Hey!
[General]
[Kalibe]
[General]
- It would be good to have the name of the storyboarder added to the tags. You know, they did contribute to this map.
Lilyanna
- 00:24:240 (2) - this really should be replaced with two circles to match the rhythm you were using previously.
Note: 00:46:943 (2) - same, perhaps. The patterning feels pretty close to the first one. - 01:03:159 (2,3) - that is quite a straightforward way to introduce jumps. I feel like we should reduce the spacing, to make the jump feel more natural and easier to understand.
Note: 01:27:281 (7,8,9) - same. I really doubt that the spacing changes are large enough to justify the jumps. - 00:48:160 (4,5,6,7,8) - you have mixed up vocals and instruments. And ended up with the pattern that emphasises neither of them. I see that you try to use slider/circle difference to separate rhythms, but it still feels sort of overdone. Consider sticking to a certain instrument instead of just mixing everything? This way the rhythm will be way easier to follow and feel more natural.
- 00:56:065 (1,2) - this and some similar patterns - the flow change feels a little bit sharp, since it's a slow song, let's try something softer? more circular patterns
- 01:14:713 (5) - the vocals are snapped on the blue tick ahead, actually. In case you were going for the repeating 1/4 instruments, you can keep the slider, but you'd have to map 01:13:497 - as well.
- 01:22:619 (4) - pretty sure that two circles or two 1/4 sliders would do better. The idea is to emphasise 01:23:024 - as well as the beat before. Tey are pretty much even in strength and are supported by vocals.
Note: 01:25:862 (4) - same, I believe. - 01:19:781 (2) - as it has been mentioned by Natsu, the vocals are actually following 1/2 rhythm.
- 03:48:767 (3,4) - the jump here feels like an overkill, I believe that the spacing should be much smaller as the slider does not highligh any strong beats.
- 04:11:267 - why are you ignoring these beats? As we were discussing the map you made it clear that your intention was to stress as many beats as you could.
- 04:53:024 (2) - try to remove and add a slider to (1)? This citcle feels really weak and it appears to be done mostly for polarity purpsoses.
[Kalibe]
- 03:11:470 (3,4,5) - all three of them sound very similar, yet they are spaced in 3 different ways. One is stacked, the first one has a jump and the last one uses regular spacing. I would probably just space all three of these objects to form a small jumpy pattern.
- 03:42:078 (3,4,5) - let's reverse the pattern and space 3-4 close as the sound on (4) is really weak and then give (5) a small jump as it gets more tense. What do you think?