00:22:947 (1) and 00:31:518 (3) - should be two circles because of the drums, and the density of 00:21:072 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) and 00:24:286 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) should be reduced so they stand out instead of just being more circles. (it looks like you're following the drums here at least? Not sure)
00:30:983 (2) - and 00:31:518 (3) - NC to drums.
01:08:215 (1) - This is a strong sound in the music which should be emphasized, shouldn't put it under a sliderend when you use the same kind of pattern here 00:55:224 (6) for a weak sound.
01:09:688 (1,2,3,4,5) - This rythym is definitely wrong, the drums go like this:
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7575845 (actual position of circles is just an example).
01:10:893 (1,2) - Every other set of 1/2 sliders in this part of the song starts on a big white tick up until 01:15:715 - where the vocals change a bit. It would make more sense to replace these sliders with circles, and the circles on 01:11:429 (1,2,3,4) - with sliders.
01:16:250 (1) - There should be a circlafter this to match 01:14:108 (1,2) - .
01:39:286 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - The other kiais use more linear 1,2 patterns, only this one uses 8 with circular flow like this. The other way seems better for emphasizing the drums.
01:50:536 (3) - This long slider is very out of place, every other 1/1 slider is emphasizing a vocal note but this one ends on one. A rythym more like
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7576134 would fit better.
02:09:822 (5,6) - Using the same curved/straight slider for both of these looks better I think.
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/757615102:18:929 (1) - No drum here.
02:19:331 (2) - No drum here.
02:24:286 (1) - You're ignoring a noticable drum sound on the red tick with this slider.
02:47:590 (4) - ctrl+j for extra symmetry aesthtics tbh
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/757619802:52:679 (3,4) - Not making the player stop for a stack here would play better after 02:51:072 (1,2,3,1,2,1) - I think.
03:55:358 (1,2,1,2) - Make these parallel?