only 3 weeks late pogchamp
[kantan]
OD4
*- 00:01:868 (2) -/- 00:03:165 (4) -/- 00:05:760 (8) – delete those ? juste to make it easier, this rhythm is kinda complicated
*- 00:21:490 (31) – remove or move to - 00:21:814 – possibly as d? consistency with - 00:32:192 (43,44) -, overall there are only triplets there so yeah. Id also remove - 00:34:787 (46) – since there is nothing at - 00:24:409 -.
*- 01:00:733 (85) – remove? Sounds unnecessary, there are similar sound before the other D. Id also delete - 01:05:598 (91) – and - 01:06:571 (93) – to emphasize more the snap increase
*- 01:26:354 (25,26) – remove? Consistency with - 01:15:976 –‘s break
*- 01:52:787 (25) – remove? No consistency reason or whatever but it just plays weird imo, better having a break before the spinner
[Futsuu]
OD 4.5
*- 00:04:949 (10) – remove? This break would emphasize the 2 following just like they all are emphasized before
*- 00:10:138 (22) – remove? - 00:09:490 – this is like the exact same spot and there is a break so yea
*- 00:14:354 (34,35,36,37,38,39,40,41,42,43) – what about removing - 00:14:679 (35) -/- 00:15:165 (37,38) – and adding a k at - 00:15:182 – and a d at - 00:15:182 - ? k d ddd k k d d k => k – d – kkk ddd k, itd emphasize more the fast sounds before the last k
*- 00:21:165 -/- 00:21:327 – add d? to make this spot more similar to 00:26:354 (65,66,67,68) -, there are kinda the same
*- 00:34:463 (84) – move to - 00:34:463 -,- 00:35:760 (87) – move to - 00:35:760 -, remove - 00:37:544 (93) – and add a k at - 00:37:544 - ? about the 2 moves its for consistency with the similar rhythm used earlier, about the last d removal for a k it just sounds/play better to me, I think you should avoid xyX stuff as much as you can
*- then - 00:44:517 – add k here and change - 00:44:841 (116,117,118) – to d kkk or d kdk? Consistency with - 00:39:652 (100,101,102,103) –
*- 00:47:111 -/- 00:47:273 – add d ? better emphasize on the following finisher and to increase the note count
*- 00:52:625 (139,140) – same suggestion I made earlier for the similar spot
*- 00:54:409 -/- 00:55:706 -/- 00:56:354 -/- 00:57:003 – add k and remove - 00:57:490 (151,152) -? The k are for the 1/6 sounds, then that’s a lot of triplets so if you do I suggest to remove the kk after
*- 01:01:706 (161) – unnecessary/play weird with the other d D, id remove it
*- 01:12:084 (8) – move to - 01:11:922 -? You used this rhythm even in the kantan so should probably try to use it here too, same for the other similar spots
*- 01:18:571 – add d? why nothing here but something at - 01:17:273 (24) –
*- 01:19:868 (29) – make it a finisher and remove -01:20:192 (30) – which is pretty much on nothing?
*- 01:26:841 – k? like at - 01:16:463 (22) –
[Muzukashii]
OD5 HP6.5
*- 00:02:354 – you had a k here in the futsuu, id have removed it there but your choice, seems weird to have one there and nothing here anyway
*- 00:07:219 (22) -make this k or make - 00:08:517 (28) – d, chose one for consistency, sounds weird rn
*- 00:25:057 (105) – remove? Consistency with - 00:22:463 –‘s break
*- 00:32:841 (141) -/- 00:35:436 (153) - ^
*- 01:02:192 – D? I still don’t get whats the difference with the other kek
*- 01:12:084 (12) – remove? Consistency with - 01:13:381 -, there is no strong sound at those spot unlike at - 01:14:679 (27) –, also - 01:14:841 (28,29,30) – seems overdone, id only keep the d at the midle to clearly emphasize the special rhythm
*- 01:17:598 (45) – id change this to D just for the sake of color swapping, looks cooler
*- 01:22:463 (70) – refer to 1:12, also - 01:25:544 (87,88,89,90,91) – seems kinda weird again, why don’t you make sometning similar to what you did at the same spot on the first kiai’s half?
[Oni]
*-00:12:895 – add d/- 00:13:544 – add k? those breaks are a bit awkward to me
*- 00:21:084 (118) – remove this and make - 00:21:165 (119,120,121) – a dddk 1/3? Just like at - 00:26:354 (155,156,157,158) -
*- 00:24:571 – add k here and change the 2 following k to d? similarly to how you end the other 5-plets
*- 00:34:949 - ^
*- 00:54:733 – add something here? You’r kinda breaking the speed up feeling there
*- 01:10:219 (2) – remove? Just for simplicity, avoid complicated pattern when they don’t fit the melody that much
*- 01:30:003 (134) – remove? Sounds much better that way, you should hear it yourself
[Inners]
This is more subjectif
*- 00:58:463 – the part following this could’ve a lower SV then the stream(s) before the kiai could increase it back to normal
*- 01:32:192 - ^
*- 00:06:571 – to - 00:10:463 – or - 00:11:760 – perfect spot for a smooth speed up, the whole following part can be used as a smooth slow down to get the SV back to normal
*- 00:53:273 - ^ good spot again for a smooth speed up, the following break puts you back to my first comment
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good luck