[Daybreak Oni]
00:03:516 (17,18) - 00:07:631 (48,49) - 00:09:002 (58,59) - 00:14:488 (106,107) - 00:18:602 (139,140) - 00:19:974 (149,150) - I don't think these are appropriate.
You may be doing this for pattern progressions, and I notice that you have kd s after all these, but these are not fit to the music, as 00:03:516 (17) - lies in the exact percussion as 00:03:345 (16) - and 00:03:602 (18) - is a low base drum. This also apply to the other few 1/4 duplets. Moreover, I don't see you reusing this pattern choice at the very end of the song, which also has similar sounds as this beginning part.
So I strongly suggest you change them to kd instead
00:05:316 (31,32) - VS 00:16:288 (120,121,122,123) - I really like the idea that you leave blanks in 31,32 to emphasize the bass sounds, but it is the only place where you place breaks here in the beginning section.
No more breaks at 00:16:288 (120,121,122,123) - will loosen the structure and make that blank seems odd overall.
A quick fix is to change 00:16:288 (120,121,122,123) - to only a d at 00:16:288 - and a d at 00:16:631 -, which sounds quite nice as well.
01:27:602 (676) - There is a very notable cymbal sound here. I personally would map this D and delete 01:27:688 (677) - , but it is up to you. Same for 01:16:631 (581) -
01:28:802 (688,689,690,691,692) - This has very similar sounds as 00:44:916 (350,351,352,353) - but you mapped it differently.
It is fine to have different patterns, but I do think the usage of finishers should be consistent throughout the map, so that it creates a stronger coherence throughout the map.
I suggest changing 01:28:802 (690,691,692,693,694) - to rhythms that are similar to 00:44:916 (352,353,354,355) - Same for 01:17:831 (595,596,597,598,599) -
02:13:374 (895,896,897,898,899,900,901,902,903) - This part can be better arranged.
I notice this stream while test-playing. It creates a strange feeling because of the non-meta pattern and especially the offbeat 1/4 quintuples, which is not a common one that you used throughout the map. 02:16:116 (919,920,921,922,923,924,925,926,927) - This one however flows better and the melody is represented better because the two 02:16:631 (924,925,926,927) - duplets are currently mapped in such a way that it makes it clear to players.
I strongly suggest you change the pattern at 02:13:374 -
02:24:002 (990) - This is another place where I will consider putting a finisher and remove 02:23:916 (989) - . It is up to you.
02:32:745 (1060) - 02:33:002 (1063) - Switch these two notes' position? The music is still blurred until 02:32:916 (1062) - and it would make more sense that you map more dons than kats here. So the map is more related with the music in this area.
03:21:602 (373) - Should have finisher, just like 03:20:059 (361) - and 03:20:745 (364) - , for consistency. You may want to remove 03:21:516 (372) - as a result.
And the rest are fine.
Please pay attention to the finisher usage throughout the map, I did not point out all of them because those I didn't point out are similar to the ones above-mentioned, but mostly after the calm part in the middle of the song.
Sorry for the huge delay. I did not intend to ignore your request. Very sorry.