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Kawada Mami - Koubou

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P A N
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P A N
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 19 กุมภาพันธ์ 2557 at 11:27:58

Artist: Kawada Mami
Title: Koubou
Source: Shakugan_no_shana 灼眼のシャナ
Tags: p_a_n ending Beam of Light Shakugan no Shana Final
BPM: 96
Filesize: 12125kb
Play Time: 04:38
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (4.61 stars, 530 notes)
  2. Normal (2.06 stars, 252 notes)
Download: Kawada Mami - Koubou
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My 6th Map :3
Normal - Me
Hard - Me
BG and Snow by Setsurei
Skin by IkarosChan
if you have better bg, please tell me :P (no shana kiss yuji please)
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Kodora
Kodora
first

/me eats

mod will be later, after my exams
P A N
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P A N

Kodora wrote:

first

/me eats

mod will be later, after my exams
yeaaaa
sjoy
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Joined April 2012
sjoy
M4M
check the ai mod
[Normal]
00:23:343 (1) - fin?
00:50:530 (4) - whis?
01:48:343 (1) - whis?

04:09:593 (1) - why nc?
04:28:968 (2) - fin?instead of 04:28:343 (1) - ?
[Hard]
00:49:905 (5) - whis?
01:04:905 (4) - ctrl+g?
01:08:343 (1) - clap on the end
01:28:186 (5) - whis?
03:58:343 (1) - I prefer like the shape afer ctrl+j
04:09:280 (2) - stack on the 04:08:343 (1) - 's end?
so relaxing song
here is my star :)
OmgHahaLOLxD
26 posts
Joined January 2013
OmgHahaLOLxD
Normal

00:34:905 - Sounds better with another note hear

( I am having a hard time trying to help w/ the accuracy of some sliders in this difficulty due to 1/2 Beat snap divisor, maybe give that a quick revision?)

Hard

00:36:468 (4,5,6) - I would overlap OR space them further
00:51:468 (2) - 'meh' overlap
00:53:030 (4) - new combo
00:53:343 (1) - remove new combo
00:58:030 (1) - ^

Song is very long, so maybe later on in the song make some more slower areas just to give a little breather ( it's only hard, not insane!)
The normal difficulty is a little to easy, I suggest changing some of the song setup options? Sorry I didn't have to much for you, but GL!
P A N
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Topic Starter
P A N
thanks mod :D and sorry for lazy to reply

updated.
787B
769 posts
Joined November 2010
787B
Hi.
Expecting a M4M through your M4M queue.

General

  1. Set preview points in all diffs.
  1. No kiai in a 4min song? That doesn't look right, you might want to add some.
  1. Try lowering the hitsounds when you add finishes, they are way too loud for the song at the moment.

Normal

  1. 00:33:968 (2) - Hmm, doesn't look nice going outside the grid up there, doing a ctrl+j and adjusting it to the spacing will do a better usage of the grid, plus it'll be nice the variation for the flow:
    Example
  1. 00:35:530 (4) - Try moving a bit more to the left, it'll make this passage a lot smoother to play:
    Example
  1. 00:43:030 (3) - Pretty much the same as above, try moving it a bit up to increase flow, it'll fit better with the slider at 00:41:468 (1) -:
    Example
  1. 00:49:593 (2,3,4) - They all follow the same direction, would be nice if it has some variation here, in this case, you can move the middle node of (3) a bit to the right to make that variation, it'll do a nice transition between (3) and (4):
    Example
  1. 01:03:343 (1,2,3) - Hmm, those finishes sounds very disnecessary with the song here, there's no point in adding them since it doesn't really catch up with the calm song. The only finish that you could've added is at 01:05:843 -, and you can clearly hear it, but there's already a spinner there and you haven't emphasized it. You can still keep up with the soft custom 1 pattern there using claps only or use the same patterns at 02:08:343 (1) -, since that one sounds much better.
  1. 02:44:593 (2,3,4) - Since it's the same pattern, also suggesting the same thing as 00:49:593 (2,3,4) -.
  1. 03:14:593 (3,4) - Hmm, you could've moved them more to the center of the grid, it's better for new players to spin:
    Example
  1. 03:19:593 (1,2,3) - I think the flow can be more improved by giving the (2) slider a different direction, take a look:
    Example
  1. 03:48:968 (2) - Add finish at the beginning to match with song and your previous patterns of finish.

Hard

  1. 00:23:343 (1) - Add finish at the beginning, just like in Normal to match with the song.
  1. 01:51:780 (6,7) - Hmm, this might be a bit confusing when playing, I'd say to give (6) a proper stack with (7), it looks better on the section, because it'll make it clear to read 01:52:405 (1) - as well.
  1. 02:15:843 (5,6,1) - Spacing doesn't feel good, you can increase the spacing of 02:15:843 (5,6) - to give a better perspection of the jump here:
    Example
  1. 02:39:593 (4,1) - Same as above, I think you don't need that small jump here, it'll be great if you followed the previous object's spacing, as it goes on a nice circular movement, it'll be much better to play since it will be consistent:
    Example
  1. 03:20:530 (5) - See if you can move this down a bit, so it doesn't go part of the slider outside the grid.
Not much to add here, very good.

I will give star later, since I'm currently out, hehe xD
Here it is:
P A N
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Topic Starter
P A N

Wolf wrote:

Hi.
Expecting a M4M through your M4M queue.

General

  1. Set preview points in all diffs.
ok
  1. No kiai in a 4min song? That doesn't look right, you might want to add some.
hmm its relax song through so, dont need to kial effect.
  1. Try lowering the hitsounds when you add finishes, they are way too loud for the song at the moment.
ok

Normal

  1. 00:33:968 (2) - Hmm, doesn't look nice going outside the grid up there, doing a ctrl+j and adjusting it to the spacing will do a better usage of the grid, plus it'll be nice the variation for the flow: ok
    Example
  1. 00:35:530 (4) - Try moving a bit more to the left, it'll make this passage a lot smoother to play:
    Example
  1. 00:43:030 (3) - Pretty much the same as above, try moving it a bit up to increase flow, it'll fit better with the slider at 00:41:468 (1) -:
    Example
  1. 00:49:593 (2,3,4) - They all follow the same direction, would be nice if it has some variation here, in this case, you can move the middle node of (3) a bit to the right to make that variation, it'll do a nice transition between (3) and (4):
    Example
  1. 01:03:343 (1,2,3) - Hmm, those finishes sounds very disnecessary with the song here, there's no point in adding them since it doesn't really catch up with the calm song. The only finish that you could've added is at 01:05:843 -, and you can clearly hear it, but there's already a spinner there and you haven't emphasized it. You can still keep up with the soft custom 1 pattern there using claps only or use the same patterns at 02:08:343 (1) -, since that one sounds much better.
  1. 02:44:593 (2,3,4) - Since it's the same pattern, also suggesting the same thing as 00:49:593 (2,3,4) -.
  1. 03:14:593 (3,4) - Hmm, you could've moved them more to the center of the grid, it's better for new players to spin:
    Example
  1. 03:19:593 (1,2,3) - I think the flow can be more improved by giving the (2) slider a different direction, take a look:
    Example
  1. 03:48:968 (2) - Add finish at the beginning to match with song and your previous patterns of finish.
all fixed except the different direction suggestion, i will consider it because I think mine are more flow :X

Hard

  1. 00:23:343 (1) - Add finish at the beginning, just like in Normal to match with the song.
ok
  1. 01:51:780 (6,7) - Hmm, this might be a bit confusing when playing, I'd say to give (6) a proper stack with (7), it looks better on the section, because it'll make it clear to read 01:52:405 (1) - as well.
to make HD mods read clearly here
  1. 02:15:843 (5,6,1) - Spacing doesn't feel good, you can increase the spacing of 02:15:843 (5,6) - to give a better perspection of the jump here:
    Example
fix in other way
  1. 02:39:593 (4,1) - Same as above, I think you don't need that small jump here, it'll be great if you followed the previous object's spacing, as it goes on a nice circular movement, it'll be much better to play since it will be consistent:It start the new stanza so i need it 0.0 maybe will consider.
    Example
  1. 03:20:530 (5) - See if you can move this down a bit, so it doesn't go part of the slider outside the grid.ok
Not much to add here, very good.

I will give star later, since I'm currently out, hehe xD
Here it is:
thanks for mod and star so much ><
- Kevin
159 posts
Joined September 2012
- Kevin
Hi, From P A N's M4M queue.

Awesome, I love the songs of Mami Kawada. you hit sounds fits perfectly with this music
hope it get ranked soon

(ノ·ω·)ノ︵

[General]

add 'Beam of Light' to tags it's his english name.
03:38:030 - 04:38:343 - Kiai Time.
Widescreen support is toggle on for normal and off for hard, whatever you have no SB i think it does not matter.
You have a custom skin so you MUST a 'approachcircle.png' too and put this code on all your .osu files:
SliderBorder: 255,255,255
under this:
[Colours]
Combo1 : 255,128,192
Combo2 : 255,128,128
Combo3 : 255,255,128
Combo4 : 128,128,255
When skinning gameplay elements, complete sets of elements must be skinned. For instance, if you skin hitcircles, you must include a hitcircle.png, hitcircleoverlay.png, approachcircle.png, and a slider border color (this can be done by adding the line "SliderBorder: 255,255,255" (using RGB values) under the [Colours] section of each .osu file). The same logic applies to hitbursts, cursors, numbers, and anything else of this nature. If you didn't intend to skin an element in the set, then using the template skin's version is okay. Setting a Skin Preference is also acceptable (e.g. forcing the default skin).
[Hard]

00:50:843 - Empty white tick, during the test play I missed something here:
Would you delete 00:49:905 (5) -
Move 00:49:905 (5) - to 00:50:218 -
Add notes 00:49:905 - and 00:51:155 -
02:26:311 - Add note
04:24:436 - Add note
04:37:405 (2) - This part seems a lit weird delete slider Add notes at 04:37:405 - 04:37:718 - 04:37:874 - dont forget the hit sounds

*All this part is fine but you can't use some hit sounds*
00:27:093 (5) - *why dont follow the 1/2 rythm? move to 00:26:936 - make him a 1/2 slider so you can add the missing Whistle/Clap add a note here 00:26:936 - *
00:33:968 (4,5) - same here
00:36:468 (4,5) - ^
00:43:968 (2,3) - ^
00:46:468 (4,5) - ^
00:53:968 (2,3) - ^

**These parts I was beloved about the sound suddenly startled by the noisy of the double finish**
03:28:343 (1) - ** remove finish and whistle from the tail add clap **
03:48:343 (1) - ^
04:08:343 (1) - ^
04:28:343 (1) - ^


[Normal]

This map is pretty good.

01:03:343 (1,2,3) - Too noisy
02:00:530 (3,1) - overlap try to move (1) then fix 02:02:093 (2) -
Image Preview
**Same as Hard**
03:28:343 (1) - same as Hard remove Finish and whistle from the tail add clap
03:48:968 (2) - remove Finish and wistle add clap
04:08:968 (2) - ^
04:28:968 (2) - ^
Natsu
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Natsu
support o:/ go pan :3
P A N
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Topic Starter
P A N

Natsu wrote:

support o:/ go pan :3
thanks natsu :P ><
P A N
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P A N
SPOILER

- Kevin wrote:

Hi, From P A N's M4M queue.

Awesome, I love the songs of Mami Kawada. you hit sounds fits perfectly with this music
hope it get ranked soon

(ノ·ω·)ノ︵

[General]

add 'Beam of Light' to tags it's his english name. yep
03:38:030 - 04:38:343 - Kiai Time. i don't need kial :X
Widescreen support is toggle on for normal and off for hard, whatever you have no SB i think it does not matter. it will have ><
You have a custom skin so you MUST a 'approachcircle.png' too and put this code on all your .osu files: well ok
SliderBorder: 255,255,255
under this:
[Colours]
Combo1 : 255,128,192
Combo2 : 255,128,128
Combo3 : 255,255,128
Combo4 : 128,128,255
When skinning gameplay elements, complete sets of elements must be skinned. For instance, if you skin hitcircles, you must include a hitcircle.png, hitcircleoverlay.png, approachcircle.png, and a slider border color (this can be done by adding the line "SliderBorder: 255,255,255" (using RGB values) under the [Colours] section of each .osu file). The same logic applies to hitbursts, cursors, numbers, and anything else of this nature. If you didn't intend to skin an element in the set, then using the template skin's version is okay. Setting a Skin Preference is also acceptable (e.g. forcing the default skin).
[Hard]

00:50:843 - Empty white tick, during the test play I missed something here:
Would you delete 00:49:905 (5) - noo I like the current one :3
Move 00:49:905 (5) - to 00:50:218 -
Add notes 00:49:905 - and 00:51:155 -
02:26:311 - Add note it will overmap i think
04:24:436 - Add note ^
04:37:405 (2) - This part seems a lit weird delete slider Add notes at 04:37:405 - 04:37:718 - 04:37:874 - dont forget the hit sounds noo

*All this part is fine but you can't use some hit sounds*
00:27:093 (5) - *why dont follow the 1/2 rythm? move to 00:26:936 - make him a 1/2 slider so you can add the missing Whistle/Clap add a note here 00:26:936 - * it already have whistle in the song so don't need to add it and i don't want to spam 1/2 rhythm :3
00:33:968 (4,5) - same here ^
00:36:468 (4,5) - ^ ^
00:43:968 (2,3) - ^ ^
00:46:468 (4,5) - ^ ^
00:53:968 (2,3) - ^ [/color]^

**These parts I was beloved about the sound suddenly startled by the noisy of the double finish**
03:28:343 (1) - ** remove finish and whistle from the tail add clap **
03:48:343 (1) - ^ I low the volume instead
04:08:343 (1) - ^ I low the volume instead
04:28:343 (1) - ^ [/color]I low the volume instead


[Normal]

This map is pretty good.

01:03:343 (1,2,3) - Too noisy ok low a bit
02:00:530 (3,1) - overlap try to move (1) then fix 02:02:093 (2) - I think its fine
Image Preview
**Same as Hard**
03:28:343 (1) - same as Hard remove Finish and whistle from the tail add clap
03:48:968 (2) - remove Finish and wistle add clapsame
04:08:968 (2) - ^ same
04:28:968 (2) - ^[/color] same

thanks for modding :)
updated.
Last edited by P A N , edited 1 time in total.
- Kevin
159 posts
Joined September 2012
- Kevin
Well, you refused almost all of my mod: (

You missed the code: "SliderBorder: 255,255,255" at HARD

Bye~
P A N
2,354 posts
Joined December 2011
Topic Starter
P A N

- Kevin wrote:

Well, you refused almost all of my mod: (

You missed the code: "SliderBorder: 255,255,255" at HARD

Bye~
not that much hehe dont be sad :(
Unusual-bot
Unusual-bot
hi~, new modder is trying to mod your map for m4m :D
sorry if i make some mistakes in my mod (or my bad english)
let's start then

Normal
01:14:593 (2,3) - i think just make this into 1 slider
01:50:843 (1) - end of slider 272, 256
01:52:093 (2) - 176, 256
02:27:093 (4,5) - make these into 1 slider
02:37:093 (2,3) - ^
02:47:093 (5,6) - ^
03:24:593 (2,3) - ^
03:37:093 (5) - 236, 104

Hard
00:26:936 (5) - end slider 232, 96
02:44:280 (2,3,1) - i think this flow is better
03:06:468 (3) - 44, 56

i think that's all from me
really2 love this song, can't say much, it's been a while since i got a good relaxing song
i think i'll shoot a star too
anyway, good luck~
Hollow Wings
1,514 posts
Joined July 2010
Hollow Wings
m4m

General

  1. combo color 1 and 4 looks really same, maybe exchange combo color 3 and 4 so that players won't be confused by those color when they see color 1 looked really same following color 4 with that skin. :3

Hard

  1. 03:43:030 (1,2) - blanket 1's end and 2's track?
  2. 03:44:905 (3,5) - blanket perfect (nazi
  3. 04:07:718 (8,1) - ^, well, i think if u want, there're lots of unperfect blanket in this diff can be fixed, thou they're not serious problem at all and feel free to ignore them lol
  4. 03:47:718 (5) - maybe 1/2slider+note here instead of 3/4slider with a beat here?
  5. omg lots of blank u've rest at the end of the song lol

Normal

  1. fine
only 2 diff with low bpm and low diffcult... actually i think it's not a diffcult work to map a harder diff thou, mapset now is still good to me lol

good luck
Soldsaga KunG
282 posts
Joined May 2013
Soldsaga KunG
M4M

Diff Normal
00:33:343 (1) - ห่าง ๆ หน่อยก็ได้มั้งพี่ แต่ไม่ต้องไกลมาก
02:08:343 (1) - ลองแยกสไลเดอร์เป็น 2 อั้นดีมะพี่

The Ends Mods ^^

Good Luck :)
-Neipezi
2,266 posts
Joined October 2011
-Neipezi
pan san o_o/

- sources "Shakugan_no_shana" and "灼眼のシャナ" change. Put the tag Shakugan_no_shana (_ Delete)
- artist "川田まみ" add
- background
bg1

it's not?
bg2

the picture is good or not good lettering D:
bg3

not good background D:

good song:D
P A N
2,354 posts
Joined December 2011
Topic Starter
P A N

Hollow Wings wrote:

SPOILER
m4m

General

  1. combo color 1 and 4 looks really same, maybe exchange combo color 3 and 4 so that players won't be confused by those color when they see color 1 looked really same following color 4 with that skin. :3

Hard

  1. 03:43:030 (1,2) - blanket 1's end and 2's track?
  2. 03:44:905 (3,5) - blanket perfect (nazi
  3. 04:07:718 (8,1) - ^, well, i think if u want, there're lots of unperfect blanket in this diff can be fixed, thou they're not serious problem at all and feel free to ignore them lol
  4. 03:47:718 (5) - maybe 1/2slider+note here instead of 3/4slider with a beat here?
  5. omg lots of blank u've rest at the end of the song lol

Normal

  1. fine
only 2 diff with low bpm and low diffcult... actually i think it's not a diffcult work to map a harder diff thou, mapset now is still good to me lol

good luck
fix some :3

-Kirito wrote:

pan san o_o/

- sources "Shakugan_no_shana" and "灼眼のシャナ" change. Put the tag Shakugan_no_shana (_ Delete)
- artist "川田まみ" add
- background
bg1

it's not?
bg2

the picture is good or not good lettering D:
bg3

not good background D:

good song:D
yeah i hope i fix all of that, but i not accept your bg because it have yuji in it :( but thanks anyway hehe XD I didn't not like yuji, but just I love Shana

K4zuya K wrote:

hi~, new modder is trying to mod your map for m4m :D
sorry if i make some mistakes in my mod (or my bad english)
let's start then
ok you are new so im gonna reply your mod :3
Normal
01:14:593 (2,3) - i think just make this into 1 slider 2 circle fits better imo because the rhythm on (2) is just a beat and don't have a vocal and the vocal start on (3) so 3 is not fit for the tail of slider.
01:50:843 (1) - end of slider 272, 256 the slider don't need to be only just straight slider :) I make it flow with next circle.
01:52:093 (2) - 176, 256 ah i see, this is your reason, I still want to keep my un-straight slider because if it has just a straight slider, it will boring.
02:27:093 (4,5) - make these into 1 slider I think slider here is not fit, my some reason D:
02:37:093 (2,3) - ^ ah yea I know now why want prefer it to be slider, because its already have so many slider so it will boring, so i add some circle instead. and slider not fit the music well too.
02:47:093 (5,6) - ^ same
03:24:593 (2,3) - ^ same
03:37:093 (5) - 236, 104 I think its fine, not a problem

Hard
00:26:936 (5) - end slider 232, 96 as I said at 01:50:843 (1) - end of slider 272, 256
02:44:280 (2,3,1) - i think this flow is better hmm i fix in different way :D i make it curve down a bit for a better flow
03:06:468 (3) - 44, 56 ahaha fix XD I know someone should point this.

i think that's all from me
really2 love this song, can't say much, it's been a while since i got a good relaxing song
i think i'll shoot a star too
anyway, good luck~
thanks anyway, good luck for you too :)
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P A N
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Topic Starter
P A N
updated anyway
Xinely
5,014 posts
Joined April 2012
Xinely
Hi PAN, well i planed to m4m with you so here is my mod


  • General
    > hmm quality of BG isn't really good. try to find nice quality BG instead? maybe like this
    > remove "川田まみ" in tags and add to Artist with Kawada Mami as romanised artist
    > source must be "Shakugan no Shana Final" taken from http://shakugan.wikia.com/wiki/K%C5%8Db%C5%8D
    > add 3rd ending in tags? take from same source as above
    > and tittle should be use "光芒" with Koubou in romanised tittle. taken from same source ofc
    > why no kiai time in this map? i feel you need to use kiai time here. yeah i'm surely you know why and where :3


  • Normal
    guess to use AR 4 here. This diff is Normal. not Easy :<
    00:38:030 - add note here? vocal seems increasing here so i thought add note better to emphasize it
    00:50:530 (4) - you did a NC every stanza here, should be NC too for consistency
    00:59:280 (2) - whistle on head. for consistency with 00:50:530 (4) -
    01:03:968 - finish on this time is really loud, as i heard the music tbh not really need finish but if you want to keep it. lower the volume at least 45%
    01:12:405 - add note? to emphasize the vocal and i think if you add circle here still not really Hard for low bpm so it's fine :3
    01:25:843 (1) - 2 repeats are kinda bad in my eyes. how about 2 sliders of 1/1 with symmetrical or something? maybe like http://puu.sh/5WPVV.jpg
    01:28:343 (2) - how about use drum here? somehow i feel fit with the music
    02:08:343 (1) - in this diff i saw you're mostly following vocal here, idk what is followed by this slider. i recommended to change the rhythm similar like http://puu.sh/5WQad.jpg
    02:52:093 (1,2) - maybe swap the NC here, in (2) have a really loud sound until you using finish for it. NC it for emphasize it hahaha
    02:54:593 (1,3) - if you follow above, swap NC here for consistency
    03:36:780 - add note here with finish sound. try to hear and you will hear a cymbal sound here


  • Hard
    if you follow to use AR4 in Normal. you can use AR 7 for here
    00:56:936 (5) - flip this slider? somehow i feel better for visual/design. flow isn't really bad too
    00:57:718 (1,1) - no need to use NC for them. remove it
    01:03:030 (3) - how about add whistle too here? to emphasize the vocal hahaha
    01:51:155 (4) - well i don't really like jump here, try to move 252,92 instead?
    02:04:280 (4) - flow is seems forced here, try move to 172,132 instead to make blanket too
    02:11:311 (4,4) - remove finish on both? i feel drum only sounds better since no any of loud sound on both time
    02:35:218 (4) - ctrl+G? to add more jump here xD
    03:23:655 (2) - flow seems too forced here, ctrl+G or change it. up to you xD
    03:48:343 (1) - on slider's body remove finish and whistle. whistle is too noisy here and finish on body is useless
    04:11:468 (6) - 368,32 for better symmetrical
    04:24:280 (7) - NC for better read by player and somehow better to use NC. maybe cause new pattern

Nice Hard diff
Good Luck pantsu :3
Zero__wind
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Zero__wind
Hi, as requested
wow so many mods 0.0

Unrankable issues
Highly recommend to fix
Common sugestions

General
Source inconsistent between diffs
I suggest that you rename your soft-hitwhistle file to drum-hitnormal, in this way, you could use both that bass sound and the default sof whistles to decorate the SC:1 parts

Hard
00:38:030 (8) - is this whistle intentional?
00:57:718 (1,1) - I think these NCs are unneccessary, better remove them
01:02:405 (4) - I suppose you would need a whistle here? according to your hitsound pattern for previous phrases
01:07:874 (2) - a drum finish would fit its end much better, as there is a kick drum at that point, not a snare drum
01:08:343 (1) - I recommend to move this further to the right, it's quite close to 01:07:561 (1,2) - and might mislead some players thinking that it was at 01:08:186 - . and also, it would emphasise the heavy beat better if you put it further away
01:20:218 (2,3) - not a good rhythm here, considering that you're always following the vocal, better use only a circle at 01:20:218 - and start a 1/1 slider from 01:20:530 -
01:47:561 - I think adding a beat here would form a better rhythm
02:06:780 (3,4,5,6) - these stacks are weird to me, I prefer to stack 02:07:093 (4,5) - instead cause they share the same drum
02:13:343 (1) - same as the first part, better move further away from the former slider, the spacing for this point is even worse. 02:12:874 (2) - shares almost the same distance between the former and the latter slider, while the time gap is different
02:15:218 (4,5,6) - rhythm not fitting vocal, better try the same thing as what I've mentioned at 01:20:218 (2,3) -
02:25:218 (4,5) - ^ and also for the later similar cases
02:29:905 (5) - may CTRL+G
02:30:530 (6,1) - better replace them with one 1/1 slider =.= I think as long as the sliders are parallel with each other, it won't break your pattern
02:32:718 (4,1) - this is a muuuuuch better distance usage than 01:08:343 (1) - and 02:13:343 (1) -
02:53:030 (8) - replace the whistle with clap would make it fit the music better and emphasise better
03:02:718 (6,1) - , 03:04:905 (1,2) - plz compare your rhythm pattern between similar vocal phrases and you'll find the problem, I suppose they should really be formed with same rhythm cause the vocal is just correspoinding to each other
03:38:030 (4) - would you try to replace this whistle with clap to form a more powerful hitsounding pattern?
04:09:593 (3) - I prefer to switch the flow from clockwise to anti-clockwise from this point, cause your flow keeps running clockwise for too long 04:01:468 (6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - . stacks are nice point for switching flow, try something like the pic below, and you'll know how to fix the later notes, it's easy to understand I think
SPOILER
04:32:405 (7) - missing whistle?
04:38:030 (3,4) - I know you're trying to keep a pattern here but I really think it's not good enough for the end, plz use a bigger distance to emphasise better, see the pic below, 2.0x distance between 3 and 4
SPOILER

most problem for this diff is the rhythm for the chorus part, try not switch your rhythm too cassualy between vocal and drums, that really does no good

Normal
HP3 AR4 OD3 for basic difficulty setting, after all this is a Normal diff, not a Easy
you can try to use tick rate 2 and then you could add more drum sounds using your custom tick sound
nothing wrong here

That's all
Good luck
P A N
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Topic Starter
P A N
thanks all :3
fix everywhere
xHappy-
443 posts
Joined May 2012
xHappy-
Normal
00:37:093 (2) - V
Screenshot
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P A N
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Topic Starter
P A N

P_KunG wrote:

Normal
00:37:093 (2) - V
Screenshot
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ok fix...
aonkub555
133 posts
Joined June 2012
aonkub555
hard

03:28:968 ตรงนี้น่าจะเบาvolให้เหลือซัก30% เสียงฉาบมันดังไปหน่อย
ai mod แจ้งว่าไฟล์แมพใหญ่ไป
ไมไม่เห็นมีkial timeเลย

good map คับ
Setsurei
1,149 posts
Joined May 2012
Setsurei
as requested, SB finally done (I'm too lazy to do it fast lol)
oh right, don't forget >> no kudos

epilepsy warning + wide screen support because the BG is WS

images files directly put on your song folder, don't need to create SB folder because only 2 images
images files taken from your Shana Marathon, I'm too lazy to make snow again lol
- s.png
- w.jpg

SPOILER
[Events]
//Background and Video events
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"s.png",320,240
 S,0,67718,,1.4
 F,0,67718,68343,0,1
 M,0,67718,88968,320,-1000,320,60
 F,0,68343,88343,1
 F,0,88343,88968,1,0
 F,0,132718,133343,0,1
 M,0,132718,173343,320,-1000,320,1000
 F,0,133343,172718,1
 F,0,172718,173343,1,0
 F,0,197718,198343,0,1
 M,0,197718,259593,320,-1000,320,1475
 F,0,198343,258968,1
 F,0,258968,259593,1,0
 F,0,298343,298968,0,1
 M,0,298343,323343,320,-1000,320,0
 F,0,298968,321468,1
 F,0,321468,323343,1,0.008000016
Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"s.png",320,240
 S,0,247718,,1.4
 F,0,247718,248343,0,1
 M,0,247718,309593,320,-1000,320,1475
 F,0,248343,308968,1
 F,0,308968,309593,1,0
Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"w.jpg",320,240
 S,0,23030,,1.1
 F,0,23030,23343,0,0.7
 F,0,23343,23655,0
 F,0,43030,43343,0,0.7
 F,0,43343,43655,0
 F,0,53030,53343,0,0.7
 F,0,53343,53655,0
 F,0,63030,63343,0,0.7
 F,0,63343,63655,0
 F,0,68030,68343,0,0.7
 F,0,68343,68655,0
 F,0,78030,78343,0,0.7
 F,0,78343,78655,0
 F,0,85530,85843,0,0.7
 F,0,85843,86155,0
 F,0,108030,108343,0,0.7
 F,0,108343,108655,0
 F,0,118030,118343,0,0.7
 F,0,118343,118655,0
 F,0,133030,133343,0,0.7
 F,0,133343,133655,0
 F,0,143030,143343,0,0.7
 F,0,143343,143655,0
 F,0,153030,153343,0,0.7
 F,0,153343,153655,0
 F,0,163030,163343,0,0.7
 F,0,163343,163655,0
 F,0,173030,173343,0,0.7
 F,0,173343,173655,0
 F,0,183030,183343,0,0.7
 F,0,183343,183655,0
 F,0,198030,198343,0,0.7
 F,0,198343,198655,0
 F,0,208030,208343,0,0.7
 F,0,208343,208655,0
 F,0,208655,208968,0,0.7
 F,0,208968,209280,0
 F,0,218030,218343,0,0.7
 F,0,218343,218655,0
 F,0,228030,228343,0,0.7
 F,0,228343,228655,0
 F,0,228655,228968,0,0.7
 F,0,228968,229280,0
 F,0,238030,238343,0,0.7
 F,0,238343,238655,0
 F,0,248030,248343,0,0.7
 F,0,248343,248655,0
 F,0,248655,248968,0,0.7
 F,0,248968,249280,0
 F,0,258030,258343,0,0.7
 F,0,258343,258655,0
 F,0,268030,268343,0,0.7
 F,0,268343,268655,0
 F,0,268655,268968,0,0.7
 F,0,268968,269280,0
 F,0,278030,278343,0,0.7
 F,0,278343,278655,0
//Storyboard Sound Samples
P A N
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Topic Starter
P A N
add thanks :3
Diran
8 posts
Joined February 2013
Diran
I love you so much for mapping this. Had no-one started mapping this by the end of the year I would have done so myself (albeit a horrible job).
Goodluck with mapping and ranked.
kajiyatta
1,421 posts
Joined April 2011
kajiyatta
M4M
[General]
Check Display epilesy warning better since there are some white flashes.
[Normal]
Placement
01:15:218(2,3) For the easiest diff, I don't suppose it is better to be much overlapped. So move this note not to overlap as possible as you can.
SPOILER
03:35:218(3) This note has placed in blanket but it looks a bit forced and not good flow. So move this note like this?
SPOILER
Rhythm
Some blank sounds not good for consistence rhythm, so I pick some to be added a note.
00:53:030 Add a note here to follow the vocal.
00:56:780 ^
03:08:030 ^
02:57:718(7,8,1,2,3,1,2) Make a blank somewhere in this part, it is the easiest diff so these linked notes looks difficult. I suppose you can delete a note at 03:00:530 better.
03:54:593(1,2,3,4,5,6,1) Again, same as above. So delete a not at 03:58:030 better.
Hit Sound
01:25:843(1) Sounds a bit loudly, so turen down vlume to 50 %? Also same as Hard.
02:08:343(1) Same as Hard.
[Hard]
Placement
00:56:468(4) Looks a bit ugly so I suppose you can stack this note at (1) better. Of course you should move following notes in your own.
SPOILER
01:51:780(6,7) Again, it looks a bit ugly and not good movement to hit notes. So move these notes like this?
SPOILER
01:59:436(3) I suppose spacing should be ×0.7 to follow your 1/4 pattern.
02:21:46(5) I don't suppose this jump would be effective, so you can set this part to follow DS better.
SPOILER
03:02:793(5) Nazi, down some grid and the flow looks more fine.
04:03:3968(2) It looks a bit far for Hard, over ×3.00 spacing wouldn't be accepted I suppose. So move this closer better.
Rhythm
01:28:343 unnecessary green line
01:45:843 ^
02:11:468
00:24:436 Add a note or 1/4 slider here since the vocal has started from here.And you did same pattern in other parts.
Hit Sound
02:08:343(3) You already added soft-finish in before part at 01:03:343, but here is custom one. So you should set one of them better.

Not find so big problem, it looks neatly. Good luck.
P A N
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P A N
almost all fix, thanks so much :3
Natsu
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Joined September 2012
Natsu
HI~

General:
  1. your timing is really off try: 23380 offset sound more accurate for me.
  2. your BG is 1280x720 resize to 1024x768. Instead? o.o
  3. Missing Skin Files 
    reversearrow.png 
    scorebar-bg.png
  4. you're missing a slide border in hard diff, add this line to your .osu :
    SliderBorder : 255,255,255


Hard:
  1. OD5 is so low for hard difficult, use OD6 instead
  2. 00:27:093 the drum here is important you should map it properly if you want, you can try:
    SPOILER
  3. 00:34:593 same as above, I believe you will improve the rhythm if you do.
  4. 00:34:905 add whistle following the piano, being consistent with the one at 00:35:218 (6) - (there are more similar, but you're experienced enough to find them )
  5. 00:44:593 same as 00:27:093
  6. 00:47:718 (6,7) - this stack doesn't play nice since the vocals are strong enough to be unstacked, you will improve the gameplay.
  7. 00:51:468 (2) - 1/2 slider sound better, following the hold vocals, try it and check if it fit for you
  8. 01:07:561 (1,2) - the sliders doesn't fit the music nicely, try circles since I love what you did on 01:05:843 (1,2,3,4) - and 01:06:624 (1,2,3,4) -
  9. 01:14:905 (5) - 2 circles fit better the vocals here, like you did on 00:47:718
  10. 01:24:905 (4) - same as above
  11. 01:25:686 (6) - nothing in the music here, I suggest you to remove this circle
  12. 01:28:343 missing NC, following your stanzas pattern
  13. 01:51:780 (6,7) - this rhythm confuse me, is the first time in the diff you used it, try this instead:
    SPOILER
  14. 02:04:280 (4) - ctrl g? and make a pattern similar to:
    SPOILER
  15. 02:44:593 (3) - rotate this in -35º selection center for better flow and design with 02:45:218 (1) -
  16. 02:51:468 (1) - this NC is unnecessary, since the jump is perfectly readable without it but you need one in 02:52:093 (3) - like you did on others patterns
  17. 02:54:593 (2,3) - make the sliders curved? better flow like:
    SPOILER
  18. 03:20:530 missing NC
  19. 03:30:530 (5) - ^
  20. 04:00:530 (5) - , 04:05:843 (5) - , 04:10:530 (5) - , 04:23:343 (5) - , ^

Normal:
  1. It's a normal difficult try: AR4 OD3 HP3
  2. 00:28:343 (1,2) - Ah this long sliders doesn't fit the vocals, maybe you want to improve the rhythm try this:
    SPOILER
  3. 00:35:218 (3,4) - this is confused, are you following the drums or the vocals? imo just remove this circle 00:35:530 (4) - to make a easy rhythm for new players
  4. 00:43:030 (3) - same as above
  5. 00:49:905 (3) - ctrl g? to make the rhythm consistent with your previous pattern also is better for a normal, imo
  6. 00:56:780 (2,3,4,5) - so much single tap for the easy diff of the set, 4 and 5 can be a slider instead imo
  7. 01:18:030 (3) - this circle is unnecessary imo, consider to remove it.
  8. 01:25:530 (3) - same as above
  9. 01:48:343 (1) - too soon after a spinner for the easy difficult of the set, consider removing the circle or the spinner, I prefer to remove the spinner.
  10. 01:57:093 (1,2,3) - the first time you used three circles can be unexpected for players, you can easily use 1/2 repeat slider instead
  11. 02:23:030 (5) - same as 01:18:030
  12. 02:29:593 (2,3,4) - same as 01:57:093
  13. 02:44:593 (2,3) - same as 00:49:905
  14. 04:09:593 (1) - remove this NC is unnecessary, It just make the previous one too short
  15. 04:14:280 (2) - this slider sound weird, since is better if you start it in 04:14:593 and end in 04:15:218
  16. 04:29:593 (1) - same as 04:09:593


GL nice song <3 my kokoro did dokidoki <3
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