This map is terrible.

General
I don't know why you storyboarded in the video. Why didn't you just add the video?
You can hear Hina say Ass at the start of the preview point. While absolutely hilarious it'd make a better impression if you moved it juuuust a tinge later.

Lunatic
00:09:974 (1,2,3) - This is ugly and too compressed. Try moving 2's end and 3's start lower so the circles on start and end don't overlap as much. Else it makes the pattern too focused and, well, ugly.
00:16:745 (1,2) - Don't fit with anything other than a bad attempt at making a map harder.
00:18:031 (1,2) - Same, only this time a double as facepalmworthy pattern since the overlap with 3 is poor at best.
00:34:488 (1,2,3) - Why are these suddenly on red ticks instead of purple?
00:47:860 (7,1) - lol spacing. Mirror the upcoming square.
01:01:145 (1,2,3,4) - this suddenly follows the instruments. Why, especially knowing you follow the vocals pristinely up to this point.
01:07:403 (1,2,3) - Ugly overlap of 1 and 3
01:11:517 (1) - TERRIBLE. Put a break there, or at the very least take all of those returns out. This is lazy space-filling, not mapping. Out out out! As a side note, the break at 01:02 is bad, doesn't fit songwise and gives a feel of "I didn't feel like mapping this part so have a break. Coming up next, overly extended slider!"
01:15:802 (1,2) - and onwards seems to have been mapped differently than, wel, everything else. Usually mapping over time isn't as noticable, but in this case it's actually quite jarring to see both a significant change in patterns and a slight pumping up of the spacing.
01:20:431 (4,5,6) - Perfect example of the style change. True to the other part of the map you would have better mapped this on the synth, following white--blue--red or however you want to describe that.

Hard
00:11:174 (5) - Have it bend up instead.
00:38:603 (5) - This slider is cringe-worthy.
00:39:974 (1) - Likewise
00:44:088 (4) - Perfect example of how sliders like the last (5) SHOULD be handled.
01:17;345 - Unneccesary break

Normal
00:11:174 (4) - Every inch of me screams to have this slider go right insteaed of down. Right now the overlap with both the previous notes is untidy.
00:19:403 (1,2,3) - What diff is this again?
00:41:345 (X) - For crying out loud put soething here. ANYTHING
00:45:460 (1,2,3,4) - See, I like this. Have more of this and less of Hard's sliders.
01:02:774 (3) - No. Put it on a white tick and have it return twice. For a NORMAL diff this is just dumb.
01:04:145 (6) - I hate you.
01:05:517 (2,3) - Take a lucky guess.
01:17:003 - why isn't anything showing up, is this a bug? IS IT THE BAD MAP BUG HUH HARRIS?
01:25:231 (1,2,3) - lol
01:26:603 (1,2,1,1,1) - Perfectly ugly way to end a map. Have those last three saparted more. More the last (1) up 4 and left 4 Lv2 grids, copy the first new combo mark to do the same.

Easy
00:59:174 (3) - *modding descends into incoherent ramble and laughing gasps*

Derp.

Wojjan wrote:

I don't know why you storyboarded in the video. Why didn't you just add the video?

Because I can. It's so much more awesome now.

Wojjan wrote:

You can hear Hina say Ass at the start of the preview point. While absolutely hilarious it'd make a better impression if you moved it juuuust a tinge later.

Fixed.

...And most of the Lunatic suggestions have been fixed, and some of the Normal. I'll also probably map over the break and fix up Hard's sliders.

Mind you this map is over a year old, and a bunch of the stuff from Lunatic were unmodified from how they originally were over a year ago. I completely remapped the ending, so that's why it's different, but the beginning section was the same as it was a year ago. Oh, the preview point is old, and so are a couple of other things. So if my map is really that retarded, that's mostly why. Bleh, well, I'll start remapping some stuff, thanks for the mod.

[General]
How about disabling SB fadein at the very start?

[Lunatic]
00:47:860 (7,1) - This bothers me, can you space it more?
01:17:516 (4,1) - This jump is cool, but there are no such jumps anywhere else
01:18:545 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Pretty confusing with such a small spacing
01:27:287 (1,1,1) - I'd better move last 2 somewhere else

[Hard]
01:17:003 - Very sudden break =\
01:24:716 (3,1) - Seems to be unintuitive

[Normal]
01:17:003 - I would map something from here too

[Easy]
00:12:545 (2,3) - I see that you want to follow spacing, but I would better place 3 straight below 2
01:17:003 - The same thing with the break.. You can add one before instead of this

SB+song are making me crazy..
Overall it's fine, but I believe you can do better note/slider placement. For now it doesn't really llook attractive =\
Sorry for that, but have a star *

Nothing bother me much on all difficulty actually. There maybe someone who see more farther detail than me. But from playing your map, what disturbing me the most was the slider pattern. Even if it rankable, it often make me combo break. This doesn't worth kudos, very

star~☆

(image previously here)

I Love Hina~!!

GJ Kitsune! .

Starrrrrr.

Wojjan wrote:

I don't know why you storyboarded in the video. Why didn't you just add the video?

Because Kitsune is pro like that c:

Wojjan wrote:

I don't know why you storyboarded in the video. Why didn't you just add the video?

[Easy]
00:57:803 (1) - Remove this new combo to match 00:53:003 (2).
01:23:174 (2) - Remove new combo to match the song better.

[Normal]
00:20:088 (3,1,2) - This is a little confusing for a Normal.
00:41:345 (1,1) - I don't think a jump like this is necessary. Especially for a Normal.
00:48:203 (1) - Add a finish.
00:54:374 (1) - This slider ends so suddenly. And it sounds a bit weird. I recommend moving it to the white tick ahead.

[Hard]
00:25:917 (8) - Remove finish. Doesn't fit.
00:44:088 (4) - This slider should start on 00:43:974 to match the vocals.
01:10:745 (4) - This would sound better on 01:10:717.
01:22:487 (1,2,3) - Rearrange this pattern, this is way too confusing.

[Insane]
00:33:003 (5) - Move this to the white tick up ahead. Matches the vocals better.
01:11:517 (1) - I am not agreeing with this slider.

The rest is fine I guess, Starred~

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(General)
01:01:737 (Storyboard) - Questionable content. I'm not complaining, but children might. Well actually, I am complaining, that's a bit distracting. Hilarious, but distracting nonetheless. XD;;

(Easy)
00:42:709 (5) - Looks better if you move it 4 up on the current grid.
01:28:140 (1) - I suggest having the spinner start on the actual "hoo" instead of a little before it (1/2 note later than the current position. New position: 01:28:309).

(Normal)
01:28:052 (1) - As with Easy, I suggest having it start at 01:28:309 instead.

(Hard)
00:44:080 (4) - Move this 1/4 back on the timeline (New Position: 00:43:995). Adjust placement accordingly.
01:28:052 (1) - Again, I suggest having it start at 01:28:309 instead.

(Lunatic)
01:28:052 (1) - Yeah, I still think 01:28:309 works better. >_>

Nice map. Love the storyboard. ^^

Hitoshirenu Shourai wrote:

SPOILER

(General)
01:01:737 (Storyboard) - Questionable content. I'm not complaining, but children might. Well actually, I am complaining, that's a bit distracting. Hilarious, but distracting nonetheless. XD;;

(Easy)
00:42:709 (5) - Looks better if you move it 4 up on the current grid.
01:28:140 (1) - I suggest having the spinner start on the actual "hoo" instead of a little before it (1/2 note later than the current position. New position: 01:28:309).

(Normal)
01:28:052 (1) - As with Easy, I suggest having it start at 01:28:309 instead.

(Hard)
00:44:080 (4) - Move this 1/4 back on the timeline (New Position: 00:43:995). Adjust placement accordingly.
01:28:052 (1) - Again, I suggest having it start at 01:28:309 instead.

(Lunatic)
01:28:052 (1) - Yeah, I still think 01:28:309 works better. >_>

Nice map. Love the storyboard. ^^

Thanks for the mod! As for the questionable content, I'm pretty sure any younger audiences won't even understand the storyboard. I worked pretty hard on it, so it probably deserves to be a bit distracting :3

For your mod, I moved the spinners at the ends of each difficulty. However, that was all. For what you suggested in Easy, it's only an aesthetic suggestion, and also, the slider is currently supposed to be perfectly encircling a slight portion of that side of the slider (see approach circle of next note lines up with slider). And for the one on hard, I'll agree that your suggestion goes with the lyrics, but it's just as intuitive in its current position, and if I move it, I'll have to readjust the entire curve, and all the slider ticks will sound off.

I hope you don't mind those two things ^~^; the rest of the map appears to be good?

Sorry for taking so long on the recheck. All looks well. Have your bubble. ^^

Its about time this thing got bubbled.
Your message is too short.
Your message is too short.

Hmm... try to change the framedelay of "montha-" to 170 and "montha-" to 85. that seems better(the origin looks a bit rapid).
and how about use instant fade in "montha-" like

 F,0,3717,,1
 F,0,3760,,0
 F,0,3845,,1
 F,0,4917,,0
 F,0,5003,,1
 F,0,7060,,0

abalee wrote:

Hmm... try to change the framedelay of "montha-" to 170 and "montha-" to 85. that seems better(the origin looks a bit rapid).
and how about use instant fade in "montha-" like

 F,0,3717,,1
 F,0,3760,,0
 F,0,3845,,1
 F,0,4917,,0
 F,0,5003,,1
 F,0,7060,,0

It looks really fast, but if you look at the source video (link in map description), her mouth moves that fast too. I fixed the second one a little bit, and I made the instant fade ins though.

Re-bubbled.

Also, I would just like to say something: Dirigible. That is all. =3

General

1. Also, the text file... well, I'd really vote for removing that out since no one's supposed to be dwelling around there. osz2 is looking at you. It's about something really minor, so there shouldn't be any problems with leaving it in the thread only.
2. The mapping is okay... it could be better, but you're getting there. Have you ever tried pattern-based mapping~?

Timing

1. Has anyone checked timing? I'm not completely sure, but I'm getting +7ms from what you have. Current one sounds a bit early.

Skin

1. The spinner is a bit distracting. I have difficulty telling where the approach circle is, reading what the words that pop up say, etc. I'm aware it's fully readable while being static, but as a quick glampse (much like when a spinner pops up and goes), it is kind of a problem. Perhaps you could look into that.

Storyboard

1. The SB image... I understand why you don't want to resize it lower, but, you see, it just can't be that large. It isn't a guideline, it's a rule. Sorry. You could, I don't know, perhaps have the zoomed in part in a separate image and use that for when it's fullscreen.

[Easy] & [Normal]

1. Oh you. You used the test build, didn't you?!
   
   

   osu!test, when writing Easy and Normal's metadata, wrote:

   [Metadata]
   Title:Hinarin's Relation of Misfortune (Short ver.)
   TitleUnicode:
   Artist:IOSYS
   ArtistUnicode:
   Creator:Kitsunemimi
   Version:Easy
   Source:Touhou
   Tags:ARM monotone sound sepher Path Apotropaic God Dark Road Side Fate Hina
   BeatmapID:112405
   BeatmapSetID:13038

   ...I am not exactly sure if it's going to be a problem (feel free to prove me wrong), but it'd be much better if you resaved these .osu files for this public build.

[Lunatic]

1. The slider on Lunatic... I honestly had no idea where to go. The color between the edges didn't make enough contrast; it blends too much, if you get what I mean. I'm not exactly sure if it's rankable, but I'm against it.

~ ~ ~

Goddamit IOSYS stop doing these songs they're so catchy and I don't want to join the weeaboo tide aaah.
Wow, I didn't expect to get this much. It should all be somewhat straight forward though, I hope.

EDIT: Wow, I hadn't popped it, what the hell.

T_T why you grave D:

Sorry ;_; suuuuper busy with school, CtBWC, other crap, BF3, etc.

And I suck at getting maps ranked so no motivation orz. If people can help me get BAT attention then that would be awesome, but that's impossible so ._.

Everything looks so much better this time! There's just two things though:

1. There are exactly three unsnapped objects on Lunatic. Make sure to fix them~
2. At Lunatic, exactly at 00:23:517 everything's supposed to be snapped at 1/3 yet there's some stuff in red ticks. Mistake?

I am still somewhat doubtful about timing, but every offset I get has been a little late, so it might be just me.

That should be all. Call me back and I'll give you your bubble back~

Gens wrote:

There are exactly three unsnapped objects on Lunatic. Make sure to fix them~

Fixed~

Gens wrote:

At Lunatic, exactly at 00:23:517 everything's supposed to be snapped at 1/3 yet there's some stuff in red ticks. Mistake?

Errr, they look like they're snapped to 1/3 to me o3o. If you're talking about 00:34:488 (1-6), then those are like that because of how the song is sung. I wasn't really sure of whether to stick with 1/3rds or not, but I they're only sliders, so I stuck with accuracy of the vocals.

Gens wrote:

I am still somewhat doubtful about timing, but every offset I get has been a little late, so it might be just me.

I pushed the timing back by 7ms.

And thanks for the post, it really relieves me to see this ^-^. There are times when I think my maps won't ever make it.

gogogogo <3

I love the spinner <3

After Gens' quick fix in Lunatic, and a small reshape of a slider...

Rebubbled.

i don't have enough time to get the fancy colours in.

Yeah. Better run it by somebody else before instaranking, right?

Anyway, everything's pretty much perfect now. Ranks!!

uuu~ yey ;w;

Sorry for the screwup on my end at first, though. Grats, Harris.

now if you'll excuse me, i'll go cry in shame

Holy shit.

FINALLYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY <33333333

EDIT: and please stay away from this map, haters

>:

Took long enough <333

Who's hating? o-o

Backfire wrote:

Who's hating? o-o

The people rating the map 0. xD

Well that's not possible
But fuck the 1 raters. this is not a 1 rating map

Congratz in rank Kitsu :3

GODDAMNIT.

I hate not having the Internet for 2 days.

Congrats!

Congratz