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Lurei
Hi there. Modding from my queue.

[Overview]

  1. Those tags... lol. If you really want to relase your rage against Slaine, you should put that on the creator's words, not in the tags. LOL At least, this rage-relasing is better than xxdeathx's one. lol

[Insane]

  1. 00:04:794 (1) - This one should be more centered between 00:04:225 (4,5,6) - . Try to use the approach circle as guide to center it.
  2. 00:11:630 (4,5,6,7) - This is pretty much nazi stuff, but I think those would actually play better if shaped like a square.
  3. 00:26:630 - I think the SV change here actually comes as quite sudden. Yeah, I know previous SV is like 0.75x, but I think changing SV here just for the vocal doesn't fit it that well. You should keep SV constant here. Length of vocal is the main reason I disagree with the SV change (more info in the thing below).
  4. 00:26:820 (3,4) - End of (3) is kinda off-beat, and judging by (4)'s position on the timeline, I think you're actually using it as a "extended" slider, through it doesn't work quite well since end of vocal is actually on 00:27:389 - . My suggestion here is to simply extend (3) to 00:27:200 and erase (4). That way, when you readd the finish hitsound, it will do the work fo giving the "finishing" impact (or something like that) just like Hard does.
  5. 00:33:275 (5) - This slider should actually end on 00:33:465 - . Extending slider like this makes this part sound really weird, since end is off-beat. You should only extend sliders like this when there isn't a beat that should be mapped before (a 1/2 beat). If a sound in the red beat exists, you should map it to keep a nice rhythm.
  6. 00:34:035 (2) - You shouldn't skip the beat at 00:34:225 - . Reason's practically the same as above.
  7. 00:36:313 (5) - This circle should be fully centered between 00:35:174 (2,3,4) - to create proper blankets in every slider (and for aesthetics), but maybe I'm just too nitpicky about it. :P
  8. 00:37:832 (1) - You should make the downbeat a clickeable element (you said so once :P ). Also, you're skipping the beat on 00:38:022 - . I know here you're extending slider to follow vocal, but it's just a bit too ankward to play.
  9. 00:42:389 (4,3) - Same as above (downbeat thingy). Since there isn't any 1/2 beat to follow, you can just place two circles to replace it. It's a bit less ankward to play that way.
  10. 00:45:048 (2,1) - If you intended a blanket here, you should recheck it. Seems a bit off in my end.
  11. 00:57:959 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2) - This is pretty~ :lol:
  12. 01:12:769 (5) - Just a friendly comment for you to be careful with this circle since it's almost outside the grid. No change needed now, through.
  13. That's it for this diff. It's quite fun to play, actually. Good job!

[Hard]

  1. 00:09:921 (2,3,1) - #naziblanketmod. This seems a bit off.
  2. 00:11:630 (3,1) - Most likely a needless worry of mine, but overlap here isn't that pretty. You could move (1) a bit above to avoid it.
  3. 00:13:719 (1,2) - Those ones overlap a bit, too.
  4. 00:15:807 (2,3,4,5) - You should check the blanket here; seems a bit off for me. If you move the sliders, remember to move the notes you're stacking, too.
  5. 00:26:630 - Same as Insane.
  6. 00:29:668 (3,4) - Blanket seems sightly off (just a tiny bit).
  7. 00:41:250 (1) - Just saying this thing is almost touching the HP bar, so you should be careful with it.
  8. 00:43:149 (4,1) - Those sliders overlap a bit (but judging by distance, it might not be that visible during gameplay, so maybe this is just minor).
  9. 00:43:908 (1) - Same as Insane (00:42:389 (4,3) - on Insane case).
  10. 00:47:896 - Playability is a bit weird if you don't map this beat (since a "beep"-ish sound is played here).
  11. 00:51:503 (4) - Downbeat's at the end of this slider, but playing it isn't quite ankward (maybe because melody changed?).
  12. 01:01:756 (1,2,3,1) - Shouldn't this be a perfect square? It's a bit ankward IMO if you start a square with constant DS, but you alter it at the end.
  13. 01:25:870 (2,3) - Those sliders overlap a bit...
  14. Hm... rhythm on this diff is pretty good. Most of this mod is "nazi" stuff ( :cry: ), so apply it if you see fit.

[Normal]

  1. 00:15:427 (1,2) - Practically "nazi" stuff, but I think those look good when blanketed (2's head with 1).
  2. 00:18:465 (1,2) - This blanket is just a tiny bit off.
  3. 00:45:427 (1,2,3) - You should recheck the blanket of those two (it's just a bit off).
  4. 01:00:997 (1,2) - I think flow improves here a bit if you Ctrl + J those circles. If you do, remember to check spacing of 01:01:756 (3,4) -
  5. 01:20:554 (3,5) - I don't know if a blanket was intended, but you should check it.
  6. This diff plays and flows quite nicely. Great!

[Easy]

  1. The only concern I have with this diff is with the usage of 1/2 notes (that are usually avoided on Easy since they seem to be too fast), so I'll try to check those. Change things if you see fit.
  2. 00:10:681 (3) - I suggest moving this to 00:10:870 - and make it a 2/1 slider to avoid the 1/2 click here.
  3. 00:13:719 (3) - You could move this to 00:13:908 - and make it a 1/1 slider...
  4. 01:17:516 (3) - Maybe moving this to 01:17:706 - and making it a 1/1 slider works?
  5. That is practically the mod for Easy. I personally think 1/2 notes should be avoided in Easy unless the BPM is actually low enough for them to work (and I don't think 158 BPM is low).

Well, I think this is it. The mapset is actually quite great (and Aldnoah.Zero is good). Have a star!
Good luck!
Topic Starter
Pho

LixRei wrote:

Hi there. Modding from my queue.

[Overview]

  1. Those tags... lol. If you really want to relase your rage against Slaine, you should put that on the creator's words, not in the tags. LOL At least, this rage-relasing is better than xxdeathx's one. lol I feel like i got to delete them soon anyway ;-; But I'll wait for a BAT to decide on that.

[Insane]

  1. 00:04:794 (1) - This one should be more centered between 00:04:225 (4,5,6) - . Try to use the approach circle as guide to center it.
  2. 00:11:630 (4,5,6,7) - This is pretty much nazi stuff, but I think those would actually play better if shaped like a square. I like to have variation in here, since i do these triangle/square stuff pretty often already.
  3. 00:26:630 - I think the SV change here actually comes as quite sudden. Yeah, I know previous SV is like 0.75x, but I think changing SV here just for the vocal doesn't fit it that well. You should keep SV constant here. Length of vocal is the main reason I disagree with the SV change (more info in the thing below). Oh, but this SV change is not done for the vocal, but the e-guitar in the background. It makes for a pretty interesting momentum imo, so I'll keep it.
  4. 00:26:820 (3,4) - End of (3) is kinda off-beat, and judging by (4)'s position on the timeline, I think you're actually using it as a "extended" slider, through it doesn't work quite well since end of vocal is actually on 00:27:389 - . My suggestion here is to simply extend (3) to 00:27:200 and erase (4). That way, when you readd the finish hitsound, it will do the work fo giving the "finishing" impact (or something like that) just like Hard does. It's a difference between actually hitting a beat and or just following it with sliderend (just like in Hard). I want more emphasis on this note by playing it for the sole fact that there's a strong cymbal there. The extended slider actually works fine imo since there's also a beat in the track at 00:27:105 - .
  5. 00:33:275 (5) - This slider should actually end on 00:33:465 - . Extending slider like this makes this part sound really weird, since end is off-beat. You should only extend sliders like this when there isn't a beat that should be mapped before (a 1/2 beat). If a sound in the red beat exists, you should map it to keep a nice rhythm. This one actually goes pretty well with the e-guitar in the background. And considering there's no noteworthy beat on the previous red tick (there's sound, yeah, but not a reason for me to put a note in there), i'd rather keep my current pattern.
  6. 00:34:035 (2) - You shouldn't skip the beat at 00:34:225 - . Reason's practically the same as above. So are my reasons. Keep.
  7. 00:36:313 (5) - This circle should be fully centered between 00:35:174 (2,3,4) - to create proper blankets in every slider (and for aesthetics), but maybe I'm just too nitpicky about it. :P
  8. 00:37:832 (1) - You should make the downbeat a clickeable element (you said so once :P ). Also, you're skipping the beat on 00:38:022 - . I know here you're extending slider to follow vocal, but it's just a bit too ankward to play. Did I? xD Yeah, probably, but I like to lower the pressure again after the previous sliderjump-section here, so extending it to follow the vocal better is fine - I don't really see a problem gameplay-wise. Also, 00:38:022 - has no noteworthy beat - if you mean the e-guitar, it plays 1/2 regularly, but it's less dominant than other elements in the track for me that I'd follow it that much.
  9. 00:42:389 (4,3) - Same as above (downbeat thingy). Since there isn't any 1/2 beat to follow, you can just place two circles to replace it. It's a bit less ankward to play that way. Circles feel too choppy to play. Considering this section is rather calm and i want smoother flow and play in general, sliders are a better choice and they follow the vocal really well.
  10. 00:45:048 (2,1) - If you intended a blanket here, you should recheck it. Seems a bit off in my end. I don't think it's really notable to fix, they are too far away on the timeline to notice in gameplay anyway.
  11. 00:57:959 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2) - This is pretty~ :lol: Symmetry figures best <3
  12. 01:12:769 (5) - Just a friendly comment for you to be careful with this circle since it's almost outside the grid. No change needed now, through. Repositioned.
  13. That's it for this diff. It's quite fun to play, actually. Good job!

[Hard]

  1. 00:09:921 (2,3,1) - #naziblanketmod. This seems a bit off. It looks fine to me oO
  2. 00:11:630 (3,1) - Most likely a needless worry of mine, but overlap here isn't that pretty. You could move (1) a bit above to avoid it. It doesn't hinder gameplay that much and i don't want to do a big jump here, so it's fine.
  3. 00:13:719 (1,2) - Those ones overlap a bit, too. Yeah, that's intended. :D Makes for interesting gameplay.
  4. 00:15:807 (2,3,4,5) - You should check the blanket here; seems a bit off for me. If you move the sliders, remember to move the notes you're stacking, too. I'm not good with blankets lol.
  5. 00:26:630 - Same as Insane. It's like you've wanted in Insane tho. oO
  6. 00:29:668 (3,4) - Blanket seems sightly off (just a tiny bit). Fixed...uhh, kind of?
  7. 00:41:250 (1) - Just saying this thing is almost touching the HP bar, so you should be careful with it. Should be fine, touching the HP bar is also just a guideline to follow, not unrankable.
  8. 00:43:149 (4,1) - Those sliders overlap a bit (but judging by distance, it might not be that visible during gameplay, so maybe this is just minor). It's intended. I like this overlap :3
  9. 00:43:908 (1) - Same as Insane (00:42:389 (4,3) - on Insane case). Same reason.
  10. 00:47:896 - Playability is a bit weird if you don't map this beat (since a "beep"-ish sound is played here). It is, but it's not very remarkable in the track, so I left this out on purpose.
  11. 00:51:503 (4) - Downbeat's at the end of this slider, but playing it isn't quite ankward (maybe because melody changed?). This one's fine, it follows the piano well.
  12. 01:01:756 (1,2,3,1) - Shouldn't this be a perfect square? It's a bit ankward IMO if you start a square with constant DS, but you alter it at the end. Intended DS change, yep. 01:02:326 (1) - is a really strong beat, so i set emphasis by increasing spacing by just a little bit (just like in Insane)
  13. 01:25:870 (2,3) - Those sliders overlap a bit... Yeah, that's intended as well.
  14. Hm... rhythm on this diff is pretty good. Most of this mod is "nazi" stuff ( :cry: ), so apply it if you see fit.

[Normal]

  1. 00:15:427 (1,2) - Practically "nazi" stuff, but I think those look good when blanketed (2's head with 1). It would hurt the flow too much though, so no change.
  2. 00:18:465 (1,2) - This blanket is just a tiny bit off. How do you find this stuff xD
  3. 00:45:427 (1,2,3) - You should recheck the blanket of those two (it's just a bit off).
  4. 01:00:997 (1,2) - I think flow improves here a bit if you Ctrl + J those circles. If you do, remember to check spacing of 01:01:756 (3,4) - I like the flow here, so no change.
  5. 01:20:554 (3,5) - I don't know if a blanket was intended, but you should check it. It really wasn't intended lol. But i don't want to make that slider more curvy, it hurts flow too much for me.
  6. This diff plays and flows quite nicely. Great!

[Easy]

  1. The only concern I have with this diff is with the usage of 1/2 notes (that are usually avoided on Easy since they seem to be too fast), so I'll try to check those. Change things if you see fit. 1/2 here are fine, I used them only between sliders so it's much more handable. No change from below
  2. 00:10:681 (3) - I suggest moving this to 00:10:870 - and make it a 2/1 slider to avoid the 1/2 click here.
  3. 00:13:719 (3) - You could move this to 00:13:908 - and make it a 1/1 slider...
  4. 01:17:516 (3) - Maybe moving this to 01:17:706 - and making it a 1/1 slider works?
  5. That is practically the mod for Easy. I personally think 1/2 notes should be avoided in Easy unless the BPM is actually low enough for them to work (and I don't think 158 BPM is low). Yeah, about that, I'm not even sure if it's 158 or 79 BPM, people still seem to be unsure about it.

Well, I think this is it. The mapset is actually quite great (and Aldnoah.Zero is good). Have a star! Aye, thanks a lot for the star and mod! :) I didn't fix much, but I hope my points are clear. No comment = fixed.
Good luck!
ErunamoJAZZ
hi o/


[Easy]
  1. http://puu.sh/eHLE1/19d0383582.png lol, just fix spacing between 00:06:313 (1,2) -
  2. 00:18:465 (4) - i think some like it looks better (is curved like 00:16:946 (2) - and do blanket with 00:19:984 (1) - )
  3. 00:23:782 (5) - i think, curved is better fo consistency with 00:21:503 (2,3) -
  4. 00:57:959 (1) - may be... it will look more consistent
[Normal]
  1. 00:49:605 - missing note? like 00:50:743 (4) - (pls, for consistency).
  2. 01:10:111 (1) - pls, make a bit more curved, like 01:11:630 (2) -
  3. 01:11:630 (2,2) - pls!, improve the stack :P (disable grid snap)
  4. 01:17:326 (2) - whistle??
  5. 01:18:845 (5) - ^, in head?
[hard]
  1. mm... mm... really, the start was not intutive, imo...
    if you move spinner end to 00:02:896 - and make some like:

    (remove hitsounds to spinner) feels better :)
  2. 00:11:630 (3,1) - ugly overlap :'(
  3. 00:28:908 (4) - i think you move it a bit, looks better:
  4. 00:37:263 (3) - why a stack??!, this broken the flow, i really think it is a bad idea...
  5. 00:43:149 (4,1) - overlap :'(
  6. 01:16:946 (3) - mm... idk xD, imo, curved will looks better :P
[Insane]
  1. 00:20:744 (3) - two circles feels better with vocals.
  2. 00:25:301 (3) - no ignore drums pls ._.
  3. 00:27:200 (4) - mm.. overmap??, why xD
  4. 01:15:617 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - orz... for me.. this stack is bored D:, the music is very intence here, with a stack this lost emotion ._. My suggestion is it:
    Pandoras Box(?)
    1. move 01:15:238 (3,4,5) - like (1.6x spacing):
    2. make a 1/2 slider:
    3. .. and make the magic:
    ... or something (?) hehehe
  5. 01:20:364 (5,2) - stack is not perfect :x

Good song and mapset :D

Good luck ;)
Topic Starter
Pho

ErunamoJAZZ wrote:

hi o/


[Easy]
  1. http://puu.sh/eHLE1/19d0383582.png lol, just fix spacing between 00:06:313 (1,2) - How could I miss that?
  2. 00:18:465 (4) - i think some like it looks better (is curved like 00:16:946 (2) - and do blanket with 00:19:984 (1) - ) I like the current motion more, keep for now.
  3. 00:23:782 (5) - i think, curved is better fo consistency with 00:21:503 (2,3) - I don't think slider-shape consistency is needed here, the current one feels fine too.
  4. 00:57:959 (1) - may be... it will look more consistent Like the flatter shape, it works so well with the vocal here :D
[Normal]
  1. 00:49:605 - missing note? like 00:50:743 (4) - (pls, for consistency). Not needed, if you listen closer to the background instruments, this actually follows them pretty well.
  2. 01:10:111 (1) - pls, make a bit more curved, like 01:11:630 (2) - But I like flat curved sliders too ;~;
  3. 01:11:630 (2,2) - pls!, improve the stack :P (disable grid snap)
  4. 01:17:326 (2) - whistle??
  5. 01:18:845 (5) - ^, in head? It's the same as in every diff, no change.
[hard]
  1. mm... mm... really, the start was not intutive, imo...
    if you move spinner end to 00:02:896 - and make some like: Oh, that's neat, I'll try it out.

    (remove hitsounds to spinner) feels better :)
  2. 00:11:630 (3,1) - ugly overlap :'( Ugh, fine... increased the jump.
  3. 00:28:908 (4) - i think you move it a bit, looks better:
  4. 00:37:263 (3) - why a stack??!, this broken the flow, i really think it is a bad idea...
  5. 00:43:149 (4,1) - overlap :'( Keep, I like this one. :3
  6. 01:16:946 (3) - mm... idk xD, imo, curved will looks better :P Flow > aesthetics for me, i feel pretty fine withthe straight slider here :D
[Insane]
  1. 00:20:744 (3) - two circles feels better with vocals. Feels not smooth enough to play imo.
  2. 00:25:301 (3) - no ignore drums pls ._. Ikr, but it follows the vocal so well too. Let me hear another opinion about this.
  3. 00:27:200 (4) - mm.. overmap??, why xD It's not overmap :c Listen closely to the music, there's also a beat on the blue tick.
  4. 01:15:617 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - orz... for me.. this stack is bored D:, the music is very intence here, with a stack this lost emotion ._. My suggestion is it:
    Pandoras Box(?)
    1. move 01:15:238 (3,4,5) - like (1.6x spacing):
    2. make a 1/2 slider:
    3. .. and make the magic:
    ... or something (?) hehehe I really like to keep it clean here (as it is for the whole map). It's the only stream session in the song, and spacing it kind of works against the style i'm going for in this map. No change.
  5. 01:20:364 (5,2) - stack is not perfect :x

Good song and mapset :D

Good luck ;)
THanks for the mod! :) Everything not commented = fixed!
Milan-
Get 2-3 more mods and call a BAT.
not me pls lol.

(*/∇\*)
Xelasto
From my modding queue! :D

Easy
00:38:212 (2,3,1) - Improve triangle
00:41:250 (2,3,1) - ^
00:53:402 (3,1) - Same shape
01:07:073 (1,2) - Blanket

I don't know if parts like 00:13:149 (2,3) are good for beginners, IDK. But anyway, nice job on this :P

Normal
00:05:554 (4) - Try and make this a repeat slider but still amount to the same length
00:15:427 (1) - Improve blanket
00:24:541 (1) - Ctrl H this to copy 3
00:28:339 (2,3,4) - This may be too confusing for beginners
00:31:377 (2,3,4) - ^
00:39:351 (1) - Try and make it so 00:39:731 is the beginning of a note or slider, as it is a strong beat.
01:16:187 (1) - Try and make this curve more to improve 3's blanket.
01:23:592 (4,5) - Try and improve blankets
01:25:870 (2,3,4) - IMO this doesn't look good nor flow well, but that might just be me.
Approach rate 5

Pretty good difficulty. Not much wrong here. :D

Hard
00:03:655 (2,3) - Blanket?
00:11:250 (2) - Put this more inbetween 3 and 1 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2604135
00:12:769 (1,2) - Please don't touch, really noticeable.
00:16:187 (3) - Improve blanket
00:20:744 (6,7) - Make same slider
00:28:339 (3) - Move middle point up by 1
00:43:149 (4,1) - Don't touch
00:57:959 (1,3) - Make same slider
01:01:756 (1) - No New combo
01:07:073 (1) - Improve blanket
01:14:858 (1,2,3,4,5) - Improve this star formation
01:14:288 (3,6) - and at the same time stack these
Approach rate 7

Great difficulty. Just a few slight problems that don't look good. 8-) Also, a lot of the combos seem to short for hard mode.

Insane
00:05:554 (4) - This dip doesn't flow well
00:10:111 (5,6) - Reverse the position on the timeline to flow better and mirror 1,2, and 3.
00:16:946 (2,3,4,5) - Make the same shape.
00:24:921 (2) - Center this more in the middle of 3
00:34:794 (1) - Make this sort of like 3, except upside down like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2603665
00:35:174 (5,6,7) - Make all the same slider (Copy and paste)
00:37:832 (1) - No new combo
00:39:351 (6) - Instead make this a copy of 5, then Ctrl H, G, then place it the left of 5
00:43:149 (1) - No new combo
00:48:845 (3) - New combo here instead of 1
00:57:959 (1,3) - Same shape.
01:01:756 (1) - No NC
01:26:440 (1) - ^

Good job on this difficulty. It flows well, etc. Looks a little messy though. A few short combos ;)

Good job on this map. It flows well and the hitsounds are beautiful. Some of the combos could be improved, and the map doesn't feel as clean as it could be in all difficulties though. (especially insane.) However, these aren't small problems and could be easily fixed. Keep mapping. I hope this gets ranked. :)
Topic Starter
Pho

Xelasto wrote:

From my modding queue! :D

Easy
00:38:212 (2,3,1) - Improve triangle
00:41:250 (2,3,1) - ^
00:53:402 (3,1) - Same shape But they are oO
01:07:073 (1,2) - Blanket Not intended, and it'd break up from the windmill pattern.

I don't know if parts like 00:13:149 (2,3) are good for beginners, IDK. But anyway, nice job on this :P

Normal
00:05:554 (4) - Try and make this a repeat slider but still amount to the same length I don't see a reason for this to happen.
00:15:427 (1) - Improve blanket Not supposed to be one.
00:24:541 (1) - Ctrl H this to copy 3 I don't really know what you want me to do here, but doing this would kill the spacing.
00:28:339 (2,3,4) - This may be too confusing for beginners It's a normal diff, players should be able to comprehend it at this level.
00:31:377 (2,3,4) - ^ ^
00:39:351 (1) - Try and make it so 00:39:731 is the beginning of a note or slider, as it is a strong beat. Will think about this, but the slider follows vocal pretty well too.
01:16:187 (1) - Try and make this curve more to improve 3's blanket.
01:23:592 (4,5) - Try and improve blankets It looks fine as it is already.
01:25:870 (2,3,4) - IMO this doesn't look good nor flow well, but that might just be me. People like it :c It's fine, really.
Approach rate 5 Like current AR more to handle these 1/2 taps better.

Pretty good difficulty. Not much wrong here. :D

Hard
00:03:655 (2,3) - Blanket? Not intended.
00:11:250 (2) - Put this more inbetween 3 and 1 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2604135 Idk, but I like the current pattern more.
00:12:769 (1,2) - Please don't touch, really noticeable.That's intended.
00:16:187 (3) - Improve blanket
00:20:744 (6,7) - Make same slider Curved 7 instead.
00:28:339 (3) - Move middle point up by 1
00:43:149 (4,1) - Don't touch Again, intended.
00:57:959 (1,3) - Make same slider Why, the current pattern works fine too.
01:01:756 (1) - No New combo I think this is fine, wait for other people commenting on it.
01:07:073 (1) - Improve blanket
01:14:858 (1,2,3,4,5) - Improve this star formation Looks fine to me.
01:14:288 (3,6) - and at the same time stack these There's no need to stack at this point.
Approach rate 7 Like the current AR more.

Great difficulty. Just a few slight problems that don't look good. 8-) Also, a lot of the combos seem to short for hard mode.

Insane
00:05:554 (4) - This dip doesn't flow well I feel it's fine here.
00:10:111 (5,6) - Reverse the position on the timeline to flow better and mirror 1,2, and 3.
00:16:946 (2,3,4,5) - Make the same shape. Can't see a reason for that to happen, as the current pattern is fine already.
00:24:921 (2) - Center this more in the middle of 3
00:34:794 (1) - Make this sort of like 3, except upside down like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2603665
00:35:174 (5,6,7) - Make all the same slider (Copy and paste) They are actually. I just rotated them by 120/240°.
00:37:832 (1) - No new combo This one's fine.
00:39:351 (6) - Instead make this a copy of 5, then Ctrl H, G, then place it the left of 5 Again, it's only a bit rotated, still the same.
00:43:149 (1) - No new combo Needed to make the play more intuitively here.
00:48:845 (3) - New combo here instead of 1 NC'd here to make the jump more intuitively.
00:57:959 (1,3) - Same shape. I don't really know how you came up with the shape issues, but this one's perfectly symmetrical to the y-axis. >.<
01:01:756 (1) - No NC Needed for big jumps.
01:26:440 (1) - ^ But it fits well to the pattern :c.

Good job on this difficulty. It flows well, etc. Looks a little messy though. A few short combos ;)

Good job on this map. It flows well and the hitsounds are beautiful. Some of the combos could be improved, and the map doesn't feel as clean as it could be in all difficulties though. (especially insane.) However, these aren't small problems and could be easily fixed. Keep mapping. I hope this gets ranked. :)
Much thanks for the mod! :) No comment = fixed!
Mikii
Hey from #modreq

Easy and Normal look fine.

Hard
SPOILER
00:21:503(1) Overlap? Could snap it onto the 5 circle or move it somewhere else
00:49:415(2,3) Switch for a better sound beat?
01:02:326(1) I wouldn't have a NC there
01:04:605(2) Overlap
01:08:022(3)^
01:08:782(1,2) Switch the slider and circle for readability since the slider is on a red tick in a more clicky section
01:12:389(3,4) ^
01:27:877(5) Maybe align slider with the 4th back and forth slider

Insane
SPOILER
00:07:643(1,2) Align the slider end with the beginning of 2nd circle for polish
00:08:212(2) Place around x:352 y:342 to prevent overlap
00:25:372(3) Messed up slider from slider speed changes I guess. It also doesn't look well blanketed
00:27:200(4) Bit hard to read, or give it more emphasis, doesn't feel like the beat is there
00:54:179(3) Curve it the over way and blanket it with that 5th circle. Also makes a nice pair with the 4th slider
01:15:617(5,6,7,8,9) Make it into a moving stream for difficulty
01:16:946(3,4,5) Put another circle pattern in there, the square feels like it breaks flow and overlaps with 01:17:516(1)

Outside of the mapset
lmao

Zoom in on that pic. Add a space between 'isa'. Whatever

lol


Good luck!
Topic Starter
Pho

Mikii wrote:

Hey from #modreq

Easy and Normal look fine.

Hard
SPOILER
00:21:503(1) Overlap? Could snap it onto the 5 circle or move it somewhere else Would break up the spacing. THis should be fine, both objects are far away in the timeline.
00:49:415(2,3) Switch for a better sound beat? It follows the instruments well in the background.
01:02:326(1) I wouldn't have a NC there It's there for the spacing change.
01:04:605(2) Overlap This should be fine. Will think about it.
01:08:022(3)^^
01:08:782(1,2) Switch the slider and circle for readability since the slider is on a red tick in a more clicky section It's there as there is a strong beat to follow at the red tick.
01:12:389(3,4) ^ Oh, I forgot I wanted to change this, thanks! :D
01:27:877(5) Maybe align slider with the 4th back and forth slider I like it more this way.

Insane
SPOILER
00:07:643(1,2) Align the slider end with the beginning of 2nd circle for polish This should flow well already.
00:08:212(2) Place around x:352 y:342 to prevent overlap The previous circle faded away in time already, so it's fine.
00:25:372(3) Messed up slider from slider speed changes I guess. It also doesn't look well blanketed I don't really see a problem here. oO
00:27:200(4) Bit hard to read, or give it more emphasis, doesn't feel like the beat is there It is there, just delete and listen closer.
00:54:179(3) Curve it the over way and blanket it with that 5th circle. Also makes a nice pair with the 4th slider Hmm, guess I can try this out.
01:15:617(5,6,7,8,9) Make it into a moving stream for difficulty Not needed, I feel comfortably with this stacked stream.
01:16:946(3,4,5) Put another circle pattern in there, the square feels like it breaks flow and overlaps with 01:17:516(1) I rearranged a slider only.

Outside of the mapset
lmao

Zoom in on that pic. Add a space between 'isa'. Whatever Not needed :3

lol hue
Good luck!
Thanks for the random mod, really appreciate it! :)
Mikii
No kudosu??? :(
But yeah most of what I said was just personal preferences and nitpicks. The map is good enough as it is. I'm still learning so kudosu or not, at least you got some use out of the mod.

I guess I should read that it was a BAT req before I started :|
Topic Starter
Pho

Mikii wrote:

No kudosu??? :(
But yeah most of what I said was just personal preferences and nitpicks. The map is good enough as it is. I'm still learning so kudosu or not, at least you got some use out of the mod.

I guess I should read that it was a BAT req before I started :|
Sry my fault, thought i clicked it already lol
Mao
Everyone tries the speedrank *runs*
xxdeathx
Better fix the title ;;
Topic Starter
Pho

Mao wrote:

Everyone tries the speedrank *runs*
Nah, I got time don't worry lol. Certainly gonna wait until death's set got reranked.
Yep, saw the recent DQ, sry for that death :( Gonna fix the title up.
jonathanlfj
woot

[General]
offset needs about -8ms
also better fix the title xD

[Easy]
00:09:351 (1) - maybe a finish on the start here (applies to all diffs)
00:45:427 (3) - missing a NC here i think
01:08:782 - since there is a clap here, consider swapping 01:08:592 (2) for a 1/2 slider
01:23:782 (2) - there is actually no clap on the end here, similar to 01:18:845 (5)

[Normal]
00:16:187 (2) - use a repeat slider here like 00:19:225 (2) would fit better imo
00:34:415 (2) - same thing here, since there is a vocal you can follow at 00:34:605
01:03:845 - another sound that can be covered for build up, try making 01:03:655 (2) a 1/2 slider
01:18:465 (4) - this note flows a bit weird, I would have done something like this:
[Hard]
00:00:806 (1) - i would decrease the volume more at the end for the fade effect to be stronger
00:57:769 (3) - i was thinking maybe you could center this note to carry forward the symmetry from 00:56:440 (1,2)
01:01:756 (1) - i dont really find this NC necessary, since it belongs to the same musical section and pattern as 01:00:997 (1,2). 01:02:326 (1) - this is fine since it contains a spacing change and a transition of the music
01:09:351 (4,5) - i can't really tell what these short kick sliders are following in the music, you are better off using some sort of jump pattern here to make the emphasis
01:22:168 (5) - this would be an insane-style gimmick, do not recommend overmaps like this on a hard diff
01:25:301 (1,2,3) - oh god my OCD, please fix the blanket spacing with 01:25:301 (1,3)

[Insane]
00:00:807 (1) - same as Hard, maybe a lower volume for the spinner end
00:25:301 (3) - there is a pretty significant beat at 00:25:491, i would try not to skip it
01:01:946 (2) - maybe you could center this note to preserve the symmetry a bit
01:20:364 (5,1) - this sudden direction change is a little hard to play, you could try ctrl+g on 01:19:984 (3,4) to make a zig-zag flow out of this

thats about all, let me know after you are done
Lanturn
Nice set. :3

Call me after jonathanlfj is done, and https://osu.ppy.sh/s/261145 is done.
Topic Starter
Pho

jonathanlfj wrote:

woot woot

[General]
offset needs about -8ms
also better fix the title xD

[Easy]
00:09:351 (1) - maybe a finish on the start here (applies to all diffs)
00:45:427 (3) - missing a NC here i think
01:08:782 - since there is a clap here, consider swapping 01:08:592 (2) for a 1/2 slider I prefer it the way it is currently, 1/2 slider here feels a bit strange to me.
01:23:782 (2) - there is actually no clap on the end here, similar to 01:18:845 (5)

[Normal]
00:16:187 (2) - use a repeat slider here like 00:19:225 (2) would fit better imo
00:34:415 (2) - same thing here, since there is a vocal you can follow at 00:34:605
01:03:845 - another sound that can be covered for build up, try making 01:03:655 (2) a 1/2 slider
01:18:465 (4) - this note flows a bit weird, I would have done something like this:
[Hard]
00:00:806 (1) - i would decrease the volume more at the end for the fade effect to be stronger
00:57:769 (3) - i was thinking maybe you could center this note to carry forward the symmetry from 00:56:440 (1,2)
01:01:756 (1) - i dont really find this NC necessary, since it belongs to the same musical section and pattern as 01:00:997 (1,2). I seem to have set the NC unconsciously here orz
01:02:326 (1) - this is fine since it contains a spacing change and a transition of the music
01:09:351 (4,5) - i can't really tell what these short kick sliders are following in the music, you are better off using some sort of jump pattern here to make the emphasis
01:22:168 (5) - this would be an insane-style gimmick, do not recommend overmaps like this on a hard diff
01:25:301 (1,2,3) - oh god my OCD, please fix the blanket spacing with 01:25:301 (1,3) lol allright

[Insane]
00:00:807 (1) - same as Hard, maybe a lower volume for the spinner end
00:25:301 (3) - there is a pretty significant beat at 00:25:491, i would try not to skip it Thought nobody would notice it, allright~
01:01:946 (2) - maybe you could center this note to preserve the symmetry a bit
01:20:364 (5,1) - this sudden direction change is a little hard to play, you could try ctrl+g on 01:19:984 (3,4) to make a zig-zag flow out of this I don't really want to jump here since I'm already jumping in the next combo. I moved the slider a bit to the left to redeem this.

thats about all, let me know after you are done
Everything not commented was applied, thanks lfj! Gonna update tomorrow or so i guess~

@Lanturn: Cool \:D/
jonathanlfj
i checked xxdeathx's ranked version, the non-romanized title should be &Z(TV size-English ver.-) with the asian brackets. just go over the other metadata as well and everything should be fine
Topic Starter
Pho
I didn't realize there's a difference between asian and western brackets orz. Allright, updated.
jonathanlfj
alright lets do this~
Topic Starter
Pho
Nice, thanks a lot lfj <3
HabiHolic
yo pho!

i will check your map!
Topic Starter
Pho

HabiHolic wrote:

yo pho!

i will check your map!
Cool :) Just wait for ZZHBOY's set to get ranked, than you can check again.
Either you or Lanturn, idk lol
Everything
Hi from my modding queue! bạn có khỏe không? :>
"Whoa vietnamese modder/mapper, that's a rare sight. :lol: I need to learn vietnamese again...."
Lol ikr.. I never met a Vietnamese player on osu personally... maybe from some multiroom but definitely do not know them personally. But here's a viet mapper right here xD

Easy
00:13:711 (2,3,4) - Flow feels a bit weird. At 00:12:381 (1,2) these are parallel to each other then combo 3 comes and --- to me it seem visually wrong. I know DS is also a pain to deal with too (when you move one, must move other to have consistent ds) but I'd move combo 3 to the left in a way, and then adjust the follow objects' DS. you dont have to agree with my opinion though, just my thought

Normal:
00:13:141 (2) - You can make this stack with 00:11:622 (5,6) just turn of DS, adjust, then adjust 00:13:711 (3) to maintain consistent DS
01:02:128 (4) - I think pointing the slider outward would look more appealing

sry if its not as much help but, im still learning in modding and mapping ;w; best of luck though, its a nice map set ;DD
Topic Starter
Pho

trammiexo wrote:

Hi from my modding queue! bạn có khỏe không? :> Bạn khỏe :>
"Whoa vietnamese modder/mapper, that's a rare sight. :lol: I need to learn vietnamese again...."
Lol ikr.. I never met a Vietnamese player on osu personally... maybe from some multiroom but definitely do not know them personally. But here's a viet mapper right here xD

Easy
00:13:711 (2,3,4) - Flow feels a bit weird. At 00:12:381 (1,2) these are parallel to each other then combo 3 comes and --- to me it seem visually wrong. I know DS is also a pain to deal with too (when you move one, must move other to have consistent ds) but I'd move combo 3 to the left in a way, and then adjust the follow objects' DS. you dont have to agree with my opinion though, just my thought I might fix the flow at that section a bit when the next BN is coming for a recheck. Your solution is not really viable since it causes inconsistent spacing in the combo which really want to avoid in general in easy diffs.

Normal:
00:13:141 (2) - You can make this stack with 00:11:622 (5,6) just turn of DS, adjust, then adjust 00:13:711 (3) to maintain consistent DS Stack is not what I really intended to do here since I do that 1/2 slider spacing consistently at the beginning. Keep
01:02:128 (4) - I think pointing the slider outward would look more appealing I like the sharp angle for emphasis :p

sry if its not as much help but, im still learning in modding and mapping ;w; best of luck though, its a nice map set ;DD No prob, you got a point tho. Thanks for mod anyway :)
meii18
ZZHBOY's version was moved to ranked a few days ago . Why you not rank it ? o_O
DakeDekaane
Didn't see people were already crowding on this map *cries*
Topic Starter
Pho

DakeDekaane wrote:

Didn't see people were already crowding on this map *cries*
Aldnoah hype still too high for some reason :v
IamKwaN
I love maps with no GDs :3
Pop for now, I hope you don't mind as you have so many BN-deep darkfriends above who are glad to help qualify.
[I]
  1. 00:03:267 - Whistle is redundant with no kick, just placing clap is enough. Same goes for 00:04:597 (6) - 00:10:103 - 00:10:673 - 00:11:242 - 00:11:622 (4) - 00:20:736 - 01:00:230 - 01:03:267 - 01:06:685 (4) - 01:11:242 (4) - You need to be fair to all snares, please.
  2. 00:06:875 - Missing whistle. Same for 00:08:774 - 00:11:052 (2) - 00:11:432 - 00:11:812 (5) - 00:14:090 - 00:14:470 - 00:27:192 - 01:09:913 (6) - 01:16:179 - 01:17:888 - 01:27:856 (4) - You also need to be fair to all kicks, please.
  3. 00:12:002 (6) - You can remove whistle here.
  4. 00:13:141 - Missing clap.
  5. 00:45:040 (2) - CTRL+G makes the flow more comfortable.
  6. 00:46:938 (5,1) - Also a CTRL+G for vocal on 00:46:938 - and kick on 00:47:318 - , since you didn't put any hitsounds on 00:47:128 - which makes it hollow even the music has a tiny synthesizer sound.
  7. 00:51:495 - Default soft whistle. Same applies on 00:51:495 - & 00:54:913 - .
  8. 00:51:495 (5,1,2) - The usage of distance snapping here is really poor, even most people have listened to this song so many times, not everyone who listen to this song for the first time can clearly read the gap in between.
  9. 00:57:761 (3) - Delete this for the sake of distance snap, the music doesn't provide potentials for such a big jump to be honest. 00:57:951 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - are different because of solid vocals.
  10. 01:10:008 (7) - Overmapping doesn't fit with the whole diff.
  11. 01:11:622 - This should be a clap instead.
  12. 01:12:381 (4) - Swap the hitsound, kick is on slider tail instead of head.
  13. 01:15:040 - Remove the whistle and put it on 01:15:230 - where kick is found.
  14. 01:15:609 - Lower the volume a bit on streams please, it's too much like a machine gun shooting now.
  15. 01:19:217 - Why not finish? Whistle is of too low pitch.
  16. 01:27:666 (2,3) - Claps missing.
    Copied hitsounds again to other diffs
[H]
  1. 00:00:799 - Redundant green line.
  2. 00:43:141 (4,1) - This placement can be polished by ignoring distance snap: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2765657
  3. 00:46:938 (4,1) - Your mapping style is to alter the spacing suddenly sometimes with no grounds on the music which makes it really untidy from my point of view. 00:48:078 (3,4,1) - Also this is really confusing, it can be a 1/1 halt if I am just looking at the spacing. And these: 00:53:014 (4,1,2) - 01:04:976 (3,4,1) - 01:18:837 (5,1) - 01:20:356 (4) - Maybe recessive jumps look more tidier and neat.
  4. 00:50:736 (1,4) - Intentional no-blanket?
  5. 01:18:078 (2) - This flow is quite uncomfortable, I suggest doing something like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2765699
  6. 01:25:293 (1,2,3) - Avoid the unaesthetic overlapping: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2765711
[N]
  1. AR5 is fine enough for such BPM, 5.5 is too exaggerated.
  2. 00:49:597 - Add a circle here for the sake of avoiding polarity and the kick.
  3. 01:04:027 (1) - May curve it facing another orientation: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2765745
Topic Starter
Pho

IamKwaN wrote:

I love maps with no GDs :3
Pop for now, I hope you don't mind as you have so many BN-deep darkfriends above who are glad to help qualify. Uhm okay. I don't know how they pop up in this thread either :D
[I]
  1. 00:03:267 - Whistle is redundant with no kick, just placing clap is enough. Same goes for 00:04:597 (6) - 00:10:103 - 00:10:673 - 00:11:242 - 00:11:622 (4) - 00:20:736 - 01:00:230 - 01:03:267 - 01:06:685 (4) - 01:11:242 (4) - You need to be fair to all snares, please. #BlameMyEars
  2. 00:06:875 - Missing whistle. Same for 00:08:774 - 00:11:052 (2) - 00:11:432 - 00:11:812 (5) - 00:14:090 - 00:14:470 - 00:27:192 - 01:09:913 (6) - 01:16:179 - 01:17:888 - 01:27:856 (4) - You also need to be fair to all kicks, please. #BlameMyEars
  3. 00:12:002 (6) - You can remove whistle here.
  4. 00:13:141 - Missing clap.
  5. 00:45:040 (2) - CTRL+G makes the flow more comfortable.
  6. 00:46:938 (5,1) - Also a CTRL+G for vocal on 00:46:938 - and kick on 00:47:318 - , since you didn't put any hitsounds on 00:47:128 - which makes it hollow even the music has a tiny synthesizer sound.
  7. 00:51:495 - Default soft whistle. Same applies on 00:51:495 - & 00:54:913 - . I'd rather leave these out, I don't think the piano notes need more emphasis.
  8. 00:51:495 (5,1,2) - The usage of distance snapping here is really poor, even most people have listened to this song so many times, not everyone who listen to this song for the first time can clearly read the gap in between. Lowered.
  9. 00:57:761 (3) - Delete this for the sake of distance snap, the music doesn't provide potentials for such a big jump to be honest. 00:57:951 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - are different because of solid vocals. Kept that note as it is pretty dominant in the track. Lowered the spacing though.
  10. 01:10:008 (7) - Overmapping doesn't fit with the whole diff.
  11. 01:11:622 - This should be a clap instead.
  12. 01:12:381 (4) - Swap the hitsound, kick is on slider tail instead of head.
  13. 01:15:040 - Remove the whistle and put it on 01:15:230 - where kick is found.
  14. 01:15:609 - Lower the volume a bit on streams please, it's too much like a machine gun shooting now.
  15. 01:19:217 - Why not finish? Whistle is of too low pitch.Finish feels over the top here, there isn't a cymbal here either and the snare isn't really strong either.
  16. 01:27:666 (2,3) - Claps missing.
    Copied hitsounds again to other diffs
[H]
  1. 00:00:799 - Redundant green line.
  2. 00:43:141 (4,1) - This placement can be polished by ignoring distance snap: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2765657 Why evryone hates this orz.
  3. 00:46:938 (4,1) - Your mapping style is to alter the spacing suddenly sometimes with no grounds on the music which makes it really untidy from my point of view. Equally spaced now. Yeah, I got that quirk to sometimes space strangely in hard maps, not sure where that comes from.
    00:48:078 (3,4,1) - Also this is really confusing, it can be a 1/1 halt if I am just looking at the spacing. I liked the halt at this point though.
    And these: 00:53:014 (4,1,2) - 01:04:976 (3,4,1) - 01:18:837 (5,1) - 01:20:356 (4) - Maybe recessive jumps look more tidier and neat. I do that sometimes in the map already, at the sections you pointed out I don't think it is necessary.
  4. 00:50:736 (1,4) - Intentional no-blanket? yes
  5. 01:18:078 (2) - This flow is quite uncomfortable, I suggest doing something like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2765699
  6. 01:25:293 (1,2,3) - Avoid the unaesthetic overlapping: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2765711 I don't feel this looks so bad. :/
[N]
  1. AR5 is fine enough for such BPM, 5.5 is too exaggerated.
  2. 00:49:597 - Add a circle here for the sake of avoiding polarity and the kick.
  3. 01:04:027 (1) - May curve it facing another orientation: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2765745 Like the current pattern more though.
Everything not commented red = fixed. Thanks Kwan-sama :)
IamKwaN
Yahoo!
HabiHolic
ok~

[Easy]

  1. 00:18:457 (4,1) - change NC batter.
  2. 01:23:394 - clap
  3. 01:23:774 - whistle
  4. 01:24:913 - clap
[Insane]

  1. 01:20:546 (1) - Ctrl+G is flow batter
nice map and hitsound~

call me back
Topic Starter
Pho

HabiHolic wrote:

ok~

[Easy]

  1. 00:18:457 (4,1) - change NC batter.
  2. 01:23:394 - clap
  3. 01:23:774 - whistle
  4. 01:24:913 - clap
[Insane]

  1. 01:20:546 (1) - Ctrl+G is flow batter
nice map and hitsound~

call me back
Fixed all except the Insane suggestion, I like the current flow. :)
HabiHolic
Recheck for no problem! good job!

Ranked
meii18
Gratz Pho ! o/
pkk
congrats pho! can I eat you now?
kakifly
you pho-nally got this ranked
gratz lol :p
Mao
Herzlichen Glückwunsch!
Kyouren

Mao wrote:

Herzlichen Glückwunsch!
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