cRyo[iceeicee] wrote:

[alacat's Normal]

1. 00:01:287 (1,2,3,1) - i would replace this pattern with 1 spinner o.o

NatsumeRin wrote:

[alacat's Normal]
01:44:249 (2) - it should be a 3/4 repeat slider like (1)? why different here?
01:56:101 (2) - ^

NatsumeRin wrote:

[Nyquill's Hard]
01:05:546 (2) - a bit strange to me. because the reverse point 01:05:731 - is at a heavy voice (both vocal/drum) Changed this, but now I can't tell if this is too troll.

NatsumeRin wrote:

[Sakuya's Easy]
Nice designed diff, nothing really to pick here.. just.
01:45:361 (2) - feels different with the rest parts.. just a single note?
fixed for Lunar since she asked me to~

[Insane]
HP-1 OD+1? i want to keep od 7 in this streamy map x.x
00:59:620 (5) - change to a 1/4 triple? sounds okay, i prefer current slider
01:02:953 (4) - this manual stack is not on the right place..? so notes wont be completely hidden ><
01:44:990 (1,2) - wow needs to be that large? made a little smaller.. and changed this part a bit
02:01:287 (1) - make it down a bit looks better.. okay..

Melophobia wrote:

[Normal]
01:00:175 (3,4) - 変える必要もないんだけど気分的に(1)と(4)が詰まってる感じするからもう少し離したい
このくらいあけました! http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/408662

Melophobia wrote:

As requested

[Insane]
why not [Lunatic]? as you can see many touhou maps are using the name for the highest diff okay ;_;
00:06:472 (4) - shorten by 1/4 and add a note on whitetick fixed
00:07:953 (1,2,3) - awkward rhythm... try this instead fixed
http://puu.sh/X8qC
also i disagree with you about (1)'s shape it doesnt match the song very well i think it fits perfectly :<
00:12:675 - note here if possible>< not possible!
00:14:249 - stream! no! keep intro simple~
00:14:620 (2) - start newcombo here instead? x_x used combo to show huge spacing change x.x
00:33:879 (3) - your all other combos are quite short but this one is kinda long maybe newcombo here? it also can warn jumps too others are long too! → 00:29:342 (10)
00:34:249 (5,6) - CTRL+R for better flow? i like current positioning, jumps are at the right places in the song imo o.o
00:50:175 (1) - finish~ im baka D:
00:58:694 (3) - ctrl+H would be much better agree~
01:37:212 (7,8,9,10) - i'd do something different here ex,1/4 sliders because of the emphasis agree.. but current is also fine too :>
02:11:657 (1) - flow is not so good imo maybe stack it with the previous (1) or rotate the slider a bit flow break on purpose for emphasis on her voice ^^
02:21:842 (6) - can be stacked better fixed
so streamy&jumpy ;_; but good one

1. 00:47:212 (1) - Move this at x:300 y:340,to make the a blanket with 00:45:731 (3) - ? Imho,it would be better to have a blanket like this here.
2. 00:49:805 - Since of the drums being played here,I suggest you to add a note in this section,it really sounds good!
3. 01:10:916 (4) - This new combo is unneded with the current new combo pattern you are using,delete it?
4. 01:46:472 (4) - Little suggestion here: Add a new combo? It currently follows well the singer's voice,so I think it might be better to add it.
   Very good diff indeed,just pick these as some suggestions,since the diff right now is pretty good. Good work! ^^

1. 00:39:805 (4) - That's more an aestethic thing,but what do you think of moving the central waypoint at x:40 y:232 and the last one at x:108 y:252? By doing that the blanket with 00:40:916 (5) - will become prettier ^^
2. 00:47:953 (3) - I would personally transform the rhythm in this way:
   
   I think a rhythm like this would follow better the singer's voice,and it would be a bit more challenging to play,because of the 1/2 rhythm! (if you do this,move 00:48:879 (1) - 1/2 later and make it too 1/2 shorter,as I have done in the screenshot!)
3. 01:59:064 (2) - Same as 00:39:805 (4) -
   Pretty diff,good work!

1. 00:29:249 (8) - Move this at x:364 y:348 to make 00:28:879 (6,7,8,1) - an equidistant pattern? It will turn out too that this pattern will actually be a series of little jump that fit with that part
2. 00:37:953 (4) - CTRL+R?
3. 00:49:249 (5) - Put this at x:440 y:148 and put 00:49:620 (6) - at x:392 y:212 to make 00:48:694 (3,4,5,6) - a perfect diamond-shaped pattern? It's just a little aestethic thing,fix only if you want!
4. 01:13:694 (7,1) - If you want something symmetrical here,what do you think on putting the note 7 at x:348 y:132 and on making 01:13:879 (1) - a symmetric slider? It will turn out something like this!
5. 01:39:064 (6,7,8) - Ctrl+r on each of them to make some little jumps? They're pretty fun to play
6. 01:46:472 (8) - Add a new combo here,to keep the consistency with other patterns?
   Really good and fun to play,you did a really good job here!

1. 00:34:620 (7) - Put this at x:256 y:332 instead of putting it in 00:34:064 (4) - 's position?
2. 00:41:101 (5) - Again,put this instead at x:328 y:280?
3. 02:19:249 (2,3) - Ctrl+r between these notes? I expected something like this,instead of returning again at 02:18:694 (3) - 's end
   Sorry for my short mod,but I'm in a hurry and right now I have to go. Maybe tomorrow I'll check it better. Anyways,really good diff,good job!

1. 00:53:138 (3,4,1,2) - Hmm, I don't really liked how (3,4) flows here, I'd play with encircles instead to make it look less forced:
   

   134,127,54990,2,2,B|92:116|60:142,2,80,2|10|2
   209,155,56101,6,0,B|285:195|365:155,2,160,4|0|0
   160,218,57953,2,0,B|159:267|113:288,2,80,8|0|8
   80,216,59064,5,0

2. 01:46:472 (4,5) - Why don't you add finish on (4)'s start and end as well, to fit the cymbals? (previously you have finishes also on 00:36:842 (2,1) xD)

1. 00:13:879 (5) - Add whistle as well? (same synth as in (4))
2. 00:50:916 (1) - Try something like this? Flows better with (2) imo:
   

   211,302,50916,6,0,B|177:300|146:312,2,60,2|0|8

3. 01:39:435 (x) - Add note here? (uhm, I don't really mind the rhythm gap like this usually... But the lyric on (5) is too strong to be skipped, really >_<)
4. 02:35:361 (1) - Whistle + Finish on spinner's end, as used in Sakuya's Easy?

1. 00:37:583 (3) - Maybe CTRL+R this for circular variation? (this jump fits the synth though :3)
2. 01:41:287 (3) - Put it more to the left (~x:4 y:115)? I feel this slider's shape is made for a slight jump like this (:
3. 02:22:027 (1,2) - This plays good though, but I prefer something flows more solid with red waypoint usage like this:
   

   136,152,142027,6,0,B|180:140|216:108|217:68|217:68|205:28,1,165.000005035401,0|8
   376,152,142768,2,0,B|332:140|296:108|295:68|295:68|305:28,1,165.000005035401,0|8

4. 02:35:361 (1) - Whistle + Finish on spinner's end, as used in Sakuya's Easy?

1. 00:05:361 (5,6,7,8,1) - Please put it around ~x:126 y:380, it'll look better in play mode... (yes, this is due to stacking's nature)
2. 00:24:990 (1) - Whistle+finish fits for this spinner's end I believe (:
3. 02:01:101 (4,1,2) - Just a suggestion here, it's good to make these three parallel I think :3
4. 02:35:361 (1) - Whistle + Finish on spinner's end, as used in Sakuya's Easy?

Niva wrote:

Hi Mythol~ Randomly checking bubbled map... i love you!! ♥.♥
Just posting some minor suggestion/things that caught my most attention here, it's a great mapset yeah~

[General]

-> You can try to add light blue/purple/gold combocolor for this set, but it's not a must (: I'm bad with combo colors.. orz no change since current ones work and I dont wanna ruin it ;_;

[Lunatic]

1. 00:05:361 (5,6,7,8,1) - Please put it around ~x:126 y:380, it'll look better in play mode... (yes, this is due to stacking's nature) agree~
2. 00:24:990 (1) - Whistle+finish fits for this spinner's end I believe (: yes !
3. 02:01:101 (4,1,2) - Just a suggestion here, it's good to make these three parallel I think :3 beautiful :3
4. 02:35:361 (1) - Whistle + Finish on spinner's end, as used in Sakuya's Easy? sorry prefer just finish here ><

Hmm, it's a really solid and very ready mapset overall (:
Call me back after the fixes~

Niva wrote:

[Sakuya's Easy]

1. 00:53:138 (3,4,1,2) - Hmm, I don't really liked how (3,4) flows here, I'd play with encircles instead to make it look less forced: Fixed, thanks
   

   134,127,54990,2,2,B|92:116|60:142,2,80,2|10|2
   209,155,56101,6,0,B|285:195|365:155,2,160,4|0|0
   160,218,57953,2,0,B|159:267|113:288,2,80,8|0|8
   80,216,59064,5,0

2. 01:46:472 (4,5) - Why don't you add finish on (4)'s start and end as well, to fit the cymbals? (previously you have finishes also on 00:36:842 (2,1) xD) Fixed

Niva wrote:

[alacat's Normal]

1. 00:13:879 (5) - Add whistle as well? (same synth as in (4))
   fixed ~!
2. 00:50:916 (1) - Try something like this? Flows better with (2) imo:
   

   211,302,50916,6,0,B|177:300|146:312,2,60,2|0|8

   fixed ~!
3. 01:39:435 (x) - Add note here? (uhm, I don't really mind the rhythm gap like this usually... But the lyric on (5) is too strong to be skipped, really >_<)
   hmm , I put in a steady rhythm >.< 01:37:583 (1,2,3) -
4. 02:35:361 (1) - Whistle + Finish on spinner's end, as used in Sakuya's Easy?
   fixed ~!

-Gamu- wrote:

(o'д')ノ☆ﾟ*｡Congratu★lations｡*ﾟ☆ヽ('д'o)

Melophobia wrote:

yes \^^/