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01:24:655 - I think it is 1/8 snap, reconsider it
1-9 / S+1-8 columns Unagi Onigiri "UHD"Would reduce OD to 7,5 tbh
00:04:084 (4084|3) - would move it to 2 to represent the pitch
00:08:655 (8655|3) - ^
(consider this in SHD diff too)
00:05:798 (5798|3) - yeah triple LN would be to much, try to extend this to 1/2 LN for consistency
00:09:512 (9512|3) - moving it to 2 would fix the hand balance a little bit, actually this start looks too harsh, I've missed here on first try
00:11:226 (11226|3) - it sounds not so long, would recomment to cut this until 00:11:441 - or even 00:11:405 - to emphasize the "attenuation" effect
00:16:155 (16155|2,16298|2,16441|3,16584|3) - starting stream by overwhelming one hand is not really good idea, please try to alternate the loading between hands
00:19:084 - 00:19:226 - you can try to add secondary LNs for that additionally sound (consider other similar points)
00:25:226 - 1/2 LNs are not representing the music properly, would be fine if you use 1/4 LNs for 1/4 sounds and add long LNs for background noises
00:30:941 (30941|0,31084|1,31084|0,31226|0,31369|0,31798|0,31941|0) - yeah you can try to rearrange for hand balance
00:32:226 - 00:32:655 - 00:33:084 - 00:33:512 - you can try to add +1 note, I think you can make it playable
00:36:655 - something like this would be more interesting, how do you think?
https://puu.sh/yGjQX/00dd573a37.png00:38:941 - one-hand trill would be more interesting here imo
00:50:369 - quadr note here for cymbal, this one actually sounds stronger than simple snare 00:50:084
00:54:941 (54941|1) - 00:55:369 (55369|3) - 00:55:798 (55798|0) - 00:56:084 (56084|3) - 00:56:512 (56512|3) - I think these sounds are not emphasized properly, I think you'd not like my suggestions, so try to think one more time how you can represent it by more interesting way than just 1/2 solo LN
00:56:084 (56084|3,56512|3) - also these should be on different columns for PR
01:22:369 - weird choise of LNs length, the sound is kinda glitched and seems cutted (idk) so short LNs would fit more
01:36:084 (96084|3,96512|0,96941|2,97226|1,97655|0) - 1/2 LN would be enough and would give more space for stream pattern
01:38:655 - should add 1/2 LN here for consistency with 01:39:798 (99798|0)
01:41:262 - I think here is pitch change, you could try to add note here
01:41:512 - do you think to map drums as LNs is good idea? Looks inconsistent a little bit
01:46:655 - I think adding note here would be fine and not uncomfortable in compare with 01:47:084 (107084|0,107084|1,107226|2,107226|1,107369|3,107369|2)
01:58:655 (118655|2) - move to 2 because pitch differs from previous 01:57:512 (117512|2)
02:15:226 - by this point try to compare 1st column and others, it looks like 3+1 style, not sure if it's intended
02:48:655 - I think this pattern can be more interesting, just example
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9762244Salmon Onigiri "SHD"I don't think elevated OD is needed, there are some LNs still
00:09:226 - what is the reason to place all 1/2 jacks on right hand. It would be ok if you place all 1/2 to left hand in the next similar part 00:13:798 - but it is not so
00:26:369 (26369|0,26726|2) - guess it should be a shield pattern for consistency with 00:25:226 (25226|0,25584|0) - 00:26:084 (26084|2,26298|2) - 00:26:798 (26798|3,27155|3) (not sure, try to make it look more logical)
00:33:369 (33369|2,33798|2,33941|2) - uncomfortable thing, you can avoid it
00:45:226 - 00:46:369 - 00:47:512 - I think these patterns lacks hand balance, try to compare 12 and 34 columns (first one is not that bad, but can be improved too)
00:38:369 - 01:49:226 - I think you need to swap these, first one looks more interesting
02:05:798 - overloading right hand when left hand feels empty, try to rearrange it
02:21:655 - 1st column is empty, shift some note to 1
02:28:655 - this part of song repeats 3rd time already, you might consider to change the style. Try out to add some extra LNs maybe
Ikura Onigiri "SC"00:27:084 (27084|3,27084|2,27155|0,27155|1) - making these single notes would be more suitable (imo) and interesting pattern
00:31:798 (31798|1,31869|3,31941|2,31941|0,32012|1,32084|3,32084|2) - emphasize this sound more
00:57:226 (57226|2,57226|3,57369|1,57369|0,57655|0,57655|3,57798|2,57798|1,58084|1,58084|2,58226|3,58226|0) - these are more impressive and audible than 00:58:512 (58512|3,58512|2,58655|1,58655|2,58798|1,58798|0) , reconsider that fact you made toms very easy and making bass harder than it should be
00:58:941 - boring choise of patterning (imo), try out this
https://puu.sh/yGl8J/3b0ec8515d.png01:31:869 (91869|1,91941|3,92012|1) - looks like random thing, anyway you need to shift this 01:32:655 (92655|1,92798|1) - jack (or better remove) to right hand for hand balance and PR consistency
01:33:798 - this pattern looks much easier than previous 01:24:655 , consider to make them same or swap because gradual complication is more interesting
01:50:655 (110655|3,110798|3) - insonsistent jack
02:07:369 (127369|1,127584|1,127941|1,128084|1) - would not recomment to overwhelm so much
02:14:369 (134369|1,134441|3,134512|1) - this is inconsistent in compare with other similar streams 02:15:512 (135512|3,135584|1,135655|2) - 02:16:655 (136655|3,136726|1,136798|2)
02:26:798 - 02:27:512 - 02:28:369 - very insonsistent to use different styles for same sound within less than within 4 seconds
02:34:084 (154084|1,154155|3,154226|1) - inconsistent in compare with other similar streams (again)
Umeboshi Onigiri "MX"00:12:798 (12798|1,12941|1) - should be on another column for PR (differs from 00:11:655 (11655|1,11798|1) ) and hand balance
00:22:512 (22512|0,22584|1,22655|2) - broken pattern would look more suitable because of drums, try out 1 4 3
00:30:655 - seems too weak pattern, try to make it trill
00:38:941 - this part looks harder than 00:27:512 - which is more impressive, you might undermap the calm part for difficult consistency
00:42:512 (42512|1,42798|1) - 00:44:798 (44798|1,45084|1) - are different pitches, change columns for PR and hand balance
00:47:655 (47655|0,47798|0) - inconsistent jack single+double, in other similar streams you use single+single jacks
also this stream 00:45:226 - has no any 1/2 jack, you can add it for consistency
00:54:941 - 00:55:369 - 00:55:798 - 00:56:084 - 00:56:512 - you can add LNs, these sounds could be emphasized more than just simple notes
01:11:226 (71226|3,71226|0,71512|0,71512|3) - shouldn't be on the same columns since sounds are different
01:11:155 (71155|2,71584|2,71941|2) - these also are different (PR) so consider to rearrange them
01:15:512 - 1st column is too empty, try to shift some notes to 1
01:21:512 - this sound seems to be kinda glitched a little bit, try to CTRL+H these 01:21:512 (81512|2,81584|1) - to represent it and also PR is different from 01:20:798 (80798|2,80869|1)
02:00:084 (120084|3,120226|2,120369|0,120512|3) - 1 2 3 4 would be more accurate for PR
02:01:084 (121084|1,121226|1) - not recommended, looks out of place in compare with previous part of difficulty
02:13:084 (133084|2,133369|2,133655|2) - all three are different pitches, shift some for PR
02:45:941 (165941|3,165941|2,166084|2,166084|1,166226|1,166226|0) - this pattern is harder than in SHD
https://puu.sh/yGmN7/dd936b4063.pngPoly's Konbu Onigiri "HD"00:16:655 (16655|0,16869|0) - these are different pitches and also inconsistent with 00:17:226 (17226|0,17441|1)
00:28:941 - you can add LN here
00:29:084 (29084|3) - actually this LN splits in 00:29:226
01:12:726 (72726|3,72941|3,73155|3,73369|3) - this is anchor and this is unneded, you can avoid this, try to rearrange the pattern
01:17:226 - would not recommend to ignore this basses if you mapped other ones properly
00:27:512 - 01:38:369 - this are literally same parts, why don't you map drums in the second one? Looks very unlogical, you can make it the same or making the first one without one, instead of second, because gradual complication is more interesting
01:52:084 - 1/4 and 1/2 are the same sounds with the same length, as I understand, you use 1/4 in the end of the every pattern, if yes, then this should be 1/4 too 01:54:798 (114798|1) . Anyway not recommend to use this way, looks inconsistent
02:00:512 (120512|3) - extending it until 02:00:798 - would fit more
02:05:655 (125655|2,125798|2) - I don't think it is necessary, looks to hard in compare with other part of kiai, I think player will miss it :p
02:40:726 (160726|1,160941|1) - ow, highly recommended to remove this shield since even doesn't contain 1/4 shields and also it looks out of place
Plain Onigiri "NM"00:17:226 (17226|2,17512|2) - I guess there's no actual reason for this, sounds are different and also not comfortable
00:17:798 - oh please don't ignore bass
00:24:941 (24941|3) - it's better to split it to 2 LNs because there is 1/4 sound and you left it just unmapped. Also for consistency with 00:20:226 (20226|1,20369|3)
00:36:512 (36512|1) - better move to another column, pitch differs from 00:35:655 (35655|1)
00:36:655 - would be nice to add a note here
Also all difficulties end this LN 00:36:512 (36512|1) - at 00:37:226 , why this one is not the same length?
00:44:226 (44226|3) - it's better to start pattern from left hand since right hand is already loaded a bit 00:43:226 (43226|3,43512|2,43798|3,43941|2)
00:51:512 (51512|0,51941|1) - you can swap columns for balance
00:59:226 - feels empty~
01:02:798 (62798|1,62941|3,63084|1,63226|3) - would not recommend to use such trill
01:06:369 (66369|3) - this should be started at 01:06:655 - and add some notes there instead
01:07:512 - this deserves a trill more than 01:06:941 (66941|1,67084|2,67226|1,67369|2)
01:22:369 - 1/1 LNs would be awesome
01:52:084 - this part is so calm but 1/2 LNs will make a newbie player tense up because it will hurt their accuracy
02:08:941 (128941|0,129226|0) - would be better if you avoid it
02:13:512 (133512|2,133798|2,134084|3,134369|3) - two jacks on right hand in a row, it's unbalanced a bit, try to shift second LN to left hand
02:17:798 (137798|0,138084|0,138369|0) - anchor is not recommended in lowest diff
02:18:798 (138798|3,138941|0) - this will be definitely hurting accuracy and combo, better not to use any kind of colmpicated LN in lowest diffs, try to map it without LN comlication
02:24:512 (144512|1,144798|1) - this can also make random miss
02:46:941 - well this is the same pattern as in HD diff, make it easier, I guess it can be too hard