you really have issues reconciling between layering and playability - to no wonder00:27:212 (27212|2,27416|0,27620|1,27926|1) - i dont get every single note in this whole section, can you decide to follow either a) the vocals or b) the background synths or c) the """""percussion" or else everything looks like theyre randomly placed - emphasize on the beats that you
want00:50:426 (50426|2,50477|3,50528|2) - whats this for
01:19:100 (79100|2) - ghost - more like no point for it to be here anyway
01:25:987 -
01:29:202 (89202|2,89253|1,89304|2,89355|1) - shit transition into jumptrill (i hope you know that 01:29:253 - these things are meant to be jumptrilled)
01:32:110 (92110|2,92110|3) - you missed beats here
01:33:641 (93641|1,93641|0) - why jump this? is it necessary? 01:33:641 (93641|1,93743|1,93845|1) - look what youve done
01:34:865 (94865|3,94865|2) - again
i dont know about you, but sounds like 01:34:712 (94712|2,94763|1,94814|0,94865|3,94865|2,94916|1) - indicate /flow/ - what youve done with it is make something that is quite the antithesis of \flow\ - jacks
this isnt the best example but 01:35:579 (95579|1,95681|1,95732|0,95783|1) - this is a way better one illustrating my point
learn to ease up on the layering especially for sounds that are
different from the situation or else everything will play like a fuckfest - thats how people do emphasis anyway
01:36:906 (96906|1,96906|0,96957|2,97008|1,97008|0,97722|2,97722|3,97773|1,97824|2,97824|3) - refer to above - there needs to be at least some form of differentiation between these two pairs of beats
to me theres already a very significant difference between each of their emphasis in the song, so its up to you to decide which one best fits
01:39:763 (99763|1,99865|0,99865|1,99967|0) - not sure if you look out for these
01:41:141 (101141|3,101192|2,101192|1,101243|0,101294|3,101345|2,101396|0,101396|1,101447|3) - 01:41:089 (101089|2,101141|3,101192|2) -01:45:069 (105069|3,105120|2,105171|3,105273|2,105375|3,105375|2,105477|3) - 01:46:753 (106753|2,106804|3,106855|2,106906|3) - 01:47:824 (107824|0,107926|0,108028|0) - 01:53:538 (113538|1,113641|1,113743|1) -
plays really bad, see above for further elaboration01:43:402 (103402|1,103470|2) - 1/8s not 1/6
01:48:641 (108641|1,108692|2,108743|1,108794|2,108845|1) - why no form of (obvious) discrimination for 01:48:845 (108845|1) - ?
01:49:967 (109967|0,109967|1,110018|2,110069|0,110069|1,110783|3,110783|2,110834|1,110885|2,110885|3,110885|0) - same deal
01:51:600 - miss out on this beat? you started the LNs on the bass beat lmao
01:52:110 (112110|2,112110|3,112110|1,112518|0,112518|2,112518|1) - same pitches
01:56:804 (116804|1,116804|0,116855|2,116855|3,116906|1,116906|0,116957|3,116957|2) - does not scale with density properly - 01:56:396 (116396|2,116396|0,116498|0,116600|1,116600|3,116702|3) - from this to a 1/8 jumptrill
01:58:232 (118232|2,118334|3,118334|2) - these are then 1/6s
02:02:212 (122212|2,122314|2,122314|3,122416|3) - pretty sure you dont notice these but these are on the same hand so do you think the quad transitions are balanced
02:02:314 - why are almost all the chords in the center
02:06:294 (126294|3,126396|3,126396|2,126498|2) - 02:07:110 (127110|1,127212|1,127212|0,127314|0) - erm
02:09:559 (129559|3,129661|2,129661|3,129763|2) - just because they appear on each hand consecutively doesnt make them any less bad to play anyway
02:14:457 (134457|1,134559|0,134559|1,134661|0) - why is this section so plain anyway there are vocals in the background you couldve done something like
from 02:13:334 - this or something to keep the intensity up rather than have it be like uhhhhh QUAD uhhhhhhhh QUAD uhhhhhhhhh QUAD it apears lazy and gets boring and tiring fast
02:24:559 (144559|1,144559|0,144610|3,144610|2,144661|0,144661|1,144712|3,144712|2,144763|0,144763|1) - same deal as before
02:24:763 - how did you put the lns why arent there any 02:29:661 - here
02:34:559 (154559|0,154661|0,154763|0) - bad transition
02:37:314 (157314|1,157314|0,157518|1,157518|2) - bad transition into vocals, the bass beats should take precedence because youre entering into a section that exclusively follows the wubs
hot tip!!!
02:38:641 (158641|3,158641|2,158743|2,158743|3,159049|0,159049|1,159151|0,159151|1) - dont put these things for no reason other than "its the easiest to play out of the jumpjacks possible"
the main issue is how little manipulation you need for these things - its just wristjacking stuff
from 02:37:926 - you can (and should) capitalize on the vocals
02:37:824 - starts off somewhat bold, because vocal
02:38:232 (158232|1,158232|2,158232|0,158334|3,158334|0,158436|1,158436|2,158538|3,158641|1,158641|2,158641|0) - part requires some form of manipulation due to the [14][23] thing, ends with 02:38:641 - [34][12] as a rest
its almost like musical composition but not really
you can decide which periods to have the manipulation thing but you need to remember that players need to rest no matter how much of a sadist you are
same thing applies for all kiai times unless i state differently in which case i will tell you anyway
03:14:763 (194763|2,194865|2,194967|2,195375|0,195477|0,195579|0) - dont feel like theyre justified, the bass beats and the snare are completely separate entities and should be treated as such, not lumped together in one jack
03:16:600 (196600|3,196600|2,196651|1,196651|0,196702|2,196702|3) - you should really not do 1/8 jumptrills actually, you missed a beat anyway 03:16:753 -
03:17:008 - same statement about quads
03:27:212 (207212|0,207212|3,207212|2,207212|1,207620|2,207620|0,207620|1) - why are you graduating from quads to triples
03:27:110 (207110|2,207110|3,207212|3,207212|0,207212|2,207212|1,207416|0,207416|3,207518|2,207518|1,207620|1,207620|2,207620|0) - if these are the bass beat pairs in play then just keep the snares as triples
03:29:865 (209865|3,209865|2,209916|1,209916|0,209967|2,209967|3,210018|1,210018|0,210069|2,210069|3) - same, weird density jump
03:57:824 (237824|1,237824|0,237875|3,237926|1,237926|2,237977|0,238028|3,238028|2,238079|1,238130|0,238130|3) - i feel like you started this too early
03:58:845 (238845|2,238845|3,238896|0,238947|2,238947|1,238998|3) - it shouldve ended here to transit into the 1/12s too
04:25:375 (265375|2,265477|2,265579|2) - a little weird but i guess its fine
04:38:283 (278283|2) - same ghost
04:41:498 (281498|2,281498|1,281600|1,281600|2,281702|2,281702|1,281804|1,281804|2,281906|2,281906|1) - no
04:41:498 (281498|0,281498|1,281498|2,281600|1,281600|2,281600|3,281702|0,281702|2,281702|1,281804|1,281804|3,281804|2) - these are disgustingly overemphasized, to no good reason too - the sounds are weak as hell and you given them triples? i want to live in a society like that
04:45:171 - im not sure about you but im sure this part is way different in intensity from 04:47:008 - and from 04:48:436 - and from 04:49:457 - but HAHA theyre all equally emphasized so what gives? do you really want that 6* rating? hot tip if you want to - make 1/16 jumptrills
04:49:661 (289661|3,289661|2,289712|0,289763|1,289763|2,289814|3,289865|1,289865|0,289916|2,289967|0,289967|3,290018|1) - stream should end at 04:49:661 - listen to the music
04:51:294 (291294|2,291294|3,291498|2,291498|1) - ignoring the percussion is misleading as fuck here
skipping second chorus, same deal as above
third chorus
05:20:273 (320273|0,320273|2,320273|3,320324|1,320375|3,320375|2) - you over did the emphasis here
05:20:885 (320885|3,320885|2,321089|2,321089|1,321089|0) - arent you missing something
05:21:294 (321294|0,321294|1,321498|1,321498|3,321498|2) - i heard hihats are doubled - oh look 05:18:028 (318028|3,318028|2,318130|1,318130|0,318232|2,318232|1,318232|3) -
05:23:436 (323436|2,323436|3,323538|1,323538|3,323538|0) - missing something again?
my main point is camellia himself already tried to make this part different by including distorted voice samples and you should definitely capitalize on that
just keep in mind how much emphasis you should give to each sample
05:40:681 - same thing as above, this part is different in intensity from 05:41:089 - and from 05:41:498 - but theyre all that same goddamn 1/8 jumpstream
05:43:845 (343845|2,343896|3,343947|2) - somewhat shit transition
05:45:477 (345477|2,345528|3,345579|2) - same
05:50:477 (350477|0,350528|1,350579|0) - same
remember what i said about how you make streams? yeah same thing here
05:58:028 (358028|0,358079|1,358130|2,358181|1,358232|2,358232|0,358283|1,358334|0) - what the fuck is this
yeah i wont point things like this out anymore, you should know the drill
blah blah ending get me out of here
this gives dumpstreams a bad rep esp. when youre just using (or should i say abusing) it for star rating and difficulty, with a very evident lack in concern for any form of emphasis and the like