1. Easy (2.71 stars, 101 notes)
2. Hard (4.84 stars, 186 notes)
3. Insane (5 stars, 303 notes)
4. kusano's Railgun (5 stars, 370 notes)
5. Normal (4.08 stars, 121 notes)

1. Tell the BATs to move title text to 00:13:459 - 00:18:459 -

1. 00:41:792 (3) - Could you make it look like http://puu.sh/2Ca6m ? looks better imo
2. 00:43:459 (1,3) - Not a pretty good overlap. Could you make it into slider bow http://puu.sh/2Ca9m
3. 00:51:792 (4,5) - To keep pattern consistency, could you change these into http://puu.sh/2CabA
4. Kiai part feels like Normal. How about converting some 1/1 sliders into 2/1 ones (what is 2/1?) like
5. 01:00:126 (4,5) - change 4 into 2/1 and add note on next white tick like this http://puu.sh/2CabA and there's a lot like these in this diff, please do the same ;3
6. 01:10:126 (3,4) - combine into one slider ;w; 6 circles is too much for easy
7. 01:23:459 (1) - Adding spinner here and a slider after it feels hard, I mean, beginners usually tends to spin widespreadly (not in the center like advanced players does) so could you remove the spinner here and map until 01:26:376 - . Spinner on 01:26:792 (1) - is enough in this diff imo

1. 00:18:251 (3,4) - Unstack please, it flows really weird
2. 00:25:126 (5) - Remove this note and start the spinner here. This plays hard on osu!mania because there were only 1/4 space on it, while this diff mostly mapped in 1/2 and 1/1, thus will shock beginners and lead them to miss
3. 00:42:626 - Add slider here until 00:43:042 - (just remove the circle)
4. 00:57:626 - Feels empty ;w; please add slider starts from here until 00:58:042 -
5. 01:00:126 (4,5) - Looks bad. Could you make it like http://puu.sh/2CaxQ
6. 01:23:459 (5,1) - See my mod point on Easy.

1. 00:13:459 (1,2) - Strange flow. How about http://puu.sh/2CaD3
2. 00:21:167 - Add note here, feels empty
3. 00:30:959 (3,1) - Could you please stack properly? ;w;
4. 00:35:751 (2,3) - Unstack please, it break flow pretty much
5. 01:00:126 (1,3) - Ugly =w= could you make slider bow instead
6. 01:16:792 (1,3) - These shouldn't be overlapped, you can only overlap 1/1 sliders with 1/1 sliders again, not with a shorter one, if you wanna make a nice overlap. This one looks ugly.
7. 01:19:501 - Add note please

1. 00:23:876 (3,4) - Switch place so it flows better
2. 00:39:084 - Add note here, it'll be okay and it keep polarity fixed up
3. 00:41:792 (1,2,3) - This jump is really weird and doesn't make any sense. Consider mapping it in a normal way with normal spacing. In short, it's not fitting to place a jump here, or at least with these sliders.
4. 00:57:417 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14) - Looks ugly >.<
   
   here, make it look better

   100,156,57417,1,4,0:0:0:0:
   120,120,57521,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   152,96,57626,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   192,88,57730,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   232,96,57834,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   264,120,57938,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   292,148,58042,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   332,160,58146,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   372,160,58251,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   412,148,58355,1,0,0:0:0:0:

5. 01:21:792 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Flows reeal bad. Here, arrange them like this http://puu.sh/2Cb6t

• Fine

1. 01:10:126 (1,2,3) - Consider following vocal at 01:10:126 01:10:438 01:10:751 ?
2. 01:25:959 (1) - Maybe move a bit further from the spinner center? The hitburst is smaller now but the light produced by kiai is still a lot, besides people might be using older skins, or haven't got used to it yet.

1. 01:25:959 (1) - Same as Normal

1. 00:33:042 (4) - To me it feels better if it starts at 00:33:146 ...?
2. 00:39:188 (2) - Feels a bit strange here as almost all your other patterns start on 1/2 beats, consider a circle at 00:39:084 ?
3. 00:43:042 (2) - Not properly stacked x:175 y:270 (I really miss DS 0.0x....)
4. 01:01:167 (4,5,6) - Maybe place clap on 01:01:376 (6) - , or move 01:01:376 (6) - to 01:01:480, it feels more natural considering the rhythm pattern

1. Add "opening" to tags.
2. Ranking Guidlines suggest one spinner, but it's all up to you.
3. 00:03:251 (10,1) - Maybe reverse for pitch?
4. 00:10:959 (6,7,8,9,10) - Should be 1/6 here according to the synth. If you're concerned about difficulty, maybe consider sliders.
5. 00:36:063 (4,5) - Whistles? There are kicks in the music
6. 01:13:771 (2) - Maybe remove head whistle?
7. 01:24:501 (7) - Move to 01:24:605 maybe?

1. The BG is 498 KB... Might as well try to reduce the size to ~200 KB to make the beatmap's package smaller? Having the .osz 300 KB smaller sounds good for me.

1. 00:11:792 - I really think this needs to be replaced with a finish, because the music has some kind of heavy sound there... Normal (and maybe other diffs?) has it there anyway.
2. 00:22:626 (4) - Ctrl+J? The flow is not really good with the current placement, IMO.
3. 00:48:459 (3,1) - Spacing inconsistency?
4. 00:56:792 - Whistle? It fits the sound on the music, IMO.
5. 00:57:417 - ^
6. 01:06:792 (3,4) - Uh, make the blanket better (second node at (360,176) and the last one at (396,80))?
7. 01:10:126 (3) - Don't think this one needs a finish; I'd rather use the default Soft sample's whistle instead.
8. 01:10:959 (5) - Remove the finish on the head, replace it with a whistle, and then put whistle on the entire body? Feels far better like that, for me. (The hitsound suggestions here apply on other diffs, and this note also applies for all diffs.)

1. 00:00:126 (1,2,1,2) - Not really sure about these sliders... 3/4 sliders that repeats three times might be confusing and throw off the players.
2. 00:19:917 - Remove the clap? Doesn't sound very good there.
3. 00:42:417 - Add clap here? This seems to be a fitting place for it.
4. 00:58:042 - You mapped this spot on Easy, so why don't try to add a circle here?
5. 01:18:251 - Remove clap? Reason's the same as 00:19:917.

1. 00:06:792 (1) - ...This seriously needs to use finish instead of whistle. It's blatanly obvious after listening to the music here.
2. 00:40:959 (3,4) - ...It's weird to see the two sliders looking different (one is linear and straight; one is curved). Stick to one shape?
3. 01:20:126 (4,1) - Swap NC and maybe make the rhythm look like this?

1. 00:03:042 (4,5,1,2) - I don't really like the flow here. It feels really awkward... This goes far nicer, IMO.
2. 00:18:459 (1,2,3,4,5) - The flow here is weird too, but TBH I don't really know why. I have tested it a dozen times, and yes, it felt very odd here. I just don't know what's happening here.
3. 00:24:501 (2,4) - The flow is better if these two notes are Ctrl+H/Ctrl+G (they produce the same effect here)'d.
4. 00:39:084 - Add a circle and stack it above 00:39:188 (2)'s head?
5. 01:10:959 (1,2,3,4) - Whoa, whoa. These jumps are totally unexpected and the flow is not very good themselves...

1. 00:57:626 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - I think the spacing should be smaller (0.5x) first, and then switches to the larger spacing (0.9x). Goes better with the song, really...

1. 00:25:438 (3) - 2 notes here ww http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/709791
2. 00:26:299 - add stream here! http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/709793
3. 00:28:459 (1,2,3,4) - i think this one is not necessary, too many notes, just make it like 00:28:042 (6) - this part
4. 00:33:042 (7) - spacing is too small, you need 1.0x http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/709797
5. 01:03:563 - remove this note, or slider for 01:03:459 (3) - is better to rhythm http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/709799
6. 01:15:126 (1) - 3/4
7. 01:16:792 (3) - a slider http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/709801
8. 01:23:042 (6) - ctrl+G wwwww

1. 00:22:626 (3) - 1/2 slider 0,0
2. 00:32:417 (1) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/709817

1. ok

1. 00:11:792 (1,2,3) - better use slider o.o
2. 00:43:042 (4) - this rhythm ww http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/709826

1. 00:40:126 - 00:49:709 - this section slider tick sounds can be removed o.o

1. BGsizeが大きい気がします。1024x768で200kb以内におさめてみました。よければお使いください。http://puu.sh/2CiHk
   

• 
  fine

1. 00:18:251 (3) - 00:18:459 (4) - の始端とStackせずに00:21:584 (3,4) - のように流す感じの方が私は好きです。

1. 00:09:709 (4) - 00:09:292 (3) - の終端とStackせずに00:10:959 (3,4) - のように配置?

1. 00:17:417 (2,3,4) - こちらの音取りの方が私は好きです。 http://puu.sh/2Cjgs

• 
  fine

0,0,"BG.jpg",0,0

1. 00:43:459 (1,2,3) - Try to avoid such overlaps on the easiest difficulty of the mapset since they could confuse beginners.
2. 01:25:959 (1) - I don't really like where you've placed this slider, try to place it like this instead.
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1. 00:11:792 (1,2,3) - This pattern is a bit tricky for a Normal, I would suggest you to make them into a slider instead.
2. 00:19:292 (5) - This slider is touching the HP Bar, try to move it down a bit if possible.

1. 01:25:751 (1,2) - It would be better to not completely center these objects after spinner, because of the previous hitburst.

1. 00:18:876 (3) - Add a clap on this slider, it feels like you're missing it if you listen to the music carefully.
2. 00:57:417 (5) - I'd suggest you to add a new combo here, otherwise it would be too long.

1. Add at least a spinner on this difficulty for avoid having same scores on listing.

1. 00:40:126 (1) - This slider is touching the HP Bar, try to move it down a bit if possible.
2. 00:44:709 (5) - Same as above for the same reason.
3. 01:01:584 (5) - Same for this circle, move it down a bit.
4. 01:12:834 (5) - Same as above for the same reason.

Pokie wrote:

• 
  Red: Unrankable issues or Highly recommended
  Black: Opinions

　General

1. _(:3 」∠)_Using default combo color isn't a good choice, even though we've an entirely new default skin set with reconfigured combo colors, I would still recommend for adding a custom combo color set. ok!
2. _(:3 」∠)_ "The video's audio track must be removed from the video file. The audio track in video is not used in osu!, so removing it reduces that filesize of the beatmap." とランキングルールがそう言いました まじか
   
3. Tags: Toaru Majitsu no Index Kinsho Mokuroku あとなんか入れよう！！思いつかない。 _(:3 」∠)_

　Insane

• 00:09:396 (4) - Missing a whistle on this slider's head? I didn't miss anything here but it makes sense so added (Not tsundere)
  00:11:376 (2) - Feel empty without hitsounding on this slider, at least add two whistles at 00:11:376 - and 00:11:584 - ? (slider's head and the 3rd repeat) Applied only to 00:11:376 - , waay too noisy if I added two.
  00:27:626 (3) - Current rhythm isn't the most proper one imo, how about trying to shorten this slider by 1/4, move it 1/4 forward 00:27:730 - . And fill the blank space 00:27:626 - with a circle: okke
  
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  00:41:792 (1) - Last repeat of this slider is deviate from the music rhythm, I'll suggest to cut it off, and add two circles at 00:42:626 - and 00:42:834 - I tried something like that but the current one feels much better to me so yeah. Same for Hard.
  
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  00:45:334 (1) - This note sounds unnecessary to me ;_; Probably my own problem but I get a miss for a few times here (flees) Removed~~
  01:01:063 - Clapclapclapclap is needed here! (inb4 no) Use the same rhythm with this part? 00:15:959 (3,4,5,6,7) - okkk

Offsetがちょっと遅かったと思う（Insaneテストプレイで-7~8msくらい / Hardは -7~12ms）、それと、ある謎のプログラムに測定してみたら、結果は-13msでした。中間値を取ると116 (-10ms) がいいと思う_(:3 」∠)_
Timing sectionのresnapを忘れないよう！ Fixed~~

あとはくさのさんのInsaneについて、昨日の言った通り、自分の考えだけですが、この難易度はまだ準備が出来てないと見えました。日本語で言うのはちょっと苦手だけど、この曲にhuge spacingを使うのがちょっとやりすぎたのです、コーラスパートのジャンプ配置、流れとスペーシングもまだ最善ではないと思う(´･ω･`)
なのでこのままランクさせたいというのなら、ranking progressが遅くなるです。難易度をMapsetから消すか、それとも今のままで維持し、Moddingを集めるか。そこはわたしが干渉できない範囲ですから、めろさんに任せた。このままでいきまーす。

最後に自分のスコアです： (リプレイ)

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_(:3 」∠)_ 88881 <=　惜しかったよねこれ

1. 00:19:907 (5,1) - I can accept some of these random spacing changes which are fun to play but this spacing is misleading and even if it's playable it shouldn't be used. Reduce the spacing to the previous 1/4 spacing you've been using until now
2. 00:38:761 (2,3,4) - Same here ^
3. 01:10:115 (1,2,3) - ^
4. 01:13:449 (1,2,3,4) - Same here, I don't understand why did you increase the spacing between these objects, it seems unnecessary and misleading as I said before. You need to try and be more consistent with jumps and spacing variations.
5. I find spacing "acceleration" (referring to "increasing spacing for some parts in the map") fun to play and a nice mapping technique when it's properly used, while going through this diff I've noticed that there are some unjustified spacing changes, I'm not talking about jumps, I'm talking about how 1/2 or 1/4 varies from pattern to pattern. You need to spend a little more time designing patterns so these changes can be consistent and fit the music, try to place your jumps or slow-downs on specific places where there's a vocal or rhythmical variation, like this pattern 01:25:116 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - this one is perfectly constructed and the spacing changes make sense, try to do more of "these". Otherwise, sure, it's "fun" and "challenging" to play but not a good mapping practice, in my opinion. Overall the diff looks okay except for some misleading spacing.

1. 00:09:074 (3,4) - The first time I played this pattern, I could see that there's just a little time to notice that (4) is not a circle but a slider due to the previous objects covering it. If it's possible, try to re-arrange this pattern so (4)'s slider-body is a little more visible.
2. 00:26:782 (1) - New Combo is missing here, post-spinner bug.
3. 00:41:782 (1,2,3,4,5) - Whoops, this pattern. The switch from 1/4 to 1/1 with the stack it's quite misleading, I strongly suggest to unstack the stream
4. 00:41:782 (1) - I'm not completely sure about this slider... I believe you could try something different to what you used on [Hard], something that would follow the music in a more accurately way.
5. Pretty good, I enjoyed this diff :3

1. 01:25:741 (1,2) - Just a minor observation, this Blue combo blends with the previous spinner, try a colourhax in order to fix this, just to be sure.

1. 00:19:907 (5,1) - I can accept some of these random spacing changes which are fun to play but this spacing is misleading and even if it's playable it shouldn't be used. Reduce the spacing to the previous 1/4 spacing you've been using until now
2. 00:38:761 (2,3,4) - Same here ^
3. 01:10:115 (1,2,3) - ^
4. 01:13:449 (1,2,3,4) - Same here, I don't understand why did you increase the spacing between these objects, it seems unnecessary and misleading as I said before. You need to try and be more consistent with jumps and spacing variations.
5. I find spacing "acceleration" (referring to "increasing spacing for some parts in the map") fun to play and a nice mapping technique when it's properly used, while going through this diff I've noticed that there are some unjustified spacing changes, I'm not talking about jumps, I'm talking about how 1/2 or 1/4 varies from pattern to pattern. You need to spend a little more time designing patterns so these changes can be consistent and fit the music, try to place your jumps or slow-downs on specific places where there's a vocal or rhythmical variation, like this pattern 01:25:116 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - this one is perfectly constructed and the spacing changes make sense, try to do more of "these". Otherwise, sure, it's "fun" and "challenging" to play but not a good mapping practice, in my opinion. Overall the diff looks okay except for some misleading spacing.

Gonzvlo wrote:

|Insane|

1. 00:09:074 (3,4) - The first time I played this pattern, I could see that there's just a little time to notice that (4) is not a circle but a slider due to the previous objects covering it. If it's possible, try to re-arrange this pattern so (4)'s slider-body is a little more visible. This was why I moved (4) slightly. Now I think it's readable enough; Also actually I don't want to change it to something else cause I can't think of new pattern which plays better than the current. So if possible I want to keep it as it is.
2. 00:26:782 (1) - New Combo is missing here, post-spinner bug. Sure, fixed.
3. 00:41:782 (1,2,3,4,5) - Whoops, this pattern. The switch from 1/4 to 1/1 with the stack it's quite misleading, I strongly suggest to unstack the stream All 1/4s are unstacked so I assumed it's not confusing.. but apparenlty you think otherwise. I don't know if it's actually confusing but I asked some players to test this difficulty and no one had trouble reading it. So I think it's readable enough for Insane-players.
4. 00:41:782 (1) - I'm not completely sure about this slider... I believe you could try something different to what you used on [Hard], something that would follow the music in a more accurately way. It was originally different and following the bass-drum. But after several testplays I found it a bit weird and didn't sound great either. So I made it like now and it gives me a perfect feeling now.
5. Pretty good, I enjoyed this diff :3 Good to hear that. Thanks :3

|Hard|

1. 01:25:741 (1,2) - Just a minor observation, this Blue combo blends with the previous spinner, try a colourhax in order to fix this, just to be sure. Fixed.

It seems like Pokie mentioned something about the source and once again, I can't understand, damn you Pokie :c
As I said before, overall, pretty good!

1. The source should be "To Aru Kagaku no Railgun S"

1. 00:41:782 (3) - Wrong hitsounding here. You should add the custom slider tick on the first tick removing the clap from this slider's reverse arrow
2. 01:25:949 (1) - I can hear a sound on the 01:26:261 tick. What about to reduce this slider till there adding a repeat that makes the slider end on the current red tick? http://puu.sh/2GJAw.jpg (I noticed later that you applied this on the normal diff xD I don't see a problem to set it here as well since this is a slider and repeating slider on 1/4 tick doesn't hurt so much)

1. 01:06:782 (1) - I don't think this new combo is really needed, especially because you didn't use it on 01:20:116 (5) that has the same vocal rhythm. You should remove it to keep consistency with this next part then ;3
2. 01:13:240 (3,4) - (nazi) move these two circles to stack the (4) with 01:11:782 (1)'s head? Actually it looks ugly IMO

1. I would decrease OD by 1 tick (maybe HP as well)
2. 00:27:199 (1,3) - You forgot to add claps on these two sliders' heads, I guess ;3 You should add them to fill those sounds in the music :3
3. 00:54:074 (2) - What about make a triple here? I feel this rhythm fits better here because it would fill all the vocal sounds in the music: http://puu.sh/2GJNk.jpg or maybe: http://puu.sh/2GJOm.jpg I think both fit better than the actual long slider

1. 00:14:699 (3) - This is just a small suggestion. In my opinion this slider would flow muuuch better if you decided to make it less curved. Something like: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/721204
2. 00:19:699 (6) - I would place this slider closer to the previous one, maybe at x:208 y:132
3. 00:28:449 (1,5,9) - What about to add some finishes on those two circles and on (9)'s slider head? They sound pretty nice in my opinion, also to distinguish them from the other streaming circles
4. 00:41:782 (1,2) - Actually I felt this pattern very awkward to play when I tested it, really. What about to use this pattern filling each sound in the music with adding those elements? This is muuch better, believe me:
   
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   44,268,41782,6,0,P|112:284|174:270,1,135
   236,136,42407,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   160,72,42616,2,0,P|140:116|144:160,1,90

5. 00:58:032 (7) - Clap

1. 00:33:241 (7,1) - You are using jumps on the whole map why don't you use it here as well? This part (also because of that new combo) would be much better to play if you decided to make the spacing larger
2. 00:44:699 (5) - Move this slider (or the whole pattern) some grid down because actually it touches hp bar and it's ugly
3. 00:51:782 (6) - New combo?
4. 01:01:574 (5) - Same of the first point, move it some grid down
5. 01:10:115 (1,2,3,4) - I don't get this part, I don't get the reason you used this rhythm with all those sliders that start on the blue tick with no sounds in the music. The rhythm should be easier, like: http://puu.sh/2GK7U.jpg

1. 00:04:282 (6,7,8,9,10) - This plays quite good actually, but I really don't like the jumps you have done there, considering that the progression starts at 00:04:699 - , and that this pattern doesen't really follow it. I would recommend instead another option, using a square pattern, plus a triangular pattern as a jump to go with 00:05:116 (1,2,3,4,5) - . It is really fun to play as it follows the oval flow there quite good, and it follows how the synth's progressing there! Here's what I have done, see if you like it!
   
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   268,188,3657,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   268,188,3761,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   144,148,3970,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   144,148,4074,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   104,268,4282,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   104,268,4386,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   228,296,4595,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   228,296,4699,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   236,84,4907,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   36,160,5116,5,2,0:0:0:0:
   20,284,5324,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   20,284,5428,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   112,368,5636,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   112,368,5741,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   236,376,5949,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   236,376,6053,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   336,300,6261,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   336,300,6366,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   312,176,6574,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   312,176,6782,6,0,P|268:156|212:148,1,105,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

2. 00:25:116 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Huh... Why are you using these doublets in the red ticks instead of using the downbeats? It doesen't really go well with the music, on the countrary it sounds quite strange and it kinda breaks your rhythmical pattern here... If you want to use some doublets, then use them at 00:25:949 - and at 00:26:261 - : it will go a whole lot better, other than fitting pretty good in the song! Here's a pattern I have done following this suggestion, see if you like it!
   
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   196,88,25116,5,4,0:0:0:0:
   160,184,25324,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   160,184,25428,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   160,184,25532,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   316,88,25741,1,4,0:0:0:0:
   284,268,25949,6,0,L|277:215,1,52.5,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   160,184,26261,2,0,L|153:236,1,52.5,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   208,320,26574,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   252,144,26782,5,4,0:0:0:0:

3. 00:32:407 (4) - Well, even if this slider DOES follow the vocal held there, the instrumental transition with this slider seemed kinda off to me, I expected instead some notes being played there, as they could go on really nicely, considering that you could rearrange the whole pattern as well to make it flow really smoothly! Here, I have rearranged the pattern using a triangular jump: see if you like it!
   
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   324,132,32407,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   440,84,32616,5,2,0:0:0:0:
   440,84,32720,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   252,40,32928,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   252,40,33032,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   304,228,33241,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   172,264,33449,6,0,P|98:230|56:167,1,157.5,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   43,118,33866,1,10,0:0:0:0:

4. 00:37:824 (4) - Not a really big deal here, though I would really modify this by tweaking it a bit, changing its rotation and putting it at x:276 y:44 : it's a really little thing, but anyways it smooths out the oval flow you have there, started from 00:37:199 (2) - ! Here's what I have done once again, see if you like it!
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   372,220,37199,2,0,P|428:228|472:204,1,105,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   392,96,37616,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   276,44,37824,2,0,P|223:54|188:92,2,105,0|10|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   392,96,38449,5,4,0:0:0:0:

5. 00:41:782 (1) - Actually, the whistle you have currently put on 00:42:199 (2) - should be used at the end of this slider, instead... I can clearly hear that the kicks are 3/4 here, so following them by using a 1/1 whistle pattern doesen't really make sense, imho... I would rather remove the whistle from 00:42:199 (2) - and add it at the end of this slider.
6. 00:48:865 (7,8) - Well, I really didn't like how the oval flow started there continued with 00:49:282 (8) - ... It seems quite forced and it doesn't really go that smooth there, considering the way you have structured the whole pattern. What about instead tweaking the pattern so that 00:49:282 (8) - goes on a circular track continuing perfectly 00:48:865 (7) - 's oval flow, maybe by making 00:50:116 (1) - go upwards as well? Here's what I have done, see if you like it!
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   412,72,48032,2,0,P|464:60|512:80,1,105,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   344,256,48449,2,0,P|272:224|188:232,1,157.5,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   148,260,48865,2,0,P|96:272|48:252,1,105,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   48,76,49282,2,0,P|104:112|96:204,1,157.5,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   40,152,49699,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   188,68,49907,2,0,L|184:24,3,26.25
   200,104,50116,6,0,P|263:123|328:58,1,157.5
   332,16,50532,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   440,116,50740,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   492,196,50949,2,0,P|512:268|484:352,1,157.5,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

7. 00:59:907 (7) - I could understand the reasoning behind putting this circle in the current position, but as now it feels really uncomfortable to play imho, and I think you should definitely "stabilize" your jump by simply putting this circle at x:172 y:268. If you still want to keep the spacing increasing there, then you could use this pattern instead:
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   8,236,59490,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   144,112,59699,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   256,332,59907,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   248,204,60115,6,0,B|320:196|320:196|356:248|424:232,1,188.999994232178,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

8. 01:03:449 (3) - While I could understand your point on using a New Combo at 01:03:032 (1) - to warn about the big jump used there, what about putting a new combo as well here, as there is a new vocal phrase and as it totally follws your New Combo pattern? It would fit pretty good actually... Remember that the same applies for 01:16:782 (3) - !
9. 01:22:616 (5,6) - One last thing, though I am being really nitpicky here: what about reversing 01:23:032 (6) - , using CTRL+G? I really like how the opposed sliders work there, considering 01:23:032 (6) - 's angle it would continue 01:22:616 (5) - 's oval flow in a really nice way, as you have done in other patterns as well! Here, if you want to fix I have reorganized the next patterns as well:
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   360,228,83032,2,0,P|296:228|240:252,1,125.999996154785,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   324,344,83449,5,4,0:0:0:0:
   360,228,83657,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   360,228,83761,2,0,L|356:140,1,62.9999980773926,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   192,304,84074,1,4,0:0:0:0:
   92,228,84282,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   96,200,84386,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   100,172,84491,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   208,108,84699,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   276,280,84907,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   436,184,85116,5,4,0:0:0:0:

-kevincela- wrote:

Hey! Chewin linked me a few days ago this map, saying that kusano's diff might need some work before ranking. I got quite curious, so now I am modding it to say what I didn't really like in your diff. Feel free not to give the kudosu, as I'm just modding this diff!

[kusano's Railgun]

1. 00:04:282 (6,7,8,9,10) - This plays quite good actually, but I really don't like the jumps you have done there, considering that the progression starts at 00:04:699 - , and that this pattern doesen't really follow it. I would recommend instead another option, using a square pattern, plus a triangular pattern as a jump to go with 00:05:116 (1,2,3,4,5) - . It is really fun to play as it follows the oval flow there quite good, and it follows how the synth's progressing there! Here's what I have done, see if you like it!fixed.
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   268,188,3657,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   268,188,3761,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   144,148,3970,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   144,148,4074,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   104,268,4282,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   104,268,4386,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   228,296,4595,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   228,296,4699,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   236,84,4907,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   36,160,5116,5,2,0:0:0:0:
   20,284,5324,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   20,284,5428,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   112,368,5636,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   112,368,5741,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   236,376,5949,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   236,376,6053,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   336,300,6261,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   336,300,6366,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   312,176,6574,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   312,176,6782,6,0,P|268:156|212:148,1,105,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

2. 00:25:116 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Huh... Why are you using these doublets in the red ticks instead of using the downbeats? It doesen't really go well with the music, on the countrary it sounds quite strange and it kinda breaks your rhythmical pattern here... If you want to use some doublets, then use them at 00:25:949 - and at 00:26:261 - : it will go a whole lot better, other than fitting pretty good in the song! Here's a pattern I have done following this suggestion, see if you like it!fixed.
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   196,88,25116,5,4,0:0:0:0:
   160,184,25324,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   160,184,25428,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   160,184,25532,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   316,88,25741,1,4,0:0:0:0:
   284,268,25949,6,0,L|277:215,1,52.5,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   160,184,26261,2,0,L|153:236,1,52.5,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   208,320,26574,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   252,144,26782,5,4,0:0:0:0:

3. 00:32:407 (4) - Well, even if this slider DOES follow the vocal held there, the instrumental transition with this slider seemed kinda off to me, I expected instead some notes being played there, as they could go on really nicely, considering that you could rearrange the whole pattern as well to make it flow really smoothly! Here, I have rearranged the pattern using a triangular jump: see if you like it!no change. I feel like current pattern are good enough.
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   324,132,32407,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   440,84,32616,5,2,0:0:0:0:
   440,84,32720,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   252,40,32928,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   252,40,33032,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   304,228,33241,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   172,264,33449,6,0,P|98:230|56:167,1,157.5,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   43,118,33866,1,10,0:0:0:0:

4. 00:37:824 (4) - Not a really big deal here, though I would really modify this by tweaking it a bit, changing its rotation and putting it at x:276 y:44 : it's a really little thing, but anyways it smooths out the oval flow you have there, started from 00:37:199 (2) - ! Here's what I have done once again, see if you like it!fixed.
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   372,220,37199,2,0,P|428:228|472:204,1,105,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   392,96,37616,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   276,44,37824,2,0,P|223:54|188:92,2,105,0|10|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   392,96,38449,5,4,0:0:0:0:

5. 00:41:782 (1) - Actually, the whistle you have currently put on 00:42:199 (2) - should be used at the end of this slider, instead... I can clearly hear that the kicks are 3/4 here, so following them by using a 1/1 whistle pattern doesen't really make sense, imho... I would rather remove the whistle from 00:42:199 (2) - and add it at the end of this slider.ok.
6. 00:48:865 (7,8) - Well, I really didn't like how the oval flow started there continued with 00:49:282 (8) - ... It seems quite forced and it doesn't really go that smooth there, considering the way you have structured the whole pattern. What about instead tweaking the pattern so that 00:49:282 (8) - goes on a circular track continuing perfectly 00:48:865 (7) - 's oval flow, maybe by making 00:50:116 (1) - go upwards as well? Here's what I have done, see if you like it! no change. I like current pattern than yours.
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   412,72,48032,2,0,P|464:60|512:80,1,105,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   344,256,48449,2,0,P|272:224|188:232,1,157.5,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   148,260,48865,2,0,P|96:272|48:252,1,105,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   48,76,49282,2,0,P|104:112|96:204,1,157.5,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   40,152,49699,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   188,68,49907,2,0,L|184:24,3,26.25
   200,104,50116,6,0,P|263:123|328:58,1,157.5
   332,16,50532,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   440,116,50740,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   492,196,50949,2,0,P|512:268|484:352,1,157.5,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

7. 00:59:907 (7) - I could understand the reasoning behind putting this circle in the current position, but as now it feels really uncomfortable to play imho, and I think you should definitely "stabilize" your jump by simply putting this circle at x:172 y:268. If you still want to keep the spacing increasing there, then you could use this pattern instead: no change. I like current pattern than yours.
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   8,236,59490,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   144,112,59699,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   256,332,59907,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   248,204,60115,6,0,B|320:196|320:196|356:248|424:232,1,188.999994232178,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

8. 01:03:449 (3) - While I could understand your point on using a New Combo at 01:03:032 (1) - to warn about the big jump used there, what about putting a new combo as well here, as there is a new vocal phrase and as it totally follws your New Combo pattern? It would fit pretty good actually... Remember that the same applies for 01:16:782 (3) - ! fixed.
9. 01:22:616 (5,6) - One last thing, though I am being really nitpicky here: what about reversing 01:23:032 (6) - , using CTRL+G? I really like how the opposed sliders work there, considering 01:23:032 (6) - 's angle it would continue 01:22:616 (5) - 's oval flow in a really nice way, as you have done in other patterns as well! Here, if you want to fix I have reorganized the next patterns as well: no change. I like current pattern than yours.
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   360,228,83032,2,0,P|296:228|240:252,1,125.999996154785,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   324,344,83449,5,4,0:0:0:0:
   360,228,83657,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   360,228,83761,2,0,L|356:140,1,62.9999980773926,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   192,304,84074,1,4,0:0:0:0:
   92,228,84282,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   96,200,84386,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   100,172,84491,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   208,108,84699,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   276,280,84907,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   436,184,85116,5,4,0:0:0:0:

And that's all from me! Good luck with your map, I hope I have helped you for now

cRyo[iceeicee] wrote:

Gravephobia >:

cRyo[iceeicee] wrote:

Gravephobia >:

1. I guess the source being "Toaru" and not "To Aru" would mean that all of the ranked maps are wrong. Hmmm.

1. 00:13:032 (7,8,9) - I'd like it if you could match the 00:12:199 (3,4) jump with a little more spacing to the stream here. It feels like the stream is too close.
   
   Example

   
2. 00:13:449 (1,2) - I can't really hear what this rhythm is following, it's confusing in play. I'd prefer that you use the same rhythm as 00:16:782 (1,2,3,4) to follow vocals. Try to extend the 1 and have a circle at 00:13:866.
   
   Image

   
3. 00:18:032 (6,7,1) - A bit strange the flow into the 1. Try placing the 6 around (336,16) instead. It provides a more comfortable flow imo.
   
   Example

   
4. 00:24:491 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1) - I'd really like to see more spacing here as the music gets more intense. I don't think using Kevin's code was such a good idea because this section feels out of place in the map IMO. The rhythm is good, but you need more spacing between the 00:25:949 (1,2,3,1) especially. Try to rework this a bit.
   
   Example

   Just an example here. You could move the 2 more upwards and the 3 more downwards and to the left.
   
5. 00:35:116 (1) - Remove finish from the head, it is not supported by a finish in the music and is breaking your pattern here it seems.
   
6. 01:03:449 (1,2) - I want less spacing to the double. The reach feels a bit too far. Less of a jump feels more fitting with vocals imo and more consistent with 01:16:365 (1,2,1,2). Try around (435,364).
   
   Example

   

1. 00:38:449 (1,2) - It's difficult to understand the switch to 1/4 on the 2, players will want to hit the 2 as if it were at 00:39:074. Try to make a little more spacing between the 1 and 2, it will be easier to read, like the 00:34:595 (4,5).
   
2. 00:41:782 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - This is really difficult to understand. The 1 having an extra repeat makes it end on the blue tick 00:42:720 which isn't hitting with anything in the song because the bass transition switches to 1/2 at that point. I highly suggest remove a repeat from the 1 and add a circle 00:42:616 and 00:42:824 to follow the music.
   
   Example

   
3. 00:57:407 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - It would be much nicer i we didn't start streaming until 00:57:616 where the bass stream starts in the music. I think you could have a 1/4 slider at 00:57:407 to follow the pattern from 00:56:782 (1,2,3,4) and use it to kick off the stream:
   
   Example

   

1. 00:41:782 (1) - Same as Insane, the extra repeat doesn't make any sense because the bass begins to hit in 1/2 there. Please remove the repeat and add some circles.

1. 00:56:782 (1) - How about deleting this and placing a spinner from here until 00:58:032? I think it might fill this awkward (imo) from 00:57:407 to the downbeat when the music is so intense. This portion is even mapped in the easy diff.
   
   Example

   
   Or you could try extending the 1 like in the easy:
   
   I feel either would be much better.

UnitedWeSin wrote:

I always knew I'd be the one to bubble this map, somehow.

Mostly just suggestions~

[General]

1. I guess the source being "Toaru" and not "To Aru" would mean that all of the ranked maps are wrong. Hmmm. i'm sure the current one is correct considering its meaning. Pokie and MiLu are comfirming and wikipedia says it is "Toaru" too.

[Insane]

1. 00:38:449 (1,2) - It's difficult to understand the switch to 1/4 on the 2, players will want to hit the 2 as if it were at 00:39:074. Try to make a little more spacing between the 1 and 2, it will be easier to read, like the 00:34:595 (4,5). Good point. :3
   
2. 00:41:782 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - This is really difficult to understand. The 1 having an extra repeat makes it end on the blue tick 00:42:720 which isn't hitting with anything in the song because the bass transition switches to 1/2 at that point. I highly suggest remove a repeat from the 1 and add a circle 00:42:616 and 00:42:824 to follow the music. Actually it was originally like that, but i changed it because it felt awkward to me. the current one somewhat sounds better to me.
   
   Example

   
3. 00:57:407 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - It would be much nicer i we didn't start streaming until 00:57:616 where the bass stream starts in the music. I think you could have a 1/4 slider at 00:57:407 to follow the pattern from 00:56:782 (1,2,3,4) and use it to kick off the stream: Cool. Fixed but i rearranged the pattern a bit.
   
   Example

   

[Hard]

1. 00:41:782 (1) - Same as Insane, the extra repeat doesn't make any sense because the bass begins to hit in 1/2 there. Please remove the repeat and add some circles. Same as Insane.

[Normal]

1. 00:56:782 (1) - How about deleting this and placing a spinner from here until 00:58:032? I think it might fill this awkward (imo) from 00:57:407 to the downbeat when the music is so intense. This portion is even mapped in the easy diff. Sure.
   
   Example

   
   Or you could try extending the 1 like in the easy:
   
   I feel either would be much better.

Cool, check these and let me know. :3

1. 00:41:782 (1) - I'm sorry I really can't agree with that slider having the extra repeat. I think it's a really unintuitive pattern, especially because you are stacking the stream on the end of the slider.
   
   The extra repeat is really unexpected, especially if you know the song, and it ending on the blue tick is hitting along with nothing in the music. I talked with a few other people and they agreed that the pattern is confusing when it doesn't need to be.
   
   I'll try again with some different options here:
   
   You could have a 1/2 slider at 00:41:782 to reflect the 00:41:365 (6) and then use a rhythm like so:
   
   
   Or you could try a triplet after the 2 instead:
   
   
   
   More Bland Options

   Single circles with jumps might be nice:
   
   
   The classic:
   
   
   Please consider changing in the Hard diff also.
   
2. 00:57:407 (5) - Finish on head?

UnitedWeSin wrote:

[Insane]

1. 00:41:782 (1) - I'm sorry I really can't agree with that slider having the extra repeat. I think it's a really unintuitive pattern, especially because you are stacking the stream on the end of the slider.
   
   The extra repeat is really unexpected, especially if you know the song, and it ending on the blue tick is hitting along with nothing in the music. I talked with a few other people and they agreed that the pattern is confusing when it doesn't need to be. By nothing in the music you mean there's no sound at 00:42:720 - ? I think otherwise.. there's actually a sound which is more noticeable than the bass-drum. That's why that slider originally had an extra repeat. But yeah, I can tell why you think it's confusing thus I replaced it with 2 sliders according to kajiyatta's suggestion so it is now less confusing imo (hopefully). i'm not sure if you're fine with it so i'd like to get your opinion on it. (at least i really love the current one.)
   
   I'll try again with some different options here:
   
   You could have a 1/2 slider at 00:41:782 to reflect the 00:41:365 (6) and then use a rhythm like so:
   
   
   Or you could try a triplet after the 2 instead:
   
   
   
   More Bland Options

   Single circles with jumps might be nice:
   
   
   The classic:
   
   
   Please consider changing in the Hard diff also.
   
2. 00:57:407 (5) - Finish on head?

I have nothing else to say. Please consider changing that pattern and let me know.

kajiyatta wrote:

As requested.
[General]
add silenced soft-sliderslide? I-it's not like I forgot to add it or anything...
[Easy]
Rhythm
01:25:949(1) it would be a bit difficult for newbie because of after a spinner. so try to put more simply like this? A slider is even easier than a circle to hit imo~

SPOILER

Hit Sonud
00:36:782(1) add finish at head Fixed.
[Normal]
Placement
01:08:032(6,1) just suggestion, it would be good flow for me. The flow between (5) and (6) will be even worse imo.

SPOILER

Rhythm
00:54:907 add a note? it is effective for the next slider. Good point.
[Hard]
Placement
00:57:616(4) add NC same as Insane? Fixed.
01:23:449(9)^ No.
Rhythm
00:08:241 not sure, but add a note better. it would follow the drum sound and look effective. Cool.
01:02:407(2,3) current looks fine, but to follow the vocal, it would be more fine. Ingoring many vocals in this difficulty in order to reduce its difficulty.

SPOILER

01:15:741(2,3)^ ^
[Insane]
Placement
00:23:866(3) super nazi, x should be 344. Ok.
01:16:574(5) to make a nice flow, move up better. The current one flows better to me. (Or I just like the way it flows..)
01:23:449(9) add NC for pattern. I know it's inconsistent with 00:23:449 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - but the pattern is differently configured and a newcombo there would make the pattern look worse.

SPOILER

Rhythm
00:17:407(2,3,4) current looks fine, but slider should start at 00:17:511 to follow the vocal I suppose. e.g) Fixed.

SPOILER

00:22:616(3) I know you followed the drum sound at 00:22:928, but it sounds weak than vocal at 00:22:824, so to put simply better. Keeping this for the sake of consistency.

SPOILER

00:41:782(1) it is allowed for normally Insane. but to be honestly, I suppose you can make it more consistent.
As UWS said, I don't follow this point the stream begins on the end of slider with double kicks. Thus, blank from 00:42:720 to 00:43:032 looks not good, and may cause confused.
To keep consistence, pick a drum sound at 00:42:824 better, here is example. if you do it, you can stack stream on the last note, it will look fine.
But, I suppose it looks fine in the Hard diff since it should be simple Rhythm. Fixed the rhythm accordingly, but I rearranged the placement in my own way.

SPOILER

00:45:324 add a note to follow the instrumental. for me, this blank looks a bit weird. Fixed.
Hit Sonud
00:57:616(1~8) How about add decrescendo? it seems to really great effect before kiai-time. I don't think it sounds that great.
overall fine I suppose. good luck~

1. 00:32:407 (1) - How about moving this NC to 00:31:782 (6)? Seems to follow vocals nicer here imo. I think the jump down to the 00:32:407 (1) is still perfectly intuitive without the NC there.
   
2. 00:42:407 (2,3) - Feel free to ignore, but I'll complain a little more about this. I guess by having the 2 end at 00:42:720 on the blue tick you're following that guitar sound. I think that's alright and all, but I think it would be much better to include the bass hit at 00:42:616 in the mix. Can you try shortening the 2 by 1/4 and adding another circle to make a triplet? Here's what I did:
   
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1. What do you think about reducing AR by 1 tick? I think it's a bit too fast in this spread.

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Just a few more things, feel free to deny.~

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1. 00:32:407 (1) - How about moving this NC to 00:31:782 (6)? Seems to follow vocals nicer here imo. I think the jump down to the 00:32:407 (1) is still perfectly intuitive without the NC there. That was actually my mistake, fixed accordingly.
   
2. 00:42:407 (2,3) - Feel free to ignore, but I'll complain a little more about this. I guess by having the 2 end at 00:42:720 on the blue tick you're following that guitar sound. I think that's alright and all, but I think it would be much better to include the bass hit at 00:42:616 in the mix. Can you try shortening the 2 by 1/4 and adding another circle to make a triplet? Here's what I did: Hmm, I prefer to keep it as it is since i think the bass-drum isn't really noticeable compared to 00:42:720 - and the current one plays better to me - i tried the triplet but it didn't play good to me since the pattern was too streamy.
   
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1. What do you think about reducing AR by 1 tick? I think it's a bit too fast in this spread. Alright.

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