00:10:712 - 00:21:379; have a very identical pattern with 00:34:712 - 00:44:712;
Consider changing the 1st kiai pattern to be a more complex one.
Example for 00:10:712:
Making a forgivable 1/4 stream on the start. And removing the 2 chords to avoid burden new player.
Apply this to rest of the 1st kiai.
Some part is breaking ranking criteria rules. (1st and 2nd kiai and after it)
Long streams of 1/2 notes should include, at minimum, a 1/1 pause where natural to implement after every musical phrase, as these can become too physically demanding for players at this level.
Consider have a 1/1 pause every phrase of the song. (e.g. delete this note. 00:13:545; 00:16:212; 00:18:879; etc. 00:37:545; 00:40:212; etc.)
00:10:712 - 00:21:379; On the first kiai, consider to nerf this section so that you can emphasize the second kiai as the more hard part (and to mention that in the 2nd kiai there's also some police sirene sound). This can help it to not making it so repetitive.
My suggestion is to keep the HiHat sound to be a single note on the first kiai. And keep it as doubles in the second kiai.