00:14:361 (1,1) - and 00:49:917 (1,1) - those 1/1 break dashes might be a bit too far for the platter players so would be nice to nerf those a bit
00:20:139 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - This pattern could be changed around to emphasize the sound at 00:20:583 (3) - i would suggest removing 00:20:472 (2) - and making the slider ( 00:20:139 (1) - ) a triple
00:23:472 (9,1) - okay this is not 1/4 but this also has to be a dash i assume? 00:22:806 (4,5,6,7,8) - you can change the shape of this stream so it works
00:29:028 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I feel like this pattern is limited by how you timelined it (also the only actual hold note in the music is 00:30:361 (7)) so going for a timeline such as this would resolve that issue
i understand what you mean but i like my rhythm better as it gives nice variety to the patterning as i use longer 1/4 patterns elsewhere in the section already.
also, sliders are usually just used as the "default object type" even though there aren't actual held notes there so that should explain why i used them
no change
The dash distance for 00:32:472 (1) - 00:33:361 (5) - and 00:39:583 (1) - 00:40:472 (5) - should be around 2.2x - 2.3x ish
00:45:917 (3,4,5) - imo the rhythm could be something different instead of pasting the same pattern as 00:44:139 (3,4,5) -
perhaps something like this could work? 
The whole kiai (00:50:361 (1)) could be simplified rhytmically in order to have a more platter-like feeling to it a good example would be simplifying the 1/6 streams at 00:57:472 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - into this this would still be a correct way to represent the music while also being simpler.
Making changes such as this thoughout the kiai will be a lotta work but itll give a more platter-like feel to the whole kiai
i want to keep the diff dense because it has easier-than-usual dashes and hyperdashes especially. that way i can keep a good difficulty spread because the higher difficulties are extremely dense too.
i did however do a significant density nerf, removing a bunch of 1/6 and substituting it with 1/4 as i felt it was too much