As requested,
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General]
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Seem like you forgot to resnap the notes after the timing change. - I notice that the lines on the pippidonclear is rather jagged, basically, looks low quality, is this intentional?
- combobreak.mp3, not sure where this sound is use, I try missing a few notes, but didn't hear this sound, can you tell me where it's use?
- A silent slider slide would be really good for the part from 00:14:634 - 00:20:407 as the slide slide sound too a bit noisy here.
And if you full submit, please remove the .osb file first.
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Easy]
- These two sliders 00:14:634 (1,2) looks really bad with all those sliders tick, I recommend slider tick 1 in this diff for this reason.
- Reduce hp by 1 tick? So that Easy > Normal > Hard > Insane hp drain is perfectly balanced (1 > 3 > 5 >7)
00:28:369 (3) - Don't really see why you add the repeat here, after playing 00:25:477 (1), I also expected this slider to have just one repeat, the extra repeat surprised me and I'm sure beginner will be surprised too.
00:31:983 (1) - Use the same shape as (2) & (3). I feel it will make this part look cleaner.
00:37:766 (1) - I recommend doing something like 00:41:381 (3) instead in term of rhythm and slider shape. Really do not think kick slider (repeating slider with multiple repeats) is intuitive here or for an Easy.
00:43:549 (1) - Same as 00:28:369.
00:44:995 (2) - I'm fine with this kick slider because the slider is much longer so you have much more time to react. 00:49:684 - 00:54:744 - Why didn't you map here like all the other diffs? Like add a spinner at 00:49:684 and end it on 00:52:214 then a repeating slider/slider that begin on 00:53:660 and end on 00:54:383 for example.
01:21:140 (3) - I'm sure you can avoid the overlap with (2) here. Would look cleaner if you fix this.
01:24:031 (1,2,3) - Copy the first slider, use the rotate tool, rinse and repeat, image example
http://puu.sh/W1Kk01:38:489 (1) - I think this spinner would be better with slightly reduce volume.
01:47:164 (3) - Same as 01:21:140.
01:50:055 (1,2,3) - Same as 01:24:031.
Not too fond of seeing kick sliders and slider slow down in an Easy diff, but since song is pretty slow, I'll let it go. Think a bit of polish could be done, but for the rest, seem fine to me.
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Normal]
00:14:634 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The note are really clustered together here, so I highly recommend avoiding 1/2 rhythm here, my suggestion for rhythm
http://puu.sh/W1Pw Simply follow piano, you can alternate by doing a slider instead if you want, but keep the distant between the notes 1/1.
00:28:369 (1,2) - Since you didn't keep spacing here (0.55x distant snap), slider to ease the change in spacing would be nice. I always hit this too early because of spacing.
00:46:441 (1,2) - Change to short slider so that you have to only hit when the singer say "la" The beginning of these two sliders 00:46:983 (3,4) are all on "la." I think nicer to song.
01:15:357 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - At this approach rate, this many hit circles in a row is annoying to read, just look at the approach circle in the editor
http://puu.sh/W1UB, what would a relatively new osu! player think of this when they see this pattern? I recommend two short repeating sliders instead.
01:24:031 (1) - Prefer this
http://puu.sh/W1W801:31:983 (2) - Finish fits at end here.
01:38:850 (1) - Spinner seem a bit too loud, consider reducing.
01:50:055 (1) - Same as 01:24:031.
Rhythm seem fitting for this song, same comments about Easy about needing polishing. Also hear this sound on 01:58:720, 01:59:453, 02:00:166 and etc. Whistle fits those place, I recommend following this sound whenever you hear it, and this applies to all diffs. I'm not too fond of seeing copy and paste again.
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Hard]
00:14:985 - Recommend having something here, sound weird without it to me.
00:15:708 - ^
00:46:612 - I feel you should have a note here rather than 00:46:792 which follow a soft hi-hat.
01:07:405 (3,6) - Since this diff seem to be your most polished diff so far, these two sliders shape looks weird to me, some ideas...
http://puu.sh/W27h01:15:718 (3) - Would be better if you add a hit circle to where the begin is and where the end is. Feel rather off to vocal to not have to hit something at where this slider end.
01:29:814 (1) - Try to make this more perfectly symmetrical?
01:38:670 (1) - Sound better if you reduce this spinner volume to me.
01:44:272 (1,2,3,4,5) - Seem odd to change spacing gameplay wise to me, I suggest keeping it consistent for this combo.
01:58:369 (4) - I prefer if you place it this way
http://puu.sh/W2aU as your current way make me think there will be another repeat.
A lot better compare to Easy & Normal imo, just some weird rhythm here and there.
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Gezo's Poop]
00:14:634 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Why not follow the piano like the next bit? The only instrument I can hear is the piano so it sound really off that I'm playing a rhythm which doesn't follow it.
00:43:369 (5) - Jump feel off to me, consider 1.0x-1.5x spacing instead. Or maybe place where 00:41:381 (3) is, just think it's better to reduce this jump a little.
00:52:224 (1) - Reduce volume of this spinner?
01:02:164 (1) - Feel better to me if you remove a repeat (this make the rhythm focus on the "ah" sound that vocal makes and I think let you feel the song a little more, just following the drums doesn't give this effect to me).
01:02:887 (2) - Prefer higher spacing for this, after that stream, I find it hard not to hit these notes early.
01:55:838 (1,2) - I prefer repeating slider first, then hit circles.
Play quite nice, I didn't really suggest to lower the volume of spinner here as I didn't manage to spin fast enough to hear the bonus sound, but you may want to reduce the volume of some spinners a bit.
Feel like you work harder on Hard & Insane than your Easy & Normal. So, I feel your Easy & Normal need quite a bit more work. No star for this reason. Looking at Hard & Insane, I feel you can easily fix those diffs if you self-mod them a bit.
Well, good luck!