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James2250
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James2250
Modding as requested, will have to be in English though :P

[General]
Everything seems to check out nicely.

[Normal]
A nice difficulty for a Normal but I think this is pushing it for the easiest difficulty of the mapset (especially with 2 fairly hard Insane difficulties). I would turn the HP down by at least 1 and the AR down by 1-2. For a fast song it has quite a lot of continuous parts without any breaks which I wouldn't expect for the easiest difficulty. Other opinions needed here I guess. The map itself is well done though.

[Hard]
00:41:534 (3,4) - odd place for a spacing change
00:48:201 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - soft part in the music, might as well keep the spacing the same between these (especially as the next combo keeps the same spacing and it's the same style)
00:48:534 (2) - I would expect the new combo here to match the lyrics
01:46:867 (5,6) - jump here isn't needed in my opinion and music doesn't call for it
01:49:534 (1,2) - ^

[Insane]
00:03:534 (1) - extend to 00:04:201 to match the others before?
00:31:867 (8) - could be hard for people to see the slider repeats with all of the other notes around it
00:55:867 (3,4,5) - why a jump here? No change in the music and and it stays peaceful sounding

[Yuki]
00:22:201 - Kiai time isn't needed here in my opinion and it isn't as dramatic as later on in the music
00:33:868 (4,1) - I would either stack these or move them further away, it is just strange to see it so close after a stack
00:59:201 (7) - add clap to the start to match the pattern
01:07:201 (1) - new combo isn't really needed
01:29:868 (4) - clap?
01:45:701 (3) - clap at the end (I am guessing these are on purpose but it sounds strange to suddenly stop at certain points when the rest follows it exactly)

Some well done maps but I think the main problem right now is getting the overall difficulty spread looking a little better , have to be nice to beginners here. A few too many jumps done just to follow patterns which I usually think is a bad idea but otherwise a fun mapset to play.
Guy
Former osu! Champion: 2014
2,049 posts
Joined March 2009
Guy
Hi! from my queue :3

Red : You must be fix.
Blue : You should be fix.
Black : Just suggestion.


[General]
  1. Audio Lead-in too long. it is enough to 1500.

[Insane]
  1. 00:04:367 (2,3) - remove whistle? it is weird cuz that part is very quiet.
  2. 00:05:201 (2) - remove whistle of the slider start. same comment above.
  3. 00:19:534 (3) - add whistle of the slider start. i can hear the piano sound, also fitting the vocal imo.
  4. 00:21:701 (1) - i suggest add finish of the slider end. really fit the song imo.
  5. 01:12:867 (1) - add finish please.
  6. 01:13:201 (5) - move to 1 grid left.
  7. 01:13:534 (6) - add clap of the slider start. drum sound here. like a 01:15:867 (2) -
  8. 01:16:201 (3) - so, add clap of the slider end.
  9. 01:16:534 (4) - hmm, add finish instead of the clap.
  10. 01:17:534 (3) - add clap of the slider start.
  11. 01:17:867 (4) - finish is really fit here. ofcourse it is slider start.
  12. 01:18:534 (1) - i think that add clap from the your pattern ?
  13. 01:28:201 (3) - add finish of the slider start.
  14. 01:28:867 (1) - ^
  15. 01:30:701 (8) - remove clap?
  16. 01:38:867 (1) - add finish of the slider start.
  17. 01:39:534 (4) - ^
  18. 01:57:034 (7) - like this?


    clap many wanted more of the Kiai-time.
    for example,
    01:23:867 -
    01:24:534 -
    01:25:201 -
    01:25:867 -
    01:26:534 - and so on. (like a Yuki's diff)

    but well done. nice diff.

[Yuki]
  1. 00:00:867 - 5% volume is too low. it is issue to confuse of players. i suggest a bit up the volume.
  2. 00:29:534 (3) - add finish of the slider start.
  3. 00:59:201 (7) - you forgot add clap of the slider start?
  4. 01:02:201 (1) - add finish
  5. 01:04:868 (1) - ^
  6. 01:29:868 (4) - add clap plz
  7. 01:45:701 (3) - ^ of the slider end.

    beautiful placement this diff.

[Hard]
  1. 00:14:201 (4) - remove whistle of the slider end. and slider end move to 00:14:867 - ?
  2. 00:20:867 (1) - add finish
  3. 00:24:867 - a bit loud the volume. clap is noisy when the song like this quiet.

[Normal]
  1. 00:01:534 (2) - if you follow the vocal, slider end is 00:02:034 - better. (like a 00:12:201 (2) - )
Good luck :)
Koiyuki
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Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

10crystalmask01 wrote:

[Yuki]
00:35:868 (1) - Add finish
00:46:201 (1) - ^ On the head.
01:02:201 (1) - ^
01:04:868 (1) - ^
01:16:534 (3) - Soft finish on the head.[/notice]
ALL FIXED, THANKS

James2250 wrote:

[Yuki]
00:22:201 - Kiai time isn't needed here in my opinion and it isn't as dramatic as later on in the music Rhythm start here so I add it.
OTHERS ALL FIXED,THANKS~
00:33:868 (4,1) - I would either stack these or move them further away, it is just strange to see it so close after a stack
00:59:201 (7) - add clap to the start to match the pattern
01:07:201 (1) - new combo isn't really needed
01:29:868 (4) - clap?
01:45:701 (3) - clap at the end (I am guessing these are on purpose but it sounds strange to suddenly stop at certain points when the rest follows it exactly)

Some well done maps but I think the main problem right now is getting the overall difficulty spread looking a little better , have to be nice to beginners here. A few too many jumps done just to follow patterns which I usually think is a bad idea but otherwise a fun mapset to play.

Guy wrote:

[Yuki]
  1. 00:00:867 - 5% volume is too low. it is issue to confuse of players. i suggest a bit up the volume.
  2. 00:29:534 (3) - add finish of the slider start.
  3. 00:59:201 (7) - you forgot add clap of the slider start?
  4. 01:02:201 (1) - add finish
  5. 01:04:868 (1) - ^
  6. 01:29:868 (4) - add clap plz
  7. 01:45:701 (3) - ^ of the slider end.

beautiful placement this diff. THANK YOU~ALL FIXED~
Aeonian Sonder
974 posts
Joined May 2012
Aeonian Sonder
[Gerenal for insanes]
00:40:867 to 00:41:117 - Have you every thought about reducing the volume of the hitsounds?
EX:
00:40:867 - VOL: 70%
00:40:951 - VOL: 55%
00:41:034 - VOL: 40%
00:41:117 - VOL: 25%

[Insane]
I absolutely love it! It's so fun to play!!
00:57:534 (3,4,5,6) - Try muting the ends of these sliders

[Yuki]
00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - Well, uh...Don't over do it...

Sorry, that's all I had time for. I need to eat dinner. I still owe you 2 mods~ :D
Kytoxid
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Kytoxid
Heya! :D Forgive me if I butcher any of my Chinese, haven't typed anything serious for a while. From PM request (for diffs Hard-Yuki).

[Hard]

用tick rate 2感觉的好一些,特别是在1/2上开始的slider (e.g. [Hard] 00:04:701 (5))。

01:09:701 - 加个circle? 这样flow的好一点。
01:41:534 (3,1) - 3最好不要完全盖住1的tail, 有的skin会看不出来有没有repeat.
01:50:201 (3) - 01:47:534里没有circle,所以我觉得这里也应该没有。
01:55:534 (1) - 用这里当head,改成1/1的slider?

玩的不错，跟音乐挺紧。

[Insane]

AR9觉的有点快,特别是开头的那个部分。用AR8试试？

00:24:034 (1) - circle比slider好一点。
00:31:867 (8) - 用4个circle,或者减去一个repeat & 把9放的远一点。
00:42:367 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - flow有点迷糊。改改位置？
00:55:867 (3,4,5) - 4-5的jump不是很自然。
01:20:867 (1) - 这里音乐比较轻,这些jump的fit不是很好
01:23:534 (1) - 这里可以加几个jump!

没有大问题，但是跟hard的难度差别有点高。

[Yuki]

分数比Insane低，但是难度比它高。。。
这里AR9也是有点快。

00:22:201 (1,2,3) - 我不是很喜欢这个pattern,但不是大的问题
00:43:534 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 这里有点乱。
01:07:534 - 这个section的hitsound太低，快要听不见了
01:30:868 (3,4,5) - 1/4 jump?
01:41:201 (2) - 这个slider看不出来，藏在hitburst下面了

玩不了这个map，太难了XD

总共来说都不错, star~
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

-APXH wrote:

[Yuki]
00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - Well, uh...Don't over do it... ( ´ ▽ ` )ﾉ

Kytoxid wrote:

[Yuki]

分数比Insane低，但是难度比它高。。。 这是2nd insane，同样是insane =.=而且不是一个作者啊！
这里AR9也是有点快。 ar8完全不能玩

00:22:201 (1,2,3) - 我不是很喜欢这个pattern,但不是大的问题
00:43:534 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 这里有点乱。 不乱，就是往返梗，最后一个改个方向坑人一把
01:07:534 - 这个section的hitsound太低，快要听不见了 低么0 0
01:30:868 (3,4,5) - 1/4 jump? 滑条判定松，其实很容易接上
01:41:201 (2) - 这个slider看不出来，藏在hitburst下面了 :>
smallboat
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Joined January 2010
Topic Starter
smallboat
James2250

James2250 wrote:

Modding as requested, will have to be in English though :P OKAY, Thanks "LINK"! :)

[General]
Everything seems to check out nicely. OKAY

[Normal]
A nice difficulty for a Normal but I think this is pushing it for the easiest difficulty of the mapset (especially with 2 fairly hard Insane difficulties). I would turn the HP down by at least 1 and the AR down by 1-2. For a fast song it has quite a lot of continuous parts without any breaks which I wouldn't expect for the easiest difficulty. Other opinions needed here I guess. The map itself is well done though. Well , I reduce HP-1, and have a little break.

[Hard]
00:41:534 (3,4) - odd place for a spacing change fixed
00:48:201 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - soft part in the music, might as well keep the spacing the same between these (especially as the next combo keeps the same spacing and it's the same style) fixed
00:48:534 (2) - I would expect the new combo here to match the lyrics fixed
01:46:867 (5,6) - jump here isn't needed in my opinion and music doesn't call for it fixed
01:49:534 (1,2) - ^ fixed

[Insane]
00:03:534 (1) - extend to 00:04:201 to match the others before? fixed
00:31:867 (8) - could be hard for people to see the slider repeats with all of the other notes around it fixed
00:55:867 (3,4,5) - why a jump here? No change in the music and and it stays peaceful sounding fixed

[Yuki]
00:22:201 - Kiai time isn't needed here in my opinion and it isn't as dramatic as later on in the music
00:33:868 (4,1) - I would either stack these or move them further away, it is just strange to see it so close after a stack
00:59:201 (7) - add clap to the start to match the pattern
01:07:201 (1) - new combo isn't really needed
01:29:868 (4) - clap?
01:45:701 (3) - clap at the end (I am guessing these are on purpose but it sounds strange to suddenly stop at certain points when the rest follows it exactly)

Some well done maps but I think the main problem right now is getting the overall difficulty spread looking a little better , have to be nice to beginners here. A few too many jumps done just to follow patterns which I usually think is a bad idea but otherwise a fun mapset to play.Okay, I try it!
Thanks James2250 mod my map in free time !


Guy

Guy wrote:

Hi! from my queue :3

Red : You must be fix.
Blue : You should be fix.
Black : Just suggestion.


[General]
  1. Audio Lead-in too long. it is enough to 1500.
fixed


[Insane]
  1. 00:04:367 (2,3) - remove whistle? it is weird cuz that part is very quiet.
  2. 00:05:201 (2) - remove whistle of the slider start. same comment above.
  3. 00:19:534 (3) - add whistle of the slider start. i can hear the piano sound, also fitting the vocal imo.
  4. 00:21:701 (1) - i suggest add finish of the slider end. really fit the song imo.
  5. 01:12:867 (1) - add finish please.
  6. 01:13:201 (5) - move to 1 grid left.
  7. 01:13:534 (6) - add clap of the slider start. drum sound here. like a 01:15:867 (2) -
  8. 01:16:201 (3) - so, add clap of the slider end.
  9. 01:16:534 (4) - hmm, add finish instead of the clap.
  10. 01:17:534 (3) - add clap of the slider start.
  11. 01:17:867 (4) - finish is really fit here. ofcourse it is slider start.
  12. 01:18:534 (1) - i think that add clap from the your pattern ?
  13. 01:28:201 (3) - add finish of the slider start.
  14. 01:28:867 (1) - ^
  15. 01:30:701 (8) - remove clap?
  16. 01:38:867 (1) - add finish of the slider start.
  17. 01:39:534 (4) - ^
  18. 01:57:034 (7) - like this?


    clap many wanted more of the Kiai-time.
    for example,
    01:23:867 -
    01:24:534 -
    01:25:201 -
    01:25:867 -
    01:26:534 - and so on. (like a Yuki's diff) Okay

    but well done. nice diff.Thanks Guy :)
Almost fixed

[Yuki]
  1. 00:00:867 - 5% volume is too low. it is issue to confuse of players. i suggest a bit up the volume.
  2. 00:29:534 (3) - add finish of the slider start.
  3. 00:59:201 (7) - you forgot add clap of the slider start?
  4. 01:02:201 (1) - add finish
  5. 01:04:868 (1) - ^
  6. 01:29:868 (4) - add clap plz
  7. 01:45:701 (3) - ^ of the slider end.

    beautiful placement this diff.

[Hard]
  1. 00:14:201 (4) - remove whistle of the slider end. and slider end move to 00:14:867 - ? fixed
  2. 00:20:867 (1) - add finish fixed
  3. 00:24:867 - a bit loud the volume. clap is noisy when the song like this quiet. fixed

[Normal]
  1. 00:01:534 (2) - if you follow the vocal, slider end is 00:02:034 - better. (like a 00:12:201 (2) - ) fixed
Good luck :)
Thanks Guy ! Good Luck ,too. :)



-APXH

-APXH wrote:

[Gerenal for insanes]
00:40:867 to 00:41:117 - Have you every thought about reducing the volume of the hitsounds? Good idea , I fixed it!
EX:
00:40:867 - VOL: 70%
00:40:951 - VOL: 55%
00:41:034 - VOL: 40%
00:41:117 - VOL: 25%

[Insane]
I absolutely love it! It's so fun to play!!
00:57:534 (3,4,5,6) - Try muting the ends of these sliders fixed

[Yuki]
00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - Well, uh...Don't over do it...

Sorry, that's all I had time for. I need to eat dinner. I still owe you 2 mods~ :D Nothing,nevermind!
Thanks -APXH mod !
riffy
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Joined December 2010
riffy
Yo, just a quick look at the map!

as you requested, only your diffs

[General]
  1. The gray combo colour may confuse player. You get exactly the same colour if you fail a song in multiplayer
  2. Slider Tick Rate 2 sounds really strange in the beginning of the map.
  3. Hitsounds are a little bit too noisy, imo. Maybe it's just me, tho.
[Normal]
Diff itsef feels pretty nice. Some things have bugged me a lot, tho.
00:22:201 - well, I would map this beat. It's loud and quite important. It feels quite weird when you ignore it :<
00:35:034 - 01:44:367 - 01:44:367 - HP4 and map vocals there. It'll feel much better, imo.
01:27:534 (3,4,1,2,1,2) - seriously, it looks way too messy for the easiest diff and it's also out of your pattern.
01:57:367 (3,4,5) - (4) is too close, some players may hit it before hitting (3). Try to avoid such things on the easiest diff

Diff isn't bad, but comboing seems to be a bit inconsistent and flow is a bit strange sometimes. However, it's sitill a pretty good diff.

[Hard]
Pretty nice one, too.
OD/HP + 1 to make diff settings more balanced. You should also remember, that it's a [Hard] diff and it's supposed to be hard!

Your rhythm is fine, but there're actually two things that should be imporved. Visual appearance of the map and comboing. Patterns are a bit messy, just work on your blankets and things and try to make combos a bit more consistent.
Hint: you can listen to drums/guitar in the background music to make comboing more consistent.

[Insane]
Seems to be fine, but same mistakes. Patterns aren't really neat and you can improve it and comboing ;__; Also, try to check your rhythm, some notes are a bit overmapped.

Well, it's just some common mistakes. Try to fix them when you get some free time!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The map is okay, but it could be much better, try to work on it a bit more!

Note: THIS IS NOT A MODPOST, IT'S JUST SOME GENERAL SUGGESTIONS AFTER A TESTPLAY
Aeonian Sonder
974 posts
Joined May 2012
Aeonian Sonder
[General for every difficulty except for guest]
00:05:867 - I don't think that a volume increase is need here. The sound just switches sides that's it.

[Yuki]
Since I didn't have time last time. I forgot to put in this comment:
There's alot of mapping to uses the location of previous combos, which I call in my terms "History Mapping" or "Referencing"

00:57:534 (3) - Resnap
00:58:201 (1,2) - Not a good idea to put these two there just after the slider ended
00:58:534 (3) - Resnap
01:07:534 (1,2,3) - Place these circles more apart. It's confusing

[Insane]
00:56:887 - Resnap timing point
01:50:201 to 01:50:451 - You should do the same thing with the reduced volume with every hitsounds that I asked you to do in the first mod. I forgot to mention that.

[Hard]
AR is a bit slow
01:40:701 (3) - Resnap
01:41:534 (3) - Same as above
01:53:201 (1) - Sudden new combo

[Normal]
Can't really say much since I not one who specializes in Easy maps. I specialize in Insane maps...
01:23:534 (1) - Both ends have clap on them
01:58:034 (5) - Might as well most it up since they're all equal distance
Aeonian Sonder
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Joined May 2012
Aeonian Sonder

[Minakami Yuki] wrote:

-APXH wrote:

[Yuki]
00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - Well, uh...Don't over do it... ( ´ ▽ ` )ﾉ
My idea is that you should do 00:22:201 (1,2,3) once, then reflect it. Or something like it. Read my newest mod to read my I'm saying thing.
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

-APXH wrote:

[Yuki]
Since I didn't have time last time. I forgot to put in this comment:
There's alot of mapping to uses the location of previous combos, which I call in my terms "History Mapping" or "Referencing"

00:57:534 (3) - Resnap Where unsnaped?
00:58:201 (1,2) - Not a good idea to put these two there just after the slider ended but fun
00:58:534 (3) - Resnap Where unsnaped as above? If you just mean that I should stack prefectly, that I fixed.
01:07:534 (1,2,3) - Place these circles more apart. It's confusing

-APXH wrote:

My idea is that you should do 00:22:201 (1,2,3) once, then reflect it. Or something like it. Read my newest mod to read my I'm saying thing.
My english is poor so that I can't get what you really want me to fix, but use ctrl+c and ctrl+v and stack notes under the slider(overlap) in my map is my style(you call history mapping?). And I want people to read my maps carefully when they're playing my map. If you can read the map carefully that 01:07:534 (1,2,3) - won't confuse you.

This is an insane map. Previous modder such as quantum-rose and _Kaiser, and Fycho plays my map, they all thinks that's fun, they are glad to play it. That's just what I want. I want to make players happy to play my map.
Lizbeth
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Lizbeth
hihi

[Insane]
00:00:867 - 00:11:534 - lighten this whole section by deleting some circles in red tick. That would give you a soft intro, just like the song
00:27:534 (1,2,3) - I think this is the distance you should have use in the rest of the map, except this part: 00:46:201 -00:56:534 - which is soft, and the distance you use fits well.
If you really decide to change the distance as i suggested, keep in mind the jumps you place are fine, and you should keep them.

[Yuki]
00:17:367 - add circle
00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - this threw me off >~< maybe if you unstack ?
01:09:868 (4,5,6) - this is a bit confusing
01:12:868 (1,2,3) - try to keep jumps in singles combos, so new combo on next slider
01:30:868 (3,4,5) - this spacing is wrong, the distance between the end of 01:30:868 (3) - and 01:31:118 (4) - is too large


[Hard]
01:53:534 (1) - this is too close to prev circle, check timeline

[Normal]
Easier diff needs less than 3.00 difficulty stars, and this have 3.21, try to lighten it a bit, or add an EASY.
there s no technical problems tho

Good luck
Koiyuki
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Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

Lizbeth wrote:

[Yuki]
00:17:367 - add circle before the spin, I follow the vocal. There is no vocal so I don't add circle :>
00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - this threw me off >~< maybe if you unstack ? I think it's fine and fun :>
01:09:868 (4,5,6) - this is a bit confusing (/・ω・＼)Really?
01:12:868 (1,2,3) - try to keep jumps in singles combos, so new combo on next slider I add NC on white line except for some special cases.

Lizbeth wrote:

01:30:868 (3,4,5) - this spacing is wrong, the distance between the end of 01:30:868 (3) - and 01:31:118 (4) - is too large
From http://news.ppy.sh/post/61334266941/mapping-analysis-1-flow
However, the last end of the slider does not need to be hit properly and has an entire area in which it can be left while still having a 300:
I have tested my map and I find it not hard to get 300, so no change

no changes, thanks for modding~
smallboat
1,687 posts
Joined January 2010
Topic Starter
smallboat
James2250

James2250 wrote:

Modding as requested, will have to be in English though :P OKAY, Thanks "LINK"! :)

[General]
Everything seems to check out nicely. OKAY

[Normal]
A nice difficulty for a Normal but I think this is pushing it for the easiest difficulty of the mapset (especially with 2 fairly hard Insane difficulties). I would turn the HP down by at least 1 and the AR down by 1-2. For a fast song it has quite a lot of continuous parts without any breaks which I wouldn't expect for the easiest difficulty. Other opinions needed here I guess. The map itself is well done though. Well , I reduce HP-1, and have a little break.

[Hard]
00:41:534 (3,4) - odd place for a spacing change fixed
00:48:201 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - soft part in the music, might as well keep the spacing the same between these (especially as the next combo keeps the same spacing and it's the same style) fixed
00:48:534 (2) - I would expect the new combo here to match the lyrics fixed
01:46:867 (5,6) - jump here isn't needed in my opinion and music doesn't call for it fixed
01:49:534 (1,2) - ^ fixed

[Insane]
00:03:534 (1) - extend to 00:04:201 to match the others before? fixed
00:31:867 (8) - could be hard for people to see the slider repeats with all of the other notes around it fixed
00:55:867 (3,4,5) - why a jump here? No change in the music and and it stays peaceful sounding fixed

[Yuki]
00:22:201 - Kiai time isn't needed here in my opinion and it isn't as dramatic as later on in the music
00:33:868 (4,1) - I would either stack these or move them further away, it is just strange to see it so close after a stack
00:59:201 (7) - add clap to the start to match the pattern
01:07:201 (1) - new combo isn't really needed
01:29:868 (4) - clap?
01:45:701 (3) - clap at the end (I am guessing these are on purpose but it sounds strange to suddenly stop at certain points when the rest follows it exactly)

Some well done maps but I think the main problem right now is getting the overall difficulty spread looking a little better , have to be nice to beginners here. A few too many jumps done just to follow patterns which I usually think is a bad idea but otherwise a fun mapset to play.Okay, I try it!
Thanks James2250 mod my map in free time !


Guy

Guy wrote:

Hi! from my queue :3

Red : You must be fix.
Blue : You should be fix.
Black : Just suggestion.


[General]
  1. Audio Lead-in too long. it is enough to 1500.
fixed


[Insane]
  1. 00:04:367 (2,3) - remove whistle? it is weird cuz that part is very quiet.
  2. 00:05:201 (2) - remove whistle of the slider start. same comment above.
  3. 00:19:534 (3) - add whistle of the slider start. i can hear the piano sound, also fitting the vocal imo.
  4. 00:21:701 (1) - i suggest add finish of the slider end. really fit the song imo.
  5. 01:12:867 (1) - add finish please.
  6. 01:13:201 (5) - move to 1 grid left.
  7. 01:13:534 (6) - add clap of the slider start. drum sound here. like a 01:15:867 (2) -
  8. 01:16:201 (3) - so, add clap of the slider end.
  9. 01:16:534 (4) - hmm, add finish instead of the clap.
  10. 01:17:534 (3) - add clap of the slider start.
  11. 01:17:867 (4) - finish is really fit here. ofcourse it is slider start.
  12. 01:18:534 (1) - i think that add clap from the your pattern ?
  13. 01:28:201 (3) - add finish of the slider start.
  14. 01:28:867 (1) - ^
  15. 01:30:701 (8) - remove clap?
  16. 01:38:867 (1) - add finish of the slider start.
  17. 01:39:534 (4) - ^
  18. 01:57:034 (7) - like this?


    clap many wanted more of the Kiai-time.
    for example,
    01:23:867 -
    01:24:534 -
    01:25:201 -
    01:25:867 -
    01:26:534 - and so on. (like a Yuki's diff) Okay

    but well done. nice diff.Thanks Guy :)
Almost fixed

[Yuki]
  1. 00:00:867 - 5% volume is too low. it is issue to confuse of players. i suggest a bit up the volume.
  2. 00:29:534 (3) - add finish of the slider start.
  3. 00:59:201 (7) - you forgot add clap of the slider start?
  4. 01:02:201 (1) - add finish
  5. 01:04:868 (1) - ^
  6. 01:29:868 (4) - add clap plz
  7. 01:45:701 (3) - ^ of the slider end.

    beautiful placement this diff.

[Hard]
  1. 00:14:201 (4) - remove whistle of the slider end. and slider end move to 00:14:867 - ? fixed
  2. 00:20:867 (1) - add finish fixed
  3. 00:24:867 - a bit loud the volume. clap is noisy when the song like this quiet. fixed

[Normal]
  1. 00:01:534 (2) - if you follow the vocal, slider end is 00:02:034 - better. (like a 00:12:201 (2) - ) fixed
Good luck :)
Thanks Guy ! Good Luck ,too. :)



-APXH

-APXH wrote:

[Gerenal for insanes]
00:40:867 to 00:41:117 - Have you every thought about reducing the volume of the hitsounds? Good idea , I fixed it!
EX:
00:40:867 - VOL: 70%
00:40:951 - VOL: 55%
00:41:034 - VOL: 40%
00:41:117 - VOL: 25%

[Insane]
I absolutely love it! It's so fun to play!!
00:57:534 (3,4,5,6) - Try muting the ends of these sliders fixed

[Yuki]
00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - Well, uh...Don't over do it...

Sorry, that's all I had time for. I need to eat dinner. I still owe you 2 mods~ :D Nothing,nevermind!
Thanks -APXH mod !

Kytoxid

Kytoxid wrote:

Heya! :D Forgive me if I butcher any of my Chinese, haven't typed anything serious for a while. From PM request (for diffs Hard-Yuki). 沒事 都看得懂! :)

[Hard]

用tick rate 2感觉的好一些,特别是在1/2上开始的slider (e.g. [Hard] 00:04:701 (5))。2喔 考慮下這個1跟2會有爭議

01:09:701 - 加个circle? 这样flow的好一点。 好
01:41:534 (3,1) - 3最好不要完全盖住1的tail, 有的skin会看不出来有没有repeat. 好
01:50:201 (3) - 01:47:534里没有circle,所以我觉得这里也应该没有。 好
01:55:534 (1) - 用这里当head,改成1/1的slider? 不錯

玩的不错，跟音乐挺紧。謝 :)

[Insane]

AR9觉的有点快,特别是开头的那个部分。用AR8试试？ 我考慮 :D 但有一些人說要用9

00:24:034 (1) - circle比slider好一点。 好
00:31:867 (8) - 用4个circle,或者减去一个repeat & 把9放的远一点。 好 是把9放遠了
00:42:367 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - flow有点迷糊。改改位置？ 好
00:55:867 (3,4,5) - 4-5的jump不是很自然。 好
01:20:867 (1) - 这里音乐比较轻,这些jump的fit不是很好 考慮下 因為有人這邊能FC
01:23:534 (1) - 这里可以加几个jump! 好 不錯

没有大问题，但是跟hard的难度差别有点高。 好

[Yuki]

分数比Insane低，但是难度比它高。。。
这里AR9也是有点快。

00:22:201 (1,2,3) - 我不是很喜欢这个pattern,但不是大的问题
00:43:534 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 这里有点乱。
01:07:534 - 这个section的hitsound太低，快要听不见了
01:30:868 (3,4,5) - 1/4 jump?
01:41:201 (2) - 这个slider看不出来，藏在hitburst下面了

玩不了这个map，太难了XD

总共来说都不错, star~
謝謝小K! :)
Rizia
3,114 posts
Joined January 2012
Rizia
[Yuki]
只在以下幾處加clap
00:23:534 -
00:23:701 -
00:24:034 -
00:24:367 -
00:24:534 -
其餘不用加
01:04:201 (3) - 試試尾巴被1蓋著
01:18:868 (1,1) - 可以不用NC
01:28:201 - Finish
01:28:534 (5) - ^
01:37:367 (2) - 237,86
01:38:867 - Finish
01:39:201 - ^

[Insane]
Check AIMod
00:12:201 (2) - NC 00:12:367 (1) - remove nc
00:18:034 (7) - 在00:18:534 - 完

00:45:867 (1) - 可以不NC
01:07:201 (2) - ctrl+G

[Normal]
00:19:534 - 至00:21:868 - 加個SPINNER

其餘不太找到(累了~
sjoy
1,025 posts
Joined April 2012
sjoy
[Insane]
00:11:534 (1) -
可以加个FIN
00:13:367 (1) - 拆成1/2+单点
00:26:867 (3) - ctrl+g
00:35:034 (1) - 去掉一个折返 加一个单点在 336,124看看
00:38:034 (4) - 我建议做成1/1 0.5速度滑条 滑条尾消音感觉不错
00:49:367 加个NOTE？
01:06:201 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 不建议摆串 overmap 3连就差不多了太多感觉不好
01:30:534 (7,8) - 先滑条再单点
01:47:367 (5) - 同00:38:034 (4)
这次作图好多了
[Yuki]
00:20:701 (5) - 上移点
01:27:201 (4) - http://puu.sh/4QLq7.jpg
01:30:868 (3) - 有必要那么坑么 CTRL+g吧

挑不出什么了 射个星好了
完成度挺好的可以RANK了
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

Kawaiwkyik wrote:

[Yuki]
只在以下幾處加clap
00:23:534 -
00:23:701 -
00:24:034 -
00:24:367 -
00:24:534 -
其餘不用加 加了clap觉得好吵，不加惹
01:04:201 (3) - 試試尾巴被1蓋著 ok
01:18:868 (1,1) - 可以不用NC 想想还是用吧=///=
01:28:201 - Finish ok
01:28:534 (5) - ^ 我觉得不需要
01:37:367 (2) - 237,86 还是选了stack 01:35:534 (1) - 的头
01:38:867 - Finish ok
01:39:201 - ^ 同上

sjoy wrote:

[Insane]

[Yuki]
00:20:701 (5) - 上移点 好
01:27:201 (4) - http://puu.sh/4QLq7.jpg 可
01:30:868 (3) - 有必要那么坑么 CTRL+g吧 不干
thanks for modding
blissfulyoshi
osu! Alumni
4,755 posts
Joined July 2008
blissfulyoshi
A somewhat short irc mod....

SPOILER
2013-10-15 19:34 smallboat: Hello,blissfulyyoshi
2013-10-15 19:34 blissfulyoshi: HAI
2013-10-15 19:35 smallboat: Hello..I think my map's quality is not enough, but I can't figure out what the question is, could you give me a pointing?
2013-10-15 19:35 blissfulyoshi: okay sure
2013-10-15 19:35 blissfulyoshi: link
2013-10-15 19:36 smallboat: https://osu.ppy.sh/s/115246 Thanks , bliss~
2013-10-15 19:37 blissfulyoshi: dling
2013-10-15 19:37 smallboat: @@?
2013-10-15 19:37 blissfulyoshi: any diff in particular?
2013-10-15 19:39 smallboat: well, Hard Insane Yuki 's diff only.
2013-10-15 19:39 smallboat: three diff
2013-10-15 19:40 blissfulyoshi: okay
2013-10-15 19:40 smallboat: THANKS!
2013-10-15 19:40 blissfulyoshi: why are you keeping messy overlaps like 00:02:034 (3,1) -
2013-10-15 19:40 blissfulyoshi: insane diff right now
2013-10-15 19:40 blissfulyoshi: 00:04:534 (3,1) - ^
2013-10-15 19:41 smallboat: well , think a pattern (?
2013-10-15 19:41 smallboat: ><"
2013-10-15 19:41 blissfulyoshi: I don't even care if it has no pattern
2013-10-15 19:41 smallboat: okay~
2013-10-15 19:41 blissfulyoshi: just remove teh overlaps
2013-10-15 19:41 smallboat: I will revise .
2013-10-15 19:41 smallboat: okay^^
2013-10-15 19:43 blissfulyoshi: also to fit the super soft intro I would make decrease teh sv a bit more for notes before 00:05:867 (1) -
2013-10-15 19:43 00:11:534 (1) - *
2013-10-15 19:43 blissfulyoshi: that is probably a better point
2013-10-15 19:44 smallboat: okay
2013-10-15 19:44 blissfulyoshi: more of a pet peeve, but why is 00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - so much harder than the notes imeediately following it
2013-10-15 19:44 blissfulyoshi: it is so cruel to do this stuff right after a slow section and a spinner imo
2013-10-15 19:44 smallboat: sure?
2013-10-15 19:44 blissfulyoshi: that is what I think
2013-10-15 19:45 blissfulyoshi: up to you
2013-10-15 19:45 blissfulyoshi: you are the mapper
2013-10-15 19:45 smallboat: okay lol
2013-10-15 19:46 smallboat: poor ENGLISH ,sorry>_<
2013-10-15 19:48 smallboat: have any problem?
2013-10-15 19:53 blissfulyoshi: ummm got caught in a phone call
2013-10-15 19:53 blissfulyoshi: give me a bit
2013-10-15 19:54 smallboat: ok , nevermind~
2013-10-15 19:56 smallboat: your pointing is useful !
2013-10-15 19:59 smallboat: Can you write a bit extra suggestion in my map forum?
2013-10-15 19:59 blissfulyoshi: sure
2013-10-15 20:00 smallboat: okay,tks~
2013-10-15 20:02 smallboat: How many quality in my map ?
2013-10-15 20:06 blissfulyoshi: sry finally got off the phone
2013-10-15 20:06 blissfulyoshi: very long phone call
2013-10-15 20:06 smallboat: oh no,nevermind . haha^^
2013-10-15 20:06 blissfulyoshi: let me at lest play all of insane
2013-10-15 20:06 blissfulyoshi: and I'll tell you
2013-10-15 20:07 smallboat: okay
2013-10-15 20:08 blissfulyoshi: 01:30:867 (8,1,2) - why is there an antijump here
2013-10-15 20:08 blissfulyoshi: 01:07:534 (1,2,3) - also, switching to a softer section == jumps??????/
2013-10-15 20:08 smallboat: THINK A pattern?
2013-10-15 20:08 smallboat: @@
2013-10-15 20:08 blissfulyoshi: increase spacing
2013-10-15 20:09 smallboat: ah sorry , I have no notice (embarrass ><
2013-10-15 20:09 blissfulyoshi: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1040323 ?
2013-10-15 20:10 smallboat: stack 3 times?
2013-10-15 20:10 blissfulyoshi: 01:44:867 (2,1) - another questionable antijump
2013-10-15 20:10 blissfulyoshi: ummm you had that stack there originally
2013-10-15 20:10 smallboat: okay
2013-10-15 20:10 blissfulyoshi: I don't care what you do with teh stack
2013-10-15 20:11 blissfulyoshi: I only rearranged 1 and 2 to have a flow that feels better to me
2013-10-15 20:11 smallboat: okay @_@
2013-10-15 20:12 blissfulyoshi: for the most part insane was okay, but some of your jumps/antijumps felt a bit awkward
2013-10-15 20:13 smallboat: OK, I"m not good at " jump" X ( "
2013-10-15 20:13 blissfulyoshi: forgot to mention 01:20:867 (1,2,3,4) - soft area === jumps again???/
2013-10-15 20:13 smallboat: @@
2013-10-15 20:13 smallboat: >_<SOR
2013-10-15 20:13 blissfulyoshi: your choruses were pretty good
2013-10-15 20:13 blissfulyoshi: besides those awkward jumps
2013-10-15 20:13 blissfulyoshi: so no worreis
2013-10-15 20:13 smallboat: OKAY
2013-10-15 20:14 blissfulyoshi: oh yeah, what is with teh inconsistent slow downs
2013-10-15 20:14 blissfulyoshi: 00:38:034 (1) - is slow
2013-10-15 20:14 blissfulyoshi: 00:40:534 (7) - is fast
2013-10-15 20:14 blissfulyoshi: well
2013-10-15 20:14 blissfulyoshi: hearing it again
2013-10-15 20:14 blissfulyoshi: I geuss it makes sense
2013-10-15 20:14 blissfulyoshi: so never mind me
2013-10-15 20:15 smallboat: :)
2013-10-15 20:16 smallboat: HAVE LIISTENED
2013-10-15 20:16 smallboat: LISTEN ><
2013-10-15 20:16 blissfulyoshi: so hard or Yuki next?
2013-10-15 20:16 blissfulyoshi: guess yuki
2013-10-15 20:16 smallboat: Yuki is GD
2013-10-15 20:16 blissfulyoshi: okay
2013-10-15 20:17 blissfulyoshi: so going to hard
2013-10-15 20:17 smallboat: okay, hard first
2013-10-15 20:18 blissfulyoshi: 00:19:534 (3) - this slider is ugly
2013-10-15 20:18 blissfulyoshi: T_T
2013-10-15 20:18 smallboat: @@
2013-10-15 20:18 smallboat: true?
2013-10-15 20:18 blissfulyoshi: I am not sure what you are aiming for
2013-10-15 20:18 blissfulyoshi: but that many sharp corners does not look good
2013-10-15 20:19 smallboat: sorry , some sliders no copy.
2013-10-15 20:19 smallboat: >_<
2013-10-15 20:21 blissfulyoshi: 01:51:534 (3,4) - why teh rnadom overlap
2013-10-15 20:21 blissfulyoshi: but this hard diff is decent
2013-10-15 20:21 smallboat: @@
2013-10-15 20:21 smallboat: okay
2013-10-15 20:21 blissfulyoshi: mostly on the safe side, but nothing too wrong about it
2013-10-15 20:21 smallboat: okay lol
2013-10-15 20:22 blissfulyoshi: 01:56:034 (2,4) - just wondering, why do you have that random bump in teh beginnign of these sliders
2013-10-15 20:22 blissfulyoshi: it looks slihgtly weird
2013-10-15 20:22 smallboat: sorry @@
2013-10-15 20:22 blissfulyoshi: oh well
2013-10-15 20:22 blissfulyoshi: your choice
2013-10-15 20:22 blissfulyoshi: anything you want me to look at?
2013-10-15 20:22 smallboat: wii fix
2013-10-15 20:23 smallboat: well, yuki diff ? I can chat problem for him.
2013-10-15 20:23 blissfulyoshi: okay
2013-10-15 20:23 blissfulyoshi: if you want
2013-10-15 20:25 smallboat: ok
2013-10-15 20:25 blissfulyoshi: wow this diff has a bunch of hard patterns
2013-10-15 20:25 blissfulyoshi: xD
2013-10-15 20:25 smallboat: XD
2013-10-15 20:25 smallboat: ha
2013-10-15 20:26 blissfulyoshi: 00:11:201 (3,1) - this jump is a bit large for that part of the song.....
2013-10-15 20:26 smallboat: @@
2013-10-15 20:26 smallboat: ok I'll tell him
2013-10-15 20:27 blissfulyoshi: 00:14:201 (5,1) and 00:15:368 (2,4) - overlaps here don't look that great
2013-10-15 20:27 smallboat: okay
2013-10-15 20:28 blissfulyoshi: 00:28:201 (3,4,1) - why is there a stack here? It doesn't seem to fit eh song that well
2013-10-15 20:28 blissfulyoshi: 00:48:534 (3,1) - anotehr overlap T_T
2013-10-15 20:29 smallboat: 0.0
2013-10-15 20:29 smallboat: okay :)
2013-10-15 20:30 blissfulyoshi: 01:05:868 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - this is evil T_T
2013-10-15 20:30 smallboat: wow
2013-10-15 20:30 smallboat: as Big Black(?
2013-10-15 20:30 smallboat: haha
2013-10-15 20:30 blissfulyoshi: big black is jsut silly
2013-10-15 20:31 smallboat: haha
2013-10-15 20:31 smallboat: No mankind to play it...
2013-10-15 20:31 blissfulyoshi: okay so only pattern I can't do in this map is that one I mentioned above
2013-10-15 20:31 blissfulyoshi: chorus is easy in comparison
2013-10-15 20:32 smallboat: okay:)
2013-10-15 20:32 blissfulyoshi: 01:33:868 (6,7,8,9,1) - I would use distance snap on this stream to give it a sense of speeding up
2013-10-15 20:32 blissfulyoshi: and why is the chorus so devoid of jumps
2013-10-15 20:32 smallboat: no stack?
2013-10-15 20:32 blissfulyoshi: yeah
2013-10-15 20:33 blissfulyoshi: 01:47:034 (2,3) - do you seriously want to be this evil, I barely did it by sightreading
2013-10-15 20:33 smallboat: Well I think you should put these recommendations in the forum, he can reply for you :)
2013-10-15 20:33 smallboat: okay
2013-10-15 20:34 blissfulyoshi: 01:49:701 (2,3) - I guess I got used to it by now
2013-10-15 20:34 smallboat: okay
2013-10-15 20:34 blissfulyoshi: well that is the end of my mod for his diff
2013-10-15 20:35 blissfulyoshi: okay jsut did that stupid poattern......
2013-10-15 20:35 blissfulyoshi: gah
2013-10-15 20:35 smallboat: 0.0~
2013-10-15 20:35 blissfulyoshi: ]/savelog
2013-10-15 20:35 blissfulyoshi: ...
2013-10-15 20:35 blissfulyoshi: T_T
2013-10-15 20:36 smallboat: @@
2013-10-15 20:36 smallboat: haha
2013-10-15 20:37 smallboat: Thanks bliss take the time to make recommendations
2013-10-15 20:38 smallboat: >_<~
2013-10-15 20:38 blissfulyoshi: lol yw
2013-10-15 20:38 blissfulyoshi: I am pretty sure you can get it ranked soon
2013-10-15 20:38 blissfulyoshi: just have someone else look over insane
2013-10-15 20:38 blissfulyoshi: I felt that was the weakest diff
2013-10-15 20:38 smallboat: sure? lol
2013-10-15 20:39 smallboat: Well, some left nazi problem ?>_<
2013-10-15 20:40 blissfulyoshi: probably some
2013-10-15 20:40 blissfulyoshi: too lazy to ask to fix it right now
2013-10-15 20:40 smallboat: >_<ok
2013-10-15 20:40 blissfulyoshi: someone else can do those
2013-10-15 20:40 blissfulyoshi: xD
2013-10-15 20:40 smallboat: XD
2013-10-15 20:41 smallboat: Okay, I will fix it soon in this day !
2013-10-15 20:41 blissfulyoshi: okay
2013-10-15 20:41 blissfulyoshi: mind if I post log?
2013-10-15 20:42 smallboat: okay :)
2013-10-15 20:43 blissfulyoshi: thx
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki
From blissfulyoshi's irc mod

00:11:201 (3,1) - this jump is a bit large for that part of the song.....move a little
01:33:868 (6,7,8,9,1) - I would use distance snap on this stream to give it a sense of speeding up good idea I like it :)

other no change
I like overlap in my insane diff lol
hoLysoup
1,846 posts
Joined September 2009
hoLysoup
hihi~
答應的mod : )
以下都是建議~

[Insane]
00:09:367 (4) - 嗯嗯~ 可能把這個去掉, 然後在00:08:867 (3) 這裡加個repeat? 總覺得音樂理沒有(4)這個beat, 所以可能比較合一點
00:32:701 - 之前妳說這裡會不會不合適. 我的想法是在00:32:701 這裡加個beat. 因為主要這一段的1/2節奏, 最明顯是從00:32:867開始. 所以這樣可能打起來比較合音樂. 尤其是因為才剛剛打完一大串stream, 突然變成1/2會變得不適.
00:34:534 (7) - 啊 對了. 這要不要考慮改成一個長slider? 00:34:534~00:34:867的slider, 可能感覺好一點
00:36:701 - 這裡是不是錯過一個beat了?
00:38:534 (1) - 要不要改成finish?
00:49:534 (3) - 要不要把這個移到00:49:367, 然後在00:49:867加個圈圈? 總覺得這一段的節奏有點變化可能比較好玩
00:59:534 (1) - 忘了加whistle?
00:59:867 (2) - 多加了whistle?
01:06:867 (1) - remove NC
01:07:534 (1) - 加finish
01:08:201 (1) - 頭上忘了clap
01:15:867 (2) - 嗯嗯~ 我覺得這個最好改成一個圈圈+滑條. 比較和節奏, 像這樣: http://puu.sh/4RhBw.jpg
01:30:117 - 這裡錯過一個beat? :>
01:47:367 (5) - NC

[Hard]
00:20:367 (1) - 這應該就不用NC了, 節奏很清楚的
00:24:034 (1) - ^
00:24:867 (1) - 開頭用滑條會不會比較好一點？ 歌手也是拉長音走, 滑條可能玩起來更合適
01:07:867 (3) - 滑條尾巴錯過了clap + whistle喔
01:12:201 (5) - 頭忘了whistle?
01:23:534 (1) - 這裡也是用滑條開始會不會比較順暢?
01:53:534 (1) - 去掉NC
01:54:201 (5) - 這裡NC
01:56:034 (2) - 噗 這slider頭長相是故意的嗎? 哈哈 可能有些BAT會鬼叫吧, 我個人倒是很喜歡奇怪的slider長相
01:57:367 (1,2,3) - 要不要把這幾個離01:56:701 (4)遠一點?

[Normal]
啊　對了妳的normal星難度可能太高囉 3.34
00:16:534 (1) - 像是這裡, 節奏來說的話　最佳的擺法就是圈+滑條. 像這樣: http://puu.sh/4Ri7w.jpg
00:20:701 - 我覺得這一段不要有break比較好欸? 像是妳從00:20:701~00:21:867做一個很長的滑條, 全部問題都解決啦. 也和音樂, 也不用break, 而且連著之後的節奏也夠簡單.
00:35:034 (4) - 要不要移到00:35:534? 當然擺飾要變一下, 不過這樣節奏會比較自然一點
01:17:867 (1) - spinner也跟hard一樣, 拉到01:20:701就好. 還可以加一個鼓聲
如果這是最簡單的難度, 星數就太高囉.
建議就把節奏改得更簡單吧~ :>

其實圖不錯!! 多注意一下hitsound~ 主要是每個部份的hitsound, 如果是同一段得話就檢查有沒有一至.
擺法, NC, 節奏這些東西, 妳只要多map, 遲早就會更了解的. 只是時間上的問題
加油加油~!
我沒星可以給妳 :<
Colin Hou
osu! Alumni
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Colin Hou
as requested

[General]
  1. title: shining grace (due to http://www.iosysos.com/cd/utahime/
[yuki]
  1. enable the custom sliderslide.wav in this diff? it works well as I see (in other diffs
  2. 00:16:868 (1,2,3) - this manual stack doesn't work properly, check it out
  3. 01:41:534 (3) - kind of too much difference with 01:30:868 (3,4,5), keeping a consistence would be nice imo
  4. 01:57:368 (4,5,6,7) - maybe try a increasing space here?
[Insane]
  1. 01:10:201 (1,2,3,4,5) - doesn't make much sense here with a stream, consider keeping things like 01:07:534 (1,2,3), then try remove 01:10:034 (7) for a better effect.
  2. 01:12:867 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^ mostly the same
  3. 01:50:451 - did you forget some section here? the volume is too low.
  4. 01:55:534 - spacing after here is quite under average. highly suggest you rearrange the patterns.
[Normal]
  1. this diff seems to be mapped to get rid of the star rating
  2. 00:34:867 (4,5) - maybe remove?
  3. 00:43:534 - make 00:43:867 (1) a slider start here?
  4. 01:09:201 - add note?
  5. 01:11:867 - ^
  6. 1 more slider since 01:57:367 to 01:58:034?
no much comment on Hard :) keep up the good working!
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

Colin Hou wrote:

[yuki]
  1. enable the custom sliderslide.wav in this diff? it works well as I see (in other diffs ok
  2. 00:16:868 (1,2,3) - this manual stack doesn't work properly, check it out fixed
  3. 01:41:534 (3) - kind of too much difference with 01:30:868 (3,4,5), keeping a consistence would be nice imo sry I don't want to change it
  4. 01:57:368 (4,5,6,7) - maybe try a increasing space here? good idea~!
thanks for modding
说中文吧0.0
smallboat
1,687 posts
Joined January 2010
Topic Starter
smallboat
-Bakari-

-Bakari- wrote:

Yo, just a quick look at the map!

as you requested, only your diffs

[General]
  1. The gray combo colour may confuse player. You get exactly the same colour if you fail a song in multiplayer
  2. Slider Tick Rate 2 sounds really strange in the beginning of the map.
  3. Hitsounds are a little bit too noisy, imo. Maybe it's just me, tho.
[Normal]
Diff itsef feels pretty nice. Some things have bugged me a lot, tho.
00:22:201 - well, I would map this beat. It's loud and quite important. It feels quite weird when you ignore it :<
00:35:034 - 01:44:367 - 01:44:367 - HP4 and map vocals there. It'll feel much better, imo.
01:27:534 (3,4,1,2,1,2) - seriously, it looks way too messy for the easiest diff and it's also out of your pattern.
01:57:367 (3,4,5) - (4) is too close, some players may hit it before hitting (3). Try to avoid such things on the easiest diff

Diff isn't bad, but comboing seems to be a bit inconsistent and flow is a bit strange sometimes. However, it's sitill a pretty good diff.

[Hard]
Pretty nice one, too.
OD/HP + 1 to make diff settings more balanced. You should also remember, that it's a [Hard] diff and it's supposed to be hard!

Your rhythm is fine, but there're actually two things that should be imporved. Visual appearance of the map and comboing. Patterns are a bit messy, just work on your blankets and things and try to make combos a bit more consistent.
Hint: you can listen to drums/guitar in the background music to make comboing more consistent.

[Insane]
Seems to be fine, but same mistakes. Patterns aren't really neat and you can improve it and comboing ;__; Also, try to check your rhythm, some notes are a bit overmapped.

Well, it's just some common mistakes. Try to fix them when you get some free time!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The map is okay, but it could be much better, try to work on it a bit more!

Note: THIS IS NOT A MODPOST, IT'S JUST SOME GENERAL SUGGESTIONS AFTER A TESTPLAY
Almost fixed,thanks -Bakari- 's mod :)

Lizbeth

Lizbeth wrote:

hihi hi

[Insane]
00:00:867 - 00:11:534 - lighten this whole section by deleting some circles in red tick. That would give you a soft intro, just like the song
00:27:534 (1,2,3) - I think this is the distance you should have use in the rest of the map, except this part: 00:46:201 -00:56:534 - which is soft, and the distance you use fits well.
If you really decide to change the distance as i suggested, keep in mind the jumps you place are fine, and you should keep them.

[Yuki]
00:17:367 - add circle
00:22:201 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - this threw me off >~< maybe if you unstack ?
01:09:868 (4,5,6) - this is a bit confusing
01:12:868 (1,2,3) - try to keep jumps in singles combos, so new combo on next slider
01:30:868 (3,4,5) - this spacing is wrong, the distance between the end of 01:30:868 (3) - and 01:31:118 (4) - is too large


[Hard]
01:53:534 (1) - this is too close to prev circle, check timeline

[Normal]
Easier diff needs less than 3.00 difficulty stars, and this have 3.21, try to lighten it a bit, or add an EASY.
there s no technical problems tho

Good luck
Almost fixed,thanks Lizbeth 's mod

Kawaiwkyik

Kawaiwkyik wrote:

[Yuki]
只在以下幾處加clap
00:23:534 -
00:23:701 -
00:24:034 -
00:24:367 -
00:24:534 -
其餘不用加
01:04:201 (3) - 試試尾巴被1蓋著
01:18:868 (1,1) - 可以不用NC
01:28:201 - Finish
01:28:534 (5) - ^
01:37:367 (2) - 237,86
01:38:867 - Finish
01:39:201 - ^

[Insane]
Check AIMod
00:12:201 (2) - NC 00:12:367 (1) - remove nc fixed
00:18:034 (7) - 在00:18:534 - 完 fixed

00:45:867 (1) - 可以不NC fixed
01:07:201 (2) - ctrl+G fixed

[Normal]
00:19:534 - 至00:21:868 - 加個SPINNER 考慮

其餘不太找到(累了~
謝謝Kawaiwkyik 的mod

sjoy

sjoy wrote:

[Insane]
00:11:534 (1) -
可以加个FIN OK
00:13:367 (1) - 拆成1/2+单点 OK/color]
00:26:867 (3) - ctrl+g
00:35:034 (1) - 去掉一个折返 加一个单点在 336,124看看 OK
00:38:034 (4) - 我建议做成1/1 0.5速度滑条 滑条尾消音感觉不错 最初有改，但後來被噴又改回去了 :o
00:49:367 加个NOTE？ OK
01:06:201 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 不建议摆串 overmap 3连就差不多了太多感觉不好 沒放藍線了
01:30:534 (7,8) - 先滑条再单点 OK
01:47:367 (5) - 同00:38:034 (4) OK
这次作图好多了 謝謝 會努力的 你的圖也很好喔
[Yuki]
00:20:701 (5) - 上移点
01:27:201 (4) - http://puu.sh/4QLq7.jpg
01:30:868 (3) - 有必要那么坑么 CTRL+g吧

挑不出什么了 射个星好了 謝謝 我也有去射個星 :idea:
完成度挺好的可以RANK了 謝謝支持 不過離Rank還有一段距離 主要又是排列有點亂 :o
謝謝sjoy 的mod與支持

hoLysoup

hoLysoup wrote:

hihi~ 嗨 :)
答應的mod : )
以下都是建議~

[Insane]
00:09:367 (4) - 嗯嗯~ 可能把這個去掉, 然後在00:08:867 (3) 這裡加個repeat? 總覺得音樂理沒有(4)這個beat, 所以可能比較合一點 OK 還不錯
00:32:701 - 之前妳說這裡會不會不合適. 我的想法是在00:32:701 這裡加個beat. 因為主要這一段的1/2節奏, 最明顯是從00:32:867開始. 所以這樣可能打起來比較合音樂. 尤其是因為才剛剛打完一大串stream, 突然變成1/2會變得不適. OK 還不錯 這樣也比較好點擊
00:34:534 (7) - 啊 對了. 這要不要考慮改成一個長slider? 00:34:534~00:34:867的slider, 可能感覺好一點 OK 還不錯
00:36:701 - 這裡是不是錯過一個beat了? 好像不小心手誤刪了.. 8-)
00:38:534 (1) - 要不要改成finish? OK
00:49:534 (3) - 要不要把這個移到00:49:367, 然後在00:49:867加個圈圈? 總覺得這一段的節奏有點變化可能比較好玩 OK
00:59:534 (1) - 忘了加whistle? 忘記了XD
00:59:867 (2) - 多加了whistle? 好像是..
01:06:867 (1) - remove NC OK
01:07:534 (1) - 加finish OK
01:08:201 (1) - 頭上忘了clap OK
01:15:867 (2) - 嗯嗯~ 我覺得這個最好改成一個圈圈+滑條. 比較和節奏, 像這樣: http://puu.sh/4RhBw.jpg OK GOOD :)
01:30:117 - 這裡錯過一個beat? :> 咦怎又忘了.. :o
01:47:367 (5) - NC OK

[Hard]
00:20:367 (1) - 這應該就不用NC了, 節奏很清楚的 OK
00:24:034 (1) - ^
00:24:867 (1) - 開頭用滑條會不會比較好一點？ 歌手也是拉長音走, 滑條可能玩起來更合適 OK
01:07:867 (3) - 滑條尾巴錯過了clap + whistle喔 忘了 已修
01:12:201 (5) - 頭忘了whistle? 又忘:o
01:23:534 (1) - 這裡也是用滑條開始會不會比較順暢? OK
01:53:534 (1) - 去掉NC OK
01:54:201 (5) - 這裡NC OK
01:56:034 (2) - 噗 這slider頭長相是故意的嗎? 哈哈 可能有些BAT會鬼叫吧, 我個人倒是很喜歡奇怪的slider長相 這樣才有梗? 不過改掉了有點可惜
01:57:367 (1,2,3) - 要不要把這幾個離01:56:701 (4)遠一點? OK

[Normal]
啊　對了妳的normal星難度可能太高囉 3.34 降了 不過在3.25....
00:16:534 (1) - 像是這裡, 節奏來說的話　最佳的擺法就是圈+滑條. 像這樣: http://puu.sh/4Ri7w.jpg OK 還不錯
00:20:701 - 我覺得這一段不要有break比較好欸? 像是妳從00:20:701~00:21:867做一個很長的滑條, 全部問題都解決啦. 也和音樂, 也不用break, 而且連著之後的節奏也夠簡單. 好建議 :idea:
00:35:034 (4) - 要不要移到00:35:534? 當然擺飾要變一下, 不過這樣節奏會比較自然一點 OK
01:17:867 (1) - spinner也跟hard一樣, 拉到01:20:701就好. 還可以加一個鼓聲 OK
如果這是最簡單的難度, 星數就太高囉. 好
建議就把節奏改得更簡單吧~ :> 好的 怎麼感覺要做Easy.. :o

其實圖不錯!! 謝謝 多注意一下hitsound~好 主要是每個部份的hitsound, 如果是同一段得話就檢查有沒有一至.
擺法, NC, 節奏這些東西, 妳只要多map, 遲早就會更了解的. 只是時間上的問題 我也覺得是時間 :o
加油加油~!
我沒星可以給妳 :<
沒關係
謝謝hoLysoup 的mod與支持

Colin Hou

Colin Hou wrote:

as requested

[General]
  1. title: shining grace (due to http://www.iosysos.com/cd/utahime/
fixed

[yuki]
  1. enable the custom sliderslide.wav in this diff? it works well as I see (in other diffs
  2. 00:16:868 (1,2,3) - this manual stack doesn't work properly, check it out
  3. 01:41:534 (3) - kind of too much difference with 01:30:868 (3,4,5), keeping a consistence would be nice imo
  4. 01:57:368 (4,5,6,7) - maybe try a increasing space here?
[Insane]
  1. 01:10:201 (1,2,3,4,5) - doesn't make much sense here with a stream, consider keeping things like 01:07:534 (1,2,3), then try remove 01:10:034 (7) for a better effect. fixed
  2. 01:12:867 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^ mostly the same fixed
  3. 01:50:451 - did you forget some section here? the volume is too low. fixed
  4. 01:55:534 - spacing after here is quite under average. highly suggest you rearrange the patterns. fixed
[Normal]
  1. this diff seems to be mapped to get rid of the star rating fixed
  2. 00:34:867 (4,5) - maybe remove? fixed
  3. 00:43:534 - make 00:43:867 (1) a slider start here? fixed
  4. 01:09:201 - add note? fixed
  5. 01:11:867 - ^
  6. 1 more slider since 01:57:367 to 01:58:034? fixed
no much comment on Hard :) keep up the good working!
謝謝Colin Hou的建議 :)
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meiikyuu
1,704 posts
Joined August 2011
meiikyuu
irc chat mod
http://puu.sh/4SQ7k.txt

star~
Charles445
Elite Mapper II: Aspirant / osu! Paragon
2,881 posts
Joined March 2009
Charles445
Having quite a blast with this one, I'd check this one if I had time for rank. Have a star, this is worth BATs looking into
Nymph
osu! Alumni
3,243 posts
Joined December 2010
Nymph
SPOILER
10:14 smallboat: 哈囉妮妮~
10:14 Nymph: @@
10:14 smallboat: @@?
10:15 Nymph: @@官網能上了
10:15 smallboat: 圖被打星不知道能不能找你check下 先別泡
10:15 smallboat: 恩
10:15 smallboat: 恭喜
10:17 Nymph: @@比以前好不少了
10:18 smallboat: @@
10:18 smallboat: 謝
10:18 smallboat: 有很多好心人給建議
10:18 Nymph: 嗯
10:19 smallboat: 還是覺得有些要改
10:19 Nymph: 唔
10:19 smallboat: @@
10:20 Nymph: 那就改唄@@
10:20 smallboat: 噗
10:21 smallboat: 你覺得有要改的地方嗎?
10:21 Nymph: 一些小地方吧
10:22 smallboat: ins?
10:23 Nymph: 嗯
10:23 smallboat: 想知道些
10:25 Nymph: 細節就是
10:26 smallboat: 恩
10:26 smallboat: 沒關係
10:27 smallboat: 可以講
10:27 Nymph: 00:12:701 (5) - slidershape略突然
10:27 smallboat: 歐歐
10:27 Nymph: 只有一個是這麼隨意的slider在這個part
10:28 Nymph: 00:38:034 (1) -
10:28 smallboat: 恩 真的感覺不太協調
10:28 Nymph: 只需要結尾靜音 開頭不需要靜音
10:28 smallboat: 阿隊了
10:28 Nymph: 爲了貫徹靜音的絕對性 結尾改成soft hitsound
10:29 Nymph: 不用normal
10:29 smallboat: 那個sliderslide我放進去沒什麼效果
10:29 smallboat: 好
10:29 Nymph: 00:56:867 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) -
10:30 Nymph: 既然用了藍線slider 就不要保持spacing了 可以自由拉一些排列
10:30 smallboat: 好
10:30 Nymph: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1045556
10:31 Nymph: 像這樣 把距離拉開 才有跟著鼓的壓藍線slider的疾走感
10:31 smallboat: 好
10:31 smallboat: 不錯耶
10:31 Nymph: 00:59:534 (1) - 這種跟你前面藍線比就普通了 是我也會用一些新鮮東西在裏面
10:32 Nymph: 01:08:867 (3) -
10:32 smallboat: 想知道要怎麼變化
10:32 Nymph: 這後面還很缺hitsound
10:32 Nymph: 變化嗎
10:32 smallboat: 恩是
10:33 Nymph: 節奏我覺得用藍線slider就好 用一些不同的排列
10:33 smallboat: 好
10:33 smallboat: 就剛剛你傳的圖差不多那樣?
10:34 Nymph: 我只是舉一個例子嘛
10:34 Nymph: 那只是選項的一種
10:34 smallboat: 喔喔@@
10:34 Nymph: 換造型 換方向 各種方法
10:34 smallboat: 好的 我也會用自己的想像力
10:34 Nymph: 嗯
10:34 smallboat: 好
10:34 Nymph: 01:08:867 (3) -
10:34 Nymph: 這後面很多地方可以做finish或者clap
10:35 Nymph: 目前空洞洞的
10:35 smallboat: 好
10:36 Nymph: 01:48:117 (3) - 這個歪啦
10:36 Nymph: 01:47:367 (1) - 這個跟之前說過的一樣
10:36 smallboat: 阿
10:37 Nymph: 發現你連打不是很會排細節啊
10:37 smallboat: 造型不好?
10:37 Nymph: 你要試著把你連打的東西還有之後的slider 做成一個比較順手的曲綫
10:38 smallboat: 恩阿 這01:46:700 (2) - 連打後不知怎接
10:38 Nymph: 你試著把這種排列的每個圓的中心都挑出來
10:38 Nymph: 然後你把這些中心點連接上
10:38 Nymph: 看看是不是溫柔的曲綫
10:38 Nymph: 01:48:034 (2,3,4) -
10:38 Nymph: 這種一看就是個鈍角嘛
10:39 smallboat: 1~5的曲線?
10:39 Nymph: 只要是曲綫就好了 成角度的都略有問題
10:39 Nymph: 關掉grid 自己手動拽下看看
10:39 Nymph: 弄成自己看著特別順眼的角度
10:40 smallboat: 好的
10:43 smallboat: 我是感覺最後一段擺不好
10:44 Nymph: 唔
10:44 smallboat: 有擺了幾次 還是怪怪:(
10:45 Nymph: 靈感不夠唄
10:46 smallboat: 好像是

some ircmod
Awaken
858 posts
Joined February 2012
Awaken
恭喜rank
EmingK
341 posts
Joined October 2012
EmingK

Awaken wrote:

恭喜rank
Frostmourne
osu! Alumni
3,733 posts
Joined November 2009
Frostmourne
I think offset +5 could be better

also here is some small checks

Insane
00:24:367 (2,3) - this spacing is unexpected because it is so similar to 00:24:034 (1,2) - . It's really hard to understand.
00:57:534 (3,4) - this spacing is unexpected due to something like 00:56:867 (1,2,3) - that already presented. It is confusing to switch to this.

Yuki
00:44:534 (1) - strange that it starts here not the bottom one.
01:55:118 (13) - this starts better on 01:55:201 (white tick) it's strange that it starts on the blue tick
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

Frostmourne wrote:

I think offset +5 could be better if smallboat decided to change the offset, then I change it~ 小船你改的话就帮我一起改了

Yuki
00:44:534 (1) - strange that it starts here not the bottom one. 00:44:534 (1,2) - according to the previous jumps, that 00:44:701 (2) - should be at like 500,172 , but I like to put it at 255,327 to make a reverse jump =3=
01:55:118 (13) - this starts better on 01:55:201 (white tick) it's strange that it starts on the blue tick fixed~
Thanks, Frost~
smallboat
1,687 posts
Joined January 2010
Topic Starter
smallboat

Frostmourne wrote:

I think offset +5 could be better

also here is some small checks

Insane
00:24:367 (2,3) - this spacing is unexpected because it is so similar to 00:24:034 (1,2) - . It's really hard to understand.
00:57:534 (3,4) - this spacing is unexpected due to something like 00:56:867 (1,2,3) - that already presented. It is confusing to switch to this.
Okay, I will fix this offset and above problems in a few days . Thanks come check in free time, Frostmourne ! :)
Chloe
1,160 posts
Joined April 2011
Chloe
I've already talked with the mapper a few times about his map and I wanna help ranking this, so here's my mod~

[General]
  1. 01:17:867 (1) - 这个转盘之后的break可以取消 右击break即可删除 所有DIFF
  2. 音效比较差 tick音效和静音sliderslide都是没有
[Normal]
  1. 01:23:534 (1) - 一般来说建议EZ和NM转盘之后接的NOTE处于屏幕中心左右 就像这样 http://puu.sh/4UtsM.jpg
  2. 00:18:867 (3) - 滑条头+whistle
  3. 00:20:201 (1) - 照理来说 既然你跟了VOCAL 那么这根滑条最好从00:20:367 - 这里开始
  4. 00:27:534 (1) - 00:28:534 (2) - 滑条头+clap
  5. 00:31:201 (2) - clap
  6. 00:33:534 (2,3) - 取消头部finish 00:32:867 (1,2,3) - 00:35:534 (1) - 尾巴全部+clap
  7. 00:43:534 (1) - 头部finish
  8. 01:06:867 (4) - 滑条头+whistle
  9. 01:23:534 (1) - 取消头部clap
  10. 01:27:534 (3) - 取消屁股clap
  11. 01:31:534 (1) - 取消头部clap 换成finish
  12. 01:58:201 (1) - 01:58:367 - 这里开始 老地方结束
  13. 总体来说 排列略差 没有全局性 而且其实可以用tick音效 不过作为新人也是算勉强过关

[Hard]
  1. 00:31:534 (1,2,3,4) - 这边的音效可以说是巨违和 建议把clap全部去掉
  2. 01:00:534 (5) - 为什么这边会突然间距变大一半多 我觉得没啥理由 也是属于以前就有的老问题
  3. 00:38:701 (2,3,4) - 丑 丑也会影响flow 老问题 不够平滑
  4. 00:40:201 (5,6) - 没啥梗 此问题也出现多次 just put note everywhere 可以像前面那样 平行 http://puu.sh/4Uulg.jpg
  5. 01:17:201 (5) - 去掉whistle
  6. 01:17:867 (7) - 加note 转盘后面红线开始
  7. 01:27:534 (5,6,7) - 丑 而且因为是锐角所以flow也是极差 还不如与01:27:534 (5) - 的开头重叠
  8. 01:41:534 (3) - 去掉finish加在01:41:867 (1) - 的头部
  9. 01:52:034 (4) - 加个NOTE用来保持节奏
  10. 01:57:867 (2,3) - 相对于前面01:56:034 (2,3,4) - 这组又变了DS 不仅丑而且在HARD也没有什么意义
  11. 全DIFF都有较多的ds变化是毫无意义 并且也是没有全局性 排列和音效的连贯性也是较差 仍然需要改善

[Insane]
  1. 00:07:034 (4) - 移到302 136 00:07:201 (5) - 移到 359 189 做一个正四边形远比现在这样3角FLOW要好的多
  2. 00:08:201 (1) - 00:18:867 (1) - 换成单点会舒服点
  3. 00:17:367 (3,4,5,6,7) - 可以跳 但是间距有点略大 建议减小一点
  4. 00:16:867 (2) - 去掉屁股的whistle
  5. 00:25:534 (3) - 00:28:201 (3) - 去掉头部finish
  6. 00:36:034 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - 毫无美观 为什么不复制00:36:034 (2,3,4) - 到后2组 然后分别旋转120度呢？ 效果图：http://puu.sh/4UuWP.jpg http://puu.sh/4UuWP.jpg 这样做了以后别忘了用00:38:034 (1) - 做个blanket包住00:36:700 (5) -
  7. 00:38:534 (1,2) - 00:39:201 (5,6) - 1-2的间距和5-6的间距请保持一致
  8. 00:40:867 (1,2,3,4) - 删了
  9. 00:40:867 (1,2,3,4) - 这边间距略大 没有理由 在我看来stack着的连打会比较好
  10. 00:42:867 (5,6,7) - 仍然是无理由的间距偏大
  11. 00:44:867 (1) - 加finish
  12. 00:47:534 (4,5,6,7,1) - 可以用00:47:867 (5,6,1) - 这3NOTE先组一个正三角 然后再做4和7在那2组的当中 如果不懂我的意思可以QQ群M我 00:47:534 (4,7,1,2) - 这4个也可以组成菱形
  13. 00:49:867 (4) - 删了 加在00:50:034 -
  14. 01:00:534 (4,5,6,7) - 这边可以像 00:57:534 (3,4,5,6) - 这边做的这样啊 是对应的 这就是所谓的没有连贯性 后面也是
  15. 01:06:534 (3,4,5) - 丑 注意间距和梗
  16. 01:12:867 (1,2,3) - 也是不太好看 有偏移 我觉得这边直线好 不过这梗也不咋的
  17. 01:16:534 (4,5,6) - 这个也是
  18. 01:17:534 (3) - 弧度向下 http://puu.sh/4UvPu.jpg
  19. 01:18:534 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - 有点乱.. 建议remap这段
  20. kiai也是很乱......
  21. 个人感觉还没到能RANK的质量 抱歉上次我好像确认错误了.... 我建议你还是DS统一些 这点可以参照我的1st rank:http://osu.ppy.sh/b/246599 没啥质量不过作为新人图也是可以算勉强过关 全局也多保持一些梗 GD就先不MOD了 再找点MOD 好好改改 改到你觉得差不多了就叫我

Good luck <3.
smallboat
1,687 posts
Joined January 2010
Topic Starter
smallboat
我將會編輯這則貼文數次(I'll edit it then paste the text several times) , 紅色字是指我目前的修復進度(Red word is my current progress of the repair).

Chloe wrote:

I've already talked with the mapper a few times about his map and I wanna help ranking this, so here's my mod~

[General]
  1. 01:17:867 (1) - 这个转盘之后的break可以取消 右击break即可删除 所有DIFF 我都不知道break可以取消..
  2. 音效比较差 tick音效和静音sliderslide都是没有 tick音效已放入(目前Normal)
[Normal]
  1. 01:23:534 (1) - 一般来说建议EZ和NM转盘之后接的NOTE处于屏幕中心左右 就像这样 http://puu.sh/4UtsM.jpg fixed
  2. 00:18:867 (3) - 滑条头+whistle fixed
  3. 00:20:201 (1) - 照理来说 既然你跟了VOCAL 那么这根滑 条最好从00:20:367 - 这里开始 fixed 之前也是感覺這邊不太協調..
  4. 00:27:534 (1) - 00:28:534 (2) - 滑条头+clap fixed
  5. 00:31:201 (2) - clap fixed
  6. 00:33:534 (2,3) - 取消头部finish 00:32:867 (1,2,3) - 00:35:534 (1) - 尾巴全部+clap fixed
  7. 00:43:534 (1) - 头部finish fixed
  8. 01:06:867 (4) - 滑条头+whistle fixed
  9. 01:23:534 (1) - 取消头部clap fixed
  10. 01:27:534 (3) - 取消屁股clap fixed
  11. 01:31:534 (1) - 取消头部clap 换成finish fixed
  12. 01:58:201 (1) - 01:58:367 - 这里开始 老地方结束 fixed

  13. 总体来说 排列略差 没有全局性 而且其实可以用tick音效 不过作为新人也是算勉强过关 謝，會改善。



[Hard]
  1. 00:31:534 (1,2,3,4) - 这边的音效可以说是巨违和 建议把clap全部去掉 fixed
  2. 01:00:534 (5) - 为什么这边会突然间距变大一半多 我觉得没啥理由 也是属于以前就有的老问题 fixed
  3. 00:38:701 (2,3,4) - 丑 丑也会影响flow 老问题 不够平滑 fixed
  4. 00:40:201 (5,6) - 没啥梗 此问题也出现多次 just put note everywhere 可以像前面那样 平行 http://puu.sh/4Uulg.jpg fixed
  5. 01:17:201 (5) - 去掉whistle fixed
  6. 01:17:867 (7) - 加note 转盘后面红线开始 fixed
  7. 01:27:534 (5,6,7) - 丑 而且因为是锐角所以flow也是极差 还不如与01:27:534 (5) - 的开头重叠 修成其他了
  8. 01:41:534 (3) - 去掉finish加在01:41:867 (1) - 的头部 fixed
  9. 01:52:034 (4) - 加个NOTE用来保持节奏 fixed
  10. 01:57:867 (2,3) - 相对于前面01:56:034 (2,3,4) - 这组又变了DS 不仅丑而且在HARD也没有什么意义 fixed
  11. 全DIFF都有较多的ds变化是毫无意义 并且也是没有全局性 排列和音效的连贯性也是较差 仍然需要改善
重排了一遍，有照弧度了


[Insane]
  1. 00:07:034 (4) - 移到302 136 00:07:201 (5) - 移到 359 189 做一个正四边形远比现在这样3角FLOW要好的多 fixed
  2. 00:08:201 (1) - 00:18:867 (1) - 换成单点会舒服点 fixed
  3. 00:17:367 (3,4,5,6,7) - 可以跳 但是间距有点略大 建议减小一点 fixed
  4. 00:16:867 (2) - 去掉屁股的whistle fixed
  5. 00:25:534 (3) - 00:28:201 (3) - 去掉头部finish fixed
  6. 00:36:034 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - 毫无美观 为什么不复制00:36:034 (2,3,4) - 到后2组 然后分别旋转120度呢？ 效果图：http://puu.sh/4UuWP.jpg http://puu.sh/4UuWP.jpg 这样做了以后别忘了用00:38:034 (1) - 做个blanket包住00:36:700 (5) - fixed
  7. 00:38:534 (1,2) - 00:39:201 (5,6) - 1-2的间距和5-6的间距请保持一致 fixed
  8. 00:40:867 (1,2,3,4) - 删了 這不用刪吧 是不是打錯..
  9. 00:40:867 (1,2,3,4) - 这边间距略大 没有理由 在我看来stack着的连打会比较好 fixed
  10. 00:42:867 (5,6,7) - 仍然是无理由的间距偏大 那這是要減小?
  11. 00:44:867 (1) - 加finish fixed
  12. 00:47:534 (4,5,6,7,1) - 可以用00:47:867 (5,6,1) - 这3NOTE先组一个正三角 然后再做4和7在那2组的当中 如果不懂我的意思可以QQ群M我 00:47:534 (4,7,1,2) - 这4个也可以组成菱形 fixed 應該是這樣吧
  13. 00:49:867 (4) - 删了 加在00:50:034 - 我覺得這邊這樣加怪怪的 我換另一種了
  14. 01:00:534 (4,5,6,7) - 这边可以像 00:57:534 (3,4,5,6) - 这边做的这样啊 是对应的 这就是所谓的没有连贯性 后面也是 fixed,後面我再想想..
  15. 01:06:534 (3,4,5) - 丑 注意间距和梗 fixed
  16. 01:12:867 (1,2,3) - 也是不太好看 有偏移 我觉得这边直线好 不过这梗也不咋的 這個再考慮
  17. 01:16:534 (4,5,6) - 这个也是 fixed,後面改直線
  18. 01:17:534 (3) - 弧度向下 http://puu.sh/4UvPu.jpg fixed
  19. 01:18:534 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - 有点乱.. 建议remap这段
  20. kiai也是很乱......
  21. 个人感觉还没到能RANK的质量 抱歉上次我好像确认错误了.... 我建议你还是DS统一些 这点可以参照我的1st rank:http://osu.ppy.sh/b/246599 没啥质量不过作为新人图也是可以算勉强过关 全局也多保持一些梗 GD就先不MOD了 再找点MOD 好好改改 改到你觉得差不多了就叫我

Good luck <3.
P A N
2,349 posts
Joined December 2011
P A N
hi, from my queue XD

[Yuki]

00:02:706 - try this rhythm for follow the vocal?
00:20:706 (5) - I think 258|100 is already fine for this. for straight to a previous slider.
00:31:206 (4,5,6,7,1) - make this stream better flow,
SPOILER
00:36:539 - I think add note here on 256|243 would be great too, its a strong beat imo. and it still look symmetry.
00:39:206 - add note?
01:28:206 (4) - move a bit down to make it's tail blanket with the previous 4's head.

[Insane]

00:24:039 (1,2) - what about swap NC? I think the spacing looks a bit confuse.
00:41:539 (6) - what about blanket like this?
SPOILER
00:44:872 (1) - make these stream more flow and slider too. maybe like this
SPOILER
01:43:872 (7) - move it for balance distance is better, balance rhythm but not spacing :/

[Hard]

00:45:539 (2) - the current one is almost overlap, what about this
SPOILER

[Normal]

01:31:539 (1,2,3) - make it to triangle pattern?
SPOILER

that's all, good luck :3
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

P A N wrote:

[Yuki]

00:02:706 - try this rhythm for follow the vocal? I think mine follows better :3
00:20:706 (5) - I think 258|100 is already fine for this. for straight to a previous slider.
00:31:206 (4,5,6,7,1) - make this stream better flow,
SPOILER
00:36:539 - I think add note here on 256|243 would be great too, its a strong beat imo. and it still look symmetry.
00:39:206 - add note?
01:28:206 (4) - move a bit down to make it's tail blanket with the previous 4's head.
no commet → changed/fixed

thx~
smallboat
1,687 posts
Joined January 2010
Topic Starter
smallboat

P A N wrote:

hi, from my queue XD

[Insane]

00:24:039 (1,2) - what about swap NC? I think the spacing looks a bit confuse.
00:41:539 (6) - what about blanket like this?
SPOILER
00:44:872 (1) - make these stream more flow and slider too. maybe like this
SPOILER
01:43:872 (7) - move it for balance distance is better, balance rhythm but not spacing :/

[Hard]

00:45:539 (2) - the current one is almost overlap, what about this
SPOILER

[Normal]

01:31:539 (1,2,3) - make it to triangle pattern?
SPOILER

that's all, good luck :3
All fixed,thank PAN :) (wait update)
Satellite
3,683 posts
Joined June 2012
Satellite
IRC LOG
Insane
SPOILER
11:21 Satellite: 00:31:539 (4,5,6,7) -
11:21 Satellite: I think stream is not Fit
11:21 Satellite: http://puu.sh/4XVjF.jpg
11:21 smallboat: okay
11:21 Satellite: Slider Reverse
11:21 Satellite: try this
11:21 smallboat: oh?
11:22 smallboat: two times reverse?
11:22 smallboat: no 1 ?
11:22 smallboat: okay
11:22 Satellite: yes
11:22 Satellite: two reverse~
11:22 smallboat: okay
11:22 Satellite: yeah
11:23 smallboat: I feel this is a pattern ,too :3
11:23 smallboat: XD
11:23 smallboat: I actually did not think.
11:24 Satellite: 01:01:872 (1) - remove Nc
11:24 Satellite: 01:02:206 (2) - add Nc
11:24 smallboat: okay
11:24 smallboat: NC ..is not good at.. :<
11:24 Satellite: ok
11:24 Satellite: "I guess"
11:24 Satellite: 01:08:039 (4) - remove note
11:25 smallboat: okay
11:25 Satellite: 01:14:872 (3) - I think
11:25 Satellite: stack is head.
11:25 Satellite: try this
11:26 Satellite: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1056250
11:26 Satellite: this
11:26 Satellite: you use "4 slider"
11:26 Satellite: Ctrl+G try this
11:26 smallboat: oh? This feel good,indeed.
11:26 smallboat: okay
11:28 Satellite: 01:25:372 (6) - I don't like this place... >.>
11:28 smallboat: @@
11:28 smallboat: feel...no arc
11:29 Satellite: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1056256
11:29 Satellite: try jump?
11:29 Satellite: 01:25:372 (6,7,8,9) -
11:29 smallboat: wow , change a lot ,I "ll try it.
11:29 smallboat: okay
11:30 Satellite: 01:30:539 (8) - end clap delete
11:30 Satellite: not fit I guess
11:30 smallboat: okay
11:30 Satellite: If you use clap
11:30 Satellite: add "First"
11:30 smallboat: Okay
11:30 Satellite: 01:34:872 (1) - remove Nc
11:31 smallboat: Okay
11:31 Satellite: 01:37:540 (1) - ^
11:31 Satellite: 01:38:872 (1) - ^
11:31 Satellite: 01:39:539 (4) - add Nc
11:31 smallboat: okay
11:32 Satellite: 01:56:039 (3,4,5) - Not fit
11:32 smallboat: need replace?
11:32 Satellite: http://puu.sh/4XVPM.jpg
11:33 Satellite: use this
11:33 smallboat: end is blue?
11:33 smallboat: okay
11:33 Satellite: That's all

GOOD LUCK
bigfrog
1,002 posts
Joined October 2011
bigfrog
Hi hi~
from your request ;3

Normal
- 00:18:872(3) - 這個間距沒有調得很好,修正一下 (0.97,0.96)
- 00:32:872(1,2,3) - 這三個不建議黏在一起
- 00:43:539(1,2,3) - 我比較喜歡以NC來分一個段落,這裡可以這樣放 :
- 00:57:539(2) - 試試這樣,可以指向(3)然後跟 00:58:872(1) 有個對稱
- 01:30:206(1,2) - 讓包圍的軌跡為1.0的間距? 只是建議..我覺得這樣比較整齊 ._.
- 01:50:539(1,2,3) - (1)往右一格,然後(2,3)的blanket

Hard
- 01:09:706(7,8) - 不是很喜歡這裡的重疊...可以讓(7)覆蓋在(8)的開頭?
- 01:35:539(3,4,5) - 沒有覆蓋得很好 (0.03)
- 01:46:539(3,4,1) - 摁..有點超出螢幕,建議稍微修改一下

Yuki's Insane
- 00:13:706(2,3,4,5) - 感覺這樣擺比較好 :
- 00:24:539(10,1) - blanket
- 00:33:539(3,4,1,2) - 這裡可以跟 00:08:206(1,2,3) 一樣的用法

Insane
- 00:49:372(3,4) - 這裡的節奏應該是這樣 :
- 00:49:539 - 如果你有改這裡一樣要有whstle
- 00:50:539(5) - 去掉whistle...
- 01:57:872(3) - 我覺得這個距離應該拉大,呈一個正三角形

大概就這些,有些小部分blanket我不想抓,不過你可以考慮看看
祝早日rank~~!! :3
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki

bigfrog wrote:

Yuki's Insane
- 00:13:706(2,3,4,5) - 感覺這樣擺比較好 : 感觉没啥必要
- 00:24:539(10,1) - blanket 其实这里也可以说是包住了，slider形状的问题而已
- 00:33:539(3,4,1,2) - 這裡可以跟 00:08:206(1,2,3) 一樣的用法 这里会自动偏移的所以只要stack就好了
no change
Umi
2,478 posts
Joined November 2012
Umi
hi m4m from your request

let'su go

Normal

- 00:00:872 (1) - whistle
- 00:01:539 (2) - whistle on tail
- 00:17:539 (2) - you should follow the voice here
SPOILER
- 01:24:872 (3) - in this way ?
SPOILER
- 01:35:539 (3,1) - why u didn't use the same shape ?
- 01:38:206 (3,1) - same here

Hard

- 00:02:039 (3) - In this way better flow imo
SPOILER
- 00:08:872 (3,4) - what about change into slider, i mean :
SPOILER
- 00:15:872 (4) - delete and extend 00:15:372 (3) - to 00:16:039 -
- 00:41:872 (4,1) - you can improve this blanket
- 01:54:872 (3,2,3,4) - or like this ? symmetry with y axis
SPOILER

Insane

- 00:04:706 (1,2) - improve the blanket here
- 00:08:539 (2) - delete the slider just put a note at 00:08:539 -
- just my opinion but all this triplet 00:36:039 (2,3,4) - 00:36:706 (5,6,7) - 00:37:372 (8,9,10) - 00:38:706 (2,3,4) - and the others doesn't really fit, it's kinda overmapped '-'
- 00:49:206 (2,3) - this part is kinda confused, you're following the piano then you following voice, and you return on the piano , u should follow only the piano here so delete the slider and add a note 00:49:539 -
- 01:38:872 (3) - in this way
SPOILER
- 01:44:206 (8) - delete this note and change 01:43:872 (7) - into a slider who end at 01:44:206 -
well overall it's a good insane :3 but there is some part overmapped for me '-'

Yuki's Insane

- 00:03:039 (2,3,4,5) - make it like this, better imo
SPOILER
- 00:04:706 (3) - delete the reverse and extend to 00:05:539 -
- 00:35:039 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - i don't really like this kind of stream, but it's a choice >.<
- 00:51:373 (3) - what are u following here ? '-' maybe delete ?
- excepted this nothing else to say nice diff :3

that's all for me good luck on ranking ;)
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