00:08:034 (8034|3,8294|2) - can be stacked since have the same vowels, even 00:15:860 - / 00:16:120 - | and 00:16:381 - / 00:16:642 - all vowels ends with u
, it would be cool being stacked,
00:09:599 (9599|1,9860|0) - / 00:13:512 (13512|0,13773|1) - / 00:17:947 (17947|2,18207|1) - too
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why is there a jack here 00:10:668 (10668|2,10755|2) - to me it feel out of place for the hi hat sound
i think moving this 00:13:277 (13277|0) - to 3 and this 00:13:451 (13451|2) - to 1 so it can flow better
00:14:842 (14842|3,14929|3) - i feel that the jack here is out of place similar to #4161229 but i suggest this pattern
i think this pattern 00:19:016 (19016|0,19103|0) - similar to the other two like this #4161238 #4161229 is out of place
similar to #4161239 this 00:23:190 (23190|2,23277|2) - feels off
i suggest this
i moved 00:23:625 (23625|3) - because it would be a bit better like this if you copy the pattern above
these two sections sound similar but you mapped them completely different
00:32:364 (32364|0,32855|2,32855|1,32855|3) -
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00:36:695 (36695|3,36695|0,36695|1,36695|2) -
i suggest making the first one like the second and removing the vocal note
I wouldn't say their similar due to the fact 00:36:695 (36695|2,36695|1,36695|0,36695|3) - has a crash so the LN's represent that.
this pattern here 00:35:375 (35375|3,35495|3,35615|3,35735|2,35735|3,35855|2,35855|3,35975|3,35975|2,36095|3,36095|2,36215|3,36215|2,36335|2) - feels much harder then the rest of this section of triples, please rework it
the second part 00:40:115 (40115|2,40115|1,40175|0,40175|3,40235|2,40295|1,40295|0,40355|2,40355|3,40415|0,40415|1,40475|3,40535|0,40535|2,40535|1) - of this pattern plays the same as the first part 00:39:575 (39575|3,39575|2,39635|0,39635|1,39695|2,39695|3,39755|0,39815|1,39815|3,39875|2,39935|1,39935|0,39995|2,40055|0,40055|3) - even tho the sounds are completely different they play very similar, i suggest changing the second part because it is less intense as the first part
I think I'll reject this one for now, 00:39:575 (39575|2,39575|3,39635|0,39635|1,39695|2,39695|3) - has tom sound so its a jump trill compared to the other part. 00:39:755 (39755|0,39815|3,39815|1,39875|2,39935|0,39935|1,39995|2) - keeps the jumpstream pattern going. 00:39:935 (39935|1,39935|0,39995|2,40055|3,40055|0,40115|1,40115|2,40175|0,40175|3,40235|2,40295|0,40295|1,40355|3,40355|2,40415|0,40415|1) - has split and jumptrill to represent the part of the "charging" sound.
00:42:935 (42935|1) - this note it's missplaced, the rhythm it's at 00:42:815 -
other missing single notes : 00:43:295 -
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this 00:44:315 (44315|2) - is a snare so you can make it a double and this 00:44:375 (44375|3,44375|1,44375|0) - is a kick so it can be a single
00:46:595 (46595|2,46655|1) - this transition it's easier compared with 00:46:955 (46955|3,47015|0) - , also look at this anchor here 00:46:715 (46715|3,46835|3,46955|3,47075|3,47195|3) -:
to improve it we can do something like:
i honestly preferr the second one since it's more playable and it remove the 4 note anchor at the start, but it depends by you the final choice
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00:47:555 (47555|2) - should be charted as doublet (suggest note on the 4th column) to match with 00:47:675 (47675|1,47675|0) -
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you could make this 00:47:615 (47615|0) - a double since the spacing would allow for it similar to the other
00:47:795 (47795|3,47795|0,47835|2,47835|1) - ik that's intentional, but what about making this more linear by placing at 3|4 columns the first doublet and 1|2 columns the 1/6 ?
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i dont hear a sound here, why is there a note here? 00:50:375 (50375|0) - if this is not intentional then please remove it
comparing this 00:51:095 (51095|3,51095|0,51175|2,51175|1,51255|3,51255|0,51335|1,51335|2) - to this 00:51:575 (51575|1,51575|0,51655|0,51655|3,51735|1,51735|2,51815|0,51815|3) - this they are the same sounds but the second one is a bit harder due to the mini jack at 00:51:575 (51575|0,51655|0) - i think you should move this 00:51:575 (51575|1,51575|0) - to the center
i suggest charging this pattern to allow emphasis of the snare 00:56:615 (56615|1,56615|2,56675|3,56675|0,56735|1,56735|2,56795|3,56795|0,56855|2,56855|1) -
this 00:58:135 (58135|0,58135|3) - should be a sniggle if you want to follow the other layering of the 1/3 section
00:58:275 - i dont get why you charted this as doublet, the sound it's the same of 00:58:195 (58195|0) -, if you make it single note 00:58:435 (58435|3,58435|1) - would be emphatized better
also 00:58:835 - should be charted as triplet
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made this a single and made 00:58:595 (58595|0,58595|1,58675|3,58675|2,58755|0,58755|1,58915|3,58915|1,58995|2,58995|1) - doubles
this should be a triple 01:12:695 (72695|3,72695|1,72695|0,72695|2) - like how this is 01:11:255 (71255|0,71255|2,71255|1) -
01:12:695 (72695|2,72695|1,72695|3) - to me feels slightly longer and helps build up better tension for 01:13:415 (73415|1,73415|2,73415|0) - . so Ill keep it how it is for now
01:14:510 (74510|1,74510|2,74585|0,74585|3) - i think it's overcharted, the real doublets should be only 01:14:435 - / 01:14:675 - / 01:14:915 -
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i do not understand why these notes are here 01:14:675 (74675|0,74735|1,74795|3,74915|1,74975|3,75035|0) -
01:17:075 (77075|3,77155|3,77155|2,77235|2,77315|3) - right hand it's heavy, i'd suggest to move 01:17:155 (77155|3) - in the center to avoid that minijack on the 4th column, in this way you'll balance each sides
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i dont here what this note is for 01:21:095 (81095|0) - so maybe remove it
01:21:395 (81395|2,81395|1) - make this lns like 01:18:995 (78995|3,78995|0) -
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01:26:675 (86675|3) - ghost ln here, it doesnt follow a new vocal like 01:19:235 (79235|2,86675|3) -
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01:32:915 (92915|1) - move this to the 4th column for playability, then 01:33:395 (93395|3) - to the 2nd and 01:33:515 (93515|1) - to the 3rd
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