general pattern first. SVs will be handled later
00:33:130 (33130|3) - i saw this particularly follow vocal but its somehow empty at - 00:33:334 - and - 00:33:436 - which is completely contradicted with most of your layering intention in this intro. tldr add a note at - - 00:33:334 - and - 00:33:436 -
00:51:294 (51294|0,51294|1,51498|2,51498|1) - eh kinda dont get why is this chorded somehow. there's no particular strong noise here
01:22:722 (82722|0,82824|0,82926|1,83028|1,83130|0,83232|0) - imo this is kinda tricky to be executed properly since they are rather heavy on the left, would recommend to spread the jacking between hands
01:29:100 (89100|0,89151|1,89202|2,89253|3,89253|0,89304|1,89355|2,89355|3,89406|0,89457|1,89457|2,89508|3,89559|1,89559|0,89610|2,89661|3,89661|0,89712|1,89763|2,89763|3,89814|0,89865|1,89865|3) - so you were all this one way jumpstream here (to right side), decided to change direction here - 01:29:916 (89916|2,89967|0,89967|1) - but later goes the same way once again - 01:30:018 (90018|2,90069|0,90069|3,90120|1,90171|2,90171|3) - . imo would be a better idea and probably more aesthetically if you change 01:30:018(90018|2,90069|3,90069|0,90120|1,90171|3,90171|2,90222|1,90273|0,90273|2,90324|3,90375|0,90375|1,90426|2,90477|1,90477|0) - into opposite direction.
01:30:885 (90885|0,90885|1) - so this is what i've thinking so for this
you somehow ignoring this same particular noise at - 01:31:192. also with this, its more balanced arent they?
01:32:620 (92620|2,92620|1) - (*)i assume you trying to imitate PLANET//SHAPER semi-dump mapping styles but this is no where justified to be doubled judging from its noise. I thought this would be better with a Single note
01:40:579 (100579|2) - double. i assume this is a kick? since you were emphasizing weak noises synth with doubles, so why making it a single note for a strong kick noise?
01:45:477 (105477|0,105477|3) - same argument as (*)
02:22:518 (142518|2) - this should be doubled rather than - 02:22:416 (142416|2,142416|3) - this one. you doubling all the synth before and this is just inconsistent
02:40:069 (160069|2) - 02:53:130 (173130|1) - pretty sure you forgot to double
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for this 1st kiai i rather confused about the jack layering here. its start like this - 02:38:130 (158130|3,158232|3) - . then it changes - 02:38:947 (158947|3,159049|2) - but then its back but in another measure - 02:40:171 (160171|0,160273|0) - If you want to make all your jack layering consistent across the diff, starting with - 02:38:130 (158130|3,158232|3) - then the next that should be jacked are - 02:38:947 (158947|3,159049|2) - 02:39:763 (159763|2,159865|1) - 02:40:579 (160579|1,160681|2) - 02:41:396 (161396|1,161498|1) (this one true anyway) - 02:43:028 (163028|3,163130|0) - and etc. you got the idea here
same could be said for 2nd kiai
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02:57:416 (177416|0,177416|3,177416|1) - hows this
the first measure filled with double jacking and the the rest of the measure filled with ascending double which is pretty cool concept to implement
02:58:947 (178947|3,178947|1,178947|0,178947|2) - kinda same for this but up to you
03:50:273 (230273|1,230273|0) - kinda wondering why is this the only kick that arent triple here
04:11:651 (251651|3,251702|3) - ugh no. this thing translates to 294 BPM jacks which is nowhere near possible to get this at 300g at all
04:16:192 (256192|1) - not LN-ing this?
04:29:457 (269457|3,269457|2,269559|3,269661|2,269865|3,269865|2,269967|3,270069|2) - somewhat ewto me. move - 04:29:661 (269661|2) - to 2 for balance
04:32:314 (272314|1,272314|2,272416|2) - move right. already had this - 04:32:722 (272722|2,272722|1,272824|2) - making a col 4 rather empty for quite some time
04:36:600 (276600|1,276600|2,276702|1) - move left. col 1 is empty
04:49:712 (289712|0,289737|1,289763|2,289788|3,289814|0,289839|1,289865|2,289891|3,289916|0,289942|1,289967|2,289993|3,290018|0,290044|1) - oh celestia not this one.
there's little to none of this notes poses an interposing beats which is make them unjustified to be snapped at 1/16. using the usual jumpstream works more better
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about kiai 4 and 5, my complaint is the same, make sure you apply them properly
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05:11:498 (311498|3) - why is this single? refer - 05:13:130 (313130|3,313130|0) -
05:22:926 - where's the double? i see you do it here - 05:24:967 (324967|1,324967|0) - but not there?
05:27:314 (327314|0,327314|3,327620|2,327620|1,327620|0) - I feel like you missing some note around here
05:35:987 - the doubleee
06:03:487 (363487|1,363538|1) - aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa