slider. If you want to stack those make it a 5 note stream instead (Shouldn't be an issue since you had this in the beginning 00:09:399 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - ) or at least make it into jumps with the 1/4 sliders, and please make 00:53:747 (1) - into 2 circles. The sounds are pretty much begging for a jump here. I really think you should try on working on emphasizing stuff more since I've seen this kind of issues in many parts of the map.
00:54:236 (2,3,4,5,6) - Kinda lacking in emphasis since the vocals are getting higher in pitch and more intense especially at 00:54:725 (5,6) -
00:56:192 (6,1) - Visual spacing here kinda stands out, could try to space them further for consistency
00:57:334 (4,5) - You were following the vocals so nicely until this so why suddenly change the rhythm here
01:00:105 (7,1) - Definitely needs a bigger spacing here, it should be at least as big as 00:59:779 (6,7) -
01:00:758 (2,3,4) - spacing gets kinda big here compared to before for seemingly no reason so maybe make it a bit smaller?
01:01:410 (6,1) - Again kinda lacking in emphasis if you compare it to spacing like 01:00:268 (1,2) -
01:03:855 (6) - random whistle here on the slidertail, I'd suggest making the end clickable anyway
01:04:834 (3) - Missed a sound in the middle?
01:06:627 (6,1) - again spacing could be better here if you compare to 01:06:138 (4,5) - kinda lack s in emphasis imo
01:07:605 (3,4,5) - the angle here looks a bit weird, maybe try to make it follow the curve of 5?
01:10:703 (1,2) - could try to match the visual spacing with 01:09:888 (4,7) -
01:11:845 (6,1) - same as before about visual spacing
01:12:986 (4,5) - rhythm again, should be 1/2 slider imo for consistency with 01:12:008 (1,2,3) -
01:18:692 (1,5) - instead of 1/2 sliders I think you could try some sort of jump pattern here both for more variety and better emphasis
01:20:486 (3,4,5) - Yeah kinda weird spacing change again since the song is getting more intense
01:24:236 (2,3,4,5,6) - I honestly don't think a linear pattern like this is properly capturing what the song is doing...
01:25:051 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Guitar doing cool stuff here, not nice to ignore it :/ (I like cool stuff - Pishifat)
01:26:355 (1,3) - Pretty cool idea here I think you could try something like this more with your 01:26:355 (1) - shape sliders
01:27:171 (3,4,1) - Better spacing emphasis here than in most parts but I'd still adjust it a bit so 01:27:171 (3,4) - < 01:27:497 (4,1) -
01:28:149 (2,3,4) - Pretty high spacing here again, also feels kinda isolated from the rest of the combo :/
01:29:779 (5) - The decision to use a repeat here kinda kills the emphasis on the notes here but also on 01:30:105 (6) - which would deserve a bigger spacing imo anyway
Well I've modded up to first kiai and there's quite a big list of issues imo... To avoid wasting both of our time I'd suggest you to scan the rest of the map for similar issues since at least by a quick glance they are repeating later as well.
I'd be happy to remod this later but with the amount of issues on just the first third of the song I think it'd be more useful to mod this later on when you've already addressed the issues already mentioned as it would be more beneficial both for you and me