hi! again from your queue
again my pics are huge lol
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00:32:241 (4) - nc to signify 1/8?
00:35:517 (7,8) - might look more aesthetically pleasing with a slight rotation
00:49:655 (1) - make this a shorter slider, have it end on the blue tick, and then put a slider on the next white tick 00:50:000 - here to emphasize that lil noise there
00:54:310 (4) - again NC?
01:05:344 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - im honestly not too big a fan of how this looks/plays, i'd suggest stacking (3) and (4) on (5), same with (6) and (7) on (8). its better this way imo and gives much more power to 01:06:034 (9,10,1) -
01:06:034 (9,10,1) - this seems to be gud
01:08:793 (3,4) - i would say make this a kickslider. would give more power to 01:08:965 (1) - and would probably look a little less wonky
01:26:896 (1,1,1,1) - i love this
01:38:448 (4) - nc
01:38:965 (1) - i'd copy paste this slider and rotate it 01:39:310 (2) - here instead of using two different slider designs... alternatively, make the second one more exotic. I love what you did here 04:13:450 (1,2,1) -
01:49:482 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - if you agreed with me earlier on these triples, here is another point where changes should be made
01:52:931 (3,4) - change into a kickslider for reasons mentioned earlier.. im going to stop mentioning this and the thing above now, but other instances of these two things I pointed out occur at 3:40, 3:43, 4:23, and 4:27ish
01:56:379 (1,1) - considering this is a kickslider jump, the distance and angle is absolutely crazy here. 01:12:241 (1,1) - compared to this similar part, anyways. i would make it easier here
02:09:482 (1) - NC since very high SV?
02:27:758 - i say add a note on this red tick
02:29:655 (4,5) - i think there should be a little bit of distance between these notes here since they are on very different sounds. i dont like the partial stack here.
02:29:310 (2,3) - perhaps using the same DS as you used between these would work well.
02:29:310 (2,3) - alternatively, you could just change these into notes and make a jump pattern.. would work too
03:06:788 (1,2) - why not use a similar slider design for these two?
03:20:001 (1) - I guess this slider design seems somewhat out of place? 03:18:622 (1) - copypaste this and rotate it
03:28:794 (4) - nc
03:38:277 (2,3,4,5) - this is a lot different structurally from the similar section in the first kiai 01:03:793 (2,3,4,1) here
03:46:725 (1) - ctrl g
04:12:932 (4) - again nc
04:28:622 (5) - not a big fan of this slider design either, make it a little more curved mayhaps? 04:30:346 (1) - like this?
04:30:863 (1) - ctrl g here too?
04:35:519 (7,1) - very nazi but inconsistent spacing with 02:01:034 (7,1) -
04:39:484 (5) - also could ctrl g here
05:02:243 - add note
05:03:794 (2) - compare this to the earlier section just like it, this note was a kickslider. in the earlier suggestion I also 05:04:139 (4,5) - thought that these should have spacing. looking at this pattern again, I seriously think just being 4 jumpy notes would fit the rhythm a lot more, so I suggest going back and doing that to the similar part that occurs around 2:28ish???
05:20:001 (1) - i think you should map this ending, its so perfectly creepy and would be an excellent addition to finishing the map off! plus the map is pretty dope and it leaves me wanting more at the end haha
think thats just about it... this is really well put together, I pointed out any structural or rhythmic issues I could find