00:28:421 (1,2,3,4) - you used more rotational flow before so i think this is a little out of place
00:16:421 (4,1) - this stack feels unnecessary, id prolly just move this to the left close to 00:16:308 (3)
00:10:082 (4,1,2,3) - flow is kinda awkward here, id move 00:10:421 (2) - below 00:10:534 (3)