1. Easy (1.53 stars, 274 notes)
2. Normal (2.1 stars, 393 notes)
3. Sakura (4.62 stars, 830 notes)
4. Sharlo's Hard (3.45 stars, 565 notes)

Narcissu ♡ Sharlo

mercury2004 wrote:

HANATAN~~~~~~~~~~~~flfhe;rf;e
oh god ,I thought this map been through some mods already, great quality for fresh off oven map

everything here are suggestion feel free to ignore, anything on colour are recommended.

xdd,


General
try offset 300 …… ok √

Sakura
00:05:065 (3,4) - dont you wanna curve this? 00:04:383 (1,2) - this curvy slider gave pretty nice feeling of piano. like copy 00:04:383 (1,2) then rotate it 180 degree. so 4's slider tail can fit into 00:05:747 (3) - this zigzag pattern …… ye it's good choice, but i still want to mix curve slider with straight slider …… random have fun?
00:07:111 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - how about 00:07:111 (3,4,5,6,7) - use 35% volume 00:07:963 (8,9,10) - then 45% volume here …… a bit trouble lol, sound like no difference imo
00:15:633 (4) - put this slant off on 3's slider tail? music is about to transition into rock concert band. antijump can be a great idea to tell player that music and mapping pattern is about to change. ……
00:17:679 (4) - curve to the left?……o no i like straight
00:18:702 (1,2,3) - these 3 note has the same drum sound. i would suggest to not use any inconsistence spacing here. or you can just 00:19:213 (4) - curve this one up a bit
00:30:804 (6) - nc here 00:30:974 (1) - then remove nc here. …… e, why …… i think add nc 00:30:981 (1) - better to read
00:32:168 (6,7,8,9,10,11) - i'm kinda expect some jump around here lol. …… a …… ok, i ctrl g 00:32:515 (7,8,9,10) - add a jump …… maybe i need change more
00:33:020 (11,1) - since this 2 note emphasize different beat. where 11 is drum and 1 is vocal. i would suggest unstack it, and slant it off slightly, in the picture ……ok

SPOILER

00:38:815 (5,1) - here that 5 is about to jump to 1 slider, but slider 1 curve to the otherside of the flow. which can be weird to some player (including me). you can instead put this 00:38:815 (5) - near slider 1's head …… no problem, it's easy …… always good flow a bit, single?

SPOILER

00:44:270 (5) - curve this one? fit with vocal and look nice with this 00:45:293 (1) - too …… ok
00:51:088 (6) - i would suggest to put 6 under 5 in the same direction of the slider. since both note using the same hitsound.……ok
00:53:134 (6) - ^ has better flow too. since the direction of the jump directly followed by curve slider……ok
01:15:974 (1) - this could be better, cause this jump directly follow slider flow …… e, i use bad flow emphasize the extra clap 01:16:152 -

SPOILER

01:29:952 (8,9) - swap this spot?, like the sounds you are following are drums, kinda feel off when all are drum but spacing are inconsistence…… ok, star + 0.01 xd
01:41:372 (4) - unstack this one. current flow doesn't transition well into other curve slider. i suggest it around there …… ok, but too far imo = =

SPOILER

01:41:883 (8,2) - put this between 2 slider tails and 6's slider head. that way you make a perfect straight line and a perfect triangle pattern with improve jump. reason is. it is better to keep the zigzag distance same as slider. …… monstart perfect triangle lol, i dislike use regular graph too more except five-pointed star
01:54:497 (11) - this could be farther …… xd
02:10:520 (5,6,7,8) - reduce volumn by 40%? …
02:22:963 (6) - curve this?
02:39:838 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - how about increase volumn by 5% every note start from 30%? …… ok …… 5% every note a bit, ahh …… until 80 volumn
02:43:247 (5) - same as 00:15:633 (4) …… stack beautiful = =
02:49:043 (3) - put this one on 1's slider head then 02:49:213 (4,5) - swap this spot, jump will improve
02:49:213 (4,5) - swap this spot. ……ok
03:27:906 (7,8,9) - better off with 0.5 x slider and remove return?……ok
03:36:940 (8) - put this on 03:36:087 (5) - 's blanket?……ok
03:40:178 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - no jump? lolol just sayin……xd
03:46:740 () - make triplet here?……ok
03:47:848 (3,5,7) - put 3 between 5 and 7 , jump will improve ……03:47:855 (3,4) - same as 03:47:344 (1,2) - follow drum better ?

Normal
AR 4 could be better ……
ah …… -0.5 …… if fact everyone（new player?） can read ar 5~7, they play Easy/Normal with HR/DT …… low ar is resistance to a certain extent? http://puu.sh/oB7aP/54dbd7e4a7.png
02:01:997 (2,3) - this could be hard to read for starter
03:09:157 (2) - move this up a bit. note under slider body can be hard to see …… √


Easy
pretty dense note for easy. if you can try reduce note in the map. current one is as hard as normal difficulty
AR3. current AR is way too fast. tested by player who is very new into game, he can't read
01:01:656 (1,2,3,4,5) - better replace with longer slider …… e, i think 1/1 better ?
02:39:838 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^

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mercury2004 wrote:

Sharlo's Hard
oh gawd this is as hard as light insane. actually if this map is light insane, i dont have anything to mod lol lol it may be a little hard

00:15:293 (4,5,6) - doesnt this jump a bit too sudden?. judging from the spacing consistency at the part before
00:31:315 (2,3) - better unstack these. low ar and this jump may not be a good idea lol okay I moved 00:31:322 (2) -
01:01:656 (1) - remove nc?
01:12:054 (2) - remove note. music has no beat to compensate for this note fixed
01:21:599 (6,7,8) - better unstack these
02:39:838 (1) - remove nc?
02:51:770 (6) - better unstack this too moved 02:51:777 (6) -
02:52:793 (2,3) - put these too the left side instead fixed
03:31:826 (2,1,2,3,4,1,2) - basically unreadable for new player with this AR fixed
04:01:314 (6) - slant this down abit where it doesnt touch with other slider? fixed

Asaiga wrote:

Hi, thanks for pm me for a mod

Mod

Sakura

00:08:311 (10,1) - Flow drop at this part. I feel like the whole thing were spinning in a circle flow and then 00:08:481 (1) - appears out of no where and breaks it. Try moving (1) to the right of (10) and let the slider's end stack with 00:08:140 (9) - Like this : < http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5067158 > Then fix the rest. …… e …… i dislike move 00:08:481 (1) - to 00:07:800 (7) - because here used ……
00:20:754 (1) - Another one with the same feeling, I think you should move this further away because sudden change distance and bad angle as well. Move this slider somewhere close to 00:20:413 (7) - and fix the rest. …… ok
01:23:993 (7,8,1) - Bring this right below 01:23:822 (6) - . Like this : < http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5067198 >……i prefer blanket 01:23:652 (5,1) - about spacing Orz
03:28:936 (1) - Beautiful ^^ …… naya ~
03:43:594 (3,4,5) - It's hard to say at this point. Because I find unnatural flow change as well. I would make it less curve, like this < http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5067253 > then fix the rest ……ye , than it's emphasize the clap 03:43:764 (4) - ?
03:51:776 (3) - Do you find it better if you increase the DS here? Just a little bit, or move 03:51:946 (4) - to make a straight fall from (3) to (4) < http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5067262 > Something like this. Just a suggestion :s……ok

Momizi wrote:

反正无聊，那么久稍微看下呗？
花姐那么御姐你居然用这么萝莉的BG，差评！……大叔啊這是遊戲OP，BG是遊戲女主，全部角色都是蘿莉，遊戲俗稱“妹都市”，一代妹控神作

[Sakura]
01:03:709 (1) - 这里开始音明显更加重，考虑SV更加高一点？而且我觉得这里用横竖的那种直滑条更加好也许 …… 換成了1.6SV 重新擺了一下
03:19:731 (5,7) - 不碰到或者stack也许比较好？……03:23:652 (3,6) - 之類的都是一樣的……全程無遮擋太假啦
03:20:072 (6,8) - ↑
没什么好主观说的，除了主观以外的其他音效啊排列什么的部分也感觉不太出来什么

easy noraml过了一遍也没什么看出来的，叫人帮你射10颗直接起飞吧233

guineaQ wrote:

I promised I would do it on wednesday so here it is :>

Sakura

I have to say I really liked how the map played, should be mostly suggestions only

1. 00:03:709 (5,6,7,8) - This pattern is fine as it is, but I think it would be better to have it like …… ok
   
   something similar

   
   where 6->7 distance is smaller then others since 00:04:050 - sound is weaker.
2. 00:11:890 (5,6,7,8) - ^ for consistency
3. 00:27:231 (3) - I know you are stacking this to 00:25:697 (3) - , but the 4's slider path felt a bit forced because of it's position, maybe place this at like x:398 y:180 …… e …… like 00:32:515 (7,8,9,10,11) - ? i want to use more different part xd
4. 00:32:004 (5) - I would make this more jumpy from 4 …… ok
5. Hmm, maybe you can find custom hitsound for soft-hitwhistle? …… maybe …… i don't know what whistle better Orz
6. 03:28:936 (1) - <3 …… <3

and I found nothing else that triggered me neat

sahuang wrote:

看了下en没人摸，随便写一点废话

[Easy]

1. 01:31:323 (2,3) - 这边flow有点奇怪，考虑这样？
   http://puu.sh/oFJZU/0eddb4ea01.jpg
2. 01:35:414 (2,3) - 这边也可以对2改进一下，现在我觉得稍微“直”了点？不过不影响就是了
   为了kds总要写点东西嘛
3. 01:46:663 (1,2) - 2左移动？
4. 01:52:800 (3,4) - 是不是parallel更好看啊……不清楚= =
5. 02:02:004 (4) - put red tick in the middle?
6. 02:12:232 (2) - 是不是反了2333……都是正的太土了
   http://puu.sh/oFK6r/1514cded04.jpg
7. 后面有点重复，就这样吧
   顺便02:58:254 (3,4) - 感觉有点怪。。
   03:28:936 (1) - 折返有点莫名其妙，我的建议是转盘，然后去掉后面的东西，03:33:026 - 开始继续……後面鼓點有開始的感覺……還是保留了

[Normal]

1. 00:20:072 (3,1) - blanket
2. 00:24:163 (3,4) - 这个在normal好不好啊hhh感觉挺难，后面也有一个这样的，抓了滑条前两个音但是漏了00:32:856 - 这种也有点奇怪……這樣最簡單
3. 01:07:800 (1,2,3,4) - 类似地方的抓音：12明显抓vocal，这样01:08:481 - 没抓，然而3后面的01:09:334 - vocal没抓去抓了4，略weird
4. 接上面，你看01:13:254 (3,4) - 这种地方你就抓了vocal。。。很奇怪的是后面出现01:17:345 (3,4) - 居然又变成vocal了……不是啦，你看看Insane，前面就是紅線的這裡只是正好對上人聲了
5. 01:42:572 (1,2) - 为什么不喜欢parallel呢。。……我基本儘量混搭盡可能多的類型……雖然還是很單調
6. 又重复一遍，居然那么长的歌全部是drain time。。。
7. 爱心画的好看】】
8. 03:40:526 (3,4) - 这种地方其实滑条头的音没啥必要抓。。不是很重……這樣最簡單【【

gl，又水了一贴

Asaiga wrote:

Sharlo's Hard

Well, I'm not a hard modder but I will tell you how I see it. At many places not in the kiai, there are stuffs like this happen : 00:45:811 (2,3) - I don't know whether it's a big issue or not but it's kinda bug me in some ways or I find it uncomfortable to play. cuz there is no sound here.

Momizi wrote:

[偶像]
00:36:095 (4,1) - 擦边
01:01:322 (7,1) - 尴尬的距离，有点碰到又不太明显 fixed
01:13:936 (1,4) - 擦到了 fixed
03:10:186 (6,1) - 这个距离的尾巴叠的不好看，覆盖半个以上或者不碰比较好 fixed
03:53:480 (1,2) - 擦边 fixed
做不来hard也就只能找找这些

guineaQ wrote:

Sharlo

This diff is nice, yes, but I have some concerns about few jumps that appear in certain places.

why the 1/8 beatsnap divisior settings owo? oh right there is 88 bpm part

1. 00:07:118 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Uh yeah, personally I have no problem SSing this pattern, but I can't say the same for players which this diff should be aimed for. I would really like you to keep this 1/2 circle spam as it fits the music, but I think the spacing should decrease after 00:07:459 (5,6) - doublets fixed
   
   maybe something like this

   
   This pattern should be easier than previous one but it should still keep that musical feel alive
2. 00:08:481 - to 00:15:129 - well you introduced 1/4s when the insane diff didn't :v
   I guess in the case when you have to nerf the hard diff for w/e reason, I guess this is the place you can come back to first. changed all of them to sliders
3. 00:15:300 (4,5,6) - imho I think the distance between 4->5 is waaaay too big for what the song offers and it actually plays a bit weird as well tsk tsk you should keep the 5->6 distance tho fixed
4. 01:01:152 (6) - ahhhh isn't 2.98x a bit too much wadsffa fixed
5. 01:50:754 (1) - I usually don't mind evil stacks, but due to low AR, I think it would be better off putting it somewhere around x:245 y:120 fixed
6. 02:21:947 (2,3) - isn't this jump a bit too much eh fixed
7. 02:39:163 (4,5,6) - what did the newbies ever do to you for them to deserve this >_>
8. 02:59:788 (6,7,8) - this one is ok because it haz snarez
9. 03:09:334 (3) - if you really want this to be a jump, at least reduce the distance and place it somewhere around like x:176 y:337 fixed
10. 03:22:118 (4,5) - and another one, 5->6 should be a jump not 4->5 =w= fixed
11. 03:28:936 (1) - I WANT MY HEART SLIDER FROM INSANE but I don't want to steal his heart (runs
    
    its neat
    but i still want a heart slider ;w; make one then lol
    
    ok on a serious note, this diff has quality but it does have places where the jumps could be rearranged to make more sense.
    good luck with trying to manage the gap between normal->hard while trying to keep hard->insane gap sensible as well ;w;7

Kuro Fuyusaki wrote:

Heya ~ From....PM in-game

Hanatan, Orz, I'm crying ;w;

Sorry for the late respon :') …… don't mind lol, i'm good at wait

[Easy & Normal]

Orz, I can't find anything to be modded (some pattern kinda hard but for the flow are already fit because most of the issue were same as previous mod, so this diff is already good) :'>

[Insane]

1. Truly relaxing pattern :')
2. 00:25:697 (3) - Can you move it down a bit, like x:256 y:184 or x:392 y:228, I think it has a better flow there……a bit far …… i think always good flow hard too map Orz
3. 01:09:845 - 01:14:959 - 01:17:686 - 01:19:050 - 01:19:050 - 01:25:868 - , etc. Just want to know the reason why you didn't install drum ride (more like finish) here, i think it would sounds lively with it, just asking …… but i can't understand these words my english very bad Orz ……
4. 03:08:311 (10) - how about move it to x:92 y:184, it gives new pace following with the vocal, you seems to play consistency most of it (following with the drum on high pressure), so it's just opinion …… e …… it's most difficult jump yet, i try do different
5. 03:28:936 (1) - <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 but could you diminish the slidertick's sounds a bit :'3…… ok
6. 04:01:662 (1,2) - convert it to repeated slider instead, well, looks like you're following the guitar here, but following the drum would be great enough, IMO …… ok

*Teach me how to use invisible-sample-hitsound senpai, looks like it is really a bundle of work :'<

Good luck with this map.

I like its style pattern :3

Janpai wrote:

As requested Sorry for late xD

General

1. Disable Widescreen support since there is no SB

Easy

1. SV is a little bit fast imo even you used 0.75 SV on green lines, why not just turn it to .80 or .90?……0.75>0.8 ?
2. Reduce OD and HP to 2 or 2.5…… i think ar4 od3 better
3. 00:00:300 (1,2) - Fix DS
4. 00:02:345 (3,4,5) - There arrangement of rhythm is pretty weird because there is insufficient sound at 00:04:050 (5) - to put a circle there, because the strong piano is at the 00:03:027 (4) - tail, just swap 00:03:027 (4,5) - and if you swap i think the tick of the 2/1 slider can emphasize the strong piano sound at 00:03:709…… 2note too hard for easy diff, i never use it
5. 00:51:436 (3,4) - Fix blanket
6. 01:10:868 (2,3) - I think it's nice to put a blanket here
7. 01:33:709 (5,1) - Blanket?
8. 03:06:436 (3,4) - Make them parallel?…… i dislike all parallel lol

Normal

1. 00:18:709 (1,2) - Why not make them the same rhythm as 00:16:663 (1,2) - They were following the same thing……all same too boring……
2. 00:59:618 (1,2) - Fix DS
3. 01:09:845 (1) - Add a white anchor at the body of the slider? since 01:10:527 (2) - is a curve, it would flow better if (1) body have curve too……all same too boring too lol
4. 02:33:709 (1,2) - ^ but this time make the body of the slider angled
5. 02:43:936 (1,2) - ^

Sorry for noob mod T^T i'm no pro at modding insanes, goodluck!

Kuro Fuyusaki wrote:

[Sharlo's Hard]

1. And here I am late responding for 3 days and this diff became looks really great, and now i'm confused what to mod, so it's mostly a mere suggestion, feel free to ignore it ;w;
2. Oh, and nice hitsound placing there at slow section
3. 01:20:584 (2,3) - try avoid overlap? i don't know about the other, but it's hard to read for me fixed
4. 02:52:800 (2,3) - not looks too far from 02:52:118 (1) - ? fixed
5. 03:00:300 (1) - Ctrl+J and stack it with 02:59:959 (7) - , dunno if it helps
6. 03:28:936 (1) - I WANT MY HEART SLIDER FROM INSANE uhuh

Janpai wrote:

Sharlo's Hard

1. 00:22:629 - I think you should put a note here since you put one in other rhythms I don't like do the same which makes a beatmap boring imo

1. 01:52:800 (3,4) – intentionally not parallel? I think it might look nicer if these were parallel, but up to you
2. 03:06:436 (3,4) - ^same here
3. 03:32:345 (3) – maybe use two circles instead of a slider? I think having this part be all circles gives greater emphasis to the notes here, but up to you

1. 00:53:481 (1,2) – mm reverse order of these sliders maybe? (shorter slider at 00:53:481 – and longer slider at 00:53:993 - ? the vocals are very powerful here and I think it would be nicer to map to those as opposed to the instruments. similar occurs at 00:55:527 (1,2) -, 02:31:663 (1,2) -, and 02:33:709 (1,2) -
2. 01:42:572 (1,2) – maybe make these parallel? just aesthetics here, this is probably fine
3. 02:10:868 (4,1) – uhh I know DS is maintained because kiai time ends on the (1) and SV multiplier changes back from 1.0x to 0.9x, but I still think the (4,1) should have the same distance as 02:10:186 (2,3) – because it looks nicer
4. 02:48:027 (1) – move the slider head so that it’s parallel with the slider end?
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 03:28:595 (3,1) – kind of a similar thing to the previous point about DS; feels like (3,1) should have the same distance as 03:27:913 (2,3) – instead of relying on DS to tell you that it’s 1.1x snap
6. 03:58:935 (3,1) – blanket looks slightly off

1. 00:15:470 (4,5) – mm maybe it’s just me, but these hitsounds feel really quiet in comparison to the music, and I’m playing with 40% music and 90% hitsounds ;;
2. 00:24:845 (1,3) – mm i’m not so sure on having the repeat part of the slider be stacked underneath something, it might cause readability issues. then again, the (1) mostly fades away by the time the (3) comes into play so it might be fine, but i’d still consider unstacking them
3. 00:32:004 (5,6,7) – in my opinion there’s nothing in the music here that really supports having slider streams like this; it feels like it’s overmapped a bit imo
4. 00:46:663 (5,2) – the (2) is kind of close to the (5) and it ruins the aesthetics a little imo. maybe move the (2) to the left a bit?
5. 01:09:845 (1,3) – similar to the first point i made about having the repeat part of the slider being stacked underneath a note; not sure if it’s the best idea, but that’s up to you
6. 01:13:936 (1,3) – move the (3) to blanket the (1) maybe?
7. 02:49:050 (3) – maybe Ctrl + H this so that it flows into the (4) more nicely?
   
   SPOILER

   

1. 01:38:140 (9,10) – kind of expected larger ds here; smaller ds here doesn’t really sit well with the emphasis imo
2. 01:53:822 (7,8,9,10,11) – i also kind of expected the jumps here to be a bit bigger too, since the jumps before this were pretty big and then these jumps are smaller and kind of breaks momentum a little bit because the player has to slow down during this intense part
3. 02:16:322 (3,4) – blanket here could be better if you moved the (4) to the right a bit
4. 02:22:118 (4,5) – are you sure about overlapping these?

Doormat wrote:

hi hi, because you pmed me last week. sorry for late I forgot :v
[hitsounds]
uhh I noticed that there are a few cymbal crashes in the music that you didn’t ignore; maybe put a soft finish on them? I listed down some of them below, but i didn’t list all of them so you probably want to go through and check the song again for cymbal crashes

maybe you should place soft-finishes on these times

1. 00:20:754 (1) –
2. 00:24:845 (1) –
3. 00:25:868 (4) – …… √
4. 00:27:913 (5) –
5. 00:28:595 (7) –…… √
6. 00:29:959 (3) –
7. 01:14:959 (3) -
8. 01:19:050 (3) –
9. 01:25:527 (5) –
10. 01:25:868 (6) – this is a slider end…… √
11. 01:34:050 (8) –…… √
12. 01:35:413 (3) –
13. 01:42:572 (1) –…… √
14. 01:46:663 (1) –…… √
15. 01:50:754 (1) –…… √
16. 02:04:050 (3) –

basically i don’t think you should be ignoring these cymbal crashes so maybe putting a finish on them would be cool. some of the cymbal crashes i listed repeat themselves later in the song, so i didn’t feel like i needed to list them all.

i skip some because …… can't hear it clearly and have drum-clap yet Orz …… other diff/part fix too
[Easy]

1. 01:52:800 (3,4) – intentionally not parallel? I think it might look nicer if these were parallel, but up to you……dislike all parallel kukuku, i want to mix more
2. 03:06:436 (3,4) - ^same here
3. 03:32:345 (3) – maybe use two circles instead of a slider? I think having this part be all circles gives greater emphasis to the notes here, but up to you …… ok

[Normal]

1. 00:53:481 (1,2) – mm reverse order of these sliders maybe? (shorter slider at 00:53:481 – and longer slider at 00:53:993 - ? the vocals are very powerful here and I think it would be nicer to map to those as opposed to the instruments. similar occurs at 00:55:527 (1,2) -, 02:31:663 (1,2) -, and 02:33:709 (1,2) -……but …… have too many reverse slider yet ……even if it's good
2. 01:42:572 (1,2) – maybe make these parallel? just aesthetics here, this is probably fine……
3. 02:10:868 (4,1) – uhh I know DS is maintained because kiai time ends on the (1) and SV multiplier changes back from 1.0x to 0.9x, but I still think the (4,1) should have the same distance as 02:10:186 (2,3) – because it looks nicer……ok
4. 02:48:027 (1) – move the slider head so that it’s parallel with the slider end? ……ok
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 03:28:595 (3,1) – kind of a similar thing to the previous point about DS; feels like (3,1) should have the same distance as 03:27:913 (2,3) – instead of relying on DS to tell you that it’s 1.1x snap……e …… low better ?
6. 03:58:935 (3,1) – blanket looks slightly off …… fix

[Sakura]

1. 01:38:140 (9,10) – kind of expected larger ds here; smaller ds here doesn’t really sit well with the emphasis imo…… i use smaller for downbeat after jump some, it's more vivid imo Orz
2. 01:53:822 (7,8,9,10,11) – i also kind of expected the jumps here to be a bit bigger too, since the jumps before this were pretty big and then these jumps are smaller and kind of breaks momentum a little bit because the player has to slow down during this intense part…… i prefer to fade out ?
3. 02:16:322 (3,4) – blanket here could be better if you moved the (4) to the right a bit……fix
4. 02:22:118 (4,5) – are you sure about overlapping these? …… ye …… maybe look bad ……then other better

hope this helps! sorry again for late :c

SPOILER

唉……明明再花力氣也沒辦法比別人好，人又懶到沒救，沒有創新精神，作圖也是半吊子，咋的就管不住這手呢

kanor wrote:

[Sakura]
01:12:913 (5,6,7,8,9) - 这里是两组三分拍吧，这么摆感觉不合节奏呀......改了
03:51:435 (1,2,3,4) - 感觉不平行，随手摆的？…… 都平行太單調啦
03:55:866 (2,3,4) - 要做这种梗感觉2和4同3的DS最好相等……都相等太單調啦
另外感觉可以在kiai头尾稍微加个更有穿透力一点的key......我暂时也没有好的选择（我只会无脑推声纳回声）

GL！

Frenkie09 wrote:

Easy
·00:35:072 (3) - 感觉这里没包好，滑条开头向上拉一点点 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5153352
·03:28:936 (1) - 我觉得这里没必要做个回打，直接1个滑条到底就可以了（因为拖长音，中间并没有什么节奏点）……因為太長不知道怎麼拉，我思考一下

Sakura
·00:03:027 (3) - 包好 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5153906……垃圾網格毀我blanket，重新弄了個
·00:07:118 (3) - 建议这个NC……的確NC好一點，但是這裡改了頻率後面全都要動有點挫……我還是維持一節一次了
·00:15:300 (3) - 这个包好
·00:25:356 (2,3) - 圈圈左下移一点
·00:32:175 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - 会做这种排列吗 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5154000，白线开始放短滑条，我打起来感觉不错，有歌的节奏感。……我不想放連打
·01:37:288 (3) - 这个3可以移动到这里 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5154062……四像素啊喂要不要這麼兇殘，我是拉2.0DS正好在這裡……
·01:43:084 (2) - 滑条尾巴叠好
·02:04:390 (5,6) - 这两个不要贴滑条边……沒有地方可以放啦，不放跳就只能塞這裡了
·02:06:947 (8,9,1,2) - 全部弄下一点 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5154106 然后调整一下这两个的位置 02:08:481 (4,5) - （原因是避免这两个又贴滑条）……和之前一樣這樣就太遠了
·02:13:254 (1) - 尾巴叠好
·02:13:851 (3) - 这个圈圈删掉……這邊和前面一樣都是overmap……摻一點1/4看上去隨性一點
·02:19:731 (1,2) - 不太好看，改成这样怎么样 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5154157……重新擺了一下
·02:45:300 (5) - 这个放在滑条头，或者放其他地方都行，不要贴住就好了……最後一段kiai 的跳梗是最難的部分了，所以我優先順手其他次要，實際上這種程度的遮擋完全不影響讀圖
·02:46:834 (3) - 我发现这个kiai部分很多地方都贴滑条，个人认为不要贴滑条好看点（我主观在滑条消失前‘圈圈’或者‘滑条开头’）不要出现在上面（影响美观和造成遮挡），话说你前面的kiai部分也没有这么做啊^_^如果非要出现，建议这样------------------------------------ https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5154254 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5154258，不要随意出现在滑条的某个地方。

好图，SB也做的好！·············GL~

Doormat wrote:

[Sharlo]

1. 00:15:470 (4,5) – mm maybe it’s just me, but these hitsounds feel really quiet in comparison to the music, and I’m playing with 40% music and 90% hitsounds ;; increased
2. 00:24:845 (1,3) – mm i’m not so sure on having the repeat part of the slider be stacked underneath something, it might cause readability issues. then again, the (1) mostly fades away by the time the (3) comes into play so it might be fine, but i’d still consider unstacking them It is okay.
3. 00:32:004 (5,6,7) – in my opinion there’s nothing in the music here that really supports having slider streams like this; it feels like it’s overmapped a bit imo Playback Rate 25% plz
4. 00:46:663 (5,2) – the (2) is kind of close to the (5) and it ruins the aesthetics a little imo. maybe move the (2) to the left a bit? blabket it then
5. 01:09:845 (1,3) – similar to the first point i made about having the repeat part of the slider being stacked underneath a note; not sure if it’s the best idea, but that’s up to you
6. 01:13:936 (1,3) – move the (3) to blanket the (1) maybe? now is blanket 01:14:618 (2) -
7. 02:49:050 (3) – maybe Ctrl + H this so that it flows into the (4) more nicely? fixed
   
   SPOILER

   

kanor wrote:

[Sharlo's Hard]
00:15:300 (3,4,5) - 这里感觉DS缩小比拉大效果可能要好
00:54:504 (3,4,5) - 这里感觉3个1/2滑条更舒服一点 never follow vocals
01:02:175 (1) - 我觉得这种转盘都有些软趴趴的......02:40:357 (1) - 这个也是，试着稍微再往后面做半个小节再放转盘
01:11:720 (4,1,2,3) - HARD这么摆没问题吗.......会不会太坑了？ not sure
其实我觉得BREAK应该填上了，要break的话感觉02:11:209 - 02:27:572 -更好 .......不过随你开心啦
03:09:164 (2,3,4) - 这个看起来挺丑的，感觉是随手摆的 怎么个丑法
03:32:004 (2,3,4) - 这里音乐是逐渐起来的，DS最好比正常稍微摆近一点 这还不近
03:56:207 (3) - 这里对强迫症有些难以接受......周围两个都是直的，这个要弧不弧就...... 那是因为03:56:548 (4,5) - 这两个都有clap音所以作为一组来做pattern
还有就是作为hard，其实有些地方的DS突然拉开我觉得还是有些突兀......不一定难，但是还是感觉有些突然（
感觉有点危险（水仙：开DS作图跟ZZH有什么区别

朋友 你摸图功力不太行阿

Frenkie09 wrote:

Hard
·00:08:652 (2,3) - 建议改成这种三连打，后边的同（因为这里白线和红线是连起来的节奏） https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5153583 本来是三连打 然后被说太难
·00:25:868 (3) - 回打那处没叠好 fixed
·01:10:868 (3) - 没叠好 fixed
·01:24:675 (2) - 尾巴没叠好 fixed 老实说抓这种细节没什么用
·02:18:368 (3) - 这里做成1个回打长滑条怎样 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5153712 02:18:538 (4) - 这个音不想盖住
·02:19:220 (6) - 然后这里白线放1个圈圈 这个还可以
·02:22:800 (5,6) - 选中这两个Crtl+G，这种节奏可以吗？ 阔以
·02:53:652 (5,6) - 这个可以往下移一点，让长滑条包住他尾巴 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5153811 fixed
·03:40:185 (4,5,6,1) - 这里排列再摆一摆，更好看 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5153866 fixed
·03:53:991 (2) - 没包好 fixed

你好可爱阿。其实前面那个点点可以这样的：

[list][*]00:08:652 (2,3) - 建议改成这种三连打，后边的同（因为这里白线和红线是连起来的节奏） https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5153583
[*]00:25:868 (3) - 回打那处没叠好
[*]01:10:868 (3) - 没叠好[/list]

jonathanlfj wrote:

[Easy]
01:00:981 - 这里放个1/1滑条试试
02:39:163 - ^
03:28:936 (1) - 为什么不用<3滑条

[Normal]
01:25:527 (3) - 这里用两个圈吧
03:03:709 (3) - ^
感觉密度可以更大一些，特别是kiai可以多用01:13:254 (3,4) 这种节奏……再議【

[Sakura]
01:13:425 (2,3) - 这里间距再大一些
01:54:504 (5) - ctrl+g更好打
03:20:584 (4) - 这叠的有点别扭 …… 偶爾變扭一下……
03:27:572 (6) - 这里改用stream？

其他没啥了改完叫我

jonathanlfj wrote:

[Sharlo's Hard]
01:30:300 (1) - 尾巴往反方向弯，现在感觉是到01:31:152 (3) 上 不是很懂什么意思但是感觉反方向flow不好 于是移动了3
02:24:504 (4) - 这个也改一下方向 fixed
02:59:959 (7,8) - ctrl+g打着更舒服一些 fixed

Yuii- wrote:

Just passin' by, hi

General

Easy/Normal AR -0.5. AR 5.5 for this BPM and the way you are mapping it seems a bit out of place

Insane

01:48:709 (1,2) - They could be parallel……all parallel a bit dull, i want to mix more
02:02:686 (6,1) - Improve me this blanket
02:41:890 (1,2,3,4,5) - I'd have definitely gone for the build-up here, especially with how you are hitsounding tailz. Same applies to 01:03:709 (1,2,3,4,5) - of course!……e …… l use Google Translate …… but i can't understand it …… change volume ?
02:49:220 (2) - Aesthetically speaking, this looks really bad. Can I suggest you to use a different pattern? http://puu.sh/p1J3i/ccbf02b245.jpg……same as above, your jump very good but i still want mix more different jump …… all same triangle a bit dull
03:08:481 (1) - Considering all your other placements on finish hitsounds, the slider just looks out of place in terms of emphasis. Would you mind move it a bit more to the right? My suggestion would be http://puu.sh/p1Jev/b5edcd70a8.jpg …… jump when downbeat ke, i think central location is also good and easy like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5218097
03:37:116 (1,2) - Blanketz
03:49:219 - You are missing just a good opportunity to place a clickable object here, the slider 03:49:048 (5) - repesents almost nothing which sounds quite... not so good. See 03:59:446 (4,1) - for example. …… yes i use some slider skip click …… because too many note a bit hard? like 01:54:504 (5) - . and all drum add note hard to typesetting maybe

[]

Very good job, overall!

Call me back.

Hanazawa Kana wrote:

妈呀 都要飞了还摸什么
给你射一发吧

1. 00:07:118 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 太吵了,要不改一下這裡的音量,要不拔掉幾個whistle
2. 00:14:618 (1,2,3,4) - 其實這裡我是建議做漸大的音量的,畢竟音樂的音量有提高
3. 00:16:663 (1) - 這裡那個finish顯得很沒有存在感...要不要換另外一個custom finish?
4. 00:17:175 (2) - 尾換soft sampleset
5. 00:25:356 (2) - ^
6. 00:33:027 - 從這段開始,那個whistle的音量顯得明顯過大了...其實可以抄一波夏蘿姐姐的音效啦
7. 01:12:913 (1) - reverse那裡拔掉clap?
8. 01:14:959 (3) - 這個clap是怎麼回事QAQ 就聽背景音效的話還是normal的clap比較合曲吧
9. 01:16:152 (2) - 這裡的clap感覺太密集了,但是拔掉又感覺怪怪的...後面那組也是,看看怎麼改吧>_>
10. 01:31:322 (3) - 換normal-hitclap?
11. 01:52:800 (1) - 那個finish加上去的效果很差...音量實在是過大了 要不拔掉,要不就換個hitfinish吧 :3
12. 02:10:527 (3,4,5,6) - 試試搞個音量漸小?
    這歌後面的結構應該沒怎麼變的,上面那堆改了後面抄一下就好了

1. 00:23:993 (2,3) - 試試不要stack?
2. 01:37:629 (2,3) - Ctrl+G? 改了的話後面那些三連也重新排一下
3. 01:40:356 (2) - 試試x:120 y:24? 現在放太近了打著感覺異常不爽
4. 01:44:447 (2) - 這個感覺放的靠近01:44:618 (1) - 會比較好打,試試x:220 y:200?
5. 02:59:618 (1,2,3,4) - 這裡試試把spacing弄大一點?
6. 03:28:936 (1) - 說實話,這個很醜

Regou wrote:

來晚了;w;

感覺sb好樸素啊-w-||...……因為不知道要弄些什麼= =


General
Clear!


Sakura

Hitsounding

1. 00:07:118 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 太吵了,要不改一下這裡的音量,要不拔掉幾個whistle……第一段降了10音量
2. 00:14:618 (1,2,3,4) - 其實這裡我是建議做漸大的音量的,畢竟音樂的音量有提高……沒有吧……
3. 00:16:663 (1) - 這裡那個finish顯得很沒有存在感...要不要換另外一個custom finish?……我一直用的都是這個Orz …… 我感覺還行
4. 00:17:175 (2) - 尾換soft sampleset……這邊都是外加的
5. 00:25:356 (2) - ^
6. 00:33:027 - 從這段開始,那個whistle的音量顯得明顯過大了...其實可以抄一波夏蘿姐姐的音效啦……連同後面都降了20
7. 01:12:913 (1) - reverse那裡拔掉clap?
8. 01:14:959 (3) - 這個clap是怎麼回事QAQ 就聽背景音效的話還是normal的clap比較合曲吧……我固定兩節一次drum……
9. 01:16:152 (2) - 這裡的clap感覺太密集了,但是拔掉又感覺怪怪的...後面那組也是,看看怎麼改吧>_>……因為原曲副歌的鼓比前面還要少，而且位置很單一
10. 01:31:322 (3) - 換normal-hitclap?
11. 01:52:800 (1) - 那個finish加上去的效果很差...音量實在是過大了 要不拔掉,要不就換個hitfinish吧 :3……去掉了
12. 02:10:527 (3,4,5,6) - 試試搞個音量漸小?
    這歌後面的結構應該沒怎麼變的,上面那堆改了後面抄一下就好了

Note Placement

1. 00:23:993 (2,3) - 試試不要stack?……有點麻煩
2. 01:37:629 (2,3) - Ctrl+G? 改了的話後面那些三連也重新排一下……都是銳角太單一了
3. 01:40:356 (2) - 試試x:120 y:24? 現在放太近了打著感覺異常不爽……好看比較重要……
4. 01:44:447 (2) - 這個感覺放的靠近01:44:618 (1) - 會比較好打,試試x:220 y:200?
5. 02:59:618 (1,2,3,4) - 這裡試試把spacing弄大一點?……不overlap拉大就太遠了
6. 03:28:936 (1) - 說實話,這個很醜 …… 我挺喜歡的233，你覺得要拉社麼樣呢

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