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Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl

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Teara
osu! Alumni
814 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
Teara
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Monday, February 08, 2010 at 8:00:39 PM

Artist: Chieko Kawabe
Title: Be Your Girl
Source: Elfen Lied (Outro)
Tags: hawkzor
BPM: 160.2
Filesize: 2907kb
Play Time: 01:24
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (2.63 stars, 113 notes)
  2. Hard (4.08 stars, 167 notes)
  3. hawkzor's Insane (4.88 stars, 140 notes)
  4. Normal (3.4 stars, 143 notes)
Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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Whatever

Thanks to x3ns0r for skin
and Zekira who went to the trouble to time this.

and to all who modded.
Last edited by Teara , edited 87 times in total.
0_o
2,155 posts
Joined December 2008
0_o
Normal
00:53:043 (3) - This note is pretty hidden

Hard
00:39:018 (5) - I would delete this and extend the slider to where this is now, it plays better imo
01:21:093 (1,1,1,1) - I would lighten up on these jumps, it's a pretty big difficulty spike and it'll make some people unhappy ;)

Insane
I don't really like this difficulty in general, the random notes on blue ticks/huge jumps don't really make sense and it just feels overmapped =/

EDIT: 200th KUDO YAY
Last edited by 0_o , edited 1 time in total.
Shulin
1,189 posts
Joined August 2009
Shulin
General:

Needs audio lead in – maybe 2 seconds.

Add a source.

Normal:

This seems pretty much perfect to me, I didn’t nazi it but the only thing that stands out is that you use only whistle and normal sounds, I haven’t done a full hitsound mod but here’s a few examples:

00:13:068 (3) – Clap
00:15:018 (7) - ^
00:19:068 (1) - ^
00:21:018 (2) - ^
00:28:068 (4) - ^
00:31:068 (2) - ^

It’s pretty much the same throughout, put the audio on 50% and listen for background music claps :D

Hard:

Same thing with hitsounds here.

Maybe 2.0 slider velocity is a little fast, I preferred playing with 1.8 but its your choice :P

00:54:093 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) – If im honest this pattern seems a little random.
01:24:056 (2) – Might look better if this was placed vertically above 1.


Insane:

Same thing with hitsounds here.

Suggestion for the intro (complete suggestion – and was before the update lol) add beats at these times and see if you like it:

SPOILER
00:00:093
00:01:021
00:01:031
00:01:068
00:02:006
00:02:043
00:02:071
00:02:081
00:03:009
00:03:018

If you like ^ you could probably use it later as well because the beat is pretty much constant.

I didn't really like the streams in this they seemed to be out of pace with the music, but apart from that it was OK.

This seems to be shaping up well :D I don't like starring WIPs because they change so often so tell me when it's pending and I'll star :D
DJPop
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3,549 posts
Here since the beginning
DJPop
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
XepherX3
625 posts
Joined September 2008
XepherX3
alright here are the images you asked for:
Download: Be Your Girl images.zip
Last edited by XepherX3 , edited 1 time in total.
kratoskitten
kratoskitten
Only 1 star so far? :o
+1 =l
Go Teara! GO!
hawkzor
123 posts
Joined September 2008
hawkzor
My difficulty -_-;

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
DJPop
osu! Alumni
3,549 posts
Here since the beginning
DJPop
Back ;)


~Normal~
01:22:031 (1,1,1,1) - remove new combo
01:24:093 (1) - silence the end

~Hard~
00:23:018 (2) - move 1/3 right
00:23:056 (4) - ^
00:23:093 (6) - ^
00:24:437 - add note
00:29:006 (1) - silence the middle note
00:35:006 (5) - ^
00:41:006 (1) - ^
00:46:031 (3) - ^
01:24:093 (1) - silence the end

~Insane~
00:11:081 (4,1) - confused
00:23:018 (2) - move 1/3 right
00:23:056 (4) - ^
00:23:093 (6) - ^
00:24:437 - add note
00:29:006 (1) - silence the middle note
00:35:006 (5) - ^
00:40:018 (4) - delete
00:53:018 (2) - move 1/3 right
01:08:024 (5) - snap 1/3 (move right on the line)
01:24:093 (1) - silence the end


+Star
hawkzor
123 posts
Joined September 2008
hawkzor
Quick fix ;p

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
DJPop
osu! Alumni
3,549 posts
Here since the beginning
DJPop
Mod again...

~Easy~
01:22:031 (1,1,1,1) - Remove new combo
01:24:093 (1) - silence the end

~hawkzor's Sane~
SliderTickRate: 1
00:30:043 (3) - end on white tick
00:33:043 (4) - ^
00:55:006 (2) - move 1/3 right
00:55:043 (4) - ^
00:55:081 (6) - ^
00:56:018 (8) - ^
hawkzor
123 posts
Joined September 2008
hawkzor
Added DJPop's fixes, thanks, really helped ^_^

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
Shulin
1,189 posts
Joined August 2009
Shulin
General:

Source on all difficulties, tags same as well.

Background color to black.

The snap divisor is 1/3 and 1/4 on some, seems to work so its not that big an issue I guess.

Easy:

00:55:068 (3) - Clap:
00:54:093 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Too many whistles in general, give emphasis to certain words with whistle.
01:08:081 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:09:018 (2) - New combo.
01:14:006 (4) - Clap or finish the very end of this.
01:15:093 (1,2,3,4) - Clap the word not 4 :P

Normal:

00:05:031 (3,1,2) - Whistle abuse :P
00:54:093 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Worse than above

Hard:

00:29:006 (1) - Why a silent beat?
00:35:006 (5) - ^
00:41:006 (1) - ^ same for the others.
01:14:006 (4) - Random clap in the middle of this slider, remove or add claps before :P

Insane:

00:15:006 (2,3) - Sounds odd, just one beat on the white tick sounds better.

hawkzor's Sane:

00:12:093 (1) - Finish?

All nice nothing else to add but a ~~ Star :D
Symbolic
519 posts
Joined June 2008
Symbolic
[Easy]

00:41:006 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:48:937 (x) - Timing section here with Kiai Time? If you add it, let Kiai Time end after the chorus (in the break i guess).


[Normal]

00:48:937 (x) - Timing section here with Kiai Time? If you add it, let Kiai Time end after the double chorus.
01:09:093 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:20:006 (1) - ^
01:21:093 (1,2,3,4,5) - These notes sound off, put them all 1/6 earlier.


[Hard]

00:48:937 (x) - Timing section here with Kiai Time? If you add it, let Kiai Time end after the double chorus.
01:21:093 (1,1,1,1,1) - Put these all 1/6 earlier, remove the new combo's if you want to.


[Insane]

00:02:043 (6) - New combo.
00:48:937 (x) - Timing section here with Kiai Time? If you add it, let Kiai Time end after the double chorus.
01:21:093 (1,1,1,1,1) - Put these all 1/6 earlier, remove the new combo's if you want to.


[hawkzor's Sane]

01:21:093 (1,2,1,2,1) - Put these all 1/6 earlier.


Nice map and song,
Starred *
ouranhshc
2,338 posts
Joined July 2009
ouranhshc
Easy
01:14:062(4) - line up with 3
00:05:312(3) - move to red tick

Normal
00:56:437(5,6,7) - straight line?
00:05:312(3) - move right to red tick

Hard
00:05:312(3) - right on timeline to red tick
01:17:062(4) - center between 2 and 3

Insane
00:05:312(1) - move right to red tick


me likey
Hikato
444 posts
Joined August 2008
Hikato
[Easy]
Fine. ^_^

[Normal]
01:21:093 (1,2,3,4,5) - white ticks like on easy.

[Hard]
01:21:093 (1,2,3,4,5) - white ticks~

[Insane]
01:21:093 (1,1,1,1,1) - white ticks~ :T

[hawkzor's Sane]
00:27:056 (4) - white tick to white tick :o
00:30:093 (1) - shorten slightly so it's on the 3 white ticks
then:
00:31:093 (#) - add a beat here :D
00:46:054 (7) - extend to end on the purple tick
01:21:087 (1,2,1,2,1) - white ticks :T

Nice map and song <3 I think it should be an Elfen Lied bg and theme but whichever you prefer :P Starr!
hawkzor
123 posts
Joined September 2008
hawkzor

Symbolic wrote:

[hawkzor's Sane]
01:21:093 (1,2,1,2,1) - Put these all 1/6 earlier.

Hikato wrote:

[hawkzor's Sane]
01:21:087 (1,2,1,2,1) - white ticks :T
HOW NOW BROWN COW?
Hikato
444 posts
Joined August 2008
Hikato
Sounds better on white to me~ unless you wanna go into 1/8 and try it that way.
Crimmi
1,947 posts
Joined June 2009
Crimmi
Crimmii's Judgement <3

No Problems Here.

I Love This Map!

I Hope This Gets Ranked =]

Have A Star :) If You Be My Girl LOL. :lol: :oops:

I Take Mods Through PM Or Check Me In #mod. I'm Usually There. ( Don't Spam Me Please...)

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None ( I Won't Give Up!! Yet...) :lol:

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Kytoxid
osu! Alumni
1,369 posts
Joined April 2009
Kytoxid
[General]

Kawaii? Nice tag. XD (not saying it's bad, just amusing)
The numbers in your skin are aliased; they have jagged edges. It's especially noticeable on widescreen, where part of it lies on a black background. Try fixing that. Nice skin overall though.

Although it doesn't show up in play because your song starts so early, you should probably disable the countdown option anyways, in case that bug is fixed.

[Easy]

Looks okay.

[Normal]

00:19:031 (2,1,2,3,1) - Adjust this parallelogram to be better?
00:37:031 (2) - This note, partially covered up by the slider, doesn't look too good.
00:40:031 (3) - ^

[Hard]

In general, don't silence the repeats.
Drain is a little high.

[Insane]

Don't silence repeats.
Drain is a little high.

00:35:006 (5) - Repeat is hidden by the comboburst.

[hawkzor's Sane]

Nice overall. Maybe a bit too easy. Timing's different too, any reason why for that section?

Have a star.
mosluv
748 posts
Joined December 2008
mosluv
Easy:
00:05:024 (3) - I think this should be a 1/2 slider.

Normal:
00:05:024 (3) - ^

Hard:
00:05:024 (3) - ^
00:25:056 (2) - Move over to 00:25:049? It sounds weird and really awkward when playing where it is now.

Insane:
01:17:043 (5) - Rearrange this so the end of this lands on the fading 2.

hawkzor's Sane:
00:12:018 (5,6)- Claps sound bad.
00:27:043 (4) - Should be on the white tick and end on 00:27:056.
00:37:096 (2,3) - Should be snapped on 1/4 not 1/6.
00:39:043 (2) - Should be on the white tick and end on 00:39:056.
00:56:034 (8,9) - Should be snapped on 1/4 not 1/6 and add whistle to 8 and 9's start.
01:14:068 (6) - Move over to the red tick.
01:20:062 (6) - ^

:) :D
Kagatob
33 posts
Joined June 2009
Kagatob
Great Song
Great Map
Great everything.
Star.
hawkzor
123 posts
Joined September 2008
hawkzor
Did all hikki's and Nexy's fixes

Fixed some stuff in alternate ways , but fixed everything.

Also I don't know how I should feel about snapping notes onto 1/4 when the whole song is mapped 1/3 ? -_-;

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
Xgor
Elite Mapper
2,534 posts
Joined April 2009
Xgor
[Skin]
Make the Comboburst smaller! (It's way to big!)
There is some kind of shading under the numbers...(Please remove it.)
Also i suggest that you make the hearts a little bit bigger so the numbers don't stick out.

[All diffs]
01:24:093 (1) - I suggest you make this slider not completely silent..

[Easy]
:)

[Normal]
:)

[Hard]
:)

[Insane]
:)

[Hawkzor's]
Would be nice if it had a bit more hitsounds at some parts but otherwise great ;)

Great map, the main things i found was somethings that could be improved in the skin.
*star*
Andrea
Beatmap Nominator
16,650 posts
Joined August 2008
Andrea
[Overall]

BPM: 160,00 - Offset: 960 (Remember to resnap all notes.)

[Easy]

00:12:018 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:41:006 (1) - ^

[Normal]

01:09:093 (4) - New combo.

[Hard]

00:05:024 (3) - Sounds bad. Adjust it.
00:57:018 (7) - New combo.

[Insane]

01:07:068 (3) - New combo.
01:21:093 (1,1,1,1,1) - These new combos seems out of the map. Seems weird.

[Hawkzor's Sane]

Cool :3
Hanyuu
2,223 posts
Joined February 2009
Hanyuu
Easy:

i dont know but think about removing this notes to lower the difficult a bit:
00:13:031 (2,4,6) -
00:29:006 (1) -
00:33:093 (2,3,4,1) - (slider at 2)
00:52:031 (2,1,3) -

if not then its okay but its more like a normal difficult to me :s

Normal:

00:42:093 (1) - remove combo
01:06:093 (1) - i think you should change to a different pattern here because it does not fit so good

Insane:

00:05:024 (1) - this jump is a bit unexpected and hard
XepherX3
625 posts
Joined September 2008
XepherX3
all fixed:
Download: newnumbers.zip
Vanmonky
986 posts
Joined June 2009
Vanmonky
As your request in my queue.

[Easy]
00:48:093 (1) - Add finish.
00:54:093 (1) - ^

[Normal]
00:48:093 (1) - Add finish.
00:54:093 (1) - ^
00:57:099 (1) - Remove finish.
01:00:093 (1) - Add finish.
01:06:093 (1) - ^

[Hard]
00:48:093 (1) - ^
00:57:093 (1) - Remove finish.
01:00:093 (1) - Add finish.

[Insane]
00:38:006 (1) - Overlaping slider. Change it.
00:48:093 (2) - Add finish
00:54:093 (1) - ^
00:57:093 (1) - Remove finish
01:00:093 (2) - Add finish.
01:06:093 (1) - ^

[hawzork's Sane]
No problem.

---

Yes, you may ignore them all ^^
And *star~
Nakata Yuji
471 posts
Joined April 2009
Nakata Yuji
Easy:
00:05:018 (3) - Move this 1/4 tick forward.
00:11:006 (1,2,3) - Not in a straight line, try to fix this.
01:06:093 (1,2,3) - ^
01:24:093 (1) - I don't think this needs to be here.

Normal:
00:11:043 (1,2,3) - This... Feels really weird...
00:13:031 (2) - Make this line up horizontally to the purple (1) to the left.

Hard:
This is fine.

Hawkzor's sane:
There are way too many jumps that should not be jumps. I'll let you find them yourself.

Starred, not bad.
Beuchi
osu! Alumni
2,288 posts
Joined February 2009
Beuchi
Hi hi! :3

Here are some suggestions for your map: Of course you don't have to do them if you're not agree :D

~All diffs~
BPM: 159,90 (?) 160 seems a bit off on some parts :o btw if you change it make sure you resnap all notes :3

~Easy~
00:05:031 (3) - Snap this on 1/4 and put it on red tick.
01:09:093 (1) - Undo New Combo.
01:24:093 (1) - Make the whole spinner slient, like in [Normal]

~Normal~
No problems. Nice work! :)

~Hard~
00:51:018 (4) - Fix spacing.
00:53:081 (4) - ^

~hawkzor's Sane~
No problems. Nice work! :) (btw: 00:56:043 (9) - Cute slider x3)

So nice map Teara, and nice song too :)

*Gives shiny llittle star*
Kitsunemimi
2,188 posts
Joined April 2009
Kitsunemimi
There may be a problem with the skin. (although it's really good)
The spinner-background.png is off center, it moves down a little when it appears. You need to move the image upwards so that it doesn't look like it's shifting when it appears.
The score-x.png matches with the background, so it's hard to see.
I'm using a custom skin, so the numbers I see behind the hearts overlay looks strange. You may want to include the osu! default numbers.

[Easy]:
00:25:057 (2) - Snap to red tick
00:30:095 (1,2,3) - Did what you did for 00:24:095 (1,2)
00:36:095 (1,2,3) - ^
That's it.

[Normal]: (yay it's <3.50 stars!!)
00:05:018 (3) - Snap to red tick
00:24:082 (1) - Bump forward to white tick
00:25:045 (2) to 01:09:085 (1) - ^ (you resnapped it incorrectly)
01:08:022 (2) - Snap to red tick
01:12:073 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,1) - Bump it all the way forward to the next white tick (resnapped incorrectly again)
01:24:023 (1,2) - Move it up and towards the center (suggestion)
The song isn't in 1/3ths it's in 1/4ths (or 1/2ths)

[Hard]:
Good!

[hawkzor's Sane]:
00:15:019 (1) - (LOL @ THE SLIDER POINTS!)
00:27:045 (4) - Move to blue tick. You need to make this slider one 1/4th long.
00:30:045 (3) - ^
00:33:045 (4) - ^
00:46:031 (6) - You have to adjust the timing section of this note and move it too.
01:13:057 (3,5,6) - 0_o
01:19:058 (3,5,6) - ^
Couple weird things, but nice map.

I wonder how you made this thing in 1/3ths :O . Also, I'd check up on the timing; my computer became laggy in the recent updates so I can't time it. It seems like it's off though.

It's a good map, I like the skin. Star for you!
hawkzor
123 posts
Joined September 2008
hawkzor
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
Teara
osu! Alumni
814 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
Teara
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
cyanberryio
424 posts
Joined August 2008
cyanberryio
Requested in #mod.
Warning, some nazi in here.

I swear, the timings off, try the following.
1. BPM: 160.045 , Offset: 950
2. BPM: 160.600 , Offset: 84,218
*is not too sure about the second section* It just sounds better. :o
[Easy]
00:34:070 (4) - Align with (2)?

[Normal]
Nice.

[Hard]
Tip: For slider ends you can put the timing section you can put it directly on it(without worrying about people who can't hit it spot on), like 00:29:083. Unless that was intentional.

[hawkzor's Sane]
Great.
DJPop
osu! Alumni
3,549 posts
Here since the beginning
DJPop
BPM is really off =_=" I'll check again when I have more time.

~Easy~
00:05:025 (3) - start on left purple tick
00:15:057 (1) - start on next white tick
00:29:007 (5) - no hitclap at the end, if you want hitclap, you have to do with almost sliders in every diffs too
00:47:090 - no hitwhistle and hitclap
00:48:096 (1) - hitfinish
00:54:097 (1) - ^
00:56:047 (5) - new combo
01:06:097 (1) - hitfinish
01:12:231 - no hitfinish

~Normal~
00:05:018 (3) - end on white tick
00:48:096 (1) - hitfinish
00:54:097 (1) - ^
01:24:086 (1) - end on white tick

~Hard~
00:29:827 - don't silence this slidertick
00:35:008 (5) - hitwhistle or hitclap at the end
00:38:008 (4) - offscreen a little
00:48:096 (1) - remove hitclap, add hitfinish
*00:49:071 (3) - hitclap
00:51:021 (4) - ^
00:52:071 (3) - ^
00:54:022 (5) - ^*
*00:50:046 (1) - remove hitclap
00:51:096 (1) - ^
00:53:046 (3) - ^*
00:54:097 (1) - hitfinish
00:55:072 (3) - hitclap
00:57:022 (1) - ^
01:00:097 (1) - hitfinish

~hawkzor's Sane~
01:20:058 (6) - end on white tick
hawkzor
123 posts
Joined September 2008
hawkzor
BPM change T_T

tried fixing most I could see, modding might be helpful

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
DJPop
osu! Alumni
3,549 posts
Here since the beginning
DJPop
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
alvisto
881 posts
Joined April 2009
alvisto
NORMAL
Fine, except that I was caught off guard at some 1/6 beats place xD

HARD
Fine

HAWKZOR'S SANE
00:49:068 (3) - Hitsound these to claps ? Also hitsound the whole chorus with claps at its appropiate place ?
01:23:005 (2) - Align this with 1 properly.

EASY
No problem

GENERAL
The comboburst is a bit too "centre" when playing. Maybe trim the image so that the unnecessary white parts is removed,and when it appears during playing, it won't occupy the whole screen ?

Great map. Star.
MaxSalsa_old
15 posts
Joined March 2009
MaxSalsa_old
[Map]
Dunno if it's intentional, but the hitcircles aren't colored in except on sliders - only the timing rings are colored. Not gamebreaking (to me) but I think it might be important...

[Easy]
Nothing to note.

[Normal]
Nothing here.

[Hard]
00:02:044 (1,2,3,4) - I'm not sure I like how these got closer (or how the set before is further apart). Livable though.
01:23:042 (5) - I think this would have more impact in the middle of the four notes before it.

[hawkzor's Sane]
00:27:050 (4) - For this and the similar short sliders thereafter, consider putting a clap on the endpoint. I think it would match better with the other claps around them.
01:21:092 (1,2,1,2,1) - What was the point of decreasing the hitsound volume here? I can't tell what you were going for here.

Sounds good overall though. Take this Star.
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