• If you want to, i can move the title to be displayed right when the first break appears. It fits really well: other maps do that in a nice way and yours would be one of those (i can add custom colours to the artist/title name as well) :P
  Generally, the mapset lacks hitsounds. This is really noticeable during the chorus: adding some Finishes and a pattern of claps or whistles would really spice up things and make the whole thing more enjoyable. Another section where whistles would go great is from 02:32:676 to 02:53:545. This will keep me from giving you a Star because I want you to put yourself into this matter (so please don't just add 2/1 claps everywhere ;__;): once you get a good job here I'll be glad to recheck and star.

1. .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
   Great, but since you're using custom difficulty names for the other two difficulties I'd use one here as well.

1. .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
   Overall Difficulty +1? 4 Feels too low for a Hard map.
2. .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
   00:04:958 (3) - i know you used a regular spacing here, but i find it really really easy to misread the delay for a 1/2 instead of a 1/1. I'd go for something like this:
   
   SPOILER

   
   00:10:665 (1) - kinda the same thing, but less misreadable.I'd go for something more natural like this btw (just rotate the slider a bit):
   
   SPOILER

   
   00:59:741 (4,5,6) - you can easily center these 3 beats better. 4 and 5 can be alligned with 00:59:089 (2,3) and 6 can be made more symmetrical to the centre of the playfield. This can be applied to some other sliders as well but yours is not a symmetrical map so it's not needed at all.
   02:28:926 (1) - same thing as 00:04:958 (3) ;__;
3. .Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
   3 unsnapped notes (CTRL-Shift-A to check, Timing - Resnap All Notes to fix)

1. .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
   02:47:676 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this stream feels weird. I'd remove 6 and 8 but since it could only be my own impression it's up to you to decide.
2. .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
   00:22:893 (3) - a bit weird. moving it one square up makes it better, anyway.
   01:06:426 (7,8,1) - move these 3 up a bit. This will "fix" the not-so-good antijump at 01:06:263 (6,7) and make the 01:06:589 (1,2) jump more readable.
   02:01:208 (7,8,1) - same as above, but move down :P
   03:03:654 (1) - you can remove the new combo here.
3. .Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
   2 unsnapped notes

Card N'FoRcE wrote:

- General: (Considerations and things you need to check/fix for the whole map)

• If you want to, i can move the title to be displayed right when the first break appears. It fits really well: other maps do that in a nice way and yours would be one of those (i can add custom colours to the artist/title name as well) Please do that！Thank you！
  Generally, the mapset lacks hitsounds. This is really noticeable during the chorus: adding some Finishes and a pattern of claps or whistles would really spice up things and make the whole thing more enjoyable. Another section where whistles would go great is from 02:32:676 to 02:53:545. This will keep me from giving you a Star because I want you to put yourself into this matter (so please don't just add 2/1 claps everywhere ;__;): once you get a good job here I'll be glad to recheck and star.

- Normal:

1. .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
   Great, but since you're using custom difficulty names for the other two difficulties I'd use one here as well.

- Route:

1. .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
   Overall Difficulty +1? 4 Feels too low for a Hard map.
2. .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
   00:04:958 (3) - i know you used a regular spacing here, but i find it really really easy to misread the delay for a 1/2 instead of a 1/1. I'd go for something like this:
   
   SPOILER

   
   00:10:665 (1) - kinda the same thing, but less misreadable.I'd go for something more natural like this btw (just rotate the slider a bit):
   
   SPOILER

   
   00:59:741 (4,5,6) - you can easily center these 3 beats better. 4 and 5 can be alligned with 00:59:089 (2,3) and 6 can be made more symmetrical to the centre of the playfield. This can be applied to some other sliders as well but yours is not a symmetrical map so it's not needed at all.
   02:28:926 (1) - same thing as 00:04:958 (3) ;__;
3. .Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
   3 unsnapped notes (CTRL-Shift-A to check, Timing - Resnap All Notes to fix)

- One-way Route:

1. .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
   02:47:676 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this stream feels weird. I'd remove 6 and 8 but since it could only be my own impression it's up to you to decide.
2. .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
   00:22:893 (3) - a bit weird. moving it one square up makes it better, anyway.
   01:06:426 (7,8,1) - move these 3 up a bit. This will "fix" the not-so-good antijump at 01:06:263 (6,7) and make the 01:06:589 (1,2) jump more readable.
   02:01:208 (7,8,1) - same as above, but move down
   03:03:654 (1) - you can remove the new combo here.
3. .Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
   2 unsnapped notes

Good luck, and PM me back when you're done with everything.

• Raise every section volume by 10%, it's more balanced (yeah, it will take you a while but it's worth it). Then replace your custom clap with this one, it has a slightly higher volume: http://www.mediafire.com/?jd90bsn9rwdspqf
  Then, as Raging Bull pointed out, the video resolution is quite bad (i didn't notice before), so here's a 360p version with a really good quality: http://www.mediafire.com/?b12u1h47zjukiuh
  Remember to do a Full submission after replacing those files.

1. .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
   01:00:067 (6) - move one square to the left

1. .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
   01:06:426 (7,8,1) - you didn't move these up a bit. If you want to keep them that way at least tell me why D:
   02:01:208 (7,8,1) - ^ (same thing, but move down)
   03:13:763 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - you should consider making these a vertical stack:
   
   SPOILER

   
2. .Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
   02:34:469 (6) - misleading as hell. When following the pattern you made with 02:33:002 (2,3,4,5) the player is very likely to consider (6) as 1/2 after (5). Please move it.

Card N'FoRcE wrote:

Ok, final things and this should be ready to go.

- General: (Considerations and things you need to check/fix for the whole map)

• Raise every section volume by 10%, it's more balanced (yeah, it will take you a while but it's worth it). Then replace your custom clap with this one, it has a slightly higher volume: http://www.mediafire.com/?jd90bsn9rwdspqf
  Then, as Raging Bull pointed out, the video resolution is quite bad (i didn't notice before), so here's a 360p version with a really good quality: http://www.mediafire.com/?b12u1h47zjukiuh
  Remember to do a Full submission after replacing those files.

- Route:

1. .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
   01:00:067 (6) - move one square to the left

- One-Way Route:

1. .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
   01:06:426 (7,8,1) - you didn't move these up a bit. If you want to keep them that way at least tell me why D:
   02:01:208 (7,8,1) - ^ (same thing, but move down)
   03:13:763 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - you should consider making these a vertical stack:
   
   SPOILER

   
2. .Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
   02:34:469 (6) - misleading as hell. When following the pattern you made with 02:33:002 (2,3,4,5) the player is very likely to consider (6) as 1/2 after (5). Please move it.

Card N'FoRcE wrote:

(ノ° - °)ノ 彡

• 
  Artist: Miku Hatsune

Card N'FoRcE wrote:

Oh, Miku is not capitalized D: (silly me for not noticing, sorry)

Please fix it and do a full resubmission (be careful and follow these steps: viewtopic.php?f=56&t=24443&start=0).

If you have troubles (like a making duplicate by mistake), feel free to ask me for help.

After you do this i'll rebubble.
EDIT: no wait what am i saying, it IS capitalized, only the thread title is not
/me double stupid.

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2006年1月18日 at 17:13:43

Aleks719 wrote:

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2006年1月18日 at 17:13:43

YOU ARE WIZARD, STAR

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2006年1月18日 at 17:13:43

Zerostarry wrote:

00:43:111 (1) - Remove the new combo, it is not musically correct

It's really all that bugs me, mapping wise

chamelepeace710 wrote:

ack.... Late mods...

You know, screw it... Good luck.

One quick look and it's good already.

And for some reason, just because it's bubbled or something else, I can't star it.

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2006年1月18日 at 17:13:43

WTF?

Zerostarry wrote:

Oh wow, I didn't realize i forgot the diff

It's [One-way Route] i'll rank as soon as it's fixed