Rokkea wrote:

it was all a coincidence that i like *namirin

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1. 00:09:659 (1) - idk if i'm nitpicking or not, but maybe remove NC here and add one over at 00:08:880 (5) - and 00:10:049 (3) - for consistency with the earlier parts. remade nc on these part
2. 00:12:971 (1) - this is a rly weird jump i feel, like when i do it my cursor ends up in the middle of the slider since it's a large jump, barely avoiding sliderbreaking and i just hold it there till the next slider comes. it feels like there's no real movement there which is weird cos it's a slider, you know. i find having a curved slider that blankets the next which starts at circle (3) better. (though this problem is gone after playing it like 4 times, i'll just leave it here so you can consider what is better for the map) for me the jump is fine , since the piano is really strong and it is well-emphasised
3. 00:35:178 (5) - ok so circle (4) is a piano key while circle (5) is *namirin's voice. they're not the same thing so it's kinda weird that you stack these two together. imo a simple linear pattern from (4) to NC(1) should suffice. unstacked and fixed nc
4. 00:59:529 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - the piano keys at (1) and (3) are pretty loud, to the point that probably (2) don't really fit. consider changing that into a 1/2 slider removed (2) but i keep those as circle
5. 01:01:477 (4,5,6,7) - i think this pattern could be improved as the triangle thing looks a little bad with those circles spaced that inconsistently. a proper triangle shape could do fine, but here's one idea of mine that i really like : http://imgur.com/ooPggEW (1.45x spacing for those 3) did something else but your idea is not bad
6. 01:24:659 (8) - this sounds more like 2 separate circles, no? ga o is 1 sound shi n is 1 ji te is 2 , i think its also fit with just 1 slider
7. 01:32:938 (4,1) - in some areas you give circles in 1/4 beat low distance spacing (ie 00:37:711 (1,2,3,4) - ), and over here there is a triplet relatively far away from the previous slider.you can say that the distance are clearly different in the editor, but in a cs4.5 map like this, it's quite hard to notice this while playing. maybe consider stacking them to the slider end or overlap slightly such that it's way more obvious. sticking this with my own idea , the emphasis on the pitch works differently and the part u pointed out , also i tested them out , even get quite some number of testplayers with ranging 25k ~ 1k and they seem to be doing fine here
8. 01:44:334 (2,3) - there's no sound at (3) unless i heard wrong, so imo 2 circles are misleading, please consider having just 1 1/4 slider instead. (btw there are 2 piano sounds i think, at where (2) is and at 01:44:432 - , maybe you can structure a pattern to capture those keys too) yea fixed
9. 01:58:945 (3,4) - very noticeable 5 note stream or piano keys and rum beats mixed together that i really think is more important than the 2nd loud piano key you've mapped at present. yea it is quite noticeable but the loud piano is a way to map it too , you are not wrong but i just find the piano is much better instrument to be map instead of the drum , i did put a circle after the piano to make sure the drum is present there
10. 02:01:477 (6) - i'm probably nitpicking again, but that's a not entirely 1/8 beats if you hear the sound at 50% speed. maybe replace it with a 1/4 slider and a circle, though it might not matter much. yea it have a 1/4 gap here but it is also fine , since no one plays it at 50% speed in the game, i also dont want it to be complex at this point
11. 02:20:568 (7) - in this jump sequence, the quitar goes up to a high tone, then drops from 02:20:178 - onwards to a low tone. maybe the jumps will feel better if the spacing decreases at this circle, where it can be placed at somewhere around (350,275). did some tweaking here
12. 02:27:581 (1,3) - i'm kind of a slider nazi, hence i deMAND THIS SLIDER TO BE SYMMETRICAL!! (turn on grid snap for ez help) =_= fixed
13. 02:43:555 (1) - and 02:44:334 (1) - NCs looks nice and all, but they are actually redundant, don't you think? fixed
14. 03:25:243 (1,2,1,2) - 2 circles to capture just 1 piano key is a little too much i believe. perhaps you can replace them with sliders with increasing sv? (the other circles are alright at there are 4 piano keys this time, 03:26:023 (1,2) - though you might need to change the spacing of the circles at 03:26:023 (1,2) - ) nope , i think they work perfectly
15. 03:44:529 (3,4) - this is really confusing imo like (3) is in a stack which makes it hard to notice it's 1/8, plus it's aiming to the opposite of (4), which just misleads me to think (4) does not exist until later. i recommend at least fix (3) such that it is aiming towards (4). this is the reason of why i used 02:01:477 (6) so the slider went back to the next slider and here you are pointing 2 different thing
16. 04:01:087 (3) - oi NC here to tell you've changed the sv again. ok lol dun mad plz
17. 04:04:789 (3) - i'd prefer the slider end to be clickable as that part has the same distinctive sound as 04:04:399 (2) - . (like what you did at 04:07:516 (2,3,4) - )
18. 04:09:854 (5) - it'll be confusing you overlap like this... *flashbacks to the 1/8 spacing sliders* ..i'm shivering. can be easily distinguished by the slider length , not sure if you arent good enough to read this kind of map ;;
19. 04:59:529 - there's that very noticeable sound that i think it's better to map. (norly you wont believe how many times i missed at that section) omg i even cant even hear them ;; am i deaf anyway i am highlighting the guitar and percussion here , the bass is too unobvious imo not worth emphasisng
20. 05:12:776 (1,3) - SAME!! to asphalt plz dun ruin my >.< plz
21. 05:46:087 (2,3,4) - ya you're mapping to the piano keys, but there's no transitionhere that hints towards it since you've been mapping the other stuff too for a full 5-10 seconds. 05:36:152 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this works as you used only circles to map to the other sounds, which helps as a transition to the circle-only piano keys pattern thing. i really suggest doing the same to that, ie turning 05:45:503 (1) - to 2 circles. fixed somehow

EDIT (cos i forgot how to mod for some reason): Good luck! I'm looking forward to the day it's ranked. (yay potential pp) yay

MrSergio wrote:

M4M from your queue~

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Aishita

• 00:11:217 (3,4) - This spacing is a bit confusing seeing 00:10:828 (2,3) - , so what about stacking 4 under 3 and 5 under 2 (start)? i repatterned these
  
  
  02:22:906 (5) - really a bit too cramped x) Suggestion did something too
  
  04:27:581 - Is the break end effect intended? yes
  
  05:38:490 (4,5) - this spacing is really inconsistent with 05:37:321 (1,2,3,4) - . Maybe put a NC on 5 or move them accordingly to the time line i deleted the 6 so i hope its better now
  
  

Lovely song ~
That's all :3