1. AudioLeadIn: Inconsistent in Mikan's diff. change into 2000 like other difficulty.
2. Title: maybe, remove "(Short Ver)" ? I'm confused since the thread title isn't using "(Short Ver)"
3. Folder: for "restiaBG", I guess be better if change the format into .jpg like other bg 0.0 and this way is reduce some file size orz
   don't forget fullsubmit if you do this

1. 00:17:414 (1) - this slider isn't fit with the song properly, I suggest to following some drum in bg music, you shoud do a think like this imo. then, add clap in all part of slider. so, the sound is nice now :3
2. 00:24:472 (1) - this slider isn't symmetry between left and right during gameplay. maybe, use this code instead? don't forget to fix spacing on the next note too
   

   256,312,24472,6,0,B|284:352|352:352|380:308,1,140,4|0

3. 00:30:119 (1) - add whistle in beginning? that's more comfortable for beginning change rhythm in here
4. 00:40:708 (2) - add clap in the both part? (begin and end) for following the drum sound? in here seems a bit empty without that
5. 01:28:708 (1) - move this circle 3 grid left? for make this circle seems symmetry with (2) and (3)
6. 01:30:119 (3) - why suddenly finish sound in beginning? 0.0 that's not fit with music orz
7. 01:36:472 (3) - ^, then, imo finish sound be better if adding in next note (4)

1. 00:00:632 (1) - add whistle? for give effect on intro song owo
2. 00:43:355 (4) - add whistle in beginning? you were add some in before sliders orz
3. 00:46:178 (4) - ^
4. 00:49:002 (4) - ^
5. 00:49:884 (1) - maybe, move this slider some grid to left? this slider border was a bit overlap with slider (4)
6. 01:27:825 (3) - sound clap in slidertick isn't fit with the song. the clap sound should in (4)..
7. 01:28:708 (1) - I guess this spinner should begin in red tick before 01:28:531 because the vocal begin in there 0.0

1. 00:00:632 (1) - same with normal diff, but in beginning
2. 00:28:708 (1,3) - nee, i guess more better if finish sound is heard in the next note (2,4). for following guitar effect. then, in here, add whistle. the sounds seems more better to me..
3. 00:52:531 (4) - add clap in here too? the drum sound still heard in here
4. 01:04:708 (4) - start the new combo in here and remove in the next note. because kiai time in the tail of this slider. kiai time usually begin with new combo for better effect-- beside that, this slider is already different from previous pattern
5. 01:06:825 (6) - from reason above, add new combo in here for make same combo set.
6. 01:16:002 (1) - why not add clap for drum sound? 0.0
7. 01:17:237 (3) - seems too near from (2). move 1 grid right for make same spacing

1. wait, you're the creator right? I guess more better if rename this diff into "Insane" for spesific about the diff-- well, this isn't gd then
2. 00:00:632 (1) - same with in normal diff
3. 00:05:032 (3,4) - well, since seems these slider aim to stacked with (2), why not stack this more properly with (2)?
4. 00:06:632 (5) - reduce 1/2 length of this slider, then add a reverse? for more following the vocal imo. like this
5. 00:17:943 (4) - add finish (soft) again in here, I can hear a bit cymbal sounder in here
6. 00:30:296 - change the volume in here into 50%? seems too loud in here
7. 00:30:119 (1,2,3) - this pattern make me confused orz.. too hard to see the (3) if below (1). I guess more easier if move (3) stacked in (4)'s beginning
8. 00:32:413 (6,7,8) - why triple in here? triplet in here isn't following the music orz. so, remove (7) is better
9. 00:32:943 (1,2,3) - here again, confusing ;A; consider to move (3) just stack in below (2)
10. 00:35:237 (9,10,11) - same with 00:32:413
11. 00:38:237 (4) - spacing? make consistent like (1,2,3). use 1.0x btw
12. 00:39:296 (3) - add finish in slider's end. following an effect in bg music 0.0 if you think too loud, just lower the volume lol
13. 00:57:119 (5) - curve this slider too? like before. weird to see in here-- curve to up like this
14. 00:58:355 (1) - .. forgot to add finish in beginning?
15. 01:02:237 (3) - ^ just add finish 0.0
16. 01:04:708 - use soft? for more quiet in here. using normal is a bit loud imo
17. 01:11:061 (1) - this slider a bit forcing curving. I suggest to change like this
    

    140,84,71061,6,0,B|160:20|240:20|256:88,1,160,4|8

1. 00:09:432 (4) - New combo here,to keep the consistency with the previous pattern.
2. 00:10:262 (5) - Place this at x:416 y:136? Imho,the flow would be better by doing this.
3. 00:17:062 - There is an unused inherited timing section here,please remove it
4. 00:18:472 - I suggest you to add a note with a clap here,since as now this part feels quite empty without it. (or you can move 00:17:414 (1) - 1/1 later if you want to do that in another way)
5. 01:24:472 (4) - By now it's better to allign this with 01:23:766 (3) - ,by moving it at x:200 y:296

1. 00:22:884 (4) - Add a finish at the start of the slider?
2. 00:57:649 (4) - Add a clap at the end of the slider? It would fit pretty good with the repeating drums >_<
   Really good Normal,I have to say! Good job

1. From 00:19:531 - to 00:20:943 - : I highly suggest you to change the rhythm in this way,instead of using a 1/1 rhythm:
   
   If you have some trouble on placing the notes with this rhythm change,you could put 00:20:061 (3) - at x:228 y:264,and you could do a pattern like this with 00:20:414 (4,5) -

1. 00:13:862 (4) - Put this at x:300 y:60?
2. 00:21:296 - Add a note here and move 00:21:296 (1) - 1/2 later,deleting 00:21:825 (2) - ? That would be really a better choice for rhythm here
3. 00:52:708 (1) - Put this at x:208 y:360,it's better to have a totally linear flow here instead of a turnaround.
4. 01:00:472 (1) - Move the new combo on 01:01:178 (2) - ,it follows the singer's voice in a better way
5. 01:06:649 (5) - Ctrl+R? Also,the central waypoint is totally useless,delete it
6. 01:10:178 (2) - Move this 1 grid right,to make the enitre pattern 01:10:178 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - a better shaped square-pattern
7. 01:11:766 (3) - 2 grids right and 1 down for the same reason as above
8. 01:35:766 (3,4,5) - Put them 1 grid right and up to make the blanket with 01:35:414 (2) - better

cRyo[iceeicee] wrote:

Hi Mikan~ :>


[Mikan]

SPOILER

1. 00:00:632 - 00:14:262 hmmm shouldt they use SC1/SC2 instead ?
2. 00:30:119 - 01:05:413 SC2 sounds better ?
   Actually i think all song should use soft sound with SC2 clap, N sound + N claps a bit heavy for this song.
   
3. 00:04:632 (2,3,4) - this i guess ? http://puu.sh/WdkC no change(´・ω・｀)
4. 00:10:262 (6) - NC for consistency with previous parts + changing bpm fixed(∩･ω･∩)
5. 00:14:262 (1) - mute spiner end plz fixed(∩･ω･∩)
6. 00:55:531 (2,3,4) - remove all repeats from sliders and do this instead ? http://puu.sh/Wdzx no change(´・ω・｀)
7. 00:59:766 (5) - end slider at 01:00:119 fixed(∩･ω･∩)
8. 01:02:061 (1,2,3,4,5) - this stream doesnt exist in music, use some easier pattern would be nice http://puu.sh/WdBo fixed(∩･ω･∩)
9. 01:04:884 (2) - remove note fixed(∩･ω･∩)
10. 01:15:119 (4) - finish on tail is quite loud....i think its better to remove it fixed(∩･ω･∩)
11. 01:28:002 (9) - theoretically NC should starts here, cause changing of music + kiai start fixed(∩･ω･∩)
12. 01:39:296 (1) - remove clap and increase volume for spiner end, fits with drum sound fixed(∩･ω･∩)

Good luck :3

cRyo[iceeicee] wrote:

Hi Mikan~ :>

[kajiyatta's Hard]

SPOILER

1. 00:28:708 (1,2,3,4) - remove all finishes and use SC2 70% clap for all notes no fixed
2. 00:32:943 (1,2,3) - maybe this ? http://puu.sh/WcNx fixed
3. 00:43:708 (6,7) - stack this notes and move it further from 00:44:237 (1) - because current spacing looks not intuitive fixed
4. 00:52:708 - 00:58:355 i dont understand why u decided to use 0.75x SV here, this part sounds even more lively then previous I think this changing of speed fits with music. but other modders menton that, I'll fix it.
5. 01:04:708 (1) - whistle head and arrow ? fixed
6. 01:08:943 (3,4,5) - 1.0 spacing plays much better instead of stacked jump http://puu.sh/WcSC fixed
7. 01:15:296 (5) - remove this note and add short repeat slider ? http://puu.sh/WcTs fits better for me no fixed
8. 01:39:296 (1) - use SV2 clap here and increase volume, match with BG drum sound it's so weak I think. so silent is better.

1. Use tick rate 2 in all difficulties?

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:55:884 (1) - How about putting a new combo here because this chain of combo is longer than others so add a new combo here can make it more consistent.
   2. 01:24:472 (4) - (design) My thought only, I would move this down a bit if I were you so that (2.3.4)- can be a equilateral triangle.
   3. 01:26:590 (1) - I didn't understand why a spinner was used here because the vocal still singing so there was no reason that a spinner is needed here, I would suggest using slider/circle here.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:20:237 (2) - Please remove the clap sound at the reverse of the slider because it ruins the hitsound flows. Instead, use a whistle instead of it, a whistle fits the music perfectly.
   2. 00:22:355 (1) - ^Same.

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 01:28:708 (1) - How about moving this spinner to 01:28:531 - and end at 01:30:472 - because the voice protraction start from 01:28:355 - so move it to 01:28:531 - can fit the voice more precisely.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:28:708 (1,2) - I have a idea here. How about removing the finish here and then change it to normal hitsound? I think it fits the music better in this way.
   2. 00:51:649 (4) - How about removing this finish sound because it doesn't fit the music imo, there is no accent or strong emotion so a finish sounds weird to me.
   3. 01:27:825 (3) - To fit your hitclap pattern, please remove the clap at the end of the slider and then add it on the next note.

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:37:531 (6) - I would suggest removing the jump here because you haven't add a jump at 00:32:943 - which is the same melody and this jump doesn't fit the music that much.
   2. 00:52:708 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - I am wondering why you would like to shorten the spacing here. Could you back to normal spacing like you place it before. The decrease of spacing is too sudden for me.
   3. 01:26:590 (1) - I would like to remove the spinner and map something here because the voice is still singing and there are no any kind of voice/instrument protraction, so I rather putting some notes here.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:14:262 (1) - How about turning the volume from 50% to 5% because there is no vocal and drum to support this or you can end the spinner at 00:16:662 - .
   2. 00:52:002 (3) - How about adding a clap sound at the reverse of the slider because I can hear a drum sound there.
   3. 01:02:766 (2,3,4) - I would like to add these a s1 clap if I were you to fit the drum sounds and back to s2 clap at 01:04:002 -
   4. 01:04:178 (2) - Add a clap here please.
   5. 01:16:178 (2) - ^

1. Difficulty setting
   (I suggest the difficulty setting for better gameplay.)
   
   1. How about OD-1?
2. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:11:062 (2,3) - A rhythmic suggest I would like to throw out here. How about removing (2.3)- and then put a 1/1 slider at 00:11:062 - to follow the voice.
   2. 01:04:002 (1,2,3) - I would make a 'big' jump here, remember it is a big jump not a 'huge' jump, I guess you will know the degree of jump.I throw out this suggestion because of the staccato.
   3. My thought: From what I have seen, you have put a lot of 1/2 in your map, they are fine in overall, but the map can be more fun if you can do more variety on rhythm, not only put 1/2 everywhere. Try to use some 1/1 ,diplet or even 5-plets. You may observe the drum/vocal or instrument to consider the rhythm. I'm expecting you become more mature in mapping!
3. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:00:632 ~ 00:17:062 - Please change it to soft-hitsound because normal hitsound sounds too noisy for such calm part. This is highly suggested!
   2. 00:17:062 - Change this green line to soft hitsound to avoid any kind of cacophony.
   3. 01:04:708 (1,2) - Probably place a whistle here due to the high-pitch part?

1. 00:17:414 (2) - How about changing it to big kat due to accent.
2. 00:26:413 (2) - I would like to change it back to don for a better flows.
3. 00:59:413 (5) - I think you should change this to kat to follow the drum since you mostly did this in your map.
4. Your map is becoming flawless!Good job!

1. 00:23:238 (1) - Remove the kat here and then add a kat at 00:23:414 (1) - to follow the drum sound.
2. 00:26:061 (1,1) - ^
3. 00:27:649 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,1) - I would like to ask why you would like to put a stream here? I found it didn't fit the music and it followed nothing imo. Therefore, reomved or simplified the stream were highly suggested.
4. 00:35:413 - Howe about adding a note here?
5. 00:38:237 - ^Same
6. 00:41:413 (3) - I would like to put a don here if I were you because the ptich here is lower than 00:41:237 - .
7. 00:51:472 (3,1,1,2,1,1) - ddk ddk here sounds better to me.
8. 01:32:237 (2,1,2,1,1,2) - I prefer ddd kdd here.
9. 01:37:884 (7,8,1,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,1) - This part sounds weird to me, especially the finish sounds. I would like to remove all notes here and then add some notes at 01:37:884 - (d), 01:38:061 - (d),01:38:413 - (k), 01:38:590 - (k), 01:38:943 - (big kat), 01:39:119 - (big kat). The bracket indicates the notes.

kanpakyin wrote:

Hi! hi

[General]

1. Use tick rate 2 in all difficulties? Ok

[Mikan]

1. Difficulty setting
   (I suggest the difficulty setting for better gameplay.)
   
   1. How about OD-1? Fixed
2. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:11:062 (2,3) - A rhythmic suggest I would like to throw out here. How about removing (2.3)- and then put a 1/1 slider at 00:11:062 - to follow the voice. Fixed
   2. 01:04:002 (1,2,3) - I would make a 'big' jump here, remember it is a big jump not a 'huge' jump, I guess you will know the degree of jump.I throw out this suggestion because of the staccato. Fixed
   3. My thought: From what I have seen, you have put a lot of 1/2 in your map, they are fine in overall, but the map can be more fun if you can do more variety on rhythm, not only put 1/2 everywhere. Try to use some 1/1 ,diplet or even 5-plets. You may observe the drum/vocal or instrument to consider the rhythm. I'm expecting you become more mature in mapping!
3. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:00:632 ~ 00:17:062 - Please change it to soft-hitsound because normal hitsound sounds too noisy for such calm part. This is highly suggested! Fixed
   2. 00:17:062 - Change this green line to soft hitsound to avoid any kind of cacophony. Fixed
   3. 01:04:708 (1,2) - Probably place a whistle here due to the high-pitch part? Fixed

That's it !Good luck.

Mikan wrote:

thanks for advice
but i think this map is my perfectly map now
so i don't re-map this
from next, i will challenge it

kanpakyin wrote:

I'm not telling you to remap, just give some advice to you and hope you can apply it in your next map.

kanpakyin wrote:

Hi!

[Restia's Taiko]

1. 00:23:238 (1) - Remove the kat here and then add a kat at 00:23:414 (1) - to follow the drum sound. no fixed
2. 00:26:061 (1,1) - ^ no fixed
3. 00:27:649 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,1) - I would like to ask why you would like to put a stream here? I found it didn't fit the music and it followed nothing imo. Therefore, reomved or simplified the stream were highly suggested. fixed to dddkd ddd d
4. 00:35:413 - Howe about adding a note here? added d
5. 00:38:237 - ^Same added k
6. 00:41:413 (3) - I would like to put a don here if I were you because the ptich here is lower than 00:41:237 - . fixed
7. 00:51:472 (3,1,1,2,1,1) - ddk ddk here sounds better to me. no fixed
8. 01:32:237 (2,1,2,1,1,2) - I prefer ddd kdd here. fixed
9. 01:37:884 (7,8,1,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,1) - This part sounds weird to me, especially the finish sounds. I would like to remove all notes here and then add some notes at 01:37:884 - (d), 01:38:061 - (d),01:38:413 - (k), 01:38:590 - (k), 01:38:943 - (big kat), 01:39:119 - (big kat). The bracket indicates the notes. fixed

That's it !Good luck.

-Baby Strawberry- wrote:

Hi sorry for the late mod...

Mikan

SPOILER

00:49:355 (8,2) - they are blocking Fixed!

Good luck~！

Kawayi Rika wrote:

Hi ~ Mikan ~ Hi

High Priority ready for mod ~



Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions

[Mikan]

1. 00:05:032 (3,4) - Why not stack on 00:03:832 (1) - end point? Fixed
2. 00:52:708 (1,3) - Try make more beautiful curved slider,like this. make it difficult to clean the slider ...
   
3. 01:02:855 (2) - Remove this circle sound better to me. Fixed
4. 01:11:943 (4) - Move to X:336 Y:88 and 01:11:061 (1) - move 1 grid up,make a Diamond. Fixed
5. 01:16:884 (1) - Slider should start to 01:16:708. Fixed
6. 01:22:708 (2) - Make a curved slider and ctrl+r,flow much better. Fixed
   
7. 01:31:266 (4) - This circle should move to 01:31:443. Fixed

Hope this can help you ~

Good luck with rank ~

-Sekai- wrote:

Mikan >A< you forgot to add "opening" in the tags~ done

lovhin456 wrote:

Hello Hellooo

[General]
- Inconsistency in audio lead-in, while others are 2000 KRZY's diff is 1500


[Mikan]
- Please change the diff's name to Mikan's Insane to be consistent Change the Insane
- 01:16:708 ~ New combo
- 01:37:531 ~ Remove the clap and add a soft finish

That's all, check my signature ^^

1. 00:00:632 (1,2) - Mh, well I think it would be better to use whistles following the vocal sound here. According to this remove whistle from (1) and add it on (2)'s head removing it from the tail
2. 00:03:032 (3) - Still following my suggestion above use whistle on this circle
3. 00:12:662 (1) - You should silence this slider's end adding a green line on 00:16:662 with 5% volume.
4. 00:17:414 (1) - Considering that you are following the drum sound here this slider follows an odd rhythm. I think that this one would fit the music much better, adding also 2 finishes on slider's head and tail and clap on (2) circle:
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 00:28:708 (2) - What about to use 2 finishes, one on the slider's head and one on the tail? They fit much better IMO
6. 00:38:237 (2) - Since the next pattern you used, I mean 00:38:590 (3,4,1,2,1) is enough hard to play I highly suggest you to remove this circle to keep an easier rhythm
7. 00:40:708 (2) - To emphasize the drum in the song add clap on this slider's head
8. 00:56:237 (2) - I'd remove this circle :\
9. 01:28:708 (1,2) - Remove claps? Claps should be on 01:29:061 and 01:29:766 indeed
10. 01:37:884 (1) - I'd use 2 finishes here, they would fit the music better

1. Considering the Easy's settings I'd reduce the HP and OD by 1 tick
2. 00:08:632 (2) - Whistle on this slider's head to fit the vocal
3. 00:10:262 (5) - ^
4. 00:13:462 (3) - Maybe whistle on this slider's head? It seems there is a missed sound there ):
5. 00:28:002 (2,3,1) - Too hard to play for a Normal. What about to use this rhythm instead? Easier and more enjoyable to play for beginners:
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 00:30:119 (1) - I'd increase this slider's head volume till 60%. Considering the previous volume with the next one it's too slow IMHO
7. 00:40:002 (3) - New combo? It'd be nice
8. 00:51:649 (4,5) - New combo if you have follow'd my suggestion above
9. 00:59:061 (2,3,1,2,3) - This pattern is ugly IMO :\ What about to make something like this instead?
   
   SPOILER

   
   
   

   24,271,60472,6,0,B|40:312|4:348,2,75
   68,256,61178,2,0,B|100:212|154:206,1,100,0|12,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
   300,267,61884,2,0,B|268:308|216:316,1,100,0|12,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

10. 01:02:590 (1) - Why this finish? It sounds too loud. You could use clap instead
11. 01:25:178 (1) - Remove new combo to keep consistency with 01:15:296 (5)
12. 01:37:178 (2,3,1) - Same of 00:28:002 (2,3,1) çwç

1. 00:00:632 (1) - Remove whistle from the slider's head. You just need to use it on the reverse arrow
2. 00:10:262 (5) - Whistle on the slider's head
3. 00:13:462 (3) - Add whistle

1. 00:08:632 (3) - Whistle
2. 00:10:262 (1) - Whistle on the slider's head
3. 00:13:462 (3) - Whistle
4. 01:01:531 (4,6) - I don't see any reason to decrease the volume of these 2 finishes. Use 65% like the others, it's really much better, please.
5. 01:02:855 - There should be a circle here to fit the stream and the drum's sound of the music
6. I don't like how this map flows, but, overall, it's enough okay.

Chewin wrote:

Hi Mikan, let's check this ;3 hi

[Lace's Easy]

1. 00:00:632 (1,2) - Mh, well I think it would be better to use whistles following the vocal sound here. According to this remove whistle from (1) and add it on (2)'s head removing it from the tail
2. 00:03:032 (3) - Still following my suggestion above use whistle on this circle
3. 00:12:662 (1) - You should silence this slider's end adding a green line on 00:16:662 with 5% volume.
4. 00:17:414 (1) - Considering that you are following the drum sound here this slider follows an odd rhythm. I think that this one would fit the music much better, adding also 2 finishes on slider's head and tail and clap on (2) circle:
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 00:28:708 (2) - What about to use 2 finishes, one on the slider's head and one on the tail? They fit much better IMO
6. 00:38:237 (2) - Since the next pattern you used, I mean 00:38:590 (3,4,1,2,1) is enough hard to play I highly suggest you to remove this circle to keep an easier rhythm
7. 00:40:708 (2) - To emphasize the drum in the song add clap on this slider's head
8. 00:56:237 (2) - I'd remove this circle :\
9. 01:28:708 (1,2) - Remove claps? Claps should be on 01:29:061 and 01:29:766 indeed
10. 01:37:884 (1) - I'd use 2 finishes here, they would fit the music better

[Insane]

1. 00:08:632 (3) - Whistle
2. 00:10:262 (1) - Whistle on the slider's head
3. 00:13:462 (3) - Whistle
4. 01:01:531 (4,6) - I don't see any reason to decrease the volume of these 2 finishes. Use 65% like the others, it's really much better, please.
5. 01:02:855 - There should be a circle here to fit the stream and the drum's sound of the music
6. I don't like how this map flows, but, overall, it's enough okay.

Call me back for a recheck then ~