Hi,
Popping the bubble because of .. various reasons. Spacing, rhythm and sometimes the logic towards the song itself do seem flawed and I think you could really improve it at this state.
[Not Like this]
Generally, I don't understand why you've used 2.0x SV in such a calm part.. the effect could be way better if you actually kept it low.
00:08:132 (1) - The active and passive beatmapping doesn't seem correct here - first of all, it kind of seems really off cuz the slider velocity is that high, even though you're leading into a calm part. Secondly, 00:08:299 - is a strong vocal, if not strong than 00:08:153 - , hence why it being passive doesn't make sense. Plaese try restructuring this part by keeping the things said above in mind.
00:12:064 (1) - It would actually make a cool feel if you had those sliders have a calmer ending volume, so you can accentuate the emphasis of the vocals better.
00:12:064 (1,2) - This antijump... well.. despite it not playing too well, it doesn't really make sense with the rest of the spacings too does it. 00:11:773 (6,1) - Why is this spacing so high? I don't hear anything ( since it's actually.. nothing ) that could justify it, but yeah, spacing does seem a bit arbitrary :/
00:09:151 (4,5) - Could I ask you why you've used 1/4 sliders (silenced) with a circle (applies to all parts?) There's reaaally not going on much in the song, and combined with that fast sv, the effect of those just feel spammed and not really emphasizing the song in a good way
00:19:054 (1,1) - vs 00:23:714 (1,1) - : Why do the first pair of sliders not follow the clap?
00:25:171 (5,6,7) - Spacing; 1/4 vs 1/2 - it's equal but not timewise. Please keep that in mind.
00:38:278 (2,3,4) - This part generally suffers heavy spacing issues :/ 1/2 and 1/4 shouldn't always be so mindlessly be same spaced
00:42:355 (1,2) - Uh.. that antijump really seems off, why is that being spaced like this? Doesn't seem like you really need to lower down this spacing like dat
00:45:289 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - His voice also here still stays calm, and so do the instruments - a bit lower spacing would actually be more emphasizing than the actual position..
00:48:472 (1,2,3,1) - Spacing
00:50:802 (1,2,1) - Hm, abotu this rhythm, it's like "duuu-uuu..." and not, dudu-duuu (like you imply) :/ So bascially I feel like you map something really off here
00:54:297 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Hmm, I don't really understand this pattern. If you take the vocals: Oh I want something just like this. You pair it like this: Oh I want - some thing just - liiii - kethis ... well.. why is it so oddly split? It could all form one pattern at least, if you wanna make it somewhat relating to the song!
01:00:413 (2,1) - Even if the rhythm is off, this spacing is just way too high I mean why do you need to emphasize it like this, the other stuff isn't either?
01:04:512 - What I wonder, but obviously boils down to preference, why don't you try spice your map a bit up by adding 1/4 here? It's one of the rare occasions you could do that, and I feel like your map suffers a bit from being really monotone (even though the vocals are actually pretty variable.. but yeah it's not really shown in the map)
01:06:821 (1,2) - Lol, I've seen the old version and all you did was creating a really odd antijump by just deleting the next note cuz it was overmapped. This just really plays unpredictable now.. you should really put some more effort into that fix
01:13:812 (5) - Same with the 1/4 again, preference, but the vocals are very distinctable here and yet you put another curve slider pattern here even tho you've only expressed yourself so far with curved sliders ://
Yeah.. I'm down to helping you further but basically there's some shizzles all over the map if you ask me. I hope it helps, mostly it just boils down on the same issue.
Popping the bubble because of .. various reasons. Spacing, rhythm and sometimes the logic towards the song itself do seem flawed and I think you could really improve it at this state.
[Not Like this]
Generally, I don't understand why you've used 2.0x SV in such a calm part.. the effect could be way better if you actually kept it low.
00:08:132 (1) - The active and passive beatmapping doesn't seem correct here - first of all, it kind of seems really off cuz the slider velocity is that high, even though you're leading into a calm part. Secondly, 00:08:299 - is a strong vocal, if not strong than 00:08:153 - , hence why it being passive doesn't make sense. Plaese try restructuring this part by keeping the things said above in mind.
00:12:064 (1) - It would actually make a cool feel if you had those sliders have a calmer ending volume, so you can accentuate the emphasis of the vocals better.
00:12:064 (1,2) - This antijump... well.. despite it not playing too well, it doesn't really make sense with the rest of the spacings too does it. 00:11:773 (6,1) - Why is this spacing so high? I don't hear anything ( since it's actually.. nothing ) that could justify it, but yeah, spacing does seem a bit arbitrary :/
00:09:151 (4,5) - Could I ask you why you've used 1/4 sliders (silenced) with a circle (applies to all parts?) There's reaaally not going on much in the song, and combined with that fast sv, the effect of those just feel spammed and not really emphasizing the song in a good way
00:19:054 (1,1) - vs 00:23:714 (1,1) - : Why do the first pair of sliders not follow the clap?
00:25:171 (5,6,7) - Spacing; 1/4 vs 1/2 - it's equal but not timewise. Please keep that in mind.
00:38:278 (2,3,4) - This part generally suffers heavy spacing issues :/ 1/2 and 1/4 shouldn't always be so mindlessly be same spaced
00:42:355 (1,2) - Uh.. that antijump really seems off, why is that being spaced like this? Doesn't seem like you really need to lower down this spacing like dat
00:45:289 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - His voice also here still stays calm, and so do the instruments - a bit lower spacing would actually be more emphasizing than the actual position..
00:48:472 (1,2,3,1) - Spacing
00:50:802 (1,2,1) - Hm, abotu this rhythm, it's like "duuu-uuu..." and not, dudu-duuu (like you imply) :/ So bascially I feel like you map something really off here
00:54:297 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Hmm, I don't really understand this pattern. If you take the vocals: Oh I want something just like this. You pair it like this: Oh I want - some thing just - liiii - kethis ... well.. why is it so oddly split? It could all form one pattern at least, if you wanna make it somewhat relating to the song!
01:00:413 (2,1) - Even if the rhythm is off, this spacing is just way too high I mean why do you need to emphasize it like this, the other stuff isn't either?
01:04:512 - What I wonder, but obviously boils down to preference, why don't you try spice your map a bit up by adding 1/4 here? It's one of the rare occasions you could do that, and I feel like your map suffers a bit from being really monotone (even though the vocals are actually pretty variable.. but yeah it's not really shown in the map)
01:06:821 (1,2) - Lol, I've seen the old version and all you did was creating a really odd antijump by just deleting the next note cuz it was overmapped. This just really plays unpredictable now.. you should really put some more effort into that fix
01:13:812 (5) - Same with the 1/4 again, preference, but the vocals are very distinctable here and yet you put another curve slider pattern here even tho you've only expressed yourself so far with curved sliders ://
Yeah.. I'm down to helping you further but basically there's some shizzles all over the map if you ask me. I hope it helps, mostly it just boils down on the same issue.