Can you elaborate? :3z0z wrote:
it's missing literary elements to hook the reader inPatatitta wrote:
idk most people don't really want to read fanfics, less if it's like the ot!book where it isn't particullary good eitherAnaxii wrote:
and i wonder why tooPatatitta wrote:
one and a half probablyAnaxii wrote:
i wonder how many people are actually reading thisPatatitta wrote:
tbh you guys SHOULD read the book, what is the point of writing the book if you're just going to skip to the latest chapter only reading a summary?
either you read it in full, or you dont
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it's missing a plot that makes sense and pacing that makes sensez0z wrote:
it's missing literary elements to hook the reader inPatatitta wrote:
idk most people don't really want to read fanfics, less if it's like the ot!book where it isn't particullary good eitherAnaxii wrote:
and i wonder why tooPatatitta wrote:
one and a half probablyAnaxii wrote:
i wonder how many people are actually reading thisPatatitta wrote:
tbh you guys SHOULD read the book, what is the point of writing the book if you're just going to skip to the latest chapter only reading a summary?
either you read it in full, or you dont
https://scribemedia.com/literary-devices/Corne2Plum3 wrote:
Can you elaborate? :3z0z wrote:
it's missing literary elements to hook the reader inPatatitta wrote:
idk most people don't really want to read fanfics, less if it's like the ot!book where it isn't particullary good eitherAnaxii wrote:
and i wonder why tooPatatitta wrote:
one and a half probablyAnaxii wrote:
i wonder how many people are actually reading thisPatatitta wrote:
tbh you guys SHOULD read the book, what is the point of writing the book if you're just going to skip to the latest chapter only reading a summary?
either you read it in full, or you dont
it's more like multiple single stories shoved togetherPatatitta wrote:
it's missing a plot that makes sense and pacing that makes sense
problem with ot book is that everyone did whatever, thing is, since chapters by the same author are like 30 chapters apart, the pacing is pretty bad as you start 20 stories and finish 0, and given that during those 30 chapters they powerscaled the fuck out of the characters now your story is completely irrelevant as the world is going to instantly get nuked, + the actual story that the book ended up following is not the best as it lacks a clear direction and I don't really see any message behind it
Patatitta wrote:
problem with ot book is that everyone did whatever, thing is, since chapters by the same author are like 30 chapters apart, the pacing is pretty bad as you start 20 stories and finish 0, and given that during those 30 chapters they powerscaled the fuck out of the characters now your story is completely irrelevant as the world is going to instantly get nuked, + the actual story that the book ended up following is not the best as it lacks a clear direction and I don't really see any message behind it
maybe try splitting the plots into chapters like A-1, A-2, B-1, B-2?keremaru wrote:
Patatitta wrote:
problem with ot book is that everyone did whatever, thing is, since chapters by the same author are like 30 chapters apart, the pacing is pretty bad as you start 20 stories and finish 0, and given that during those 30 chapters they powerscaled the fuck out of the characters now your story is completely irrelevant as the world is going to instantly get nuked, + the actual story that the book ended up following is not the best as it lacks a clear direction and I don't really see any message behind itI think the most straightforward way to circumvent this problem with pacing is having a few select people (and by few I mean three to five) refresh the story into a more coherent narrative, with less of a focus on minor character notes and more on relevant development of the story. Unfortunately, that may mean the repurposing of or complete removal of certain story beats that just don't push the plot further or have better uses in different contexts. I'll have to check with yoony and the rest of the editing team to see what can happen.
Wait a minute though..
Did my character just die? o_O
Did my character just die? o_O
Mikey? No one know what happened to himMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Wait a minute though..
Did my character just die? o_O
they went training to the dragon ball time room and they will come back strongerCorne2Plum3 wrote:
Mikey? No one know what happened to himMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Wait a minute though..
Did my character just die? o_O
Well at Chapter 44 Mikey seemed to have probably died, because of Abaddon's Firelution Laser Shootout. ;_;
Imagine if Fara took him with herPatatitta wrote:
they went training to the dragon ball time room and they will come back strongerCorne2Plum3 wrote:
Mikey? No one know what happened to himMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Wait a minute though..
Did my character just die? o_O
Imagine there's a plot about Fara teaching Mikey how toCorne2Plum3 wrote:
Imagine if Fara took him with herPatatitta wrote:
they went training to the dragon ball time room and they will come back strongerCorne2Plum3 wrote:
Mikey? No one know what happened to himMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Wait a minute though..
Did my character just die? o_O
Man, this OT Chapter thing really is dying... ;_;
Are there any kind of stories the OT users could come up with?
Are there any kind of stories the OT users could come up with?
I can just write but i'm too embarrased to share anything I have written over here lmao + I don't really like the OT!book format that much as I have made clear in the pastMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Man, this OT Chapter thing really is dying... ;_;
Are there any kind of stories the OT users could come up with?
WELLPatatitta wrote:
I can just write but i'm too embarrased to share anything I have written over here lmao + I don't really like the OT!book format that much as I have made clear in the pastMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Man, this OT Chapter thing really is dying... ;_;
Are there any kind of stories the OT users could come up with?
seems like it's dead again
I literally do not write for the OT!book that is just my reason of why I dont, I do not know why chapters are being so delayed or whateverAnaxii wrote:
WELLPatatitta wrote:
I can just write but i'm too embarrased to share anything I have written over here lmao + I don't really like the OT!book format that much as I have made clear in the pastMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Man, this OT Chapter thing really is dying... ;_;
Are there any kind of stories the OT users could come up with?
seems like it's dead again
think it's the exponential problem of making sure the new entry is consistent with the previous entries which grows larger for each entryPatatitta wrote:
I literally do not write for the OT!book that is just my reason of why I dont, I do not know why chapters are being so delayed or whateverAnaxii wrote:
WELLPatatitta wrote:
I can just write but i'm too embarrased to share anything I have written over here lmao + I don't really like the OT!book format that much as I have made clear in the pastMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Man, this OT Chapter thing really is dying... ;_;
Are there any kind of stories the OT users could come up with?
seems like it's dead again
MrMcMikey22 wrote:
Are there any kind of stories the OT users could come up with?
𝙾𝚗𝚌𝚎 𝚞𝚙𝚘𝚗 𝚊 𝚝𝚒𝚖𝚎, 𝚒𝚗 𝚝𝚑𝚎 𝚙𝚎𝚊𝚌𝚎𝚏𝚞𝚕 𝚕𝚊𝚗𝚍𝚜 𝚘𝚏 𝙾𝚃, 𝚊 𝚛𝚊𝚗𝚍𝚘𝚖 𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚔𝚎𝚛 𝚜𝚞𝚍𝚍𝚎𝚗𝚕𝚢 𝚊𝚙𝚙𝚎𝚊𝚛𝚎𝚍 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚜𝚝𝚊𝚛𝚝𝚎𝚍 𝚙𝚘𝚜𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚜𝚔𝚒𝚋𝚒𝚍𝚒 𝚝𝚘𝚒𝚕𝚎𝚝 𝚙𝚛𝚘𝚙𝚊𝚐𝚊𝚗𝚍𝚊, 𝚜𝚘 𝚝𝚑𝚎 𝚖𝚒𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚢 𝚊𝚋𝚛𝚊𝚔𝚎𝚛 𝚑𝚊𝚍 𝚝𝚘 𝚜𝚠𝚘𝚘𝚙 𝚒𝚗 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚜𝚝𝚘𝚙 𝚝𝚑𝚎 𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚕 𝚍𝚘𝚎𝚛, 𝚞𝚜𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚑𝚒𝚜 𝚙𝚘𝚠𝚎𝚛𝚏𝚞𝚕 𝚕𝚘𝚌𝚔𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚙𝚘𝚠𝚎𝚛𝚜, 𝚑𝚎 𝚠𝚊𝚜 𝚊𝚋𝚕𝚎 𝚝𝚘 𝚋𝚎𝚜𝚝 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚋𝚎𝚊𝚝 𝚝𝚑𝚎 𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚕 𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚔𝚎𝚛, 𝚃𝚑𝚎 𝙴𝚗𝚍.
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but really, why not just shorten the chapters? your just overcomplicating things by making it long and adding in whatever characters and stuff
I mean, the chapters are already pretty short, and I don't think it's becoming too complex to people to write, mainly because the new chapters kinda ignore the previous ones and do their own thing. If anything I just think it's people losing interest over time
THIS IS WHAT WE ALL WANTHydreigon wrote:
but really, why not just shorten the chapters? your just overcomplicating things by making it long and adding in whatever characters and stuff
don't speak for all of us, not everyone shares that criticismAnaxii wrote:
THIS IS WHAT WE ALL WANTHydreigon wrote:
but really, why not just shorten the chapters? your just overcomplicating things by making it long and adding in whatever characters and stuff
we can discuss merging some plot threads if desiredPatatitta wrote:
don't speak for all of us, not everyone shares that criticismAnaxii wrote:
THIS IS WHAT WE ALL WANTHydreigon wrote:
but really, why not just shorten the chapters? your just overcomplicating things by making it long and adding in whatever characters and stuff
not everyone shares that criticism because nobody is reading thatPatatitta wrote:
don't speak for all of us, not everyone shares that criticismAnaxii wrote:
THIS IS WHAT WE ALL WANTHydreigon wrote:
but really, why not just shorten the chapters? your just overcomplicating things by making it long and adding in whatever characters and stuff
Am I the only okay with long chapters?
nah I like long chapters, if anything, short chapters are worse since we have more constant switches in perspective and plot in the story and the process of fixing chapters and notificating the next person takes double the time, if anything, chapters should be LONGER, not shorterCorne2Plum3 wrote:
Am I the only okay with long chapters?
ANNOUNCEMENT
Since dPeace skipped his turn, it's now Anaxii's turn to write a chapter.i will write a short story for this one
i finished writing the short storyAnaxii wrote:
i will write a short story for this one
now i just need mikey to draw an epic drawing for the chapter lol
By Anaxii
Hand The God’s heaven - Monday 6th October 3727, 6:15am WCT+0
This story takes place a few minutes after Abaddon was sent to the country of Yoony like his original version Mikey. Hand the God's anger was so strong that he couldn’t move to erase The Devil Satan who has created his entity to destroy the world. All hope seems lost, when suddenly…
*BOOM*
???: “I’M FINALLY BACK AFTER AN ETERNITY!!”
The Devil Satan: “Who are you and why do you almost look like Hand the God?”
???: “DIE HORRIBLE MONSTER!!”
The Devil Satan: “Wait- AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA-”
As the flames tried to consume his entire body, The Devil Satan managed to escape and never set foot on the playground Hand the God had created.
Hand The God: “Thank you for helping me.. but who are you exactly?”
Crazy the God: “My am I? It’s… a bit complicated to explain. You can just call me Crazy the God if you want.”
Hand The God: “Are you my alter ego as well??”
Crazy the God: “Not really. I'm back because I saw that something terrible was going to happen in the world where your 22nd creation was sent. We need to come together to destroy what Abaddon is going to do. Its power is much more dangerous than we think.”
Fear of the hand of God engulfs its whole body.
Crazy the God: “You don't remember your past with me, do you? When we still had our humanity, we were used to being together because we were codependent on each other. Once death has separated us, we reincarnated as gods to create a new world with our own laws. Unfortunately, viruses also known as evil entities are destroying everything on their way, which is a big problem. We have been able to apprehend all these devils, but Abaddon is going to transform itself into an even more powerful god…”
Hand The God: “WHAT? How can we stop it, and how do you know my past??? O_O”
Crazy the God: “I'd love to answer your questions, but first I'd like to show you something by sending you back to where you came from...”
*KABOOM*
The playground they were in began to be devoured by a black hole made by Crazy the God. Hand the God was being sucked in exponentially.
Crazy the God: “YOU WILL REMEMBER EVERYTHING ABOUT US MY FRIEND.”
Hand The God: “WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA-”
Then everything went black…
Chapter Summary:
After Abaddon, the creation of The Devil Satan, teleported into the normal world at the country of Yoony, Hand the God is very mad at The Devil Satan, as it may destroy the world… But suddenly, a purple hand looking like Hand the God appears and attacks The Devil sata, who manages to escape. His name is Crazy the God, and claims to be Hand the God’s friend in the past, until they got separated by death to be reincarnated as gods. Then he creates what looks like a black hole, sucking everything around, including the 2 hands, to a mysterious location.
Important Points:
- According to Hand the God, Abaddon can become stronger, more powerful than them, and destroy the world.
- Hand the God and Crazy the God were friends before dying. Then they got reincarnated into god-like entities.
- At the end of the chapter, “everything went black” as Hand the God got sucked into a “black hole”, created by Crazy the God, who wanted him to show “where he came from”.
Hmmm... Why you made it public?Patatitta wrote:
idk it sums up my thoughts well and I thought it was funny, don't see any harm of making it publicCorne2Plum3 wrote:
Hmmm... Why you made it public?Patatitta wrote:
I think the flaw that I have with the Anaxii's stories is that it all suddenly takes into an intense and serious approach and that everone knows what they are doing, even though we barely get anything to know about their character or something...
(Note: Not a insult. =P)
(Note: Not a insult. =P)
oh hey the chapter
there are things that have been modified but i don't mind
the part 2 is going to be way longer and way more entertaining for sure!!!!
/queue
there are things that have been modified but i don't mind
the part 2 is going to be way longer and way more entertaining for sure!!!!
/queue
THIS IS WHAT THE PART 2 IS GOING TO TALK ABOUT AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMrMcMikey22 wrote:
I think the flaw that I have with the Anaxii's stories is that it all suddenly takes into an intense and serious approach and that everone knows what they are doing, even though we barely get anything to know about their character or something...
wanted to upload something short because it's been a decade that we didn't have a chapter, which is annoying
22 days ;_;Anaxii wrote:
THIS IS WHAT THE PART 2 IS GOING TO TALK ABOUT AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMrMcMikey22 wrote:
I think the flaw that I have with the Anaxii's stories is that it all suddenly takes into an intense and serious approach and that everone knows what they are doing, even though we barely get anything to know about their character or something...
wanted to upload something short because it's been a decade that we didn't have a chapter, which is annoying
For real when you're unable to make a chapter, please message us ASAP, the best is before your turn (we message you before your turn)
my complains for this chapter is that the dialogue is IMO not really that well written (like puting emotes in the text or going AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA to describe a scream). The fact that I dislike the entire god/satan storyline thing. + like this has no direct connection with the previous chapter so it's kinda weird + the chapter is like really really short, I like longer chaptersMrMcMikey22 wrote:
I think the flaw that I have with the Anaxii's stories is that it all suddenly takes into an intense and serious approach and that everone knows what they are doing, even though we barely get anything to know about their character or something...
(Note: Not a insult. =P)
If I write a story that you think is good, then I'll get a hug from you!Patatitta wrote:
my complains for this chapter is that the dialogue is IMO not really that well written (like puting emotes in the text or going AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA to describe a scream). The fact that I dislike the entire god/satan storyline thing. + like this has no direct connection with the previous chapter so it's kinda weird + the chapter is like really really short, I like longer chaptersMrMcMikey22 wrote:
I think the flaw that I have with the Anaxii's stories is that it all suddenly takes into an intense and serious approach and that everone knows what they are doing, even though we barely get anything to know about their character or something...
(Note: Not a insult. =P)
(Although I don't know if I would ever be able to achieve that. ;_;)
I mean, you can if you put the effort, your stories just seem too over the top for meMrMcMikey22 wrote:
If I write a story that you think is good, then I'll get a hug from you!Patatitta wrote:
my complains for this chapter is that the dialogue is IMO not really that well written (like puting emotes in the text or going AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA to describe a scream). The fact that I dislike the entire god/satan storyline thing. + like this has no direct connection with the previous chapter so it's kinda weird + the chapter is like really really short, I like longer chaptersMrMcMikey22 wrote:
I think the flaw that I have with the Anaxii's stories is that it all suddenly takes into an intense and serious approach and that everone knows what they are doing, even though we barely get anything to know about their character or something...
(Note: Not a insult. =P)
(Although I don't know if I would ever be able to achieve that. ;_;)
It's been a huge minute since the last Other Side chapter, and that isn't helped much by a lack of chapter postings. So, considering the average method of chapter posting recently, I'll be trying to braid multiple related plotlines into a more concise story over my course of chapter writing. It'll take way more than one chapter, but I'll hopefully be able to scratch the itches of a) - Not a clear story, and b) - really short chapters after months of waiting.
Thanks!
my only request is please dont turn the more sol stories into action like it happened in the past in the book
is it finsh yet?
it will never be finished.Jangsoodlor wrote:
is it finsh yet?
bro wtf happened to samdaze
my little baby boy samdaze (actually he's not even mine it's actually mikey's little baby boy but anyways)
my little baby boy samdaze (actually he's not even mine it's actually mikey's little baby boy but anyways)
Topic Starter
One piece will finish firstJangsoodlor wrote:
is it finsh yet?
Oh yeah, I forgot to mention something.
Me and Anaxii are about to write a chapter together!
Could that work?
Me and Anaxii are about to write a chapter together!
Could that work?
SureMrMcMikey22 wrote:
Oh yeah, I forgot to mention something.
Me and Anaxii are about to write a chapter together!
Could that work?
Hopefully, if I have the chance for a "next time", I'll be able to compensate for this blunder and the next chapter.
Oh god how do I even begin with such a story like this? ;_;
By MrMcMikey22
Next to Otie, Corneplume woods - Monday 6th October 3727, 12:30pm WCT+0
Fara drags Mikey into a hidden bush as she retreats.
Fara: “Uhm. Hello? Are you okay?”
Mikey feels immobilized by Abaddon’s strong fire attack.
Mikey: “I can’t move… Am I just going to die then?”
Fara: “I can reduce your sufferness!”
Mikey: “Really?”
Fara: “If I’m thirsty, yeah!”
Mikey: “Are you thirsty right now?”
Fara: “Of course….not, I was trying to make a funny joke, why did you even fall for that?”
Mikey: “Huh? A joke???”
Mikey: “But my body’s DYING! I can’t just melt like an ice cream during the summer heat!”
Fara: “It’s Fall already!”
Mikey: “No, it's Autumn!”
Fara: “Yeah yeah you autumnnistic kid…”
Mikey: “Please grab me and help me find something to cool on!”
Fara thinks about the situation. On her mind: “Eugh that kid is starting to annoy me… Oh wait! I have a perfect idea! Why can’t this no-brainer just go into a dangerous forest, so that it’ll get killed immediately by these huge monsters? Ooohhooohooo!”
She looks back at Mikey.
Fara: “Hey Mikey!”
Mikey: “Yes?”
Fara: “I have a great idea!”
Mikey: “Yes! I love great ideas! What great ideas do you have?”
Fara: “Go into a forest filled with trees and then, the trees can cool you down, because of the sun hitting the trees instead of
you! Isn’t that such wonderful advice that I got?”
Mikey: “Oh my lifesaver! Thank you for your advice, but where is that forest exactly?”
Fara: “It’s right here where I’m about to throw you! – Hiyaaa!!!”
Fara throws Mikey up so high that he manages land into a dark forest. That forest is Corneplume woods, and there are a lot of dangerous monsters in it.
Fara: “And that’s one of many ways to kill an annoying guy!”
Fara: “Thank you guys so much for our positive feedback, I appreciate it so much!!“
Mikey then suddenly comes back, as if nothing actually happened.
Mikey: “Me too!”
Fara: “Huh? Oh you’re STILL HERE!”
Mikey: “And you helped me!”
Fara: “Yeah, I of course helped hurting you! Hahaha!!!”
Mikey: “Was that just another joke???”
Fara: “Uhhhh why can’t you go away? I honestly feel like I might have to kill you at this point.”
Mikey: “Oh yeah! Well I feel 22 times better now and I can turn you into an ice cube flavored ice cream.”
Fara: “Oh yeah, even if you’d like to eat it, I bet that your whole body will shatter as soon as you eat it!”
Mikey and Fara are about to get in an attacking position, getting ready to fight, just making an announcement before their fight, for an even more epic battle.
Fara: “My announcement of you, before we start fighting, is that you are so annoying!”
Mikey: “And my announcement to you, before we start fighting, is why is there a base that is getting built in this deep forest
that I got thrown at? Are you trying to confuse me?”
Fara: “Hold on a second. A base in that completely random forest that I had just thrown you into?”
After Mikey suddenly talks about that weird base that’s about to get built, leading the two to stop arguing. That base that’s inside Corneplume woods looks quite small, but also has a somewhat modern-ish look.
Mikey: “Yeah! There’s some kind of white base that you must have been building!”
Fara: “No. It must have been something else that has built these.”
Mikey: “Wait, why won’t we explore it then?”
Fara: “You know, there could be evil people that have created this hidden base.”
Mikey: “Evil people?”
Fara: “Yeah, maybe the ones from the school. Think about it!”
Mikey: “Hmmm, you know what you’re not too far-fetched. I mean the school is right near that base or somewhat nearby that base.”
Fara: “But should we really HAVE TO explore this place?”
Mikey: “Why not?”
Fara: “Arghhh, fine I guess.”
Mikey: “Let’s expose the bad side of this world!”
Fara: “Yeah, whatever.”
Fara and Mikey decide to take a deep look near this basement.
Mikey: “I still feel scared.”
Fara: “You decided to go in there, not my fault.”
Mikey: “You know what. You’re right!”
Mikey: “I think… that… the only… thing… is to….”
Fara: “Go inside this basement?”
Mikey: “Yeah!”
Mikey kicks the door.
Mikey: “Sit down and cry, weakling!!!”
Mikey: “…”
Fara: “Wow, I bet they cried laughing at you instead.”
Mikey: “Hey! I just had to throw away my anxiety somewhere!”
Fara: “But hmm interesting there seems to be another door that I can easily melt at.”
Fara uses some fire magic to reveal a hidden door.
Fara: “And another door…”
Meanwhile inside Abaddon’s secret bunker, where Abaddon is trying to make a nuke…
Abaddon: “Hahahah!!! It looks like I’ve got ALL the ingredients I need in order to construct a nuke!”
Abaddon: “But wait let me check all the ingredients again, there are so many gosh dang ingredients.”
Abaddon: “10kg of metal, check! 5 mg Uranium, check! Lots and lots and lots of sulfur and gunpowder, check!”
After going deeper in the basement, burning every door, some behind metallic.
Fara: “And another door…”
Then the vampire demon uses another fire spell, which ends on… Abaddon.
Abaddon: “AAAAAAAA!!!”
Fara: “Oh. It’s you… again…”
Mikey: “Oh NO! NOT HIM AGAIN!”
Abaddon: “How did you doofuses get into my basement?”
Mikey: “The good question is: How did we not?”
Abaddon: “Do you really think that my base is that pathetic?”
Fara: “Of course! And what are you actually creating? Some kind of little firework that does nothing?”
Abaddon: “Get out of here right now, or else I will cling both of you guys into my nuke!”
Mikey: “A nuke? He’s going to destroy the whole world!”
Mikey: “We. Have. To. KILL HIM…”
Fara: “... Because. He. Is. Somehow. Even. More. Annoying. Than. YOU!”
Chapter Summary:
As Fara retreats from Tomfoolery High after her fight against Abaddon, she hides behind a bush in the forest next to Otie, with Mikey who’s wounded. Despite being on his side, Fara finds Mikey very annoying, and would like to get rid of him. Then they discover a basement in the middle of the forest and explore it, and discover Abaddon making a nuke to destroy the world.
Important Points:
- Fara dislikes Mikey, but dislikes Abaddon even more.
- There’s a basement in the middle of Corneplume wood, which hides a bunker where Abaddon is making a nuke.
- At the end of the chapter, Mikey and Fara are facing Abaddon in his bunker.
Please read community/forums/topics/1885742?n=1
my personal headcanon is that the world of OTbook 1 got blown up all thanks to fucking mikey
sooorry ;w;sametdze wrote:
my personal headcanon is that the world of OTbook 1 got blown up all thanks to fucking mikey
i just wanted to get into ot book so soon! ;w;
replaced by the new versionkeremaru wrote:
UNPINNED??
smoking that OT!book pack 💯💯💯💯🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
Topic Starter
I wonder if anyone ever got rickrolled
instead of the OTbook ending right here, this is my ending for it. not the greatest ending, but personally i think its funny
Chapter 48: Ooops, we're all dead thanks to a.. train?
samDAZE is a happy little train. He's got 6 small wheels, a short stumpy funnel and big round dome. He's also got the number 1 on both of his sides. One day, samDAZE's boss, The Round Operator told samDAZE to deliver very special fireworks for some reason. I don't know why but, they need fireworks, so, samDAZE had to get it. samDAZE happily went over to the docks, where the big crane Cranko gave samDAZE the fireworks. Cranko told samDAZE, "Be careful with these, sam. one little mistake and the whole world will end." samDAZE didn't think of this as anymore other than Cranko being silly. All was well, until samDAZE started getting cocky. samDAZE started going faster and faster and faster, even though he was carrying really dangerous cargo. samDAZE was going so fast, he didn't realise that he was going on the wrong set of track. samDAZE's driver, Bob, tried telling samDAZE that he was going the wrong way, but samDAZE didn't listen. Before samDAZE knew it, he was speeding into a set of buffers. Upon hitting it, samDAZE flipped over, and the fireworks followed through. As samDAZE and Bob were spinning around in the air for that brief second, Bob shed a tear knowing that this was the end. Bob was never gonna see his wife or his kids ever again, and he couldn't even say goodbye. samDAZE, in a state of confusion blurted out, "Bust my buffers!" And then it happened. a massive explosion which would wipe out the whole world. Cranko was right. It would end the whole world. The first victims were samDAZE and Bob, then everyone else on the Island of Rodor. Then, everyone else would follow. In the dark empty atmosphere of whereever the hell we are, fireworks in all sorts of colours read out,
"HAPPY END OF THE OT BOOK! GO READ THE OT!LIBRARY NOW!"
the end :)
samDAZE is a happy little train. He's got 6 small wheels, a short stumpy funnel and big round dome. He's also got the number 1 on both of his sides. One day, samDAZE's boss, The Round Operator told samDAZE to deliver very special fireworks for some reason. I don't know why but, they need fireworks, so, samDAZE had to get it. samDAZE happily went over to the docks, where the big crane Cranko gave samDAZE the fireworks. Cranko told samDAZE, "Be careful with these, sam. one little mistake and the whole world will end." samDAZE didn't think of this as anymore other than Cranko being silly. All was well, until samDAZE started getting cocky. samDAZE started going faster and faster and faster, even though he was carrying really dangerous cargo. samDAZE was going so fast, he didn't realise that he was going on the wrong set of track. samDAZE's driver, Bob, tried telling samDAZE that he was going the wrong way, but samDAZE didn't listen. Before samDAZE knew it, he was speeding into a set of buffers. Upon hitting it, samDAZE flipped over, and the fireworks followed through. As samDAZE and Bob were spinning around in the air for that brief second, Bob shed a tear knowing that this was the end. Bob was never gonna see his wife or his kids ever again, and he couldn't even say goodbye. samDAZE, in a state of confusion blurted out, "Bust my buffers!" And then it happened. a massive explosion which would wipe out the whole world. Cranko was right. It would end the whole world. The first victims were samDAZE and Bob, then everyone else on the Island of Rodor. Then, everyone else would follow. In the dark empty atmosphere of whereever the hell we are, fireworks in all sorts of colours read out,
"HAPPY END OF THE OT BOOK! GO READ THE OT!LIBRARY NOW!"
the end :)
this is why I didn't want to write an ending LMAOsametdze wrote:
instead of the OTbook ending right here, this is my ending for it. not the greatest ending, but personally i think its funnyChapter 48: Ooops, we're all dead thanks to a.. train?
samDAZE is a happy little train. He's got 6 small wheels, a short stumpy funnel and big round dome. He's also got the number 1 on both of his sides. One day, samDAZE's boss, The Round Operator told samDAZE to deliver very special fireworks for some reason. I don't know why but, they need fireworks, so, samDAZE had to get it. samDAZE happily went over to the docks, where the big crane Cranko gave samDAZE the fireworks. Cranko told samDAZE, "Be careful with these, sam. one little mistake and the whole world will end." samDAZE didn't think of this as anymore other than Cranko being silly. All was well, until samDAZE started getting cocky. samDAZE started going faster and faster and faster, even though he was carrying really dangerous cargo. samDAZE was going so fast, he didn't realise that he was going on the wrong set of track. samDAZE's driver, Bob, tried telling samDAZE that he was going the wrong way, but samDAZE didn't listen. Before samDAZE knew it, he was speeding into a set of buffers. Upon hitting it, samDAZE flipped over, and the fireworks followed through. As samDAZE and Bob were spinning around in the air for that brief second, Bob shed a tear knowing that this was the end. Bob was never gonna see his wife or his kids ever again, and he couldn't even say goodbye. samDAZE, in a state of confusion blurted out, "Bust my buffers!" And then it happened. a massive explosion which would wipe out the whole world. Cranko was right. It would end the whole world. The first victims were samDAZE and Bob, then everyone else on the Island of Rodor. Then, everyone else would follow. In the dark empty atmosphere of whereever the hell we are, fireworks in all sorts of colours read out,
"HAPPY END OF THE OT BOOK! GO READ THE OT!LIBRARY NOW!"
the end :)
Is the ending the same level of shit as the rest of the book?
yeah. that's why i chose the ending ofYmir wrote:
Is the ending the same level of shit as the rest of the book?
but for some reason, in an early thomas episode style. first thing that came to mind i guess. also samDAZE is heavily unrecognised in the OTstory series. give the train some love man.
I think I know a good idea. How about all the writer collab together and write the ending. Something like,
By going to the other side again and again. A portal was created which connected the other side to the real world. All the monster from the other side came into the real world and started destroying everything. To stop them, all the character worked together and split into different teams. but in the end we lost and the crumbling destroyed the earth.
to give it a bit more happy ending. we can go like, one of the team went into the other side and found a switch by winning some boss fight. The switch will destroy the whole 'other side' and crumbling from every world but the cost will be sacrificing the earth
By going to the other side again and again. A portal was created which connected the other side to the real world. All the monster from the other side came into the real world and started destroying everything. To stop them, all the character worked together and split into different teams. but in the end we lost and the crumbling destroyed the earth.
to give it a bit more happy ending. we can go like, one of the team went into the other side and found a switch by winning some boss fight. The switch will destroy the whole 'other side' and crumbling from every world but the cost will be sacrificing the earth
Part 5
Mystery Mystera
*Joqirum's name has been changed to Joquir
...
...
I wake up in my bed aching all over. I noticed my bedroom's lights are turned on. It felt a bit like a flashbang, as suddenly going from darkness to light would do.
...
"Hey, are you ok?"
...
Looking to my right, I see Jaburrv with his arms on my bed.
"My body hurts, how are you up?"
"I think being smaller helps with that. My head hurts but everyone seems injured by what happened."
"How did I get in bed?"
"Joquir and I moved you to bed. We moved everyone else to bed too."
...
"Well do you need anything?" Jaburrv asked.
"No."
I then attempt to sit up. Aches all over my body stop that from happening.
"You don't need to push yourself."
...
After a few long moments, Jaburrv mentioned "The others are awake, I will talk with Joquir about what to do."
Then he got up, turned off my bedroom's lights, and left my room.
Even though the lights weren't on, it was a little more than enough to see and look.
Looking around, my stuff had been scattered everywhere by the series of jolts but at least my computer or the peripherals connected to it don't look damaged. I'll have to check my stuff for damage though. And do a clean-up of my room.
Staring out the window, it looks like it's cloudy. Very cloudy. The sparkling lights of the stars were very blocked.
I wondered how the others were doing and how they were feeling.
I wondered what would happen now and what next.
I didn't know how long I was out but I mainly felt like sleeping right now, so I went to sleep.
...
...
---
I think everyone's at least ok. Especially Zeral.
I went to the living room to talk to Joquir.
There's stuff everywhere. It looks like the house doesn't look damaged otherwise except some dents.
"Everyone has been woken up but they all seem like they are in pain. Do you know any healing spells?"
"I don't but it wouldn't be good to ask everyone else who is resting. Neither of us are feeling well either. We should rest for the rest of the night."
"Sure."
We went to prepare for bed.
I put on my pajamas and went to bed.
...
...
I woke up next with less of a headache than before. Then I got up and prepared for today.
I went to the kitchen to cook some food for everyone though I had to search for a few ingredients since they weren't where they should be.
While I was preparing the food, Joquir came over and exchanged greetings and plans on what to do next. We will both check up on everyone else and go outside to see what we could find. We both tried to contact our instructor but the communications device couldn't connect to the instructor. The coordinates also said "Error: Low-wave emitter out of reach."
It's a good thing that no one seems to be dying but they're all badly hurt expect for Eberm.
We ate a breakfast together and started moving everything that fell out of place in the main rooms.
The decorations that lay on the floor.
The cleaning containers all over the bathroom.
The pantry items scattered in the kitchen.
The console game cartridges out of place and so on.
We spent a long time cleaning things up, taking a significant chunk of time out of the day. But it has been done.
We got ready to go out. I wrote a note about breakfast in the pot and put on my shoes.
As soon as I stepped out, I realized that we did not know where we were. The smell of the beach hit my muzzle and the sound of the ocean waves struck my ears.
The house-car looked like it was not on a road and we were on a beach.
Looking around, we saw a rather short beach from the ocean to the grass, a ocean that we had no idea how far it went, the sky with a few clouds, and a plain as far as the eye could see.
The plains had grass and the occasional tree but nothing more. There wasn't anything in the sand. The landscape seemed very plain with very few notable features.
The lack of features compared to home made this landscape feel a bit off.
I got a bit worried since it seemed very easy to get lost. But maybe it will be fine as long as we can see the house-car.
The two of us picked a direction and headed there. It went to a tree. We then explored the area near the house-car. There were a few trees around the area.
We also saw a large gray building in the distance as a crumb but unexpectedly, the sun was already setting and touching the horizon when we saw it and even though the house-car was visible from here, it was almost a speck and we had to head home for the night.
By the time we were home, it was twilight. It didn't feel like half a day passed.
Everyone else seemed to be in their bedroom. The pot was empty and in the sink with some bowls. The two of us sat at the dining table together to discuss what happened.
"I was helping Zeral clean up the dishes. We finished putting them away when the house-car shook and exploded."
"I think the explosion came from the back of the van. Me and Acror were playing a game together and suddenly we got thrown into the wall and I blacked out."
"Do you think it was a malfunction of the house-car?"
"No idea."
Our eyes look towards the back of the van for a moment. It appeared undamaged which is unusual.
"Let's go check on the others."
"Sure. I think we might have a spell book somewhere."
---
I have just woken up and all the aching has went away. I look to my right and see Jaburrv using a spell book. Well whatever he did, I don't feel in pain anymore. I feel better so that's what I told him.
"Thanks."
The sun is up again. I get up and start today, the waking routine and all. Washing up and breakfast.
We as a group decided to go out except Jaburrv and Joquir decided to stay.
I don't know what this place is. The land is rather barren of features. There's a beach and sea behind us and a whole plains in front. We move in the direction leading to the castle.
As we get close to the castle, I wonder to myself "What's next?"
Mystery Mystera
*Joqirum's name has been changed to Joquir
...
...
I wake up in my bed aching all over. I noticed my bedroom's lights are turned on. It felt a bit like a flashbang, as suddenly going from darkness to light would do.
...
"Hey, are you ok?"
...
Looking to my right, I see Jaburrv with his arms on my bed.
"My body hurts, how are you up?"
"I think being smaller helps with that. My head hurts but everyone seems injured by what happened."
"How did I get in bed?"
"Joquir and I moved you to bed. We moved everyone else to bed too."
...
"Well do you need anything?" Jaburrv asked.
"No."
I then attempt to sit up. Aches all over my body stop that from happening.
"You don't need to push yourself."
...
After a few long moments, Jaburrv mentioned "The others are awake, I will talk with Joquir about what to do."
Then he got up, turned off my bedroom's lights, and left my room.
Even though the lights weren't on, it was a little more than enough to see and look.
Looking around, my stuff had been scattered everywhere by the series of jolts but at least my computer or the peripherals connected to it don't look damaged. I'll have to check my stuff for damage though. And do a clean-up of my room.
Staring out the window, it looks like it's cloudy. Very cloudy. The sparkling lights of the stars were very blocked.
I wondered how the others were doing and how they were feeling.
I wondered what would happen now and what next.
I didn't know how long I was out but I mainly felt like sleeping right now, so I went to sleep.
...
...
---
I think everyone's at least ok. Especially Zeral.
I went to the living room to talk to Joquir.
There's stuff everywhere. It looks like the house doesn't look damaged otherwise except some dents.
"Everyone has been woken up but they all seem like they are in pain. Do you know any healing spells?"
"I don't but it wouldn't be good to ask everyone else who is resting. Neither of us are feeling well either. We should rest for the rest of the night."
"Sure."
We went to prepare for bed.
I put on my pajamas and went to bed.
...
...
I woke up next with less of a headache than before. Then I got up and prepared for today.
I went to the kitchen to cook some food for everyone though I had to search for a few ingredients since they weren't where they should be.
While I was preparing the food, Joquir came over and exchanged greetings and plans on what to do next. We will both check up on everyone else and go outside to see what we could find. We both tried to contact our instructor but the communications device couldn't connect to the instructor. The coordinates also said "Error: Low-wave emitter out of reach."
It's a good thing that no one seems to be dying but they're all badly hurt expect for Eberm.
We ate a breakfast together and started moving everything that fell out of place in the main rooms.
The decorations that lay on the floor.
The cleaning containers all over the bathroom.
The pantry items scattered in the kitchen.
The console game cartridges out of place and so on.
We spent a long time cleaning things up, taking a significant chunk of time out of the day. But it has been done.
We got ready to go out. I wrote a note about breakfast in the pot and put on my shoes.
As soon as I stepped out, I realized that we did not know where we were. The smell of the beach hit my muzzle and the sound of the ocean waves struck my ears.
The house-car looked like it was not on a road and we were on a beach.
Looking around, we saw a rather short beach from the ocean to the grass, a ocean that we had no idea how far it went, the sky with a few clouds, and a plain as far as the eye could see.
The plains had grass and the occasional tree but nothing more. There wasn't anything in the sand. The landscape seemed very plain with very few notable features.
The lack of features compared to home made this landscape feel a bit off.
I got a bit worried since it seemed very easy to get lost. But maybe it will be fine as long as we can see the house-car.
The two of us picked a direction and headed there. It went to a tree. We then explored the area near the house-car. There were a few trees around the area.
We also saw a large gray building in the distance as a crumb but unexpectedly, the sun was already setting and touching the horizon when we saw it and even though the house-car was visible from here, it was almost a speck and we had to head home for the night.
By the time we were home, it was twilight. It didn't feel like half a day passed.
Everyone else seemed to be in their bedroom. The pot was empty and in the sink with some bowls. The two of us sat at the dining table together to discuss what happened.
"I was helping Zeral clean up the dishes. We finished putting them away when the house-car shook and exploded."
"I think the explosion came from the back of the van. Me and Acror were playing a game together and suddenly we got thrown into the wall and I blacked out."
"Do you think it was a malfunction of the house-car?"
"No idea."
Our eyes look towards the back of the van for a moment. It appeared undamaged which is unusual.
"Let's go check on the others."
"Sure. I think we might have a spell book somewhere."
---
I have just woken up and all the aching has went away. I look to my right and see Jaburrv using a spell book. Well whatever he did, I don't feel in pain anymore. I feel better so that's what I told him.
"Thanks."
The sun is up again. I get up and start today, the waking routine and all. Washing up and breakfast.
We as a group decided to go out except Jaburrv and Joquir decided to stay.
I don't know what this place is. The land is rather barren of features. There's a beach and sea behind us and a whole plains in front. We move in the direction leading to the castle.
As we get close to the castle, I wonder to myself "What's next?"
z0z
save your writing skills for the OT!Library
save your writing skills for the OT!Library
i wrote this before the announcement, i just changed it a little to make it an ending to this bookAnaxii wrote:
z0z
save your writing skills for the OT!Library
ahhhhh okz0z wrote:
i wrote this before the announcement, i just changed it a little to make it an ending to this bookAnaxii wrote:
z0z
save your writing skills for the OT!Library
at least it ended... .-.Patatitta wrote:
this is why I didn't want to write an ending LMAOsametdze wrote:
instead of the OTbook ending right here, this is my ending for it. not the greatest ending, but personally i think its funnyChapter 48: Ooops, we're all dead thanks to a.. train?
samDAZE is a happy little train. He's got 6 small wheels, a short stumpy funnel and big round dome. He's also got the number 1 on both of his sides. One day, samDAZE's boss, The Round Operator told samDAZE to deliver very special fireworks for some reason. I don't know why but, they need fireworks, so, samDAZE had to get it. samDAZE happily went over to the docks, where the big crane Cranko gave samDAZE the fireworks. Cranko told samDAZE, "Be careful with these, sam. one little mistake and the whole world will end." samDAZE didn't think of this as anymore other than Cranko being silly. All was well, until samDAZE started getting cocky. samDAZE started going faster and faster and faster, even though he was carrying really dangerous cargo. samDAZE was going so fast, he didn't realise that he was going on the wrong set of track. samDAZE's driver, Bob, tried telling samDAZE that he was going the wrong way, but samDAZE didn't listen. Before samDAZE knew it, he was speeding into a set of buffers. Upon hitting it, samDAZE flipped over, and the fireworks followed through. As samDAZE and Bob were spinning around in the air for that brief second, Bob shed a tear knowing that this was the end. Bob was never gonna see his wife or his kids ever again, and he couldn't even say goodbye. samDAZE, in a state of confusion blurted out, "Bust my buffers!" And then it happened. a massive explosion which would wipe out the whole world. Cranko was right. It would end the whole world. The first victims were samDAZE and Bob, then everyone else on the Island of Rodor. Then, everyone else would follow. In the dark empty atmosphere of whereever the hell we are, fireworks in all sorts of colours read out,
"HAPPY END OF THE OT BOOK! GO READ THE OT!LIBRARY NOW!"
the end :)
or else we'd have to plow through our asses writing tons of stories in order to truly end the story...