amazing song
[General]
- White combo color (5) is too bright, try to keep it under 220 luminosity
http://i.imgur.com/sxfcYQV.pngRanking Criteria wrote:
Avoid using combo colors with ~220 luminosity or higher during kiai times. They create bright pulses which can be unpleasant to the eyes.
- 04:38:449 - conflicting settings on timing lines
[Star]
- 00:11:235 (2) - generally sliders like this look better horizontal or vertical but it's minor xd
- 00:18:092 (1,2) - blanket is ever so slightly off // 00:23:235 (2,4) -
- 00:29:560 - hs volume is pretty high here, try dropping it to about 30%?
- 00:36:653 (4) - worth ncing for downbeat?
- 00:41:087 (1,2) - i'd swap these ncs as well and move the 2 closer so it overlaps a bit more
- 00:48:476 (1) - this slider makes the stream flow a bit weird imo... idk how you'd adjust this though since it's kinda in the corner
- 01:17:293 (7,1,2,3,4,1) - you could make a nice star out of this
- 01:20:988 (2) - has less spacing but the snare is on this and not 01:21:136 (3) - o.o
- 01:21:579 (1,2) - kinda also underemphasized imo
- 01:42:712 (4,1) - this is really harsh compared to the other sliders take 01:41:677 (1,2,3) - for example (whose visual spacing could be improved a bit too since 1 and 3 are a bit close)
- 01:55:865 (3,4,5) - you could equalize this spacing too
- 01:58:229 (1) - big curvy slider but nothing to blanket
maybe
http://i.imgur.com/NWdjlGC.png? This would give more emphasis to 3 as well and it's a strong vocal so checks out to me o:
- 01:59:411 (5) - perhaps worth ncing since it's a peak in intensity?
- 02:41:530 (4,1,2) - spacing here is a bit meh
- 03:13:008 (1,2) - maybe swap ncs?
- 03:16:702 (5,6,1) - not really optimal to force a sudden stop after a stream then a streamjump right after x.x
- 03:42:860 (5,1,1) - i feel like these'd be a lot cooler as circles instead of sliders
- 03:45:520 (2,3) - i don't really understand why these are stacked but 03:46:111 (5,6) - aren't when the music is almost the same o.o
- 04:08:722 (4,5,6,7) - could center these?
http://i.imgur.com/Yf3EaqA.png- 04:19:806 (1,2,3) - ow this pattern is really loose.. like the 2 doesn't really fit with the 1 and 3 if you know what i mean...?
- 04:20:397 (3,2,3,5) - could equalize this overlapping // 04:20:101 (2,3) - stack xd
- 04:43:160 (4) - stands out so much as a really out-of-place slider compared to a lot of your sliders so far, like they've all been fairly straight/curved but this is like WHOA POINTY SHARP THINGY and yeah
- 04:46:717 (1,2,3) - pretty sure these blankets are slightly off x.x
- 04:56:754 (9) - a lot of drums/percussion getting ignored here i think might be worth mapping
I'm really sorry but I can't exactly comment much on rhythm/patterning or anything like that since what mainly irks me is the aesthetic choices you make. They kind of clash with each other in places like 04:43:160 (4) - 02:05:323 (1) - (compare to the sliders around it) 02:08:870 (1) - 02:21:875 (6) - (compare shape to sound) and so on. They feel like they don't mesh with the other slider shapes you used so well imo
Thats all from me, sorry for the somewhat useless mod but as Garden said, the quality is
decent but it could still use a lot of work in the aesthetics department
Good luck~