1. Easy (0.76 stars, 75 notes)
2. Hard (4.79 stars, 290 notes)
3. Normal (3.88 stars, 204 notes)

Mukku wrote:

Offset 558 (remember to resnap all hitsounds. Upper corner of your osu edit screen-> Timing -> Resnap All Notes (red text)Alace's advice add
BPM is fine

Normal
00:17:55 (3,4) - Too close to each other ok
01:14:30 (3,4) - Same as above ok


Great song And you should add some hitsounds too.
I see. Edit will begin later. Thanks advice and star!

Alace wrote:

You get a song kiouonesama loves

Offset:
1.590 ok
2.33295 ok
3.57771 ok
resnap all notes by 1/4 divisors but the 57771 area can`t be snapped well
so use 57791 ----> resnap all notes ----> use 57771 ----> resnap all notes >A<

Sliderticks
0.5 sounds better to me but 1 or 2 are fine too (4 is too noisy XD) ok

<map>
00:53:33~00:57 this part is hard to map i suggest a break time here ok
thanks advice and star!
pretty good first map

Alace wrote:

00:57:29 (1) - delete this note and redo the break XD done
first offset 590 you forgot it oh...sorry. done

avira0922 wrote:

chat advice desu :3

bg resize
mp3 cut
preview point
use of the distance snap
Addition / the change of the note
setting of the audio

etc...

I felt that his work improved than the first
Please do its best~

special THX Alace sama >A<

Alace wrote:

Hitsounds
Almost every new mapper makes the same mistake here
Adding to many hitsounds (i did it before and that map is pretty bad)
This song is very soft so simple hitsounds are better

Softclaps don`t fit the song so i remove all of them
I just add some softwhistles and finishs
you can download the .osu and listen to it
If you like it you can just rename it to Normal and try to remake easy`s hitsounds by yourself
good luck~

gdeath wrote:

[Easy]
00:16:59 (8) - new combo done
00:32:09 (1) - remove new combo? done
01:12:77 (8) - new combo done
01:18:77 (1,1) - remove new combo done
01:45:77 (2) - make the slider 1/2 earlier or later done
01:49:77 (1) - ^ done

[Normal]
increase 1 circle size? done
00:12:59 (11) - new combo done
00:28:59 (11) - ^ done
01:09:27 (11) - ^ done
01:25:27 (11) - ^ done

[Hard]
increase 1 circle size? done
00:26:59 (9) - new combo(dont let your combo exceed 13 except stream.) done
00:34:79 (7) - ^ done
00:38:79 (7) - ^ done
00:42:79 (7) - ^ done
00:46:79 (7) - ^ done
01:09:27 (9) - ^ done
01:15:27 (9) - ^ done
01:19:27 (9) - ^ done
02:05:77 (14) - ^ done

star*
better than my second map

Alace wrote:

<Hard>
00:13:009 (2) - spacing
map is fine for me but i think you can make your map more 綺麗　
you don`t need to use distance snap all the time
I will show you 3 pics (i don`t use any distance snap)

try it XD

AngelHoney wrote:

hard

00 24 590 (12345678 1234567) to 00 24 527(forward 1/8)?
Not done.
I used the slider instead.

star~
thanks star!

kud wrote:

Easy
サークルサイズを一つ大きくしてみるといいかも
絶対いいとは言い切れないので試してみてください
他の人からも１つ大きくした方がいいかもね、と言われていたので変更しました。

Normal
よくなったと思います！
自分はこっちのほうが好き
00:13:090~00:15:590,00:29:090~00:31:590,
01:09:771~01:12:271,01:25:771~01:28:271
も最後のスライダーだけうねうねさせたほうが曲に合っているかもしれないです！
ちょっと迷ってます。考えさせてください。(11/19追記、とりあえずそのままでいこうと思います。)

Hard
01:10:271(3)
プレイした時に１グリッド分上にずれて見えるのでもう一度配置しなおしてみるといいかもしれないです
こういう現象になったことがないので直るかどうかはわからないですが；すいません；
何度も重ねていくとなるみたいです。0.5grid下げてみました。(同じ所にサークルの連打を作ると少しずつずれるみたいなアレです。)

nice map~
star><
MODと星あり！

Yes wrote:

hard
00:51:079 (7) - i think this will play better if you make into a slider
01:26:002 (3) - whistle at end
01:27:002 (5) - ^
01:27:052 (6) - whistle beginning and end
01:28:002 (7) - only whistle at end (not whole thing)
01:45:077 (1) - no whistle
01:47:052 (1) - whistle
01:49:077 (1) - no whistle
01:51:052 (1) - whistle
01:53:077 (1,1) - ^
02:01:052 (x) - add note
02:01:064 (x) - ^
02:02:077 (3) - whistle


normal
00:15:009 (6) - take off slider whistle
00:43:054 (9) - whistle at end
01:49:077 (2) - ^
01:53:077 (2) - whistle at beginning and end
01:57:077 (2) - ^

easy
00:17:009 (x) - add note?
00:05:009 (4) - new combo
00:06:009 (1) - no new combo
00:09:009 (3,1) - ^
i think a lot of your new combo is weird but maybe just me :/

this is a cute song >O<

Yes wrote:

oh maybe i messed up ;__;
okie i fix!

hard:
01:45:077 (1) - whistle 01:45:771(spin)? done
02:01:052 (x) - add a new note 02:01:521? done
02:01:064 (x) - ^ 02:01:646? done
(see screenshot)
[attachment=0:07c33]screenshot001.jpg[/attachment:07c33]

if you add notes above, maybe
02:01:077 (3) - finish 02:01:771? done

02:02:077 (1) - whistle 02:02:771? done

Matma Rex wrote:

[Overall]
Nice map, but a bit repetitive :/
Your background are soooo ugly with all these jpg artifacts, you've compressed them too much D:
You played with storyboard and something got fucked up, remove .osb file from folder and fullsubmit.


[Easy]
This background is absolutely terrible. I blurred it a bit (see attachments), use it or just find new one.
You might re-place notes with distance snap and use some nice pattern, just to make look better, but whatever.
00:01:009 (1,2) - loljump?

[Normal]
00:43:054 (9) - remove two repeats, I combobroke on it D:
01:45:077 (2) - sounds bad, make it one long slider with no repeats.
01:53:077 (2) - ^
01:57:077 (2) - ^
02:06:077 (3) - doesn't fit, replace it with a hitcircle.

[Hard]
Lower drain rate a bit? Now it requires getting an S to just pass the song - if you get more 100s, you fail.
00:29:009 (3) - doesnt fit IMO.
00:43:004 (2,3,4) - looks ugly.

Starred.

osu_CN_yaya wrote:

i think
Hard
01:45:771 (1) -
01:49:771 (1) -
01:53:771 (1) -
01:57:771 (1) -

these 4 spinners , all extend 1/2 beat . done
and use this will be better .

sorry...i don't know use costom sound...
thanks mod and star.

202,142,64271,2,2,B|175:144|160:161|142:185|161:220|175:236|204:240,1,140

strager wrote:

General
First offset is at ~555ms. change 1st offset 560

Easy
Nothing wrong. Very calming. <3

Normal
Nothing wrong. Very calming. <3

=]

Hard
00:52:795 - Map this? You can put a spinner there.not done
01:04:271 (8) - Try this?done

202,142,64271,2,2,B|175:144|160:161|142:185|161:220|175:236|204:240,1,140

02:00:271 (4) - Ew?ok?

JInxyjem wrote:

[Easy]
Nazi: 01:21:771 (1) - Why is this not stacked on 3. If yo udon't want them stacked, move this beat further away.
done

Good enough for a proto-bubble, so here you go.

simplistiC wrote:

[Easy]
00:35:295 (2,3,4,5) - I would use a new combo for every one of them. Just my suggestion though.
done!

[Hard]
01:20:771 (8,1) - Spacing. This is fine with me but may be a problem.
01:22:771 (3,1) - ^
01:24:771 (3,1) - ^
i think fine.not done.
Nice map. Star~