VINXIS wrote:

LMFAO THIS SONG IS SO FUNNY I CAN T SNTOP LAKGGUHN

FUCK

general

O M G

y r ur kiai times on a soft part and not on the wubwubwbuwwbuuw part??/?? ok let's kiai spam

hitsounds r fine i thikn

le diff

1. 00:00:258 (1,2) - o look ur signature pattern. I'd ercommend making the 2nd slider smaller so it ends on the red tick, and then place a circle on 00:00:939 (1) - head like this or smth like that. it follows the music better imo good suggestion, but if i do so, 00:00:598 (2) - will be very fast one lol
2. 00:47:473 (2,3,4,5) - FUCK i really hate how this looks. can u pls make the slider look nice and not just a bland curve, it'd make this look so much better ajhdsfg
3. 01:36:223 (1) - I'dd say to make the slider larger or use like 0.9x SV or smth tbh. It'll look better and read better imo i put all slow sliders like this with 1.0x, so fixed with no SV change
4. 02:06:223 (1) - ^ keep this one, not hard to read imo
5. 02:30:257 (1) - might wanna rotate this -38 degress clockwise so it perfectly flows with 02:29:916 (1,2,3) - tbh
6. 03:35:711 (1,1) - u sud stack imo itll look better keep it, it's almost same flow and current one is looks better
7. 04:31:449 (6) - possible curve upwards? i consider here, but keep it for now due to same form with 04:32:643 (5) -
8. 05:11:847 (1,2,1,2) - bad 2 read zzz maybe it' ok zzz

HOW CAN I MAP LIKE YOU FUCK

Tess wrote:

GeneralNote: If I tell you to place a note at x123 y123, it doesn't mean you have to place it EXACTLY there, just in that general direction (unless otherwise specified)
Note: When I talk about "symmetry" I'm referring to the aesthetic placement of one object relative to the others, which doesn't have to be Andrea-style axis symmetry

1. You can remove "m_o_k_o_r_i" from tags, since searching "mokori" or "m o k o r i" would both give the same results if your tag is "mokori" all my maps have that tag, so i keep it
2. I really advise you find a storyboarder for this set, it could be turned into something amazing yes i think so too, but it's hard to make ;w;
   
3. I think you could find a more fitting bg for this, as it is now it seems rather generic. You can pm me in-game if you'd like help with it. i searched some pictures that fit to this, but there're not so many kind of it. so i chose this generic but clean one
4. The red combo color provides a stark contrast with the other combos, is there a reason for this? red is related to skirt color on BG xD
5. I'd like to compliment you on this map, I can really see the effort you put into it and it turned out very awesome. Original style and cool sliders. Keep it up! thanks!!!

Chloe LemaireRhythms & Patterns

1. 01:06:239 (4) - I think it would look cleaner if you curved this slider out a bit, like so http://puu.sh/hwbOT/9bd982edce.png it makes blanket with 01:05:899 (2) - so keep it
   
2. 01:31:637 - Nice job! This section is really cool! thanks xD
   
3. 01:49:194 (3,4,1,2,1) - Why don't you try something like this? Would look much smoother in my opinion. very nice!!
4. 01:32:489 (1) - I think this would flow way cooler if you ctrl + G'd it you're right, fixed!
5. 04:11:012 (10) - Try turning this into a 1/4 slider and then stack 04:11:183 (1) - on top of 04:10:245 (4) - like this sorry i like this pattern and rhytm ;w;
6. 04:16:467 (10) - Ctrl + G'ing this would make the flow so much smoother here maybe current one works well imo
7. 04:24:137 (7,8,9,10) - I think these doubles might be a bit too spaced out internally but it might just be me i consider to decrease space but keep it now
8. 04:54:137 (1,2,3,4) - ^ ^

Hitsounds
Sounds good to me!

Tess wrote:

Someone please bubble

Yuii- wrote:

Chloe Lemaire

General: Why this is marked as a "WIP/Help" map? I think it's ready for ranked. At least you are working on the storyboard or something like that.
yes it's on WIP section because it's for approved map, means does have only one difficulty. so i can't submit to pending because of that reason. maybe if this map gets #2 bubble, QAT will move this to pending
The map itself has a lot of creativity, it's amazing to see it from the Editor and to play it as well. The flow used in this map is FANTASTIC, and I'm really like to see people mapping like this. However, I have to disagree with the usage of doubles like no tomorrow. You shouldn't really spam doubles all over the map, that's the only thing I didn't like from it. thanks for opinion! as you said, there are many doubles, but it's all fit to song and playable. of course i love doubles, so pls let me keep ;w;
The red colour there is so pointless. You should REALLY reconsider removing it as it has nothing to do with the other colours. sure, you and Tess said red combo color is pointless one, so i removed



00:16:637 (1) - Ctrl+G
00:16:978 (2) - ^
00:17:319 (3) - ^
00:17:660 (4) - ^
These 4 sliders Ctrl+G'd play really really good, and they actually look better than your version, imo. that's also good, but i like current flow and pattern

01:22:944 - Place a circle here! on this part, i put notes with drum sound. exactly there has piano sound, though it's too small and inconsistent with my thought

01:43:399 (1) - What do you think if you actually move this slider more to the right? You will be avoiding an unnecessary overlapping with 01:42:887 (2) - and it will be also easier to hit! i want to make a flow like round at 01:42:546 (1,2,1,1,2,3) - , so if i move that to right, must be lost that flow ;w;

02:14:421 (3) - Place it in the middle of the semi-circle. This slider overlapping with 02:13:825 (4) - looks awful. that's good! fixed!

03:00:614 (1) - Clap sounds perfectly! yey

03:22:092 (1,1,1,1,2,1,1,1,1,2,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,2,1) - All these sliders should be finished in the last blue tick, because the rhythm is constant. i put NC there all of 4/1 rhythm, because it looks better than finish on blue tick imo. and also, maybe HR player lost much HP here

04:02:916 (9) - This note is not necessary. omg you're right, then i try to make another flow to make here

04:05:387 (1) - Finish this slider at 04:05:558 -

04:16:467 (10) - Ctrl+G there, PLEASE! This flows better with the next circle 04:16:637 (1) - and the stream as well. It's also better to play! it makes also good flow at 04:16:467 (10,1) - , but makes really bad at 04:16:296 (9,10) - , so keep it
04:19:535 (2,3,4,5,6) - Ctrl+G maybe? current flow 04:19:024 (9,1,2) - is better imo
05:25:842 (5) - ^ this one is rotated 05:25:501 (3,4) - , so keep it

04:24:137 (7,8,9,10) - There's a lot of spacing between these doubles. I think that (7,8) should be somewhere near x152 y204 and (9,10) x292 y168
Also you should try NC! maybe spacing is not big, so keep it but added NC on 04:24:137 (1) -

Please, rank this.

1. 00:02:575 (6) - ここの音、1/6の音の可能性が・・・00:02:546 -
2. 00:08:029 (6) - ^
3. 00:14:592 (1) - 特にNew combo入れなくてもいいと思います。
4. 00:53:626 (4) - このあたり見ると、00:49:364 (1,2,3) - 、00:47:489 (2,4) - デザイン的にここもこんな感じに配置したい
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 01:12:205 (4) - 音とジャンプ的にここからNew combo入れたほうがプレイヤーにもわかりやすいと思います。
6. 01:17:660 (4) - ,01:20:387 (3) - ^
7. 01:22:092 (1) - ここは逆にいらないと思います。
8. 02:13:910 (1,3) - (3)の折り返しがほとんどかさなってる状態なので少しずらして確認できるくらいに配置するか別の配置にしてください～
9. 02:15:614 (2) - ここらへんのパートすべてスライダーなのでこの速度変化はちょっと差がありすぎかなと思いました。この部分だけx0.7 -> x1.5となっているので、x1.2 or x1.3あたりにしたほうがいいと思います。
10. 02:16:126 (2) - ^
11. 02:52:092 (5) - New combo忘れ・・・？
12. 03:22:262 - sliderslide無音にしてるのでslidertickの音を最低でも20%くらいにしたほうがいいと思います。
13. 03:23:626 - ^ これ以降の他の部分も同じです

alacat wrote:

[Chloe Lemaire]

1. 00:02:575 (6) - ここの音、1/6の音の可能性が・・・00:02:546 - 　うわほんとだ・・・直しました！
2. 00:08:029 (6) - ^　^
3. 00:14:592 (1) - 特にNew combo入れなくてもいいと思います。
4. 00:53:626 (4) - このあたり見ると、00:49:364 (1,2,3) - 、00:47:489 (2,4) - デザイン的にここもこんな感じに配置したい
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 01:12:205 (4) - 音とジャンプ的にここからNew combo入れたほうがプレイヤーにもわかりやすいと思います。
6. 01:17:660 (4) - ,01:20:387 (3) - ^
7. 01:22:092 (1) - ここは逆にいらないと思います。
8. 02:13:910 (1,3) - (3)の折り返しがほとんどかさなってる状態なので少しずらして確認できるくらいに配置するか別の配置にしてください～ 別配置に変更です
9. 02:15:614 (2) - ここらへんのパートすべてスライダーなのでこの速度変化はちょっと差がありすぎかなと思いました。この部分だけx0.7 -> x1.5となっているので、x1.2 or x1.3あたりにしたほうがいいと思います。　x1.2に変更しました～
10. 02:16:126 (2) - ^　^
11. 02:52:092 (5) - New combo忘れ・・・？　ｱｯ
12. 03:22:262 - sliderslide無音にしてるのでslidertickの音を最低でも20%くらいにしたほうがいいと思います。　イエッサ！
13. 03:23:626 - ^ これ以降の他の部分も同じです

(^q^)<Good luck

Gamu wrote:

M4Mですヾ(｡>﹏<｡)ﾉﾞ

[ Chloe Lemaire]

1. offsetが遅く感じます。 たぶん、252くらいがいい気がします。最初のパートのとこをよく聞いてみると、ずれていることがわかると思います。　色々試してみた結果、262で調整しました。
2. 00:35:046 (1,2,3) - 少しこのリズムが取りにくいと感じました。00:35:217にサークルを追加して三連打を作ったほうが良さそうです。あと音もハッキリと聞こえますのでnormal-hitnormalを入れるといいかもです。 3連打も試しましたが、窮屈になってしまう感じがしたのでここは２連打で置いてあります。normal-hitnormalは追加しました
3. 00:51:921 (5) - 1/4じゃなくて1/3だと思います。　ほんとだ・・・了解です！
   
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4. 01:07:581 (3) - ここは01:07:240 (2)と同じdrum-hitclapがいい感じがする。(2)と(3)は同じような音が聞こえるので。
5. 01:23:626 (4) - 1/16は合ってない気がします。1/8が良いかと。あと、伸ばしすぎな感じがするので01:23:796までで良いと思います。音量は少し40%とかにしたほうがいい感じに聞こえます。
6. 01:31:296 (3) - soft-hitwhistleよりsoft-hitclapかな。

がんばってください～

Hollow Wings wrote:

m4m

NO KD

Chloe Lemaire

1. 03:42:536 (1,2) - still recommend you not overlap the arrow, maybe just drag the arrow to 180,200.
2. 05:05:377 (1) - you can just set high sv slider here imo w.

can't say too much, star*2.

poke me later when you are ready.

1. looks fine

1. 00:53:616 (4) - I think if you change to circles here it really emphasis the beat here really well just like what you did here 00:47:479 (2,3,4) - ,00:54:468 (6,7) - ,00:55:661 (2,3,4) -
2. 01:23:104 (1,2) - 1/2 spacing here looks pretty similiar to 1/1 spacing here 01:22:423 (4,5) - this can make player a bit confuse when playing imo , I think increase spacing here 01:22:423 (4,5) - would make spacing a bit different from 01:23:104 (1,2,3) - so that make player less confuse imo
3. 01:31:116 (2) - I think the beat should be here 01:31:158 - (1/8) , I can't hear any beat on 1/2 , not sure tho
4. 02:00:264 (5) - nc? so iwould make this somehow consistent with the nc pattern here 01:56:002 (2,3,1) - , 02:01:457 (2,3,1) - , 02:04:184 (2,3,1) -
5. 02:02:820 (3) - you can move this a bit to the right so it not overlap with 02:02:479 (1) - at tail , it make pattern looks more clean without overlap there
6. 02:04:354 (1) - ctrl+g this ? so it would make flow here 02:04:014 (1,2,3,1,2,1) - nice imo
7. 02:13:729 (3,4,1) - make them straight , current one flow weird imo
   SPOILER

   
8. 04:06:741 (7) - stack this with 04:06:229 (4) - would make flow here 04:06:485 (6,7) - better imo
9. 04:12:366 (8,1) - I think you can make jumps here , would play nice and also make sense with the music here since this beat 04:12:536 (1) - is emphasized lower spacing here is just can give weird feeling to players imo
   SPOILER

   
10. 04:15:093 (8) - place this at around x312 y204 ? would make flow here 04:14:923 (7,8,1) - nice imo
11. 04:17:991 (1) - place this at around x244 y284 ? would make flow here 04:17:650 (9,1,2) - nice imo also would make spacing make sense with the others similiar pattern like 04:19:014 (9,1,2) - (spacing 1.5x -> 1.2x) , 04:23:104 (9,1,2) - ( also spacing 1.5x -> 1.2x )
12. 04:31:968 (1,2,3,4,5) - place like this ? so it would make flow better imo
    SPOILER

    
13. 05:05:377 (1) - snap slider end to 1/8 ? since the beat is there not on 1/2 , I'm not sure
    

CelsiusLK wrote:

[general]

1. looks fine

[the only one diff]

1. 00:53:616 (4) - I think if you change to circles here it really emphasis the beat here really well just like what you did here 00:47:479 (2,3,4) - ,00:54:468 (6,7) - ,00:55:661 (2,3,4) - ok :3
2. 01:23:104 (1,2) - 1/2 spacing here looks pretty similiar to 1/1 spacing here 01:22:423 (4,5) - this can make player a bit confuse when playing imo , I think increase spacing here 01:22:423 (4,5) - would make spacing a bit different from 01:23:104 (1,2,3) - so that make player less confuse imo i added NC for that reason, and maybe that spacing is not affect much to play i think
3. 01:31:116 (2) - I think the beat should be here 01:31:158 - (1/8) , I can't hear any beat on 1/2 , not sure tho yea, here is really strange, sounds like crack of sound. 01:31:116 - has a quiet sound and maybe 1/12 section 01:31:144 - also have strong sound. for comfortable to play, keep current pattern makes good imo
4. 02:00:264 (5) - nc? so iwould make this somehow consistent with the nc pattern here 01:56:002 (2,3,1) - , 02:01:457 (2,3,1) - , 02:04:184 (2,3,1) -
5. 02:02:820 (3) - you can move this a bit to the right so it not overlap with 02:02:479 (1) - at tail , it make pattern looks more clean without overlap there
6. 02:04:354 (1) - ctrl+g this ? so it would make flow here 02:04:014 (1,2,3,1,2,1) - nice imo
7. 02:13:729 (3,4,1) - make them straight , current one flow weird imo
   SPOILER

   
8. 04:06:741 (7) - stack this with 04:06:229 (4) - would make flow here 04:06:485 (6,7) - better imo if i do so, flow of 04:06:485 (6,7) - is ok, but 04:06:741 (7,8) - would be get too closer. and current pattern is good as well, so keep it
9. 04:12:366 (8,1) - I think you can make jumps here , would play nice and also make sense with the music here since this beat 04:12:536 (1) - is emphasized lower spacing here is just can give weird feeling to players imo yea you're right, fixed
   SPOILER

   
10. 04:15:093 (8) - place this at around x312 y204 ? would make flow here 04:14:923 (7,8,1) - nice imo feel good, fixed
11. 04:17:991 (1) - place this at around x244 y284 ? would make flow here 04:17:650 (9,1,2) - nice imo also would make spacing make sense with the others similiar pattern like 04:19:014 (9,1,2) - (spacing 1.5x -> 1.2x) , 04:23:104 (9,1,2) - ( also spacing 1.5x -> 1.2x ) ok
12. 04:31:968 (1,2,3,4,5) - place like this ? so it would make flow better imo fixed with another way
    SPOILER

    
13. 05:05:377 (1) - snap slider end to 1/8 ? since the beat is there not on 1/2 , I'm not sure hmm i keep it
    

good luck

sionKotori wrote:

最高

Tess wrote:

Oh wow bubbled already, nice work!

Gogo gadget rank

Hollow Wings wrote:

rebubbled #1

removed useless files.

Tess wrote:

I AM ON THE EDGE OF MY SEAT PLEASE DON'T KEEP ME HERE FOR ANOTHER DAY

Amamiya Yuko wrote:

no drumstep in tags? o.o

1. 05:29:582 (5) - NC?
2. add tags skystar mentioned.

Minakami Yuki wrote:

hi
ramdom bubble check

1. 05:29:582 (5) - NC?
2. add tags skystar mentioned.
   fixed all!

also I'm a little questionable about 00:35:292 (2) - , I cant hear the beat here in music and prefer to put it at 00:35:207 - , can you give me the reason why put the note here?
yea, exactly drum sound is landing on 00:35:207 - , however i chose to follow "pi" sound on 00:35:292 - instead of that to make there has deffer rhythm with 00:34:354 (1,2,3,4) -


others are fine, really fun map.

VINXIS wrote:

yes