CoLouRed GlaZeE wrote:

i really love this map!

1. ARとODのバランスが悪く感じます。そもそもAR9.5が非常に高く感じたのでARを9.3程度にしてODも8にしちゃっていいと思います
2. 00:15:322 - 音がずれちゃってるのでメロディに合わせてここから2連打の音取りにして00:16:655 - からキックを２つ置く音取りが無難だし叩いてて気持ちいいと思います。てか要するに00:13:544 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - と一緒です
   
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3. 00:27:099 (1,2,3) - ここだけやけに遠いような･･･。一例として
   00:27:099 (1) - の頭を00:25:766 (4) - の尻尾
   00:27:322 (2) - をCtrl+G
   00:27:544 (3) - の尻尾を00:25:544 (3) - の尻尾に　って感じです(これでも若干遠いですが)
4. 00:32:433 (1,2,3,4,5) - おれならボーカルに合わせてキック３つを結構スペーシング広めに起きます。いかが？
5. 00:33:099 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - イマイチなんの音とってるのかよくわかりませんでした ボーカルフォローでこんな感じとかどうでしょう
   
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6. 00:36:655 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^ここだと00:41:211 (4) - がやけに浮いちゃってます
7. 00:40:211 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
8. 00:43:988 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - 青線から3連が始まる非常に難解な音取りになってしまっているので赤線から3連打を置くことで白線にあるスネアの音をキックの頭にしてクリアな音取りにできます
   
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9. 00:45:433 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - ここもキックの尻尾にスネアが鳴っていてリズムを取りづらい音取りになってしまっています。上記と同じくスネアがキックの頭にくるようにしてあげれば綺麗な2連リズムになります
10. 00:47:211 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - ^
11. 00:57:988 (1) - シンバルも鳴ってるしもう少し前のキックから離して強調させてはどうでしょうか。このスライダーをいじるより00:57:544 (1,2,3) - を移動させたほうが楽かも？
12. 01:13:099 (1) - ここも個人的には遠ざけたいです
13. 01:13:988 (1) - ^
14. 01:16:211 (3,4) - ここは01:17:988 (3,4,5) - と同じように3つサークルを置いて4連打にした方がリズムが取りやすいと思います。もし違う音取りで表現したいというのであればこのままでも問題ありません
15. 01:19:766 (3,4) - ^

Meg wrote:

Extraだけ気になった箇所を～
Extra

1. ARとODのバランスが悪く感じます。そもそもAR9.5が非常に高く感じたのでARを9.3程度にしてODも8にしちゃっていいと思います
2. 00:15:322 - 音がずれちゃってるのでメロディに合わせてここから2連打の音取りにして00:16:655 - からキックを２つ置く音取りが無難だし叩いてて気持ちいいと思います。てか要するに00:13:544 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - と一緒です
   
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3. 00:27:099 (1,2,3) - ここだけやけに遠いような･･･。一例として
   00:27:099 (1) - の頭を00:25:766 (4) - の尻尾 00:27:766 (1) - をずらして頭に00:27:099 (1) - を置いて近くなるようにしました
   00:27:322 (2) - をCtrl+G
   00:27:544 (3) - の尻尾を00:25:544 (3) - の尻尾に　って感じです(これでも若干遠いですが)
4. 00:32:433 (1,2,3,4,5) - おれならボーカルに合わせてキック３つを結構スペーシング広めに起きます。いかが？
5. 00:33:099 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - イマイチなんの音とってるのかよくわかりませんでした ボーカルフォローでこんな感じとかどうでしょう 音取り下手なのでよく分からないけど自分なりに修正
   
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6. 00:36:655 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^ここだと00:41:211 (4) - がやけに浮いちゃってます
7. 00:40:211 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
8. 00:43:988 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - 青線から3連が始まる非常に難解な音取りになってしまっているので赤線から3連打を置くことで白線にあるスネアの音をキックの頭にしてクリアな音取りにできます
   
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9. 00:45:433 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - ここもキックの尻尾にスネアが鳴っていてリズムを取りづらい音取りになってしまっています。上記と同じくスネアがキックの頭にくるようにしてあげれば綺麗な2連リズムになります
10. 00:47:211 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - ^
11. 00:57:988 (1) - シンバルも鳴ってるしもう少し前のキックから離して強調させてはどうでしょうか。このスライダーをいじるより00:57:544 (1,2,3) - を移動させたほうが楽かも？
12. 01:13:099 (1) - ここも個人的には遠ざけたいです
13. 01:13:988 (1) - ^
14. 01:16:211 (3,4) - ここは01:17:988 (3,4,5) - と同じように3つサークルを置いて4連打にした方がリズムが取りやすいと思います。もし違う音取りで表現したいというのであればこのままでも問題ありません
15. 01:19:766 (3,4) - ^　ここは01:19:877 (4,5,6,1) - この流れが気に入っているのでこのままで

以上です。他難易度ももし時間があれば見ます～

Sotarks wrote:

i like the song!

Taneda Risa wrote:

ranked plz~ w

1. If you want to get ranked, normal-hitnormal.wav cannot be silent. It needs to have some sound.

1. 00:13:544 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - I think these are too hard for Easy diff. The rhythm is dense and hard to understand for beginner players, and the overlapping sliders make it hard to read. I think it will be better to simplify the rhythm here. Maybe try something like this instead: http://puu.sh/v45gy/c5a1b6d05f.jpg
2. 00:05:099 (5,1) - I think combo should be swapped here since the phrase actually starts at 00:04:655 http://puu.sh/v45lx/08985567aa.jpg
3. 00:33:544 - If you want to use slider tick hitsounds like this, then try to make it lower volume, because there is no click or release there in the map. Having loud sound in the middle of the slider can be confusing for the player, so try to lower the volume of hitsounds for timing section at 00:33:433 to about 60%. Same suggestion for all other uses of slider tick hitsound.
4. 00:45:544 (3,4,5,1,2,3) - Same as 00:13:544 (1,2,3,1,2,3) or you can try some rhythms with repeat sliders, just try to make it less dense. Also add new combo at 00:45:544 (3)
5. 00:49:211 (1,1) - The slider is too soon after the spinner for Easy diff. After spinner, beginner players need time to recover. osu! Ranking Criteria guidelines recommend having 4 beats between end of a spinner and the next object (but since this is low bpm, 2 or 3 beats would probably be enough). Anyway, I think it's better to replace this spinner with a 3/2 beat repeat slider: http://puu.sh/v466H/008bc9f486.jpg
6. 01:03:322 (1,1) - Same problem as 00:49:211 (1,1)
7. 01:15:766 (1) - It may look better if it doesn't overlap with (3). http://puu.sh/v46oZ/7d4fac25d2.jpg
8. 01:16:544 (2,3) - I think it's too complicated for Easy. Try simplifying the rhythm like http://puu.sh/v46yf/d215c6c0e8.jpg or http://puu.sh/v46zw/939da5bc6a.jpg Same for 01:18:322 (2,3) and 01:20:099 (2,3)
9. 01:20:655 (3,4) - Distance spacing is larger here. Make it consistent?

1. 00:08:211 (7,1) - Swap combo to start on 00:08:211
2. 00:43:322 (3) - I think it may actually be better to map this as 1/2 beat slider or two circles so it contrasts against 00:43:988 (2,3,4)
3. 00:48:099 (2,1) - This overlap looks messy in my opinion. I think it will look better if you avoid overlapping it.
4. 00:56:211 (1) - I think it's really weird that you used spinner here since it's the same part of the song as 01:10:433 (5) but you mapped there with sliders. I think it will be better to use sliders here.
5. 01:05:766 (2,4) - It will look cleaner if these are stacked.
6. 01:12:211 (2,3) - Distance here is too big.
7. 01:13:544 (1) - Slider makes rhythm hard to understand here. Consider changing to circle at 01:13:766 http://puu.sh/v47kE/57dee88b5f.jpg
8. 01:15:766 (1,2) - Avoid overlapping slider repeat. This makes it confusing to read.
9. 01:17:544 (1,3) - This looks cool, but I think it will be confusing for player since they can already see 01:18:322 (3) when they are supposed to click (2), so they might click the wrong object. It's difficult to read, so I suggest avoiding overlap between (1,3).
10. 01:25:433 (3) - I think it's better to have click at 01:25:544 since the sound is more obvious there.
11. 01:27:322 (4,5) - It's better to avoid multiple repeats on short slider for Normal diff since the player doesn't know how many repeat there are. Reduce it? http://puu.sh/v47xn/1ac741c85e.jpg
12. 01:28:655 (1) - Spinner might be too short for Normal diff. Consider making it circle like in Easy.

1. 00:31:655 (4,5) - Maybe swap the rhythm to put more emphasis on vocal note at 00:31:655 http://puu.sh/v47Kk/3b22d2bea9.jpg
2. 00:37:322 (3,5) - It may look better if these are not so close together: http://puu.sh/v47ND/e86eca6686.jpg
3. 00:49:988 (4) - I think this should be part of the next combo.

1. 00:45:544 (7,1) - I think it's better to start combo at 00:45:544 Same for 00:47:322 (5,1)
2. I love this diff.

1. 00:45:656 (2) - Slider end is unsnapped.

Asuka_- wrote:

m4m
完成されている譜面( *´艸｀)なので、できるだけ壊さないようにmodします。（質の良いmodができない）

General
無音のsoft-sliderslide3.wavを用意してください。
Easyでsoft-slidertick3.wavを鳴らすときに、その場所だけデフォのslide音がなっているので違和感があります。

Easy
00:10:877 (3,4) - easyでこういうoverlapは避けたほうがいいです。
00:20:655 (1) - 個人的に(3)の終点の左上に配置して上げたほうが初心者には優しいと思います。（調整したらギリギリhpbarかからずに置けるはず）
01:05:433 - kiai切れてまｓ
01:29:211 - 緑線外しておきましょう

Normal
01:26:877 (3) - 下向きに曲げたほうが流れ的に良いかな

Hard
00:48:099 (5) - 1/1sliderに変えませんか？　完全に同じ曲調の00:46:322 (4) - が1/1sliderで取ってあるので統一すべきだと思います。
こんな音取りとかどーでしょ　https://gyazo.com/4c3e5f623c563ce421369181c2112e11.png

Insane
00:15:322 (3) - 曲調的にここにNC置いた方がいいかな
00:24:211 (6) - ここもおなじ
00:27:766 (5) - ここも
00:36:655 (3) - ここ　　　（ここは同じ曲調の00:40:211 (1) - がNCです。　統一したほうがいいとおもいます）
00:59:766 (7) - こ
01:08:211 (5,1) - 　00:53:988 (5,6) - のように変更してみてもいいかもしれません。 このままで！

NCがちょっと変則的かなって印象を受けました。
意図的なら上のNC指示は無視しちゃってくださいな。

Extra
01:18:988 (5) - 前後のdsキープさせたいです。 (4)をほんの少し近づけてみたらどでしょ？（地味だけど結構変わる）


Hitsound上手すぎ憧れる
Good Luck!!

Kotori-Chan wrote:

this is obviously the tv size version so no tv size in title and video ?
:3

JeirYagtama wrote:

Nice map. You earn one star for the mapping and also a fav xd

Easy

00:39:322 (4,1) - hmm a bit too close
cant see that much mistakes

Normal

00:05:544 (2,3,4) - also a bit too close fix it just slightly make a little bit away from each other and you're good
00:07:322 (5,6,1) - ^
00:09:988 (3,4,5,6) - ^
00:21:988 (3) - move this a bit downward
00:39:099 (6) - ^
00:30:877 (3) - move this a bit upward
00:34:433 (3) - move it a bit more to the left

Hard

soo cleaaaannn

Insane

Also clean aaaaaaaaaa

Extra

Its also clean wtf

Looking forward to seeing this ranked Goodluck!

RepL4y wrote:

JeirYagtama wrote:

Nice map. You earn one star for the mapping and also a fav xd

Easy

00:39:322 (4,1) - hmm a bit too close
cant see that much mistakes

Normal

00:05:544 (2,3,4) - also a bit too close fix it just slightly make a little bit away from each other and you're good
00:07:322 (5,6,1) - ^
00:09:988 (3,4,5,6) - ^
00:21:988 (3) - move this a bit downward
00:39:099 (6) - ^
00:30:877 (3) - move this a bit upward
00:34:433 (3) - move it a bit more to the left

Hard

soo cleaaaannn

Insane

Also clean aaaaaaaaaa

Extra

Its also clean wtf

Looking forward to seeing this ranked Goodluck!

all fixed. thx~

Extra:

00:16:655 (3) - nc (bcz 00:14:877 (1) - have nc)
00:45:878 (3) - nc (bcz 00:13:877 (1) - have nc)
01:04:211 (5) - ^

k. I think HP=7.2 is too high for 135BPM. Players(2k noobs like me) clicks 100 on sliders and died on first sliderbreak because of low HP regen(bcs of low bpm).
U can get low HP or put some NC's for regen. Here, i propose to put here:
00:32:655 (2) - nc
00:32:877 (3) - ^
00:22:877 (3) - ^
00:29:988 (3) - ^
main idea is when vocal and music intense get down player's hp should be regened

Insane
HP=7 is too hard for 4.12*. Put HP=6
Diff seems good.But maybe little bit flow correction gonna be good.

Hard:
01:13:099 (3,4) - bad overlap
00:58:877 (4,5) - ^

Normal:
I recommend do White-Red rhythm ticks on this diff(1/2 rhythm)
00:10:655 (4) - try to not abond Square arena in low diffs. This confusing newbies.
00:40:211 (1) - ^
00:17:877 (2,1) - overlap
00:22:433 (4,1,2) - ^
00:53:544 (5,2) - ^
00:56:211 (1,3) - ^
01:11:322 (7,2) - ^
01:12:877 (3,4) - ^
01:25:433 (3,1,2) - ^
00:48:099 (2,1) - ^ and 00:48:099 (2,3,1) - too spiky
00:30:877 (3) - dont change flow so sharp here. Too spiky
00:41:322 (3,4,5) - pattern is too spiky.
00:43:988 (2,3,4) - i think this is too confusing reverses. Maybe sliders?
00:49:099 (1,2,3) - dont sure about parts like these..
01:18:877 (4,1,2,3,4) - spiky and too hard
ok. The main problem with this diff is you pick too hard rhythm style for Normal. So u have many overlaps, hard flow and patterns for "normal" AR and SV.
Maybe rename this diff to "Advance" and create new easier "normal"?

Easy:
Same problems: Spiky patterns. Abond playfield square zone. A trifle overlaps

m3gB3g wrote:

~Hi!
mod and some proposal

Extra:

00:16:655 (3) - nc (bcz 00:14:877 (1) - have nc)　
00:45:878 (3) - nc (bcz 00:13:877 (1) - have nc)
01:04:211 (5) - ^　fixed

k. I think HP=7.2 is too high for 135BPM. Players(2k noobs like me) clicks 100 on sliders and died on first sliderbreak because of low HP regen(bcs of low bpm).
U can get low HP or put some NC's for regen. Here, i propose to put here:
00:32:655 (2) - nc no change
00:32:877 (3) - ^ no change
00:22:877 (3) - ^ fixed
00:29:988 (3) - ^ fixed
main idea is when vocal and music intense get down player's hp should be regened

Insane
HP=7 is too hard for 4.12*. Put HP=6
Diff seems good.But maybe little bit flow correction gonna be good. HP 7→6.5

Hard:
01:13:099 (3,4) - bad overlap　　fixed
00:58:877 (4,5) - ^　　fixed

Normal:
I recommend do White-Red rhythm ticks on this diff(1/2 rhythm)
00:10:655 (4) - try to not abond Square arena in low diffs. This confusing newbies.　no change
00:40:211 (1) - ^　no change
00:17:877 (2,1) - overlap　no change
00:22:433 (4,1,2) - ^　fixed
00:53:544 (5,2) - ^ fixed
00:56:211 (1,3) - ^ fixed
01:11:322 (7,2) - ^　no change
01:12:877 (3,4) - ^ fixed
01:25:433 (3,1,2) - ^　fixed　
00:48:099 (2,1) - ^ and 00:48:099 (2,3,1) - too spiky　fixed　
00:30:877 (3) - dont change flow so sharp here. Too spiky　no change
00:41:322 (3,4,5) - pattern is too spiky.　no change
00:43:988 (2,3,4) - i think this is too confusing reverses. Maybe sliders?　no change
00:49:099 (1,2,3) - dont sure about parts like these..　no change
01:18:877 (4,1,2,3,4) - spiky and too hard　no change
ok. The main problem with this diff is you pick too hard rhythm style for Normal. So u have many overlaps, hard flow and patterns for "normal" AR and SV.
Maybe rename this diff to "Advance" and create new easier "normal"?

Easy:
Same problems: Spiky patterns. Abond playfield square zone. A trifle overlaps

ok. Tbh this is very funny to play and good mapset. But for rank u need a lot of work with low diffs.
Good luck!

nextplay wrote:

Hi~

[Easy]

00:04:211 (4) - I don't really understand what it should follow what about this Rythm https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7830966 ?
00:39:322 (4) - Make it curved like 3.
01:14:433 (3,1) overlap

sry for little mod you don't have to give me kds but you can if the Mod was Helpful
and Mutual pls
GL

Xexxar wrote:

日本語でModしてみたい
[Easy]
01:25:544 (2) - Clapを足してください。

[Normal]
00:16:655 (5) - ブランケット
00:21:433 (2,3,4) - ちょっと近く過ぎると思います。
00:18:433 (3,4) - これはここで1/2しか使わない。そのパターンは一回に使ったのでRemoveかAdjustをしてください。
00:34:433 (3,4) - Spacingは違いますか？なぜ？直してください。00:34:877 (4,5) - これも
00:45:544 - This unplayed gap is a little awkward. It might be a good idea to make 00:45:322 (5) - a 1/2 slider.

Rest is ok!~

1. 00:16:877 (7) - might consider making this a circle only as you did for 00:15:099 (6) - (same beat within the same rhythm)
2. 00:23:766 (5) - this is the only slider with this number of repeats on this diff, hence it is misleading (and no one can actually predict this is 4 beats and not three because you have 00:19:322 (2) - 00:21:988 (6) - 00:06:655 (5) - and so on)
3. 01:01:099 (5,6) - why the sudden space increasing?
4. 01:08:211 (3,4) - what about a 1/2 slider and circle instead? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890520
5. 01:19:099 (7) - why not circle as you did for 01:17:322 (6) - :p

1. 00:07:322 (3) - I checked and your Extra doesn't have this. I personally think it's too hard for this diff yet, so maybe make it a normal 1/4 repeat slider instead?
2. 00:16:099 (2,3) - i'd increase spacing between these, more or less what you did between 00:15:433 (2,3) -
3. 00:45:544 (1,2) - stack? I mean, it's the same as 00:45:877 (3,4,1,2,3,4) - so why not?
4. 00:47:322 (5,1) - NC goes on 5 and you should do the same as above ^ imo
5. 01:16:877 (1,2,3) - I mean, ok to increase spacing on an intense part, but isn't this a bit too much for the map's average DS? .-.
   Less trauma on players: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890560
6. 01:17:988 (3,4) - this one is a bit too big too, maybe https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890574 ?
7. 01:22:766 (4) - but the strong beat ins on tail D:
   Since you also screw up emphasis with 01:23:099 (5,1) - , what do you think of https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890589 ?

1. 00:04:655 (1) - please ctrl G this lol, the circular movement is completely wasted xD
2. 00:25:766 (4) - circles work probably better
3. 00:33:099 - from here on the song calms down, so I was expecting lower spacing in the next section =w=
   From 00:45:655 - onwards you can go back to bigger spacings, but having that part so high spaced is just meh considering the song :v
4. 00:50:099 (3) - forgot a whistle?
5. 01:03:322 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,3,4,5) - I wonder why this part isn't similar to 00:13:544 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - in rhythm .-.
   or even 00:45:545 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3) -
6. 01:26:322 (5) - please unstack this. I played it and it was really hard to follow since you completely turn back.
   Move it to x360 y264?
7. 01:27:544 (2,3) - well, I could explain you why, but it's a bit long, so instead I'll tell you that doing this express better that sort of rhythm since you don't have to go back and forth between each slider
8. 01:28:655 (1) - Ctrl H and Ctrl J?

1. 00:35:544 (5,6) - stacking after a slider is a bit hard for new players, so maybe unstack this? (I'm saying this because I had a newbie player testplay for me this sort of stuff actually)
2. 00:41:544 (4,5) - maybe turn these into a slider so you avoid that cluster of circles (it might be confusing as to what circle must be clicked first, second, third...)
3. 00:44:877 (4,5,1) - this jump is too sudden: 4 -> 5 is really small, while 5 -> 1 is pretty big, even if they are the same snap.
4. 01:10:433 (5) - the tail works better with a clap instead of a whistle
5. 01:27:322 (4,5) - try to avoid that overlap please, it's hard to read and I doubt players of this level can actually understand it
6. 01:28:655 (6) - maybe add a NC :p

1. 00:06:433 (2,3,4) - this is still the intro of the map, so all these circles are a bit too much of a cluster. Repeat slider instead?
2. 00:19:322 (3,2) - you should try to avoid overlaps and stacks like this, above all when the player has to go back and forth (due to reading problems for newbie players)
3. 01:05:099 (1,3) - speaking of that ^, this is a clear example of what not to do on lower diffs. Don't completely change the direction like that because it's hard to predict and not so visible either since it is stacked under another object.
   Try this instead: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890697. You can fix the next objects anyway if you don't have enough space
4. 01:15:766 (1,2) - this snap looks identical to any other 1/2 snap you used so far tbh and might be misread, but I can't really find a solution so rip, but still... what is the difference between 01:18:322 (2,1) - and 01:17:544 (1,2) - ???
   This is really misleading and you also keep changing snaps with 01:19:322 (1,2,3) - , which adds even more questions .-.
   Pick a solid 1/2 rhythm and try to stick to it instead of using different snaps. It is confusing for new players
5. 01:19:322 (1,2,3) - let me at least suggest something for this, since it's just too confusing: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890711
6. 01:28:655 (5) - NC and don't stack please

Meg wrote:

Title : 青空のラプソディ (Aozora no Rhapsody)

surely it is written "RHAPSODY OF BLUE SKY" on the CD cover.
however, main title of this song is above.
we can know it on this anime's website and fhana's official website.
and this is JAPANESE SONG. japanese title should be given priority imo.
so it should be used "青空のラプソディ (Aozora no Rhapsody)".

on anime's website

on fhana's official website

http://fhana.jp/
http://maidragon.jp/product/cd/op.php

MrSergio wrote:

Hard:

1. 00:16:877 (7) - might consider making this a circle only as you did for 00:15:099 (6) - (same beat within the same rhythm)
2. 00:23:766 (5) - this is the only slider with this number of repeats on this diff, hence it is misleading (and no one can actually predict this is 4 beats and not three because you have 00:19:322 (2) - 00:21:988 (6) - 00:06:655 (5) - and so on)
3. 01:01:099 (5,6) - why the sudden space increasing?
4. 01:08:211 (3,4) - what about a 1/2 slider and circle instead? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890520
5. 01:19:099 (7) - why not circle as you did for 01:17:322 (6) - :p

Insane:

1. 00:07:322 (3) - I checked and your Extra doesn't have this. I personally think it's too hard for this diff yet, so maybe make it a normal 1/4 repeat slider instead?
2. 00:16:099 (2,3) - i'd increase spacing between these, more or less what you did between 00:15:433 (2,3) -
3. 00:45:544 (1,2) - stack? I mean, it's the same as 00:45:877 (3,4,1,2,3,4) - so why not?
4. 00:47:322 (5,1) - NC goes on 5 and you should do the same as above ^ imo
5. 01:16:877 (1,2,3) - I mean, ok to increase spacing on an intense part, but isn't this a bit too much for the map's average DS? .-. no change
   Less trauma on players: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890560
6. 01:17:988 (3,4) - this one is a bit too big too, maybe https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890574 ?
7. 01:22:766 (4) - but the strong beat ins on tail D:
   Since you also screw up emphasis with 01:23:099 (5,1) - , what do you think of https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890589 ?

Extra:

1. 00:04:655 (1) - please ctrl G this lol, the circular movement is completely wasted xD no change
2. 00:25:766 (4) - circles work probably better
3. 00:33:099 - from here on the song calms down, so I was expecting lower spacing in the next section =w=　no change
   From 00:45:655 - onwards you can go back to bigger spacings, but having that part so high spaced is just meh considering the song :v
4. 00:50:099 (3) - forgot a whistle?
5. 01:03:322 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,3,4,5) - I wonder why this part isn't similar to 00:13:544 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - in rhythm .-.
   or even 00:45:545 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3) - 　？
6. 01:26:322 (5) - please unstack this. I played it and it was really hard to follow since you completely turn back.
   Move it to x360 y264?
7. 01:27:544 (2,3) - well, I could explain you why, but it's a bit long, so instead I'll tell you that doing this express better that sort of rhythm since you don't have to go back and forth between each slider　no change
8. 01:28:655 (1) - Ctrl H and Ctrl J?

Normal:

1. 00:35:544 (5,6) - stacking after a slider is a bit hard for new players, so maybe unstack this? (I'm saying this because I had a newbie player testplay for me this sort of stuff actually)
2. 00:41:544 (4,5) - maybe turn these into a slider so you avoid that cluster of circles (it might be confusing as to what circle must be clicked first, second, third...)
3. 00:44:877 (4,5,1) - this jump is too sudden: 4 -> 5 is really small, while 5 -> 1 is pretty big, even if they are the same snap.
4. 01:10:433 (5) - the tail works better with a clap instead of a whistle
5. 01:27:322 (4,5) - try to avoid that overlap please, it's hard to read and I doubt players of this level can actually understand it
6. 01:28:655 (6) - maybe add a NC :p

Easy:

1. 00:06:433 (2,3,4) - this is still the intro of the map, so all these circles are a bit too much of a cluster. Repeat slider instead?
2. 00:19:322 (3,2) - you should try to avoid overlaps and stacks like this, above all when the player has to go back and forth (due to reading problems for newbie players)
3. 01:05:099 (1,3) - speaking of that ^, this is a clear example of what not to do on lower diffs. Don't completely change the direction like that because it's hard to predict and not so visible either since it is stacked under another object.
   Try this instead: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890697. You can fix the next objects anyway if you don't have enough space
4. 01:15:766 (1,2) - this snap looks identical to any other 1/2 snap you used so far tbh and might be misread, but I can't really find a solution so rip, but still... what is the difference between 01:18:322 (2,1) - and 01:17:544 (1,2) - ???
   This is really misleading and you also keep changing snaps with 01:19:322 (1,2,3) - , which adds even more questions .-.
   Pick a solid 1/2 rhythm and try to stick to it instead of using different snaps. It is confusing for new players
5. 01:19:322 (1,2,3) - let me at least suggest something for this, since it's just too confusing: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7890711
6. 01:28:655 (5) - NC and don't stack please

I know a t2 BN bubbled this, but imo there are also other things that need improvement before pushing for rank. These things aren't something I can fix right away with a mod. They require time and mapping knowledge.
Anyway, good luck with the set~

PS: blame Xexxar for sending me this and telling me to give it a look

Sotarks wrote:

o lol anime war 3 rhapsody maps bubbled xd
also IamKwaN checked my full ver and it's the good romanisation

add this to tags too : aozora no junichi sato yuxuki waga kevin mitsunaga tv size anime
gl~

Gaia wrote:

i agree with Meg

Gaia wrote:

i agree with Meg

SadiStick wrote:

since when is romanized synonymous with translated lul

Sotarks wrote:

SadiStick wrote:

since when is romanized synonymous with translated lul

Yeah but it's the official title, and even if you type aozora no Rhapsody you can find the map, since it's on tags.
But I can agree that it would be better with the actual romanized title lol

fun fact

official missing "of" in the url lo

Sotarks wrote:

can we end this metadata war one day?

1. you need to fix the metadata
2. The video's audio track must be removed from the video file although video is silenced, it still contains an audio track, which should be removed

1. 00:11:322 (3,4,5) - as the sound on 00:11:655 - is weaker than the others, i think this rhythm would fit the song better
2. 00:31:655 - isn't this supposed to be a clap?
3. 00:47:323 (1,2) - i think they look too close each other compared to the rest (really nazi lol)

1. 00:21:433 (5) - the slider whistle sounds kinda weird, i believe it's a mistake lol
2. 00:32:877 (3) - maybe you could move this slider somewhere to the upside so that 00:33:099 (1) - gets more emphasis. it's just a suggestion tho

1. 00:21:433 (4,5,7,1) - i wouldn't recommend to use different rhythms in just one stack, it's confusing, especially for this level of difficulty

1. you have a lot of spacing inconsistencies, stuff like 00:17:877 (2,3) - is too difficult for newbies because they're not yet accustomed to move the cursor lol. besides, you have combos where the distance suddenly decreases (this one 01:05:099 (1,2,3) - for example) so please check the map carefully
2. 01:03:322 - i think you shouldn't be changing the sv, although music is more intense, the song's pace stays the same so it might be too confusing for beginners
3. 01:14:877 (7,1) - i kinda mentioned this already, but time distance equality should be used, using a stack is confusing because you're already using stacks to represent 1/2 gaps
4. 00:59:766 (5) - same whistle as insane lol

1. 00:01:100 - make the green and red lines hitsounding consistent
2. delete the space in between 青空のラプソディ and (TV size) (only in the unicode title)
3. replace the spinner 01:28:766 (1) - for something else, auto can't reach 1k with hr so i doubt it's doable

1. i don't think tick rate 2 is appropiate for this diff, tick rate 1 is enough imo
2. 00:13:544 - rhythms here are kinda confusing, you could try something easier by deleting this circle 00:14:877 (2) -
3. 00:31:322 (3,4,1) - balance the spacing so people don't recognize them as different time gaps
4. 01:03:322 (3) - sv change is too sudden, you should be keeping constant sv
5. 01:06:877 (3,4) - spacing mistake

1. 00:24:988 (2,3) - spacing mistake
2. 00:32:099 (5,6,1) - could balance the spacing as well
3. 00:59:766 (5) - whistle didn't get fixed

1. your rhythm is questionable. no, not even questionable; it actually goes against the idea of "strong sounds get clicked, weaker sounds get passively hitsounded".
   
   
   when talking about mapping, we have two type of rhythms/actions: active and passive
   -active hitsounding refers to everything players click, that is circles and sliderheads (could also argue that players also click spinners, but that's for later). now, these notes are supposed to represent the most prominent beats in the music thus creating some kind of pressure for the players. unlike sliderends, for example, players get more feedback from the clicking action rather than the non-clicking one. it should be obvious by now, though.
   -passive hitsounding refers to everything that have a passive functionality. examples being slidertails, reverse arrows, sliderbodies, sliderticks and spinnerends. these don’t generate any kind of pressure; these are only mapped for the purpose of emphasizing certain objects over others and/or when extending certain sounds. if you are going to silence the tails (which you should in most cases), it should sound natural to the player.
   
   
   throughout the whole map, there are a lot of instances where you prioritize non-existent beats over very audible notes:
   
   
   1. 00:17:433 (2) - if you are following the drums or the vocals during this section, there's no way this note is being mapped. the sound this object holds is completely different from what you're following. it lands on the guitar. from here you could argue that "well, there's a guitar sound (even if it's really, really, really quiet) so i placed a circle", but it doesn't work like that. if you were to map the guitar, you would place objects like this http://i.imgur.com/XzwPgD2.jpg . but that'd be inconsistent with everything else, so let's avoid guitars.
   2. 00:19:211 (2) - same occurs here; this follows a different rhythm
   3. 00:20:988 (2) - and here, etc. etc.
      
   4. 00:29:099 (3,4,5,6) - nothing landing on 00:29:211 (4) - so it ruins the emphasis on vocals 00:29:322 (5) -
   5. 00:54:099 (4) - etc. etc.
   you get the point, there are overmapped sounds following a complete different layer. your rhythm isn't consistent. you are /trying/ to follow pretty much everything in the song, but you are not prioritizing anything, so what are you exactly following?
   i strongly suggest you to stick to vocals, they are very prominent on fhána songs
   
   
2. 00:19:211 (2,3,4,5,1,2) - three different patterns for three different sounds, yet the emphasis is not executed properly;
   00:20:988 (2,3,4,5,1,2) - this patterning works way better, even if the rhythm is really unclear (because as i told you above, you are following 48092 sounds at the same time)
3. 00:22:433 (1,2,1) - weird way of NCing, it should be placed 00:23:211 (3) - there
4. 00:33:099 - this whole section as a whole doesn't feel special at all. it's the most calm section of the whole song, but it contains the same slider velocity, density and spacing that everywhere else. for calm parts, you always want to make a clear distinctiveness so there's a noticeable contrast between different sections of the song.
   this section feels the exact same as the whole rest of the map
5. the whole map looks and plays the exact same throughout different sections. there's no build-up into the chorus, there's no calm section, there's no difference between non-kiai and kiai
6. 00:41:099 (1,2,3,4) - there is no consistency whatsoever (as i said before) for stronger beats over weaker ones. if you are not planning to space them out consistently, in a way that they make sense with the song, then don't space them at all because it plays really baddd
7. 00:43:988 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - this one is a personal one, but a build-up into the kiai would be more appreciated, spacing the notes out every triplet plays and looks better
8. 01:01:544 (1,2,3,4,5) - again, you swap from vocal mapping to... whatever this rhythm is following
9. 01:04:544 (1) - you are almost never supposed to start a stream on the blue tick. why not? because stronger beats tend to land on whites/reds, so the emphasis should be put there; in this case http://i.imgur.com/N1vJCaU.jpg would work better because there's a full stream starting on 01:04:211 (1) - and there's nothing landing on 01:04:988 (5) - other than extended vocals from the previous tick.
10. 01:07:211 (2,3) - not spaced vs 01:08:099 (2,3) - spaced vs 01:08:544 (4,1,2,3) - spaced spaced spaced

Yuii- wrote:

throughout the whole map, there are a lot of instances where you prioritize non-existent beats over very audible notes:

1. 00:17:433 (2) - if you are following the drums or the vocals during this section, there's no way this note is being mapped. the sound this object holds is completely different from what you're following. it lands on the guitar. from here you could argue that "well, there's a guitar sound (even if it's really, really, really quiet) so i placed a circle", but it doesn't work like that. if you were to map the guitar, you would place objects like this http://i.imgur.com/XzwPgD2.jpg . but that'd be inconsistent with everything else, so let's avoid guitars.
   00:17:433 (2) - this circle followed vocal so clear. It plays a very important role for following vocals in playing, and it makes playable. If remove this note, players will feel boring and weird, since this part is generally called "alternating"(we can know from snare drum sounds). So I don't think it appropriate to delete this circle.

you get the point, there are overmapped sounds following a complete different layer. your rhythm isn't consistent. you are /trying/ to follow pretty much everything in the song, but you are not prioritizing anything, so what are you exactly following?
i strongly suggest you to stick to vocals, they are very prominent on fhána songs
I wanna just say, consistency is not important in mapping. To make big one makes boring. If a map could be followed the songs at minimum, it is unnecessary.

Meg wrote:

Do you think ALL emphasized(means you said "active"?) points must be clickable?

Yuii- wrote:

Yes. It is music theory.

Firis Mistlud wrote:

Yuii- wrote:

Yes. It is music theory.

LOL

nice meme

Xexxar wrote:

This map is fine in my eyes (in fact its better than most maps and has a nice older style to it). I'll let you guys come to a conclusion but I plan to rebubble / qualify this depending on what Repl4y wants to do regarding this mod. Come to an agreement or agree to disagree and call me back.

Yuii- wrote:

Meg wrote:

Do you think ALL emphasized(means you said "active"?) points must be clickable?

Yes. It is music theory.

Yuii- wrote:

Yes. It is music theory.

Yuii- wrote:

Yes. It is music theory.

Yuii- wrote:

Yes. It is music theory.

Yuii- wrote:

That's not even subjective, it is reality.

Extra

00:27:322 (2,3) - here i think little bit overspaced..
HP drain in extra still feels weird and idk how fix that ;_;