1. Easy (2,44 stars, 91 notes)
2. Hard (4,92 stars, 205 notes)
3. Normal (3,98 stars, 128 notes)

SPOILER

kurohana for fixing my hitsounds
Gabe for bubble and for having resist to my annoying pm XD XD
Kethsar for the video
and dkun for rank
and of caurse to all the people who modded it :3

SuperMoutarde wrote:

Hi, mod req from my queue ^^

[General]

Hitsounds are seriously lacking in all difficulties imo. You could use some claps and finish in a lot of spot, do whatever sounds good to you but you need to work on this

[Easy]

HP Drain Rate -1
Approach Rate -1
Overall Difficulty -1 or -2
I would also go for the biggest circle size

[Normal]

01:04:107 (2) - change for the same thing as 01:06:940 (4)


[Hard]

HP Drain Rate +1
Circle Size +1 or +2
Approach rate +2
Overall Diff +1 or +2


Don't have more comments, it is nicely mapped to the music, and your maps graphically look very good, such a good job for a first beatmap it's actually quite impressive oO. You only need to work on the hitsounds as I said ^^ Good luck with this!

JudgeTheDude wrote:

Hi, M4M from my queue ^^

[General]
I don't like the hitsounds, but I'm not enough inspired by the music to know how to place them, sorry
Your background is very small :/ (600*450) I found a larger version on the net and I could resize it, so it looks better: http://puu.sh/1SU4c
I don't think the .osb has an utility, unless it has a link with the Sound Samples. Delete it (if I'm wrong, keep it, of course)

[Easy]
00:38:607 (1,2) - These notes aren't aligned
00:38:607 (1) - Move this 1 grid left
00:45:607 (4) - 1 grid up (x:60 y:132)
00:46:273 (1) - 1 grid right (x:60 y:316)
01:12:940 (6) - 2 grid left (x:356 y:304)

[Normal]
No probs

[Hard]
No probs

Very impressive, the Hitsound are not perfect, but that's a very good mapping, for a beginner ^^

Good job, and good luck for rank ^^ You've done a very great job

Jacob wrote:

Please put a space between the title and "(TV Size)". Also, add "opening" to the tags since this is the opening song for an anime.

No kudosu.

B2IN wrote:

o/ hi~ luxoDeh
from my q

• [General]

1. not ' Shounen Yo Ware Ni Kaere ' . plz change the title to ' Shounen yo Ware ni Kaere '.
2. you must remove video sounds ~
3. can you find high quality mp3 file ?
4. i recommend you to start kiai time at 00:52:273 till 01:18:940 .
5. add ' Genesis ' ' Kuma-san ' in tags .
6. lead-in 1(1000) or 1.5(1500) will better.
   [Easy]
   HP drain -1, AR -1, OD -1 will better.
7. 00:35:607 (1) - increase the slider till 00:35:940 .
8. 00:50:607 (1) - end the slider till 00:52:273 will better.
9. 00:20:273 (3) - new combo here.
10. 00:44:273 (3) - ^
11. 00:46:273 (1) - if follow opinion, remove newcombo here. and add newcombo 00:46:940 (2)
    [Normal]
12. 01:13:607 (1) - end spinner till 01:17:607. because too close with next slider .
13. 01:22:773 (3) - remove finish on slider end.
    [Hard]
14. 00:18:106 (2,3) - try this arrangement for a more naturally? like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/588113
15. 00:27:606 (4) - remove finish on slider end will sounds better.

so cute song and map lol
is this really your first map ? wow nice :3
gl ~

Cancel wrote:

Hi. From my Modding Queue!

General

00:06:939 - Add bookmark there. It is easier for modders to get to.
TV Size is not allowed in the song title >t/89198< I suggest you to remove it from ttitle, and put it in the beatmap description instead.
Change volume to 70%.
Remove second BPM Point

Easy

00:32:273 (2) -

00:35:603 (1) - This slider is not perfectly on beat.

00:42:603 (2) - That looks better.

00:33:603 (2) - Maybe like that?

00:35:603 (1) - Like that.

Normal

00:52:273 (1,2) - Too fast after spinner!

Hard

Looks good.

Good luck!

luxoDeh wrote:

i don't really know what you mean whit lead-in XD thanks!

B2IN wrote:

luxoDeh wrote:

i don't really know what you mean whit lead-in XD thanks!

Rotte wrote:

From queue

[General]

Timing is have some problems,plz find MAT/BAT to test it?
Plz close countdown and letterbox

skin
spinner-circle is not in circle point

[Easy]

00:12:439 - Why the place is blank?
00:23:106 - The same as 00:12:439

00:32:939 (1,2,3) - nove to 00:32:606 -
00:35:939 - add a circle
01:08:273 (1,2) - 1/2 slider is well
01:27:940 (2) - you can use 5/16 slider

[Normal]

HP-1 OD-1

00:12:439 - Why the place is blank?
00:23:106 - The same as 00:12:439

00:10:939 (1) - this slider's ending....
00:29:939 - add a circle
00:34:106 - add a circle
00:59:939 - add a circle

[Hard]

00:40:440 (5,1,2,3) - Rhythm is weird

00:45:607 (5,1) - Rhythm is weird

01:10:940 (1,2) - Rhythm is weird

01:12:273 (4,5,6,7,8,9,1) -



I guess you are taiko player?I recommend you better mod some good mapsets and compared.

BounceBabe wrote:

Hi, from the Queue!

Easy

00:23:939 (5,1) - Reverse this combo, should be on (5) and (1) is still part of the previous pattern
00:57:607 (5) - NC here for new vocal and pattern
01:10:940 (3) - ^

Normal

00:09:606 (5) - NC for new vocal and pattern
00:10:939 (1) - Remove NC, pattern still counts as previous part of 00:09:606 (5) -
00:12:273 (3) - NC again for consistance
00:54:940 (4,5,6) - Different spacing, fix this by using another grid level

Hard

00:15:439 (2,4) - These are not well stacked, fix this
00:19:606 (7,1) - To follow your own combo pattern remove NC here 00:22:273 (1) -
00:41:106 (1,2) - Reverse combo, the 1 is still part of the previous pattern and the 2 is where a new vocal starts
00:46:106 (1) - Remove NC to follow your own combo again
00:48:940 (8,9) - This jump isnt readable, move it so its obviously to see
01:08:273 (8,1) - Reverse this NC, the new vocal starts at 8
01:25:107 (3) - This slider doesnt fit soundwise, i suggest just deleting it and adding a circle at 01:25:273 -

GL

General

Easy

Normal

Hard

kurohana wrote:

General

1. Inconsistency in tags: There is 1 space too much in Hard after 'Genesis'. Fix this.
2. Spinner circle has to be 666x666
3. There is a SB-file but no file in the folder. If it's right this way, fill in the missing file, otherwise delete the .osb-file in the folder
4. Offset is 273, you only have to set it to the beginning to the song. And you don't have to use 3/4 on the timeline, this isn't a Waltz-song

Easy

1. 00:06:939 - 00:12:273 - You use spacing 0,9x, afterwards you always use 1,0x. I suggest you to change the first part to 1,0x, because the music doesn't change at 00:12:273.
2. 00:18:939 (3) - Move this note 2 grids down and 1 grid left to make a straight line between (2) and (3)
3. 00:22:939 (4) - NC
4. 00:23:939 (1) - Remove NC
5. 00:25:939 (4) - NC
6. 00:30:940 (1) - Make this blanket perfect by copy+paste 00:32:940 (2) and flip it horizontally.
7. 00:32:606 (1) - Remove NC
8. 00:32:940 (2) - This slider doesn't fit in here, please change ><
9. 00:34:606 - Set note
10. 00:34:939 - Set note
11. 00:37:607 (4) - Remove finish, it doesn't fit with the music
12. 00:39:940 (3) - Move 2 grids down and 1 frid left to make a straight line between the begiinings of slider (3) and (4)
13. 00:48:607 (3) - Move this note on the timeline on the red tick and longer it up to 00:48:939, that fits the music very well :3
14. 00:49:272 - Set note
15. 00:49:607 (4) - Finish at the beginning and the end of the slider sounds good, try it
16. 00:50:607 (1) - Set finish
17. 00:54:606 - Set note
18. 00:54:940 (1) - Set clap
19. 00:55:607 (2) - Set clap
20. 00:57:607 (1) - Clap at the beginning of the slider
21. 00:58:940 (3) - Clap at the beginning and at the ending, remove finish
22. 00:39:940 (3) - Move 1 grid down to make a straight line between (2) and (3)
23. 01:02:940 (1) - Set clap
24. 01:03:607 (2) - Set clap
25. 01:04:940 (4) - Remove finish and move 1 grid down to make a straight line between the end of slider (3) and circle (4)
26. 01:05:607 (1) - Move 1 grid down to make the straight above complete
27. 01:06:273 (2) - Move 1 grid left to make a straight line
28. 01:06:773 (3) - Move 1 grid down for the straight above
29. 01:07:607 (4) - 2 grids down for above
30. 01:08:272 - Try to use this rhythm
31. 01:12:606 - Set note
32. 01:13:272 - Set note
33. 01:20:606 - Set note
34. 01:23:272 - Set note
35. 01:25:272 - Set note
36. 01:26:940 (1,2) - They don't fit in very well... You could set a spinner from 01:26:939 to 01:28:772

Normal

1. 00:10:273 (3) - Remove finish, the music doesn't allow this ><
2. 00:10:606 - Maybe set a note here
3. 00:18:606 (2) - Move 1 grid down to fix spacing, 00:19:939 (1) too, to stack them correctly
4. 00:32:773 - Consider setting a note here, it sounds really empty.
5. 00:37:607 (8) - Remove finish
6. 00:40:606 - Set note
7. 00:43:439 - Set note
8. 00:45:939 - Set note
9. 00:50:107 (3) - Remove finish and set whistle
10. 00:50:440 (1) - This spinner should end at 00:52:273 to fit the music
11. 00:53:440 (3) - Remove finish at the end
12. 01:04:273 (2) - Change rhythm to , fit's better to the music, use at 01:06:940 (5) too
13. 01:08:273 (7) - NC
14. 01:08:773 - Set note
15. 01:09:940 (1) - Remove NC
16. 01:19:606 (2) - Set this note to 01:19:439 or remove finish to make this fit to the music
17. 01:19:939 - Set note
18. 01:26:940 (1,2,3) - Same as Easy, spinner from 01:26:939 to 01:28:772 fits better

Hard

1. 00:10:606 (4) - Try this
2. 00:11:939 (1) - Remove NC
3. 00:12:606 (2) - NC
4. 00:16:606 (4) - Stack correctly with (2)
5. 00:25:606 (6) - NC
6. 00:26:439 (1) - Remove NC
7. 00:27:606 (4) - 2 grids left and 1 grid up to get (2) and (4) in a straight line
8. 00:30:273 (1) - Remove NC
9. 00:30:940 (2) - NC
10. 00:32:607 (1) - Remove NC
11. 00:33:607 (5) - NC
12. 00:35:273 (1) - Remove NC
13. 00:36:273 (5) - NC
14. 00:37:940 (1) - Remove NC
15. 00:43:273 (1) - Remove NC
16. 00:49:773 (9) - NC
17. 00:50:440 (1) - Remove NC
18. 00:57:607 (5) - NC
19. 00:58:440 (1) - Remove NC
20. 01:09:440 (1) - Remove NC
21. 01:11:773 (3) - Remove this note and set one at 01:11:939
22. 01:12:273 (1) - Remove NC
23. 01:26:440 (3) - This slider is out of the playfield, please move it

Please PM me for re-check, then I suggest some hitsound-placings ^-^

General

Easy

Normal

Hard

Easy

Normal

Hard

luxoDeh wrote:

I think I love you! finally the hitsounds are perfect! thank you veeery veery much! there are only two things i don't understand... i delate the .osb fils... or i thougt i did it... so... what are exactly these .osb files? and what do you mean when you say unsnapped note? i can't find what's wrond whit the note you noticed :/ anyway thanks, thanks, thanks!

luxoDeh wrote:

oook! thanks a lot again! XD all fixed now :3 really, thanks for all the time you spent on my map!

kurohana wrote:

Normal: 00:10:939 (5) - Remove the clap on the beginning :3
00:12:606 (2) - Remove the clap on the ending
00:24:772 (5) - Clap on the ending

Hard: 00:28:272 (1) - Finish
and 00:38:939 (1) - Finish at the beginning

Ok, do them and then the hitsounds are perfect <33
in my opinion *cough*

One little tipp:

Blue circle: There is a long white line , there you should set hitsound 'Finish', because that's a heavy beat (that's explained here http://osu.ppy.sh/forum/viewtopic.php?f=10&t=20998) and mostly it fits best
Pink circle: I setted them on the small short white lines before and after the long white line. Here's a picture You should set hitsound 'Clap' on them, mostly it fits with the music If you can't set clap there, because there is no note or a note wouldn't fit with the music or would be too hard for Easy or Normal like in your diffs and especially here (00:28:272 (1) in your Easy :3) you can leave it empty or try to set a clap on a red line after that white line, but you should hear it first. If it sounds good you can leave it
White circle: I leave it often empty, but sometimes it sounds good to set a whistle there :3 But i use Soft-Hitsounds the most and that whistle is other then the normal xD

You don't have to set it always like this, the main thing is to set hitsounds at all xD
I hope this helped you a bit >< I can't explain things very good v.v" ...

luxoDeh wrote:

oook! thanks a lot again! XD all fixed now :3 really, thanks for all the time you spent on my map!

That's my job as a modder ♥ I'm here to help, and i really love it ^^
I really love to help newbies get their maps ranked, because that's really hard X____x I know by myself |D And I saw that at my best friend too, getting mods as a newbie is hard... Most modders want to mod good beatmaps by popular mappers (there isn't a lot to check...) to get kudosu easily (It's my thought of this...) I did that first too, but helping the one that needs help makes more fun <33
And I have to thank you that you'd fixed everything I wrote a lot, I wasn't sure if that wasn't too long sometimes Dx But thank you, really You are really nice ^^

And now, take this

luxoDeh wrote:

*_____* thanks!!!!! also thanks for your explanation about the hitsounds! :3
I'm happy that you modded my map! as you sayed not all the modders are happy to help newbie, i had a little experience also whit another of my maps... anyway you're really nice too! so... I really hope to rank this map and...thank you very mutch again!

Nanika133 wrote:

After one week, here is my mod

Easy:
00:12:273 (1,2) - Remove the points in the slider With this slider velocity and this circle size, it doesn't look good
00:22:939 (1,2) - Straighten them with 00:21:606 (3)?
00:57:273 (4) - Use distance snap

Normal:
01:08:606 - Add a note
01:08:773 (2,3) - Move by one half beat

Hard:
01:03:606 (4,5) - Maybe Ctrl+H
01:20:606 (5) - 3 grids up
01:23:522 (6) - Remove
01:23:772 - Add a note

Nicely mapped

kurohana wrote:

As I said, I do it because I ♥ it <33 If you need help at mapping feel free to ask me, I'm here to help :3

neonat wrote:

Mod queue

Normal

Just some suggestions for rhythm
00:07:939 - add a note
00:35:272 - add a note here and 00:35:439, the gap there is quite empty
00:54:606 - add a note - lead-in to the subsequent 3 notes
01:28:439 - a possible note here


Hard

00:21:439 - add a note
00:24:272 (4,5) - let the rhythm be the same as 00:22:939 (1,2,3): let 00:24:272 (4) repeat one more time till 00:24:772, move 00:24:939 (5) so that it starts at 00:25:106 and ends at 00:25:272
01:01:606 (6) - looks too close to 01:01:272 (5)


Just take a look, it's not a must to change, just suggestions. I felt that the rhythm and flow at some parts were halted sometimes, with gaps with no notes placed. Good luck on your 1st map.

Yuki-kun wrote:

Star~ :p
Good luck :p

luxoDeh wrote:

Yuki-kun wrote:

Star~ :p
Good luck :p

oh, thanks! *___*

Yuki-kun wrote:

Actually your map is a bit square imo, but ignore it since i think it's your style :p

Natsu wrote:

General:

This folder's size is 24,5 MB, which is greater than the allowed size of 20.0 MB with video. o.o! im not sure if this a problem

Easy:

00:55:606 (2,4) - stack they perfect
01:13:606 this should finish here 01:17:606 if you are following vocals
01:18:939 add finish
01:26:939 this should finish here 01:28:939

Normal:

01:18:939 add finish
00:45:939 add circle so weird pause
00:52:939 overlap with spinner hitburst move it to other place
01:01:606 (3,1) - stack they perfect
01:13:606 same as easy

Hard:

00:14:939 (1,2) - distance error i dont know if you do this on purpose but i feel weird when i play it

Nice map :3

1. 00:17:606 (1,3) - These sliders are not aligned, make sure to make them aligned.
2. 00:33:272 - A clap should be added here to keep the consistency with the previous upbeats sounds, which are claps.
3. 00:37:606 (2) - Reverse the sounds from the beginning to the end, the clap is supposed to be placed on an upbeat, not a downbeat.
4. 01:02:939 - I think a finish would sound better here to emphasize the louder sounds in this part of the song.

1. 00:11:939 (8,1) - You've placed a slider on an upbeat and finishes on a downbeat, but on 00:12:106 there's a strong noise and you're missing it. I am suggesting you to make something else like, replace the slider (8) by two circles and a slider that will start on 00:12:272 and finishes on 00:12:606, also delete the slider (1) and add circles to 00:12:772 and 00:13:106
   
   Example

   
2. 00:24:772 (5) - It would be looking better if this circle was making a curve with the previous/next objects. Right now, it's looking.. straight and since the next object is a curved slider, I think it would fit better. Move this circle to x:232 y:208
3. 00:25:939 (3,1) - You've added a clap on the circle 1, which you shouldn't since most of your claps were added on upbeats, to keep the consistency, it's preferred if you delete it. Also, It would be sounding better if these circles were replaced by a simple slider.
4. 00:26:939 (4,6) - Are they supposed to be aligned? If yes, make sure to make them aligned on the same x:axis.
5. 00:53:772 - Since you have added a clap on 00:56:439, I think you could bbe adding one here too.
6. 01:04:106 (5) - You should be moving this slider one grid up, to make sure to align it with the end of the previous slider.
7. 01:09:272 - I think you're missing a clap here to keep the consistency with your previous upbeats sounds.
8. 01:22:939 (4,5,6,7) - This is sounding and playing awkwardly. I am suggesting you to delete the reverse arrow of the slider 4 and delete these three triplets since they aren't fitting the music and it's the only place where you've added triplets. Also, by doing this, you could be adding a slider that starts on 01:23:272 and finishes on the next white line. For an example, like this
   
   Example

   
9. 01:25:106 - You aren't keeping the polarity in here, which makes it sounds weird. Add an object to 01:25:106, for an example, stack a circle with the next circle or delete the circle (3) and replace it with a slider, replace the slider (2) with a slider, you can do anything here.
10. 01:27:772 (5) - I am suggesting you to add a new combo here to make it fit with the background sounds.

Gabe wrote:

Easy
The easy is pretty good as it is. Further work by yourself can be done.

Normal

1. 00:17:606 (1,3) - These sliders are not aligned, make sure to make them aligned.
2. 00:33:272 - A clap should be added here to keep the consistency with the previous upbeats sounds, which are claps.
3. 00:37:606 (2) - Reverse the sounds from the beginning to the end, the clap is supposed to be placed on an upbeat, not a downbeat.
4. 01:02:939 - I think a finish would sound better here to emphasize the louder sounds in this part of the song.

Pretty nice difficulty.

Hard

1. 00:11:939 (8,1) - You've placed a slider on an upbeat and finishes on a downbeat, but on 00:12:106 there's a strong noise and you're missing it. I am suggesting you to make something else like, replace the slider (8) by two circles and a slider that will start on 00:12:272 and finishes on 00:12:606, also delete the slider (1) and add circles to 00:12:772 and 00:13:106
   
   Example

   
2. 00:24:772 (5) - It would be looking better if this circle was making a curve with the previous/next objects. Right now, it's looking.. straight and since the next object is a curved slider, I think it would fit better. Move this circle to x:232 y:208
3. 00:25:939 (3,1) - You've added a clap on the circle 1, which you shouldn't since most of your claps were added on upbeats, to keep the consistency, it's preferred if you delete it. Also, It would be sounding better if these circles were replaced by a simple slider.
4. 00:26:939 (4,6) - Are they supposed to be aligned? If yes, make sure to make them aligned on the same x:axis.
5. 00:53:772 - Since you have added a clap on 00:56:439, I think you could bbe adding one here too.
6. 01:04:106 (5) - You should be moving this slider one grid up, to make sure to align it with the end of the previous slider.
7. 01:09:272 - I think you're missing a clap here to keep the consistency with your previous upbeats sounds.
8. 01:22:939 (4,5,6,7) - This is sounding and playing awkwardly. I am suggesting you to delete the reverse arrow of the slider 4 and delete these three triplets since they aren't fitting the music and it's the only place where you've added triplets. Also, by doing this, you could be adding a slider that starts on 01:23:272 and finishes on the next white line. For an example, like this
   
   Example

   
9. 01:25:106 - You aren't keeping the polarity in here, which makes it sounds weird. Add an object to 01:25:106, for an example, stack a circle with the next circle or delete the circle (3) and replace it with a slider, replace the slider (2) with a slider, you can do anything here.
10. 01:27:772 (5) - I am suggesting you to add a new combo here to make it fit with the background sounds.

This map is pretty solid, get some more mods and try to look at the whole mapset by yourself, when you really think it's worthy to be bubbled, catch me.

AlpacaCokelat wrote:

Hi ^^ m4m from your mod queue
I hope this will helps

General

The audio lead-in is unnecessary, imo, since you didn't map the intro

Hard

OD +1

00:25:939 (1) - remove nc
00:26:939 (6) - add nc (big white line)
00:30:272 (7) - move up one grid

Normal

00:08:272 (4) - move up one grid

this diff is great ^^

Easy

00:54:606 (1) - i found this kinda weird, imo. How about this

anyway this diff is also great =w=

useless bonus

this was my second try actually because i forgot to export my first replay fkhjdk

if you bother to download the replay http://puu.sh/2hwZd

Anyway, star!!
Good luck with your ranking~

Entreal wrote:

OMG M4M QUEUE FROM YOURS LETS GO, caps

Easy

00:08:272 - Put this slider in symmetry in the y-axis
00:21:606 - Move to 324|204, makes it to the middle of those two circles
00:32:772 - Clap here, just like the the way you did in the previous
00:38:106 - ^
Overall, Pretty good.

Normal

00:32:772 - Clap, just like the way you did in the previous
00:46:939 - Move a pixel down, makes it look symmetric to previous note

Hard

00:25:939 - Clap, following the pattern you're doing
00:26:606 - ^

Dang, i don't feel like theres anything more that i need to say. Good map. and Good luck!

luxoDeh wrote:

P.S. I think if you mute slider-slide sound, it might sounds better hm... I don't really know how to change this XD

AsprikaQ wrote:

luxoDeh wrote:

P.S. I think if you mute slider-slide sound, it might sounds better hm... I don't really know how to change this XD

Same with when you add custom hitsound.

http://puu.sh/2nQu8 : Add this file to your song's folder (I adjusted the name already so just simply add it)

No KD please.

P.S. if you want to used it in kiai time too, change Inheriting Section to Normal Custom 2 and then make one more of the file i gave you and rename it to normal-sliderslide2

buhei wrote:

hi luxoDeh~ from your modding queue

[Easy]
00:52:939 (1,2,1,2,3) - the rhythm is so strange, add a note at 00:54:606 ? hm... I'll keep it
00:59:772 - add a note that's ok
i think kiai part need revising..

[Normal]
00:14:939 (1,2) - don't look good no, I'll keep it as it is
add a note at 00:39:606 or 00:39:772 plz I changed this
00:53:272 - add a note ok
add a note at 00:54:606 or 00:54:772 I tryed something
the same as Easy

[Hard]
00:15:439 (2) - keep the spacing no, it was ok this way
00:34:439 (3) - Ctrl+G and let it be farther from (2) ok
add notes at 00:53:939 , 00:54:272 , 00:56:939 and 00:57:439 hm... I prefer leave it as it is or the spacing and pattern will be too different :/
kiai part can be harder than other parts so don't be afraid to add notes

good luck~

MillhioreF wrote:

testplay as requested in my queue~

[General]
* The whole map seems overly quiet compared to most of the songs in osu!. I'd double the MP3's volume and raise the hitsounds to 80%. I thought a lot about that. in reality I tryed to find a better mp3 file but I failed every time I don't know if there is a way to double the mp3 volume without changing it.
* The spinner graphic doesn't have a clear indicator of where the center is, I'd suggest adding a little marker in the middle. that's right, I always noticed it and always forget it XD now it's time to add this center (the new osu graphic also changed something of this custom spinner and I think in some way made it a bit worse anyway :/)

[Easy]
Major complaints:
* None, good job!

Minor complaints:
* I actually don't have any... very solid Easy diff, nice pattern/time variety and good flow!

Awesomeness:
* 00:30:939 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - This blanketing is really nice

[Normal]
Major complaints:
* None, good job!

Minor complaints:
* 00:09:606 (1,2) - This is the only time in the map notes are completely stacked... nothing wrong per se, but it stood out to me. Perhaps you can design around it. tryed to change this

Awesomeness:
* Really nice blanketing throughout the map. 00:57:273 (1,2,3) and 01:00:273 (1,2,3) really stood out as being awesome.

[Hard]
Major complaints:
* None, good job!

Minor complaints:
* 01:19:939 (3,4,5,6) - These notes felt somewhat out of place when I was playing; the music it's mapped to is very subtle, and the note pattern feels strange on it. I listened to it carefully and the notes fit with the music, I tryed to make something different but I always ended up with something that made me change also part of the following pattern :/ so I kept it as it is

Awesomeness:
* 00:20:272 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - This whole combo flows really nicely, it was a blast to play.
* 01:26:939 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - this pattern <3


Great map, great mapping! I could definitely see this being ranked with not much change.

Wolf wrote:

Ciao!
I'm a member in -Cloudchaser's Modding Queue, so I'll be taking your request.
Let's go!

General
Careful when following the vocals. I'd recommend to emphasize both instrumental and vocal parts. I was very uncomfortable when playing the kiai's in Easy and Normal, since there aren't much notes to hit.

Easy
00:28:272 (1) - Consider moving a grid up to match with 00:26:939 (2) - . I keep it as it is because then the previous slider is not symmetric, if someone other tell me this I'll change it
00:38:939 (2) - Hm, I would change the slider to improve flow, doesn't play good since they are on a straight line imo. Something like this. good
01:12:273 (4) - Add an arrow to match with vocals? http://puu.sh/2uXGl. that's ok

Normal
00:47:773 (2) - Highly suggest ctrl+g here to improve flow. I prefere keep it as it is
01:12:273 (3) - Move a grid up to match with 01:10:939 (1) - ok
01:13:022 (4) - Move a grid left to be on center with 01:10:939 (1,2,3) - . I changed it
01:19:439 (2) - Try placing this circle a bit more below, so it will improve flow with previous slider 01:18:939 (1) - http://puu.sh/2uY9X that's good

Hard
00:18:939 (4,5,6) - Try to avoid placing triplets this way. How about something like this? in this one is ok
00:20:272 (1,2,3) - ^
00:22:272 (7,8,9) - ^ I tryed to change this but I felt strange with flow, so I kept is as it is
00:25:939 (3) - Is there by any change you can lower this slider on the grid in specific? Even though it's not a problem when playing, it still feels quite harsh to play. maybe but I leave this as it if for now
01:04:106 (5) - You should replace this slider for exact same copy of 01:03:606 (4) - to improve visuals. http://puu.sh/2uYIz
Nice ending here. thank you! I didn't replaced it well some time ago, now i got the problem XD I'm stupid XD

Good luck there!

kajiyatta wrote:

M4M from your queue
General
almost suggetions
Easy
Placement
00:10:272(2,1) I suppose you can stack these notes, and it is more expectable for newbie that's ok

SPOILER

Rhythm
00:14:939(1,2) a bit weird for me, to follow the vocal is one of the mapping styles, but in case I suppose to follow the music seems more clearly

SPOILER

I prefere leave it as it is
00:30:606 add a note here to follow the vocal since already did at 00:35:606 and so on better not because I don't want to make this diff too hard...
00:40:606 ^ ^
00:46:939(1,2) sounds a bit weird, I dunno why the slider stopped at 00:47:439 since there is no instrumental heard. so just simpley put better fixed

SPOILER

01:10:606(1) it is useless note I suppose since the note doen't follow any music or vocal. just example here fixed

SPOILER

Hit Sonud
just opinion in KIAI TIME, it doesn't fit to music to add Normal-whistle. hm... don't know XD
01:02:939(1) add finish ok

Normal all fixed
Placement
00:09:6060(1,2) put at center line better

SPOILER

00:13:939(4,5) stack at slider's end seems difficult for Normal, put away better.

SPOILER

00:17:606(1,1) stack better
01:01:272(2,4)^
01:07:606(4,5,1,2,3) I suppose you can put more beautiful, like this?

SPOILER

Rhythm
01:18:939(1) a bit difficult for Normal I suppose. maybe like this?

SPOILER

Hit Sonud
00:38:939(2) add finish at head

Hard
Placement
00:30:939(1) move like this to make a tetragon ok

SPOILER

00:37:939(6,7) move like this? fixed

SPOILER

Rhythm
00:14:772 add a note here? to follow the vocal. it is Hard diff so I suppose player will expect it I tryed it but I think it's better not
Hit Sonud
01:02:939(1) add finish ok

some tiny things you should consider still need to be worked, but overall fine. support your 1st Rank, star thank you!! ^.^

Melophobia wrote:

[General]
Artist: Yakushimaru Etsuko Metro Orchestra ok
Artist Unicode: やくしまるえつこメトロオーケストラ ok
Title Unicode: 少年よ我に帰れ (TV Size) ok
Source: MAWARU-PENGUINDRUM hm... I saw also another mawaru ranked map and it's different :/

SPOILER

Combo color 3 is too bright and brended sometimes with the video. So you should change it to another color. ok, tryed another king of grey
The center circle of spinner-background isn't centered correctly. You can tell just by looking at this. fixed
The file size of the video is too large considering its quality. I think it should be around 10MB so everyone can enjoy the video. I tried this but I don't know if I would be able to reduce it, maybe I'll ask to someone other

[Hard]
I suggest AR7 because this difficulty is the highest one but still "Hard". AR8 is a bit too fast imo. Also BPM is fast enough but the song and your rhythm feels unfitting with AR8 I think. And considering Hard difficulties are commonly played with DT AR7 is more suitable imo. ok
00:13:939 (5) - I find it weird that this slider is shaped in a different way from 00:14:939 (1) - ; It's currently a bit too curved imo. How about doing sometime like this?

SPOILER

00:15:439 (2,4) - Please stack them properly.
00:36:272 (1,2) - I'm thinking it's better to use the same slider shape for (1,2).

SPOILER

00:51:439 (4) - Finish does fit with the emphasis and is feeling good to me.
00:51:939 - How about removing this finish and adding a clap instead? I think that way the emphasis at 00:52:272 - will be more emphasized and sounds better to me.
all fixed!

[Normal]
00:14:939 (1) - Move this slider to x:304 y:128 so the (4,5,1) makes a perfect triangle. fixed
00:20:272 (1) - Keep 1/1 rhythm here to keep hitsounds constant. hm... I'll leave it as it is
00:22:606 (4) - Use the same shape as (3). It currently looks a bit awkward to me. fixed
00:25:939 (2,3) - I personally dislike this 1.5 rhythm usage.. I think you can replace (2) with 1/2 slider for a better rhythm. that's ok
00:43:439 - It may be just me but feels kinda empty here, how about adding a clap here? fixed
00:44:939 - Rather than leaving this beat empty, I would like to extend (1) by 1/1 beat because of the long vocal. good idea
01:01:606 (3,1) - Please stack them properly. I tryed my best... but it's a bit strange...
01:21:606 (1) - Remove the whistle from the slider path. As it is being inconsistant with the other patctern and difficulties, I assume that's your mistake. ok ^.^
01:26:939 (1) - ^

[Easy]
00:32:772 - Missing clap here? yes XD
00:38:106 - ^
00:50:606 (1) - The following notes appear too soon after a spinner and this slider itself doesn't fit well with this part. Remove it and remap here. hm... maybe I'll leave it as it is
01:10:939 (4) - Add a newcombo here for the sake of consistency - Your all other newcombos are coming every 2 downbeats but this. ok

There are a lot of 1.5 rhythms in this difficulty. Yes, I know it's pretty hard to map this song without them, but I think many patterns can be simplified and currently this difficulty is too hard to be called "Easy" to be honest. So I'd suggest reworking on it and find more mods afterward. Hard and Normal are pretty good and ready for ranking imo so I'll leave this star icon. Good luck!I tryed something here for easy diff, let's see if it's good u.u

Gabe wrote:

Basically, it is not "MAWARU-PENGUINDRUM"
as seen on http://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mawaru_Penguindrum

Haya wrote:

Uff... So it seems that it has already been modded quite a lot. Let's see what I can find!

[General]
Clear!

[Easy]
00:20:272 (1,2,3) - Place these symmetrically on the X Axis. http://puu.sh/33KT0.jpg ok
00:38:606 (1) - Remove NC fixed
00:38:939 (2) - NC ^
01:00:273 (1,2) - Place these symmetrically on the Y Axis. http://puu.sh/33KXl.jpg ok
01:04:106 (3) - This one could be hard for Easy Players, since the rhythm changes so suddenly. Maybe fix it like this: http://puu.sh/33KZx.jpgI prefere to leave it as it is
01:06:606 (3) - ^ ^

[Normal]
00:09:606 (1,2,3) - I personally don't recommend using 1/2 circles on any Normal Diff since it's pretty hard for these players to press/react this fast. http://puu.sh/33L6x.jpg maybe it's true but it's better leave it as it was imo
00:11:939 - Add a circle here. better not
00:23:106 (1) - It's getting confusing here. Try this: http://puu.sh/33Lbc.jpg ok, tryed this
00:29:939 (3) - Move the circle 1 grid up ok
00:34:106 (2,3) - It's pretty hard here to find the right rhythm so just go with a slider. http://puu.sh/33LhN.jpg not fixed
01:00:272 (1,3) - Do the curves wider so it looks better with the circle in the middle. http://puu.sh/33LnO.jpg ok
01:10:939 (1,3) - ^ here is not necessary imo

[Hard] nothing fixed
00:19:439 - Add a circle.
00:20:772 - Add a circle.
00:53:106 - Add a circle.

Couldn't find anything else. Nice map and good luck!

1. 00:40:939 (3,2) - These two sliders could be stacked better together if you disable grid snap.

1. 00:48:939 (4) - Add a new combo here due to the new stanza and music change.
2. 00:54:606 (4) - Same as above for the same reason.

1. 00:14:939 (1,2) - Why different spacing here? It doesn't look so good to me.
2. 00:16:606 (4) - Stack this slider better under the previous one without using the grid snap.
3. 00:48:939 (8,1) - New combo should go on (8), since the music actually changes there.

Andrea wrote:

~Easy~

1. 00:40:939 (3,2) - These two sliders could be stacked better together if you disable grid snap.

~Normal~

1. 00:48:939 (4) - Add a new combo here due to the new stanza and music change.
2. 00:54:606 (4) - Same as above for the same reason.

~Hard~

1. 00:14:939 (1,2) - Why different spacing here? It doesn't look so good to me.
2. 00:16:606 (4) - Stack this slider better under the previous one without using the grid snap.
3. 00:48:939 (8,1) - New combo should go on (8), since the music actually changes there.

Pretty simple but good map.

1. 00:17:606 - You should add a finish here. At first, I muted the song and listened to the hitsounds only and because of those hitsounds (00:14:939 (1,2,3,4) - ) it was more logical if a finish would be added.
2. 00:26:939 (2,1) - As I can see on both reverse, there's a space between them and at both beginning, there's no space. In my opinion, it looks a bit weird, aesthetically. I suggest you to reform them a bit, so it won't have this weirdo space between those reverses.
   
   Example

   
3. 00:54:606 (1) - It might be a bit difficult for beginners to hit this slider because it starts on the fourth measure/upbeat and it has a strong noise on the next downbeat, which is why you have added two timing points to add a sound to the slider tick. I highly suggest you to review that to make it easier. For an example, I am suggesting you something like that:
   
   Example

   
   
   
   *So first, I have deleted the circle on (00:55:606 - ) to move the previous slider on the big downbeat. After that, I have deleted the reverse arrow of (00:53:439 (2) - ) and replaced the end by another slider, which follows the vocals.
4. 01:00:272 - oh, this is just a suggestion. Since this slider is a bit quiet, would you mind to add it a whistle here and another on the reverse arrow? It's going to sound like the next slider with its claps and since you already have whistles to this part, it wouldn't sound terrible.
5. 01:09:606 - A whsitle should sound good here because of the previous slider
6. 01:09:606 (3,1) - For those objects, the circle (1) is making a terrible blanket with the slider. You should reform the slider to make it blanketed. After you're done, copy/paste this slider for 01:08:273 (1) - since it's the same.

1. 00:17:606 (1,3) - Shouldn't these sliders be aligned? They're very close on being aligned.
2. 00:30:939 (1,2) - This is only a suggestion, they're already acceptable. Anyways, with those sliders, you can easily make two blankets, for an example, the beginning of the slider (1) will make a blanket with the form of the slider (2) and vise-versa.
   
   Example

   
3. 00:38:606 (1,2) - Would you mind on making a better blanket with this circle and slider? The slider's form is a bit weird from what it could be if it was blanketed.
4. 00:44:272 (1) - The clap at the end of this slider sounds terrible because on the next object, it has a clap. So, there's two claps one after the other, which sounds awful. I highly suggest you to delete this one.
5. 01:10:939 (1,2,3) - I am going to take an example, 01:00:272 (1,2,3) - those object, both sliders are formed to make a blanket with the circle between them. On those objects, it is not doing the same thing. Yes, the circle is between two sliders but.. it is not blanketed, so it looks weird. I suggest you to make a copy/paste from the previous pattern to help you.

1. 00:49:272 - Why is there missing a clap here? It should have one to keep the consistency with your upbeats hitsounds.
2. 01:04:106 (5) - Is this slider copied from the previous one? If yes, you forgot to delete the clap at the end of it. It's pretty obvious when you hear two claps in a row.
3. 01:04:106 (5) - This spinner does not have any finishes. On Easy and Normal, it has one. I suggest you to keep the consistency by either adding a finish or the opposite, deleting it on both Easy and Normal.

Gabe wrote:

Hello luxoDeh, long time no see!
Here's my recheck, I am sincerely sorry for being very late. I'm happy to see you here again XD

Easy

1. 00:17:606 - You should add a finish here. At first, I muted the song and listened to the hitsounds only and because of those hitsounds (00:14:939 (1,2,3,4) - ) it was more logical if a finish would be added. ok, added it
2. 00:26:939 (2,1) - As I can see on both reverse, there's a space between them and at both beginning, there's no space. In my opinion, it looks a bit weird, aesthetically. I suggest you to reform them a bit, so it won't have this weirdo space between those reverses. I tryed to change this
   
   Example

   
3. 00:54:606 (1) - It might be a bit difficult for beginners to hit this slider because it starts on the fourth measure/upbeat and it has a strong noise on the next downbeat, which is why you have added two timing points to add a sound to the slider tick. I highly suggest you to review that to make it easier. For an example, I am suggesting you something like that:
   
   Example

   
   
   
   *So first, I have deleted the circle on (00:55:606 - ) to move the previous slider on the big downbeat. After that, I have deleted the reverse arrow of (00:53:439 (2) - ) and replaced the end by another slider, which follows the vocals.
   ok, changed this part in something different
4. 01:00:272 - oh, this is just a suggestion. Since this slider is a bit quiet, would you mind to add it a whistle here and another on the reverse arrow? It's going to sound like the next slider with its claps and since you already have whistles to this part, it wouldn't sound terrible. not a bad suggestion, fixed
5. 01:09:606 - A whsitle should sound good here because of the previous slider ok
6. 01:09:606 (3,1) - For those objects, the circle (1) is making a terrible blanket with the slider. You should reform the slider to make it blanketed. After you're done, copy/paste this slider for 01:08:273 (1) - since it's the same.

tryed to change this, at first I didn't got the concept of blancket, then I realized it but I made some changes XD hope it's ok in this way

Normal

1. 00:17:606 (1,3) - Shouldn't these sliders be aligned? They're very close on being aligned. fixed
2. 00:30:939 (1,2) - This is only a suggestion, they're already acceptable. Anyways, with those sliders, you can easily make two blankets, for an example, the beginning of the slider (1) will make a blanket with the form of the slider (2) and vise-versa. changed just a little bit
   
   Example

   
3. 00:38:606 (1,2) - Would you mind on making a better blanket with this circle and slider? The slider's form is a bit weird from what it could be if it was blanketed. ok
4. 00:44:272 (1) - The clap at the end of this slider sounds terrible because on the next object, it has a clap. So, there's two claps one after the other, which sounds awful. I highly suggest you to delete this one. that's right changed
5. 01:10:939 (1,2,3) - I am going to take an example, 01:00:272 (1,2,3) - those object, both sliders are formed to make a blanket with the circle between them. On those objects, it is not doing the same thing. Yes, the circle is between two sliders but.. it is not blanketed, so it looks weird. I suggest you to make a copy/paste from the previous pattern to help you.

right copyed the previous one so

Good Good o_ob

Hard

1. 00:49:272 - Why is there missing a clap here? It should have one to keep the consistency with your upbeats hitsounds. ok
2. 01:04:106 (5) - Is this slider copied from the previous one? If yes, you forgot to delete the clap at the end of it. It's pretty obvious when you hear two claps in a row. O.o that was right XD I fixed this
3. 01:04:106 (5) - This spinner does not have any finishes. On Easy and Normal, it has one. I suggest you to keep the consistency by either adding a finish or the opposite, deleting it on both Easy and Normal.

I didn't noticed this O_O

Yay~ >//<
I am proud of you. :333
Call me back whenever you want~!

Gabe wrote:

I am confident enough and the map has been in pending for too long.

dkun wrote:

I'd just like to point out that the video can be compressed better. Although there is nothing wrong with it, your filesize is a bit too big for me to be comfortable with the mapset.

Please call this a tentative bubble and let the mapper decide before any BAT's do anything else with the map.
That's all I'd like to say, though. Please feel free to call me back when you've made a decision on what to do (and I hope this means you'll compress the video!).

Kethsar wrote:

So, I made 2 smaller file size encodes. One of them uses the same resolution as yours, but with a smaller bitrate, the other was encoded to 4:3 aspect ratio, also with a smaller bitrate. Take your pick (or don't).

4:3 video

Original resolution.

dkun wrote:

great job!

Andrea wrote:

You finally made it

-kevincela- wrote:

Congratulations for your first ranked map!

Mi fa sempre piacere vedere nuovi mapper italiani :3

Leader wrote:

-kevincela- wrote:

Congratulations for your first ranked map!

Mi fa sempre piacere vedere nuovi mapper italiani :3

^^^^

MineC24 wrote:

Congratulations!!