1. Alacatty (1.36 stars, 107 notes)
2. Purity (3.33 stars, 168 notes)
3. Sincerity (4.61 stars, 242 notes)

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

Filesize: 23332kb

Play Time: 02:33

popner wrote:

因为用3/4滑条跟vocal的这种方法比较特殊，一般是在节奏单调的地方增加变化，但是用的位置需要好好考虑，随机的话会很突兀。

NHKsFlag wrote:

skin非常棒
当然图也很棒，要我的话一开始就不知道怎么下手了lol

Flower wrote:

纯粹吐槽 no kds
一个是一开始啥节奏都没 那些note都是怎么加的？至少给点声音这样知道是自创节奏吧
开头看来还是得增加节奏感,必要的话我还会增加音效 233
一个是请不要滥用3/4（包括5/4，etc）滑条 有不少这种滑条让人很不爽
没错..目前的版本已经比1st submit好多了(汗 好像只有一处集中使用了3/4? 估计还会在mod过程中不断减少的
最后就是图好看 star :3

Quilt wrote:

hellooooo

Sincerity

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00:48:469 (2,3) - i feel weird this 1/4 rhythm. try this rhythm https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/931251
OK Tried another rhythm
00:51:469 (1,2) - delete(2) note then streach(1) slider to 00:52:014?
OK
01:47:105 (4) - delete
I know which rhythm you're trying to tell below,but it'll make quite a difference to the whole mapflow..so I decide to keep it
01:51:196 (5,6) - (6) delete then (5) streach to 01:51:742 and add note on 01:52:014
^
01:55:696 - add note
OK
02:04:560 (3) - delete
^
02:18:742 (7) - delete
^

Purity

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00:43:560 - add note?
OK

01:51:469 (2) - delete this then put 1/1 slider on 01:51:196
OK

alacat

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はなにも言うことがない　ぐっどまっぷ

thats all

really really good map U too ^^
good luck!

Shia is our idol :p

Fycho wrote:

[ alacatty]

• 
  Hihi~alacat^^ 　yo Fycho :3/
  00:37:832 (2) –I suggest you try this rhythm I want to put a whistle at here. 00:38:378 -
  
  00:40:287 (1) – move to 00:40:287 – no change.
  01:16:832 (5) –remove head’ whistle and add whistle to slider’s end nice♪ fix all my pattern.
  01:21:196 (4) -^
  01:32:105 (5) -^
  02:33:778 (2) –reduce volume because I think whistle is too noisy changed the volume 20%

Xinely wrote:

• 
  Alamoe *runs* xDDDD Xinely
  00:44:378 (2) - spacing inconsistency (0,91x) *oops* fix :3
  00:51:469 (1) - remove NC for consistency? emm keep on now.
  01:08:378 (2) - 388,208 for make diagonal? ok!
  why so perfect ;-; , nice as usual alacat Thank you <3

Hollow Wings wrote:

random mod
好安静的曲子

General

大体上这么些建议：

1. 排版：两个及以上control points的滑条是贝塞尔曲线，它并不包含圆弧，所以想要blanket多加control points比较好，比如00:29:651 (1,2) - OK
2. 音效：很多3/4的滑条可以消尾音，其他有些也可以消，这个你自己看；另外soft的clap为何浪费不用捏 这个Clap有点吵，我也找过其他音效但没能找到合适的..

Sincerity

我有强迫症所以挑了点一看就感觉巨不和谐的地方：

1. 很多地方都可以blanket，似乎有这个意思但都没做好的样子，不知道你是否想改：
   00:29:651 (1,2,3) -
   00:34:832 (2,3) - √
   00:44:923 (1,2) - √
   00:53:651 (1,3) - √
   01:31:014 (4,1) - √
   02:10:560 (2,3) -
   02:13:287 (1,2,3) - 这里包起来滑条太弯了比较难看
2. 不用确认ds光用肉眼但就可以看出这些都不是正五边形/五角星，似乎摆正五边形/五角星也没有破坏什么梗，那为何不来一发呢
   01:24:196 (1,2,3,4,5) - √
   02:04:287 (2,3,4,5,6) - 这个如果标准中间的滑条会被挡住一点
   02:17:378 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - √
3. 01:06:469 (1,2,3,4,5) - 全部弄弯（咦不要想歪w 前面直后面弯 有点变化也不坏
4. 02:33:778 (2) - 这后面的滑条尾音都能消了我一般不静音，5%可以了
   
   看了一下前面人mod，似乎节奏方面比较拙计。从个人来说就player的角度看，除了某个蓝线开打的滑条略违和外其余均ok，当然那里似乎也可以换成其他梗的样子，这个倒不是很勉强 OK
   

Purity

00:43:832 (5) - 不是跟vocal么，这个滑条怎么回事，宁可空拍换个梗 修改了节奏
01:48:196 (1,2,3,4) - 做成一个弧度的比较好 这个弧度还可以啦

其实个人觉得这曲子不太适合用折线滑条0.0 0.0

这图太安静了mod得快睡着233
good luck

Awaken wrote:

irc mod

12:00 Awaken: 00:37:832 (3,4,5) - 这里总觉得不如直的好看._.
12:02 Awaken: 01:42:469 (2,1) - 这里stack没弄好?0.02
12:03 Autumn: 唔 irc mod？
12:03 Awaken: 恩owo
12:03 Autumn: 好 你继续
12:04 Awaken: 02:13:287 (4,5) - 这两个好像包的不是很好..
12:04 Autumn: Fix
12:05 Awaken: 02:27:233 (2) - 这个可以考虑一下轨迹和1的一样（我在说什么
12:06 Autumn: 唔 这个之前是和你说的一样
12:06 Autumn: 但是会造成不可避免的遮挡
12:06 Awaken: 是吗0.0
12:07 Autumn: 嗯 后来改掉的
12:07 Awaken: 完了 到purity XD
12:07 Autumn: 其他两个难度你稍微看下就行，直接连着这里的po到thread里就行
12:08 Autumn: 我得先吃午饭了 ;w;
12:08 Awaken: hao 233
12:09 Awaken: 这个应该去NC吧 ..后面都去了
12:09 Awaken: 02:27:233 (2) -
12:09 Awaken: 错了||
12:09 Awaken: 00:23:105 (1) - 是这个
12:10 Awaken: 00:31:832 (1,2) - exchange nc Fixed，re-arranged NC
12:12 Awaken: 01:33:742 (2) - 这没包好前面的3 Fixed
12:13 Awaken: 02:29:687 (1,2) -遮住了..好像不怎么好0 0 Changed
12:16 Awaken: alacatty没什么问题._.
12:16 Awaken: 完了w

lkx_Shore wrote:

[Insane]
kiaitime其实可以根据他那个比较重的鼓音加normal的底音 对，而且我的这个whistle还不太准。我去找BAT看看，不行就换你说的
02:20:651 (1) - 弄成这样？http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/970625 好

[Purity]
00:37:832 (2) - 红点后那部分直线没有平行，最后的描点往左拉一格 OK
02:13:014 (6) - 感觉弯点好看 稍微弄弯了一点

[Other]
No kdz,挑不出东西orz 卧槽 刚看到 我又手贱了lol
Star,Goodluck

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1. 00:20:378 (3) - Even when I first hear the song, I already imagined that the song would be mostly playing around with hitsound volume dynamics - on the opening parts, how about making the second whistle volume's lower (~10-15%)?
2. 00:30:469 (2) - Minor stuff, move the first waypoint to ~x:279 y:174 for a better encircle with (1)
3. 00:33:469 (3) - I'd put this further from (2) instead, for instance ~x:474 y:250 - then
4. 00:34:014 (1) - Stack this to (3) as you did previously - what I wanted to emphasize here is the small jump from (2) to (3) followed by a stack really fits the song here (:
5. 00:36:196 (1,2,3,4,5) - Umm, I don't think 5/4 slider really fits here - if you still want to use 5/4, I highly recommend to reduce the volume on every slider's end to ~5-10% xD
6. 00:37:832 (3,4) - Suggestion, perhaps try this flow instead:
   
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7. 00:39:469 (5,1) - Would be much nicer if they form a back-to-back flow like this:
   
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8. 00:50:514 (1) - Err, why not start this from 00:50:651 instead o.o
9. 00:53:651 (1,1,2) - Actually it feels weird you shaped (1) like that but left the gap inside empty... Perhaps try this flow to make use of it:
   
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10. 01:11:105 (2) - Your finish sound really fits the thumping sound on the entire song... Why you only used it on this slider's start only >_<
11. 01:14:105 (5) - Copy-paste the shape from (4) here? Quite obvious that (4) and (5) isn't symmetrical here
12. 01:17:651 (1,2,3) - Umm... I much prefer if (2,3) isn't stacked and made into a simple flow like this, plays much more natural imo:
    
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13. 01:20:651 (2,1,2,3) - To make it look more patterned perhaps arrange them in a tilted square like this: (sorry I made this in a hurry)
    
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14. 01:29:378 (2,2) - On these two, put the whistle on the sliders' start instead (due to the vocals)?
15. 01:44:651 (2,3) - I really, REALLY recommend to use a gradual slider speed increase here (possibly .6x -> .8x -> 1x) - should be a lot more dramatic here :3
16. 01:47:242 (x) - Add note here to follow the background drums? (there are a lot of places where you can add circle to follow the background drums on the chorus though, I'd only mention this one xD)
17. 01:50:651 (3) - ~x:141 y:314 here perhaps to form a straight line?
18. 02:20:651 (1) - I much prefer if you could add two 1/4 circles here and start the slowdown slider on 02:20:923 instead, to follow the instrument~
19. 02:33:778 (2) - This can simply be moved to ~x:162 to make the slidertick in the center (symmetrical slider) :3

1. 00:20:651 (1,3) - Is it intentional not to make these two land on the same y-axis? Barely noticeable though
2. 00:25:287 (2,3) - As your intention is to encircle the previous (2) here, consider this shape instead? (flows good with (3) too!~)
   
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3. 00:28:287 (2) - For me it would be better if this could be placed in the center (~x:256) - up to you though (:
4. 00:36:196 (1) - Umm, I don't feel a fully linear slider flows good here... Perhaps add some bezier twist here to resemble a heart pulse more:
   
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5. 00:46:014 (6,1) - Again here with the fully linear slider with sharp turns - this flows much better imo:
   
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6. 00:49:014 (3) - I'd leave this without any hitsound to emphasize the whistle on (6)
7. 00:51:469 (7) - ...and here as well (leave this without any hitsound, same reason as above)
8. 00:53:651 (3) - Minor stuff, place this in ~x:313 y:252 (slightly lower than (2)'s end) to carry its flow?
9. 01:03:196 (5) - Umm, perhaps shape this to form a hollow circle like this:
   
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10. 01:11:105 (3) - Minor stuff, move the first waypoint to ~x:154 y:263 to make its angle more even with (2)?
11. 01:16:287 (4,5,1) - These three isn't placed at the same altitude (y-axis), is this intentional?
12. 01:26:378 - Add note here and start spinner 1/2 or 1/4 later perhaps to fill the continuing beat?
13. 01:28:560 (1) - Flows more solid imo if this is made straight with (2) - up to you though:
    
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14. 01:43:832 (x) - The music continues here - add note and start spinner 1/4 or 1/2 after? As for the arrangement, a simple pentagon would do good already imo:
    
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15. 01:53:651 (3,4,5) - For me it's better if this is arranged downward-upward-downward as (1,2,3)'s flow will be continuous this way xD
16. 02:05:651 (1,2,3,4) - Err, is it intentional to let them be like this? A simple neat arc flows better and more continuously imo:
    
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17. 02:10:832 (2) - I'd place the endpoint at ~x:360 y:96 so that it'll point directly at 02:08:651 (3)'s turn (looks very neat imo) - up to you though :3
18. 02:20:651 (3) - More or less same as Sincerity (in this case : extend this into a 1/2 slider, than start spinner on 02:21:060 due to that echoing sound)
19. 02:33:778 (2) - This seems minor but adding a bezier twist a bit would make the ending much more touching, really~
    
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1. 00:22:014 (1) - imo would be nice if this can be placed in the center (~x:256) somehow...
2. 00:26:378 (1) - Also for this as well~
3. 00:53:651 (1), 00:55:832 (3),... - I'd remove the whistle on slider's end here and try to keep the whistle sounding every 4/1 on this part - 2/1 sounds too noisy imo and doesn't really fit the song...
4. 01:05:651 (2) - Perhaps add a slight curve upward here so it'll form a continuous flow with next (1) :
   
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5. 01:13:287 (1,2) - Suggestion, how about creating a back-to-back flow like this here:
   
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6. 01:26:378 (1) - Use lower volume on the slider here perhaps to let that horror (?) sound from the song stood out?
7. 01:37:287 (1,2) - While forming patterns like this you could use a 'test circle' ((3) in this picture below) in which you could delete afterwards to form a perfect circle pattern, really:
   
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8. 01:41:651 (3) - Minor stuff, put this in ~x:69 y:57 so that (1,2,3) will be placed in a straight line :3
9. 01:46:014 (1) - Suggestion, perhaps try something like this here? It flows more solidly to both its next and previous slider imo:
   
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10. 02:03:469 (1,2) - You can use the same technique I mentioned on 01:37:287 (1,2), but this one is much better already xD
11. 02:20:923 - I much prefer if the spinner is started here (the instrument stood out more imo) but it's your call here~
12. 02:24:196 (2) - Start this slider 1/2 earlier to follow the vocals?
13. 02:31:596 - Add circle here, also for the vocals? (I can see your intention here is to simplify the rhythm, but some skipped beats are more into confusing currently imo :3)