namirin

1. 00:12:776 (5,1) - swap nc?
2. 00:20:568 (3,1) - this overlapping looks a bit ugly, so maybe move or change the 00:20:568 (3) - form would works well here i think
3. 01:49:399 (5,6) - maybe not stacking them plays well since the 5 sliders speed and stop aiming doesn't fit here, so move 01:49:789 (6) - around 304/208 should be fine imo
4. 03:03:620 - ignoring this beat is way to weird o.o
5. 05:15:113 (2,3) - miss stacking?

1. 00:09:659 (1) - idk if i'm nitpicking or not, but maybe remove NC here and add one over at 00:08:880 (5) - and 00:10:049 (3) - for consistency with the earlier parts.
2. 00:12:971 (1) - this is a rly weird jump i feel, like when i do it my cursor ends up in the middle of the slider since it's a large jump, barely avoiding sliderbreaking and i just hold it there till the next slider comes. it feels like there's no real movement there which is weird cos it's a slider, you know. i find having a curved slider that blankets the next which starts at circle (3) better. (though this problem is gone after playing it like 4 times, i'll just leave it here so you can consider what is better for the map)
3. 00:35:178 (5) - ok so circle (4) is a piano key while circle (5) is *namirin's voice. they're not the same thing so it's kinda weird that you stack these two together. imo a simple linear pattern from (4) to NC(1) should suffice.
4. 00:59:529 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - the piano keys at (1) and (3) are pretty loud, to the point that probably (2) don't really fit. consider changing that into a 1/2 slider
5. 01:01:477 (4,5,6,7) - i think this pattern could be improved as the triangle thing looks a little bad with those circles spaced that inconsistently. a proper triangle shape could do fine, but here's one idea of mine that i really like : http://imgur.com/ooPggEW (1.45x spacing for those 3)
6. 01:24:659 (8) - this sounds more like 2 separate circles, no?
7. 01:32:938 (4,1) - in some areas you give circles in 1/4 beat low distance spacing (ie 00:37:711 (1,2,3,4) - ), and over here there is a triplet relatively far away from the previous slider.you can say that the distance are clearly different in the editor, but in a cs4.5 map like this, it's quite hard to notice this while playing. maybe consider stacking them to the slider end or overlap slightly such that it's way more obvious.
8. 01:44:334 (2,3) - there's no sound at (3) unless i heard wrong, so imo 2 circles are misleading, please consider having just 1 1/4 slider instead. (btw there are 2 piano sounds i think, at where (2) is and at 01:44:432 - , maybe you can structure a pattern to capture those keys too)
9. 01:58:945 (3,4) - very noticeable 5 note stream or piano keys and rum beats mixed together that i really think is more important than the 2nd loud piano key you've mapped at present.
10. 02:01:477 (6) - i'm probably nitpicking again, but that's a not entirely 1/8 beats if you hear the sound at 50% speed. maybe replace it with a 1/4 slider and a circle, though it might not matter much.
11. 02:20:568 (7) - in this jump sequence, the quitar goes up to a high tone, then drops from 02:20:178 - onwards to a low tone. maybe the jumps will feel better if the spacing decreases at this circle, where it can be placed at somewhere around (350,275).
12. 02:27:581 (1,3) - i'm kind of a slider nazi, hence i deMAND THIS SLIDER TO BE SYMMETRICAL!! (turn on grid snap for ez help)
13. 02:43:555 (1) - and 02:44:334 (1) - NCs looks nice and all, but they are actually redundant, don't you think?
14. 03:25:243 (1,2,1,2) - 2 circles to capture just 1 piano key is a little too much i believe. perhaps you can replace them with sliders with increasing sv? (the other circles are alright at there are 4 piano keys this time, 03:26:023 (1,2) - though you might need to change the spacing of the circles at 03:26:023 (1,2) - )
15. 03:44:529 (3,4) - this is really confusing imo like (3) is in a stack which makes it hard to notice it's 1/8, plus it's aiming to the opposite of (4), which just misleads me to think (4) does not exist until later. i recommend at least fix (3) such that it is aiming towards (4).
16. 04:01:087 (3) - oi NC here to tell you've changed the sv again.
17. 04:04:789 (3) - i'd prefer the slider end to be clickable as that part has the same distinctive sound as 04:04:399 (2) - . (like what you did at 04:07:516 (2,3,4) - )
18. 04:09:854 (5) - it'll be confusing you overlap like this... *flashbacks to the 1/8 spacing sliders* ..i'm shivering.
19. 04:59:529 - there's that very noticeable sound that i think it's better to map. (norly you wont believe how many times i missed at that section)
20. 05:12:776 (1,3) - SAME!!
21. 05:46:087 (2,3,4) - ya you're mapping to the piano keys, but there's no transitionhere that hints towards it since you've been mapping the other stuff too for a full 5-10 seconds. 05:36:152 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this works as you used only circles to map to the other sounds, which helps as a transition to the circle-only piano keys pattern thing. i really suggest doing the same to that, ie turning 05:45:503 (1) - to 2 circles.

• Nothing relevant here~
  

• 00:11:217 (3,4) - This spacing is a bit confusing seeing 00:10:828 (2,3) - , so what about stacking 4 under 3 and 5 under 2 (start)?
  
  00:40:438 (2,3) - Is this similar to 00:27:971 (3,4) - ? If so, I'd use the same kind of spacing for the sake of consistency
  (00:31:087 (5,6) - btw, same)
  
  02:01:477 (6,1) - I'd rather space them out a little as I mentioned already above ^
  
  02:02:646 (3,4) - Why is this stacked while 01:19:399 (2,3) - isn't? I find the stack a bit uncomfortable to play, above all because you usually use the stacked notes for 1/2 notes (00:53:880 (5,1) - 01:06:347 (5,1) - 01:11:023 (5,1) - and many more) which makes you think that it is actually a 1/2 note there too
  02:10:828 (6,1) - same ^
  
  02:13:945 (1,2) - Just to show you how that stack is misleading. Keep this one and change the ones above imo
  
  02:22:906 (5) - really a bit too cramped x) Suggestion
  
  03:59:529 (3,4) - space them a bit (reference above ^)
  04:01:477 (4,1) - same
  
  04:08:100 (3) - I'd stack this on top of the next slider instead since it is quite a strong beat
  
  04:09:464 (4,5) - This spacing might be confused with 01:19:010 (1,2,3) - and such
  
  04:27:581 - Is the break end effect intended?
  
  05:25:243 (1,2) - space them out a bit
  05:35:763 (8,1) - same ^
  
  05:36:542 (2,3,4) - nazi, but not perfectly triangular
  
  05:38:490 (4,5) - this spacing is really inconsistent with 05:37:321 (1,2,3,4) - . Maybe put a NC on 5 or move them accordingly to the time line
  
  05:43:165 (3,1) - space them out a bit ^
  
  05:46:282 - 05:46:672 - what happened here o.O? Where are the beats? nvm, I noticed the piano the fourth time I listened to the part but it's indeed a bit misleading the first time lol
  
  05:54:854 (1,2) - space them out a bit ^
  
  05:57:191 (1,3) - Swap NC maybe, to emphasize the last beats which are on the high pitch notes of the piano
  

1. disable countdown
2. 00:12:776 (7,1) - can stack
3. 01:43:945 (1,2) - decrease spacing since you made the same spacing for 01:44:334 (2,3) - , confusing la
4. 01:52:321 (4,5) - can avoid overlap, no need such small spacing
5. 02:46:282 (1) - this should be a slider instead i think, both finish sound and strong vocal start here, should be emphasized
6. 04:47:841 (1,2,3,4) - what are you following? seems different from 04:49:984 (2,3) - here what you followed, suggest to map 04:48:425 - 04:48:815 - these
7. 05:08:490 (2) - nc for sv change
8. 05:42:776 (2,3) - no stack la, very easy to choke, it looks like 1/4 reverse slider according to what you did before, make them like 02:18:620 (2,3) -
9. increase overall volume by 10% - 20%, i can't hear those claps and finishes clearly tbh.
10. 01:15:698 (6) - is this clap on purpose?
11. 02:52:516 (1) - remove whistle on slider body zz, if want use whistle, add them on head and tail, since the slider body sound is really bad
12. 04:33:815 (4) - ^
13. 05:07:711 (3) - ^

1. There is a little delay on your soft-hitfinish.wav : take this -> http://puu.sh/nLzil/69fed37ef7.wav .
2. Sure to keep Letterbox ?

- Aishita :

1. 00:12:790 (7) - Blablabla pattern blablabla pls no! It's a strong sound, there is no reason to kill spacing here just for pattern sake. Honestly moving it to 164:120 makes more sense to me.
2. 00:20:387 (2) - Can you equalize spacing here ? Will be more coherent and looks better imo.
3. 00:27:985 (3) - I'm quite sure it's overmapped :/ I don't hear any sounds on 1/8 tics. Same for 00:31:101 (5) - /00:40:452 (2) - .
4. 00:37:627 (7) - This one sounds overmapped too.
5. 00:43:861 (3) - ^
6. 01:17:660 (4) - ^
7. 01:20:485 (6) - ^
8. 02:03:244 (5,6) - Pls no these sliders are way to folded on themselve :c
9. 02:10:842 (6,1) - Why decide to make 02:11:231 (1) - clickable and not 02:14:348 - ? There is a difference between them ? I don't see any reason to do a 3/4 slider + circle and not the other one too.
10. 02:24:089 (3,4,5,6,1) - I think it's overmapped here too. I only hear instrument on 1/4 tics.
11. 02:28:179 (2) - The spacing you use here is too different from all other similar section on this part. Try to adjust it like other. Also why doing 02:28:374 (3) - differently and not like 02:22:140 (3) - ? Is there again something different ? No :c
12. 03:02:952 (4) - Overmapped like other (tbh that's a bad idea to map the guitar note as triplet if it's what you did).
13. 03:17:205 (2) - Maybe NC it for the rhythm change.
14. 03:58:959 (1) - Same overmap again ;w;
15. 05:01:686 - Strange than you didn't map the vocal here.
16. 05:14:835 (6) - Don't hear anything again :c

• 
  Ashita

1. 01:23:504 (5) - i guess add NC here for consistency
2. 00:01:102 - imo better use addition normal for this head. the cymbal is crash and imo normal default finish sounds better to cover it
3. 00:04:121 - clear 1/8 sound here. probably map it as triplet?
4. 00:07:140 (1) - with tail goes to right imo the flow is a bit harsh to me. i would say make the tail to 160,312
5. 00:10:842 (6) - the guitar sounds late here imo, as i hear the snap is 1/16 http://puu.sh/nNhZI/cf6f2204bc.jpg aka extend the slider to 00:10:988 - but im not really sure so i just write in here and let you decide
6. 00:13:569 - same as 00:01:102 -
7. 00:16:686 (1,2,3) - somehow the jump to (1) is too low for this kind strong instrument. i would say move them all to 492,176
8. 00:44:348 (1) - not really fan of slider's tail on downbeat. i would say remove the repeat and map 00:44:738 - with a circle
9. 00:50:972 (1) - missing finish sound. also suggest normal addition if you agree with before
10. 00:56:816 (6) - same as before. imo the jump is too low to next slider. i would say 24,92 here
11. 01:15:907 (1) - strong music for both head and tail.. would be nicer to seperate by 2 circles and jump for them
12. 01:17:270 - vocal is quite important for relax part. i think better to be mapped
13. 01:19:998 (4) - seperate to 2 circles? i cry with loud piano mapped with tail
14. 01:34:218 (6) - ^ (since both pianos are strong so map 2 circles with jump would be nicer)
15. 01:52:335 (4) - 72,120? i saw many 1/4 slider jump with higher spacing before kiai. would be weird if you use low spacing for kiai
16. 01:59:153 - 01:59:251 - would be nice if mapped with streams since the drums are hoping for it </3 , just like 02:05:387 -
17. 02:08:114 - needs finish imo, i hear cymbal on bg music
18. 02:16:296 (4) - 316,280? low spacing looks bad here imo, also consistency with 02:17:465 (2) -
19. 02:18:147 - nice spot to make triplet here. drum is so strong
20. 02:30:809 - 02:31:004 - nice spot to make streams too
21. 02:33:829 (3) - missing finish on head
22. 03:01:881 (1) - 03:14:348 (1) - same as 01:15:907 (1) -
23. 03:17:076 - 03:17:205 (1) - map with drum hitsounds? they are drums afterall.. soft-hitnormal sounds very weird for me
24. 03:25:063 - skip loud drum i cry </3
25. 03:31:296 (4) - this only follow vocal that isnt very strong so i think the jump is a bit overdone.. how about reduce a bit with move to 272,216?
26. 04:03:829 - 04:03:926 - can map them for streams, i cry </3
27. 04:15:322 (2) - even the clap doesnt sound like soft-hitnormal but i hear soft-hitnormal only here. i would say change to drum-hitnormal instead with 60% volume
28. 04:51:556 (2) - 348,132? the music is weak. else the vocal for next slider is strong so imo jump is better placed for vocal
29. 04:55:452 (1) - you're following vocal here? if yes then okay, i just feel weird with skip 04:55:647 - strong music on this
30. 05:19:024 (1) - so cry see cymbal mapped with tail, i would say end the slider at 05:19:705 - and map 05:19:803 - with circle like you did with sliders end to 1/8
31. 05:21:556 (1) - if follow vocal then ok but i think this part is stream party since drums are loud and strong, fit to map hard to catch the 05:22:140 (1) - lol
32. 05:37:335 (1,3) - and similar sounds since too many im tired to write lol, decrease volume 10% i guess. soft-hitnormal sounds too strong really
33. 05:45:907 (2,3,4,5) - i hope you can give hitsounds for them. they are loud piano and feel weird w/o hitsound