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Yuuki Aira - Zankoku yo Kibou to Nare

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shikyu
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 07 Nopember 2011 at 22:11:33

Artist: Yuuki Aira
Title: Zankoku yo Kibou to Nare
Source: Idolm@ster Xenoglossia
Tags: jusufkala opening
BPM: 113
Filesize: 5430kb
Play Time: 03:39
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (4,51 stars, 446 notes)
  2. JK Insane (4,91 stars, 571 notes)
  3. Normal (2,88 stars, 196 notes)
Download: Yuuki Aira - Zankoku yo Kibou to Nare
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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my first beatmap, enjoy :)

Idolm@aster Xenosglossia 2nd OP

moved to WIP for a while until finish remake it
Genkishi
Hi..

Your map has no hitsounds..and it's full of circles so it's very boring to play and i suggest to add some sliders..fix your spacing also'your spacing is very bad..and make the circles bigger because it's difficulty is easy..
Genkishi
Oh the map is graveyard i thought it's pending sorry
Starrodkirby86

Genkishi wrote:

Oh the map is graveyard i thought it's pending sorry
Not anymore it ain't!

Revived. Good luck! Work hard, and all that good stuff. ;)
Topic Starter
shikyu

Starrodkirby86 wrote:

Genkishi wrote:

Oh the map is graveyard i thought it's pending sorry
Not anymore it ain't!

Revived. Good luck! Work hard, and all that good stuff. ;)
thanks :D
Genkishi

Starrodkirby86 wrote:

Genkishi wrote:

Oh the map is graveyard i thought it's pending sorry
Not anymore it ain't!

Revived. Good luck! Work hard, and all that good stuff. ;)

whoa that's unexpected
subarasikibuta
waiting for a long time.
senaya
Yo~

[General]
Your bg is 1228*767. maximum width is 1024, you have to resize yours.
Your diffs don't have any preview points. You can set them in Timing -> Set Current Position as Preview Point.

[Normal]
Uhh... You have an inheriting time section before your global BPM/Offset is being set. Remove it or else it won't work.
Lots of unsnapped notes (go Timing -> Resnap All Notes)
I seriously suggest you to map this diff till the end like you did with Hard.
00:21:804 (7) - make this repeat at 00:22:184 (1/4 shorter)?
00:28:717 (1) - it'd make it turn 1/4 earlier. i'd also make it 1/4 shorter (end it at 00:29:619)
00:31:065 (4) - 1 grid left, 1 grid down to put it under the previous slider or alternatively you can use distance snap.
00:30:282 (2) - i'd move this to 00:30:140
00:40:717 (1,2,3) - are you sure Normal diff should have something like triplets?
00:59:488 (4) - make it 1/4 longer or even better, move it to 00:59:619
01:03:021 (3,4) - spacing here looks bad
00:58:456 (2) - move this to 00:58:314 and add another circle here 00:58:705
00:59:500 (5) - move this to 00:59:619
01:03:021 (3,5) - bad spacing. maybe add a note to 01:03:532?
01:05:879 (2) - move this to 01:05:749?
01:07:326 (5,6,7) - and again, not sure if this should be in the easiest diff..
01:21:282 (1) - use 1/6 divisor and move it to 01:21:314
01:21:804 (2) - move this to 01:21:923?
01:22:836 (3) - again use 1/6 divisor and move it to 01:22:792
01:29:749 (4) - why not spinner instead?

[Hard]
00:23:227 (5,6,7) - bad spacing
00:33:402 (1) - too short
00:43:836 (3,4,5,6) - feels like not following anything here..
00:42:793 (7) - i'd use 1/6 divisor to move it to 00:42:879
00:48:793 (3) - i'd move this to 00:48:923
00:50:880 (1) - way too short for a spinner
00:58:966 (5,6,7) - spacing. also, doesn't fit music D:
02:06:793 (3) - i'd move this to 02:06:662
02:18:402 (1,2,3) - look at that spacing..
02:21:402 (7,8,9) - this could follow rhythm better
02:44:749 - remove this break? it's too short anyway..
03:01:706 (8,9) - don't hide sliders. it's unrankable.
03:24:793 (2,3,4) - spacing is bad
03:33:793 (5) - remove and move 03:33:924 (6) there instead and make it end at 03:34:314


Uh, actually, I thought that you should use 1/6 divisor all along.
But it turns out that your BPM is wrong, change it to 113
After that you will have to resnap all notes again and go through both diffs to fix notes that were shifted after the BPM chagne.
Topic Starter
shikyu

senaya wrote:

Yo~

[General]
Your bg is 1228*767. maximum width is 1024, you have to resize yours.
Your diffs don't have any preview points. You can set them in Timing -> Set Current Position as Preview Point.

[Normal]
Uhh... You have an inheriting time section before your global BPM/Offset is being set. Remove it or else it won't work.
Lots of unsnapped notes (go Timing -> Resnap All Notes)
I seriously suggest you to map this diff till the end like you did with Hard.
00:21:804 (7) - make this repeat at 00:22:184 (1/4 shorter)?
00:28:717 (1) - it'd make it turn 1/4 earlier. i'd also make it 1/4 shorter (end it at 00:29:619)
00:31:065 (4) - 1 grid left, 1 grid down to put it under the previous slider or alternatively you can use distance snap.
00:30:282 (2) - i'd move this to 00:30:140
00:40:717 (1,2,3) - are you sure Normal diff should have something like triplets?
00:59:488 (4) - make it 1/4 longer or even better, move it to 00:59:619
01:03:021 (3,4) - spacing here looks bad
00:58:456 (2) - move this to 00:58:314 and add another circle here 00:58:705
00:59:500 (5) - move this to 00:59:619
01:03:021 (3,5) - bad spacing. maybe add a note to 01:03:532?
01:05:879 (2) - move this to 01:05:749?
01:07:326 (5,6,7) - and again, not sure if this should be in the easiest diff..
01:21:282 (1) - use 1/6 divisor and move it to 01:21:314
01:21:804 (2) - move this to 01:21:923?
01:22:836 (3) - again use 1/6 divisor and move it to 01:22:792
01:29:749 (4) - why not spinner instead?

[Hard]
00:23:227 (5,6,7) - bad spacing
00:33:402 (1) - too short
00:43:836 (3,4,5,6) - feels like not following anything here..
00:42:793 (7) - i'd use 1/6 divisor to move it to 00:42:879
00:48:793 (3) - i'd move this to 00:48:923
00:50:880 (1) - way too short for a spinner
00:58:966 (5,6,7) - spacing. also, doesn't fit music D:
02:06:793 (3) - i'd move this to 02:06:662
02:18:402 (1,2,3) - look at that spacing..
02:21:402 (7,8,9) - this could follow rhythm better
02:44:749 - remove this break? it's too short anyway..
03:01:706 (8,9) - don't hide sliders. it's unrankable.
03:24:793 (2,3,4) - spacing is bad
03:33:793 (5) - remove and move 03:33:924 (6) there instead and make it end at 03:34:314


Uh, actually, I thought that you should use 1/6 divisor all along.
But it turns out that your BPM is wrong, change it to 113
After that you will have to resnap all notes again and go through both diffs to fix notes that were shifted after the BPM chagne.
thanks anyway :D
athiota33
:)
Niva
Mod request via forum PM

[General]
-> Preview time-nya beda, yang Hard 68073, yang Normal 68097. Coba buka file .osu-nya pakai notepad terus diselaraskan preview timenya (:
-> BG image coba cari yang ukuran 640 x 480 / 800 x 600 / 1024 x 768, sama kualitas file .mp3 yang diperbolehkan itu max. 192 kbps. Coba diganti kedua hal ini, terus pilih Full Submit (jangan Standard Submit)

[Normal]
-> Jujur ini masih terlalu susah buat normal, mungkin coba buat diff lain yang tingkat kesulitannya di bawah 3 stars atau utak-atik diff. settingnya jadi begini :
00:26:525 (2,3) - Rubah jadi 1/2 slider?
00:35:684 (3,4,5,6) - "Clustering", coba buat mereka ini nggak terlalu mengumpul, misalnya http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/118426 ? (sorry notenya gw tumpuk supaya 1 gambar : D)
00:48:958 (1) - Nada ini ketutupan sama hit-300 - nya ): Sebenarnya nggak masalah sih, tapi ini diff yang paling mudah, kalau ada pemula yang mainin ini pasti kaget
01:08:604 (1) - Kiai time-nya nggak ke-snap tuh xD
01:22:941 (3) - Usahakan ini nggak nempel sama (1) yang sebelumnya, kalau mau ditumpuk ditumpuk aja sekalian
01:25:330 (1,2,3,4) - Pattern yang terlalu menjebak buat Normal imo
01:28:781 (3) - Coba dirubah jadi bezier slider?
01:40:197 (4,5,6,7) - Susah dibaca >< Mending digabung jadi slider aja
01:47:100 (8) - Kalau mau bikin slider wave, coba pakai teknik ini : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/118431
02:02:764 (3,4) - Susah dibaca karena stack-nya tidak sempurna
02:39:932 (5) - Coba rubah arah slider ini supaya nggak nyentuh (2) yang sebelumnya

[Hard]
00:11:790 (4) - New combo, kalau nggak mau spacingnya disamain aja sama jump yang sebelumnya
00:19:489 (5) - Coba di-space lebih jauh dari (4)
00:27:321 (4,5) - Taruh 1/4 lebih awal
00:32:233 (8) - Jangan taruh slider di atas note sebelumnya, sama sekali nggak bisa dibaca ><
01:13:649 (5) - New combo atau taruh lebih jauh dari note sebelumnya
01:21:082 (1) - Stream ini spacingnya disamakan aja sama stream sebelumnya, soalnya terlalu menjebak kalau spacingnya begini
02:03:560 (7) - Evil jump :3
02:05:418 (9) - Spacingnya coba dijauhkan dari note sebelumnya
02:54:268 (2,3,4,5) - Terlalu nge-cluster ): Coba (2,3,4) dirubah jadi repeating slider terus spacingnya disesuaikan
03:34:888 (7) - Spacing

Masih banyak kesalahannya sih... Tapi gw star deh
Semangat yah~ Good luck !
Topic Starter
shikyu

Nivalis wrote:

Mod request via forum PM

[General]
-> Preview time-nya beda, yang Hard 68073, yang Normal 68097. Coba buka file .osu-nya pakai notepad terus diselaraskan preview timenya (: ok
-> BG image coba cari yang ukuran 640 x 480 / 800 x 600 / 1024 x 768, sama kualitas file .mp3 yang diperbolehkan itu max. 192 kbps. Coba diganti kedua hal ini, terus pilih Full Submit (jangan Standard Submit) ok

[Normal]
-> Jujur ini masih terlalu susah buat normal, mungkin coba buat diff lain yang tingkat kesulitannya di bawah 3 stars atau utak-atik diff. settingnya jadi begini : ok
SPOILER
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00:26:525 (2,3) - Rubah jadi 1/2 slider? ok
00:35:684 (3,4,5,6) - "Clustering", coba buat mereka ini nggak terlalu mengumpul, misalnya http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/118426 ? (sorry notenya gw tumpuk supaya 1 gambar : D) ok
00:48:958 (1) - Nada ini ketutupan sama hit-300 - nya ): Sebenarnya nggak masalah sih, tapi ini diff yang paling mudah, kalau ada pemula yang mainin ini pasti kaget timing slider masih cukup jauh
01:08:604 (1) - Kiai time-nya nggak ke-snap tuh xD ok
01:22:941 (3) - Usahakan ini nggak nempel sama (1) yang sebelumnya, kalau mau ditumpuk ditumpuk aja sekalian ok
01:25:330 (1,2,3,4) - Pattern yang terlalu menjebak buat Normal imo ok
01:28:781 (3) - Coba dirubah jadi bezier slider? ok
01:40:197 (4,5,6,7) - Susah dibaca >< Mending digabung jadi slider aja ok
01:47:100 (8) - Kalau mau bikin slider wave, coba pakai teknik ini : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/118431 ok
02:02:764 (3,4) - Susah dibaca karena stack-nya tidak sempurna ok
02:39:932 (5) - Coba rubah arah slider ini supaya nggak nyentuh (2) yang sebelumnya ok

[Hard]
00:11:790 (4) - New combo, kalau nggak mau spacingnya disamain aja sama jump yang sebelumnya ok
00:19:489 (5) - Coba di-space lebih jauh dari (4) ok
00:27:321 (4,5) - Taruh 1/4 lebih awal yang 4 udah pas sama lirikinya, 5 ok
00:32:233 (8) - Jangan taruh slider di atas note sebelumnya, sama sekali nggak bisa dibaca >< ok
01:13:649 (5) - New combo atau taruh lebih jauh dari note sebelumnya ok
01:21:082 (1) - Stream ini spacingnya disamakan aja sama stream sebelumnya, soalnya terlalu menjebak kalau spacingnya begini ok
02:03:560 (7) - Evil jump :3 ok
02:05:418 (9) - Spacingnya coba dijauhkan dari note sebelumnya ok
02:54:268 (2,3,4,5) - Terlalu nge-cluster ): Coba (2,3,4) dirubah jadi repeating slider terus spacingnya disesuaikan ok
03:34:888 (7) - Spacing ok

Masih banyak kesalahannya sih... Tapi gw star deh
Semangat yah~ Good luck !
Shadow
[General Impressions]

Please use distance snap (if you press Alt, it appears in the top right corner)



and remap the both diff using a higher distance snap, its really hard to read and not really fun to play,

I'd also suggest you read this thread on how to make nice sliders.

Making Delicious Sliders: A Guide.


[Normal]
00:09:135 (1) - Finish Hitsound
00:11:259 (5) - Finish Hitsound on 1st White tick
00:11:259 (5) - Add an extra repeat with a finish hitsound on all three white ticks



00:14:180 (x) - Slider that end on 1st Whitetick (finish hitsound on red tick, and clap on white tick)



00:26:126 (1) - Finish hitsound
00:26:923 (3) - Finish Hitsound
00:27:188 (4) - Should start the red tick on 00:27:454
00:59:578 (4) - end this slider on 01:01:171 and delete 01:01:171 (1) -
01:05:418 (1,2,3) - Convert into a repeating slider and place a finish on 1st white tick



01:06:480 (2) - Finish on white and blue tick
01:07:277 (3) - Finish on red and white tick
01:11:259 (5) - Add a clap
01:11:790 (6) - clap on red tick
01:12:852 (1,2,3) - Convert this slider too, like 01:05:418 (1,2,3) and add a clap on white and red tick
01:13:914 (4) - Clap on 1st white tick
01:51:082 (6) - This looks a lot better, see SS. Also place a clap on red tick.


02:36:480 (3,4) - Clap on both

02:43:118 (4,5,6) - Same suggestion as for 01:05:418 (1,2,3) (to make it better to play)

[Hard]

For the hitsounds, you can use the same I suggested for normal.
Topic Starter
shikyu

ShadowLord wrote:

[General Impressions]

Please use distance snap (if you press Alt, it appears in the top right corner) ok


and remap the both diff using a higher distance snap, its really hard to read and not really fun to play , ok

I'd also suggest you read this thread on how to make nice sliders.

Making Delicious Sliders: A Guide.


[Normal]
00:09:135 (1) - Finish Hitsound ok
00:11:259 (5) - Finish Hitsound on 1st White tick ok
00:11:259 (5) - Add an extra repeat with a finish hitsound on all three white ticks ok



00:14:180 (x) - Slider that end on 1st Whitetick (finish hitsound on red tick, and clap on white tick) ok



00:26:126 (1) - Finish hitsound ok
00:26:923 (3) - Finish Hitsound ok
00:27:188 (4) - Should start the red tick on 00:27:454 sounds weird
00:59:578 (4) - end this slider on 01:01:171 and delete 01:01:171 (1) - ok
01:05:418 (1,2,3) - Convert into a repeating slider and place a finish on 1st white tick ok



01:06:480 (2) - Finish on white and blue tick ok
01:07:277 (3) - Finish on red and white tick ok
01:11:259 (5) - Add a clap ok
01:11:790 (6) - clap on red tick sounds weird
01:12:852 (1,2,3) - Convert this slider too, like 01:05:418 (1,2,3) and add a clap on white and red tick I add clap on all ticks
01:13:914 (4) - Clap on 1st white tick ok
01:51:082 (6) - This looks a lot better, see SS. Also place a clap on red tick. ok


02:36:480 (3,4) - Clap on both ok

02:43:118 (4,5,6) - Same suggestion as for 01:05:418 (1,2,3) (to make it better to play) ok

[Hard]

For the hitsounds, you can use the same I suggested for normal. ok
Yasora
yahoo~ mod by request~ :3

[Normal]
ngg... kayaknya spacingnya masih agak berantakan yah... sekalian nyaranin, spacingnya 1.0x aja.. biar ga terlalu susah buat normal~
00:23:737 (1) ganti jadi circle ?
00:26:216 (2) pindah ke 00:26:657 ?
00:27:587 (4) pindah ke 00:27:454 , berakhir di 00:28:250 (perpendek slider)
00:54:268 (1) new combo
00:55:595 (1) delete new combo
01:20:817 kiai time nya bagus sampe sini~
01:42:587 (4) new combo
02:06:480 (5) ^

[Hard]
ano... ini juga sama, spacing nya rapihin dikit lagi aja.. ^ ^"
00:39:666 (1,2,3,4) gimana kalo jangan stack gini... rasanya aneh.. coba tempatin di tempat lain...
00:40:463 (1,2,3,4) ^
00:43:383 (1) pindah ke 00:43:118
00:43:516 (2) pindah ke 00:43:383 & diperpanjang sampe 00:44:180
01:00:109 (1) add finish ?
02:11:790 (5) delete, slider (4) dipanjangin sampe situ
02:34:888 (7) new combo
02:36:480 (10) panjangin sampe 02:37:277
02:47:631 (7) new combo
03:00:640 (6) ^
03:24:534 kiai time sampe 03:39:401
03:39:666 add spinner sampe 03:40:994 +add finish
03:40:463 (1) delete

yosh~ kayaknye segitu dulu aje~~ smoga bermanfaat~ :3 maafin yah kalo ada salah kata~ ;w;
*kabur~*
Topic Starter
shikyu

Yasora-chan wrote:

yahoo~ mod by request~ :3

[Normal]
ngg... kayaknya spacingnya masih agak berantakan yah... sekalian nyaranin, spacingnya 1.0x aja.. biar ga terlalu susah buat normal~ spacing yang ini ga susah2 banget
00:23:737 (1) ganti jadi circle ? ok
00:26:216 (2) pindah ke 00:26:657 ? ok
00:27:587 (4) pindah ke 00:27:454 , berakhir di 00:28:250 (perpendek slider) ok
00:54:268 (1) new combo ok
00:55:595 (1) delete new combo ok
01:20:817 kiai time nya bagus sampe sini~ enakan sampe 01:16:303
01:42:587 (4) new combo ok
02:06:480 (5) ^ ok

[Hard]
ano... ini juga sama, spacing nya rapihin dikit lagi aja.. ^ ^" ok
00:39:666 (1,2,3,4) gimana kalo jangan stack gini... rasanya aneh.. coba tempatin di tempat lain... ok
00:40:463 (1,2,3,4) ^ ok
00:43:383 (1) pindah ke 00:43:118 ok
00:43:516 (2) pindah ke 00:43:383 & diperpanjang sampe 00:44:180 ok
01:00:109 (1) add finish ? ok
02:11:790 (5) delete, slider (4) dipanjangin sampe situ sesuai sama sound drum
02:34:888 (7) new combo di (8)
02:36:480 (10) panjangin sampe 02:37:277 tanggung, dipanjangin sampe 02:37:542
02:47:631 (7) new combo ok
03:00:640 (6) ^ ok
03:24:534 kiai time sampe 03:39:401 kepanjangan, sampe 03:28:250
03:39:666 add spinner sampe 03:40:994 +add finish ok
03:40:463 (1) delete ok

yosh~ kayaknye segitu dulu aje~~ smoga bermanfaat~ :3 maafin yah kalo ada salah kata~ ;w;
*kabur~*
fixed :)
mancuso_JM_
Well My mod
Some words: NC- Add New Combo RNC- Remove New Combo
General:
Your BG is 1227x767, Try to change to 1024x768 or maybe 640 x 480 After this you have to do full submision

Normal:
First of all I'm going to say that this diff. is better than hard

Slider velocity (1,40) it is the same in hard diff.
Hard is harder than Normal, I think that the slider velocity in Normal should be less
Kiai Time: select one place to set in all diff.This only can change if you have guest diff in the mapset
00:27:454 (4): NC?
00:28:781 (1): RNC?
00:38:339 (4): NC
00:57:719 (7): NC
00:57:985 (1): RNC
00:59:578 (5): NC
02:39:135 (4): NC
02:50:817: At the end Add a Spinner Start: Here Finish: 2:53:472 (Red Tick) and Hitsound FINISH

Hard:
I prefer to map with 1/4 beat snap divisor, I think that is better, but this is your opinion
Try to use the distance snap you have a lot of spacing mistakes
Circle size 2 maybe??
More than three unique slider speed are used in this beatmap, you can only change the slider speed three times

00:23:206 (5): NC
00:26:126: Slider speed: 1.40 x 0.5 and 00:27:454 1.40 x 1.5 The change in their sliders speeds is very abrupt
This is UNRANKEABLETry to change this It's very important
00:29:312 (x): Add one note
00:32:233 (8): NC
00:35:949 (7): NC
00:36:215 (slider): RNC
00:42:056 (6): NC
00:44:711 (3): NC
00:45:241 (slider): RNC
00:48:958 (3): NC
00:53:206 (5): NC
01:08:870 (6): NC
01:27:454 (6): NC
01:27:719 (1): RNC
02:02:233 (4): NC
02:05:418 (5): NC
02:05:684 (1): RNC
02:13:914 (5): NC
02:20:817 (6): NC
02:30:640 (4): NC
02:44:711 (circle): Remove this circle and add a slider that finish in 02:45:241 (white tick)
03:13:914 (10): NC
03:26:138 (6): NC
03:38:339 (slider and Inherited time): slider velocity change to 1,0 x slider start here and finish in 03:38:870 (white tick)
00:39:135 (slider) : This start here and finish in 03:39:401 You have to use the distance snap here
00:340:445 (Inherited time): Delete this, I think volume 60 to the end it's ok and you don't need the slider velocity


It's enough, I am very tired xD, Good Luck with your beatmap
jusufkala
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Download: Yuuki Aira - Zankoku yo Kibou to Nare (shikyu) [JK Hard].osu
hoLysoup
hi~
just suggestions

[JK's Hard]

OD7 and AR 8
00:11:790 (5) - New combo
00:16:038 (1,2,3,4,5) - make this more arc like?http://puu.sh/5NIX
00:32:896 (6) - try to not over lap this? it's hard to see
01:06:480 (4) - shorten this by a bit and add a circle at 01:07:542 to look like this: http://puu.sh/5NJo
01:29:843 (4) - stack on 3?
01:39:932 (7) - down 1 grid. Grid level 3
02:43:649 (8) - new combo
03:15:905 (8,1) - spacing

[Hard]

more than 3 slider speeds are used here. Please only use 3.
00:09:666 (6) - New combo here
00:10:994 (1) - remove new combo
00:14:976 (1,1,1,1) - make them 1 after another please. don't skip any beat in between. and also:
00:14:976 (1,1,1,1) - all of them are not snapped to anything: http://puu.sh/5NMk
00:20:551 (9,10,11) - spacing
00:23:870 (8) - whistle?
00:42:852 (7,1,2) - spacing
01:02:233 (6) - make slider end stack on the circle?
01:05:418 (3) - new combo
01:08:870 - no more kiai? :O maybe make kiai time from 01:08:604~01:29:843 and then 02:29:312~02:50:551

  1. Did you change SV when you finished mapping or something? :O many of your sliders are not stacked to anything:
00:14:976 (1,1,1,1) - here
03:09:135 (2,3,5,6) - like here
03:16:834 (1,2,6) - ^

ok.. I think you have many things to fix.. first you should definitely first fix all the sliders and snap them on to a line first. I won't go into deep mod yet because all the sliders need fixing.
Good Luck~~!!
pLease pm me when the map is done and I'll mod everything again ^^
jusufkala
I'm done fixing it :lol: :D :D
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