Kenterz9 wrote:

Hello =3

Take this SB (」・ω・)」http://puu.sh/82pnj.osb (.osb file)

1. It seems there are elements in the storyboard that are scripted but the files aren't in the download, I would talk to the storyboarder and see what's up with that http://puu.sh/82Owz.png
2. I'd recommend a 10% increase in hitsounds overall, I understand that you want them to be quiet but remember that hitsounds are there to provide feedback to the player, and when they're so quiet all the time it's hard to get that feedback.

1. 00:06:821 (1,2,3) - the pattern here could look a bit nicer, try moving 1 to x172 y92 and 2 to x420 y192, will look like this
   
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2. 00:48:561 (1,2) - try a pattern like this? would flow a bit better
   
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1. I think you could use claps a little more consistently like you did in the normal, if you're going to place them on the third beat of a measure like 00:04:734 (3) - , then why not do it for both measures and put one on the end of 00:02:648 (1) - as well? can go through the whole map like this, just an idea
2. 00:08:908 (3,4) - a few more whistles would fit well, tail of 3 and head of 4 perhaps?
3. 00:42:300 (3,4) - same as before

1. nice

1. 00:04:734 (1) - I'd move the whistle from the head to the tail
2. 00:08:908 (1) - try a whistle on the end?

1. 00:06:300 (4) - is this supposed to be a blanket? might want to make it clearer if it is or not, since right now it just looks like a messy blanket
2. 00:26:648 (3,4) - the fact that you increase spacing here with the melody is cool, but they don't flow well into 00:27:691 (1,2,3) - after.
3. 00:29:778 (1,2,3) - placement here looks odd, since 3 does not flow well with the rest of the combo, where it did at 00:27:691 (1,2,3) - right before. Might want to see what you can do about this

1. 00:39:169 (3) - missed whistle?

1. 00:08:387 (4,1) - since this is basically consistent for the whole map i'll just leave as a suggestion, I think it would be much nicer if you increased the spacing between these two notes a lot, since they're both sliders the motion will still be smooth to play and it will accent the high point in the melody
2. 00:28:995 (2) - note is a bit tricky to read even nomod, I can only imagine that it'll be even more frustrating to play with hd

• nice

1. 00:28:734 (5) - were you going for an equal triangle here? x408 y32 if you were (perhaps move 00:27:952 (2) - so it's centered again if you do)
2. 00:42:300 (1,3) - if you drag 00:43:343 (3) - to 00:42:952 - you will be able to do the blanket for this a bit better

• 00:27:691 - it seems like in this section you were doing whistles on every beat but missed a couple? or if you're intentionally skipping some i would create a pattern with it, like beats 1, 3, and 4 have whistles and 2 does not, since at the moment it's inconsistent

captin1 wrote:

overall won't say much since this is so opposite from my style. having the higher spacing between circles rather than sliders doesn't make sense to me at all, but if this is how you wish to map it then that's fine.

captin1 wrote:

hi

[General]

1. It seems there are elements in the storyboard that are scripted but the files aren't in the download, I would talk to the storyboarder and see what's up with that http://puu.sh/82Owz.png Huh, I will ask Kenterz about it
2. I'd recommend a 10% increase in hitsounds overall, I understand that you want them to be quiet but remember that hitsounds are there to provide feedback to the player, and when they're so quiet all the time it's hard to get that feedback.

Yes

[Easy]
Placement/Rhythm/Nazi Patterning

1. 00:06:821 (1,2,3) - the pattern here could look a bit nicer, try moving 1 to x172 y92 and 2 to x420 y192, will look like this
   
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   Yes
2. 00:48:561 (1,2) - try a pattern like this? would flow a bit better Yes
   
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Hitsounding

1. I think you could use claps a little more consistently like you did in the normal, if you're going to place them on the third beat of a measure like 00:04:734 (3) - , then why not do it for both measures and put one on the end of 00:02:648 (1) - as well? can go through the whole map like this, just an idea
2. 00:08:908 (3,4) - a few more whistles would fit well, tail of 3 and head of 4 perhaps?
3. 00:42:300 (3,4) - same as before

I don't want so many whistles in the easy, sorry.

[Normal]
Placement/Rhythm/Nazi Patterning

1. nice

Hitsounding

1. 00:04:734 (1) - I'd move the whistle from the head to the tail
2. 00:08:908 (1) - try a whistle on the end?

I don't wnat so many whistles ;w; And the first ones fit the pattern of hitsounding

[Hard]
Placement/Rhythm/Nazi Patterning

1. 00:06:300 (4) - is this supposed to be a blanket? might want to make it clearer if it is or not, since right now it just looks like a messy blanket Yes
2. 00:26:648 (3,4) - the fact that you increase spacing here with the melody is cool, but they don't flow well into 00:27:691 (1,2,3) - after. I think the flow is good ;w; Sorry I can't explain why
3. 00:29:778 (1,2,3) - placement here looks odd, since 3 does not flow well with the rest of the combo, where it did at 00:27:691 (1,2,3) - right before. Might want to see what you can do about this

I don't see a problem with it

Hitsounding

1. 00:39:169 (3) - missed whistle?

Yes

[Insane]
Placement/Rhythm/Nazi Patterning

1. 00:08:387 (4,1) - since this is basically consistent for the whole map i'll just leave as a suggestion, I think it would be much nicer if you increased the spacing between these two notes a lot, since they're both sliders the motion will still be smooth to play and it will accent the high point in the melody I think the flow is good, and it fits, as I actually never used high spacing between these sliders
2. 00:28:995 (2) - note is a bit tricky to read even nomod, I can only imagine that it'll be even more frustrating to play with hd

It's not tricky, even on hidden o: And also, I don't make a map for hidden. Many maps got those stacks.
overall won't say much since this is so opposite from my style. having the higher spacing between circles rather than sliders doesn't make sense to me at all, but if this is how you wish to map it then that's fine. <- Already commented on that

Hitsounding

• nice

certainly an interesting concept for a map, and small circles do fit the map well
good luck!

1. 00:06:821 (1) - bend little more will be nice like
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2. Nice Job~

1. I think CS3 is better to spread Difficulties but maybe can't change now
2. 00:40:213 (1) - i think this slider doesn't look that good i recommend this one
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1. 00:06:821 (1) - make like this will be better shape
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2. 00:48:561 (1,2) - bend little more will be nice
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3. 00:36:039 (1) - move slider's end point to 416,120 and move slider's 3rd point to 392, 160 looks nice~

1. 00:02:648 (1) - i think this shape looks nicer
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Neta wrote:

mod from PM req

[Easy]

1. 00:06:821 (1) - bend little more will be nice like Uhhh but it messes up the curve completely
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2. Nice Job~

[Normal]

1. I think CS3 is better to spread Difficulties but maybe can't change now CS4 fits the spread better imo
2. 00:40:213 (1) - i think this slider doesn't look that good i recommend this one Sorry, I'd like to keep this shape, nothing wrong with it
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[Hard]

1. 00:06:821 (1) - make like this will be better shape Messep up curve... I doN't like this
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2. 00:48:561 (1,2) - bend little more will be nice ^
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3. 00:36:039 (1) - move slider's end point to 416,120 and move slider's 3rd point to 392, 160 looks nice~ ^

[insane]

1. 00:02:648 (1) - i think this shape looks nicer I can't see why I should change it ;w;
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Nice Map!

No big problems

my mod is all suggestion just fix what you want

Star~ and GL

Irreversible wrote:

[SB]

Das erste Bild bewegt sich echt schnell, willst du es nicht ein wenig mehr von rechts nach links moven (und langsamer) anstatt so schnell von oben nach unten?
00:27:952 - Dieses rote Bild könnte ein bisschen mehr zum Gong passen, aka es sollte langsamer ausfaden.
00:44:908 - Den Übergang kriegste bestimmt besser hin.


La première image se déplace très vite, tu veux qu'il ne bouge pas un peu plus de droite à gauche (et plus lent) au lieu de le plus rapidement de haut en bas?
00:27:952 - Cette image rouge pourrait être un peu plus approprié pour le gong, ce qui signifie qu'il devrait disparaître lentement.
00:44:908 - la transition que vous avez déterminé à aller mieux.

Google translater. Lol

[Easy]

00:23:517 (1) - Blanket Yes

..naja, ok? xD 00:09:952 (4) - Das einzige was ich noch erwähnen könnte wäre das hier, weil der flow hier ein wenig doof ist, der Slider pointed nach unten, der andere Slider ist oben, du kennst es ja.

[Normal]

00:21:430 (1) - Wie wärs mit ner schöneren Kurve oder was ausgefallenerem? Aber das ist doch nur ein S-Slider ;w; Was ist daran verwerflich
00:29:778 (1) - Naja, auch wieder nkomisches Shape, machs symmetrisch oder so ;w; ._.
00:45:169 (2) - Blanket Ok

Die Slidershapes gefallen mir nicht so, würden schöner gehen. Rest ist ok. ;w;

[Hard]

00:15:430 (2) - Wie wärs mit irgendwo wie.. 428 48 fürn bessren flow? (Ist nicht die beste Stelle, aber du solltest sehen was ich mein) Jo
00:18:300 (3) - Willst du die heavy beats echt ignoireren? Jap, mappe hier nur das eine Instrument und nich das andere ;w;
00:23:517 (1,2,3) - Nschöneres Pattern geht bestimmt, wow.. dat useful mods today xD Naja, eigentlich würd ich hier 00:24:561 - Circles machen anstatt den grossen Slider. http://puu.sh/8wsUI/8107dda4cd.jpg Iwie so.. Sorry, mir gefällt der Pattern ._.

[Insane]

..SV ist meiner Meinung nach viel zu hoch, das Feeling vom Song geht damit echt flöten. Wie auch immer D: AR 7. Ja, hast irgendwie recht. Naja, ich lass die diff drin, für die leute, denen es gefällt. Auf DT is es schon wieder was anderes, finde ich. Gibt ja auch noch ne Insane o:

00:19:343 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Eigentlich gute Idee, allerdings gehts immer im Kreis, etwas langweilig oder? Versuch ein paar Directionchange pro Pattern reinzukriegen. Aber danach kommen doch changes ;w; Ich wollte nicht den Flow zerstören, vorallem wegen CS5 war mir das zu riskant
00:26:648 (1,2,3,4) - Und das sieht einfach Random aus im Vergleich zum Rest. Fixed

Tut mir leid, der Mod ist echt fürn Arsch xD Es gibt zum einen nicht viel zu sagen, aber es überzeugt mich noch nicht wirklich - liegt aber eher am Song, nicht an der Map, deswegen passts Die Maps sind nicht schlecht. Danke <33

Viel Glück, star4u! Wenn du kein Glück hast mit BATs finden kannst du mich dann rufen.

Irreversible wrote:

[SB]

Das erste Bild bewegt sich echt schnell, willst du es nicht ein wenig mehr von rechts nach links moven (und langsamer) anstatt so schnell von oben nach unten?
00:27:952 - Dieses rote Bild könnte ein bisschen mehr zum Gong passen, aka es sollte langsamer ausfaden.
00:44:908 - Den Übergang kriegste bestimmt besser hin.


La première image se déplace très vite, tu veux qu'il ne bouge pas un peu plus de droite à gauche (et plus lent) au lieu de le plus rapidement de haut en bas? I think you're right
00:27:952 - Cette image rouge pourrait être un peu plus approprié pour le gong, ce qui signifie qu'il devrait disparaître lentement. Okey
00:44:908 - la transition que vous avez déterminé à aller mieux. Strange sentence, but I understand. Fixed

Google translater.

1. With that SB I had an idea that maybe you like: Add a new red combo colour and force the colour of combos when the bg of the sb turns on red (00:10:995, 00:27:691 and 00:44:387). You can try with this example of the easy diff: http://puu.sh/8EHoA.osu
   
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2. The combo colours are so similars now (1 with 3, 2 with 4), maybe remove one and make another more light or dark, idk.
3. Maybe considers add a spinner at the end to vary the score.

1. 00:27:691 (1) - This slider shape would look more smooth if you remove the red control point and move the white one downwards until the slider restore its shape.
   
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2. 00:29:778 (2) - Same.
3. 00:50:648 (3) - Add finish at the end, I think it fits properly with the sound of the track. If you add then go and fix this in all diffs.

1. Considers increasing the AR and OD +1 since this is a hard diff. Now the AR is kinda slow.
2. 00:26:648 (3) - A) Add a new combo here. B) Move the previous slider to make a sequence of jumps.

1. 00:26:126 (2) - I think this would work better if you invert the start of the slider (ctrl+g), if you add, then the sliders would be consistent with the others. (Jumps: 00:27:691 (1,2), 00:29:778 (1,2), 00:31:865 (1,2) etc)

Kenezz wrote:

Heey / Hi :3

[General]

1. With that SB I had an idea that maybe you like: Add a new red combo colour and force the colour of combos when the bg of the sb turns on red (00:10:995, 00:27:691 and 00:44:387). You can try with this example of the easy diff: http://puu.sh/8EHoA.osu Done in all diffs ^^
   
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2. The combo colours are so similars now (1 with 3, 2 with 4), maybe remove one and make another more light or dark, idk. I dunno, I think I like it how similar they are ;w; I think the calm song doesn't need many different combo colours.
3. Maybe considers add a spinner at the end to vary the score.

I tried it, but it sounds not good ;w; In my opinion, spinners don't fit so well for fade-outs, even when you lower the volume

[Easy]

1. 00:27:691 (1) - This slider shape would look more smooth if you remove the red control point and move the white one downwards until the slider restore its shape. Nice, done ^^
   
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2. 00:29:778 (2) - Same. ^
3. 00:50:648 (3) - Add finish at the end, I think it fits properly with the sound of the track. If you add then go and fix this in all diffs. No. I only used finishes for special sounds in the music, which is not there. And also, I think the end is too calm to add a finish of another sampleset

[Hard]

1. Considers increasing the AR and OD +1 since this is a hard diff. Now the AR is kinda slow. It fits the diff spread, as both Insanes have AR7. I don't want the hard to have the same AR a the Insane diffs. Then, the OD, I think it fits to the AR so no change here
2. 00:26:648 (3) - A) Add a new combo here. B) Move the previous slider to make a sequence of jumps. Added NC. I once had a different placement of these similar to yours, but I prefer my new one now.

[Insane]

1. 00:26:126 (2) - I think this would work better if you invert the start of the slider (ctrl+g), if you add, then the sliders would be consistent with the others. (Jumps: 00:27:691 (1,2), 00:29:778 (1,2), 00:31:865 (1,2) etc) Done

Very short mod, very short map lol
Okay, that's all from me. Hope this can help you. Very tidy mapset btw
The m4m is done~

Secretpipe wrote:

Star for you /O/

1. 00:04:734 (3) - I think this whole pattern would look a bit better if you would move this to x:268 y:264, kinda helps it become a better circle in a way. http://puu.sh/99iX2/3d5e472e7a.jpg
2. 00:21:430 (2,1) - Small improvements in the blanket would be nice~ http://puu.sh/99j1a/598a1042f2.jpg
3. 00:29:778 (1) - Is this NC really that necessary? I mean it doesn't feel like that. I'd just remove the combo from 00:31:865 (1) -

1. 00:19:343 (1) - I think this slider could use some improvements, the red point makes it kind of awkward, might be just me though. http://puu.sh/99jqA/9154ca36b1.jpg So in this picture I made a slider that is pretty casual, has the blankety effect going on there and now the wave slider blankets with 2 too, so it makes sense! Idk, use it if you like.
2. 00:29:778 (1) - Looks kind of funny because it's unbalanced, can you make it like 00:23:517 (1) - ? Or like this: http://puu.sh/99jAq/22608ad564.jpg

1. 00:05:778 (3,4) - I dislike this because they are so close to each other, usually people blanket these or move them a bit further away, this is an example how I would prefer to see them; http://puu.sh/99jJr/3e2eb4a4d8.jpg
2. 00:17:256 (1) - You can blanket it with 00:17:778 (2) - in order to make this better, see this example; http://puu.sh/99jOn/680b72e59d.jpg And now since you curved 2 to the opposite direction, move 00:18:300 (3) - more to the right so the transition is better.
3. 00:29:517 (4,1,2) - Kind of disappointed that you guys didn't do a nice circle / star / square pattern with these notes, oh well, here's an example still; http://puu.sh/99jWv/903d8451ef.jpg Would look better imo
4. 00:32:387 (2) - Curving it could be a possibility in order to make it look more clean, see this; http://puu.sh/99k0G/a0c8dd9c0c.jpg

Asphyxia wrote:

Sorry for the delay.

[Easy]

1. 00:04:734 (3) - I think this whole pattern would look a bit better if you would move this to x:268 y:264, kinda helps it become a better circle in a way. Ok http://puu.sh/99iX2/3d5e472e7a.jpg
2. 00:21:430 (2,1) - Small improvements in the blanket would be nice~ http://puu.sh/99j1a/598a1042f2.jpg Sorry, I don't really see a difference
3. 00:29:778 (1) - Is this NC really that necessary? I mean it doesn't feel like that. I'd just remove the combo from 00:31:865 (1) - Yes it is. Because the red combo colour is used when the storyboard turns red and that slider isn't part of the red section

[Normal]

1. 00:19:343 (1) - I think this slider could use some improvements, the red point makes it kind of awkward, might be just me though. http://puu.sh/99jqA/9154ca36b1.jpg So in this picture I made a slider that is pretty casual, has the blankety effect going on there and now the wave slider blankets with 2 too, so it makes sense! Idk, use it if you like. I changed it, but I just used a curved slider instead
2. 00:29:778 (1) - Looks kind of funny because it's unbalanced, can you make it like 00:23:517 (1) - ? Or like this: I changed ithttp://puu.sh/99jAq/22608ad564.jpg

[Hard]

1. 00:05:778 (3,4) - I dislike this because they are so close to each other, usually people blanket these or move them a bit further away, this is an example how I would prefer to see them; http://puu.sh/99jJr/3e2eb4a4d8.jpg I really like this, so I'll keep it ;w;
2. 00:17:256 (1) - You can blanket it with 00:17:778 (2) - in order to make this better, see this example; http://puu.sh/99jOn/680b72e59d.jpg And now since you curved 2 to the opposite direction, move 00:18:300 (3) - more to the right so the transition is better. I'm not sure, but I'd like to keep it since it fits the style of the map and I wanted to reuse the straight slider from before
3. 00:29:517 (4,1,2) - Kind of disappointed that you guys didn't do a nice circle / star / square pattern with these notes, oh well, here's an example still; http://puu.sh/99jWv/903d8451ef.jpg Would look better imo Hmm sorry I didn't use any patterns like these in this mapset so it wouldn't really fit into it imo. Also, circle reusing
4. 00:32:387 (2) - Curving it could be a possibility in order to make it look more clean, see this; http://puu.sh/99k0G/a0c8dd9c0c.jpg Fixed, but in a different way then in your screenie

Insane looks good, so does Mao's, although for Mao's difficulty there are room to improve, because some slider shapes like 00:34:995 (4) - and 00:36:039 (1) - are not that appealing. Just by making it more curvy or moving the red point could improve them so much. Also the transitions at 00:16:734 (6,1) - , 00:18:300 (4,5) - and 00:18:821 (5,1) - for example weren't the best but that's fine. Nice map overall. I guess you can call me back~

Asphyxia wrote:

Re-bubbled~

Asphyxia wrote:

Mapper wanted to change something so yeah. ~

Irreversible wrote:

gz

gokugohan12468 wrote:

Gratzz!! Mao and Desperate-kun!

Wait, how are you know Artist is Hatsuki Yura?

I want delete my map & change artist is Roses Epicurean (Is insturmental not Singing)

https://osu.ppy.sh/s/92315

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