1. Hard (3,1 stars, 199 notes)
2. Normal (1,87 stars, 156 notes)

[Nemesis] wrote:

Hello M4M

Normal

00:00:534 (2,3) - forging them into a straight line like so would improve the visuals and the "rectangularness" of the map sure, that was a mistake from my side
00:06:898 (4,1,2) - these spacings are identical, yet 00:07:352 (1,2) - is a 2/1 snap and nothing really emphasizes that. I feel like these two sections should feel differently since they're snapped differently also I believe the underwhelming presence of beats at this moment justifies using a lower spacing. Moreover, the player has 1 second to realise the spacing changed.
00:30:989 (1,2) - maybe reposition (2) so that it lines up with (1) a little bit? yess
00:39:398 (4) - this slider looks kinda ugly, maybe recenter the white anchor? sure
01:11:898 (2,3) - I think this spacing is a little too high for a normal, I'm no expert but I believe stacking (3) on (2) is gonna feel a bit better I believe this is okay. Stacking it would make it harder to play actually since the pattern is stuck at the top of the screen, using a slightly higher spacing (which is somewhat justified by the pronounced beat the slider is snapped on) makes it actually more readable in my opinion.
01:18:261 (1,2,3,4) - (1) seems to be standing out a little too much, how about using the same angle you used for (2,3,4)? sure
01:26:443 (2,2) - stack these up for aesthetics it would break the spacing unfortunately. Anyway there is a couple of seconds between those objects, so no problem

Hard

00:02:352 (2,4) - if you ctrl+g them you might end up with a more consistent flow (reposition the circles afterwards though) I do not like this ;w;
00:18:261 (1,2,1) - same spacing issue I mentioned in Normal same thing then xp
00:32:807 (1,2,3) - spacings between these are kinda contradictory, (3) is snapped closer to (2) than (2) to (1), yet it's spaced higher for some reason. Why did you go for that inconsistency? to mark the slowdown in the song
00:37:352 (4) - soften the curve there, I believe it's gonna line up with 00:36:443 (1) - a bit better did it a bit
00:46:443 (1,2,3) - I believe this sound isn't as strong for a jump like this I actually like it, if someone else complain, I guess I will rearrange it
00:47:352 (1,1) - not a fan of these slider shape varieties why tho
01:03:489 (5) - move the white anchor exactly one pixel up, it's gonna look much better than you think, trust me True!
01:34:170 - since it's a hard I'm pretty sure you can add a circle there, it's a pretty strong sound after all. mmhhhh, not sure, I'll think about it

aight all from me, best of luck :3

1. Utilise un background JPG au lieu de PNG

1. 00:32:807 (1,2) - Je remarque que tu utilises des whistles pour ces deux cercles, par contre, si on regarde un peu plus tôt à 00:21:898 (1) - , le combo complet contient le même son que les deux cercles, mais ils n'ont pas de whistles. Ce que je peux te suggérer, c'est de supprimer les whistles des deux cercles afin que ça soit pareil avec le combo avant.
2. 00:36:443 (1) - Puisque c'est le début de la section du kiai, tu pourrais ajouter un finish sur le début de ce slider afin de représenter le début de la nouvelle section. Ça permet aussi de distinguer le changement de mesure.
3. 01:30:989 (1,2) - Avec tes hitsounds, tu ne joues pas de la bonne façon avec les instruments. Je te suggère de supprimer le whistle sur le début du slider (2) et d'ajouter des whistles sur la fin des deux sliders. De cette façon, ça te permet de mettre l'accent sur le piano.
4. 01:34:170 (1) - C'est la seule diff qui a un cercle à ce moment avant le spinner. Je te suggère de le supprimer, ça serait plus facile pour les beginners et ça serait plus constant avec les deux autres difficultés.
5. Je n'ai rien d'autre à ajouter par rapport à la map en général. C'est une difficulté très simple avec des patterns constants. La seule chose, par contre, tu devrais regarder tes timings points, parce qu'il y en a qui ne sont pas utile.
   Dans la box ci-dessous, je t'ai highlight ceux qui tu devrais supprimer.
   
   Clickie

   

1. 00:06:898 (4) - Si tu veux jouer un peu avec le contraste du mouvement, je te suggère de stack ce cercle avec le cercle (2). Puisque le flow va naturellement vers le haut, tu peux le break en le plaçant vers le bas au lieu.
2. 00:07:352 (1) - à partir de cet objet jusqu'à 00:33:716 (2) - tu as placé les objets d'une façon où que tu dois faire un rectangle continue vers le haut dans le sens contraire de l'aiguille. Tu pourrais facilement arrêter ça en plaçant 00:13:489 (2,3) - vers le bas et recontinuer de la droite vers la gauche. (Si tu ne comprend pas, tu me le dira)
   
   Clickie

   
3. 00:29:170 (1,2) - Les cercles ne sont pas alignées!1!!11!
4. 00:38:943 (2) - J'ai de la difficulté à voir pourquoi ce cercle il est placé ici. Je te suggère fortement de le déplacer à 00:38:716 - au lieu. Ça serait plus évident vu le rythme des derniers objets. (aka 00:36:443 (1,2) - )
5. 00:43:034 (4) - Vu les vocals et les instruments, je ne comprend pas pourquoi tu as décidé de mettre un deuxième reverse arrow. Pourtant, 00:43:716 - cet endroit est 'worth' pour être cliquable surtout que c'est de début d'une nouvelle mesure (Ce n'est pas comme 00:57:125 (3) - qui est approprié puisque le moment le plus important est le prochain cercle)
6. 01:12:807 (4) - New combo?

1. 00:04:625 (3,4) - Pas parfaitement alignés
2. 00:14:170 (4,1) - Pas parfaitement alignés
3. 00:18:034 (4) - Penserais-tu que ça serait trop edgy si tu déplaçais le cercle un peu vers la droite pour créer le même effet que 00:15:307 (3,4) - ? xd - Ça pourrait bien faire puisque la chanson a un bruit un peu plus fort au moment du cercle (4).
   
   Clickie

   
4. 01:03:261 (4) - Je vois bien un petit jump à cet endroit.
   
   Clickie

   c'est presque une blague mon affaire

Gabe wrote:

alo l'espace

General

1. Utilise un background JPG au lieu de PNG ah ui faudra qu'j'le fasse uwu

Normal

1. 00:07:352 (1) - à partir de cet objet jusqu'à 00:33:716 (2) - tu as placé les objets d'une façon où que tu dois faire un rectangle continue vers le haut dans le sens contraire de l'aiguille. Tu pourrais facilement arrêter ça en plaçant 00:13:489 (2,3) - vers le bas et recontinuer de la droite vers la gauche. (Si tu ne comprend pas, tu me le dira) J'ai tout réarrangé autrement
   
   Clickie

   
2. 00:43:034 (4) - Vu les vocals et les instruments, je ne comprend pas pourquoi tu as décidé de mettre un deuxième reverse arrow. Pourtant, 00:43:716 - cet endroit est 'worth' pour être cliquable surtout que c'est de début d'une nouvelle mesure (Ce n'est pas comme 00:57:125 (3) - qui est approprié puisque le moment le plus important est le prochain cercle) je trouve que ça fait mieux pour suivre les 1/4 dans la musique

Hard

1. 01:03:261 (4) - Je vois bien un petit jump à cet endroit. Je préfère pô, je trouve que justement avoir un spacing régulier c'est plus approprié pour le slowdown de la musique
   
   Clickie

   c'est presque une blague mon affaire

by la terre

YuzukiEba wrote:

Bonsoir

GENERAL

Rajoute plus de tags owo oki

NORMAL

00:35:989 - petit son inaperçue
00:44:170 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2) - Les hitsounds sont trop bas
01:12:580 - 01:18:261 (1) - Kiai ?
01:17:807 (4,5,1) - Bizarre le pattern

En tous ça fait plaisir de voir une beatmap AVEC DU RYTHME ^^ ( c dur en std )

1. "PLAYER" → Album name (http://www.yamahamusic.co.jp/artist/det ... tist_id=73)
2. 中田 ヤスタカ (Nakata Yasutaka) → composer and record producer
3. こしじま としこ (Koshijima Toshiko) → vocalist
4. → information taken from there: http://www.yamahamusic.co.jp/artist/ind ... tist_id=73

Ponoyoshi wrote:

Easy

00:06:443 (2) - pas besoin de nc ça

00:34:398 (1) - nc ça

01:03:489 (1) - beaucoup trop rapide pour une easy

normal

00:06:443 (3) - T'aurais pu faire un slider 1/2 ici Imo pour plus emphasise le changement dans le song

https://imgur-archive.ppy.sh/GSc5iS0.png 00:30:989 (1) - thinking face utilise CTRL Shift S pour faire ce genre de chose

01:03:489 (1) - c'est également un peu fast je trouve

01:06:443 (2) - pareil que pour 30sec, copy past le slider c'est tellement plus propre


un peu la flemme de mod le reste, back in 2k8 mapset xD

Pachiru wrote:

jpe gd?

M a r v o l l o wrote:

[General]

1. Some minor issues:
   - no combo colours
   - widescreen while there's no sb
   - countdown is enabled, though you can use it if you really want
2. modding assistant tells there are some unsnapped green lines on ez and nm

alright

[Hard]

1. I think AR8 is kinda high for 132 bpm song hard diff because even my Insane on 124 bpm has AR8. What about AR7? changed
2. 00:34:398 (3) - needs NC because you placed them every new tact and this slider crosses the tact's start. kk
3. 00:44:625 (1) - 00:46:443 (1) - 00:48:261 (1) - is it really required to place NCs there? They break the system of placing NCs every tact.
   NC issues also go to the end part yes because the song changes rhythms as well
4. 00:53:261 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - these sounds aren't worth being circles with such space. This rythm would fit better https://puu.sh/wWaa0/a66386aa37.jpg also you used it at the same sounds here 00:54:625 (1,2,3,4,5) - kk
5. 00:59:170 (3,4) - try to avoid this overlap, it looks ugly. same goes for 01:00:989 (3,4) - I like it :'(

[Normal]

1. AR6 is too high for normal especially on such BPM. Yes, RC allows you to use AR6 but we usually use high AR on high BPM songs so you know what I mean sure
2. what about using 1.2 ds on 1/2 beats so we can avoid such ugly overlaps? but they're not ugly uwu
3. 00:07:352 (1) - is there any reason why this is spaced so far from the previous object? mistake from my side lmao, fixed
4. 01:12:125 (3) - inconsistent spacing done on purpose
5. 01:30:989 (3) - missed NC boop

[Easy]

1. DS 1.3 would work better Ovoui told me he doesn't want to fix that
2. I cannot catch your NCing, you always use different system of NC placing. In the beginning you used it every tact, a bit later every two, later just no ncs then two random ncs etc. Please make it more logical. Made it better

I guess this is an oldschool map. Not what I like but I think some people might love it. Best of luck~ ♥

Mir wrote:

hi hi

[Normal]
Kinda same about DS but you already said you didn't wanna change it overlaps make it easier to read
MA is telling me lots of unsnapped greenlines. fixed

SPOILER

01:05:530
01:11:894
01:34:166
01:34:621
01:35:076
01:35:530
01:35:985
01:36:439
01:36:894
01:37:348
01:37:803
01:38:257
01:38:712
01:39:166
01:39:621
01:40:076

- 00:33:716 (2,3) - Maybe making these slightly closer would make the 1/2 more obvious? changed
- 00:43:034 (4) - eee 00:57:125 (3,3) - can't be trusted owo why tho
- 01:15:307 (2) - Slider end sounds like it should have a slider instead like this instead? but, that would ignore the main instrument :'( I purposedly ignored this beat to leave a small 1/1 break

[Hard]
- 00:44:625 (1,1,1) - I don't think this is ever used again and that's kinda sad cuz I like this idea (also kinda looks random) I didn't want to abuse it
- 00:47:352 (1,1) - No same shape? changed
- 00:49:625 (3,4,5) - 4 has more emphasis than 5 but 5 is stronger no? but it's a star

Otherwise fine I think.

Good luck!!

Mir wrote:

hi Hey o/

[Ovoui's Easy]
SV is really low and that causes 1/1 overlaps which isn't advised according to the RC guidelines. It's not recomanded by the RC but i don't the see probem in this map. Moreover overlaping make the map easier to read because when the player will focus on a circle he will see instantly the next object thanks to the overlap.
You also have a spinner that violates several guidelines regarding recovery time and spinning time at 01:03:489 (1) - would recommend removing it and replacing it with a circle on 01:03:489 - The guidlne isn't clear enough, 4 beats is too vague and depends of the bpm of the music, so the guideline is not general enough and shouldn't be applied imo. I don't want put any 1/2 gap between two hitobject, it'd feel weird it'd be the only in the difficulty.

SPOILER

- 00:29:170 (1,2,3,4) - Don't really get why you decided to vary the slider shapes so much despite no change in the music really. To make the pattern less boring.

Otherwise it's just overall issues.



Good luck!! Thanks for the mod !

1. 01:27:352 (1,2) - maybe you can do 1/2 sliders here, like you did earlier (although you only used repeats) but this should fit since it's not gonna be followed by more hits with low rhythmic spacing.

1. 01:02:807 (2,1) - Probably not recommended to have that big of a gap to the centre on a normal when a spinner comes
2. 01:05:080 - might wanna add a note here? maybe not since the spinner is still close but eh
3. 01:15:307 (2,3) - why does the pattern change here?

1. 00:43:488 (7) - there's barely any sound here
2. 01:03:489 (5) - could use some beautification

1. 01:03:489 (1) - I felt this spinner wasn't leaving a decent amount of recovery time for beginners, so I took a look at Mir's mod and noticed he mentioned it before. Your reply was pretty much that the guideline wasn't clear, so let's do some math with facts here. The guideline is based on maps with an approximation of 180BPM. Each beat in 180 BPM is 333ms long, so 4 beats would be 1332ms. This spinner leaves 909ms of recovery time, which is a difference worth pointing out. So it would be nice to remove this spinner and do something else.

1. 00:53:489 (3) - You're touching a bit the life bar on the default skin
2. 01:05:530 - unsnapped green line here
3. 01:11:898 (2,3) - why u change the spacing if it's the same combo xp hmm shouldn't (3) have nc cuz of the sudden sv change? hmm what about moving the sv change to 01:12:807 - ?
4. 01:11:902 - another unsnapped green line (are u even using these lines for something? they're just a few ms before the lines that make an actual thing xp)
5. 00:43:034 (4) - 00:57:125 (3) - These are the only places where you use a slider with more than one repeat, maybe do something else?

1. 00:00:080 (1,2) - 00:01:898 (1,2) - These two patterns are following the same rhythm, yet they have a very different spacing, any special reason for that? Looks inconsistent. Seems you used the same as the first one at 00:03:716 (1,2) - so I guess the second pattern's spacing is by mistake?
2. 00:05:534 (1,2) - I see you're using these antijumps with the same spacing as the previous two circles, but it's a bit awkward. I guess the nc is something to help with that, but I suggest to at least place them differently to create more visual contrast between the patterns because the things that they are mapped to sound very different from each other and one is 1/2 and the other 1/1 circle clicking. What about placing them like this?
3. 00:41:898 (1,2) - Pls slant them at the same angle
4. 00:47:352 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - You should do the same effect you did with 00:44:625 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - for some consistency there, and also looks pretty cool cuz of the way it represents the song
5. 00:50:080 (5) - It's a pretty pattern but this circle screams for a jump. The sound here is very strong to just leave it without any emphasis :c
6. 01:02:125 (2) - Maybe like this to keep up a bit more with the theme?
7. 01:09:170 (1,2) - This blanket can be improved

lazyboy007 wrote:

Hello :3

[Normal]

1. 01:02:807 (2,1) - Probably not recommended to have that big of a gap to the centre on a normal when a spinner comes agreed
2. 01:05:080 - might wanna add a note here? maybe not since the spinner is still close but eh pause after the spinner, yeah
3. 01:15:307 (2,3) - why does the pattern change here? small pause again to transition with the next pattern

I find it weird that you start with full square gimmick and just randomly abandon it

[Hard]

1. 00:43:488 (7) - there's barely any sound here but there are vocals here, and the synth playing as well
2. 01:03:489 (5) - could use some beautification I'll try uwu

Again weird how you abandon the 90° gimmick. the 90° gimmick is here to underline the predominance of the drums in the song, when other instruments are taking over, there is no reason to keep using it (using it throughout the map would make it boring as well).

That's all for me, gl! thank you!

ezek wrote:

Hellow OwO HELLO ○W○

[Normal]

1. 00:53:489 (3) - You're touching a bit the life bar on the default skin should be better now
2. 01:05:530 - unsnapped green line here no idea how it got there xp
3. 01:11:898 (2,3) - why u change the spacing if it's the same combo xp hmm shouldn't (3) have nc cuz of the sudden sv change? hmm what about moving the sv change to 01:12:807 - ? it's here to emphasize the drums coming back, so the SV change has to be there, changed the NC tho
4. 01:11:902 - another unsnapped green line (are u even using these lines for something? they're just a few ms before the lines that make an actual thing xp) fix fix fix
5. 00:43:034 (4) - 00:57:125 (3) - These are the only places where you use a slider with more than one repeat, maybe do something else? because that's the only time the song does something like this, and I have to make it stand out. I fixed the second one, but kept the first one the way it is.

[Hard]

1. 00:00:080 (1,2) - 00:01:898 (1,2) - These two patterns are following the same rhythm, yet they have a very different spacing, any special reason for that? Looks inconsistent. Seems you used the same as the first one at 00:03:716 (1,2) - so I guess the second pattern's spacing is by mistake? It was not a mistake, that spacing is higher for structural reasons, I reduced the spacing but I can't make it 0.8x just like the other ones.
2. 00:05:534 (1,2) - I see you're using these antijumps with the same spacing as the previous two circles, but it's a bit awkward. I guess the nc is something to help with that, but I suggest to at least place them differently to create more visual contrast between the patterns because the things that they are mapped to sound very different from each other and one is 1/2 and the other 1/1 circle clicking. What about placing them like this? the point of this map is to let the player anticipate spacing differences judging by the intensity of the beats. I used the same spacing on purpose so that the player learn how to handle spacing differences based on the intensity of the song. Making the spacing clearly different would break that urpose. Also the antijumps are here to emphasize that increase in intensity because 00:05:079 (4,5) - and 00:05:534 (1,2) - clearly sound different. It breaks the flow on purpose in order to accentuate 00:06:443 (3) - which is the climax of that increase in intensity. I'm pretty exhausted at the moment so I have no idea if what I'm telling even makes sense, but yeah... xD also, your pattern suggestion wouldn't work as it would break the 90° gimmick :'(
3. 00:41:898 (1,2) - Pls slant them at the same angle actually, it's not going in the same direction because I wanted (2) to show that the song is changing it's rhythm, contrasting with 00:40:989 (3,1) - being symmetrical, which represents the monotonic aspect of the song. and I think it looks cooler this way xD
4. 00:47:352 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - You should do the same effect you did with 00:44:625 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - for some consistency there, and also looks pretty cool cuz of the way it represents the song I intended to do that in the first place, but I realised I would be abusing the same pattern too much making it less interesting. Also, in the end I decided to map 00:47:352 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - differently because compared to 00:44:625 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - , the piano is less present and 00:44:625 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - was mainly mapped like this because of the piano.
5. 00:50:080 (5) - It's a pretty pattern but this circle screams for a jump. The sound here is very strong to just leave it without any emphasis :c why does everyone want to break my cute little star ;w;, anyway I changed it a bit
6. 01:02:125 (2) - Maybe like this to keep up a bit more with the theme? mh, I did a curved slider here to show that the song is getting smoother here, making an angled slider would break the purpose of this slider
7. 01:09:170 (1,2) - This blanket can be improved damned I suck at this, tried improving it!

Interesting unusual map, I'm just concerned about the Easy; it would be nice if the mapper agrees with all the changes proposed.