you really have issues reconciling between layering and playability - to no wonder00:27:212 (27212|2,27416|0,27620|1,27926|1) - i dont get every single note in this whole section, can you decide to follow either a) the vocals or b) the background synths or c) the """""percussion" or else everything looks like theyre randomly placed - emphasize on the beats that you
want it was kinda piano or keyboard sound that sometimes follows vocal00:50:426 (50426|2,50477|3,50528|2) - whats this for
changed before you modded it, havent updated yet01:19:100 (79100|2) - ghost - more like no point for it to be here anyway
^01:25:987 -
why do you model your streams like that do you not think that it matters? please keep in mind that this is 147 bpm and youre dealing with 1/8s
i can model it better with all steams way to the left of right without ever changing direction or else i make 3 (not 2) instead for the turn and anyway, its jumptrillable so keep this 01:29:202 (89202|2,89253|1,89304|2,89355|1) - shit transition into jumptrill (i hope you know that 01:29:253 - these things are meant to be jumptrilled)
again, fixed before you modded it01:32:110 (92110|2,92110|3) - you missed beats here
if you meant the tom sound, read above01:33:641 (93641|1,93641|0) - why jump this? is it necessary?
yes it is, i dont want my map boring with all jacks here and please, listen to the sound 01:33:641 (93641|1,93743|1,93845|1) - look what youve done
shifted the double after, the jump is totally fine01:34:865 (94865|3,94865|2) - again
^i dont know about you, but sounds like 01:34:712 (94712|2,94763|1,94814|0,94865|3,94865|2,94916|1) - indicate /flow/ - what youve done with it is make something that is quite the antithesis of \flow\ - jacks
for fun, really, it its short, less than 1 beat finger wont hurt with thatthis isnt the best example but 01:35:579 (95579|1,95681|1,95732|0,95783|1) - this is a way better one illustrating my point
learn to ease up on the layering especially for sounds that are
different from the situation or else everything will play like a fuckfest - thats how people do emphasis anyway
keep, havent got better pattern01:36:906 (96906|1,96906|0,96957|2,97008|1,97008|0,97722|2,97722|3,97773|1,97824|2,97824|3) - refer to above - there needs to be at least some form of differentiation between these two pairs of beats
to me theres already a very significant difference between each of their emphasis in the song, so its up to you to decide which one best fits
^01:39:763 (99763|1,99865|0,99865|1,99967|0) - not sure if you look out for these
^01:41:141 (101141|3,101192|2,101192|1,101243|0,101294|3,101345|2,101396|0,101396|1,101447|3) - 01:41:089 (101089|2,101141|3,101192|2) -01:45:069 (105069|3,105120|2,105171|3,105273|2,105375|3,105375|2,105477|3) - 01:46:753 (106753|2,106804|3,106855|2,106906|3) - 01:47:824 (107824|0,107926|0,108028|0) - 01:53:538 (113538|1,113641|1,113743|1) -
plays really bad, see above for further elaboration ^01:43:402 (103402|1,103470|2) - 1/8s not 1/6
pretty sure its 1/6 if you count the sound01:48:641 (108641|1,108692|2,108743|1,108794|2,108845|1) - why no form of (obvious) discrimination for 01:48:845 (108845|1) - ?
actually its playable01:49:967 (109967|0,109967|1,110018|2,110069|0,110069|1,110783|3,110783|2,110834|1,110885|2,110885|3,110885|0) - same deal
same reason to all those ^ sign01:51:600 - miss out on this beat? you started the LNs on the bass beat lmao
fixed01:52:110 (112110|2,112110|3,112110|1,112518|0,112518|2,112518|1) - same pitches
fixed01:56:804 (116804|1,116804|0,116855|2,116855|3,116906|1,116906|0,116957|3,116957|2) - does not scale with density properly - 01:56:396 (116396|2,116396|0,116498|0,116600|1,116600|3,116702|3) - from this to a 1/8 jumptrill
are you expecting to change those jumpstream to stream or the 1 note earlier beat into 2 note?01:58:232 (118232|2,118334|3,118334|2) - these are then 1/6s
02:02:212 (122212|2,122314|2,122314|3,122416|3) - pretty sure you dont notice these but these are on the same hand so do you think the quad transitions are balanced
nah, its fine02:02:314 - why are almost all the chords in the center
hithat02:06:294 (126294|3,126396|3,126396|2,126498|2) - 02:07:110 (127110|1,127212|1,127212|0,127314|0) - erm
yep, read above02:09:559 (129559|3,129661|2,129661|3,129763|2) - just because they appear on each hand consecutively doesnt make them any less bad to play anyway
02:14:457 (134457|1,134559|0,134559|1,134661|0) - why is this section so plain anyway there are vocals in the background you couldve done something like
from 02:13:334 - this or something to keep the intensity up rather than have it be like uhhhhh QUAD uhhhhhhhh QUAD uhhhhhhhhh QUAD it apears lazy and gets boring and tiring fast
still, keep the quad for some reason02:24:559 (144559|1,144559|0,144610|3,144610|2,144661|0,144661|1,144712|3,144712|2,144763|0,144763|1) - same deal as before
same reason as well02:24:763 - how did you put the lns why arent there any 02:29:661 - here
fixed02:34:559 (154559|0,154661|0,154763|0) - bad transition
keep, triples on the beginning caused it and the triples is for kick02:37:314 (157314|1,157314|0,157518|1,157518|2) - bad transition into vocals, the bass beats should take precedence because youre entering into a section that exclusively follows the wubs
not following vocals actuallyhot tip!!!
02:38:641 (158641|3,158641|2,158743|2,158743|3,159049|0,159049|1,159151|0,159151|1) - dont put these things for no reason other than "its the easiest to play out of the jumpjacks possible"
the main issue is how little manipulation you need for these things - its just wristjacking stuff
from 02:37:926 - you can (and should) capitalize on the vocals
02:37:824 - starts off somewhat bold, because vocal
will apply 02:38:232 (158232|1,158232|2,158232|0,158334|3,158334|0,158436|1,158436|2,158538|3,158641|1,158641|2,158641|0) - part requires some form of manipulation due to the [14][23] thing, ends with 02:38:641 - [34][12] as a rest
its almost like musical composition but not really
you can decide which periods to have the manipulation thing but you need to remember that players need to rest no matter how much of a sadist you are
same thing applies for all kiai times unless i state differently in which case i will tell you anyway
03:14:763 (194763|2,194865|2,194967|2,195375|0,195477|0,195579|0) - dont feel like theyre justified, the bass beats and the snare are completely separate entities and should be treated as such, not lumped together in one jack
keep, this is not bad either03:16:600 (196600|3,196600|2,196651|1,196651|0,196702|2,196702|3) - you should really not do 1/8 jumptrills actually, you missed a beat anyway 03:16:753 -
note added, keep the jumptrill anyway03:17:008 - same statement about quads
03:27:212 (207212|0,207212|3,207212|2,207212|1,207620|2,207620|0,207620|1) - why are you graduating from quads to triples
idk what you mean03:27:110 (207110|2,207110|3,207212|3,207212|0,207212|2,207212|1,207416|0,207416|3,207518|2,207518|1,207620|1,207620|2,207620|0) - if these are the bass beat pairs in play then just keep the snares as triples
i think ill keep03:29:865 (209865|3,209865|2,209916|1,209916|0,209967|2,209967|3,210018|1,210018|0,210069|2,210069|3) - same, weird density jump
^03:57:824 (237824|1,237824|0,237875|3,237926|1,237926|2,237977|0,238028|3,238028|2,238079|1,238130|0,238130|3) - i feel like you started this too early
its faded in03:58:845 (238845|2,238845|3,238896|0,238947|2,238947|1,238998|3) - it shouldve ended here to transit into the 1/12s too
even there was strong kick, 1/8 sound didnt stop04:25:375 (265375|2,265477|2,265579|2) - a little weird but i guess its fine
04:38:283 (278283|2) - same ghost
yep04:41:498 (281498|2,281498|1,281600|1,281600|2,281702|2,281702|1,281804|1,281804|2,281906|2,281906|1) - no
04:41:498 (281498|0,281498|1,281498|2,281600|1,281600|2,281600|3,281702|0,281702|2,281702|1,281804|1,281804|3,281804|2) - these are disgustingly overemphasized, to no good reason too - the sounds are weak as hell and you given them triples? i want to live in a society like that
changed to double04:45:171 - im not sure about you but im sure this part is way different in intensity from 04:47:008 - and from 04:48:436 - and from 04:49:457 - but HAHA theyre all equally emphasized so what gives? do you really want that 6* rating? hot tip if you want to - make 1/16 jumptrills
already made 1/16 stairs actually, just ask bn dude, its same intensity04:49:661 (289661|3,289661|2,289712|0,289763|1,289763|2,289814|3,289865|1,289865|0,289916|2,289967|0,289967|3,290018|1) - stream should end at 04:49:661 - listen to the music
idk will keep this or change this part into 1/4 trill or jack04:51:294 (291294|2,291294|3,291498|2,291498|1) - ignoring the percussion is misleading as fuck here
just havent noticeskipping second chorus, same deal as above
third chorus
05:20:273 (320273|0,320273|2,320273|3,320324|1,320375|3,320375|2) - you over did the emphasis here
just listen05:20:885 (320885|3,320885|2,321089|2,321089|1,321089|0) - arent you missing something
added05:21:294 (321294|0,321294|1,321498|1,321498|3,321498|2) - i heard hihats are doubled - oh look 05:18:028 (318028|3,318028|2,318130|1,318130|0,318232|2,318232|1,318232|3) -
idk what you meant05:23:436 (323436|2,323436|3,323538|1,323538|3,323538|0) - missing something again?
nope, double is too earlymy main point is camellia himself already tried to make this part different by including distorted voice samples and you should definitely capitalize on that
just keep in mind how much emphasis you should give to each sample
05:40:681 - same thing as above, this part is different in intensity from 05:41:089 - and from 05:41:498 - but theyre all that same goddamn 1/8 jumpstream
are you really expecting me to give 1/16 right now?05:43:845 (343845|2,343896|3,343947|2) - somewhat shit transition
05:45:477 (345477|2,345528|3,345579|2) - same
05:50:477 (350477|0,350528|1,350579|0) - same
keepremember what i said about how you make streams? yeah same thing here
05:58:028 (358028|0,358079|1,358130|2,358181|1,358232|2,358232|0,358283|1,358334|0) - what the fuck is this
yeah i wont point things like this out anymore, you should know the drill
kinda fixed itblah blah ending get me out of here