Erosion - Shinkai Shoujo-piano ver.- · forum

defiance

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-08-11T02:54:06+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Tuesday, October 24, 2017 at 11:49:00 PM

Artist: Erosion
Title: Shinkai Shoujo-piano ver.-
Tags: deep sea girl 小五 hatsune miku vocaloid utaite xiao wu Jennglebells
BPM: 110
Filesize: 2430kb
Play Time: 01:29
Difficulties Available:

Jennglebells' Hard (2.4 stars, 165 notes)
Normal (1.64 stars, 125 notes)
Sea of Misery (3.02 stars, 190 notes)

Download: Erosion - Shinkai Shoujo-piano ver.-
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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#2

thanks for the hard jenn!

battle (i stole his timing with some editing from celerih and jonathanlfj so it's more accurate)

Metadata :
http://www.nicovideo.jp/watch/sm24993296
http://www.nicovideo.jp/watch/sm25076211

Last edited by defiance 2017-10-25T03:49:19+00:00, edited 35 times in total.

Jennifer

Beatmap Nominator

352 posts

Joined July 2015

Jennifer 2017-08-11T07:40:53+00:00

generic first post message uwu

celerih

617 posts

Joined July 2014

celerih 2017-08-11T10:58:15+00:00

fruits

Celektus

730 posts

Joined April 2014

Celektus 2017-08-20T19:35:02+00:00

hi from the Mentorship-programm

[Overall]

bg normal.jpg and annie mays.jpg don't follow the newest standard for BG resolution which is 1920x1200, most people use 1920x1080 though since that's 16x9 which is why the 3rd BG is fine. Try and look for some other backgrounds or rescale yours with: http://waifu2x.udp.jp/

[

Deep Sea Girl]

I think you use a bit too many whistles in the intro
why are these 2 spaced bigger than the rest? 00:08:168 (1,1) -
I think making this overlap more would look better and express the calmness of the section well 00:19:907 (4,5,1) -
if not you could still make the curve of the 1/4 look more like in line with the slider
I think this jump is a bit too big 00:21:413 (5,6) - you can compare it to 00:22:014 (6,1) - or 00:16:316 (4,1) - which are both not as big but arguably strong.
this is placed on nothing 00:24:110 (4) -
00:24:408 (4,1) - shouldn't be bigger than 00:24:769 (1,2) - I think
those don't have whistles one them 00:35:243 (2,3,4) - but the rest of the section does sort of, I don't really get how you use whistles so maybe re do some sections of HS
why are you skipping that Vocal? ;_; 00:56:569 -
I think this sound 01:01:067 - could rather be mapped passively through a slider end, also that 2nd vocal initially doesn't really land on that tick so I initially though there was no sound at all
the timing on these sounds a bit off 01:01:367 (3,4,5,6) - maybe change it a bit, I don't want to make any specific suggestions since it's not really clear to me if notes are too late or too early
the 2nd jump should be bigger than the first one here 01:02:567 (7,1,1) - because the 2nd one sounds more intense and is easier to hit because of slider leniency
this blanket could be improved in case you care about blankets 01:04:058 (2,1) - the slider end is further away than the rest of the slider body from the approach circle
I think it's a bit confusing that this 1/1 gap is spaced like all the other jumps 01:13:674 (2,3) - stacking it under the last slider end would make more sense in my opinion since you also didn't have many 1/1 jumps before.
I'm not sure which layer you're following, but making the quite piano here clicked 01:16:974 (3) - while there Vocals here aren't 01:15:474 (1,1) - seems weird
I think it's really inconsistent to use 1/2 stacks so far into the song 01:17:274 (4,5) - hard players are still expecting 1/2 to be visually different form other rhythms so using that really late into the song is hard to read for them and inconsistent design wise pls space them out
those 2 could stand out more from the circle of you notes you had before 01:24:835 (4,1) - since they are the only vocals after those few piano notes.
I think it would be interesting to rotate the 2 by 180° so their position is sort of flipped, but other ideas could be better
those all hit too late I think 01:26:408 (5,6,1) -

[

Hard]

you should simplify that 3/4 gap with either doubles or 1/2 sliders and a 1/4 gap 00:54:314 (2,3) - you also simplified that in the top diff so it would be weird to not do that on the lower diffs too

[

Normal]

really nitpicky... these 2 would look better if they didn't slightly touch 00:20:211 (2,3) - same for a few other objects... Anime
It's kinda weird that the start of the kiai doesn't start with a NC 01:03:458 (5) - o.o

that's it, hope that helps a bit. gl with the set~

defiance

503 posts

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-08-21T00:06:09+00:00

Celektus wrote:
hi from the Mentorship-programm

[Overall]
bg normal.jpg and annie mays.jpg don't follow the newest standard for BG resolution which is 1920x1200, most people use 1920x1080 though since that's 16x9 which is why the 3rd BG is fine. Try and look for some other backgrounds or rescale yours with: http://waifu2x.udp.jp/ SHINKAI SHOU-JO
MADAMADA SHIZUMU

[ Deep Sea Girl]
I think you use a bit too many whistles in the intro
why are these 2 spaced bigger than the rest? 00:08:168 (1,1) - i wanted to try and express the vocal, i will reduce 00:08:168 (1) - 's distance but 00:10:610 (1) - is fine to me
I think making this overlap more would look better and express the calmness of the section well 00:19:907 (4,5,1) - i think it's fine,
the triple nicely flows into the slider and i think making a stack or lowering the distance would add more pressure on the player
if not you could still make the curve of the 1/4 look more like in line with the slider yea lol,
I think this jump is a bit too big 00:21:413 (5,6) - you can compare it to 00:22:014 (6,1) - or 00:16:316 (4,1) - which are both not as big but arguably strong. fixD,
this is placed on nothing 00:24:110 (4) - i am deaf
00:24:408 (4,1) - shouldn't be bigger than 00:24:769 (1,2) - i think it should, it's transitioning into a more intense part than the lowering pitch of the piano was.
those don't have whistles one them 00:35:243 (2,3,4) - but the rest of the section does sort of, I don't really get how you use whistles so maybe re do some sections of HS i'm gonna recheck my hs anyways
why are you skipping that Vocal? ;_; 00:56:569 - the slider path represents the vocal which i like
I think this sound 01:01:067 - could rather be mapped passively through a slider end, also that 2nd vocal initially doesn't really land on that tick so I initially though there was no sound at all i feel like making a slider would add less contrast to the buildup of the song, and having low distance on that nice works very nicely imo
the timing on these sounds a bit off 01:01:367 (3,4,5,6) - maybe change it a bit, I don't want to make any specific suggestions since it's not really clear to me if notes are too late or too early i stole the timing from a ranked version so /shrug
the 2nd jump should be bigger than the first one here 01:02:567 (7,1,1) - because the 2nd one sounds more intense and is easier to hit because of slider leniency adjusted
this blanket could be improved in case you care about blankets 01:04:058 (2,1) - the slider end is further away than the rest of the slider body from the approach circle me no care about blankets
I think it's a bit confusing that this 1/1 gap is spaced like all the other jumps 01:13:674 (2,3) - stacking it under the last slider end would make more sense in my opinion since you also didn't have many 1/1 jumps before. but in play a player should be able to determine that's a 1/1 than 1/2 because 1/2 jumps appear fairly quickly
I'm not sure which layer you're following, but making the quite piano here clicked 01:16:974 (3) - while there Vocals here aren't 01:15:474 (1,1) - seems weird the vocals are clicked on the heads and can end on the tails, i do this all the time throughout the song. the piano there is to make sure the rhythm doesn't seem so empty.
I think it's really inconsistent to use 1/2 stacks so far into the song 01:17:274 (4,5) - hard players are still expecting 1/2 to be visually different form other rhythms so using that really late into the song is hard to read for them and inconsistent design wise pls space them out 00:53:262 (5,6) - i used them, and they are used, and the ar makes them predictable to read and add pressure to the most intense part of the kiai
those 2 could stand out more from the circle of you notes you had before 01:24:835 (4,1) - since they are the only vocals after those few piano notes.
I think it would be interesting to rotate the 2 by 180° so their position is sort of flipped, but other ideas could be better sure
those all hit too late I think 01:26:408 (5,6,1) - explained above

[ Hard]
you should simplify that 3/4 gap with either doubles or 1/2 sliders and a 1/4 gap 00:54:314 (2,3) - you also simplified that in the top diff so it would be weird to not do that on the lower diffs too i opted for doubles

[ Normal]
really nitpicky... these 2 would look better if they didn't slightly touch 00:20:211 (2,3) - same for a few other objects... Anime ANIME
It's kinda weird that the start of the kiai doesn't start with a NC 01:03:458 (5) - o.o im gay

that's it, hope that helps a bit. gl with the set~

thank you for modding!

Celektus

730 posts

Joined April 2014

Celektus 2017-08-21T15:47:13+00:00

osuskrub wrote:
Celektus wrote:
hi from the Mentorship-programm

why are you skipping that Vocal? ;_; 00:56:569 - the slider path represents the vocal which i like
that pretty lame tho to represent the start of a vocal with a slider body

I overall wanted to say that I can't really tell which instrument your rhythm prioritises, but that's more general criticism. People usually use sliders to prioritize the to them more important layer over the other by making the less important one land on slider ends. If you already know that then I'm sorry to annoy you, but I think it's an important thing to be mentioned

defiance

503 posts

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-08-21T19:57:02+00:00

i'm mainly mapping the vocals with piano as filler but i use different arrangements of rhythms to emphasize vocal syllables and piano

i might as well change the slider but i used it because i like variation but due to consistency i might as well change it

Mismagius

9,268 posts

Joined July 2008

Mismagius 2017-08-23T18:30:57+00:00

hey!

i am terribly terribly sorry for taking so long to post my mod. some RL issues happened and i'll try to get to your map as soon as possible! hope i can do it by this week.
(i believe it was a m4m, so using this post as an update to tell you that my map is pending! https://osu.ppy.sh/s/539042)

_____________________________

[Normal]

00:11:818 (2,3,4) - because of timing point stuff, the spacing got kinda fucked up here, strongly recommend fixing this to make the spacing consistent since it's a normal
00:20:211 (2,3,4) - kinda ugly overlap, i'd personally prefer if you did something like this
00:23:501 (2,3,4) - i know the timing points are going a bit silly here but it's really recommended that you keep spacing constant here
00:58:372 (4) - move to x243 y346 to fix stacking here
00:58:673 (5,6,7,1) - inconsistent spacing, same as before
01:02:267 (3,4) - ^
01:11:858 (3) - maybe add whistle to the sliderend to follow the strong piano at the background?
01:16:974 (3) - move to x128 y297 to fix stacking
01:17:874 (5) - same as 01:11:858
01:19:074 (6,7,1) - overlap here looks kinda ugly imo, maybe do something like this?
01:21:180 (2) - move 1px right to fix stacking
01:22:696 (5) - you can make this a nicer blanket by moving the second sliderpoint to x376 y308
01:23:914 (1,2,3) - inconsistent spacing

[Hard]

00:12:416 (3,4,1) - i think this happens throughout the diff but it looks really weird to me and plays kinda badly, in a calm song like this the spacing shouldn't change suddenly in a kinda constant rhythm
00:16:617 (5) - missing NC
00:22:615 (6) - NC should be here instead of 00:23:501 (1) -
00:25:045 (4) - NC?
00:32:234 (5,1) - swap NC
01:00:467 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - eh, just looks ugly in my opinion & flows pretty badly. if you wanna give emphasis you can do something like this instead - notice how i remove (3) since there's no sound in the music there and it just sounds overmapped
01:04:058 (4,5) - you can try making better blankets in these cases by using the yellow circle from the sliderball as reference - something like this!
01:07:058 (4) - maybe stack with (1)'s sliderend?
01:07:658 (5,1) - same as 01:04:058
01:24:520 (5,6,7) - inconsistent spacing here looks really weird

[dipsy girl]

00:56:268 (1,2) - maybe fix blanket using the approach circle as reference?
01:26:408 (5) - timing sounds off in this note

defiance

503 posts

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-08-29T23:55:19+00:00

Mismagius wrote:
hey!

i am terribly terribly sorry for taking so long to post my mod. some RL issues happened and i'll try to get to your map as soon as possible! hope i can do it by this week.
(i believe it was a m4m, so using this post as an update to tell you that my map is pending! https://osu.ppy.sh/s/539042)

_____________________________

[Normal]
00:11:818 (2,3,4) - because of timing point stuff, the spacing got kinda fucked up here, strongly recommend fixing this to make the spacing consistent since it's a normal technically a normal does not need to have 1000% distance snap pixel perfect everything, though i did adjust it by hand a little
00:20:211 (2,3,4) - kinda ugly overlap, i'd personally prefer if you did something like this yes
00:23:501 (2,3,4) - i know the timing points are going a bit silly here but it's really recommended that you keep spacing constant here done
00:58:372 (4) - move to x243 y346 to fix stacking here apparently x:242 y:345 seemed to work better
00:58:673 (5,6,7,1) - inconsistent spacing, same as before yes
01:02:267 (3,4) - ^ this one looks fine to me, a normal player isn't going to freak out if sliders are just a little farther than usual
01:11:858 (3) - maybe add whistle to the sliderend to follow the strong piano at the background? oops
01:16:974 (3) - move to x128 y297 to fix stacking done
01:17:874 (5) - same as 01:11:858 yea
01:19:074 (6,7,1) - overlap here looks kinda ugly imo, maybe do something like this? like 1 px but okay
01:21:180 (2) - move 1px right to fix stacking this one seemed fine to me
01:22:696 (5) - you can make this a nicer blanket by moving the second sliderpoint to x376 y308 yea
01:23:914 (1,2,3) - inconsistent spacingthis one also looks fine to me
[Hard]
00:12:416 (3,4,1) - i think this happens throughout the diff but it looks really weird to me and plays kinda badly, in a calm song like this the spacing shouldn't change suddenly in a kinda constant rhythm i adjusted it to the best of my ability
00:16:617 (5) - missing NC yes
00:22:615 (6) - NC should be here instead of 00:23:501 (1) - yes
00:25:045 (4) - NC? mhm
00:32:234 (5,1) - swap NC anime
01:00:467 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - eh, just looks ugly in my opinion & flows pretty badly. if you wanna give emphasis you can do something like this instead - notice how i remove (3) since there's no sound in the music there and it just sounds overmappedeh, i wasn't a big fan of your suggestion, all of the circles in that pattern have a sound and i'm more going on strong and weak sounds with that type of patterning
01:04:058 (4,5) - you can try making better blankets in these cases by using the yellow circle from the sliderball as reference - something like this! done
01:07:058 (4) - maybe stack with (1)'s sliderend? sure
01:07:658 (5,1) - same as 01:04:058 anime
01:24:520 (5,6,7) - inconsistent spacing here looks really weird tried to adjust the best i could
[dipsy girl]
00:56:268 (1,2) - maybe fix blanket using the approach circle as reference? done
01:26:408 (5) - timing sounds off in this notenice catch! this is actually on 1/8

ty for modding!

Yuii-

2,501 posts

Joined July 2013

Yuii- 2017-08-31T14:53:04+00:00

not so professional mod coming through

normal

use ar4 you madboy

00:12:715 (4) - sir, try to snap the object thanks
00:20:211 (2) - would recommend rotating the red anchor as it looks quite bad currently
00:23:501 (2,3,4) - this is minor but followpoints on normals do actually matter http://i.imgur.com/8ZWRXgT.jpg
00:31:036 - combo way too long here, splitting 00:33:438 (3) - http://i.imgur.com/Kwp9QLb.jpg like that gives a break and accentuates the vocals a little bit better!!
00:39:435 (5,6,7) - yo i'm nazing the fuck out of you, so i'm deeply sorry for that but yeah... thing is, if you are curving (5) as that it'd be much better if (6) would look visually patterned by making it flow towards that object http://i.imgur.com/oEd9X7G.jpg . then you can drag (7) close to (6) and ta-da! you know when you are making these super-linear patterns, try to keep it clean, if you start curving sliders by this much but objects don't visually flow, then just make sliders fully stright, would be much btter
00:43:042 - hoooly, give 'em some breakzzz, this is a massive spike

ehh let me help you a bit with the kiai:
01:10:658 (5) - rotate tail by 28°
01:07:958 (4) - 01:12:768 (8) - 01:16:974 (6) - delete
01:19:074 (2,3) - 1/1 + circle on 01:19:977 -

great overall!!

hard

00:15:403 - ouch
00:22:615 (1,2) - rhythm again

i will try to be honest and not so harsh
this needs a remap

the visuals; the placements; the flow; hell even the rhythm just don't work at all. none work.
like yeah, sure, ds and stuf fmight ruin your map. that's why you can, sometimes, and if it /looks/ similar break with the distance snapping, but let me give you some examples of what is just completely wrong:
00:09:389 (4,5,1) -
00:12:987 (1,3) -
00:13:609 (2,4) -
00:23:501 (2,3,4,1) -
00:31:036 (2,3,4,1) -
00:54:465 (3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - this hurts
00:59:543 (3,2) - q
01:20:280 (1,4) -

you need to leave more breaks during patterns, you are just having the same mistakes across every difficulty. your patterning isn't good at all ,so you need to focus on small groups of objects before moving towards something more heavy.
a small advice would be to look at other people's maps and try to get different ideas on small groups before moving on - and also some self-modding after finishing the map would be a nice idea

the mapset has a lot of potential, but this difficulty will hold you back unless some bn thinks otherwise (which... has occurred)

anime

00:13:312 (1,2,3,4) - yes, consider mapping a good build-up please, something like http://i.imgur.com/eovlt60.jpg looks ezpz
00:16:016 (3,4) - these are supposed to be stressed, 00:09:999 (4,5,1) - here's a good example of what you should be doing. please follow the music properly
00:16:617 (1,2) - visually speaking this is real bad, here's a better-looking pattern for the lulz http://i.imgur.com/m38ZMkY.jpg
00:29:238 (4,1,2,3) - eee spacing
00:50:256 (3,4) - if anything try ctrl+g'ing the rhythm with 00:50:857 (5) - as there's nothing to emphasize on 00:50:557 -
00:56:268 (1) - why is this the only extended slider in the whole map come on
01:01:067 (3) - yes, excuse me?
01:04:058 (2,3,1) - vs 01:13:074 (1,2,3) - take care with that filler and the ncing!!

i'd say you need to take more care of the spacing during kiai times. it really isn't inconsistent, but the emphasis is just plain wrong. you should just use higher spacing when the vocals are more emphasized in the bgm and not during the whole kiai
also, please take care at your overall design. stuff such as 01:17:874 (1,2,3,4) - would look way, way better if the slider design of these were a bit more similar rather than just 4 different shapes
on a last note, please be conscious of the overall spacing on non-kiai sections, please... from 00:25:045 - to 00:46:649 - it seems like a clownfiesta, you should be more considered to actual emphasis and design. patterning might not be so important, but once you've learned a lot abotu mapping, these things actually hurt visually speaking

[]

i can go more in-depth into this, but basically... just read the above and work on it slightly, you'll see improvements!!

good luck
you can hit me up whenever you want for more help, you know i can assist you with that!!!

defiance

503 posts

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-08-31T20:36:58+00:00

Yuii- wrote:
not so professional mod coming through

normal

use ar4 you madboy ar 4.5

00:12:715 (4) - sir, try to snap the object thanks i swear i had this snapped
00:20:211 (2) - would recommend rotating the red anchor as it looks quite bad currently ye
00:23:501 (2,3,4) - this is minor but followpoints on normals do actually matter http://i.imgur.com/8ZWRXgT.jpg the skin i map with doesn't have follow points so oops
00:31:036 - combo way too long here, splitting 00:33:438 (3) - http://i.imgur.com/Kwp9QLb.jpg like that gives a break and accentuates the vocals a little bit better!! ye ye
00:39:435 (5,6,7) - yo i'm nazing the fuck out of you, so i'm deeply sorry for that but yeah... thing is, if you are curving (5) as that it'd be much better if (6) would look visually patterned by making it flow towards that object http://i.imgur.com/oEd9X7G.jpg . then you can drag (7) close to (6) and ta-da! you know when you are making these super-linear patterns, try to keep it clean, if you start curving sliders by this much but objects don't visually flow, then just make sliders fully stright, would be much btter this is why you aren't a tier 2 anymore
00:43:042 - hoooly, give 'em some breakzzz, this is a massive spike i can't really do much about this, i changed 00:46:649 (1) - into a 1/1 slider so i hope it alleviates some of the clicking intensity

ehh let me help you a bit with the kiai:
01:10:658 (5) - rotate tail by 28° i personally like this angle and i don't think every object needs to flow into the other
01:07:958 (4) - 01:12:768 (8) - 01:16:974 (6) - delete i agree with every one of them except the second one, it's highlighting a fairly strong vocal
01:19:074 (2,3) - 1/1 + circle on 01:19:977 - sure

great overall!!

hard

00:15:403 - ouch
00:22:615 (1,2) - rhythm again

i will try to be honest and not so harsh
this needs a remap

the visuals; the placements; the flow; hell even the rhythm just don't work at all. none work.
like yeah, sure, ds and stuf fmight ruin your map. that's why you can, sometimes, and if it /looks/ similar break with the distance snapping, but let me give you some examples of what is just completely wrong:
00:09:389 (4,5,1) -
00:12:987 (1,3) -
00:13:609 (2,4) -
00:23:501 (2,3,4,1) -
00:31:036 (2,3,4,1) -
00:54:465 (3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - this hurts
00:59:543 (3,2) - q
01:20:280 (1,4) -

you need to leave more breaks during patterns, you are just having the same mistakes across every difficulty. your patterning isn't good at all ,so you need to focus on small groups of objects before moving towards something more heavy.
a small advice would be to look at other people's maps and try to get different ideas on small groups before moving on - and also some self-modding after finishing the map would be a nice idea

the mapset has a lot of potential, but this difficulty will hold you back unless some bn thinks otherwise (which... has occurred) i will attempt a remap

anime

00:13:312 (1,2,3,4) - yes, consider mapping a good build-up please, something like http://i.imgur.com/eovlt60.jpg looks ezpz borborygmos
00:16:016 (3,4) - these are supposed to be stressed, 00:09:999 (4,5,1) - here's a good example of what you should be doing. please follow the music properly i made sure that this player feels very stressed when playing them
00:16:617 (1,2) - visually speaking this is real bad, here's a better-looking pattern for the lulz http://i.imgur.com/m38ZMkY.jpg very anime,
but i did it/
00:29:238 (4,1,2,3) - eee spacing please explain more
00:50:256 (3,4) - if anything try ctrl+g'ing the rhythm with 00:50:857 (5) - as there's nothing to emphasize on 00:50:557 - yse
00:56:268 (1) - why is this the only extended slider in the whole map come on fiine
01:01:067 (3) - yes, excuse me? i swear on my life there's a sound there
01:04:058 (2,3,1) - vs 01:13:074 (1,2,3) - take care with that filler and the ncing!! since i wanna do vocals for those, i just deleted 01:04:958 (3) -

i'd say you need to take more care of the spacing during kiai times. it really isn't inconsistent, but the emphasis is just plain wrong. you should just use higher spacing when the vocals are more emphasized in the bgm and not during the whole kiai
also, please take care at your overall design. stuff such as 01:17:874 (1,2,3,4) - would look way, way better if the slider design of these were a bit more similar rather than just 4 different shapes
on a last note, please be conscious of the overall spacing on non-kiai sections, please... from 00:25:045 - to 00:46:649 - it seems like a clownfiesta, you should be more considered to actual emphasis and design. patterning might not be so important, but once you've learned a lot abotu mapping, these things actually hurt visually speaking

[]

i can go more in-depth into this, but basically... just read the above and work on it slightly, you'll see improvements!!

good luck
you can hit me up whenever you want for more help, you know i can assist you with that!!!

thank you so much for modding yuii!

celerih

617 posts

Joined July 2014

celerih 2017-09-20T00:52:04+00:00

[

General]

How about changing diff name here to something that isn't the translation of the title. Something like Drowning Emotions would be cool
You could use a better sample for the hitwhistle, use this one that I used in my own map for this song https://celerih.s-ul.eu/meCPPmUU
Also there's an unused bg in the song folder, or that the hard diff doesn't have it set for some reason, might want to fix that
01:26:408 - Timing point here is late, your map needs to be perfectly timed, move it to 01:26:360 -

[

Normal]

00:08:168 (5) - NC here, combo gets a bit long afterwards
00:38:238 (4) - To make the pattern look cleaner move this up and reduce the curve of the slider
00:43:042 (2) - To follow the piano better move this to start on 00:42:741 - and have it end at the same place as it did before. This way both piano and vocals are followed better
01:07:958 - Would add a circle here since the all the other vocals in the kiai are followed except for this one
But I'd still make some more 1/1 gaps in this, rhythm is dense and should be made easier. It is lowest diff after all
01:11:858 (7) - make into 2 circles at the start and end of the slider and reduce density
01:07:058 (3) - Same thing as above, could even make 01:07:658 - a 1/2 slider from here to cover vocals and circle on 01:07:058 - instead of slider
Nice normal, good job

[

Jennglebell's Hard]

00:08:168 (1,2) - Would reduce distance here in favor of higher distance for 00:08:778 (2,3) - since there's much stronger piano there
00:24:769 (4,1,2) - Once again kinda backwards emphasis, 1 should get more spacing that 2 here
00:27:141 (4) - Note here is overmapped, there's no sound to support it as there is a break in both piano and vocals
00:42:741 (2,3,4) - Rhythm here could be improved upon since going for faint vocals over strong piano is confusing when playing. See box below for a suggestion
00:59:274 (2,3,4) - Overmapped note on 00:59:840 (3) - makes rhythm here improvable, mostly making a 1/1 slider on 00:59:543 - . See box below
01:02:852 (1) - Both vocals and piano hit on 01:03:155 - so shorten this by 1/4. It's a shame that the slider shape will have to be changed since it's really nice but the song just doesn't support it :/
01:08:258 (1) - Another case of a slider being 1/4 too long. If the vocals aren't being extended and just last 1/2, extended sliders won't fit
Main problem here is rhythm and overmapping imo. Apart from that I really like how this map looks and the fun use of slider movement

[

Deep Sea Girl]

00:09:084 (3) - Such strong piano on a slider reverse isn't the best. circle + 1/2 slider would be a better rhythm here
00:22:615 (1) - The very straight and "sharp" shape of the slider here clashes with the rest of the sliders as of yet, and there aren't any distinct sounds that really justify it
00:28:040 (2) - 00:37:639 (2) - Once again the reverses here could be make into something more appropriate, like 1/2 slider + circle
00:42:741 (2,3) - Here a reverse would actually work wonderfully, since you'd get the reverse on a pretty weak sound on 00:43:042 - instead of a clickable slider head. Something more passive would be better for a faint sound like this
01:01:367 (3,4,5,6,7) - A more clean progression of spacing would fit well into other patterns you did on 00:12:987 (4,1,2,3,4) - and 01:25:451 (2,3,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) -
01:26:089 (1,1) - Would use a slider here, the random change in timing (btw fix timing I mentionned it earlier) would easily catch players off guard
That's all I'll touch on, nice diff overall

Good luck with the set!

defiance

503 posts

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-09-20T12:25:32+00:00

celerih wrote:
[ General]

How about changing diff name here to something that isn't the translation of the title. Something like Drowning Emotions would be cool ok mr deep sea rain
You could use a better sample for the hitwhistle, use this one that I used in my own map for this song https://celerih.s-ul.eu/meCPPmUU there's not much of a difference between this and the default soft whistle
Also there's an unused bg in the song folder, or that the hard diff doesn't have it set for some reason, might want to fix that guya
01:26:408 - Timing point here is late, your map needs to be perfectly timed, move it to 01:26:360 -battle

[ Normal]
00:08:168 (5) - NC here, combo gets a bit long afterwards combo's are usually this long anyways
00:38:238 (4) - To make the pattern look cleaner move this up and reduce the curve of the slider osu
00:43:042 (2) - To follow the piano better move this to start on 00:42:741 - and have it end at the same place as it did before. This way both piano and vocals are followed better animemapping.jpg
01:07:958 - Would add a circle here since the all the other vocals in the kiai are followed except for this one shinkai shoujo mada mada shizumu
But I'd still make some more 1/1 gaps in this, rhythm is dense and should be made easier. It is lowest diff after all
01:11:858 (7) - make into 2 circles at the start and end of the slider and reduce density downbeats are hate
01:07:058 (3) - Same thing as above, could even make 01:07:658 - a 1/2 slider from here to cover vocals and circle on 01:07:058 - instead of slider i prefer the 1/1 for the vocals her
Nice normal, good job

[ Jennglebell's Hard]
00:08:168 (1,2) - Would reduce distance here in favor of higher distance for 00:08:778 (2,3) - since there's much stronger piano there
00:24:769 (4,1,2) - Once again kinda backwards emphasis, 1 should get more spacing that 2 here
00:27:141 (4) - Note here is overmapped, there's no sound to support it as there is a break in both piano and vocals
00:42:741 (2,3,4) - Rhythm here could be improved upon since going for faint vocals over strong piano is confusing when playing. See box below for a suggestion
00:59:274 (2,3,4) - Overmapped note on 00:59:840 (3) - makes rhythm here improvable, mostly making a 1/1 slider on 00:59:543 - . See box below
01:02:852 (1) - Both vocals and piano hit on 01:03:155 - so shorten this by 1/4. It's a shame that the slider shape will have to be changed since it's really nice but the song just doesn't support it :/
01:08:258 (1) - Another case of a slider being 1/4 too long. If the vocals aren't being extended and just last 1/2, extended sliders won't fit
Main problem here is rhythm and overmapping imo. Apart from that I really like how this map looks and the fun use of slider movement

[ Deep Sea Girl]
00:09:084 (3) - Such strong piano on a slider reverse isn't the best. circle + 1/2 slider would be a better rhythm here agre
00:22:615 (1) - The very straight and "sharp" shape of the slider here clashes with the rest of the sliders as of yet, and there aren't any distinct sounds that really justify it it's matching the vocals, but i did a ctrl + g and adjusted the slider so it better follows it
00:28:040 (2) - 00:37:639 (2) - Once again the reverses here could be make into something more appropriate, like 1/2 slider + circle gang GANG
00:42:741 (2,3) - Here a reverse would actually work wonderfully, since you'd get the reverse on a pretty weak sound on 00:43:042 - instead of a clickable slider head. Something more passive would be better for a faint sound like this benis
01:01:367 (3,4,5,6,7) - A more clean progression of spacing would fit well into other patterns you did on 00:12:987 (4,1,2,3,4) - and 01:25:451 (2,3,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - i will attempt something
01:26:089 (1,1) - Would use a slider here, the random change in timing (btw fix timing I mentionned it earlier) would easily catch players off guard meh i don't like to incorporate a slider into that because it's just a single sound
That's all I'll touch on, nice diff overall

Good luck with the set!

ty for modding

Jennifer

Beatmap Nominator

352 posts

Joined July 2015

Jennifer 2017-09-23T04:05:39+00:00

celerih wrote:
General

Jennglebell's Hard
00:08:168 (1,2) - Would reduce distance here in favor of higher distance for 00:08:778 (2,3) - since there's much stronger piano there +
00:24:769 (4,1,2) - Once again kinda backwards emphasis, 1 should get more spacing that 2 here
00:27:141 (4) - Note here is overmapped, there's no sound to support it as there is a break in both piano and vocals im not exactly a big fan of keaving gaps especially when theres none in the song, so i will remove it and extend 3 instead;
00:42:741 (2,3,4) - Rhythm here could be improved upon since going for faint vocals over strong piano is confusing when playing. See box below for a suggestion went for something else to (maybe) follow the piano better
00:59:274 (2,3,4) - Overmapped note on 00:59:840 (3) - makes rhythm here improvable, mostly making a 1/1 slider on 00:59:543 - . See box below opt for a reverse instead
01:02:852 (1) - Both vocals and piano hit on 01:03:155 - so shorten this by 1/4. It's a shame that the slider shape will have to be changed since it's really nice but the song just doesn't support it :/ i did shorten it but i also raised sv by a bit in attempt to keep shape :sad:
01:08:258 (1) - Another case of a slider being 1/4 too long. If the vocals aren't being extended and just last 1/2, extended sliders won't fit +
Main problem here is rhythm and overmapping imo. Apart from that I really like how this map looks and the fun use of slider movement

osu crashed halfway so some things might be a little different

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Peter

800 posts

Joined June 2016

Peter 2017-10-06T14:10:11+00:00

Normal

00:35:842 (7) - the spacing here is so neutral make it closer http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253005
00:37:939 (3,4) - placement of these 2 is so weird place them like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253023 or in other way
00:42:741 (2) - place it higher http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253027
00:53:863 (5) - weird this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253030 would have been better
01:00:467 (1) - hmm ctrr + h and rotate this to http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253036
01:25:132 (5) - placing it like this feels unnatural move it here http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253041 or somewhere else

Hard

00:14:204 (5) - NC
00:17:807 (5) - prob same here but not sure
00:21:112 (6) - NC
00:40:637 (7) - ^
01:02:852 (1) - this slider is weird
01:11:858 (1) - NC

Sea Of Misery

00:05:727 (2,3) - why won't you place them like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253089
00:28:040 (2) - isnt the same as previous slider ctr + c and ctr + shift +r previous one
00:46:048 (6) - place a little bit higher

Jennifer

Beatmap Nominator

352 posts

Joined July 2015

Jennifer 2017-10-07T00:58:42+00:00

PeterEU wrote:
Hard
00:14:204 (5) - NC no thank you, but if you provided more reasoning i might reconsider
00:17:807 (5) - prob same here but not sure same as above, but i did went in and changed some after
00:21:112 (6) - NC adjusted in new change
00:40:637 (7) - ^
01:02:852 (1) - this slider is weird weird as in..? shape? speed? im sorry, but you'll need to be more specific than that -w-;
01:11:858 (1) - NC

thank you

update

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defiance

503 posts

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-10-07T17:03:40+00:00

PeterEU wrote:
Normal
00:35:842 (7) - the spacing here is so neutral make it closer http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253005 nah, im trying not to have overlaps in this diff so i just moved it farther
00:37:939 (3,4) - placement of these 2 is so weird place them like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253023 or in other way it's just following the curve of the pattern, i don't see the problem lol
00:42:741 (2) - place it higher http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253027 what i have is fine
00:53:863 (5) - weird this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253030 would have been better i prefer curved sliders over straight ones so i can accentuate the calm part of the song
01:00:467 (1) - hmm ctrr + h and rotate this to http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253036 again, following the curve, nothing wrong with that
01:25:132 (5) - placing it like this feels unnatural move it here http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253041 or somewhere else why?, i don't see how it's unnatural to follow the curve of that pattern

Sea Of Misery
00:05:727 (2,3) - why won't you place them like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9253089 because of the piano making a strong noise
00:28:040 (2) - isnt the same as previous slider ctr + c and ctr + shift +r previous one sure
00:46:048 (6) - place a little bit higherlooks ok to me

ty

-Hoshizora

6 posts

Joined February 2016

-Hoshizora 2017-10-11T21:46:35+00:00

Heyho:

My Mod for Sea of Misery

Slider velocity is a bit fast in general in my opinion.
00:09:084 (3,4) - could look better imo.
01:00:467 (1,2,3) - Hard to read for such an easy diff in my opinion, since the distance between 1-2 and 2-3 is the same, but there is a half beat gap between 2-3. Maybe new combo 01:01:367 (3) - to make it better readable or change distance.
01:24:835 (4,1) - a bit hard for such a low difficulty in my opinion. maybe make the slider from 4 - 1 and a circle on the sliderend of 1.
01:26:089 (1,1,1,1) - - for such an easy diff its a bit hard to click that in my opinion. since the bpm is changing, there will be tons of 100 for unexperienced people. probably work with sliders there.

My Mod for Hard

00:21:112 (7) - Maybe move this note a bit away from the previous one, to make it better readable
00:22:615 (3,4,5) - This flow looks a bit annoying to me. Maybe change it like this for example https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9295387
00:26:243 (3) - I would cut this slider at the white tick and add a circle, since this slider skips a beat in my opinion.
00:44:244 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - Flow doesnt fit to the music very good in my opinion. i would change the flow in base of the pitch of the voice maybe.
Maybe like this?
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9295461
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9295480
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9295487
01:03:458 (1) - could be spaced a bit more from the previous slider in my opinion.
01:13:074 (1,2,3) - Song is more intense here then 01:15:474 (1,2,3,4,5) - here. i would change the spacing in that part.
01:20:880 (3,4,5) - Maybe emphasize this part a bit more.
01:22:696 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - music is getting calmer with every note. maybe you could reflect this with the spacing.

My Mod for Normal

00:20:211 (2,3,4) - The spacing between those 3 object looks weird.
00:25:045 (5) - New combo?
00:35:243 (6,7) - This is the only overlap, looks a bit random for me.
00:39:435 (5) - New combo?
00:44:244 (4) - New combo?
I would put a few more new combos, but you have to decide that.

defiance

503 posts

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-10-11T22:34:24+00:00

-Hoshizora wrote:
Heyho:

My Mod for Sea of Misery
Slider velocity is a bit fast in general in my opinion.
00:09:084 (3,4) - could look better imo. ur right.
01:00:467 (1,2,3) - Hard to read for such an easy diff in my opinion, since the distance between 1-2 and 2-3 is the same, but there is a half beat gap between 2-3. Maybe new combo 01:01:367 (3) - to make it better readable or change distance. good suggestion
01:24:835 (4,1) - a bit hard for such a low difficulty in my opinion. maybe make the slider from 4 - 1 and a circle on the sliderend of 1. personally think that the current rhythm fits the song better
01:26:089 (1,1,1,1) - - for such an easy diff its a bit hard to click that in my opinion. since the bpm is changing, there will be tons of 100 for unexperienced people. probably work with sliders there. sliders wouldn't really match the song too well :/ plus this is the top diff and i want to make it the most rhythmically challenging

My Mod for Normal
00:20:211 (2,3,4) - The spacing between those 3 object looks weird. it looks fine to me, just a different kind of movement
00:25:045 (5) - New combo?
00:35:243 (6,7) - This is the only overlap, looks a bit random for me. i swear i fixed this
00:39:435 (5) - New combo?
00:44:244 (4) - New combo?
I would put a few more new combos, but you have to decide that.the nc's are supposed to be every 2 downbeats, i do follow a system in where to place them

ty for modding!

Jennifer

Beatmap Nominator

352 posts

Joined July 2015

Jennifer 2017-10-14T15:42:04+00:00

-Hoshizora wrote:
Heyho:
My Mod for Hard
00:21:112 (7) - Maybe move this note a bit away from the previous one, to make it better readable 6 and 7 are stacked, i'll restack them if they are not properly stacked x.x
00:22:615 (3,4,5) - This flow looks a bit annoying to me. Maybe change it like this for example https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9295387 3 and 5 are paired, i'd rather not have them blanketed since the next note after 5 will have limited placement, 4 is also a bit too far from 5 by my likings
00:26:243 (3) - I would cut this slider at the white tick and add a circle, since this slider skips a beat in my opinion. shortened the slider but skipped the circle. theres no beat for the circle to be mapped to, originally the extended was a placeholder for better rhythm but now ive went in and adjusted some stuff
00:44:244 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - Flow doesnt fit to the music very good in my opinion. i would change the flow in base of the pitch of the voice maybe.
Maybe like this?
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9295461
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9295480
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9295487 this section gave me a very straight forward feeling with its clear 1/2s, so i mapped it without much turns to give it an easier flow to distinguish this part from the rest of the map
01:03:458 (1) - could be spaced a bit more from the previous slider in my opinion. +
01:13:074 (1,2,3) - Song is more intense here then 01:15:474 (1,2,3,4,5) - here. i would change the spacing in that part. spacing doesnt always make things more intense imo, in this case i used 01:14:274 (4,5) - to show its more intense since its in the opposite direction of 3, different from 01:15:474 (1,2,3,4,5) - which flows one direction
01:20:880 (3,4,5) - Maybe emphasize this part a bit more. remapped
01:22:696 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - music is getting calmer with every note. maybe you could reflect this with the spacing.vocal is still going at its peak, the following spinner slows down the song for both conclusion
thanks for the mod

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jonathanlfj

Elite Mapper

2,568 posts

Joined February 2010

jonathanlfj 2017-10-22T22:18:00+00:00

[General]
Tags in Hard are corrupted

you probably want to mute the slider sides, they are very disruptive for a quiet song like this

01:00:467 - this timing point feels like it should be -8ms
01:26:360 - -8ms
01:27:014 - -12ms

[Normal]
00:55:968 (8) - spacing
00:58:673 (5,6,7,1) - I understand there are timing changes here, but changing spacing like this may confuse some beginner players and generally doesn't look very clean
01:02:852 (4) - same here
01:19:977 (3,7) - spacing
diff is nice, just need to clean up the visual spacing over timing change sections and it should be solid

[Jennglebells' Hard]
a lot of your sliders go over red lines, that sadly won't be rankable so you have to map them out with circles or reduce the repeat sliders. Here are the places:
00:11:830 - Slider end
00:59:574 - Slider repeat
00:59:875 - Slider end
01:00:732 - Slider repeat
01:01:030 - Slider end
01:22:094 - Slider repeat
01:22:408 - Slider end

00:09:389 (3) - this map mainly follows the vocals so I felt a bit left out here skipping the vocals, see if you can break it up
00:47:701 - I'd add a circle here to catch the vocals as well
00:55:066 (5,6) - feel like you should map it similar to 00:53:863 (1,2,3) for consistency and vocal following
01:22:696 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - arguably the hardest part of the map with continuous circles over timing changes, I highly recommend you to swap some out for sliders to increase timing leniency for players

[Sea of Misery]
00:28:639 (3) - whistle?
00:53:863 (1,2,3) - spacing here should be consistent, looks better visually
00:56:268 (1) - whistle on start?
01:12:462 - did you forgot to change the sv here or is it intentionally 1.0x
01:17:874 (1,2,3) - no hitsounds?
01:26:711 (1) - unsnapped, should be on the red line

Yeah make sure you fix the timing and snapping issues, then you can call me back

defiance

503 posts

Joined July 2015

Topic Starter

defiance 2017-10-22T22:59:29+00:00

jonathanlfj wrote:
[General]
Tags in Hard are corrupted fixed

you probably want to mute the slider sides, they are very disruptive for a quiet song like this okay

01:00:467 - this timing point feels like it should be -8ms
01:26:360 - -8ms
01:27:014 - -12ms
did all of these, thank you for polishing the timing!

[Normal]
00:55:968 (8) - spacing
00:58:673 (5,6,7,1) - I understand there are timing changes here, but changing spacing like this may confuse some beginner players and generally doesn't look very clean
01:02:852 (4) - same here
01:19:977 (3,7) - spacing
diff is nice, just need to clean up the visual spacing over timing change sections and it should be solid i tried to fix all of these the best i could, the timing makes it sadfdsaf

[Sea of Misery]
00:28:639 (3) - whistle? yes
00:53:863 (1,2,3) - spacing here should be consistent, looks better visually yes
00:56:268 (1) - whistle on start? yes
01:12:462 - did you forgot to change the sv here or is it intentionally 1.0x it's intentional to give pressure on the held piano
01:17:874 (1,2,3) - no hitsounds? i put hitsounds on the heads
01:26:711 (1) - unsnapped, should be on the red line oof

Yeah make sure you fix the timing and snapping issues, then you can call me back

about jenn's diff, those sliders are allowed to go through red lines as long as they are snapped, which they weren't. so we snapped them

thank you for modding jonathan!!!

Last edited by defiance 2017-10-22T23:30:44+00:00, edited 1 time in total.

Jennifer

Beatmap Nominator

352 posts

Joined July 2015

Jennifer 2017-10-22T23:21:14+00:00

jonathanlfj wrote:
[Jennglebells' Hard]
a lot of your sliders go over red lines, that sadly won't be rankable so you have to map them out with circles or reduce the repeat sliders. Here are the places:
00:11:830 - Slider end
00:59:574 - Slider repeat
00:59:875 - Slider end
01:00:732 - Slider repeat
01:01:030 - Slider end
01:22:094 - Slider repeat
01:22:408 - Slider end

00:09:389 (3) - this map mainly follows the vocals so I felt a bit left out here skipping the vocals, see if you can break it upcircle+slider
00:47:701 - I'd add a circle here to catch the vocals as well
00:55:066 (5,6) - feel like you should map it similar to 00:53:863 (1,2,3) for consistency and vocal following
01:22:696 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - arguably the hardest part of the map with continuous circles over timing changes, I highly recommend you to swap some out for sliders to increase timing leniency for players replaced 5 and 6 with 1/2
all fix&thank you!

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jonathanlfj

Elite Mapper

2,568 posts

Joined February 2010

jonathanlfj 2017-10-23T00:19:38+00:00

hmm about the snapping i was mainly referring to the repeat sliders, since the repeats also have to be snapped, but there is no way to achieve that with how you set up some of your red lines

e.g. in Hard
00:10:610 (1) -
00:59:274 (2) -
01:21:780 (5) -

these are all unrankable as far as I'm aware :/

Jennifer

Beatmap Nominator

352 posts

Joined July 2015

Jennifer 2017-10-23T00:45:52+00:00

my mistake, i misread
went in and edited the rhythms

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