Garven wrote:

[Easy]
Much more time after the spinners please. For Easy difficulties, aim for 3-4 beats so that new players can recover in time.
00:21:409 (4) - New combo should be here
00:29:981 (1) - This combo is huge. You can't follow your pattern since you made a repeat slider at 00:32:838 - Try to keep to your pattern of a new combo every two tall white ticks. It fits the phrasing of this song quite well.
00:38:552 (1) - Maybe for this slower part use only circles instead of sliders to give it a different feel from the other parts like when the music picks back up at 00:44:267 -
02:25:695 (1) - Use circles here instead of a slider. Gives a better feel with the sudden quiet band. That and the end of the slider at 02:26:409 - feels really off rhythm anyway. It'd be better to follow the rhythm you used at 01:14:267 (1) - if you insist on using a slider still. Same with the very end of the map.
03:11:052 (4) - Might be better to just delete this. Kind of hard to read for an Easy difficulty
04:01:945 - Why not end here? Same question posed to the Normal

BaunceBabe wrote:

Easy

00:26:767 (4) - , 01:01:052 (3) - , 01:11:409 (2) - , 01:44:981 (2) - , 02:22:838 (2) - The spacing here is 0,8 when you had 1x on the actual overall patterns. You shouldn't change the spacing in an Easy and keep it consistant. It can confuse and be missunderstood and played as 1x spacing so please fix that. It also might be played as 1/2 pattern, so please fix this.
01:03:909 (4,1) - Little spacing difference than the normal spacing 01:02:659 (3,4) - . Easy fix.
01:14:267 (1) - NC is not needed remove it.

Loctav wrote:

p3n forced me to do this.
And yes, I am picky <3

[General]

Remove Star_Stream from the tags? You removed the collab, so.. well. No need to leave that there.
Inconsistent Widescreen Support. Deactivate Widescreen Support on Easy and Hard.

[Easy]
00:03:552 (3,1) - quite flowbreaking. I would move (3) and (1) more to the right, so the movement bow is less sharp:
before: http://puu.sh/5U4lY/453c7f25c3.jpg
after: http://puu.sh/5U4j1/6c2ca6a858.jpg
I rotated (1) btw. Readjust (2) when applying, please.

236,84,3552,2,0,L|172:84,1,50
92,116,4088,6,0,P|19:165|0:241,1,150,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

00:16:409 (2) - move this more upwards, to match more the direction of (1).
00:23:552 (4,1) - The direction of (4) should point more towards (1). More like this: http://puu.sh/5U4A7/2f03f276b6.jpg

492,156,23195,1,8,3:0:0:0:
412,212,23552,2,0,P|383:258|378:323,1,100,0|8,0:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
308,376,24267,6,0,P|232:392|152:364,1,150

00:33:552 (2) - uneven blanket usage. Move more to the right.
00:34:981 (3,1,2) - this pattern is unevenly shaped. (not symmetrical, looks untidy). Move (1) and (2) more to the right. http://puu.sh/5U4Hl/e6414a43e9.jpg

248,184,34981,2,0,P|196:96|92:104,1,200
152,184,36052,5,8,3:0:0:0:
196,272,36409,2,0,P|100:267|54:182,1,200,8|4,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

00:41:409 (1) - why is this so straight above the (3). See, the movement of (3) suggests something else: http://puu.sh/5U4R8/91c8112ab3.jpg. The previous movement contradicts with the placement

of (1). tl;dr: move the yellow (1) more into the reach of the sliderend and direction of (3).
00:52:838 (1,2) - The slider is curved, pointing up slightly, yet you line up the (2) straight horizontally with the sliderend. This looks a bit untidy. Try to put the (2) more into the

direction the sliderend points to.
01:01:409 (1) - move more to the left?
01:08:195 (2,3,4) - I tried to readjusted it a bit. It appeared like you ran out of space when placing (3) and (4). Look at this try: http://puu.sh/5U5dz/a47cdcba0a.jpg

364,180,68195,1,8,0:0:0:0:
276,228,68552,2,0,P|264:276|272:340,1,100,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
352,384,69267,2,0,P|404:384|456:360,1,100,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

01:26:945 (1,2) - try this: http://puu.sh/5U5Cu/1b3571349d.jpg

408,88,86945,6,0,P|344:48|272:56,1,150,4|8,0:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
192,116,87838,2,0,P|195:213|130:285,1,200

01:57:124 (3,4,1) - like in 00:41:409 - the movement is kinda sharp. Try to spread the objects apart from each other, more.
02:01:052 (3) - move more upwards
02:07:124 (1,2,3) - uneven spacing. Resnap!
02:06:767 (4,1,2,3,4,1) - I rebuilt this pattern a bit. Try it~

428,132,126767,1,8,0:0:0:0:
332,152,127124,6,0,P|229:132|149:74,1,200
52,68,128195,1,8,0:0:0:0:
72,164,128552,2,0,P|159:229|199:318,1,200
284,364,129624,1,8,0:0:0:0:
316,272,129981,6,0,P|388:236|472:252,2,150,0|12|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
160,252,131409,2,0,P|152:172|88:120,2,150,0|12|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

02:21:409 (1) - move more to the left. Line it more up with the fictional line of (3) and (1). Currently: http://puu.sh/5U69K/ec6322e87b.jpg. The centre of (1) should be, where the red line is.
03:45:338 (3) - move more to the right. Do a triangle!
03:55:338 (3,4,1,2,3) - uneven spacing? 0,80.. why? Stay consistent within the Easy. Don't change it suddenly. Especially not within the last 3 seconds, lol

Looks like a big mod, but actually it's just fixing an overall untidiness.

[Normal]

00:03:552 (3) - move more to the right, to match the direction of (2) more.
00:10:516 (2) - move more to the right and slightly upwards
00:15:517 (1,2,3,4) - I tried to reshape this a bit. Try it out~

180,112,15517,6,0,P|264:137|314:209,1,180,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
352,300,16409,2,0,P|402:337|468:320,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
496,240,17124,1,0,0:0:0:0:
452,156,17481,1,8,0:0:0:0:

00:23:552 (1,2) - move them more apart from each other. This almost-overlap is really iffy to me.
00:33:552 (3,4,5,1) - I also tried to reshape this:

52,132,33552,2,0,P|129:88|217:94,2,180,0|2|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
92,220,34981,1,0,0:0:0:0:
184,252,35338,1,0,0:0:0:0:
280,240,35695,6,0,P|324:280|340:336,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

00:42:838 (2,3,4) - odd movement pattern. The (2) indicates left movement, (3) indicates right and then (4) goes left again: http://puu.sh/5U8bC/86608ddbdc.jpg - try to make the "drawn line"

more even.
00:45:695 (4,5,1) - the gap between (4) and (5) is different from the gap between (5) and (1), which makes it appear untidy.
00:49:088 (4) - move more to the right and slightly upwards.
00:54:981 (5) - what about bowing this one and fit the sliderbeginning of (1) into it? like this: http://puu.sh/5U8oY/a63386d1d8.jpg

104,60,54624,1,8,0:0:0:0:
16,100,54981,2,0,P|12:164|48:228,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
108,148,55695,6,0,P|136:240|77:321,2,180,2|2|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

01:00:695 (5) - rotate by 10°, resnap to (4), make it look a bit "symmetrical", then it looks more tidy
01:01:409 (1,3) - ooow, this almost overlap. Move this more to the left, please. They shouldn't be SO close to each other.
01:10:517 (5) - move this more downwards to fit the direction of (4) more
01:29:981 (1) - bow it and fit the sliderend of (5) into it? http://puu.sh/5U8Dl/0cb8bd3217.jpg

336,340,89267,2,0,P|360:280|400:240,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
496,240,89981,6,0,P|480:184|408:140,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

01:34:267 (1) - move this more upwards to fit the direction of (3)
01:39:267 (2) - do they need to be so close to each other here, too?
01:44:267 (1,2) - try to fit the (2) more into the blanket of (1): http://puu.sh/5U8OC/20908dad3b.jpg
01:47:481 (1,2,3) - clap spam? D: that sounds weird.
01:49:981 (1,3) - move them more apart from each other
01:52:124 (4,1) - ^
02:00:517 (3) - move more downwards
02:12:124 (5) - rotate by 10° and resnap?
02:12:838 (1,3) - sliders, why you so close to each other? ;_;
02:17:838 (4,1,2) - uneven spacing, the gap between sliders is unbalanced. Try to readjust.
02:21:945 (2) - move more to the left and slightly downwards.
02:22:838 (3,4) - here, too ;_; why so close?
02:43:552 (2,4) - kill this almost overlap, please!
02:56:409 (4) - flip it! http://puu.sh/5U968/906847fc1b.jpg
03:12:124 (3,4,5,1,2) - Let's try this: http://puu.sh/5U9aE/c731d62bf6.jpg

220,196,193195,1,8,0:0:0:0:
280,120,193552,2,0,L|244:-12,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
344,20,194267,6,0,L|380:152,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
448,72,194981,2,0,L|484:204,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

03:21:409 (2,3) - you should really not put sliders SO CLOSE to each other.
03:24:267 (1,2) - did you run out of space again? Move (2) downwards. Rotate, if needed.
03:35:695 (3) - new combo? lol

The remaining diffs are covered by p3n.

p3n wrote:

In addition to Loctav, I'll be focusing on some gameplay issues and on appearance in 'Insane'. I hope this is not TOO much. Remember: Everything that is not related to timing is a suggestion. I highly recommend trying out most of the codes. Most suggestions don't change your patterns but improve the flow and playability as well as the look and aesthetics.


[Easy]
00:42:838 (3,1,2) - hitburst of (3) is obscuring (2). I suggest (you don't have to change this since it is not an unrankable issue as the hitburst is already fading out completely) you move (2) on the opposite side and just alternate the cursor movement like you did @00:36:052 (1,2,3,4) - : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190226
02:58:552 (2) - slightly wrong timing. slider should end on the red tick @02:59:088 - to match the song.



[Normal]
00:59:624 (3) - consider replacing the circle with a short 1/2 slider to closer match the vocals. The strict 1/1 beat doesn't really fit here and it plays very repetetive. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190273
01:14:803 (1) - wrong timing! This slider doesn't reflect vocals OR beat. Vocals are on the red ticks and beat is on the white ticks with the '2' left out. You could shorten the slider and follow only the red ticks to mostly follow the vocals. Or you can try something more complicated to match both vocals and beat while including the last downbeat before the break: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190256 Or just come up with anything else that fits the song.
01:44:267 (1) - remove finish on slider head. It shouldn't be here but on the red tick before (you didn't map the tick so you shouldn't have the finish here)
02:11:053 (3) - same as 00:59:624 (3) -
02:49:981 (3) - weird timing. Removing one repeat here and stretching the slider to reflect guitar and beat seems a much better way. 2x repeat slider like this never play as good as other combinations of hit objects. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190267
03:35:338 - why the unmapped pause? A short 1/2 slider or a circle would work well here.



[W h i t e's Hard]
looking good~



[Insane]

(1) Spacings/Blankets
00:04:802 (3,4) - the blanket should maintain a consistent distance between both sliders. Also maintaining a consistent distance for blankets like this throughout the map will increase readability and make it visually much more pleasing. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1189904

240,28,4088,6,0,P|208:92|116:108,1,160,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
48,132,4623,1,8,0:0:0:0:

00:15:338 (1) - one grid (level 4) up to match the slider blanket
00:26:231 (2) - blanket is uneven: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1189909
00:26:767 (3,1) - gaps are inconsistent. This makes this part look very crude and unpleasent. You should fix this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1189917

124,256,26231,2,0,P|84:184|132:116,1,160,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
196,288,26767,2,0,P|164:324|116:332,1,80,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
216,212,27124,6,0,P|272:268|248:348,1,160,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
196,288,27659,1,0,0:0:0:0:

00:38:552 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - the slowdown part makes differences in spacing and inconsistent note placement very obvious. You have to be careful in parts like this to place your hitobjects as precice as possible. I recommend a 1,20x DS setting and placement without grid snapping:

125,306,38552,6,0,P|174:348|238:356,1,128,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
288,300,39088,1,0,0:0:0:0:
352,260,39267,2,0,P|360:324|312:372,1,128,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
288,300,39802,2,0,P|280:232|324:188,1,128,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
392,196,40338,1,2,0:0:0:0:
364,124,40517,2,0,L|396:48,2,64,0|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
317,191,41052,5,2,0:0:0:0:
252,148,41231,1,0,0:0:0:0:
208,216,41409,2,0,P|152:180|92:200,1,128,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
144,256,41945,1,0,0:0:0:0:
108,324,42124,1,2,0:0:0:0:
64,264,42302,2,0,L|-4:264,2,64,0|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
96,196,42838,6,0,P|131:126|95:66,1,128,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
44,52,43374,1,0,0:0:0:0:
204,24,43731,1,0,0:0:0:0:
268,68,43909,2,0,L|336:68,1,64,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

00:47:838 (3,4) - I recommend not overlapping the slider head. Try something like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1189951

196,208,47838,2,0,P|204:288|172:360,1,160,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
120,288,48374,1,0,0:0:0:0:

00:53:552 (3,4,5,6) - you should improve the blankets to be consistent for this pattern. You could also increse the distance a bit to make the gaps appear less cramped: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1189964

256,252,53552,2,0,P|224:296|232:352,1,95.9999970703126,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
332,268,53909,2,0,P|328:220|296:184,1,95.9999970703126,10|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
320,344,54267,2,0,P|373:335|400:304,1,95.9999970703126,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
288,108,54624,2,0,P|239:132|220:168,1,95.9999970703126,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

00:56:231 (2) - suggestion: You could try to shape this in a way that will represent a V shape for the gap between the two long sliders: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1189974
01:31:409 (1,2) - you could increase the gap here. Just to make it more appealing and consistent for this part: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1189991
01:36:231 (2) - spacing should be 1,10x. Blanket could be better as well: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190000

100,52,96231,2,0,P|40:104|48:184,1,160,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

01:46:766 (1,2,3,1) - I recommend increasing the spacing between the linear sliders a bit. Try to match the distance of 01:48:374 (2,3) - (or in other words: Your distance snapping between notes should apply to the distance of these sliders for the sake of consistency): http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190012
01:48:374 (2,3,4,5) - spacing inconsistency in this pattern. Try to match your distance snapping (1,10x):
01:49:981 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - try to be very precice with your note placement in this sections. You change the DS here to reflect the calm part but some placements destroy the overall appearance. Readability could be improved by maintaining a perfect 1,00x DS without grid snapping:

156,344,109981,6,0,P|112:268|48:232,1,160,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
17,160,110517,1,0,0:0:0:0:
96,160,110695,2,0,L|132:80,2,80,2|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
123,235,111231,2,0,P|202:215|274:251,1,160,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
316,312,111767,1,0,0:0:0:0:
348,239,111945,2,0,P|262:254|237:325,1,160,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
316,312,112481,6,0,L|408:312,1,80,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
430,239,112838,2,0,L|510:239,2,80,2|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
386,171,113374,1,2,0:0:0:0:
346,101,113552,1,0,0:0:0:0:
426,101,113731,1,0,0:0:0:0:
386,32,113909,2,0,P|346:21|297:40,1,80,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
346,101,114266,6,0,P|306:164|343:239,1,160,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
386,171,114802,2,0,P|306:168|246:233,1,160,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
231,297,115338,2,0,L|143:297,1,80,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

02:04:981 (3,4,5,6) - same as 00:53:552 (3,4,5,6) - you should be able to copy paste the pattern or correct the spacings on your own
02:07:124 (1,2) - again the V shaped gap between the sliders would look more dynamic: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190047
02:09:981 (1,2) - ^same: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190051
02:15:695 (1) - blanket should be fixed: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190082
02:17:838 (7,8,1,2) - spread this out to match your 1,20x spacing for KIAI. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190094

241,264,137838,2,0,P|263:222|311:200,1,95.9999970703126,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
159,281,138195,2,0,P|182:325|229:347,1,95.9999970703126,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
241,264,138552,6,0,P|175:199|88:234,1,191.999994140625,6|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
280,188,139088,2,0,P|186:198|160:283,1,191.999994140625,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

02:21:409 (1,2,3) - try to shape the sliders with consistent gaps and angles. If you use a fan pattern it will look and feel more natural and dynamic. You could also focus on the slider heads to create a more consistent flow: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190111

336,376,141409,6,0,P|416:328|467:226,1,191.999994140625,6|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
347,285,141945,2,0,P|375:201|348:105,1,191.999994140625,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
292,217,142481,2,0,P|277:170|241:139,1,95.9999970703126,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

02:22:838 (1,2,3) - ^same, copy paste, CTRL + H
02:39:981 (1,2) - spacing inconsistency. Keep your 1,20x spacing.

8,200,159981,6,0,P|6:281|72:336,2,160,6|10|2,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
92,243,160874,2,0,P|128:256|169:241,1,80,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
235,176,161231,2,0,P|311:148|386:194,1,160,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

02:47:124 (1,2,3) - (1) and (3) are a bit too close. It looks very cramped. You could spread it out a bit and use the fan pattern I tried to show you before to increase the flow and make the pattern more dynamic: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190138
02:50:517 (2,3) - to make the bridged jump more readable, check your distance between the previous slider and the circle and apply the exact same distance to the following slider. This will automatically fix the blanket as well: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190145

125,35,170517,1,2,0:0:0:0:
299,81,170695,2,0,P|383:61|463:77,1,160,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

03:01:409 (1,2,3,4) - blanket spacings are inconsistent. Try to match your DS: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190162

360,130,179981,6,0,P|337:206|388:275,1,160,6|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
440,190,180517,1,0,0:0:0:0:
475,279,180695,2,0,P|436:349|350:362,1,160,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

03:01:409 (1,2,3) - ^same, copy paste, CTRL + H, adjust to fit everything
03:11:409 (1,2,3) - distances are inconsistent. Also blanket looks too cramped compared to the 1,20x spacing used here. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190183

345,338,191409,6,0,P|404:290|397:205,1,160,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
497,210,191945,1,0,0:0:0:0:
315,252,192123,2,0,P|275:252|236:282,1,80,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

03:14:267 (1,2,3) - spread it out with the previously used fan pattern. You could increase the spacing for (2) and have a evenly spreaded jump pattern with the 3 sliders: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190190
03:19:624 (9,1) - and 03:21:052 (3) - spread them out more to keep the high spaced dynamics of your KIAI mapping, use the fan pattern again if you want: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190208 & http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190210

438,231,199981,6,0,P|383:144|372:43,1,191.999994140625,6|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
254,97,200517,2,0,P|293:160|287:275,1,191.999994140625,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
203,154,201052,2,0,P|208:204|173:251,1,95.9999970703126,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
93,304,201409,2,0,L|5:364,1,95.9999970703126,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

03:23:910 (3) - maybe move the slider head slightly to match the new spreads of the slider blankets: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190214
03:47:660 (2,3) - use the EXACT same distance here as you did before on 03:46:767 (6,1) -


(2) Gameplay and stuff:
01:12:659 (8,9,10) - I recommend not stacking this triplet under the previous note. You can keep it if you want but it is a very old-fashioned way of mapping that is in contrast to the rest of the map. Your decision.
02:38:909 - you can drag the end of the break to this point to reflect the drumroll.
02:43:909 (10,1) - ty to create a more natural flow with the movement after the stream. You might have to adjust the stream notes (place them without grid snapping for a smoother curve and consistent gaps): http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190128
02:52:659 (8) - wrong timed repeat! The repeat on the blue tick doesn't match the song at all. Listen closely (50% or 25% speed) to hear the actual beats and guitar notes. You could try something like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1190157